读后续写--情人节的特别礼物：传递对奶奶的爱 讲义-2025届江西省萍乡高三第一次调研考试英语试题

读后续写
When Valentine’s Day was around the corner, Grandma came down with a terrible cold as she was travelling from Colorado to my family’s house in California. She was too weak to go out at all, which was sad and disappointing. Grandma and Grandpa had been planning to take my little sister Indi and me to the zoo for Valentine’s Day. Grandma, as an animal lover, had been especially looking forward to it.
On Valentine’s Day, Indi begged Grandma to go to the zoo with us. But Grandma jokingly explained that if she went there, she might spread her cold to other visitors, or even to the animals, making them all start sneezing.
I imagined the sight that an elephant kept sneezing. Meanwhile, I pretended my arm was a trunk and blurted out a funny trumpeting sound that ended with a gigantic sneeze. “Good one, brother,” Indi laughed. “That elephant would need a huge box of tissues.”
Grandma was amused. But she insisted that she should stay at home and rest up. She wished us a pleasant visit and reminded us to send her regards to the monkeys.
Well, we did go and we did have a great time, but I kept wishing Grandma could have been there with us. When we reached the monkey mountain, Grandpa suggested taking a picture with the monkeys and told us to hold still and say “cheese”.
“Cheese,” I said. But Indi said, “Happy Valentine’s Day, Grandma!”
“You were supposed to say cheese,” said Grandpa.
Indi shrugged, “It just came out.”
“I’m glad it did,” I said. “Because you’re just given me a fantastic idea. What if we take pictures of different animals, and then turn them into a special Valentine gift for Grandma ” Indi and Grandpa agreed and we kept taking pictures for Grandma.
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When we got home, we set about making the gift.
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Then we took the gift upstairs to Grandma’s room.
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文章大意
情人节前夕，奶奶从科罗拉多州来加州途中患重感冒，无法按计划带 “我” 和妹妹去动物园。情人节当天，我们还是去了动物园，玩得很开心，但 “我” 一直希望奶奶也在。在猴山拍照时，妹妹喊出 “情人节快乐，奶奶！”，这让 “我” 想到以动物照片为奶奶制作情人节礼物。
故事山分析
开端：奶奶因感冒无法带 “我” 和妹妹去动物园过情人节。
发展：我们去了动物园，在猴山拍照时妹妹的话启发 “我” 制作礼物。
高潮：回家后制作礼物以及给奶奶送礼物的过程。
结局：奶奶收到礼物后的反应，体现亲情的温暖和礼物的意义。
伏笔及在续写中的回应
伏笔：“Grandma, as an animal lover, had been especially looking forward to it.” 表明奶奶热爱动物。
回应：续写中以动物照片制作礼物，满足奶奶对动物的喜爱，给她带来惊喜。
伏笔：“I imagined the sight that an elephant kept sneezing.” 体现 “我” 丰富的想象力。
回应：在制作礼物时，可能会发挥想象力对照片进行创意加工，如添加有趣的文字描述动物打喷嚏的样子。
伏笔：“But Indi said, ‘Happy Valentine’s Day, Grandma!’” 妹妹对奶奶的情感表达。
回应：制作的礼物围绕情人节祝福展开，强化妹妹对奶奶的爱，也让奶奶感受到这份温暖。
伏笔：“‘What if we take pictures of different animals, and then turn them into a special Valentine gift for Grandma ’ Indi and Grandpa agreed.” 表明要制作礼物。
回应：续写第一段详细描述制作礼物的过程，如挑选照片、装饰等。
伏笔：“Well, we did go and we did have a great time, but I kept wishing Grandma could have been there with us.” 体现对奶奶的思念。
回应：制作礼物是弥补奶奶未能同去的遗憾，奶奶收到礼物后，能感受到我们的思念，进一步加深亲情。
续写要点
第一段：详细描述回家后制作礼物的过程。先挑选出最有趣、最有代表性的动物照片，然后用彩色笔在照片周围画上爱心、花朵等装饰，还可以在每张照片下写上有趣的文字，如动物的 “内心独白”，表达对奶奶的祝福。
第二段：描述送礼物给奶奶的场景。我们走进奶奶房间，将礼物递给她，奶奶打开礼物时的表情从惊讶到感动，她可能会逐张翻看照片，眼中泛着泪花，对我们的礼物赞不绝口，最后我们一起拥抱，感受亲情的温暖。
情感线
从去动物园时对奶奶的思念，到决定制作礼物时的期待，制作过程中的用心和喜悦，送礼物时的紧张与兴奋，以及奶奶收到礼物后的感动，情感层层递进，突出亲情的美好。
故事线
奶奶因感冒无法陪我们去动物园。
我们在动物园游玩，妹妹的话启发制作礼物。
回家后挑选照片，装饰并撰写文字制作礼物。
带着礼物上楼，走进奶奶房间。
奶奶打开礼物，表现出惊讶与感动。
一家人拥抱，感受亲情温暖。
主旨升华句
Love is not bound by circumstances but can be expressed in creative ways, just like the gift we made for Grandma.
A simple act of kindness and thoughtfulness can bring immeasurable joy and warmth, especially to those we love.
The power of family love lies in the small gestures that show we care, like this special Valentine's gift for Grandma.
Even in the face of disappointment, love finds a way to shine through, as our gift to Grandma demonstrated.
This Valentine's Day, we learned that the most precious gifts are not bought but crafted with love and shared with family.
写作示范
示范一
When we got home, we set about making the gift. First, we carefully selected the best pictures from our zoo visit. The one of the lion roaring was a must - include, and the photo of the cute pandas munching on bamboo was perfect too. Then, Indi and I took out our colored pens and started decorating the edges of the pictures with hearts and flowers. I wrote funny captions under each photo. For the lion, I wrote, “Roar! Wishing you a speedy recovery, Grandma!” We spent hours making the gift as special as possible.
Then we took the gift upstairs to Grandma’s room. As we entered, Grandma looked up with a tired smile. We handed her the gift, and she opened it slowly. Her eyes widened with surprise at first, and then filled with tears of joy as she saw each photo. “Oh, my dears, this is the most wonderful Valentine's gift ever. I feel like I was right there with you at the zoo,” she said, her voice trembling with emotion. We all hugged her tightly, and the love in the room was palpable.
示范二
When we got home, we set about making the gift. I spread out all the pictures on the table and sorted them by animal type. Indi found some glitter and stickers, and we used them to make the pictures more eye - catching. We added little notes like “This giraffe is stretching its neck to send you love, Grandma” next to the picture of the giraffe. Grandpa helped us arrange the pictures neatly in a photo album.
Then we took the gift upstairs to Grandma’s room. We knocked gently and entered. Grandma was sitting in bed, reading a book. When we presented her with the album, she was speechless for a moment. As she flipped through the pages, a big smile spread across her face. “You kids are so sweet. This gift means the world to me. It's the best Valentine's surprise I could have asked for,” she said, pulling us close for a hug. The love and warmth in that room made this Valentine's Day truly unforgettable.
【答案】One possible version:
When we got home, we set about making the gift. We printed out the photos we had taken at the zoo, each one capturing a different animal in their playful or majestic moments. Indi and I carefully selected the best shots, making sure to include the monkeys as per Grandma’s request. We then took out a beautiful photo album and lovingly arranged the pictures inside, adding little notes about each animal and the memories they brought back. It was a labor of love, and we were excited to see Grandma’s reaction.
Then we took the gift upstairs to Grandma’s room. We tiptoed in, trying not to disturb her, but her eyes lit up as soon as she saw the wrapped photo album in our hands. “What’s this ” she asked. We handed her the gift, and as she flipped through the pages, her face broke into a wide smile. “Oh, this is the best Valentine’s Day gift ever,” she exclaimed. “Thank you, my darlings. This means so much to me.” We sat with her, sharing stories about the day and watching her delight as she revisited the zoo through our pictures. It was a moment of pure happiness, and we knew that even though she wasn’t physically with us at the zoo, she was very much a part of our adventure.