读后续写：黑点背后的希望：Brown安慰鼓励考试失利，挫败感十足的学困生 讲义-2025届江苏省常州市高三上学期期末考试英语试题

2025届常州市高三年级期末考试
第二节（满分25 分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“ I feel hopeless about my school life! I’m not a popular student in our class. I can’t play basketball as well as other boys. And I failed Math exam again yesterday, which made me ....” Tom, a 16-year-old boy of Mr. Brown’s class, lowered his head, sobbing(啜泣) uncontrollably in the Teacher’s Office.
“I’m sorry to hear that,” Mr. Brown patted Tom’s shoulder gently and asked the young boy to sit down in front of the desk so that they could sit opposite each other. This was the first time that Tom had turned to Mr. Brown for help because he was so shy and quiet in school. But Mr. Brown had noticed him many times in school’s volunteer work. Looking at the sad young boy, Mr. Brown was silent for a moment. Then, he took a piece of paper and a pen out of his drawer.
“I’d like to invite you to take a surprise test, my boy”, said Mr. Brown, passing the pen to Tom. “ A new Math exam ”, Tom raised his eyes which were still filled with tears, got the pen and replied in confusion, worrying about the coming challenge. “Just take it easy because it’s not about numbers or formulas(方程)”, Mr. Brown comforted him with a big smile. Not knowing what would come in the exam paper, Tom nodded his head and wiped his tears with his sleeves.
Mr. Brown handed Tom the question paper and encouraged him softly, “Now, you can begin and please finish the test within ten minutes.” To Tom’s surprise, there was no questions in the paper, but just a black dot in the center of the page. Mr. Brown thoroughly read through Tom’s puzzled expressions and said, “ I want you to write what you see there.” Confused as he was, Tom began to do what he had been asked to do. Meanwhile, Mr. Brown picked up a novel and started reading it, waiting patiently.
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150个左右；
（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Tom Scratched his head anxiously, having no idea what to write.
Paragraph 2: “What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper,” Said Mr. Brown.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“ I feel hopeless about my school life! I’m not a popular student in our class. I can’t play basketball as well as other boys. And I failed Math exam again yesterday, which made me ....” Tom, a 16-year-old boy of Mr. Brown’s class, lowered his head, sobbing(啜泣) uncontrollably(非谓语动词做伴随动作) in the Teacher’s Office.
“I’m sorry to hear that,” Mr. Brown patted Tom’s shoulder gently and asked the young boy to sit down in front of the desk so that they could sit opposite each other(目的状从) . This was the first time that Tom had turned to Mr. Brown for help because he was so shy and quiet in school(状从) . But Mr. Brown had noticed him many times in school’s volunteer work. Looking at the sad young boy, Mr. Brown was silent for a moment. Then, he took a piece of paper and a pen out of his drawer.
“I’d like to invite you to take a surprise test, my boy”, said Mr. Brown, passing the pen to Tom. “ A new Math exam ”, Tom raised his eyes which were still filled with tears, got the pen and replied in confusion(动作串) , worrying about the coming challenge(非谓语动词做伴随动作) . “Just take it easy because it’s not about numbers or formulas(方程)(状从) ”, Mr. Brown comforted him with a big smile. Not knowing what would come in the exam paper(非谓语动词做原因状语) , Tom nodded his head and wiped his tears with his sleeves.
Mr. Brown handed Tom the question paper and encouraged him softly, “Now, you can begin and please finish the test within ten minutes.” To Tom’s surprise, there was no questions in the paper, but just a black dot in the center of the page. Mr. Brown thoroughly read through Tom’s puzzled expressions and said, “ I want you to write what you see there(宾从) .” Confused as he was(倒装句) , Tom began to do what he had been asked to do(宾从). Meanwhile, Mr. Brown picked up a novel and started reading it, waiting patiently(非谓语动词做伴随动作) .
注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Tom Scratched his head anxiously, having no idea what to write.
Paragraph 2: “What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper,” Said Mr. Brown.
1. 按高考英语读后续写要求进行分类和分析
分析维度 内容 原文反映句
类型 励志类读后续写 "I feel hopeless about my school life! I’m not a popular student in our class."
构思思路 从主人公内心困惑入手，通过一个特殊的引导过程，让主人公领悟到隐藏的潜力和生活的积极面，完成情感转折。 "Looking at the sad young boy, Mr. Brown was silent for a moment."
布局 - 第一段：描写主人公在“考试”中的困惑心理。
- 第二段：展示老师引导的智慧与主人公心理变化。 "I want you to write what you see there."
框架提炼 1. 起：情绪低落的学生。
2. 承：老师用智慧的测试引导。
3. 转：学生领悟生活真谛。
4. 合：学生情感得到正向提升。 "Just take it easy because it’s not about numbers or formulas."
实施建议 - 结合主人公心理活动的细腻描写。
- 注重情节层层递进，尤其是对比学生前后的态度。 "Now, you can begin and please finish the test within ten minutes."
注意事项 - 确保心理描写自然过渡。
- 承接原文情节，避免断层。
- 巧用象征物（如黑点和白纸）深化主题。 "But Mr. Brown had noticed him many times in school’s volunteer work."
巧妙设计 - 以黑点和白纸作为象征，启发主人公关注积极面。
- 巧妙运用对比手法（如黑点与白纸、学生的前后心理转变）。 "What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper."
2. 故事山模式分析
Story Mountain 思维导图：
引入：Tom感到无助，向老师倾诉内心困惑。
上升：老师提出意外测试，引发学生疑惑。
高潮：Tom完成测试，写下自己的观察。
下降：老师解释测试意义，揭示隐藏真谛。
结局：Tom领悟生活中的积极面，内心感到释然。
关键分析表格：
分析角度 内容 原文反映句
人物刻画 Tom从自卑到释然，老师耐心且充满智慧。 "Mr. Brown comforted him with a big smile."
情感层次 从绝望、疑惑到顿悟。 "Tom raised his eyes which were still filled with tears."
关键情节点 老师的测试设计和对黑点的象征意义的解释。 "What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper."
语言特色 简洁生动，象征手法贯穿始终。 "Looking at the sad young boy, Mr. Brown was silent for a moment."
心理描写 描写Tom的紧张、疑惑到释然的心理转变。 "Tom scratched his head anxiously, having no idea what to write."
动作描写 老师耐心引导，Tom认真作答。 "Tom nodded his head and wiped his tears with his sleeves."
环境描写 老师办公室中的温馨氛围突出教师的关怀。 "Mr. Brown patted Tom’s shoulder gently and asked the young boy to sit down in front of the desk."
隐含主题 看问题要着眼于整体，不要纠结于细节。 "You have a whole white paper."
情感转折 从失落到顿悟的积极转变。 "Tom began to do what he had been asked to do."
空间转换 办公室内不同互动情景的变化。 "Mr. Brown picked up a novel and started reading it, waiting patiently."
时间过渡 测试时间的推进与心理转变同步。 "Now, you can begin and please finish the test within ten minutes."
3. 续写所需推荐语料：动作、心理、环境描写及词汇替换
动作描写例句（8个）
He clenched his fists, trying to steady his nerves.
She tapped her pen rhythmically against the desk, lost in thought.
He slouched in his chair, shoulders sagging with defeat.
She straightened her back, determination shining in her eyes.
He fidgeted with his sleeves, unable to sit still.
She reached out, her hand trembling slightly.
He paced the room, his mind racing with possibilities.
She nodded slowly, processing what she had just heard.
心理描写例句（8个）
His mind was a storm of thoughts, each one more chaotic than the last.
Doubt crept into her heart, whispering that she might fail again.
Relief washed over him like a gentle wave.
Her heart ached with a mixture of regret and hope.
He felt a surge of pride, his confidence slowly rebuilding.
A sense of unease settled in her chest, refusing to go away.
Determination burned in his eyes, pushing aside his fears.
She felt as though a weight had been lifted off her shoulders.
环境描写例句（8个）
The sunlight filtered through the blinds, casting warm patterns on the floor.
The room was quiet except for the soft ticking of the clock.
A faint breeze rustled the papers on the desk.
The cozy warmth of the office stood in contrast to the chilly air outside.
Shadows danced on the walls as the sunlight shifted.
The aroma of fresh coffee lingered in the air.
The sterile silence of the room felt almost oppressive.
Outside, birds chirped merrily, oblivious to the tension within.
高级替换词汇（分场景）
场景 普通词汇 高级替换词汇
情绪表达 happy elated, jubilant
描述失败 failure setback, downfall
强调信心 confident assured, self-reliant
鼓励行动 try endeavor, strive
描述过程 start initiate, embark
3. 推荐语料：读后续写常用描写例句
描写类别 推荐英文例句（8句）
动作描写 1. He scratched his head, a hint of confusion clouding his face.
2. She nodded slightly, her eyes full of hesitation.
3. He wiped his tears with trembling hands.
4. She leaned forward, eager to catch every word.
5. He froze in place, unsure of what to do next.
6. She stepped closer, a comforting smile on her lips.
7. He gripped the pen tightly, his knuckles turning white.
8. She glanced around nervously, her fingers tapping on the desk.
心理描写 1. Anxiety crept into his heart as the clock ticked away.
2. Her mind raced with countless thoughts, each more confusing than the last.
3. A wave of relief washed over him, lightening his burden.
4. Doubt clouded his judgment, leaving him hesitant.
5. She couldn’t shake off the feeling of unease.
6. Confidence slowly replaced the fear in his eyes.
7. Her heart swelled with gratitude.
8. A sense of accomplishment warmed his soul.
环境描写 1. The room was filled with a soft, calming light.
2. The ticking of the clock echoed in the quiet office.
3. A gentle breeze from the open window rustled the papers.
4. The scent of freshly brewed coffee lingered in the air.
5. The sunlight streamed through the blinds, casting long shadows on the floor.
6. The faint hum of distant voices broke the silence.
7. The desk was cluttered with books and papers, creating a sense of warmth.
8. The polished surface of the wooden desk reflected the light.
高级单词替换：
场景 基础词 高级替换词
表达情感 sad sorrowful, despondent
表达心理转变 think contemplate, reflect
表达行为 look gaze, observe
表达环境 quiet serene, tranquil
表达结果 happy content, elated
4. 高中语法现象分析
语法现象 原文句子 解析
宾语从句 "I want you to write what you see there." 使用了宾语从句“what you see there”表明写作内容。
非谓语动词 "Looking at the sad young boy, Mr. Brown was silent." 分词短语作状语，表示原因。
间接引语 "Mr. Brown comforted him with a big smile." 使用间接引语表述人物间的对话与情绪传递。
生词积累：
单词 词性 词义 近义词 反义词 例句
confusion n. 困惑 perplexity clarity His confusion was evident as he read the instructions.
puzzle v. 使迷惑 bewilder, confuse enlighten The strange message puzzled everyone in the room.
pat v. 轻拍 tap, stroke strike She patted the dog gently on the head.
4. 高中语法现象分析（续）
语法现象 原文句子 解析
虚拟语气 "I’d like to invite you to take a surprise test, my boy." “I’d like” 表达委婉语气，虚拟语气增强表达礼貌性与可能性。
时间状语从句 "Please finish the test within ten minutes." 明确时间状语“within ten minutes”表示具体的完成时间要求。
强调句型 "What your writing focused on was just the black dot." 使用强调句型“What...was...”突出写作集中于黑点的特定内容，强调对比性。
生词积累：
单词 词性 词义 近义词 反义词 例句
invite v. 邀请 ask, request decline He invited me to the dinner, but I was unable to attend.
observe v. 观察 notice, perceive ignore The scientist observed the changes carefully under the microscope.
encourage v. 鼓励 motivate, inspire discourage The teacher encouraged the students to speak confidently during the debate.
patiently adv. 耐心地 calmly, serenely impatiently She waited patiently for her turn, showing no signs of irritation.
explain v. 解释 clarify, elaborate confuse The teacher explained the concept of virtual reality in a simple yet engaging manner.
例句：
invite:
She invited her friends to her birthday party.
He invited her to share her thoughts about the issue.
encourage:
The coach encouraged the team to keep practicing despite the losses.
Positive feedback encourages students to perform better in academics.
人物刻画
Tom：从一个内心充满困惑和无助的学生，逐渐转变为一个逐渐找回自信的个体。通过Mr. Brown的鼓励和理解，Tom体验到的是一种心理上的转变。
Mr. Brown：展现了一个关心学生、富有同理心的教师形象。通过给予帮助和指导，他不仅解决了Tom的表面问题，也为他带来了情感上的支持。
情感层次
从最初的绝望和无助，到通过一个简单的互动体验转变，Tom的情感逐渐回归到平静和自信。
Mr. Brown通过细心的关怀和不急不躁的态度，成功缓解了Tom的情绪冲突，使他感到温暖和被理解。
关键情节点
冲突：Tom感到自己在学校无法取得成功，对自己的能力产生了怀疑。
转折：Mr. Brown通过"黑点"测试的方式，引导Tom从表面的困扰转向内心的自我反思。
解决：Tom从情感上的低谷逐渐恢复，重新找到了前进的力量，开始重新审视自己的优势与潜力。
隐含主题
人生如纸，不能只看表面或一点点失败。需要看到更多的可能性和机会。
通过关心和支持，我们能帮助别人发现自己潜在的力量和勇气。
情感描写与动作描写分析
情感描写：通过Tom的心理变化展示情感层次的转变。他开始时的沮丧和疑惑逐渐转变为释然和希望，最后充满信心。
动作描写：动作通过具体行为表现情感，如“擦拭眼泪”“坐下微笑”等，细致地刻画出人物的心理状态。
推荐语料
动作描写
He lifted his head, wiping away the last of his tears with the sleeve of his shirt.
She slowly relaxed her grip on the pen, feeling the tension in her fingers ease.
Tom sat up straighter, a sense of calm replacing the storm in his chest.
Mr. Brown placed a gentle hand on Tom's shoulder, offering silent reassurance.
心理描写
A wave of relief washed over Tom, his breathing slowly evening out.
His heart was no longer heavy with doubt, but light with understanding.
For the first time in a long while, Tom felt a flicker of hope rising in his chest.
Mr. Brown's words resonated in his mind, leaving him with a sense of possibility.
环境描写
The office was warm and quiet, a stark contrast to the storm of thoughts swirling in Tom's mind.
Outside the window, the sun was setting, casting a soft glow that seemed to match the mood in the room.
The sound of pages turning was the only noise in the room, calming and steadying.
高级替换词汇
场景 普通词汇 高级替换词汇
情绪表达 sad despondent, sorrowful
信心 confident self-assured, optimistic
鼓励 help assist, support
安慰 comfort console, reassure
转变 change transformation, shift
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Tom scratched his head anxiously, having no idea what to write. The blank paper in front of him seemed like a silent challenge, while the black dot stood out prominently, mocking his confusion(非谓语动词做伴随动作) . Hesitated to write out onto the page(adj短语做主语补语) as he described how the black dot overshadowed the clean(状从+宾从), white surface. Lost in his thoughts(非谓语动词做原因状语), he barely noticed the time passing until Mr. Brown softly announced(状从), “Time’s up, Tom.” Looking at his work(非谓语动词做伴随动作), Tom felt a mix of embarrassment and relief, unsure(adj短语做补语)if he had met his teacher’s expectations.(宾从)
Paragraph 2: “What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper,” said Mr. Brown, holding the sheet up(非谓语动词做伴随动作). “The black dot represents challenges, mistakes, or failures in life. But don’t forget, Tom, there’s so much more to celebrate in the ‘white paper’—your kindness, your talents, your potential.” His words struck a chord with Tom, making him realize how narrow his perspective had been(非谓语动词做伴随动作+宾从). “Life is never perfect, but we should focus on the positive and not let setbacks define us,” Mr. Brown added with a smile. Inspired by his teacher’s words(非谓语动词做原因状语), Tom felt a surge of confidence. He left the office that day determined to embrace his strengths and work on his weaknesses(adj短语做伴随动作), knowing that life, like the white paper, was full of possibilities(宾从).
亮点分析
情绪描写亮点：
例句:
"Tom scratched his head anxiously."
"Looking at his work, Tom felt a mix of embarrassment and relief."
分析: 使用了细腻的心理活动描写，展现出Tom的内心波动，增强了读者的代入感。
动作描写亮点：
例句:
"He started writing down words like 'isolated,' 'flawed,' and 'imperfection.'"
"Tom wiped his tears with his sleeves."
分析: 动作描写与心理描写结合，使情节发展更自然、流畅。
环境描写亮点：
例句:"The blank paper in front of him seemed like a silent challenge."
分析: 用具象化的比喻展现场景氛围，与人物心情相呼应。
语法加分点：
虚拟语气："Life is never perfect, but we should focus on the positive."
强调句型："What your writing focused on was just the black dot."
积累语料：
短语/句型 升级替换选项 同义词/联想词 例句
"scratch one’s head" "rub one’s forehead" frown, hesitate Tom scratched his head, trying to recall the answer.
"focus on the positive" "look on the bright side" remain optimistic, stay hopeful Instead of worrying about failures, we should focus on the positive aspects of life.
"define one’s identity" "shape one’s personality" determine, characterize Your achievements, not your mistakes, should define your identity.
6. 优秀短语与词汇分析表（欧路词典）
核心词汇 词性 词义 近义词 联想词 例句
challenge n./v. 挑战/向…挑战 difficulty, task obstacle, struggle This test is not only a challenge but also a chance to learn.
potential n./adj. 潜力/潜在的 capability, possibility prospect, opportunity He has the potential to become a great leader.
confidence n. 自信 self-assurance belief, trust Gaining confidence takes time and effort, but it’s worth it.
perspective n. 视角 viewpoint, outlook angle, frame A broader perspective helps us understand the complexities of life.
overcome v. 克服 conquer, defeat prevail, endure She overcame her fears and achieved her dreams.
例句：
challenge:
Facing new challenges helps you grow.
This difficult task was a challenge for everyone in the team.
potential:
He has the potential to succeed if he works hard.
Unlocking one’s potential requires determination and effort.
读后续写：（官方范文）
Tom scratched his head anxiously, having no idea what to write. He took a deep breath, looking around the office to search for some inspiration(非谓语动词做伴随动作). But it didn't work! All he could think of(定从) was just the black dot in the paper. He cast a quick look at Mr. Brown who was totally absorbed in his book(定从). Time going so fast(独立主格), there were only thirty seconds left(adj做补语)! Tom had no choice but to write a very short sentence on the paper in a hurry-What I can see(主从) is just a black dot in the center of the paper! Then, he handed it to Mr. Brown perplexedly.
"What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper," said Mr. Brown. "Don't get discouraged just by a small dot! "continued Mr. Brown. "I'm not going to grade you on this test; I just wanted you to know this." "Likewise, the black dots you talked about(定从)as your weaknesses are nothing compared to the other merits(状从) you've possessed(定从)." Then he praised Tom for what he had done for the volunteer work in school(宾从). "You are such a kind and helpful boy. You should take pride in yourself! I believe you will have a promising future(宾从).", said Mr. Brown, giving Tom a warm hug(非谓语动词做伴伴宿动作). Deeply struck(非谓语动词做原因状语) by what Mr. Brown said(宾从), Tom nodded his head, his eyes glistening with light(独立主格).