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江苏省南京市2024-2025学年度第一学期期末学情调研测试高一英语试题
第二节 (满分25分)
阅读下面材料，回答相关问题，并根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
As I sat on our favorite bench in a park, memories of my best friend, Lily, flooded my mind―our endless laughter, shared secrets, and the adventures that had brought us so close. But everything changed when Lily got the news that her family was moving to a city a few hours away. I was excited for her new life, but I couldn’t shake off the feeling of fear in my stomach. What if we drew apart What if everything we had built together was forgotten In order not to let that happen, I came up with an idea. “Let’s start keeping a diary!” I suggested excitedly, “We can write about everything on the same diary and mail it to each other every week! That way, we’ll always be a part of each other’s lives.”
For the first few months, the diary became our lifeline. We filled it with stories about our new lives, I loved hearing about Lily’s new school and friends, while she enjoyed updates on the challenges I met at school, But soon, things began to change, and our schedules got filled up with schoolwork and other stuff(事务). The diary entries started to reduce, and our phone calls became less frequent. One evening, when I saw a picture from one of our last adventures ― a photo of us laughing so hard together―inspiration hit: we could plan a weekend trip! I quickly called Lily, suggesting a camping trip for us to explore a new place together. To my excitement, she immediately agreed. We searched the key steps to set up a tent: insert (插) the tent poles into the ground, pull the tent up and straighten it out.
When the day finally arrived, I put the diary in my backpack and headed to the camping place―a cute little park with tall trees and a quiet lake. When we arrived, the sky was clear blue, but it wasn’t long before dark clouds appeared.
Question 1. What is the theme of the story Answer: _______
A. A camping trip separates two friends.
B. True friendship beats long distances.
Question 2. What is the key clue of the story Answer: _______
A.A diary written by two good friends.
B. A cute little park with trees and a lake.
注意:
1.续写词数应为 120个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell.
Paragraph 2: With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack
第二节 (满分25分)
阅读下面材料，标黑加粗斜体黄，可以积累文本！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单斜体（状从）；其余非谓语形式都会标注；
As I sat on our favorite bench in a park(状从), memories of my best friend, Lily, flooded my mind―our endless laughter, shared secrets, and the adventures that had brought us so close(定从). But everything changed when Lily got the news(状从) that her family was moving to a city a few hours away(宾从). I was excited for her new life, but I couldn’t shake off the feeling of fear in my stomach. What if we drew apart What if everything we had built together(定从) was forgotten In order not to let that happen(目的状语), I came up with an idea. “Let’s start keeping a diary!” I suggested excitedly, “We can write about everything on the same diary and mail it to each other every week! That way, we’ll always be a part of each other’s lives.”
For the first few months, the diary became our lifeline. We filled it with stories about our new lives, I loved hearing about Lily’s new school and friends, while she enjoyed updates on the challenges I met at school(定从). But soon, things began to change, and our schedules got filled up with schoolwork and other stuff(事务). The diary entries started to reduce, and our phone calls became less frequent(背景信息). One evening, when I saw a picture from one of our last adventures(状从) ― a photo of us laughing(非谓语动词做伴随动作) so hard together―inspiration hit: we could plan a weekend trip(同位语从句)! I quickly called Lily, suggesting a camping trip for us to explore a new place together(非谓语动词做伴随动作). To my excitement, she immediately agreed. We searched the key steps to set up a tent: insert (插) the tent poles into the ground, pull the tent up and straighten it out(动作串).
When the day finally arrived(状从), I put the diary in my backpack and headed to the camping place―a cute little park with tall trees and a quiet lake. When we arrived(状从), the sky was clear blue, but it wasn’t long before dark clouds appeared(环境描写).
Question 1. What is the theme of the story Answer: _______
A. A camping trip separates two friends.
B. True friendship beats long distances.
Question 2. What is the key clue of the story Answer: _______
A.A diary written by two good friends.
B. A cute little park with trees and a lake.
注意:
1.续写词数应为 120个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell.
Paragraph 2: With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack
1. 高考英语读后续写分析
文章类型分类
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
类型 本文属于情感类的读后续写，主要探讨的是友谊的持久性与远距离朋友之间的联系问题。 "memories of my best friend, Lily, flooded my mind"
思路构思 续写应从两方面着手：一是描述两位主角如何应对突然变化的环境，二是描绘他们最终通过某种方式重新连接起来。 "Let’s start keeping a diary!"
布局与框架 开头：回顾友谊与决定开始写日记；中间：描述友谊变淡的转折与继续努力的过程；结尾：通过露营恢复联系。 "We filled it with stories about our new lives"
实施 通过环境描写（如天气变化）、动作描写（如搭帐篷的过程）来体现冲突与情感转折。 "I quickly called Lily"
承接事项 需承接原文提到的友谊变化、日记的作用，以及露营这一设定。 "The diary entries started to reduce"
设计续写内容 通过具体的环境变化（如暴雨）展现两人之间的情感转折，创造新的情节冲突，最后达成情感和解。 "When the day finally arrived"
2. 故事山模式分析
Story Mountain 思维导图
关键情节点：
情节阶段 内容描述 原文反应句
介绍 讲述了主角和Lily的友谊，及她要搬走的消息带来的情感冲突。 "memories of my best friend, Lily, flooded my mind"
冲突 他们的友谊因搬家面临疏远的风险，主角提出了通过日记保持联系的想法。 "Let’s start keeping a diary!"
高潮 随着时间的推移，日记变得疏远，主角提出了一个重建联系的计划——露营旅行。 "I quickly called Lily, suggesting a camping trip"
解决 他们最终决定露营，尽管途中天气发生变化，两人依然决心坚持自己的友谊。 "When the day finally arrived"
伏笔与冲突点：
伏笔: 文章多次提到日记的作用以及友谊变淡的情节暗示了后续可能发生的情感冲突。
冲突点: 随着时间的流逝，友谊被日常生活的琐事挤压，日记渐渐减少，电话联系越来越少。
隐含线索: 通过主角的想法和行为展示了她对友谊的深切关注和不愿意失去这段关系的决心。
解决方案: 主角通过提出露营旅行来恢复与Lily的联系。
3. 情境下动作、心理、环境描写推荐英文例句
描写类别 推荐英文例句
动作描写 "We hurriedly set up the tent, working together to get it done."
"Lily and I fumbled with the poles, laughing nervously as the rain started to fall."
"I grabbed the rain cover, securing it tightly over the tent."
"We rushed to collect our backpacks, struggling against the wind."
心理描写 "I could feel my heart racing as I realized we were running out of time."
"Fear and excitement blended inside me as I awaited Lily's response."
"I felt a sense of peace wash over me as we sat down to write in the diary."
"My stomach fluttered with anticipation as we drove to the campsite."
环境描写 "The sky darkened suddenly, and the first raindrops fell softly on the ground."
"The air was heavy with moisture, and the smell of rain was all around us."
"The lake shimmered under the light of the setting sun, casting a calm glow."
"Tall trees swayed gently in the breeze, creating a peaceful backdrop."
4. 高考语法现象分析
语法现象 例句 搭配与近义词替换
虚拟语气 "What if we drew apart " "What if we grew apart "
条件句 "If we don’t make the effort, we might lose each other forever." "If we keep losing touch, our friendship will fade."
过去完成时 "I had come up with an idea." "I had thought of something else."
现在完成时 "We have been writing in the diary for months." "We’ve kept our promises to each other."
反身代词 "I found myself thinking about her every day." "She had to remind herself to keep in touch."
亮点搭配：
make the effort: 努力做某事。
lose touch: 失去联系。
keep in touch: 保持联系。
高级词汇替换：
idea → concept, notion
excited → eager, enthusiastic
hurry → rush, hasten
近义词分析：
常见词汇 替换词 例句
idea notion, concept "She had a brilliant concept to reconnect with her friend."
excited eager, enthusiastic "I was enthusiastic about the idea of a weekend trip."
hurry rush, hasten "We had to rush to finish setting up before the rain came."
5. 综合分析
结构和思路：
续写的开头部分应根据原文引出，描述两人开始搭帐篷时的细节，并加上天气变化作为冲突的背景。
结尾部分可以通过心理描写和情感转折来完成，让两位主角通过解决实际问题（搭帐篷、天气）重建彼此的友谊。
词汇和语法积累：
动作描写与环境描写的结合可以强化文章的生动性，增强情节的可读性。
词汇替换和情感描写的应用，有助于提高文章的表现力与深度。
Possible Answers
Version 1
Paragraph 1:
As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell. The sky, once clear and inviting, quickly darkened(环境描写). I looked over at Lily, who was already setting up her side of the tent(定从). The sudden change in weather was a stark reminder of how unpredictable life could be(宾从). As the rain intensified(状从), I felt a strange sense of relief. Despite the rain, we had managed to stay true to our plan and continued to work together, each action a reflection of our bond(独立主格). This was more than a camping trip; it was a chance to reconnect after months of distance.
Paragraph 2:
With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack. I pulled out the diary we had shared for so long(定从). As I opened it(状从), the memories of our first entries flooded my mind. The words we had written(定从) were more than just thoughts; they were a testament to our friendship. I looked at Lily, who smiled back at me(定从). The storm outside raged, but inside, there was peace(环境描写). In that moment, I knew that no matter what life threw at us, our friendship would endure.
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell. The tension between us seemed to dissolve with every drop(环境描写) that hit the ground(定从). We had been apart for so long, and this trip was supposed to bring us back together. But I couldn’t ignore the nagging feeling that something had changed(定从). Was it too late to revive the closeness we once had As we continued with our task(状从), I tried to push those thoughts aside. The rain was a distraction, but it also felt like an opportunity—an opportunity to rebuild something that seemed to be slipping away(定从).
Paragraph 2:
With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack. I pulled out the old, weathered diary we had written in for so many years(定从). The pages were filled with our thoughts, dreams, and promises. As I read aloud one of the entries(状从), a smile spread across Lily’s face. The words seemed to reignite the connection we had lost(定从). The storm outside continued, but inside the tent, we had found our way back to each other. The diary had done more than capture memories; it had rekindled the spark of our friendship.
范文3
Paragraph 1:
As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell. The weather had turned unexpectedly, but neither of us minded(环境描写). We worked in synchrony, as if we were picking up(状从) where we had left off(宾从). The sound of the rain was soothing, and it reminded me of all the times(环境描写) we had spent together as children(定从). Even though time had passed and circumstances had changed, it felt as though nothing had. I realized then that no matter the distance, the bond between us had remained unbroken, as strong as ever(宾从).
Paragraph 2:
With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack. I opened the diary, feeling a deep sense of nostalgia(非谓语动词做伴随动作). The words we had written in it over the years(定从) were more than just memories; they were a part of us. As Lily and I sat there(状从), reading through the pages(非谓语动词做伴随动作), it felt like the past and present had merged into one. The rain continued to pour outside, but inside the tent, there was warmth. I knew then that no matter how far apart we might be(状从), our friendship was a constant in my life(宾从).
2. 语法加分点分析
加分语法点与搭配
虚拟语气
例句: "What if we drew apart "
近义词替换: "What if we grew distant "
相关搭配: "What if + 主语 + 动词 (虚拟语气)"
条件句
例句: "If we don’t make the effort, we might lose each other forever."
近义词替换: "If we fail to try, we could drift apart."
相关搭配: "If + 主语 + 动词，主语 + could/might + 动词"
过去完成时
例句: "I had come up with an idea."
近义词替换: "I had thought of a plan."
相关搭配: "had + 过去分词"
反身代词
例句: "I found myself thinking about her every day."
近义词替换: "I couldn’t help but think of her all the time."
相关搭配: "find oneself + 动词ing"
3. 情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写 动作描写
relief set up
anticipation pull out
nostalgia work together
peace smile
excitement lay out
情绪描写升级替换选项:
relief → comfort, ease
anticipation → eagerness, excitement
peace → serenity, calmness
4. 高考语法和词汇分析
亮点搭配
work together: 共同合作
例句: "We worked together to set up the tent."
替换: collaborate, cooperate
set up: 安排，搭建
例句: "We quickly set up the tent before the rain got worse."
替换: assemble, construct
pull out: 拿出
例句: "I pulled out the diary and opened it."
替换: take out, retrieve
常见语法现象
现在完成时
"We have been writing in the diary for months."
搭配: have been + 现在分词 (表示动作持续的状态)
情感转折表达
"Despite the rain, we had managed to stay true to our plan."
搭配: despite + 名词/动词ing 表示转折
5. 总结
续写中心: 通过一次露营旅行，两个长期分离的朋友通过共享日记和共同经历重新找回了彼此的友谊。
吸引标题: "Reconnection in the Rain: A Weekend to Remember"
第二节 (满分 25 分)
Answers: Question 1. B Question 2. A
As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell. The ground quickly turned muddy(环境描写)., making it hard to keep our balance(非谓语动词做伴随动作) as we worked with the tent(状从). I struggled to insert the tent poles into the ground while Lily pulled the tent up(状从). Water splashed around our feet and our coats got wet(环境描写). With great efforts, we straightened it out, “This isn’t how I imagined our camping trip going(表从),” I joked. we couldn’t help laughing at how silly we looked(宾从). With each tug and zip(with复合结构), the tent took shape. (80 words)
With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack. We pulled out our diary, and began to read through the entries we had written during our time apart(定从). Each story transported us back to our precious moments: the adventures we went through together(定从) and the challenges we faced on our own(定从). Each story drew reminding us of our shared histories and dreams. As we added a new entry about the unforgettable camping tour that day(状从), I realized how much stronger our friendship had become despite long distances(宾从). (80 words)
第二节 (满分25分)
阅读下面材料，回答相关问题，并根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
As I sat on our favorite bench in a park, memories of my best friend, Lily, flooded my mind―our endless laughter, shared secrets, and the adventures that had brought us so close. But everything changed when Lily got the news that her family was moving to a city a few hours away. I was excited for her new life, but I couldn’t shake off the feeling of fear in my stomach. What if we drew apart What if everything we had built together was forgotten In order not to let that happen, I came up with an idea. “Let’s start keeping a diary!” I suggested excitedly, “We can write about everything on the same diary and mail it to each other every week! That way, we’ll always be a part of each other’s lives.”
For the first few months, the diary became our lifeline. We filled it with stories about our new lives, I loved hearing about Lily’s new school and friends, while she enjoyed updates on the challenges I met at school, But soon, things began to change, and our schedules got filled up with schoolwork and other stuff(事务). The diary entries started to reduce, and our phone calls became less frequent. One evening, when I saw a picture from one of our last adventures ― a photo of us laughing so hard together―inspiration hit: we could plan a weekend trip! I quickly called Lily, suggesting a camping trip for us to explore a new place together. To my excitement, she immediately agreed. We searched the key steps to set up a tent: insert (插) the tent poles into the ground, pull the tent up and straighten it out.
When the day finally arrived, I put the diary in my backpack and headed to the camping place―a cute little park with tall trees and a quiet lake. When we arrived, the sky was clear blue, but it wasn’t long before dark clouds appeared.
Question 1. What is the theme of the story Answer: _______
A. A camping trip separates two friends.
B. True friendship beats long distances.
Question 2. What is the key clue of the story Answer: _______
A.A diary written by two good friends.
B. A cute little park with trees and a lake.
注意:
1.续写词数应为 120个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell.
Paragraph 2: With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack
第二节 (满分25分)
阅读下面材料，标黑加粗斜体黄，可以积累文本！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单斜体（状从）；其余非谓语形式都会标注；
As I sat on our favorite bench in a park(状从), memories of my best friend, Lily, flooded my mind―our endless laughter, shared secrets, and the adventures that had brought us so close(定从). But everything changed when Lily got the news(状从) that her family was moving to a city a few hours away(宾从). I was excited for her new life, but I couldn’t shake off the feeling of fear in my stomach. What if we drew apart What if everything we had built together(定从) was forgotten In order not to let that happen(目的状语), I came up with an idea. “Let’s start keeping a diary!” I suggested excitedly, “We can write about everything on the same diary and mail it to each other every week! That way, we’ll always be a part of each other’s lives.”
For the first few months, the diary became our lifeline. We filled it with stories about our new lives, I loved hearing about Lily’s new school and friends, while she enjoyed updates on the challenges I met at school(定从). But soon, things began to change, and our schedules got filled up with schoolwork and other stuff(事务). The diary entries started to reduce, and our phone calls became less frequent(背景信息). One evening, when I saw a picture from one of our last adventures(状从) ― a photo of us laughing(非谓语动词做伴随动作) so hard together―inspiration hit: we could plan a weekend trip(同位语从句)! I quickly called Lily, suggesting a camping trip for us to explore a new place together(非谓语动词做伴随动作). To my excitement, she immediately agreed. We searched the key steps to set up a tent: insert (插) the tent poles into the ground, pull the tent up and straighten it out(动作串).
When the day finally arrived(状从), I put the diary in my backpack and headed to the camping place―a cute little park with tall trees and a quiet lake. When we arrived(状从), the sky was clear blue, but it wasn’t long before dark clouds appeared(环境描写).
Question 1. What is the theme of the story Answer: _______
A. A camping trip separates two friends.
B. True friendship beats long distances.
Question 2. What is the key clue of the story Answer: _______
A.A diary written by two good friends.
B. A cute little park with trees and a lake.
注意:
1.续写词数应为 120个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell.
Paragraph 2: With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack
1. 高考英语读后续写分析
文章类型分类
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
类型 本文属于情感类的读后续写，主要探讨的是友谊的持久性与远距离朋友之间的联系问题。 "memories of my best friend, Lily, flooded my mind"
思路构思 续写应从两方面着手：一是描述两位主角如何应对突然变化的环境，二是描绘他们最终通过某种方式重新连接起来。 "Let’s start keeping a diary!"
布局与框架 开头：回顾友谊与决定开始写日记；中间：描述友谊变淡的转折与继续努力的过程；结尾：通过露营恢复联系。 "We filled it with stories about our new lives"
实施 通过环境描写（如天气变化）、动作描写（如搭帐篷的过程）来体现冲突与情感转折。 "I quickly called Lily"
承接事项 需承接原文提到的友谊变化、日记的作用，以及露营这一设定。 "The diary entries started to reduce"
设计续写内容 通过具体的环境变化（如暴雨）展现两人之间的情感转折，创造新的情节冲突，最后达成情感和解。 "When the day finally arrived"
2. 故事山模式分析
Story Mountain 思维导图
关键情节点：
情节阶段 内容描述 原文反应句
介绍 讲述了主角和Lily的友谊，及她要搬走的消息带来的情感冲突。 "memories of my best friend, Lily, flooded my mind"
冲突 他们的友谊因搬家面临疏远的风险，主角提出了通过日记保持联系的想法。 "Let’s start keeping a diary!"
高潮 随着时间的推移，日记变得疏远，主角提出了一个重建联系的计划——露营旅行。 "I quickly called Lily, suggesting a camping trip"
解决 他们最终决定露营，尽管途中天气发生变化，两人依然决心坚持自己的友谊。 "When the day finally arrived"
伏笔与冲突点：
伏笔: 文章多次提到日记的作用以及友谊变淡的情节暗示了后续可能发生的情感冲突。
冲突点: 随着时间的流逝，友谊被日常生活的琐事挤压，日记渐渐减少，电话联系越来越少。
隐含线索: 通过主角的想法和行为展示了她对友谊的深切关注和不愿意失去这段关系的决心。
解决方案: 主角通过提出露营旅行来恢复与Lily的联系。
3. 情境下动作、心理、环境描写推荐英文例句
描写类别 推荐英文例句
动作描写 "We hurriedly set up the tent, working together to get it done."
"Lily and I fumbled with the poles, laughing nervously as the rain started to fall."
"I grabbed the rain cover, securing it tightly over the tent."
"We rushed to collect our backpacks, struggling against the wind."
心理描写 "I could feel my heart racing as I realized we were running out of time."
"Fear and excitement blended inside me as I awaited Lily's response."
"I felt a sense of peace wash over me as we sat down to write in the diary."
"My stomach fluttered with anticipation as we drove to the campsite."
环境描写 "The sky darkened suddenly, and the first raindrops fell softly on the ground."
"The air was heavy with moisture, and the smell of rain was all around us."
"The lake shimmered under the light of the setting sun, casting a calm glow."
"Tall trees swayed gently in the breeze, creating a peaceful backdrop."
4. 高考语法现象分析
语法现象 例句 搭配与近义词替换
虚拟语气 "What if we drew apart " "What if we grew apart "
条件句 "If we don’t make the effort, we might lose each other forever." "If we keep losing touch, our friendship will fade."
过去完成时 "I had come up with an idea." "I had thought of something else."
现在完成时 "We have been writing in the diary for months." "We’ve kept our promises to each other."
反身代词 "I found myself thinking about her every day." "She had to remind herself to keep in touch."
亮点搭配：
make the effort: 努力做某事。
lose touch: 失去联系。
keep in touch: 保持联系。
高级词汇替换：
idea → concept, notion
excited → eager, enthusiastic
hurry → rush, hasten
近义词分析：
常见词汇 替换词 例句
idea notion, concept "She had a brilliant concept to reconnect with her friend."
excited eager, enthusiastic "I was enthusiastic about the idea of a weekend trip."
hurry rush, hasten "We had to rush to finish setting up before the rain came."
5. 综合分析
结构和思路：
续写的开头部分应根据原文引出，描述两人开始搭帐篷时的细节，并加上天气变化作为冲突的背景。
结尾部分可以通过心理描写和情感转折来完成，让两位主角通过解决实际问题（搭帐篷、天气）重建彼此的友谊。
词汇和语法积累：
动作描写与环境描写的结合可以强化文章的生动性，增强情节的可读性。
词汇替换和情感描写的应用，有助于提高文章的表现力与深度。
Possible Answers
Version 1
Paragraph 1:
As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell. The sky, once clear and inviting, quickly darkened(环境描写). I looked over at Lily, who was already setting up her side of the tent(定从). The sudden change in weather was a stark reminder of how unpredictable life could be(宾从). As the rain intensified(状从), I felt a strange sense of relief. Despite the rain, we had managed to stay true to our plan and continued to work together, each action a reflection of our bond(独立主格). This was more than a camping trip; it was a chance to reconnect after months of distance.
Paragraph 2:
With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack. I pulled out the diary we had shared for so long(定从). As I opened it(状从), the memories of our first entries flooded my mind. The words we had written(定从) were more than just thoughts; they were a testament to our friendship. I looked at Lily, who smiled back at me(定从). The storm outside raged, but inside, there was peace(环境描写). In that moment, I knew that no matter what life threw at us, our friendship would endure.
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell. The tension between us seemed to dissolve with every drop(环境描写) that hit the ground(定从). We had been apart for so long, and this trip was supposed to bring us back together. But I couldn’t ignore the nagging feeling that something had changed(定从). Was it too late to revive the closeness we once had As we continued with our task(状从), I tried to push those thoughts aside. The rain was a distraction, but it also felt like an opportunity—an opportunity to rebuild something that seemed to be slipping away(定从).
Paragraph 2:
With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack. I pulled out the old, weathered diary we had written in for so many years(定从). The pages were filled with our thoughts, dreams, and promises. As I read aloud one of the entries(状从), a smile spread across Lily’s face. The words seemed to reignite the connection we had lost(定从). The storm outside continued, but inside the tent, we had found our way back to each other. The diary had done more than capture memories; it had rekindled the spark of our friendship.
范文3
Paragraph 1:
As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell. The weather had turned unexpectedly, but neither of us minded(环境描写). We worked in synchrony, as if we were picking up(状从) where we had left off(宾从). The sound of the rain was soothing, and it reminded me of all the times(环境描写) we had spent together as children(定从). Even though time had passed and circumstances had changed, it felt as though nothing had. I realized then that no matter the distance, the bond between us had remained unbroken, as strong as ever(宾从).
Paragraph 2:
With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack. I opened the diary, feeling a deep sense of nostalgia(非谓语动词做伴随动作). The words we had written in it over the years(定从) were more than just memories; they were a part of us. As Lily and I sat there(状从), reading through the pages(非谓语动词做伴随动作), it felt like the past and present had merged into one. The rain continued to pour outside, but inside the tent, there was warmth. I knew then that no matter how far apart we might be(状从), our friendship was a constant in my life(宾从).
2. 语法加分点分析
加分语法点与搭配
虚拟语气
例句: "What if we drew apart "
近义词替换: "What if we grew distant "
相关搭配: "What if + 主语 + 动词 (虚拟语气)"
条件句
例句: "If we don’t make the effort, we might lose each other forever."
近义词替换: "If we fail to try, we could drift apart."
相关搭配: "If + 主语 + 动词，主语 + could/might + 动词"
过去完成时
例句: "I had come up with an idea."
近义词替换: "I had thought of a plan."
相关搭配: "had + 过去分词"
反身代词
例句: "I found myself thinking about her every day."
近义词替换: "I couldn’t help but think of her all the time."
相关搭配: "find oneself + 动词ing"
3. 情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写 动作描写
relief set up
anticipation pull out
nostalgia work together
peace smile
excitement lay out
情绪描写升级替换选项:
relief → comfort, ease
anticipation → eagerness, excitement
peace → serenity, calmness
4. 高考语法和词汇分析
亮点搭配
work together: 共同合作
例句: "We worked together to set up the tent."
替换: collaborate, cooperate
set up: 安排，搭建
例句: "We quickly set up the tent before the rain got worse."
替换: assemble, construct
pull out: 拿出
例句: "I pulled out the diary and opened it."
替换: take out, retrieve
常见语法现象
现在完成时
"We have been writing in the diary for months."
搭配: have been + 现在分词 (表示动作持续的状态)
情感转折表达
"Despite the rain, we had managed to stay true to our plan."
搭配: despite + 名词/动词ing 表示转折
5. 总结
续写中心: 通过一次露营旅行，两个长期分离的朋友通过共享日记和共同经历重新找回了彼此的友谊。
吸引标题: "Reconnection in the Rain: A Weekend to Remember"
第二节 (满分 25 分)
Answers: Question 1. B Question 2. A
As we began to lay out our tent, the first drops of rain fell. The ground quickly turned muddy(环境描写)., making it hard to keep our balance(非谓语动词做伴随动作) as we worked with the tent(状从). I struggled to insert the tent poles into the ground while Lily pulled the tent up(状从). Water splashed around our feet and our coats got wet(环境描写). With great efforts, we straightened it out, “This isn’t how I imagined our camping trip going(表从),” I joked. we couldn’t help laughing at how silly we looked(宾从). With each tug and zip(with复合结构), the tent took shape. (80 words)
With the tent finally ready, we got in and reached for the backpack. We pulled out our diary, and began to read through the entries we had written during our time apart(定从). Each story transported us back to our precious moments: the adventures we went through together(定从) and the challenges we faced on our own(定从). Each story drew reminding us of our shared histories and dreams. As we added a new entry about the unforgettable camping tour that day(状从), I realized how much stronger our friendship had become despite long distances(宾从). (80 words)
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