2025届高三英语复习读后续写7 结尾手法 导学案
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英语培优7 学案 结尾手法+培优6跟踪训练讲评
一 结尾手法
升华式结尾：套用原文中有哲理的话；套用谚语；在故事基础上抽象出道理；自己的感受
I have fallen in love with writing since then and, as a famous writer now, I have had quite a lot of works published. My teacher was right: anything is possible if I really apply myself. 后续发展+套用原文中的道理
What goes around really comes around, which was what I experienced in person and has clung to me ever since.
As we waved the grateful lady goodbye, my heart swelled with a newfound understanding of my father’s mantra. What goes around really comes around. I finally had a chance to witness my father’s mantra in action and follow in his footsteps.
We had found Larry, and in the process, we had discovered something even more important: the power of teamwork, the strength of friendship, and the unwavering belief in ourselves. We had faced a challenge, a real-life mystery, and we had overcome it. We had learned that even in the face of adversity, there was always hope, always a solution, and always the power of a team.
Del and I became good friends. Words have the power to hurt and heal. I will always keep in mind that they can wound and cause pain, but they also have the ability to soothe, comfort, and heal.
Reflecting on this experience, I realized how damaging rumors can be and how important to seek the truth and understand someone's circumstances before passing judgment.
Only at that moment did I realize that rumor spread easily, but it hurt someone deeply.
The 20 pounds not only alleviated / relieved my financial strain/stress but also served as a beacon 灯塔of hope and support, rescuing me from the depths of adversity and uncertainty.
Yes, life might be hard for me in a new city. But with the unreserved毫无保留的 generosity and unwavering 坚定的support from my roommate, I knew I could pull through any difficulty and rise to any challenge. Indeed, life is not a bed of roses, but love from my roommates make the world go around. Plus, I am bound to pay forward their kindness by helping more needy people like me.
Despite the fact that I might suffer a tight budget in the following weeks, I felt the warmth out of the kindness.Never before had I believed so firmly that kindness was a ray of light, brightening up the day in the darkest time.
Walking out of the coffee shop, I felt my previous desperation, disheartenment and self-blame were gone, which were replaced by a sheer sense of calm and inner peace. I knew, they were rewarded by my invaluable virtue-honesty and integrity.
Family love and bond could melt away any ice, allowing love to enter each other's hearts. This was powerfully illustrated on that bright, sunny day when I volunteered to take graduation photos for my close friend, Jeff, who held his father in a tight embrace.
问题解决式结尾
Few flowers blossom (绽放) overnight and I was glad that it had not taken too long for me to accept my dear sister. 道理+问题解决
I suddenly understood what my aunt said to me before. Yes, this time I have made up my mind to learn to be a big sister. Welcome to my new life, Rosa, my sister.
Father and son, once separated by a gap of misunderstanding, now stood together, a silent proof to the power of family ties. The years of separation faded, replaced by a shared look of quiet pride and understanding. In that single moment, a bond, long fractured, was quietly, powerfully, mended.
Our skilled skier finally skied across the snow mountain in his and his father's heart and arrived at the destination of understanding.
画面定格式（情景交融）结尾
With the four of us enveloped in the fragrance of the flowers and the warm sunshine, I knew I had fully accepted Rosa as one of the closest family members and I was willing to share everything with her.
Flakes were still swirling in the sky but the tender flame in my heart had melted the snow surrounding us. 对比
Silent snowflakes drifting down from the sky, I wondered on the familiar country roads, mourning for the past golden days that would never fade away. 环境与心情
Dancing snow whispered in the air, narrating the tale of a caring Santa Claus and his pleasure. 拟人
Wandering along the familiar road and recalling the past golden days, I felt a touch of sadness, but also a deep sense of inspiration from this tender “adventure.” 场景再现
We all gathered around Larry's terrarium, singing a song crafted for his return. Mr. Jones smiled and clapped along, his eyes twinkling with pride. Larry seemed to enjoy the song, too. He stretched out his little legs and blinked his eyes, as if to say, "Thank you for finding me!" 群像描写
Jeff came down and opened his arms and hugged his father awkwardly, to which his father responded eagerly. I clicked my camera and recorded the unforgettable moment. 画面定格
As we gathered around Larry's terrarium, singing him a celebratory song(回扣上文), we knew that this was just the beginning of our adventures together. We were a team, and we were ready for anything.
总结上文+收获
I didn’t earn enough money to buy a canary, but I was happy that Mrs. Riley was no longer lonely because of my help. Roses given, fragrance in hand, which was what I experienced in person.
We didn’t harvest much fish that day, but I harvested something more important: what goes around really comes around, which has clung to me to this day.
对话式结尾
Jeff came down, smiling with tears in eyes. “My father is here,” he whispered to me, “I think I’m going home.” 对话式结尾
回忆式结尾
Looking back on it now, I am grateful that the kindness of the Chicago neighbourhood has stuck in my heart and made me what I am today. 回忆+影响
后续发展式结尾
For a long time that followed, with the help of the new bicycle I delivered more newspapers and helped my family pull through the difficult time with the money I earned. It was the kindness and generosity of the people in my neighbourhood that encouraged and helped the nine-year-old me and has made me what I am today, a man who is tough and full of love. 后续发展+升华
Many years has passed, but with my father’s mantra sticking in my mind, I am always willing to reach out to anyone in need, firmly believing what goes around does come around. 后续发展+原文中道理
照应开头式结尾
森林迷路
开头
As the golden sun was sailing higher and higher in the east, casting its
warm glow over the town, Emily, a keen photographer, started a solo journey to the famed Old Pine Scenic Area, well known for its centuries- old pine forests and winding paths. She anticipated a day filled with peaceful beauty and the opportunity to touch nature in its purest form.
结尾
As the sun dipped below the horizon, casting long shadows across the ancient pines, Emily emerged from the forest, her heart full of a quiet gratitude. The vibrant greens and earthy browns, the whispering pines, the breathtaking beauty of Old Pine，and the unexpected kindness of a stranger—these were the treasures she carried with her, far more precious than any single photograph.
偶遇蟋蟀
开头
I still remember what I felt on a bright Saturday morning in late September, at a five-kilometer race in Clarkston, Georgia.
结尾
On that bright Saturday morning, my son missed a prize. But we obtained something far more important: the precious encounter and connection with Little Friend, a treasure far exceeding any trophy.
无声的花开
开头
One of the most difficult realities about the teaching profession is that we seldom know if we have made a difference. When I become discouraged about my job, my students or myself, I often think back to one particular day of my teaching career.
结尾
The memory of that particular day remains vivid even now, serving as a powerful reminder of the profound impact a teacher can have and a source of strength I constantly dram upon whenever doubt threatens to shadow me.
二 周练 无声的花开
主题：教育的潜移默化的作用，师生之情
心理描写：惊讶，感动，对教育的思考
场景描写：学生送花
伏笔
One of the most difficult realities about the teaching profession is that we seldom know if we have made a difference. When I become discouraged about my job, my students or myself, I often think back to one particular day of my teaching career. 要解决的问题：作者对教育效果怀疑；情节发展的暗示：那天发生的事情一直鼓励着我；可采用首尾呼应式开头
Deep down, though, I was more bothered by leaving than I admitted. 我恋恋不舍
I doubted they would remember much about me after a few more years of their academic careers and busy lives. 我担心学生会忘记我（和我的教导）
Just about this time I was on hall duty outside my classroom, and I noticed the crowds thinning out and classroom doors shutting. I looked in my room to find only two students in attendance. When I commented that it was awfully strange that their classmates were so late, they agreed and then quickly asked to get a drink outside. The hallway was awfully quiet. I walked down the hall several times to see if anyone was coming. 学生反常行为：教室空荡荡，在给老师准备惊喜
Suddenly, I heard footsteps coming down the hall. I was annoyed that after such a great year with these kids, I would-on their last day with me--have to give them a lecture about responsibility. 作者的误解（呼应开头对教育效果的不确定）
Paragraph 1: I sighed and then observed them coming peacefully towards me with something in their hands. 送花场景描写，作者的担心已得到解决
范文：To my surprise, they were holding a bouquet of roses and each student a card in hand. Their faces were a mix of nervousness and excitement as they approached me." We wanted to give you something before you leave," one of them said, their voice trembling slightly. As they handed me the flowers and the cards, I could see that they had put a lot of thought into it. The roses were a vibrant red, symbolizing the passion I had instilled in them for literature.On the cards were their photos and some of my catchphrases, a testament to the impact our conversations had made.
下水：A few steps closer, I saw one of them holding a bouquet of roses and each of them a card in their hands, their face a mixture of shyness and affection. A girl went up and presented me with a bouquet of roses. “We really appreciated having you this year. Thank you for everything," she said quietly with a slight blush. Then, each of them, in turn, pressed a card into my hand, their fingers lingering for a moment on mine before they embraced me, their hugs warm and genuine. The weight of their affection, the unspoken gratitude in their eyes, was more profound than any words could express. Then they disappeared into the classroom.
Paragraph 2: I stood alone outside my classroom with the roses, thinking about their touching words on the cards. 由具体到抽象，从表面到深入，对教育的思考 借助于长句（）
范文：The sincerity in their eyes and the heartfelt messages caused a tightness in my throat. It was a moment of profound realization that, despite my doubts, I had indeed made a difference in their lives. The students had not only learned the curriculum but had also formed a bond with me that would extend beyond the classroom. While the teaching profession might be filled with uncertainties, this unexpected act of appreciation was a reminder that the seeds of knowledge and inspiration can take root and flourish, even if their growth is not always immediately visible.
下水1：The initial annoyance, that dull ache of incoming departure and the uncertainty of my impact began to fade away slowly. It was replaced by the unexpected warmth of their affection. The red roses, against the pale walls of the hallway, seemed to mirror the transformation. Their simple act of kindness, the sincerity in their eyes, the heartfelt messages on their cards—these were not mere gestures; they were the gentle reassurance that my efforts had not been in vain. The seeds of knowledge and inspiration, I realized, had indeed taken root.
下水2：With the roses in my hand and the cards in my pocket, my mind replayed their words, their hugs and the sincerity in their eyes. Each detail, each gesture, represented a depth of meaning that surpassed the simple act of gift-giving. It wasn't just about the roses or the cards; it was about the connection, the unspoken understanding, the shared journey we had experienced together. A wave of emotion washed over me—gratitude, yes, but also a profound sense of connection and a quiet joy. A slow smile spread across my face. The uncertainties of the profession, the doubts that had threatened to overwhelm me, gave way to a quiet sense of fulfillment. The seeds of knowledge and inspiration had indeed taken root and blossomed in ways I hadn't anticipated.
描写roses:
The roses, vibrant and full of life, represented more than just a beautiful gesture; they symbolized the blossoming of the seeds of knowledge and inspiration I had sown. Their red colour mirrored the passion I held for literature and the joy I found in sharing it with my students. Each petal spoke of the individual growth and development I had witnessed in my students. They were a testament to the power of human connection and the profound impact a teacher can have on a young mind.
三 培优6跟踪训练 审题 + 扩句 讲评
审题
Passage 11 乐观艺术课
主题：乐观的人生态度
She picked up the painting, not realizing she had paints颜料 on her fingers.
Question 1：What happened later The paints on her fingers left marks on the painting.
Question 2：Hazel’ s response Hazel declared it to be the third bad thing.
Question 3: Fein’s response Fein added strokes to the marks so that flowers appeared.
The last sentence of paragraph 1: Everyone, including Emma, was delighted to
witness the change.
"Want to add one on the painting " Fein asked Hazel.
Question4: Did Hazel accept the invitation What did she paint Yes. She changed several marks into butterflies / a rainbow.
Question5: What happened later The rain stopped. The kids thought highly of the transformation.
A proper ending: 升华？/ describe the scene./ 问题解决
扩句训练：
Passage9 森林迷路
主题：人在面对困难时的冷静坚韧，陌生人的帮助，人与自然和谐相处
情感描写：沮丧，感激，对自然之美的欣赏
场景描写：迷路时的森林，走出迷宫时的森林
需要解决的问题：迷路后走出森林，寻找松树之王
Emily remembered reading about the importance of staying calm when lost.
Question 1：What did she do to stay calm She took a deep breath. / She sat down to think about her situation.
She took a deep breath and tried to clear her mind. Her heart still raced, but she forced herself to focus on the task at hand.
Taking a slow, deep breath, she consciously slowed her racing pulse, feeling the cool air fill her lungs. The panic fluttering in her chest began to ease, replaced by a steadier rhythm.
Question 2：What did she do next She tried several other ways in her attempt to find her way out of the forest but in vain. / She just stayed there trying to think of a way out.展现（具体做了什么，心理情感等）
She recalled that she should try to find a landmark that could help her position herself. She chose a tree with a distinctive shape to use it as a reference. Carefully, she backtracked again, keeping the tree in sight this time, and started to look for any signs of the path she had taken. The thick underbrush, however, seemed determined to erase all traces of her passage. "It doesn't matter," she whispered. She held her breath, trying to make out, from the rustling leaves and chirping birds, the sound of the running water of a stream or anything helpful. Just then, she heard faint crunching of leaves .
She found a relatively clear spot and decided to wait, hoping that a ranger who takes care of forest or another hiker might pass by. To keep calm, she resumed taking photos, capturing the stunning beauty of the fog- wrapped forest, each shot an obvious contrast to the morning's. About an hour later, she heard the sound of footsteps crunching on dry leaves.
Question 3：What happened next A local man appeared. 展现（描写the man, Emily听到的， 看到的，感受）
A wave of relief washed over her as an elderly man emerged from the mist,his face wearing a kind smile beneath a wide- brimmed hat.
The last sentence of paragraph 1: The man asked her if she needed any help / The man guessed she must be there for the oldest pine.
A local man approached without haste, his voice calm and reassuring. "You seem to be having some difficulty," he observed, his eyes resting on her camera.
"You must be here for the oldest pine."
Nodding eagerly, Emily explained her situation to the local man.
Question4: The old man’s response He introduced himself and offered to lead her back to the beaten track.
The man, who introduced himself as a ranger. With a comforting assurance,he offered to lead her to the ancient pine she had sought and then to the main trail.She thanked the old man sincerely.
Question5: Did she see the eldest pine tree Yes, with the local man leading the way.
In fact, the oldest pine was only ten minutes’ walk. Its vast trunk and overgrown branches were a breathtaking sight, majestic and enduring. Emily captured the tree in her lens, a permanent reminder of her adventure and unexpected generosity she had encounteredin the heart of the wilderness.
A proper ending: The local man led her out of the forest. Her feelings / Describe the
scene.
Guided by the kind local man, Emily walked from the forest's shadowy depths intoa world bathed in the golden light of setting sun with the path ahead dancing with light and shadow, a perfect scene for a perfect picture!
Under the guidance of the local man, Emily emerged from the forest not only with a remarkable story to tell but also with a deeper understanding of the forest, a lesson far more valuable than any photograph could ever capture.
Passage10
主题：人与自然和谐相处（爱护动物）；珍惜生活中的美好时刻
需要解决的问题：越野赛中保证蟋蟀安全；蟋蟀回归自然
场景描写：男孩照顾蟋蟀，越野赛，蟋蟀回归自然
Little Friend was riding proudly on one finger of my son’s right hand. It was like a very small captain on a very big ship, as calm as could be. My predictions had been wrong. My son hadn’t run fast. He blamed a cold he was getting over. However, I knew the real reason. While he was running, his arms would swing, and Little Friend would be bounced and eventually fall to the ground, which would certainly put its life in danger. So my son had to slow down his running speed to protect it. But I didn’t question him too much about it. I think there’s more than one way to win a race.
Smiling, we walked back to the car with Little Friend. My son carefully found some bushes in the parking lot which seemed like a good place for him to drop off Little Friend.He seemed lost and unwilling to give up on Little Friend. But he knew their brief and intense friendship had to run its course. “Be free,” my son said, and gently pushed Little Friend. It took some more pushes, and Little Friend finally sprang from his finger and jumped downward, its bright green body integrated with the dark green bushes.The small creature went out of sight and sought its freedom.
升华式结尾：Sometimes life offers unexpected treasures—fragile, fleeting moments of connection that unexpectedly attach themselves to our hands. There is no need to rush ahead. Treat it gently. Enjoy each moment. Hold on while we can, before they take flight on their own journey.
Describe the cricket:
Its tiny legs gripped tightly, adjusting its position with each footfall, while my son maintained a slightly slower but steady pace.
The scene of a little boy running cautiously with a tiny cricket perching/ sitting on his finger painted a picture of a shared journey.
Before launching itself into the bushes, Little Friend paused for a second, as if to
show its thanks for my son.
Landing on a leaf, Little Friend let out a single, clear chirp—a tiny farewell—before
disappearing into the dense green of the bushes.
四 培优6跟踪训练扩句优化
续写扩句建议：
情节设计力求合理（符合常理，符合上文）
要着力提升句子的流畅（借助长句）；
心理和场景描写要自然，与上下文浑然一体（ 把心理情感或场景写成伴随或原因状语也是不错的处理方式）；
有效积累（理解句式的具体运用场景、练后重写）和反复打磨句子用词是提升续写水平的必然之路。
After that, we tried our best to find a safe enough position so that we managed to could help it return to its home. Seeing its departure and bathed in the sunshine, we all burst out content smiles and would never forget this experience.
注意：burst out doing, burst into sth. Seeing与bathed并列，逻辑混乱
优化1：Afterwards, we managed to locate a safe place as its new home and set it free. Witnessing its departure under the warm embrace of the sunshine, we couldn't help but break into content smiles. What a unique and unforgettable encounter!
Taking a deep breath, Emily chose a rock to sit clown to keep calm. After that, she tried her best to remember recall what the roads were like and gathered her courage to take a try, trying to find a way out.
优化2：Taking a deep breath to calm herself down, Emily searched the trees for familiar landmarks. However, the dense trees completely blocked her view. Then she closed her eyes and listened intently for the distant sounds of a road or anyone passing by.
Along the rocky way there lived a number of old pine trees and Emily made a decision to share her aim with him . To her surprise, the man said the eldest pine tree was ahead, and soon they saw it. After enjoying appreciating the oldest pine tree, they soon got out of the forest. A wave of happiness swept over her as she saw the track again.
注意：情节设计——在遇到老人时，Emily应该向老人说明自己迷路的原因，拍照，寻找松树之王。
优化3：In fact, the eldest pine was only ten minutes’ walk. Its vast trunk and overgrown
Branches were a breathtaking sight, majestic and enduring. Emily captured the tree in her
lens, a permanent reminder of her adventure and unexpected generosity she had encountered in the heart of the wilderness. Under the guidance of the local man, Emily emerged from the forest not only with a remarkable story to tell but also with a deeper understanding of the forest, a lesson far more valuable than any photograph could ever capture.
Walking on the rocky road, my son focused on his new friend. However, I understood that it couldn't accompany us forever. So I had to told him that he must free Little Friend off. Hearing such crucial cruel fact, my son showed an unwilling heart 写具体表现to separate with his new friend. However, after a while, my son accepted my advice and freed it unwillingly. Seeing my son's right decision, I really took pride in him who finally grew up.
注意：此时我们已经走到了停车场，要具体描述让蟋蟀回归自然的场景，从我的视角写儿子的心情。
优化可参考学案相应部分。
When Emily was about to give up，delicate sound rose from the trees behind Emily and became closer and closer and tugged at her heart strings. A man, dressed as if he was the native, appeared.
注意：句型 be about to do / on the point of doing--- when ; dressed as if ——dressed like ;
优化5：Emily was about to give up when she heard faint sounds of leaves crunching. Holding her breath, she listened intently as the sound grew clearer. Then, she saw a man appear in the distance.
Curiosity beat Emily and drove her to break the silence. "May I see the eldest pine tree " The man turned his head with a watery smile and walked towards another way. After a while, they stood in front of the pine tree, astonishment choked Emily's
句子修正：Curiosity overcame Emily, forcing her to break the silence. "May I see the eldest pine tree " she inquired. The man turned his head with a smile and led her down a different path. After a while, they arrived in front of the pine tree, leaving Emily astonished.
注意：情节设置不太合理（有点悬疑的意味），应该写乐于助人的当地人，善于沟通的Emily。
The local man led her out of the forest, a sense of gratitude flooded over Emily. Thanks to the kind man, Emily got rid of danger as well as achieving her aim.
注意：句子不够流畅；表达有些笼统
句子修正：The local man guided Emily out of the forest, filling her with a sense of gratitude. Thanks to his kindness, Emily not only escaped danger but also achieved her goal.
He was so familiar with the forest that it just took us a few minutes to get out. But during the way, I recognised a giant pine and stayed to appreciate it. The man introduced to me that it was the eldest pine tree here. Escaping from the frightening forest, I felt like I was relive. Sun rose from the east and cast its light on me. How excellent an experience I had!
优化可借鉴学案中句子：Guided by the kind local man, Emily walked from the forest's
shadowy depths into a world bathed in the golden light of setting sun with the path ahead dancing with light and shadow, a perfect scene for a perfect picture!
一 结尾手法
升华式结尾：套用原文中有哲理的话；套用谚语；在故事基础上抽象出道理；自己的感受
I have fallen in love with writing since then and, as a famous writer now, I have had quite a lot of works published. My teacher was right: anything is possible if I really apply myself. 后续发展+套用原文中的道理
What goes around really comes around, which was what I experienced in person and has clung to me ever since.
As we waved the grateful lady goodbye, my heart swelled with a newfound understanding of my father’s mantra. What goes around really comes around. I finally had a chance to witness my father’s mantra in action and follow in his footsteps.
We had found Larry, and in the process, we had discovered something even more important: the power of teamwork, the strength of friendship, and the unwavering belief in ourselves. We had faced a challenge, a real-life mystery, and we had overcome it. We had learned that even in the face of adversity, there was always hope, always a solution, and always the power of a team.
Del and I became good friends. Words have the power to hurt and heal. I will always keep in mind that they can wound and cause pain, but they also have the ability to soothe, comfort, and heal.
Reflecting on this experience, I realized how damaging rumors can be and how important to seek the truth and understand someone's circumstances before passing judgment.
Only at that moment did I realize that rumor spread easily, but it hurt someone deeply.
The 20 pounds not only alleviated / relieved my financial strain/stress but also served as a beacon 灯塔of hope and support, rescuing me from the depths of adversity and uncertainty.
Yes, life might be hard for me in a new city. But with the unreserved毫无保留的 generosity and unwavering 坚定的support from my roommate, I knew I could pull through any difficulty and rise to any challenge. Indeed, life is not a bed of roses, but love from my roommates make the world go around. Plus, I am bound to pay forward their kindness by helping more needy people like me.
Despite the fact that I might suffer a tight budget in the following weeks, I felt the warmth out of the kindness.Never before had I believed so firmly that kindness was a ray of light, brightening up the day in the darkest time.
Walking out of the coffee shop, I felt my previous desperation, disheartenment and self-blame were gone, which were replaced by a sheer sense of calm and inner peace. I knew, they were rewarded by my invaluable virtue-honesty and integrity.
Family love and bond could melt away any ice, allowing love to enter each other's hearts. This was powerfully illustrated on that bright, sunny day when I volunteered to take graduation photos for my close friend, Jeff, who held his father in a tight embrace.
问题解决式结尾
Few flowers blossom (绽放) overnight and I was glad that it had not taken too long for me to accept my dear sister. 道理+问题解决
I suddenly understood what my aunt said to me before. Yes, this time I have made up my mind to learn to be a big sister. Welcome to my new life, Rosa, my sister.
Father and son, once separated by a gap of misunderstanding, now stood together, a silent proof to the power of family ties. The years of separation faded, replaced by a shared look of quiet pride and understanding. In that single moment, a bond, long fractured, was quietly, powerfully, mended.
Our skilled skier finally skied across the snow mountain in his and his father's heart and arrived at the destination of understanding.
画面定格式（情景交融）结尾
With the four of us enveloped in the fragrance of the flowers and the warm sunshine, I knew I had fully accepted Rosa as one of the closest family members and I was willing to share everything with her.
Flakes were still swirling in the sky but the tender flame in my heart had melted the snow surrounding us. 对比
Silent snowflakes drifting down from the sky, I wondered on the familiar country roads, mourning for the past golden days that would never fade away. 环境与心情
Dancing snow whispered in the air, narrating the tale of a caring Santa Claus and his pleasure. 拟人
Wandering along the familiar road and recalling the past golden days, I felt a touch of sadness, but also a deep sense of inspiration from this tender “adventure.” 场景再现
We all gathered around Larry's terrarium, singing a song crafted for his return. Mr. Jones smiled and clapped along, his eyes twinkling with pride. Larry seemed to enjoy the song, too. He stretched out his little legs and blinked his eyes, as if to say, "Thank you for finding me!" 群像描写
Jeff came down and opened his arms and hugged his father awkwardly, to which his father responded eagerly. I clicked my camera and recorded the unforgettable moment. 画面定格
As we gathered around Larry's terrarium, singing him a celebratory song(回扣上文), we knew that this was just the beginning of our adventures together. We were a team, and we were ready for anything.
总结上文+收获
I didn’t earn enough money to buy a canary, but I was happy that Mrs. Riley was no longer lonely because of my help. Roses given, fragrance in hand, which was what I experienced in person.
We didn’t harvest much fish that day, but I harvested something more important: what goes around really comes around, which has clung to me to this day.
对话式结尾
Jeff came down, smiling with tears in eyes. “My father is here,” he whispered to me, “I think I’m going home.” 对话式结尾
回忆式结尾
Looking back on it now, I am grateful that the kindness of the Chicago neighbourhood has stuck in my heart and made me what I am today. 回忆+影响
后续发展式结尾
For a long time that followed, with the help of the new bicycle I delivered more newspapers and helped my family pull through the difficult time with the money I earned. It was the kindness and generosity of the people in my neighbourhood that encouraged and helped the nine-year-old me and has made me what I am today, a man who is tough and full of love. 后续发展+升华
Many years has passed, but with my father’s mantra sticking in my mind, I am always willing to reach out to anyone in need, firmly believing what goes around does come around. 后续发展+原文中道理
照应开头式结尾
森林迷路
开头
As the golden sun was sailing higher and higher in the east, casting its
warm glow over the town, Emily, a keen photographer, started a solo journey to the famed Old Pine Scenic Area, well known for its centuries- old pine forests and winding paths. She anticipated a day filled with peaceful beauty and the opportunity to touch nature in its purest form.
结尾
As the sun dipped below the horizon, casting long shadows across the ancient pines, Emily emerged from the forest, her heart full of a quiet gratitude. The vibrant greens and earthy browns, the whispering pines, the breathtaking beauty of Old Pine，and the unexpected kindness of a stranger—these were the treasures she carried with her, far more precious than any single photograph.
偶遇蟋蟀
开头
I still remember what I felt on a bright Saturday morning in late September, at a five-kilometer race in Clarkston, Georgia.
结尾
On that bright Saturday morning, my son missed a prize. But we obtained something far more important: the precious encounter and connection with Little Friend, a treasure far exceeding any trophy.
无声的花开
开头
One of the most difficult realities about the teaching profession is that we seldom know if we have made a difference. When I become discouraged about my job, my students or myself, I often think back to one particular day of my teaching career.
结尾
The memory of that particular day remains vivid even now, serving as a powerful reminder of the profound impact a teacher can have and a source of strength I constantly dram upon whenever doubt threatens to shadow me.
二 周练 无声的花开
主题：教育的潜移默化的作用，师生之情
心理描写：惊讶，感动，对教育的思考
场景描写：学生送花
伏笔
One of the most difficult realities about the teaching profession is that we seldom know if we have made a difference. When I become discouraged about my job, my students or myself, I often think back to one particular day of my teaching career. 要解决的问题：作者对教育效果怀疑；情节发展的暗示：那天发生的事情一直鼓励着我；可采用首尾呼应式开头
Deep down, though, I was more bothered by leaving than I admitted. 我恋恋不舍
I doubted they would remember much about me after a few more years of their academic careers and busy lives. 我担心学生会忘记我（和我的教导）
Just about this time I was on hall duty outside my classroom, and I noticed the crowds thinning out and classroom doors shutting. I looked in my room to find only two students in attendance. When I commented that it was awfully strange that their classmates were so late, they agreed and then quickly asked to get a drink outside. The hallway was awfully quiet. I walked down the hall several times to see if anyone was coming. 学生反常行为：教室空荡荡，在给老师准备惊喜
Suddenly, I heard footsteps coming down the hall. I was annoyed that after such a great year with these kids, I would-on their last day with me--have to give them a lecture about responsibility. 作者的误解（呼应开头对教育效果的不确定）
Paragraph 1: I sighed and then observed them coming peacefully towards me with something in their hands. 送花场景描写，作者的担心已得到解决
范文：To my surprise, they were holding a bouquet of roses and each student a card in hand. Their faces were a mix of nervousness and excitement as they approached me." We wanted to give you something before you leave," one of them said, their voice trembling slightly. As they handed me the flowers and the cards, I could see that they had put a lot of thought into it. The roses were a vibrant red, symbolizing the passion I had instilled in them for literature.On the cards were their photos and some of my catchphrases, a testament to the impact our conversations had made.
下水：A few steps closer, I saw one of them holding a bouquet of roses and each of them a card in their hands, their face a mixture of shyness and affection. A girl went up and presented me with a bouquet of roses. “We really appreciated having you this year. Thank you for everything," she said quietly with a slight blush. Then, each of them, in turn, pressed a card into my hand, their fingers lingering for a moment on mine before they embraced me, their hugs warm and genuine. The weight of their affection, the unspoken gratitude in their eyes, was more profound than any words could express. Then they disappeared into the classroom.
Paragraph 2: I stood alone outside my classroom with the roses, thinking about their touching words on the cards. 由具体到抽象，从表面到深入，对教育的思考 借助于长句（）
范文：The sincerity in their eyes and the heartfelt messages caused a tightness in my throat. It was a moment of profound realization that, despite my doubts, I had indeed made a difference in their lives. The students had not only learned the curriculum but had also formed a bond with me that would extend beyond the classroom. While the teaching profession might be filled with uncertainties, this unexpected act of appreciation was a reminder that the seeds of knowledge and inspiration can take root and flourish, even if their growth is not always immediately visible.
下水1：The initial annoyance, that dull ache of incoming departure and the uncertainty of my impact began to fade away slowly. It was replaced by the unexpected warmth of their affection. The red roses, against the pale walls of the hallway, seemed to mirror the transformation. Their simple act of kindness, the sincerity in their eyes, the heartfelt messages on their cards—these were not mere gestures; they were the gentle reassurance that my efforts had not been in vain. The seeds of knowledge and inspiration, I realized, had indeed taken root.
下水2：With the roses in my hand and the cards in my pocket, my mind replayed their words, their hugs and the sincerity in their eyes. Each detail, each gesture, represented a depth of meaning that surpassed the simple act of gift-giving. It wasn't just about the roses or the cards; it was about the connection, the unspoken understanding, the shared journey we had experienced together. A wave of emotion washed over me—gratitude, yes, but also a profound sense of connection and a quiet joy. A slow smile spread across my face. The uncertainties of the profession, the doubts that had threatened to overwhelm me, gave way to a quiet sense of fulfillment. The seeds of knowledge and inspiration had indeed taken root and blossomed in ways I hadn't anticipated.
描写roses:
The roses, vibrant and full of life, represented more than just a beautiful gesture; they symbolized the blossoming of the seeds of knowledge and inspiration I had sown. Their red colour mirrored the passion I held for literature and the joy I found in sharing it with my students. Each petal spoke of the individual growth and development I had witnessed in my students. They were a testament to the power of human connection and the profound impact a teacher can have on a young mind.
三 培优6跟踪训练 审题 + 扩句 讲评
审题
Passage 11 乐观艺术课
主题：乐观的人生态度
She picked up the painting, not realizing she had paints颜料 on her fingers.
Question 1：What happened later The paints on her fingers left marks on the painting.
Question 2：Hazel’ s response Hazel declared it to be the third bad thing.
Question 3: Fein’s response Fein added strokes to the marks so that flowers appeared.
The last sentence of paragraph 1: Everyone, including Emma, was delighted to
witness the change.
"Want to add one on the painting " Fein asked Hazel.
Question4: Did Hazel accept the invitation What did she paint Yes. She changed several marks into butterflies / a rainbow.
Question5: What happened later The rain stopped. The kids thought highly of the transformation.
A proper ending: 升华？/ describe the scene./ 问题解决
扩句训练：
Passage9 森林迷路
主题：人在面对困难时的冷静坚韧，陌生人的帮助，人与自然和谐相处
情感描写：沮丧，感激，对自然之美的欣赏
场景描写：迷路时的森林，走出迷宫时的森林
需要解决的问题：迷路后走出森林，寻找松树之王
Emily remembered reading about the importance of staying calm when lost.
Question 1：What did she do to stay calm She took a deep breath. / She sat down to think about her situation.
She took a deep breath and tried to clear her mind. Her heart still raced, but she forced herself to focus on the task at hand.
Taking a slow, deep breath, she consciously slowed her racing pulse, feeling the cool air fill her lungs. The panic fluttering in her chest began to ease, replaced by a steadier rhythm.
Question 2：What did she do next She tried several other ways in her attempt to find her way out of the forest but in vain. / She just stayed there trying to think of a way out.展现（具体做了什么，心理情感等）
She recalled that she should try to find a landmark that could help her position herself. She chose a tree with a distinctive shape to use it as a reference. Carefully, she backtracked again, keeping the tree in sight this time, and started to look for any signs of the path she had taken. The thick underbrush, however, seemed determined to erase all traces of her passage. "It doesn't matter," she whispered. She held her breath, trying to make out, from the rustling leaves and chirping birds, the sound of the running water of a stream or anything helpful. Just then, she heard faint crunching of leaves .
She found a relatively clear spot and decided to wait, hoping that a ranger who takes care of forest or another hiker might pass by. To keep calm, she resumed taking photos, capturing the stunning beauty of the fog- wrapped forest, each shot an obvious contrast to the morning's. About an hour later, she heard the sound of footsteps crunching on dry leaves.
Question 3：What happened next A local man appeared. 展现（描写the man, Emily听到的， 看到的，感受）
A wave of relief washed over her as an elderly man emerged from the mist,his face wearing a kind smile beneath a wide- brimmed hat.
The last sentence of paragraph 1: The man asked her if she needed any help / The man guessed she must be there for the oldest pine.
A local man approached without haste, his voice calm and reassuring. "You seem to be having some difficulty," he observed, his eyes resting on her camera.
"You must be here for the oldest pine."
Nodding eagerly, Emily explained her situation to the local man.
Question4: The old man’s response He introduced himself and offered to lead her back to the beaten track.
The man, who introduced himself as a ranger. With a comforting assurance,he offered to lead her to the ancient pine she had sought and then to the main trail.She thanked the old man sincerely.
Question5: Did she see the eldest pine tree Yes, with the local man leading the way.
In fact, the oldest pine was only ten minutes’ walk. Its vast trunk and overgrown branches were a breathtaking sight, majestic and enduring. Emily captured the tree in her lens, a permanent reminder of her adventure and unexpected generosity she had encounteredin the heart of the wilderness.
A proper ending: The local man led her out of the forest. Her feelings / Describe the
scene.
Guided by the kind local man, Emily walked from the forest's shadowy depths intoa world bathed in the golden light of setting sun with the path ahead dancing with light and shadow, a perfect scene for a perfect picture!
Under the guidance of the local man, Emily emerged from the forest not only with a remarkable story to tell but also with a deeper understanding of the forest, a lesson far more valuable than any photograph could ever capture.
Passage10
主题：人与自然和谐相处（爱护动物）；珍惜生活中的美好时刻
需要解决的问题：越野赛中保证蟋蟀安全；蟋蟀回归自然
场景描写：男孩照顾蟋蟀，越野赛，蟋蟀回归自然
Little Friend was riding proudly on one finger of my son’s right hand. It was like a very small captain on a very big ship, as calm as could be. My predictions had been wrong. My son hadn’t run fast. He blamed a cold he was getting over. However, I knew the real reason. While he was running, his arms would swing, and Little Friend would be bounced and eventually fall to the ground, which would certainly put its life in danger. So my son had to slow down his running speed to protect it. But I didn’t question him too much about it. I think there’s more than one way to win a race.
Smiling, we walked back to the car with Little Friend. My son carefully found some bushes in the parking lot which seemed like a good place for him to drop off Little Friend.He seemed lost and unwilling to give up on Little Friend. But he knew their brief and intense friendship had to run its course. “Be free,” my son said, and gently pushed Little Friend. It took some more pushes, and Little Friend finally sprang from his finger and jumped downward, its bright green body integrated with the dark green bushes.The small creature went out of sight and sought its freedom.
升华式结尾：Sometimes life offers unexpected treasures—fragile, fleeting moments of connection that unexpectedly attach themselves to our hands. There is no need to rush ahead. Treat it gently. Enjoy each moment. Hold on while we can, before they take flight on their own journey.
Describe the cricket:
Its tiny legs gripped tightly, adjusting its position with each footfall, while my son maintained a slightly slower but steady pace.
The scene of a little boy running cautiously with a tiny cricket perching/ sitting on his finger painted a picture of a shared journey.
Before launching itself into the bushes, Little Friend paused for a second, as if to
show its thanks for my son.
Landing on a leaf, Little Friend let out a single, clear chirp—a tiny farewell—before
disappearing into the dense green of the bushes.
四 培优6跟踪训练扩句优化
续写扩句建议：
情节设计力求合理（符合常理，符合上文）
要着力提升句子的流畅（借助长句）；
心理和场景描写要自然，与上下文浑然一体（ 把心理情感或场景写成伴随或原因状语也是不错的处理方式）；
有效积累（理解句式的具体运用场景、练后重写）和反复打磨句子用词是提升续写水平的必然之路。
After that, we tried our best to find a safe enough position so that we managed to could help it return to its home. Seeing its departure and bathed in the sunshine, we all burst out content smiles and would never forget this experience.
注意：burst out doing, burst into sth. Seeing与bathed并列，逻辑混乱
优化1：Afterwards, we managed to locate a safe place as its new home and set it free. Witnessing its departure under the warm embrace of the sunshine, we couldn't help but break into content smiles. What a unique and unforgettable encounter!
Taking a deep breath, Emily chose a rock to sit clown to keep calm. After that, she tried her best to remember recall what the roads were like and gathered her courage to take a try, trying to find a way out.
优化2：Taking a deep breath to calm herself down, Emily searched the trees for familiar landmarks. However, the dense trees completely blocked her view. Then she closed her eyes and listened intently for the distant sounds of a road or anyone passing by.
Along the rocky way there lived a number of old pine trees and Emily made a decision to share her aim with him . To her surprise, the man said the eldest pine tree was ahead, and soon they saw it. After enjoying appreciating the oldest pine tree, they soon got out of the forest. A wave of happiness swept over her as she saw the track again.
注意：情节设计——在遇到老人时，Emily应该向老人说明自己迷路的原因，拍照，寻找松树之王。
优化3：In fact, the eldest pine was only ten minutes’ walk. Its vast trunk and overgrown
Branches were a breathtaking sight, majestic and enduring. Emily captured the tree in her
lens, a permanent reminder of her adventure and unexpected generosity she had encountered in the heart of the wilderness. Under the guidance of the local man, Emily emerged from the forest not only with a remarkable story to tell but also with a deeper understanding of the forest, a lesson far more valuable than any photograph could ever capture.
Walking on the rocky road, my son focused on his new friend. However, I understood that it couldn't accompany us forever. So I had to told him that he must free Little Friend off. Hearing such crucial cruel fact, my son showed an unwilling heart 写具体表现to separate with his new friend. However, after a while, my son accepted my advice and freed it unwillingly. Seeing my son's right decision, I really took pride in him who finally grew up.
注意：此时我们已经走到了停车场，要具体描述让蟋蟀回归自然的场景，从我的视角写儿子的心情。
优化可参考学案相应部分。
When Emily was about to give up，delicate sound rose from the trees behind Emily and became closer and closer and tugged at her heart strings. A man, dressed as if he was the native, appeared.
注意：句型 be about to do / on the point of doing--- when ; dressed as if ——dressed like ;
优化5：Emily was about to give up when she heard faint sounds of leaves crunching. Holding her breath, she listened intently as the sound grew clearer. Then, she saw a man appear in the distance.
Curiosity beat Emily and drove her to break the silence. "May I see the eldest pine tree " The man turned his head with a watery smile and walked towards another way. After a while, they stood in front of the pine tree, astonishment choked Emily's
句子修正：Curiosity overcame Emily, forcing her to break the silence. "May I see the eldest pine tree " she inquired. The man turned his head with a smile and led her down a different path. After a while, they arrived in front of the pine tree, leaving Emily astonished.
注意：情节设置不太合理（有点悬疑的意味），应该写乐于助人的当地人，善于沟通的Emily。
The local man led her out of the forest, a sense of gratitude flooded over Emily. Thanks to the kind man, Emily got rid of danger as well as achieving her aim.
注意：句子不够流畅；表达有些笼统
句子修正：The local man guided Emily out of the forest, filling her with a sense of gratitude. Thanks to his kindness, Emily not only escaped danger but also achieved her goal.
He was so familiar with the forest that it just took us a few minutes to get out. But during the way, I recognised a giant pine and stayed to appreciate it. The man introduced to me that it was the eldest pine tree here. Escaping from the frightening forest, I felt like I was relive. Sun rose from the east and cast its light on me. How excellent an experience I had!
优化可借鉴学案中句子：Guided by the kind local man, Emily walked from the forest's
shadowy depths into a world bathed in the golden light of setting sun with the path ahead dancing with light and shadow, a perfect scene for a perfect picture!