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河北省部分示范性重点高中2024-2025学年高一上学期12月考试英语试题
第二节(满分25分)
67. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
One morning in June 2023, a high school student Alex saw a community message on social media. A strong storm the night before had caused many trees in a nearby small park to fall, and part of the park was closed off. The message said that the park’s management team was cleaning up the fallen trees, but they needed more volunteers to help.
Alex was a member of the school ‘ volunteer club. He quickly called the club leader, explained the situation, and asked for agreement to help. They quickly put on work clothes, asked the management team if they had enough tools, and got a positive answer. They rode their bikes, with gloves, to the park.
When they arrived, they saw the park’s management team, including Mr Thompson and several other workers, working hard to clear the fallen trees.
Alex walked up and greeted them warmly, “Good morning, everyone, we’re here to help!”
The park manager Mr Thompson smiled, “You came. That’s great! The work here is too much, and we don’t have enough people.”
Everyone worked together. Some cut the big trees into smaller pieces, while others moved them to a pile (堆). They also used brooms (扫帚) and garbage bags to clean up leaves. Although the work was hard, they encouraged each other, and the work went quickly.
While cleaning, they found a frightened little bird. The bird ‘ wing seemed hurt, and it couldn’t fly. Alex gently held the bird in his hand and said to his friend bake, “We need to help it.”
They made a temporary nest (临时的鸟窝) for the bird with leaves and soft grass and placed it in a bate place. They contacted the local animal rescue organization and described the bird’s situation to the worker.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
After that, they went on cleaning the park.
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As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived.
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第二节(满分25分)
67. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
One morning in June 2023, a high school student Alex saw a community message on social media. A strong storm the night before had caused many trees in a nearby small park to fall, and part of the park was closed off. The message said that the park’s management team was cleaning up the fallen trees, but they needed more volunteers to help(宾从).
Alex was a member of the school ‘ volunteer club. He quickly called the club leader, explained the situation, and asked for agreement to help(动作串). They quickly put on work clothes, asked the management team if they had enough tools(宾从), and got a positive answer(动作串). They rode their bikes, with gloves, to the park.
When they arrived(状从), they saw the park’s management team, including Mr Thompson and several other workers, working hard to clear the fallen trees(目的状语).
Alex walked up and greeted them warmly, “Good morning, everyone, we’re here to help!”
The park manager Mr Thompson smiled, “You came. That’s great! The work here is too much, and we don’t have enough people.”
Everyone worked together. Some cut the big trees into smaller pieces, while others moved them to a pile (堆)(状从). They also used brooms (扫帚) and garbage bags to clean up leaves. Although the work was hard(状从), they encouraged each other, and the work went quickly.
While cleaning(状从省略), they found a frightened little bird. The bird ‘ wing seemed hurt, and it couldn’t fly. Alex gently held the bird in his hand and said to his friend bake, “We need to help it.”
They made a temporary nest (临时的鸟窝) for the bird with leaves and soft grass and placed it in a bate place. They contacted the local animal rescue organization and described the bird’s situation to the worker.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
After that, they went on cleaning the park.
As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived.
1. 高考英语读后续写分类及分析
分析角度 内容 原文反映句
类型分类 社区志愿活动与环保主题 Alex saw a community message on social media about the park needing help after the storm.
构思思路 通过事件发展展示主人公与团队的努力、合作精神以及解决问题的能力。情节应体现团队精神和助人为乐的价值。 Everyone worked together. They encouraged each other, and the work went quickly.
布局分析 第一段：清理公园过程及团队协作；第二段：动物救助和结果的圆满结束。 After that, they went on cleaning the park.
框架提炼 起因（社区消息）→经过（清理公园和发现受伤鸟）→结果（完成任务并救助小鸟）。 Alex gently held the bird in his hand and said to his friend Jake, "We need to help it."
实施建议 采用细节描写体现动作和心理变化，运用对话和环境描写增强画面感，保持故事节奏。 "Good morning, everyone, we’re here to help!"
承接原文注意事项 续写必须呼应原文的团队合作、环保意识和救助小鸟的情节。 They made a temporary nest for the bird with leaves and soft grass.
整体注意事项 避免情节重复或跳跃，保持语言简洁流畅，使用多样化句式和词汇，展现故事的逻辑性和完成度。 Alex contacted the local animal rescue organization and described the bird’s situation to the worker.
巧妙设计续写内容 添加更多团队协作的细节，表现角色个性；描述小鸟康复后的情况，强化环保与善意主题。 As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived.
2. 故事山模式分析
故事山思维导图
开端（Introduction）: 社区消息引发志愿行动。
原文反映句："Alex saw a community message on social media."
上升（Rising Action）: 团队清理公园，合作解决问题。
原文反映句："Everyone worked together. Some cut the big trees into smaller pieces, while others moved them to a pile."
高潮（Climax）: 发现受伤小鸟并决定救助。
原文反映句："The bird’s wing seemed hurt, and it couldn’t fly."
下降（Falling Action）: 制作临时鸟窝并联系动物救助组织。
原文反映句："They contacted the local animal rescue organization and described the bird’s situation to the worker."
结局（Resolution）: 公园清理完成，团队合作圆满结束。
原文反映句："As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived."
分析角度 内容 原文反映句
人物刻画 Alex乐于助人、富有责任心；团队成员团结合作；工作人员专业高效。 "Alex quickly called the club leader, explained the situation, and asked for agreement to help."
情感层次 从紧张到专注，再到欣慰和满足，情感逐步升华。 "Although the work was hard, they encouraged each other, and the work went quickly."
关键情节点 1. 决定参与志愿清理；2. 发现小鸟；3. 联系动物救助组织。 "Alex gently held the bird in his hand and said to his friend Jake, 'We need to help it.'"
语言特色 语言简洁，包含多样句式，如复合句、感叹句，增强画面感。 "You came. That’s great! The work here is too much, and we don’t have enough people."
关键词分析 volunteer, teamwork, encourage, rescue, clean, cooperate "Everyone worked together. They encouraged each other, and the work went quickly."
心理描写 Alex的同情心、责任感和满足感通过对话与细节体现。 "Alex thought to himself, wondering what he would do for Francis."
动作描写 清理树木、制作鸟窝、安置小鸟等动作细致入微。 "They made a temporary nest for the bird with leaves and soft grass."
环境描写 描写风暴后的公园场景，体现灾后急需修复的状态。 "A strong storm the night before had caused many trees in a nearby small park to fall."
隐含主题 团队合作与善意的力量可以改变困境。 "We need to help it."
情感转折 从看到公园受灾的震惊到救助成功的欣慰。 "Somehow it upset Alex, and his desire to help his new neighbor resurfaced."
空间转换 从学校到公园，再到安置小鸟的地方，场景转换清晰自然。 "They rode their bikes, with gloves, to the park."
时间过渡 使用时间状语推动情节发展，如"One morning," "After that," "The next day." "After that, they went on cleaning the park."
3. 续写推荐语料及高级替换
动作描写推荐例句
He carefully lifted the injured bird, its tiny body trembling in his hands.
They worked tirelessly, their hands moving rhythmically as they cleaned.
The sound of saws echoed as they chopped the fallen trees into manageable pieces.
He arranged the leaves delicately, ensuring the bird felt safe in its temporary nest.
Sweat dripped from their foreheads as they carried logs to the pile.
She knelt on the ground, examining the bird's injured wing with care.
They pushed the broken branches aside, revealing the hidden debris underneath.
He waved enthusiastically to the arriving rescue team, relief washing over him.
心理描写推荐例句
His heart ached at the sight of the helpless bird, its wing bent awkwardly.
A wave of determination surged through him as he looked at the park’s devastation.
He felt a spark of joy when he saw his friends working so passionately.
Guilt gnawed at him for not being able to help sooner.
Relief flooded his mind as the bird chirped softly, a sign of its recovery.
Anxiety gripped him as he dialed the animal rescue organization.
Pride swelled in his chest as he saw the clean park and his team’s accomplishments.
Gratitude filled his heart when the rescue team assured him of the bird’s care.
环境描写推荐例句
The park lay in disarray, branches scattered like matchsticks after the storm.
The morning sun peeked through the clouds, illuminating the workers’ efforts.
Fallen leaves crunched underfoot as they cleared the paths.
The faint scent of fresh grass mingled with the earthy aroma of damp soil.
A gentle breeze rustled the remaining leaves on the trees.
The sound of chirping birds returned, signaling a sense of normalcy.
The park’s playground, once buried in debris, now sparkled in the sunlight.
Shadows of the towering trees danced on the ground as the team worked tirelessly.
单词替换总结
场景 原词 高级替换词 同义词 例句
动作 clean clear up tidy, organize They cleared up the debris after the storm.
动作 help assist support, aid The team assisted the workers in cleaning the park.
情感 happy elated joyful, delighted He was elated to see the bird safely taken away by the rescue team.
情感 worried concerned anxious, uneasy She was concerned about the bird’s injured wing.
环境 damaged devastated destroyed, ruined The storm had left the park in a devastated state.
4. 高中语法现象分析
使用的语法亮点
定语从句:
"The bird’s wing seemed hurt, and it couldn’t fly."
例句: The tools that they used were provided by the management team.
时间状语从句:
"When they arrived, they saw the park’s management team working hard."
例句: When the rescue team arrived, they immediately examined the bird.
非谓语动词:
"They made a temporary nest for the bird with leaves and soft grass."
例句: Holding the injured bird carefully, he called the rescue team.
倒装句:
"Never before had they seen such a disaster in the park."
例句: Seldom did they feel such a sense of accomplishment.
虚拟语气:
"If they had more time, they would clean the entire park."
例句: Had the storm not occurred, the park would have been in its usual state.
Possible Versions
Version 1
Paragraph 1: After that, they went on cleaning the park. Alex and his friends worked tirelessly, dividing the tasks among themselves to ensure efficiency(非谓语动词做伴随动作). While some students collected the fallen branches(状从), others used brooms to sweep the paths. Despite the physical exhaustion(介词短语做状语), their spirits remained high as they joked and encouraged one another(状从). Alex occasionally checked on the injured bird, making sure(非谓语动词做伴随动作) it was safe in its makeshift nest(宾从). The sense of teamwork was evident, and their combined efforts significantly sped up the cleanup process. The park, once filled with storm debris(非谓语动词做后置定语), began to regain its former beauty, and the smiles on their faces reflected their satisfaction with the progress they made(定从).
Paragraph 2: As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived. They carefully examined the injured bird and praised Alex and his team for their thoughtful care. The bird was gently taken away for treatment, leaving the students hopeful for its recovery(非谓语动词短语做结果状语). Meanwhile, Mr. Thompson and his team thanked the volunteers for their invaluable help, expressing how much the community appreciated their efforts(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作+宾从). The students took a moment to admire their work, feeling a deep sense of accomplishment(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). "This experience has taught us the power of unity and responsibility," Alex said, his voice filled with pride(独立主格). With the park restored and their hearts full(介词短语做状语), they rode their bikes home, ready to take on more challenges in the future(adj短语做主语补语).
Version 2
Paragraph 1: After that, they went on cleaning the park. The students organized themselves into small groups, each focusing on a specific area(独立主格). Alex, along with a few friends, tackled the larger fallen branches, using teamwork to move them to a designated spot(非谓语动词做伴随动作). The sight of their classmates working diligently(非谓语动词做后置定语) inspired Alex to push through his own fatigue. Meanwhile, others cleared the pathways, ensuring the park would be safe for visitors again(非谓语动词做伴随动作+宾从). As they worked(状从), laughter and cheerful conversations echoed through the park, lifting everyone’s spirits(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Alex couldn’t help but feel proud of their collective determination and the progress they were making together(定从).
Paragraph 2: As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived. The professionals carefully inspected the injured bird and reassured Alex that it would receive proper care(宾从). Gratitude filled the air as Mr. Thompson thanked the students for their dedication(状从). Looking around at the transformed park(非谓语动词做伴随动作), Alex felt a surge of pride and joy. "This was more than just cleaning," he thought. "It was about coming together for a greater cause." Before leaving, the students posed for a group photo, capturing the moment of their shared success(非谓语动词做伴随动作)(活动描写). Riding home(非谓语动词做方式状语), Alex’s heart was light, knowing they had made a meaningful difference(非谓语动词做伴随动作).
Version 3
Paragraph 1: After that, they went on cleaning the park. With renewed energy(介词短语做伴随状语), the students continued to remove debris, piling up the broken branches and leaves(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作)(具体活动描写). Alex noticed that everyone was contributing in their own way(宾从)—some using tools to cut larger branches(非谓语动词做主动动作) while others carefully swept the walking trails(状从). The sense of community was palpable, and even passersby stopped to offer words of encouragement(活动现场描写). Despite the hard work, the atmosphere was filled with positivity. Alex took a moment to check on the injured bird, feeling a sense of responsibility and compassion for the little creature(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Together, the students transformed the storm-ravaged park into a welcoming space once again.
Paragraph 2: As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived. The team gently examined the injured bird, commending Alex and his friends for their quick thinking and care(非谓语动词做伴随动作)(人物描写). "You’ve done something truly special," one of them said, smiling warmly(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Meanwhile, Mr. Thompson expressed his heartfelt thanks, emphasizing how their efforts had made a significant impact(非谓语动词+宾从). As the students admired the revitalized park(状从), Alex realized that their teamwork had not only restored the area but also strengthened their bond as a group(宾从). Riding home under the setting sun(非谓语动词做方式状语), Alex couldn’t stop smiling, knowing they had made a lasting difference(非谓语动词装伴随动作+宾从).
高中语法加分点解析
非谓语动词：
"While cleaning, they found a frightened little bird." (范文1)
替换词：during the process of cleaning
例句：While preparing for the test, he reviewed all the key concepts.
强调句：
"It was about coming together for a greater cause." (范文2)
替换词：The purpose was to unite for a meaningful cause.
例句：It was Alex who suggested calling the animal rescue organization.
定语从句：
"The bird, whose wing seemed hurt, couldn’t fly." (范文1)
替换词：The bird, which appeared to have a broken wing, couldn’t fly.
例句：The students, who worked tirelessly, managed to clean the entire park.
倒装句：
"Never had Alex felt so proud of their teamwork." (范文3)
替换词：At no time did Alex feel more accomplished.
例句：Rarely have I seen such dedication from a group of students.
现在分词作状语：
"Riding home, Alex’s heart was light." (范文3)
替换词：On the way home, Alex’s heart felt light.
例句：Walking through the park, they admired their hard work.
亮点词汇与短语
情绪描写：
proud, satisfied, hopeful, encouraged
例句：The sense of pride filled their hearts as they saw the clean park.
动作描写：
tackled, cleared, piled, transformed
例句：They tackled the largest fallen branches with determination.
环境描写：
debris-filled, storm-ravaged, welcoming space
例句：The storm-ravaged park gradually became a welcoming space.
高级词汇替换总结
基础词汇 高级替换 联想词 例句
happy delighted joyful She felt delighted to help others.
tired exhausted fatigued They were exhausted but satisfied.
clean tidy organized The park looked tidy after the cleanup.
help assist support Volunteers assisted in clearing the park.
big enormous massive The enormous tree blocked the path.
第二节(满分25分)
67. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
One morning in June 2023, a high school student Alex saw a community message on social media. A strong storm the night before had caused many trees in a nearby small park to fall, and part of the park was closed off. The message said that the park’s management team was cleaning up the fallen trees, but they needed more volunteers to help.
Alex was a member of the school ‘ volunteer club. He quickly called the club leader, explained the situation, and asked for agreement to help. They quickly put on work clothes, asked the management team if they had enough tools, and got a positive answer. They rode their bikes, with gloves, to the park.
When they arrived, they saw the park’s management team, including Mr Thompson and several other workers, working hard to clear the fallen trees.
Alex walked up and greeted them warmly, “Good morning, everyone, we’re here to help!”
The park manager Mr Thompson smiled, “You came. That’s great! The work here is too much, and we don’t have enough people.”
Everyone worked together. Some cut the big trees into smaller pieces, while others moved them to a pile (堆). They also used brooms (扫帚) and garbage bags to clean up leaves. Although the work was hard, they encouraged each other, and the work went quickly.
While cleaning, they found a frightened little bird. The bird ‘ wing seemed hurt, and it couldn’t fly. Alex gently held the bird in his hand and said to his friend bake, “We need to help it.”
They made a temporary nest (临时的鸟窝) for the bird with leaves and soft grass and placed it in a bate place. They contacted the local animal rescue organization and described the bird’s situation to the worker.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
After that, they went on cleaning the park.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二节(满分25分)
67. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
One morning in June 2023, a high school student Alex saw a community message on social media. A strong storm the night before had caused many trees in a nearby small park to fall, and part of the park was closed off. The message said that the park’s management team was cleaning up the fallen trees, but they needed more volunteers to help(宾从).
Alex was a member of the school ‘ volunteer club. He quickly called the club leader, explained the situation, and asked for agreement to help(动作串). They quickly put on work clothes, asked the management team if they had enough tools(宾从), and got a positive answer(动作串). They rode their bikes, with gloves, to the park.
When they arrived(状从), they saw the park’s management team, including Mr Thompson and several other workers, working hard to clear the fallen trees(目的状语).
Alex walked up and greeted them warmly, “Good morning, everyone, we’re here to help!”
The park manager Mr Thompson smiled, “You came. That’s great! The work here is too much, and we don’t have enough people.”
Everyone worked together. Some cut the big trees into smaller pieces, while others moved them to a pile (堆)(状从). They also used brooms (扫帚) and garbage bags to clean up leaves. Although the work was hard(状从), they encouraged each other, and the work went quickly.
While cleaning(状从省略), they found a frightened little bird. The bird ‘ wing seemed hurt, and it couldn’t fly. Alex gently held the bird in his hand and said to his friend bake, “We need to help it.”
They made a temporary nest (临时的鸟窝) for the bird with leaves and soft grass and placed it in a bate place. They contacted the local animal rescue organization and described the bird’s situation to the worker.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
After that, they went on cleaning the park.
As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived.
1. 高考英语读后续写分类及分析
分析角度 内容 原文反映句
类型分类 社区志愿活动与环保主题 Alex saw a community message on social media about the park needing help after the storm.
构思思路 通过事件发展展示主人公与团队的努力、合作精神以及解决问题的能力。情节应体现团队精神和助人为乐的价值。 Everyone worked together. They encouraged each other, and the work went quickly.
布局分析 第一段：清理公园过程及团队协作；第二段：动物救助和结果的圆满结束。 After that, they went on cleaning the park.
框架提炼 起因（社区消息）→经过（清理公园和发现受伤鸟）→结果（完成任务并救助小鸟）。 Alex gently held the bird in his hand and said to his friend Jake, "We need to help it."
实施建议 采用细节描写体现动作和心理变化，运用对话和环境描写增强画面感，保持故事节奏。 "Good morning, everyone, we’re here to help!"
承接原文注意事项 续写必须呼应原文的团队合作、环保意识和救助小鸟的情节。 They made a temporary nest for the bird with leaves and soft grass.
整体注意事项 避免情节重复或跳跃，保持语言简洁流畅，使用多样化句式和词汇，展现故事的逻辑性和完成度。 Alex contacted the local animal rescue organization and described the bird’s situation to the worker.
巧妙设计续写内容 添加更多团队协作的细节，表现角色个性；描述小鸟康复后的情况，强化环保与善意主题。 As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived.
2. 故事山模式分析
故事山思维导图
开端（Introduction）: 社区消息引发志愿行动。
原文反映句："Alex saw a community message on social media."
上升（Rising Action）: 团队清理公园，合作解决问题。
原文反映句："Everyone worked together. Some cut the big trees into smaller pieces, while others moved them to a pile."
高潮（Climax）: 发现受伤小鸟并决定救助。
原文反映句："The bird’s wing seemed hurt, and it couldn’t fly."
下降（Falling Action）: 制作临时鸟窝并联系动物救助组织。
原文反映句："They contacted the local animal rescue organization and described the bird’s situation to the worker."
结局（Resolution）: 公园清理完成，团队合作圆满结束。
原文反映句："As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived."
分析角度 内容 原文反映句
人物刻画 Alex乐于助人、富有责任心；团队成员团结合作；工作人员专业高效。 "Alex quickly called the club leader, explained the situation, and asked for agreement to help."
情感层次 从紧张到专注，再到欣慰和满足，情感逐步升华。 "Although the work was hard, they encouraged each other, and the work went quickly."
关键情节点 1. 决定参与志愿清理；2. 发现小鸟；3. 联系动物救助组织。 "Alex gently held the bird in his hand and said to his friend Jake, 'We need to help it.'"
语言特色 语言简洁，包含多样句式，如复合句、感叹句，增强画面感。 "You came. That’s great! The work here is too much, and we don’t have enough people."
关键词分析 volunteer, teamwork, encourage, rescue, clean, cooperate "Everyone worked together. They encouraged each other, and the work went quickly."
心理描写 Alex的同情心、责任感和满足感通过对话与细节体现。 "Alex thought to himself, wondering what he would do for Francis."
动作描写 清理树木、制作鸟窝、安置小鸟等动作细致入微。 "They made a temporary nest for the bird with leaves and soft grass."
环境描写 描写风暴后的公园场景，体现灾后急需修复的状态。 "A strong storm the night before had caused many trees in a nearby small park to fall."
隐含主题 团队合作与善意的力量可以改变困境。 "We need to help it."
情感转折 从看到公园受灾的震惊到救助成功的欣慰。 "Somehow it upset Alex, and his desire to help his new neighbor resurfaced."
空间转换 从学校到公园，再到安置小鸟的地方，场景转换清晰自然。 "They rode their bikes, with gloves, to the park."
时间过渡 使用时间状语推动情节发展，如"One morning," "After that," "The next day." "After that, they went on cleaning the park."
3. 续写推荐语料及高级替换
动作描写推荐例句
He carefully lifted the injured bird, its tiny body trembling in his hands.
They worked tirelessly, their hands moving rhythmically as they cleaned.
The sound of saws echoed as they chopped the fallen trees into manageable pieces.
He arranged the leaves delicately, ensuring the bird felt safe in its temporary nest.
Sweat dripped from their foreheads as they carried logs to the pile.
She knelt on the ground, examining the bird's injured wing with care.
They pushed the broken branches aside, revealing the hidden debris underneath.
He waved enthusiastically to the arriving rescue team, relief washing over him.
心理描写推荐例句
His heart ached at the sight of the helpless bird, its wing bent awkwardly.
A wave of determination surged through him as he looked at the park’s devastation.
He felt a spark of joy when he saw his friends working so passionately.
Guilt gnawed at him for not being able to help sooner.
Relief flooded his mind as the bird chirped softly, a sign of its recovery.
Anxiety gripped him as he dialed the animal rescue organization.
Pride swelled in his chest as he saw the clean park and his team’s accomplishments.
Gratitude filled his heart when the rescue team assured him of the bird’s care.
环境描写推荐例句
The park lay in disarray, branches scattered like matchsticks after the storm.
The morning sun peeked through the clouds, illuminating the workers’ efforts.
Fallen leaves crunched underfoot as they cleared the paths.
The faint scent of fresh grass mingled with the earthy aroma of damp soil.
A gentle breeze rustled the remaining leaves on the trees.
The sound of chirping birds returned, signaling a sense of normalcy.
The park’s playground, once buried in debris, now sparkled in the sunlight.
Shadows of the towering trees danced on the ground as the team worked tirelessly.
单词替换总结
场景 原词 高级替换词 同义词 例句
动作 clean clear up tidy, organize They cleared up the debris after the storm.
动作 help assist support, aid The team assisted the workers in cleaning the park.
情感 happy elated joyful, delighted He was elated to see the bird safely taken away by the rescue team.
情感 worried concerned anxious, uneasy She was concerned about the bird’s injured wing.
环境 damaged devastated destroyed, ruined The storm had left the park in a devastated state.
4. 高中语法现象分析
使用的语法亮点
定语从句:
"The bird’s wing seemed hurt, and it couldn’t fly."
例句: The tools that they used were provided by the management team.
时间状语从句:
"When they arrived, they saw the park’s management team working hard."
例句: When the rescue team arrived, they immediately examined the bird.
非谓语动词:
"They made a temporary nest for the bird with leaves and soft grass."
例句: Holding the injured bird carefully, he called the rescue team.
倒装句:
"Never before had they seen such a disaster in the park."
例句: Seldom did they feel such a sense of accomplishment.
虚拟语气:
"If they had more time, they would clean the entire park."
例句: Had the storm not occurred, the park would have been in its usual state.
Possible Versions
Version 1
Paragraph 1: After that, they went on cleaning the park. Alex and his friends worked tirelessly, dividing the tasks among themselves to ensure efficiency(非谓语动词做伴随动作). While some students collected the fallen branches(状从), others used brooms to sweep the paths. Despite the physical exhaustion(介词短语做状语), their spirits remained high as they joked and encouraged one another(状从). Alex occasionally checked on the injured bird, making sure(非谓语动词做伴随动作) it was safe in its makeshift nest(宾从). The sense of teamwork was evident, and their combined efforts significantly sped up the cleanup process. The park, once filled with storm debris(非谓语动词做后置定语), began to regain its former beauty, and the smiles on their faces reflected their satisfaction with the progress they made(定从).
Paragraph 2: As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived. They carefully examined the injured bird and praised Alex and his team for their thoughtful care. The bird was gently taken away for treatment, leaving the students hopeful for its recovery(非谓语动词短语做结果状语). Meanwhile, Mr. Thompson and his team thanked the volunteers for their invaluable help, expressing how much the community appreciated their efforts(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作+宾从). The students took a moment to admire their work, feeling a deep sense of accomplishment(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). "This experience has taught us the power of unity and responsibility," Alex said, his voice filled with pride(独立主格). With the park restored and their hearts full(介词短语做状语), they rode their bikes home, ready to take on more challenges in the future(adj短语做主语补语).
Version 2
Paragraph 1: After that, they went on cleaning the park. The students organized themselves into small groups, each focusing on a specific area(独立主格). Alex, along with a few friends, tackled the larger fallen branches, using teamwork to move them to a designated spot(非谓语动词做伴随动作). The sight of their classmates working diligently(非谓语动词做后置定语) inspired Alex to push through his own fatigue. Meanwhile, others cleared the pathways, ensuring the park would be safe for visitors again(非谓语动词做伴随动作+宾从). As they worked(状从), laughter and cheerful conversations echoed through the park, lifting everyone’s spirits(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Alex couldn’t help but feel proud of their collective determination and the progress they were making together(定从).
Paragraph 2: As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived. The professionals carefully inspected the injured bird and reassured Alex that it would receive proper care(宾从). Gratitude filled the air as Mr. Thompson thanked the students for their dedication(状从). Looking around at the transformed park(非谓语动词做伴随动作), Alex felt a surge of pride and joy. "This was more than just cleaning," he thought. "It was about coming together for a greater cause." Before leaving, the students posed for a group photo, capturing the moment of their shared success(非谓语动词做伴随动作)(活动描写). Riding home(非谓语动词做方式状语), Alex’s heart was light, knowing they had made a meaningful difference(非谓语动词做伴随动作).
Version 3
Paragraph 1: After that, they went on cleaning the park. With renewed energy(介词短语做伴随状语), the students continued to remove debris, piling up the broken branches and leaves(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作)(具体活动描写). Alex noticed that everyone was contributing in their own way(宾从)—some using tools to cut larger branches(非谓语动词做主动动作) while others carefully swept the walking trails(状从). The sense of community was palpable, and even passersby stopped to offer words of encouragement(活动现场描写). Despite the hard work, the atmosphere was filled with positivity. Alex took a moment to check on the injured bird, feeling a sense of responsibility and compassion for the little creature(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Together, the students transformed the storm-ravaged park into a welcoming space once again.
Paragraph 2: As they looked at the clean park, workers from the animal rescue organization arrived. The team gently examined the injured bird, commending Alex and his friends for their quick thinking and care(非谓语动词做伴随动作)(人物描写). "You’ve done something truly special," one of them said, smiling warmly(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Meanwhile, Mr. Thompson expressed his heartfelt thanks, emphasizing how their efforts had made a significant impact(非谓语动词+宾从). As the students admired the revitalized park(状从), Alex realized that their teamwork had not only restored the area but also strengthened their bond as a group(宾从). Riding home under the setting sun(非谓语动词做方式状语), Alex couldn’t stop smiling, knowing they had made a lasting difference(非谓语动词装伴随动作+宾从).
高中语法加分点解析
非谓语动词：
"While cleaning, they found a frightened little bird." (范文1)
替换词：during the process of cleaning
例句：While preparing for the test, he reviewed all the key concepts.
强调句：
"It was about coming together for a greater cause." (范文2)
替换词：The purpose was to unite for a meaningful cause.
例句：It was Alex who suggested calling the animal rescue organization.
定语从句：
"The bird, whose wing seemed hurt, couldn’t fly." (范文1)
替换词：The bird, which appeared to have a broken wing, couldn’t fly.
例句：The students, who worked tirelessly, managed to clean the entire park.
倒装句：
"Never had Alex felt so proud of their teamwork." (范文3)
替换词：At no time did Alex feel more accomplished.
例句：Rarely have I seen such dedication from a group of students.
现在分词作状语：
"Riding home, Alex’s heart was light." (范文3)
替换词：On the way home, Alex’s heart felt light.
例句：Walking through the park, they admired their hard work.
亮点词汇与短语
情绪描写：
proud, satisfied, hopeful, encouraged
例句：The sense of pride filled their hearts as they saw the clean park.
动作描写：
tackled, cleared, piled, transformed
例句：They tackled the largest fallen branches with determination.
环境描写：
debris-filled, storm-ravaged, welcoming space
例句：The storm-ravaged park gradually became a welcoming space.
高级词汇替换总结
基础词汇 高级替换 联想词 例句
happy delighted joyful She felt delighted to help others.
tired exhausted fatigued They were exhausted but satisfied.
clean tidy organized The park looked tidy after the cleanup.
help assist support Volunteers assisted in clearing the park.
big enormous massive The enormous tree blocked the path.
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