25年浙江1月高考小作文解读示范与个人点评
第一节 (满分15分)
你将参加英语课上的“一分钟演讲”活动,请你针对部分同学在校园内用手机拍摄短视频的现象写一篇演讲稿,内容包括:
(1)陈述看法;
(2)提出建议。
注意:
(1)写作词数应为80个左右;
(2)请按如下格式在答题纸相应位置作答。
My views on filming short videos on campus
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分析:
战略:方向——人与自我+人与社会(皮与瓤的关系——近年来的命题趋势)
战术:内容——1.看法(背景介绍+观点);2.建议(两点即可——正方:记录美好+自我放松;反方:影响学业+负面习惯);3.勿忘收尾(可根据观点的正/反做出相应的调整)
行文与示范1(支持):
My views on filming short videos on campus
As we all know, there does exist a common phenomenon that an increasing number of students are addicted to filming short videos with their phones on campus. And I am also one of them.
From my perspective, it really provides us with more chances to record the beautiful moments of our school life, which will later compose our valuable memories. At the same time, shooting short videos will constructively occupy our after-class time, offering us more pleasure and energy under the heavy academic pressure.
So I encourage more students to join us.(5句92字)
行文与示范2(反对):
My views on filming short videos on campus
As is known to all, it is a common phenomenon that a growing amount of students take to filming short videos with their phones on campus. But I stand on the opposite side.
For one thing, despite the fact that recording our school life looks so cool, it definitely distracts our students’ attention, which exerts negative influences on our academic performance. For another thing, taking mobile phones to our class not only spoils school rules/discipline, but also makes it easy for students to slide into had habits, like indulging in video games.
So we are encouraged to put an end to this behavior.(5句103)
锦言妙语积累:
正方范式:
1.定语从句:As we all know,;which will later compose our valuable memories
2.there be句式+同位语从句:there does exist a common phenomenon that
3.动名词做主语:shooting short videos
4.非谓语做状语:offering us more pleasure and energy under the heavy academic pressure
5.喜欢:be addicted to
反方范式:
1.定语从句:As is known to all,;which exerts negative influences on our academic performance
2.it形式主语+主语从句:it is a common phenomenon that
3.让步逻辑+同位语从句:despite the fact that
4.动名词做主语:taking mobile phones to our class
5.it形式宾语:makes it easy for students to slide into had habits
6.喜欢:take to
点评:
2025年浙江1月高考的小作文命题思路新颖,把如今社会中的流行现象“派生短视频”和校园生活有机结合起来。这一命题思路不免让我们有一种要梳理近几年浙江卷1月命题的手法的想法:
25年校园现象“拍摄短视频”——24年校园活动“体育与健康”——23年校园活动“了解身边的植物”——22年1月人际交往“中爱文化节回忆”——22年6月校园生活“学习室介绍”——21年1月校园活动“访校安排”——21年6月校园活动“学生国画展介绍”——20年1月校园活动“留学生中文演讲赛介绍”——20年6月人际关系“外教慰问”
通过过去6年共9篇真题整理,我们不难发现如今新课标英语小作文的命题呈现如下几个特征:
1.写作内容更贴近生活(都是耳熟能详的内容“短视频;体育/健康;身边的植物”等)
2.三大主题彼此融合趋势(以“人与自我”为材料背景,结合“人与社会”或“人与自然”为写作内核)
3.写作要点简明扼要(2个为主:看法/介绍+建议/理由/感受)
4.首次尝试应用文写作为“开放选择式”命题(考生可以在正/反方中根据自身认知灵活处理,不在是单一方向)
所以,对于今年6月参加高考的考生非常重要的备考启发为:
1.内容准备从周围的常见现象入手(突出热点现象;美育/体育/劳动教育等)
2.主题的融合性趋势明显(由单一主题进入复合主题结合命题)
3.写作主体部分多采用“平行逻辑”,角度的选择突显考生的“思维与认知”
4.写作的语言设计与内容的控制,如何有效的利用答题卡空间,通过更高效的表达呈现更多的信息