读后续写：车祸后截肢女孩被爱心护士安排的乐观抗癌女孩感染重拾乐观心态 讲义- 四川省绵阳市高中2024-2025学年高二上学期期末教学质量测试英语

绵阳市高中2023级第三学期末教学质量测试英 语
第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Look who’s here to see you, Brenda,” the nurse said. She led a tired-looking woman to the girl’s beside. Brenda huddled(蜷缩) on her side, facing the wall. When her mother touched her shoulder, she pulled her head closer to her chest, as if making her body smaller would help her disappear altogether. The nurse patted the mother’s shoulder. “Brenda’s still not talking to us,” she said in a low voice.
Brenda’s mother bit her lip to keep herself from crying. She remembered exactly how cheerful and happy Brenda had been before the car accident that led to the amputation(截肢) of her leg. She’d been one of the most popular girls in her sixth-grade class. When Brenda first awakened from her surgery, she became extremely angry at her mother. Why had this happened Now, she felt like no one would ever want to be her friend. Then Brenda had just stopped talking.
“I wish I could bring her friends to visit her,” said Brenda’s mother. “But it’s just too long a bus trip, about three hours each way.” The nurse smiled. “Don’t worry. We have a plan.” One said happily. “We need this bed for someone who’s really sick. We’ve picked out the the roommate in the hospital for you.”
Before Brenda could say no, the nurses had rolled her onto the stretcher and taken her away down the hall. The room was full of light, posters and music. “Here’s your new roomie, Annie Wiggle-Do,” one nurse told a dark-haired teenager in the other bed. “She’s just beginning to get better, so please don’t kill her with your poor jokes.”
Fourteen-year-old Annie laughed. Not replying to the nurses, she turned to Brenda. “I lost my legs from bone cancer,” she announced. “What happened to yours ” Without waiting for a reply, Annie from reached up and took off her hair, continuing “Oh, look, the stuff they gave me to kill the cancer also killed my hair.” “ So, any wig(假发) will do. ‘Annie Wiggle-Do’ ” Annie began laughing at her own joke.
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150个左右；
（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: From a box under her bed, Annie pulled out a lot of wigs.
Paragraph 2: Gradually, Brenda began chatting with Annie.
绵阳市高中2023级第三学期末教学质量测试英 语
第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Look who’s here to see you(状从), Brenda,” the nurse said. She led a tired-looking woman to the girl’s beside. Brenda huddled(蜷缩) on her side, facing the wall(非谓语动词做伴随动作). When her mother touched her shoulder(状从), she pulled her head closer to her chest, as if making her body smaller would help her disappear altogether(状从 心理状态描写). The nurse patted the mother’s shoulder. “Brenda’s still not talking to us,” she said in a low voice.
Brenda’s mother bit her lip to keep herself from crying(心理描写). She remembered exactly how cheerful and happy Brenda had been before the car accident(状从) that led to the amputation(截肢) of her leg(定从). She’d been one of the most popular girls in her sixth-grade class. When Brenda first awakened from her surgery(状从), she became extremely angry at her mother. Why had this happened Now, she felt like no one would ever want to be her friend(宾从 题点). Then Brenda had just stopped talking.
“I wish I could bring her friends to visit her(宾从),” said Brenda’s mother. “But it’s just too long a bus trip, about three hours each way.” The nurse smiled. “Don’t worry. We have a plan.” One said happily. “We need this bed for someone who’s really sick(定从). We’ve picked out the the roommate in the hospital for you.”
Before Brenda could say no(状从), the nurses had rolled her onto the stretcher and taken her away down the hall. The room was full of light, posters and music. “Here’s your new roomie, Annie Wiggle-Do,” one nurse told a dark-haired teenager in the other bed. “She’s just beginning to get better, so please don’t kill her with your poor jokes.”(人物性格描写)
Fourteen-year-old Annie laughed. Not replying to the nurses(非谓语动词做伴随动作), she turned to Brenda. “I lost my legs from bone cancer,” she announced(反应人物性格). “What happened to yours ” Without waiting for a reply, Annie reached up and took off her hair, continuing(动作串) “Oh, look, the stuff they gave me to kill the cancer(定从) also killed my hair.” “ So, any wig(假发) will do. ‘Annie Wiggle-Do’ ” Annie began laughing at her own joke(人物性格).
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: From a box under her bed, Annie pulled out a lot of wigs.
Paragraph 2: Gradually, Brenda began chatting with Annie.
1. 文章分类及续写思路
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 描述了Brenda的情感变化与心理状态，及Annie的幽默与自信。 “Brenda huddled on her side, facing the wall.” “Annie laughed.”
情感层次 Brenda的沮丧与愤怒逐渐得到舒缓，Annie的幽默帮助Brenda放下心防。 “Brenda had just stopped talking.” “Annie began laughing at her own joke.”
关键情节点 Brenda与Annie的初次互动，Annie的幽默打破了Brenda的沉默。 “Annie Wiggle-Do” laughed.
语言特色 通过幽默的语言描绘人物性格，特别是Annie的角色。 “What happened to yours ” “Oh, look, the stuff they gave me...”
关键词分析 关键词：amputation, angry, cheerful, wig, cancer “amputation of her leg” “I lost my legs from bone cancer”
心理描写 描写Brenda的内心挣扎与情感变化，Annie的幽默使Brenda敞开心扉。 “Brenda’s mother bit her lip to keep herself from crying.”
动作描写 动作：Brenda躲避接触，Annie主动与Brenda对话。 “Brenda huddled on her side, facing the wall.”
环境描写 医院环境充满光明、音乐与温暖，影响了Brenda的情绪。 “The room was full of light, posters and music.”
隐含主题 身心康复与人际关系的重建。 Brenda与Annie通过相似的遭遇建立了联系。
情感转折 Brenda从拒绝到开始与Annie交流。 “Gradually, Brenda began chatting with Annie.”
空间转换 从医院病房到Annie的病床。 “Before Brenda could say no, the nurses had rolled her onto the stretcher.”
时间过渡 描写Brenda从完全闭塞到逐渐开放心扉的过程。 “Gradually, Brenda began chatting with Annie.”
2. Story Mountain思维导图
Story Mountain是结构化故事叙述的一种方式，包含五个主要元素：
Exposition (介绍)
背景：Brenda因车祸截肢，情绪低落，拒绝与人交谈。
初步冲突：Brenda对自己失去的身体和生活产生极度的愤怒和不满。
Rising Action (情节发展)
转折点：Brenda被带到新的病房，与Annie见面。
Annie的幽默和开朗的态度让Brenda开始打破沉默。
Climax (高潮)
Brenda开始与Annie交流，情感发生转折。
Falling Action (情节下滑)
Brenda逐渐开始放下心防，与Annie建立联系。
Resolution (解决)
Brenda慢慢克服心理障碍，逐渐恢复与外界的交流。
3. 续写中的衔接与设计
原文衔接：Annie的幽默和主动将Brenda从自我封闭中拉出来，开启了两人之间的互动。续写中应注意通过Annie的幽默感和Brenda逐步打开心扉的过程来表现转折。
伏笔：原文中提到“Brenda just stopped talking”和“she felt like no one would ever want to be her friend”暗示了Brenda的孤立和心理障碍，续写时可以利用Annie的角色帮助Brenda逐渐打破心结。
冲突点：Brenda的内心矛盾——失去腿后的自卑和孤独感。
解决方案：Annie通过幽默的方式引导Brenda重新面对自己，促进情感恢复。
4. 动作、心理、环境描写的英文例句
动作描写：
Brenda reluctantly sat up in bed, her eyes still fixed on the wall.
Annie jumped off her bed and approached Brenda with a wide smile.
Brenda nervously pulled the covers tighter around herself.
Annie reached for the colorful wig beside her bed and placed it on Brenda’s lap.
Brenda hesitated for a moment, then slowly turned to face Annie.
With a deep breath, Brenda finally spoke, her voice trembling.
Annie waved her hand in front of Brenda’s face, trying to get her attention.
Brenda slowly nodded, unsure of what to say next.
心理描写：
Brenda felt an overwhelming sense of shame as she looked at her reflection in the mirror.
Annie’s cheerful attitude started to chip away at Brenda’s emotional wall.
Brenda couldn’t understand why this was happening to her, and it made her feel so helpless.
Annie’s joke, though silly, brought a small smile to Brenda’s face for the first time in weeks.
Brenda felt a spark of hope, something she hadn’t felt since the accident.
As Brenda listened to Annie’s story, she realized she wasn’t alone in her pain.
Brenda’s heart softened as she saw Annie’s genuine concern for her.
A tiny part of Brenda wished she could laugh along with Annie, but fear held her back.
环境描写：
The hospital room was quiet, except for the soft hum of medical equipment.
The walls were adorned with colorful posters, making the sterile environment feel a little less cold.
Outside the window, the bright sunlight poured in, adding warmth to the room.
The music playing softly in the background seemed to lift the heavy atmosphere.
The air in the room smelled faintly of disinfectant, a reminder of the sterile setting.
A gentle breeze from the open window stirred the curtains, bringing a touch of fresh air.
The room was dimly lit in the early morning, the only sound the soft murmur of nurses passing by.
The clock ticked loudly on the wall, adding to the stillness of the moment.
常见单词的高级替换词：
Angry → furious, enraged, irate, irritated, livid
Cheerful → joyful, upbeat, happy, optimistic, content
Sad → sorrowful, melancholic, downcast, despairing, gloomy
Funny → humorous, amusing, comical, witty, hilarious
Tired → exhausted, fatigued, weary, drained, worn-out
5. 高中语法现象分析
语法现象 例句 常见搭配 生词短语
虚拟语气 “I wish I could bring her friends to visit her.” “wish + past tense” “wish + would”
定语从句 “Annie laughed, not replying to the nurses.” “who/which + 动词” “the nurse who helped”
情态动词 “The nurses had rolled her onto the stretcher.” “could, would, should, might” “must have”
过去完成时 “When Brenda first awakened from her surgery.” “had + 过去分词” “had been”
Possible Answers:
官方Possible version：
From a box under her bed, Annie pulled out a lot of wigs. “Look at this one,” she said, holding up a bright pink wig(非谓语动词做伴随动作). “I call it my ‘cotton candy’ look.” Then, she grabbed a blue one. “And this ‘Ocean Wave Annie!’” She tried on each wig dramatically. Brenda glanced at her out of the corner of her eyes, her lips twitched in the smallest hint of a smile(独立主格). Annie caught it immediately. “Ah, there it is! The tiniest smile!” she exclaimed, clapping her hands(非谓语动词做伴随动作). She leaned closer and whispered, “I knew you couldn’t resist my charm(宾从).” Brenda rolled her eyes but found herself feeling lighter.
Gradually, Brenda began chatting with Annie. At first, it was just a few short replies to Annie’s endless chatter. But soon, Brenda started asking questions about the wigs and sharing her own story. Annie listened attentively and said, “You’re not alone, you know. It’s okay to feel sad, but life doesn’t stop. We make our own new normal.” For the first time in weeks, Brenda felt understood and hopeful, realizing that maybe, just maybe, she could find happiness again(宾从).
Version 1:
Paragraph 1: From a box under her bed, Annie pulled out a lot of wigs. She set them out one by one, making a colorful display across the bed(非谓语动词做伴随动作). "Pick whichever one you like(宾从)," she said with a grin. Brenda, still lying on her side and avoiding eye contact(非谓语动词做伴随动作), hesitated at first(adj做补语). But when Annie placed a bright pink wig on top of her head(状从), Brenda couldn't help but smile slightly. It was absurd, yet it made her feel lighter(状从), like the weight of her sorrow had lifted for a brief moment(宾从). Annie was persistent, always trying to make Brenda laugh(非谓语动词做伴随动作), and although Brenda stayed silent(状从), she was starting to feel something she hadn't felt in weeks—a sense of curiosity(定从).
Paragraph 2: Gradually, Brenda began chatting with Annie. At first, it was only small words or simple responses, but over time, her conversations grew longer. Brenda shared stories about her life before the accident, and Annie, with her usual sense of humor, made Brenda laugh. Slowly but surely, the barrier between them began to dissolve. Brenda found herself looking forward to their chats, each one bringing a little more light to her dark days(独立主格). She no longer felt entirely alone in the world. There was a warmth in Annie’s presence, and Brenda realized she was starting to heal, one conversation at a time(宾从).
加分点语法与搭配分析：
动词短语（Phrasal Verbs）
搭配：pull out, set out, pick up
同义替换：take out, arrange, choose
例句：
Annie pulled out a few wigs from the box and carefully arranged them on the bed.
Brenda picked up a wig and held it against her face, considering how it might look.
情感变化（Emotional Change）
搭配：lift the weight, feel lighter, starting to heal
同义替换：ease the burden, feel relieved, beginning to recover
例句：
For the first time in weeks, Brenda felt lighter after Annie made her smile.
The laughter helped her begin to heal from the emotional scars she had carried.
互动描写（Interaction Description）
搭配：start chatting, share stories, break the silence
同义替换：engage in conversation, exchange stories, start a dialogue
例句：
Brenda started chatting with Annie more often, opening up little by little.
She shared stories from her life, and Annie's humor made the moments less heavy.
亮点词汇短语：
情绪描写：
Sorrow (悲伤), sense of curiosity (好奇心), lighter (轻松的)
升级替换：
Sorrow → grief → heartache
Curiosity → interest → fascination
动作描写：
Pick out (挑选), set out (摆放), look forward to (期待)
升级替换：
Pick out → choose → select
Look forward to → anticipate → await
语法亮点分析：
过去进行时（Past Continuous Tense）：用于描述在过去某一时刻正在进行的动作。
例句： Brenda was starting to heal, and with each passing day, she felt a little better.
情态动词（Modal Verbs）：用来表示可能性、愿望或能力，增强语气和情感。
例句： Brenda realized she was starting to heal, and she couldn’t wait to speak more freely.
Version 2:
Paragraph 1: From a box under her bed, Annie pulled out a lot of wigs.Annie continued to crack jokes, and gradually, Brenda’s cold exterior began to thaw. As Brenda listened to Annie’s stories about her own struggles with cancer(状从), she felt an unfamiliar sense of comfort. Slowly, she allowed herself to smile, though it was faint at first(状从). Her mind, once filled with self-pity and anger(非谓语动词做原因状语), started to shift. The warmth in the room seemed to mirror the change in her heart. She realized that she wasn’t alone(宾从), and for the first time in weeks, she felt a glimmer of hope. The laughter that filled the room(定从) was healing in ways Brenda had not anticipated(定从). It was as though Annie’s humor had unlocked something deep inside her(表从), a part of her that still longed for connection(定从).
Paragraph 2: Gradually, Brenda began chatting with Annie. In the days that followed, Brenda began to open up more. She shared her feelings with Annie, telling her about the anger(非谓语动词做伴随动作) she had felt towards herself and others(定从). With each passing day, her confidence grew, and she found herself laughing at Annie’s jokes, even joining in on some of the banter(n.戏谑逗弄，开玩笑). The nurses noticed the change, and Brenda’s mother, who had been worried for so long(定从), could see a light return to her daughter’s eyes. Brenda knew she still had a long way to go(宾从), but now she felt empowered. Thanks to Annie’s unwavering friendship, Brenda was no longer trapped in her sorrow; she was beginning to heal, piece by piece.
加分点语法分析与搭配：
渐进变化（Gradual Shift）
搭配：gradually begin to, slowly allow oneself to, shift from...to...
同义替换：start to, gradually, little by little
例句：
She slowly allowed herself to smile, despite the tears that had once flowed endlessly.
The situation gradually changed as they started to open up to each other.
情感的转变（Emotional Change）
搭配：filled with, begin to feel, shift in heart
同义替换：overcome, transform, change
例句：
Her heart was filled with warmth, a feeling she hadn’t experienced in a long time.
The emotional shift in Brenda was noticeable to everyone in the room.
动作描写（Action Description）
搭配：began to open up, share feelings, join in
同义替换：start to communicate, express, participate
例句：
Brenda slowly began to share her deepest fears with Annie, unburdening herself.
She started to laugh at Annie's jokes, her laughter mingling with hers.
亮点词汇短语：
情绪描写：
Self-pity (自怜), unfamiliar sense of comfort (陌生的安慰感), glimmer of hope (希望的微光), faint smile (微弱的笑容)
升级替换：
Self-doubt → self-consciousness → insecurity
Comfort → reassurance → solace
动作描写：
Smiled faintly (微笑), opened up (敞开心扉), joined in (加入)
升级替换：
Smile → grin → beam
Open up → confide → share
语法亮点分析：
过去完成时：用来描述某个事件在过去某一时间之前发生的动作。
例句： Brenda had been struggling with her anger for months before Annie arrived.
情态动词：表示愿望、可能性或能力，增强了情感表现力。
例句： Brenda knew she still had a long way to go, but she felt empowered.
Version 3
Paragraph 1: From a box under her bed, Annie pulled out a lot of wigs. Placing it on Brenda's lap. “Want to try one on ” she asked playfully. At first, Brenda resisted the attempt at conversation. She barely glanced at Annie, keeping her face turned away(非谓语动词做伴随动作). But Annie was relentless, laughing and joking, she chipped away at Brenda's defenses. As Brenda sat(状从) staring blankly at the wall(非谓语动词做伴随动作), hesitant and nodding(adj和非谓语动词做伴随动作). As the wig settled on her head(状从), a small, nervous chuckle escaped her lips. It was the first time in weeks that she had allowed herself to laugh(强调句). The sound echoed through the room, surprising both of them(非谓语动词做伴随动作). It wasn’t much, but it was a start.
Paragraph 2:Gradually, Brenda began chatting with Annie. From that day forward, Brenda’s attitude began to shift. She started to engage in conversations with Annie, even making a few jokes of her own(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Her confidence was returning, and the sadness that once clouded her eyes(定从) began to lift. Her mother was amazed at the change, and the nurses often caught the two of them laughing together(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Brenda’s room, once a place of sorrow and isolation(同位语或者补语), had transformed into a space of warmth and laughter. Although the road ahead would be long(状从), Brenda no longer felt alone in her struggle. She had found a friend, someone who understood her pain and helped her embrace life once again(定从).
加分点语法分析与搭配：
反复发生的行为（Repetition of Action）
搭配：kept + 动词-ing, was relentless, kept chipping away
同义替换：continuously, persistently, constantly
例句：
She kept pushing forward, refusing to give up.
Despite the setbacks, she was relentless in her pursuit of recovery.
轻微变化（Slight Change）
搭配：shift in attitude, a small laugh escaped
同义替换：slight adjustment, subtle change
例句：
A small shift in her attitude made all the difference.
She let out a quiet laugh, surprised at herself for even attempting it.
心理描写的强化（Strengthening Psychological Description）
搭配：clouded her eyes, allowed herself to laugh, lifted the sadness
同义替换：overcome her sadness, brighten her mood
例句：
Brenda’s eyes, once clouded with sorrow, now gleamed with hope.
Her mood lifted the moment she joined in on the conversation.
亮点词汇短语：
情绪描写：
Reluctance (不情愿), hesitant (犹豫), surprising (令人惊讶的)
升级替换：
Hesitate → pause → doubt
Surprise → astonishment → amazement
作描写：
Place on lap (放在膝上), escape a chuckle (轻轻笑出)
升级替换：
Place → set → position
Escape a laugh → burst out laughing → guffaw
语法亮点分析：
过去进行时：表现过去正在发生的动作，强化情感变化。
例句： Annie was relentlessly cracking jokes while Brenda was struggling to keep her emotions in check.
被动语态：加强描述的情感和对动作的关注。
例句： The room was filled with laughter, an unexpected outcome for both of them.