Unit 11
Sad movies make me cry.
Writing Name
ⅠFill the blanks
be too hard on keep my eyes on as soon as rather than
feel like because of pull together communicate with
Whenever I look back on my past, one unforgettable experience always comes to my mind.
Last term, I missed a score in an important football game. __________my stupid mistake. our team lost. As I walked home alone after the game. I was so upset that I __________________ the ground.l _________ there was a heavy weight on my shoulders.
_________ I got home. I told my father our team lost. Then I went into my room without another word. My father came into the room and told me that I shouldn't ____________ myself.Besides, he encouraged me to ____________________my teammates and learn from my mistakes.What my father said made me feel better.
The next day. I told my teammates that we need to practice more _________ falling into sad feelings. They all agreed to ___________ to win next time. Their words made me feel much relieved.
This unforgettable experience has become a guiding star in my life. From it. I realized that whatever happens in our lives, always remember to communicate with others and learn from our failure.
II. Analyze the topic
Writing Topic
英语周报正在以 ”My Unforgettable Experience”为主题征文。请写一篇80-100词的英语短文，叙述你的一次难忘的经历，并谈谈你在其中的感悟和收获。
In your story,try to explain the following:
1.What happened
2.When did it happen
3.Where did it happen
4.How did it make you feel Why
5.What did you learn from experience
写作要求：
2.文中不得出现真实的人名和校名等相关信息。
3.不少于100词。
Person：
Tense：
Text：
Details
Reader：
III. Make an outline
Structure：
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IV. Finish the first draft
Dear Mike,
V. Finish the second draft
Dear Mike,(共12张PPT)
Unit 11
Sad movies make me cry.
Writing
Review
Whenever I look back on my past, one unforgettable experience always comes to my mind.
Last term, I missed a score in an important football game. __________my stupid mistake. our team lost. As I walked home alone after the game. I was so upset that I __________________ the ground.l _________ there was a heavy weight on my shoulders.
_________ I got home. I told my father our team lost. Then I went into my room without another word. My father came into the room and told me that I shouldn't ____________ myself.Besides, he encouraged me to ____________________my teammates and learn from my mistakes.What my father said made me feel better.
Fill the blanks
be too hard on keep my eyes on as soon as rather than
feel like because of pull together communicate with
kept my eyes on
felt like
be too hard on
communicate with
As soon as
Because of
Review
The next day. I told my teammates that we need to practice more _________ falling into sadfeelings. They all agreed to ___________ to win next time. Their words made me feel much relieved.
This unforgettable experience has become a guiding star in my life. From it. I realized that whatever happens in our lives, always remember to communicate with others and learn from our failure.
Fill the blanks
be too hard on keep my eyes on as soon as rather than
feel like because of pull together communicate with
pull together
rather than
Pre-writing
Whenever I look back on my past, one unforgettable experience always comes to my mind.
Last term, I missed a score in an important football game. Because of my stupid mistake. our team lost. As I walked home alone after the game. I was so upset that I kept my eyes on the ground.l felt like there was a heavy weight on my shoulders.
As soon as I got home. I told my father our team lost. Then I went into my room without another word. My father came into the room and told me that I shouldn't be too hard on myself.Besides, he encouraged me to communicate with my teammates and learn from my mistakes.What my father said made me feel better.
The next day. I told my teammates that we need to practice more rather than falling into sadfeelings. They all agreed to pull together to win next time. Their words made me feel much relieved.
This unforgettable experience has become a guiding star in my life. From it,I realized that whatever happens in our lives, always remember to communicate with others and learn from our failure.
Analyze the passage
What is the passage about
It’s about one unforgettable experience.
when
what
feelings
what
feelings
what
feelings
learn from
where
I was so upset that I kept my eyes on the ground.
What my father said made me feel better.
Their words made me feel much relieved.
Analyze the passage
Then I went into my room without another word.
How can we write about our feelings
l felt like there was a heavy weight on my shoulders.
行为动作
思想活动
程度副词（much,really,so...)
Pre-writing
Writing Topic
英语周报正在以 ”My Unforgettable Experience”为主题征文。请写一篇80-100词的英语短文，叙述你的一次难忘的经历，并谈谈你在其中的感悟和收获。
In your story,try to explain the following:
1.What happened
2.When did it happen
3.Where did it happen
4.How did it make you feel Why
5.What did you learn from experience
要求：
1.短文不得出现任何真实的人名、校名及其他相关信息；
2.书写规范，100词左右；可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Pre-writing
Person
The first person
Tense
The simple present tense
Text
A passage
Reader
the readers of English Weekly
Details
1. what, when,where and how
2.80-100 words
Pre-writing
Beginning
movie/reasons/contents/feelings
Body
Ending
Structure
lead to the topic
What, when, where, how
What you have learned
Whenever l look back on my past, one unforgettable experience always comes to my mind.
This unforgettable experience has become a guiding starin my life. From it, l realized that ...
Pre-writing
1..... kept my eyes on. 2........ without another word.3. I felt like there was ... 4.I couldn't stop doing5. When l ..., I was filled with ...
Write a passage in 15 minutes
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已开始计时
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While-writing
a clear structure:beginning,body,ending.
correct content: (when/where/what /how)
some conjunction words and transitional sentences
some good sentences
no spelling mistakes
a clear and tidy hand writing
no wrong sentences
enough words
Structure
and
content
Grammar and language
Post-writing
Spelling mistakes
Wrong sentences &Punctuation mistakes
Good sentences
Conjunction words
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Check the composition
Post-writing
Work in groups,correct the mistakes and appreciate(欣赏) your group members’ compositions. Then show it to the class.
Focus on: 1. structure(结构)
2. handwriting(书写)
3. points(要点)
4. grammar(语法)
5. punctuation(标点)
6. language(语言)
7. fluency(流畅度)
Post-writingMarking ladders
Unit 11 Sad movies make me cry.
For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure, content, grammar & language Self-check Peer check Teacher’s assessment
Structure and content I have organized my writing into paragraphs. (1 point)
Para : I have leaded to the topic (2 point)
Para_____: I have written when;where;what;how (9 points)
Para.____:I have showed what I learned from (2 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (2 point)
Grammar and language My expressions are right. (3 points)
There are spelling mistakes. (1 point)
I have used some good sentences. (2 point)
I have used some conjunction words and transitional sentences.. (2 point)
I have checked my word count is around . (1 point)
Total Score
What can I do to improve my writing next time
