读后续写一件自我努力得来的宝贵裙子撞衫富家女的同款（讲义）-2025届高三英语二轮复习
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江苏省无锡市澄宜六校2025届高三上学期12月联考英语试题
第二节(满分25分)
阅读下面的材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A Precious Dress
I was raised in a family where my parents were united in their way of bringing up children, but it mostly fell to my mother to actually carry it out, and she managed the family budget effortlessly. Looking back, I honestly think I would be a different person if my mum hadn’t turned a dress into a life lesson I carry with me today.
If we complained about not having what another kid did, we’d hear something like I don’t care what so-and-so got for his birthday, you are not getting a car for your birthday or a lavish sweet party. We had to earn our allowance (零用钱) by doing chores around the house. My brothers can no doubt remember hours spent cleaning the house. I can still remember how long it took to polish the legs of our dining table. Sometimes, I couldn’t even contain my envy of Chloe, a neighbourhood girl, always beautifully dressed, whose parents satisfied her with almost every need.
One day, my mother drove me downtown to buy some household necessities and there it was in the shopping window. Pink, lovely, delicately trimmed (镶嵌着) with lace, the dress winked (眨眼) at me and I knew I had to have it. “It’s beautiful,” my mother said when I pointed it out to her. “What a beautiful dress!”
I tried to hide my desire at first. But then I guess I couldn’t stand it any longer. “Mum, please get it I’ll do anything, but I need that dress. I love it. Please ”
I was desperate.
“You know,” she said, gently rubbing my back, “if you save up, you could buy this yourself.”
“By the time I make enough, it’ll be sold!”
“There might be a way,” she said.
And so our paying plan unfolded. Mum bought the dress and put it safely in some hiding place where I couldn’t find. Each week I eagerly counted my growing savings increased by extra work. Weeks later, I counted and jumped for joy. Oh, I made it! I finally had the exact amount we’d agreed on. Having put on my dress, I flew to school like a bird. However, the unthinkable happened.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door.
第二节(满分25分)
阅读下面的材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A Precious Dress
I was raised in a family where my parents were united in their way of bringing up children(定从)., but it mostly fell to my mother to actually carry it out, and she managed the family budget effortlessly. Looking back(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I honestly think I would be a different person(宾从) if my mum hadn’t turned a dress into a life lesson(状从) I carry with me today(定从).
If we complained about not having what another kid did(状从+宾从), we’d hear something like I don’t care what so-and-so got for his birthday(宾从), you are not getting a car for your birthday or a lavish sweet party. We had to earn our allowance (零用钱) by doing chores around the house. My brothers can no doubt remember hours spent cleaning the house(非谓语动词做后置定语). I can still remember how long it took to polish the legs of our dining table(宾从). Sometimes, I couldn’t even contain my envy of Chloe, a neighbourhood girl, always beautifully dressed(非谓语动词做后置定语), whose parents satisfied her with almost every need(定从).
One day, my mother drove me downtown to buy some household necessities and there it was in the shopping window. Pink, lovely(adj做主语补语), delicately trimmed (镶嵌着) with lace(非谓语动词短语做定语或主语补语), the dress winked (眨眼) at me and I knew I had to have it(宾从). “It’s beautiful,” my mother said when I pointed it out to her(状从). “What a beautiful dress!”
I tried to hide my desire at first. But then I guess I couldn’t stand it any longer(宾从). “Mum, please get it I’ll do anything, but I need that dress. I love it. Please ”
I was desperate.
“You know,” she said, gently rubbing my back(非谓语动词做伴随动作), “if you save up(状从), you could buy this yourself.”
“By the time I make enough, it’ll be sold!”
“There might be a way,” she said.
And so our paying plan unfolded. Mum bought the dress and put it safely in some hiding place where I couldn’t find(定从). Each week I eagerly counted my growing savings increased by extra work(非谓语动词短语做后置定语). Weeks later, I counted and jumped for joy. Oh, I made it! I finally had the exact amount we’d agreed on(定从). Having put on my dress(非谓语动词短语做原因状语), I flew to school like a bird. However, the unthinkable happened.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door.
1. 文章分类与思路分析
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
类型分类 该文章属于“情感转折型”读后续写：通过展示主角经历的心情波动（从渴望到失望）来展现成长的过程。 "However, the unthinkable happened."
构思思路 续写应从情感上加深主角的挫败感，并通过母亲的安慰和智慧来展示成长。 文章中主角从情感的极端低谷（看到相同的裙子）到情感升华（母亲的关怀和指导）形成转折。
布局 1. 主角经历失望的情感波动；2. 母亲出现并给出解决办法，带来情感的安慰和成长的教训。 "The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress."
框架提炼 起：描述主角的失望情感；转：通过母亲的安慰和智慧提供情感转折点；结：展示成长的心理变化和对家庭教育的理解。 "Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door."
实施 续写要着重表现情感的变化，母亲的教育方式和温柔关怀，突显成长的过程；同时需要紧密承接原文内容，使用情感描写。 "She pushed open the door, her face full of concern. ‘Don’t worry, sweetie, you’re still my shining star.’"
承接原文事项 1. 母亲的理智和教育方式是情节转折的关键；2. 需要表现出主角由外在物质欲望转向情感成熟的过程。 "But then I guess I couldn’t stand it any longer. ‘Mum, please get it I’ll do anything, but I need that dress.’"
整体注意事项 保持语言的一致性，确保情感的描写真实且流畅；展现母亲角色的智慧与关怀，细腻地描写主角从失望到成长的过程。 "I finally had the exact amount we’d agreed on."
巧妙设计内容 在续写中，巧妙加入母亲的教育言辞，通过反转的方式令主角理解生活中的真正价值，激发情感的共鸣。 "I flew to school like a bird, my new dress a symbol of my hard-earned success."
2. Story Mountain模式分析
Story Mountain思维导图展示了文章的情感起伏以及故事情节的发展，具体结构如下：
起点: 主角看到梦想中的裙子。
发展: 主角向母亲提出购买要求，母亲同意并设定计划。
高潮: 主角努力工作，积攒足够的钱。
转折: 主角穿上新裙子，却遇到不可预见的事情——看到同样的裙子。
结尾: 母亲出现，安慰主角，带来成长的教训。
3. 分析各个角度
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 母亲的理智、爱与关怀；主角的渴望与成长。 "She rubbed my back gently, ‘if you save up, you could buy this yourself.’"
情感层次 主角经历从渴望到失望，再到通过母亲的安慰而获得心理成长的过程。 "I was desperate. ‘By the time I make enough, it’ll be sold!’"
关键情节点 1. 主角渴望购买裙子；2. 母亲的教育与理智；3. 看到同样的裙子，产生情感转折。 "The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress."
语言特色 通过温暖且理智的语言展现母亲的智慧，通过急切与失望的语言展现主角的内心变化。 "I was desperate."
关键词分析 渴望、失望、成长、教训、安慰。 "I flew to school like a bird."
心理描写 主角的渴望、失望、无助及最终的成长。 "I was desperate. ‘By the time I make enough, it’ll be sold!’"
动作描写 主角的急切动作，母亲的细腻照顾。 "I jumped for joy"
环境描写 商店环境、学校环境，突出心理感受的转变。 "I flew to school like a bird, my new dress a symbol of my hard-earned success."
隐含主题 成长与责任、努力与回报、亲情的教育。 "If you save up, you could buy this yourself."
情感转折 从渴望到失望，从失望到通过母亲的支持成长。 "But then I guess I couldn’t stand it any longer."
空间转换 从购物场所到学校的转变，情感的外化。 "I flew to school like a bird."
时间过渡 从节约时间到购买裙子的时间跨度，突显主角的努力与情感的起伏。 "Weeks later, I counted and jumped for joy."
4. 动作、心理、环境描写推荐句子
描写类型 英文例句
动作描写 1. I ran out the door, my heart racing with excitement.
2. She opened the door with a slow, gentle motion, as though unsure of what awaited inside.
3. I felt my hands shake as I counted the money for the umpteenth time.
心理描写 1. I felt a rush of disappointment, my stomach sinking as I saw the same dress on Chloe.
2. Doubt crept into my mind, wondering if all my efforts had been in vain.
3. With tears in my eyes, I realized the true value of my hard-earned dress.
环境描写 1. The school gate loomed before me, filled with a mixture of excitement and dread.
2. The street was bustling with people, but I felt completely alone in my disappointment.
3. The bright, colorful store window reflected the dreams of a young girl.
5. 高中语法现象分析与可积累语料
常见语法现象：
虚拟语气（如条件句和假设语气）："If you save up, you could buy this yourself."
倒装句（为了强调或表达强烈情感）："Never had I felt such disappointment before."
定语从句： "The dress, which was pink and delicate, caught my eye instantly."
词汇和短语分析：
词汇：desperate, savings, delight, hardship
搭配：earn/save up, jump for joy, burst into tears
高级替换词：eager (replace with keen), frustration (replace with irritation)
6. 词汇表与语法亮点
单词/短语 词性 词义 近义词 联想词 例句
desperate 形容词 渴望的，绝望的 eager, anxious hopeless, frantic I was desperate to buy the dress after weeks of saving.
savings 名词 储蓄，积蓄 funds, reserves earnings, capital Her savings grew as she worked harder each week.
delight 名词 高兴，愉快 joy, pleasure happiness, bliss She screamed with delight when she saw her new dress.
hardship 名词 艰难，困苦 difficulty, struggle adversity, challenge The journey was full of hardships, but it taught me resilience.
Possible Answer 1
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress. My heart sank, and I felt as though the world was closing in around me. I had worked so hard to earn this dress, and now it felt worthless. The jealousy was overwhelming, and for a moment, I wished I had never seen it.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door. She wrapped her arms around me and whispered, "Sweetheart, it’s not about the dress. What matters is the effort you put into getting it." As her words sank in, I realized the lesson I had learned. It wasn’t the dress that made me special, but the journey I had taken to earn it.
亮点语法与搭配：
情绪描写：
“My heart sank” (心情的快速变化，常用于失望时)
“The jealousy was overwhelming” (描述极端情感，强化内心的波动)
“I wished I had never seen it” (虚拟语气，表示遗憾)
同义词替换：overwhelming (overpowering, intense)，sank (dropped, sunk)
动作描写：
“Hearing me crying loudly” (通过动作来描写情感)
“She wrapped her arms around me” (动作体现关爱和安慰)
语法亮点：
虚拟语气： "I wished I had never seen it."（表示对过去情况的后悔）
非谓语动词： “Hearing me crying loudly” （通过动名词形式描述结果）
例句：
"Her kindness was overwhelming, and I felt her support in every hug."
"I wish I had never said those words to her."
"Seeing the results of my hard work, I felt proud."
Possible Answer 2:
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress. I stood frozen, my eyes fixed on her. I couldn’t believe it—how could this happen It felt like all my hard work had been wasted, and I was left with nothing but disappointment.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door. She took one look at me and smiled softly, “Don’t worry, dear. What you have is far more valuable than any dress. The experience you gained is the real treasure.” Her words gave me strength, and I felt a sense of pride in the journey I had gone through to earn my dress.
亮点语法与搭配：
情绪描写：
“I stood frozen” (身体状态反映内心的震惊)
“How could this happen ” (反问句强化情感)
同义词替换：frozen (stunned, paralyzed)，disappointment (dismay, dissatisfaction)
动作描写：
“She took one look at me” (简单的动作，表现母亲的洞察力)
“She smiled softly” (动作与情感结合)
语法亮点：
反问句： “How could this happen ”（增强情感的冲击）
定语从句： “The experience you gained is the real treasure.”（定语从句用来扩展信息）
例句：
"How could I have missed such a simple mistake "
"She smiled as though she understood exactly how I felt."
"The experience I gained was more important than anything else."
Possible Answer 3:
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress. I was speechless, and my excitement quickly turned into a deep sense of regret. I had spent weeks working hard for this moment, and yet, it seemed as though the dress no longer held any meaning.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door. She held me close and said, “It’s not about the dress; it’s about what you’ve learned through all this. Your effort, patience, and persistence are far more precious than anything material.” I wiped my tears, realizing that the true value of my hard work lay in the process, not the final result.
亮点语法与搭配：
情绪描写：
“My excitement quickly turned into a deep sense of regret” (情感变化的过渡)
“I was speechless” (没有话语的反应，表达深深的失望)
同义词替换：excitement (eagerness, anticipation)，regret (remorse, sorrow)
动作描写：
“She held me close” (母亲的安慰动作)
“I wiped my tears” (动作反映主角情感的转变)
语法亮点：
被动语态： “It seemed as though the dress no longer held any meaning.”（强调主角的内心反应，而不是物品本身）
现在完成时： “Your effort, patience, and persistence are far more precious than anything material.”（突出经验的价值，非物质的东西）
例句：
"The dress no longer seemed to matter once I understood its true value."
"I have learned more from this experience than any material possession."
"The pain I felt was a reminder that true success comes from perseverance."
常见短语与单词的替换：
情绪描写：
disappointment: sorrow, sadness, regret
joy: happiness, elation, excitement
动作描写：
hug: embrace, hold tightly
smile softly: grin gently, beam warmly
语法亮点：
虚拟语气： "I wish I had never seen it."
非谓语动词： "Hearing me crying loudly"
反问句： "How could this happen "
单词/词组 词性 (汉语) 词义 (汉语) 英语近义词 联想词 例句
sank 动词 (下沉) 下沉，塌陷 drop, sink collapse, subside "My heart sank when I saw the result."
overwhelming 形容词 (压倒性的) 巨大的，压倒一切的 overpowering, intense crushing, irresistible "The overwhelming support from my friends made me feel appreciated."
envy 名词 (嫉妒) 嫉妒，羡慕 jealousy, desire resentment, bitterness "She felt a deep envy when she saw her friend’s new car."
desperate 形容词 (绝望的) 绝望的，急切的 frantic, hopeless urgent, reckless "I was desperate to succeed in the exam."
treasure 名词 (宝贵的东西) 宝物，珍贵物品 jewel, gem prized possession, valuable "The old book is a treasure passed down through generations."
hiding 名词 (藏匿) 隐藏，藏匿 concealment, seclusion hiding place, secret "He was hiding behind the door, waiting for the surprise."
sank 动词 (下沉) 沉没，心情低落 drop, sink subside, decline "The mood in the room sank after the bad news."
regret 名词 (遗憾) 后悔，懊悔 sorrow, remorse guilt, disappointment "I deeply regret not attending the meeting yesterday."
precious 形容词 (宝贵的) 宝贵的，珍贵的 invaluable, priceless cherished, treasured "The time we spent together was the most precious moment of my life."
effort 名词 (努力) 努力，尽力 attempt, exertion hard work, endeavor "She put in a lot of effort to finish her project on time."
第四部分 写作(共两节, 满分40分)
第一节(满分15分)
假定你是李华,为了帮助你校交换生们更好地了解中国文化,你校将邀请他们一起参与校园话剧节。请你写一封信申请做志愿者,以协助活动有序进行。内容包括：
1.写信的目的;2. 个人的优势。参考词汇：campus drama festival
注意: 写作词数应为80个左右
Dear Sir/Madam,
Yours,
Li Hua
应用文写作
One possible version:
Dear Sir/ Madam,
I am writing to apply to be a volunteer for the upcoming campus drama festival, with the aim of helping our exchange students understand Chinese culture better.
I believe I have the necessary skills and qualities to contribute to the success of this event(宾从). Firstly, I am a fluent English speaker and have excellent communication skills, which will assist our exchange students in overcoming any language barriers(定从)they may encounter(定从). Additionally, having a deep understanding of Chinese culture(非谓语动词做原因状语), I can explain the background and significance of the performances to the exchange students, helping them to connect with the local culture(非谓语动词后置定语). Better still, I have extensive experience in voluntary work.
Should I be given the chance(虚拟语气), I would strive to ensure the smooth running of the festival. Thank you for considering my application.
Yours,
Li Hua
读后续写官方
One possible version:
The moment I arrived at the school gate(状从), Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress. At the sight of this horrible turn of events, I was green with envy. “How ridiculous!” my heart sank. For Chloe, getting such a dress(非谓语动词短语做主语) was merely a piece of cake, while for me, I had to do it with all my might. With a mixed feeling of rage and grief(with复合结构), I dashed home to tell my mother about this disaster. “It’s unfair!” I exclaimed with fury, storming into my room and slamming the door before she could respond(状从).
Hearing me crying(非谓语动词做伴随动作), Mum gently pushed open the door. “Honey, are you OK ” she walked up to me, gathered me into her arms and tenderly wiped away my tears(动作串). “Look!” she pointed at the shiny dress hanging in the most visible place(非谓语动词做后置定语), adding(非谓语动词做伴随动作) “Your dress is the most precious one because you paid for it(状从). Don’t you think so ” On hearing(一....就....) what she said(宾从), I felt much relieved. “Yes, you earned it through hard work,” a firm and cheerful voice answered in my heart. Nothing could be better than gaining the precious thing in that way!
第二节(满分25分)
阅读下面的材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A Precious Dress
I was raised in a family where my parents were united in their way of bringing up children, but it mostly fell to my mother to actually carry it out, and she managed the family budget effortlessly. Looking back, I honestly think I would be a different person if my mum hadn’t turned a dress into a life lesson I carry with me today.
If we complained about not having what another kid did, we’d hear something like I don’t care what so-and-so got for his birthday, you are not getting a car for your birthday or a lavish sweet party. We had to earn our allowance (零用钱) by doing chores around the house. My brothers can no doubt remember hours spent cleaning the house. I can still remember how long it took to polish the legs of our dining table. Sometimes, I couldn’t even contain my envy of Chloe, a neighbourhood girl, always beautifully dressed, whose parents satisfied her with almost every need.
One day, my mother drove me downtown to buy some household necessities and there it was in the shopping window. Pink, lovely, delicately trimmed (镶嵌着) with lace, the dress winked (眨眼) at me and I knew I had to have it. “It’s beautiful,” my mother said when I pointed it out to her. “What a beautiful dress!”
I tried to hide my desire at first. But then I guess I couldn’t stand it any longer. “Mum, please get it I’ll do anything, but I need that dress. I love it. Please ”
I was desperate.
“You know,” she said, gently rubbing my back, “if you save up, you could buy this yourself.”
“By the time I make enough, it’ll be sold!”
“There might be a way,” she said.
And so our paying plan unfolded. Mum bought the dress and put it safely in some hiding place where I couldn’t find. Each week I eagerly counted my growing savings increased by extra work. Weeks later, I counted and jumped for joy. Oh, I made it! I finally had the exact amount we’d agreed on. Having put on my dress, I flew to school like a bird. However, the unthinkable happened.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door.
第二节(满分25分)
阅读下面的材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A Precious Dress
I was raised in a family where my parents were united in their way of bringing up children(定从)., but it mostly fell to my mother to actually carry it out, and she managed the family budget effortlessly. Looking back(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I honestly think I would be a different person(宾从) if my mum hadn’t turned a dress into a life lesson(状从) I carry with me today(定从).
If we complained about not having what another kid did(状从+宾从), we’d hear something like I don’t care what so-and-so got for his birthday(宾从), you are not getting a car for your birthday or a lavish sweet party. We had to earn our allowance (零用钱) by doing chores around the house. My brothers can no doubt remember hours spent cleaning the house(非谓语动词做后置定语). I can still remember how long it took to polish the legs of our dining table(宾从). Sometimes, I couldn’t even contain my envy of Chloe, a neighbourhood girl, always beautifully dressed(非谓语动词做后置定语), whose parents satisfied her with almost every need(定从).
One day, my mother drove me downtown to buy some household necessities and there it was in the shopping window. Pink, lovely(adj做主语补语), delicately trimmed (镶嵌着) with lace(非谓语动词短语做定语或主语补语), the dress winked (眨眼) at me and I knew I had to have it(宾从). “It’s beautiful,” my mother said when I pointed it out to her(状从). “What a beautiful dress!”
I tried to hide my desire at first. But then I guess I couldn’t stand it any longer(宾从). “Mum, please get it I’ll do anything, but I need that dress. I love it. Please ”
I was desperate.
“You know,” she said, gently rubbing my back(非谓语动词做伴随动作), “if you save up(状从), you could buy this yourself.”
“By the time I make enough, it’ll be sold!”
“There might be a way,” she said.
And so our paying plan unfolded. Mum bought the dress and put it safely in some hiding place where I couldn’t find(定从). Each week I eagerly counted my growing savings increased by extra work(非谓语动词短语做后置定语). Weeks later, I counted and jumped for joy. Oh, I made it! I finally had the exact amount we’d agreed on(定从). Having put on my dress(非谓语动词短语做原因状语), I flew to school like a bird. However, the unthinkable happened.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door.
1. 文章分类与思路分析
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
类型分类 该文章属于“情感转折型”读后续写：通过展示主角经历的心情波动（从渴望到失望）来展现成长的过程。 "However, the unthinkable happened."
构思思路 续写应从情感上加深主角的挫败感，并通过母亲的安慰和智慧来展示成长。 文章中主角从情感的极端低谷（看到相同的裙子）到情感升华（母亲的关怀和指导）形成转折。
布局 1. 主角经历失望的情感波动；2. 母亲出现并给出解决办法，带来情感的安慰和成长的教训。 "The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress."
框架提炼 起：描述主角的失望情感；转：通过母亲的安慰和智慧提供情感转折点；结：展示成长的心理变化和对家庭教育的理解。 "Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door."
实施 续写要着重表现情感的变化，母亲的教育方式和温柔关怀，突显成长的过程；同时需要紧密承接原文内容，使用情感描写。 "She pushed open the door, her face full of concern. ‘Don’t worry, sweetie, you’re still my shining star.’"
承接原文事项 1. 母亲的理智和教育方式是情节转折的关键；2. 需要表现出主角由外在物质欲望转向情感成熟的过程。 "But then I guess I couldn’t stand it any longer. ‘Mum, please get it I’ll do anything, but I need that dress.’"
整体注意事项 保持语言的一致性，确保情感的描写真实且流畅；展现母亲角色的智慧与关怀，细腻地描写主角从失望到成长的过程。 "I finally had the exact amount we’d agreed on."
巧妙设计内容 在续写中，巧妙加入母亲的教育言辞，通过反转的方式令主角理解生活中的真正价值，激发情感的共鸣。 "I flew to school like a bird, my new dress a symbol of my hard-earned success."
2. Story Mountain模式分析
Story Mountain思维导图展示了文章的情感起伏以及故事情节的发展，具体结构如下：
起点: 主角看到梦想中的裙子。
发展: 主角向母亲提出购买要求，母亲同意并设定计划。
高潮: 主角努力工作，积攒足够的钱。
转折: 主角穿上新裙子，却遇到不可预见的事情——看到同样的裙子。
结尾: 母亲出现，安慰主角，带来成长的教训。
3. 分析各个角度
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 母亲的理智、爱与关怀；主角的渴望与成长。 "She rubbed my back gently, ‘if you save up, you could buy this yourself.’"
情感层次 主角经历从渴望到失望，再到通过母亲的安慰而获得心理成长的过程。 "I was desperate. ‘By the time I make enough, it’ll be sold!’"
关键情节点 1. 主角渴望购买裙子；2. 母亲的教育与理智；3. 看到同样的裙子，产生情感转折。 "The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress."
语言特色 通过温暖且理智的语言展现母亲的智慧，通过急切与失望的语言展现主角的内心变化。 "I was desperate."
关键词分析 渴望、失望、成长、教训、安慰。 "I flew to school like a bird."
心理描写 主角的渴望、失望、无助及最终的成长。 "I was desperate. ‘By the time I make enough, it’ll be sold!’"
动作描写 主角的急切动作，母亲的细腻照顾。 "I jumped for joy"
环境描写 商店环境、学校环境，突出心理感受的转变。 "I flew to school like a bird, my new dress a symbol of my hard-earned success."
隐含主题 成长与责任、努力与回报、亲情的教育。 "If you save up, you could buy this yourself."
情感转折 从渴望到失望，从失望到通过母亲的支持成长。 "But then I guess I couldn’t stand it any longer."
空间转换 从购物场所到学校的转变，情感的外化。 "I flew to school like a bird."
时间过渡 从节约时间到购买裙子的时间跨度，突显主角的努力与情感的起伏。 "Weeks later, I counted and jumped for joy."
4. 动作、心理、环境描写推荐句子
描写类型 英文例句
动作描写 1. I ran out the door, my heart racing with excitement.
2. She opened the door with a slow, gentle motion, as though unsure of what awaited inside.
3. I felt my hands shake as I counted the money for the umpteenth time.
心理描写 1. I felt a rush of disappointment, my stomach sinking as I saw the same dress on Chloe.
2. Doubt crept into my mind, wondering if all my efforts had been in vain.
3. With tears in my eyes, I realized the true value of my hard-earned dress.
环境描写 1. The school gate loomed before me, filled with a mixture of excitement and dread.
2. The street was bustling with people, but I felt completely alone in my disappointment.
3. The bright, colorful store window reflected the dreams of a young girl.
5. 高中语法现象分析与可积累语料
常见语法现象：
虚拟语气（如条件句和假设语气）："If you save up, you could buy this yourself."
倒装句（为了强调或表达强烈情感）："Never had I felt such disappointment before."
定语从句： "The dress, which was pink and delicate, caught my eye instantly."
词汇和短语分析：
词汇：desperate, savings, delight, hardship
搭配：earn/save up, jump for joy, burst into tears
高级替换词：eager (replace with keen), frustration (replace with irritation)
6. 词汇表与语法亮点
单词/短语 词性 词义 近义词 联想词 例句
desperate 形容词 渴望的，绝望的 eager, anxious hopeless, frantic I was desperate to buy the dress after weeks of saving.
savings 名词 储蓄，积蓄 funds, reserves earnings, capital Her savings grew as she worked harder each week.
delight 名词 高兴，愉快 joy, pleasure happiness, bliss She screamed with delight when she saw her new dress.
hardship 名词 艰难，困苦 difficulty, struggle adversity, challenge The journey was full of hardships, but it taught me resilience.
Possible Answer 1
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress. My heart sank, and I felt as though the world was closing in around me. I had worked so hard to earn this dress, and now it felt worthless. The jealousy was overwhelming, and for a moment, I wished I had never seen it.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door. She wrapped her arms around me and whispered, "Sweetheart, it’s not about the dress. What matters is the effort you put into getting it." As her words sank in, I realized the lesson I had learned. It wasn’t the dress that made me special, but the journey I had taken to earn it.
亮点语法与搭配：
情绪描写：
“My heart sank” (心情的快速变化，常用于失望时)
“The jealousy was overwhelming” (描述极端情感，强化内心的波动)
“I wished I had never seen it” (虚拟语气，表示遗憾)
同义词替换：overwhelming (overpowering, intense)，sank (dropped, sunk)
动作描写：
“Hearing me crying loudly” (通过动作来描写情感)
“She wrapped her arms around me” (动作体现关爱和安慰)
语法亮点：
虚拟语气： "I wished I had never seen it."（表示对过去情况的后悔）
非谓语动词： “Hearing me crying loudly” （通过动名词形式描述结果）
例句：
"Her kindness was overwhelming, and I felt her support in every hug."
"I wish I had never said those words to her."
"Seeing the results of my hard work, I felt proud."
Possible Answer 2:
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress. I stood frozen, my eyes fixed on her. I couldn’t believe it—how could this happen It felt like all my hard work had been wasted, and I was left with nothing but disappointment.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door. She took one look at me and smiled softly, “Don’t worry, dear. What you have is far more valuable than any dress. The experience you gained is the real treasure.” Her words gave me strength, and I felt a sense of pride in the journey I had gone through to earn my dress.
亮点语法与搭配：
情绪描写：
“I stood frozen” (身体状态反映内心的震惊)
“How could this happen ” (反问句强化情感)
同义词替换：frozen (stunned, paralyzed)，disappointment (dismay, dissatisfaction)
动作描写：
“She took one look at me” (简单的动作，表现母亲的洞察力)
“She smiled softly” (动作与情感结合)
语法亮点：
反问句： “How could this happen ”（增强情感的冲击）
定语从句： “The experience you gained is the real treasure.”（定语从句用来扩展信息）
例句：
"How could I have missed such a simple mistake "
"She smiled as though she understood exactly how I felt."
"The experience I gained was more important than anything else."
Possible Answer 3:
Paragraph 1: The moment I arrived at the school gate, Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress. I was speechless, and my excitement quickly turned into a deep sense of regret. I had spent weeks working hard for this moment, and yet, it seemed as though the dress no longer held any meaning.
Paragraph 2: Hearing me crying loudly, Mum gently pushed open the door. She held me close and said, “It’s not about the dress; it’s about what you’ve learned through all this. Your effort, patience, and persistence are far more precious than anything material.” I wiped my tears, realizing that the true value of my hard work lay in the process, not the final result.
亮点语法与搭配：
情绪描写：
“My excitement quickly turned into a deep sense of regret” (情感变化的过渡)
“I was speechless” (没有话语的反应，表达深深的失望)
同义词替换：excitement (eagerness, anticipation)，regret (remorse, sorrow)
动作描写：
“She held me close” (母亲的安慰动作)
“I wiped my tears” (动作反映主角情感的转变)
语法亮点：
被动语态： “It seemed as though the dress no longer held any meaning.”（强调主角的内心反应，而不是物品本身）
现在完成时： “Your effort, patience, and persistence are far more precious than anything material.”（突出经验的价值，非物质的东西）
例句：
"The dress no longer seemed to matter once I understood its true value."
"I have learned more from this experience than any material possession."
"The pain I felt was a reminder that true success comes from perseverance."
常见短语与单词的替换：
情绪描写：
disappointment: sorrow, sadness, regret
joy: happiness, elation, excitement
动作描写：
hug: embrace, hold tightly
smile softly: grin gently, beam warmly
语法亮点：
虚拟语气： "I wish I had never seen it."
非谓语动词： "Hearing me crying loudly"
反问句： "How could this happen "
单词/词组 词性 (汉语) 词义 (汉语) 英语近义词 联想词 例句
sank 动词 (下沉) 下沉，塌陷 drop, sink collapse, subside "My heart sank when I saw the result."
overwhelming 形容词 (压倒性的) 巨大的，压倒一切的 overpowering, intense crushing, irresistible "The overwhelming support from my friends made me feel appreciated."
envy 名词 (嫉妒) 嫉妒，羡慕 jealousy, desire resentment, bitterness "She felt a deep envy when she saw her friend’s new car."
desperate 形容词 (绝望的) 绝望的，急切的 frantic, hopeless urgent, reckless "I was desperate to succeed in the exam."
treasure 名词 (宝贵的东西) 宝物，珍贵物品 jewel, gem prized possession, valuable "The old book is a treasure passed down through generations."
hiding 名词 (藏匿) 隐藏，藏匿 concealment, seclusion hiding place, secret "He was hiding behind the door, waiting for the surprise."
sank 动词 (下沉) 沉没，心情低落 drop, sink subside, decline "The mood in the room sank after the bad news."
regret 名词 (遗憾) 后悔，懊悔 sorrow, remorse guilt, disappointment "I deeply regret not attending the meeting yesterday."
precious 形容词 (宝贵的) 宝贵的，珍贵的 invaluable, priceless cherished, treasured "The time we spent together was the most precious moment of my life."
effort 名词 (努力) 努力，尽力 attempt, exertion hard work, endeavor "She put in a lot of effort to finish her project on time."
第四部分 写作(共两节, 满分40分)
第一节(满分15分)
假定你是李华,为了帮助你校交换生们更好地了解中国文化,你校将邀请他们一起参与校园话剧节。请你写一封信申请做志愿者,以协助活动有序进行。内容包括：
1.写信的目的;2. 个人的优势。参考词汇：campus drama festival
注意: 写作词数应为80个左右
Dear Sir/Madam,
Yours,
Li Hua
应用文写作
One possible version:
Dear Sir/ Madam,
I am writing to apply to be a volunteer for the upcoming campus drama festival, with the aim of helping our exchange students understand Chinese culture better.
I believe I have the necessary skills and qualities to contribute to the success of this event(宾从). Firstly, I am a fluent English speaker and have excellent communication skills, which will assist our exchange students in overcoming any language barriers(定从)they may encounter(定从). Additionally, having a deep understanding of Chinese culture(非谓语动词做原因状语), I can explain the background and significance of the performances to the exchange students, helping them to connect with the local culture(非谓语动词后置定语). Better still, I have extensive experience in voluntary work.
Should I be given the chance(虚拟语气), I would strive to ensure the smooth running of the festival. Thank you for considering my application.
Yours,
Li Hua
读后续写官方
One possible version:
The moment I arrived at the school gate(状从), Chloe appeared in exactly the same dress. At the sight of this horrible turn of events, I was green with envy. “How ridiculous!” my heart sank. For Chloe, getting such a dress(非谓语动词短语做主语) was merely a piece of cake, while for me, I had to do it with all my might. With a mixed feeling of rage and grief(with复合结构), I dashed home to tell my mother about this disaster. “It’s unfair!” I exclaimed with fury, storming into my room and slamming the door before she could respond(状从).
Hearing me crying(非谓语动词做伴随动作), Mum gently pushed open the door. “Honey, are you OK ” she walked up to me, gathered me into her arms and tenderly wiped away my tears(动作串). “Look!” she pointed at the shiny dress hanging in the most visible place(非谓语动词做后置定语), adding(非谓语动词做伴随动作) “Your dress is the most precious one because you paid for it(状从). Don’t you think so ” On hearing(一....就....) what she said(宾从), I felt much relieved. “Yes, you earned it through hard work,” a firm and cheerful voice answered in my heart. Nothing could be better than gaining the precious thing in that way!