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When my sister, Dona, and I were little kids, my parents both joined the army. They stayed far away from our town and hardly returned home. My grandpa took on the big responsibility of taking care of us. Still, without our parents by our side, Dona and I sometimes felt lonely and sad, especially one winter.
One morning in that winter when Dona and I were sitting in our bedroom, dull (沉闷的) and quiet, Grandpa said, “My dear, how about trying skating for fun ” Our faces immediately lit up and we answered together, “Great, we surely like it, Grandpa!”
He smiled and quickly set about building us a skating rink (溜冰场) in our yard. The process of building a skating rink was not easy. First, Grandpa laid out long wooden boards around the yard. Next, he made the base of the rink flat. Grandpa then began spraying (喷) the water, lightly at first, until the first layer of ice was established. He would then put some water onto the ice each night. And thus, the ice became thicker and thicker.
In the darkness of the night, from the kitchen window Dona and I watched Grandpa with great expectations. His back and shoulders rounded to protect him from the freezing wind. He stood alone, busying himself creating a perfect skating rink for us. The only light was from the moon and stars.
One night, Grandpa suddenly pressed his waist and the look on his face showed he was painful. Quite concerned, Dona and I rushed out and asked, “Grandpa! What’s wrong ” “My waist is painful. Don’t worry! I’ll be fine just after a little rest,” he smiled. Dona and I offered to help create the rink. But he said it was too cold outside at night and that building the rink needs much experience and lots of skills. Then, we gave up the idea of offering him a hand, but demanded he build the rink a few days later. Seeing we were determined, he walked into the room with us and had warm tea. Before long, Dona and I were tired and went to bed.
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一、文章大意
作者和妹妹多娜小时候,父母参军远离家乡,由爷爷照顾。一个冬天,爷爷为了让姐妹俩开心,决定在院子里给她们建溜冰场。建溜冰场过程艰难,爷爷在寒冷的夜晚独自劳作,姐妹俩在厨房窗边满怀期待地看着。一天晚上,爷爷突然腰疼,姐妹俩想帮忙被拒,最后爷爷和她们一起回屋喝茶,姐妹俩因疲惫上床睡觉。
二、故事山分析
开端:父母参军,爷爷照顾作者和妹妹,冬天时姐妹俩感到沉闷,爷爷提议建溜冰场。
发展:爷爷开始建溜冰场,过程复杂,姐妹俩在夜晚看着爷爷忙碌。
高潮:爷爷腰疼,姐妹俩想帮忙但被拒绝,最后一起回屋喝茶,姐妹俩睡觉。
结局(预测):第二天姐妹俩看到建好的溜冰场,开心玩耍,感受到爷爷的爱。
尾声(预测):姐妹俩更加珍惜和爷爷在一起的时光,理解爷爷的付出。
三、伏笔及在续写中的回应
伏笔 1:父母不在身边,姐妹俩感到孤独沉闷。回应:爷爷建溜冰场就是为了让她们开心,后续可能会强调溜冰场给姐妹俩带来的欢乐,驱散孤独。
伏笔 2:建溜冰场过程艰难,爷爷独自在寒冷夜晚劳作。回应:体现爷爷的辛苦,为姐妹俩看到建好的溜冰场后的感动做铺垫。
伏笔 3:爷爷突然腰疼。回应:可能会在后续提到爷爷的身体状况,或者姐妹俩对爷爷健康的关心。
伏笔 4:姐妹俩想帮忙被拒。回应:突出爷爷对姐妹俩的爱护,后续可能会体现姐妹俩对爷爷这种爱护的感激。
伏笔 5:姐妹俩满怀期待地看着爷爷建溜冰场。回应:为第二天看到建好的溜冰场后的兴奋做铺垫。
四、续写要点
第一段:描述第二天姐妹俩醒来后看到溜冰场的场景,她们的表情、动作和语言,如兴奋地尖叫、迫不及待地冲出去等,以及对溜冰场的赞美。
第二段:描写姐妹俩在溜冰场玩耍的情景,如互相追逐、摔倒又爬起来,同时可以表达她们对爷爷的感激之情,以及爷爷看到她们玩耍时的欣慰。
五、情感线
起初姐妹俩因父母不在身边感到孤独沉闷,得知爷爷要建溜冰场后充满期待,看到爷爷腰疼时十分担心,想帮忙被拒有些失落,第二天看到建好的溜冰场时兴奋激动,在玩耍过程中对爷爷的感激之情愈发深厚。
六、故事线
父母参军,爷爷照顾姐妹俩,姐妹俩冬天感到沉闷。
爷爷提议建溜冰场,开始艰难建造。
爷爷腰疼,姐妹俩想帮忙被拒。
姐妹俩睡觉,第二天醒来看到建好的溜冰场。
姐妹俩在溜冰场开心玩耍。
姐妹俩感激爷爷,珍惜和爷爷在一起的时光。
七、主旨升华句
Love is not just a word; it is the selfless actions like Grandpa's, which can warm our hearts even in the coldest of winters.(爱不只是一个词,它是像爷爷那样无私的行动,即使在最寒冷的冬天也能温暖我们的心。)
In the absence of parents, Grandpa's love, shown through the building of the skating rink, became the most precious gift, filling our lives with joy and warmth.(在父母不在身边时,爷爷通过建溜冰场所展现的爱,成为了最珍贵的礼物,让我们的生活充满欢乐和温暖。)
Sometimes, the greatest expressions of love come in the form of simple yet dedicated efforts, just like Grandpa's hard work to create a happy memory for us.(有时候,最伟大的爱的表达是以简单而专注的努力的形式出现,就像爷爷为我们创造美好回忆所付出的努力。)
The skating rink, built with Grandpa's love and sweat, not only provided us with fun but also taught us the true meaning of family affection and sacrifice.(这个用爷爷的爱和汗水建成的溜冰场,不仅给我们带来了乐趣,还让我们懂得了亲情和付出的真正含义。)
Through Grandpa's act of building the skating rink, we learned that love has the power to turn a dull winter into a season full of laughter and cherished memories.(通过爷爷建溜冰场的举动,我们明白了爱有力量把沉闷的冬天变成充满欢笑和珍贵回忆的季节。)
八、写作示范一
第一段
The next morning, as soon as Dona and I opened our eyes, we rushed to the window. To our great surprise, a beautiful skating rink lay in the yard. The ice was so smooth that it reflected the sunlight like a mirror. “Wow! It's amazing! Grandpa really made it!” we shouted excitedly, jumping up and down. Without hesitation, we quickly put on our thick clothes and rushed out to the rink.
第二段
On the rink, we held hands and skated slowly at first. Then, we started to speed up, laughing and screaming. Sometimes, we fell down, but the soft snow on the side of the rink protected us. Looking at Grandpa standing by, watching us with a big smile, we skated towards him and gave him a big hug. “Thank you, Grandpa! This is the best gift ever!” we said gratefully. Grandpa patted our heads gently, and his eyes were filled with love and contentment.
写作示范二
第一段
When we woke up the following day, the first thing we did was to run outside. There, in the middle of the yard, was a perfect skating rink. The ice sparkled under the sunlight, as if it was covered with diamonds. Dona and I were so excited that we couldn't wait to step on it. We put on our skates clumsily and stepped onto the ice with trembling legs.
第二段
At first, we moved carefully, afraid of falling. But soon, with the wind blowing on our faces, we became more confident and started to enjoy the feeling of gliding. We played games, chased each other, and even tried some simple tricks. Every now and then, we would look at Grandpa, who was sitting on the bench, watching us with pride. We knew that this wonderful skating rink was not just a place for fun, but a symbol of Grandpa's deep love for us.
参考答案
When we fell asleep, Grandpa quietly walked out into the yard. He busied himself working on the rink again. He hoped to finish the work early so that we could skate as soon as possible. That night, he worked for a long time outside although his waist was painful. The next morning, when Dona and I woke up, we found Grandpa had placed skating equipment before our bed. When we were just curious and confused, Grandpa called out, “Kids, put it on and come out for fun! The rink was ready.”
Amazed, we hurriedly put on the skating equipment and rushed out. Seeing the beautiful rink, we were so excited and tried putting our skate blades to the ice at once, while Grandpa stood aside, smiling. We skated in the cold for what felt like hours, laughing and creating memories that have lasted a lifetime. Grandpa always was proud of what he had accomplished and happy to see us having so much fun. Now we always remember those many winters of terrific fun in our own backyard as a very special gift, which Grandpa built with great love.