云南昆明市2025届高三“三诊一模”摸底诊断测试英语试题
第二节(满分25分)
67. 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In the beautiful town Riverview surrounded by rolling hills, lived two brothers, Jack and Tom.
They were as different as night and day-Jack, the older by two years, was a keen reader with a preference for quiet moments spent in academic books, his nose often buried in the pages of historical texts or scientific pared with him, Tom was totally different, full of energy and enthusiasm, always longing for the outdoors. He found joy that came from playing soccer and basketball. The differences between them often led to arguments, creating a gap that seemed impossible to bridge.
One summer, their parents, hoping to mend the growing divide between them, decided to send them on a camping trip in the nearby Blue Ridge Mountains. They thought that the fresh mountain air, coupled with outdoor activities, would bring them closer.
Unwillingly, the two brothers packed their bags, each secretly hoping that the other would give up at the last minute. But neither did, and soon enough, they found themselves setting up camp under a canopy(顶篷)of twinkling stars, the cool night breeze whispering through the trees.
The first few days were tense. They quarreled over insignificant matters-who should carry the water bottle, who got to choose the music during meals, and whose turn it was to gather firewood. Their unpleasant quarrel echoed through the quiet forest, breaking the peace that enveloped them. Each disagreement seemed to widen the crack between them until one evening when things took a dramatic turn.
A sudden storm rolled in. The wind howled through the trees, and rain began to pour. In the disorder of securing the tent and gathering supplies to prevent them from getting wet, Tom slipped on a muddy path and hurt his ankle badly. Struggling with extreme pain, he knew that he had to turn to Campsite medical tent.
注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡上相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Noticing his brother in such a situation, Jack’s heart softened immediately.
Paragraph 2: As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip.
云南昆明市2025届高三“三诊一模”摸底诊断测试英语试题
第二节(满分25分)
67. 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In the beautiful town Riverview surrounded by rolling hills(非谓语动词做后置定语), lived two brothers, Jack and Tom(倒装句).
They were as different as night and day-Jack, the older by two years, was a keen reader with a preference for quiet moments(介词短语做后置定语) spent in academic books(非谓语动词做后置定语), his nose often buried in the pages of historical texts or scientific journals(独立主格). Compared with him(过去分词做比较状语), Tom was totally different, full of energy and enthusiasm(adj短语做补语), always longing for the outdoors(非谓语动词做伴随动作). He found joy that came from playing soccer and basketball(定从). The differences between them often led to arguments, creating a gap that seemed impossible to bridge(定从).
One summer, their parents, hoping to mend the growing divide between them(非谓语动词做后置定语), decided to send them on a camping trip in the nearby Blue Ridge Mountains. They thought that the fresh mountain air, coupled with outdoor activities(过去分词做后置定语), would bring them closer(宾从).
Unwillingly, the two brothers packed their bags, each secretly hoping that the other would give up at the last minute(宾从)(独立主格). But neither did, and soon enough, they found themselves setting up camp under a canopy(顶篷)of twinkling stars, the cool night breeze whispering through the trees(独立主格，环境描写).
The first few days were tense. They quarreled over insignificant matters-who should carry the water bottle, who got to choose the music during meals, and whose turn it was to gather firewood(同位语从句，AB&C). Their unpleasant quarrel echoed through the quiet forest(环境描写), breaking the peace(现在分词短语做结果状语) that enveloped them(定从). Each disagreement seemed to widen the crack between them(状态描写) until one evening when things took a dramatic turn(定从).
A sudden storm rolled in(环境描写). The wind howled through the trees, and rain began to pour. In the disorder of securing the tent and gathering supplies to prevent them from getting wet(介词短语状语), Tom slipped on a muddy path and hurt his ankle badly(核心转折点). Struggling with extreme pain(非谓语动词做伴随动作), he knew that he had to turn to Campsite medical tent(宾从).
注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右;2. 请按如下格式在答题卡上相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Noticing his brother in such a situation, Jack’s heart softened immediately.
Paragraph 2: As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip.
1. 续写类型分类与构思分析
分析角度 内容
续写类型 情感成长类（兄弟关系、理解与和解）
构思思路 1. 通过外部事件（暴风雨与受伤）促使人物成长。
2. 通过情感冲突和转折点推动情节。
3. 结尾强调成长、理解与和解。
布局与框架 第一段：Jack对弟弟受伤的反应，情感转变，开始照顾Tom。
第二段：Tom逐渐恢复，兄弟关系改善，共同完成露营。
实施要点 1. 注意承接原文（如描写他们的矛盾、争吵）。
2. 巧妙设置转折（如Jack的内心变化）。
3. 强化情感递进（从冷漠到关心）。
承接原文要点 1. 矛盾点：之前关系紧张，争吵不断。
2. 关键事件：Tom受伤，无法独自行动。
3. 情感转折：Jack主动照顾Tom。
巧妙设计续写 1. 环境渲染（暴风雨、森林中的困境）。
2. 心理描写（Jack的内心挣扎与改变）。
3. 人物互动（对话与行动体现关系缓和）。
2. 故事山（Story Mountain）分析
起因→冲突→高潮→转折→结局
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 Jack从冷漠到关心，Tom从固执到理解。 "They quarreled over insignificant matters."
情感层次 起初：相互厌烦 → 冲突：暴风雨受伤 → 转折：关心 → 结尾：和解 "Jack’s heart softened immediately."
关键情节点 1. 争吵不断 → 2. 暴风雨来袭 → 3. Tom受伤 → 4. Jack照顾Tom → 5. 关系缓和 "Tom slipped on a muddy path and hurt his ankle badly."
语言特色 对比修辞（兄弟性格差异）、心理描写、动作描写增强氛围 "Unwillingly, the two brothers packed their bags..."
关键词分析 争吵（argue, quarrel）、受伤（injured, wounded）、关心（care, concern） "The differences between them often led to arguments."
心理描写 1. Jack开始不情愿，后来变得主动。
2. Tom对哥哥的态度变化。 "Jack’s heart softened immediately."
动作描写 1. Tom滑倒受伤。
2. Jack帮忙扶起并包扎伤口。 "Tom slipped on a muddy path..."
环境描写 1. 暴风雨来袭。
2. 森林氛围，夜晚寒冷。 "The wind howled through the trees, and rain began to pour."
隐含主题 1. 兄弟情谊的成长。
2. 困境中的相互支持。 "As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip."
情感转折 从冷漠到关心，从对抗到理解。 "Jack’s heart softened immediately."
空间转换 帐篷→森林小路→医疗帐篷→营地 "Struggling with extreme pain, he knew that he had to turn to Campsite medical tent."
时间过渡 风暴前→风暴中→风暴后 "A sudden storm rolled in."
3. 续写常用语料
推荐的动作、心理、环境描写
（1）动作描写（8个）
He rushed forward, grabbing his brother’s arm.
His hands trembled slightly as he helped his brother stand.
Jack knelt down, examining Tom’s swollen ankle.
He gritted his teeth and lifted his brother onto his back.
He wrapped a bandage tightly around the wound.
Tom winced in pain but nodded in appreciation.
Jack cleared his throat, hesitating before speaking.
They walked side by side, their steps finally in sync.
（2）心理描写（8个）
Jack hesitated, torn between old resentment and new concern.
A sense of guilt washed over him.
He couldn’t ignore the tight knot in his chest.
Tom bit his lip, ashamed of their past fights.
Relief flooded through Jack when Tom managed a weak smile.
He felt a warmth spread through him as they worked together.
Jack realized how much he had taken his brother for granted.
Tom met his brother’s gaze, understanding finally dawning.
（3）环境描写（8个）
Dark clouds gathered, swallowing the last traces of sunlight.
The wind howled, rattling their fragile tent.
Raindrops pounded against the ground, soaking their supplies.
Lightning flashed across the sky, illuminating the worried faces.
The forest floor turned into a slippery mess of mud and leaves.
Cold air bit at their skin, making them shiver.
The storm passed, leaving the world fresh and silent.
Morning sunlight filtered through the trees, casting a golden glow.
高级词汇替换
基础词汇 高级表达 同义词
Help Assist, aid Support
Angry Furious, outraged Resentful
Tired Exhausted, drained Fatigued
Happy Overjoyed, elated Thrilled
Difficult Challenging, demanding Arduous
4. 高分语法点与搭配
（1）语法现象
语法点 示例句
虚拟语气 If he hadn’t helped, his brother might not have made it.
现在分词短语 Seeing his brother in pain, Jack acted instantly.
强调句 It was in that moment that Jack truly understood his brother.
非谓语动词（to do） Jack knelt down to examine the wound.
定语从句 The forest, which had once felt vast and lonely, now seemed smaller.
（2）可积累的语料
短语 例句
Make amends Jack wanted to make amends for their past fights.
Come to terms with Tom finally came to terms with his brother’s care.
Tension melted away As they worked together, the tension melted away.
Possible Versions
Version 1：
Paragraph 1
Noticing his brother in such a situation, Jack’s heart softened immediately. Withou hesitation(without介词短语做状语), he rushed to Tom’s side, helping him sit up(非谓语动词做伴随动作). “Are you okay ” he asked, concern written all over his face(独立主格). The rain continued to pour, soaking them to the bone(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作)(环境描写). Jack quickly wrapped his jacket around Tom’s shoulders, his previous frustrations forgotten(独立主格). “We need to get you to the medical tent,” Jack said firmly. Though Tom hesitated(状从), he nodded, realizing(非谓语动词做伴随动作) he had no other choice(宾从). Jack bent down, allowing Tom to lean on him(非谓语动词做伴随动作) as they slowly made their way back to the campsite(状从). Every step was painful for Tom, but Jack’s unwavering support gave him strength(转折对比描写). For the first time in a long while, Tom felt grateful for his brother’s presence.
Paragraph 2
As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip. Jack took charge of gathering firewood, while Tom helped prepare meals(状从). Their old arguments seemed distant(状态描写为), replaced by laughter and shared experiences(过去分词短语做结果状语). Sitting by the campfire one evening(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Tom glanced at Jack. “Thanks… for everything,” he said softly. Jack smiled, giving his brother a playful nudge(现在分词短语做伴随动作). “You’re not that bad, you know.” The warmth of the fire mirrored the warmth growing between them(环境情感描述). The trip that had started as a burden(定从) had become something meaningful(转变描写). By the time they packed up(状从), they were no longer just two individuals—they were brothers(递进句式), bound by something deeper than words(过去分词短语做结果状语).
Version 2
Paragraph 1
Noticing his brother in such a situation, Jack’s heart softened immediately. The past conflicts suddenly seemed insignificant compared to Tom’s pain.(心理描写) Without thinking twice(with复合状语), Jack crouched beside him, his hands trembling(独立主格) as he examined Tom’s ankle(状从 对原文的衔接). “We need to get you out of the rain,” he muttered, his voice firm but gentle(独立主格). Ignoring the cold seeping through his clothes(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he wrapped an arm around Tom’s waist and helped him stand. Tom winced(vi退缩) but allowed Jack to guide him back. The storm raged around them, but Jack refused to let go(环境描写和心理展示). With each step, their bond strengthened—unspoken but undeniable(状态描写).
Paragraph 2
As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip. Jack patiently taught Tom how to properly set up a tent(宾从), while Tom, in return, shared survival tips(状从) he had picked up from adventure books(定从). They laughed at past misunderstandings and found common ground in the simplest of things(变化描写). When the final day arrived(状从), Jack looked at Tom and smirked. “I guess camping wasn’t so bad after all(宾从),” he said. Tom chuckled, nodding(现在分词做伴随动作). “Not with you around.” As they left the campsite(状从), the gap that once divided them(定从) had disappeared, replaced by trust, understanding, and an unbreakable bond(过去分词短语做结果状语).
Version 3
Paragraph 1
Noticing his brother in such a situation, Jack’s heart softened immediately. For years, he had seen Tom as nothing but a reckless troublemaker(描写兄弟情很好的积累), but in that moment, all he saw(定从) was his little brother in pain. “Hold on,” he murmured, kneeling beside Tom(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Carefully, he inspected the swollen ankle before tearing a strip of fabric from his own shirt to wrap around it(救援类动作描写). “Lean on me,” he instructed. Though reluctant at first(让步状从), Tom obeyed, his usual pride melting in the face of necessity(不情愿感的描写推荐！). As they stumbled through the rain(状从), Jack tightened his grip, his determination unwavering(独立主格).
Paragraph 2
As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip. They found themselves working in perfect harmony—Tom lighting the fire(独立主格) while Jack cooked(状从). Gone were the constant bickering and silent treatments(倒装句，强调). One night, under a sky filled with stars, Tom broke the silence. “I always thought you didn’t care,” he admitted. Jack scoffed. “You’re my brother. Of course, I care.” In that moment, both understood that despite their differences, they would always have each other(宾从). And that was enough.
高分语法解析与亮点词汇
1. 高中语法加分点
语法点 例句 解析
虚拟语气 If he hadn’t helped, his brother might not have made it. 表达对过去情况的假设，提高语言表达高级感。
强调句 It was at that moment that Jack realized his love for his brother. 强调情感转折，提高句子感染力。
非谓语动词 Ignoring the cold, he wrapped an arm around Tom. 通过非谓语结构让句子更紧凑、更流畅。
定语从句 The storm, which raged around them, only made their bond stronger. 使句子更具逻辑性、层次感。
现在分词短语 Seeing his brother in pain, Jack acted immediately. 使句子简洁，同时强调主观情感变化。
2. 亮点词汇短语
（1）情绪描写
基础词 高级表达 同义词
Worry Anxiety, concern Unease
Happy Elated, overjoyed Thrilled
Nervous Uneasy, apprehensive Tense
Relieved Comforted, reassured Soothed
Sad Heartbroken, devastated Melancholy
（2）动作描写
基础词 高级表达 同义词
Help Assist, support Aid
Look Gaze, glance at Peer at
Walk Stumble, stride Trudge
Hold Grasp, clutch Cling to
Say Murmur, whisper Utter
（3）环境描写
基础词 高级表达 同义词
Rain Downpour, drizzle Shower
Wind Howling wind, breeze Gust
Dark Gloomy, dim Shadowy
Cold Icy, freezing Chilly
Fire Blaze, flickering flames Ember
3. 可积累的读后续写语料
短语 例句
Swallowed his pride Jack swallowed his pride and offered his hand.
A lump formed in his throat Seeing his brother struggle, a lump formed in Jack’s throat.
Tears welled up in his eyes Tears welled up in Tom’s eyes as he accepted Jack’s help.
Break the silence Tom finally broke the silence and muttered, “Thank you.”
Stand by someone’s side Jack stood by his brother’s side, determined to protect him.
