读后续写--以爱为翼,自闭症男孩与小猪的温暖救赎 讲义-江西省无锡市22025届高三上学期期终教学质量调研测试

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名称 读后续写--以爱为翼,自闭症男孩与小猪的温暖救赎 讲义-江西省无锡市22025届高三上学期期终教学质量调研测试
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When Sam was two years and two months old, he began to shut the world away. The once-happy little boy, who was already starting to pick up words of both English and Spanish, suddenly stopped speaking; stopped looking his family in the eye; stopped communicating altogether. Most of the time, all Sam did was lie on the sofa touching his ears.
He started to display certain behavioral changes. He began to have this funny thing with straight lines where he would pick up a toy and look at it sideways, or lie on his front for hours on end, rolling a car in front of his eyes.
Within two years, his mother Jo visited one expert after another with Sam and tried various treatment methods; however, nothing seemed to work. What was worse, in about three weeks Sam's grandfather died of cancer, his parents divorced and his family were robbed -and all the while, Sam was becoming more and more withdrawn. His eyes were dead.
And it was then that Sam was eventually diagnosed (诊断) with autism (自闭症).
As a single mother, Jo had no choice but to go straight to work herself to earn a living while researching the condition and try her best to help Sam to come back out of himself. For Jo, the following eight years was a terrifying time, watching her son disappearing just in front of her eyes. All methods tried, money running out, Jo had no choice but to take Sam, by now completely non-verbal (不使用言语交际的), from the hustle and bustle (喧嚣) of the city to the calm of the Devon countryside.
Once on a local farm, they came across Chester, a mini pig belonging to a farmer. It was so small that they didn't even see it at first sight. As they walked down the grassland, the only little pig was hiding in the corner. He looked sad and lonely, like Sam often did.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph 1:When Sam saw Chester, he went over to the little pig immediately.
Paragraph 2: The farmer agreed and Jo took Chester home
文章大意
故事中的小男孩Sam,在年仅两岁两个月时,突然间关闭了与外界交流的大门。他的家庭随后遭遇了一系列不幸,包括祖父去世、父母离婚和家中被盗。在Sam被诊断出自闭症后,他的单身母亲Jo带着他远离城市喧嚣,来到了乡村。在那里,一只名叫Chester的孤独小猪,意外地走进了他们的生活。
故事山分析
开端:Sam 在两岁两个月时突然行为异常,不再说话、交流,出现行为改变,如专注直线物品、长时间重复特定动作。
发展:两年间母亲 Jo 带他看了众多专家,尝试各种治疗方法均无效,家庭还遭遇祖父去世、父母离婚、被抢劫等变故,Sam 愈发孤僻,最终被诊断为自闭症。Jo 作为单亲妈妈,一边工作一边努力帮助 Sam,在尝试所有方法且经济紧张后,带他从城市来到乡村。
高潮(待续写):在乡村农场,Sam 看到了和自己一样孤独的小猪 Chester,续写中要展现 Sam 与 Chester 的互动,以及这一互动对 Sam 的巨大影响,比如 Sam 可能会有情感上的明显转变,甚至开始有交流的迹象。
结局(待续写):小猪 Chester 成为改变 Sam 的关键因素,Sam 逐渐走出自己的世界,与外界建立联系,Jo 也看到了希望,整个故事围绕着爱与陪伴的力量展开。
伏笔以及在续写中的回应
Sam 的孤独与行为异常:在续写中,这是 Sam 被 Chester 吸引的原因,他从 Chester 身上看到了自己的影子,而与 Chester 的相处也会逐渐改变他的行为,比如减少重复性动作,开始关注外界。
Jo 的努力与坚持:在续写中,会继续体现在她为了让 Sam 和 Chester 在一起所做的努力,如说服农场主,以及在之后照顾他们的过程中,展现她对 Sam 深深的母爱。
家庭的变故:与 Sam 之后的改变形成对比,在续写中,随着 Sam 在 Chester 的陪伴下逐渐好转,会让 Jo 和 Sam 感受到生活的转机,家庭的阴霾也会逐渐散去。
Chester 的孤独:与 Sam 的孤独相呼应,在续写中,他们会相互陪伴,共同走出孤独,Sam 和 Chester 的关系会越来越亲密,成为彼此生活中的重要部分。
从城市到乡村的转变:为 Sam 和 Chester 的相遇创造条件,在续写中,乡村的宁静环境和与动物的接触,会对 Sam 的康复起到积极作用,如他能更放松地与 Chester 相处,开启改变的第一步。
情感线
起初,Sam 孤独、封闭,母亲 Jo 焦虑、无助,面对家庭变故和 Sam 的病情,感到绝望。在农场看到 Chester 时,Sam 的内心被触动,有了好奇和亲近的情感。Jo 看到 Sam 的变化,心中燃起希望。当得到农场主同意带 Chester 回家后,Jo 满心期待,希望 Chester 能真正改变 Sam。而 Sam 在与 Chester 相处中,逐渐打开心扉,从孤独走向温暖,Jo 也从绝望慢慢走向欣慰,他们的情感随着故事发展逐渐变得积极。
故事线
Sam 在农场看到孤独的 Chester,被其吸引并走向它。
Sam 与 Chester 开始互动,表现出与以往不同的行为。
Jo 看到 Sam 的变化,意识到 Chester 对 Sam 的重要性,决定向农场主请求带走 Chester。
农场主同意 Jo 带走 Chester,Jo 带着 Sam 和 Chester 回家。
Sam 和 Chester 在新环境中相处,Sam 的状况持续改善。
Jo 看到 Sam 的转变,感受到生活的希望,家庭氛围逐渐变好。
主旨升华句
Love and companionship, no matter how small or unexpected, can break through the thickest walls of isolation and bring light to the darkest corners of the heart.(爱与陪伴,无论多么渺小或出乎意料,都能冲破最厚重的孤独之墙,为心灵最黑暗的角落带来光明。)
Sometimes, the most unlikely friendships can be the key to unlocking a world that was once thought to be forever closed, as Sam and Chester's bond so beautifully showed.(有时,最意想不到的友谊可能是打开一个曾被认为永远关闭的世界的钥匙,就像 Sam 和 Chester 的情谊所完美展现的那样。)
In the face of life's hardships and challenges, a simple act of connection, like the one between Sam and Chester, can start a journey of healing and transformation.(在生活的艰难困苦面前,一个简单的联结行为,比如 Sam 和 Chester 之间的联结,就能开启一段治愈与转变的旅程。)
This story reminds us that even in the depths of despair, there is always hope, and that hope can come in the form of an unexpected friend, ready to share a warm and loving bond.(这个故事提醒我们,即使在绝望的深渊,也总有希望,而这份希望可能以一个意想不到的朋友的形式出现,准备分享温暖和爱的联结。)
Through the special relationship between Sam and Chester, we learn that the power of empathy and understanding, across species, can create miracles and give new meaning to life.(通过 Sam 和 Chester 之间特殊的关系,我们了解到,跨越物种的共情与理解的力量,能创造奇迹,为生活赋予新的意义。)
段落续写要点
Sam和小猪Chester,两颗孤独的心缓缓靠近。根据续写第二段段首句的提示——妈妈提议将小猪带回家,我们可以推断,Sam与小猪的相处,就像打开了一扇窗,让妈妈窥见了一线希望。她重新燃起对沟通的期盼、对接纳的祈愿、对欢喜的向往,和对改变的无限希望。在这片田园的宁静中,两个生命的相遇似乎预示着一段非凡旅程的开始。所以,第一段续写的情节大致如下:
根据Sam主动走向小猪的描述,我们的故事自然应该从Sam开始。他和Chester的相遇相识应该是一个充满试探、回应和适应的过程。所以,在我们的叙述镜头中,首先聚焦的是Sam和Chester的互动。随后,当妈妈Jo见证了这一幕,她的内心无疑会充满惊讶和喜悦,甚至可能重新点燃了一丝希望:这只小猪能否为她的儿子带来改变呢?带着这样的期待,Jo向农夫提出了将小猪带回家的请求,这样,第二段的情节便顺理成章地衔接上了。
因此,对于第一段的安排,小榜建议角色的出场顺序可以是:Sam,Chester,然后是Jo。每个角色在我们的叙述镜头中都应该有充分的展现,这样才能在切换到下一个角色时,确保每个人物都是饱满和立体的。
在描写Sam与小猪Chester之间的互动时,我们可以聚焦他们之间通过肢体动作、眼神交流以及细微的表情变化而进行的无声交流。由于Sam患有孤独症,他在这种情境下开口的可能性极小。而这只同样孤寂的小猪Chester,也只能以非言语的方式给予回应。比如:我们可以运用平时积累的素材描写Sam如何小心翼翼地伸出手,或是他眼中闪烁着好奇与渴望;镜头一转,Chester在轻微地颤抖,它那明亮、滚圆的眼睛里流露出信任与亲昵。这些细节将成为他们之间独特的沟通桥梁,无需言语的支撑,同样深情与真挚。
通过这样的叙述,我们不仅能展现两个灵魂的相遇,也能让读者感受到,即使在沉默中,也能开出温暖而默契的友谊之花。
写作示范1
When Sam saw Chester, he went over to the little pig immediately. His small hand reached out hesitantly, and Chester looked up, his small eyes meeting Sam's for a brief moment before nudging closer. Jo held her breath as she watched her son sit on the grass, his fingers stroking Chester's soft fur. For the first time in years, Jo saw a spark in Sam’s eyes --- a flicker of curiosity and warmth. They stayed close with quiet contentment, as if they shared an unspoken understanding. The farmer stood by, smiling. “Looks like they’ve chosen each other,” he observed. Jo nodded slightly, her heart swelling with cautious hope. She asked if she could take the pig home, which she thought could possibly be the key to helping her boy who had once been so full of life and energy.
The farmer agreed and Jo took Chester home. The mini pig quickly became a part of their lives, and with Chester by his side, Sam began to open up in ways Jo had never imagined possible. He started mimicking Chester’s movements, laughter filling the air as the piglet gleefully rolled in the mud or snorted excitedly at mealtime. Motivated by Chester’s unwavering faith, Sam slowly ventured into the world again / emerged from his shell, showing newfound interest in the outdoors, toys, and even the people around him. Chester’s presence brought not just comfort but a pathway to understanding. Over time, Sam began communicating through gestures and, eventually, words, with “Ches” being his first spoken word. Hope blossomed in their little family, proving that healing can come in the most unexpected form.
写作示范2
When Sam saw Chester, he went over to the little pig immediately. For the first time in years, Jo caught a glimmer of light in her son’s eyes. Sam knelt down beside the tiny pig, watching him intently as the pig sniffed at the ground. Tentatively, Sam reached out to touch the pig’s soft ears, in the same way he often touched his own. Chester, timid at first, slowly lifted his head and nuzzled against Sam’s palm. It was a connection so simple, yet so profound. Jo was taken aback when a small giggle, a sound long absent, escaped from Sam’s lips. As the two sat in peaceful companionship, calm seemed to envelop Sam, as if Chester had reached a place in him that no one else had access to. Jo begged the farmer to let her take the pig home, clinging to the faint hope that this small creature might introduce / inject a touch of liveliness into their lives.
The farmer agreed, and Jo took Chester home. From the moment Chester stepped into their little cottage, he became Sam’s devoted shadow, following him wherever he went. Slowly but surely, something miraculous unfolded --- Sam began to reconnect with the world in small but meaningful ways --- giggling when Chester rolled over clumsily, humming softly as they lounged side by side by the window, and even looking his mother in the eye with a flicker of joy. Jo couldn’t believe it: her son was coming back to her, piece by piece. Chester was more than just a pet; he was a bridge, showing that connection was possible, even after years of silence. Jo realized that sometimes the simplest, most unexpected bond could unlock doors that no therapy or medication had the power to.
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