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山西省太原市2024-2025学年高三上学期期末学业诊断英语试卷
(满分25分)47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Summer vacation starting, Steve and I planned to play baseball every day, aiming to join the freshman team. “If you make it into the team, I’ll buy you a new baseball glove as a present.” My mom’s promise echoed in my mind as I excitedly waited for Steve, staring at my worn-out glove.
But today I had to clean Mrs. Thompson’s garage first. She was weakened by old age, so my mom always volunteered me to help her. Mom wouldn’t let me accept any money, thinking she didn’t have much, and literally, I never minded — after all, Mrs. Thompson had knitted me five sweaters and always made me cakes. Most importantly, it was the right thing to do.
Steve came rushing out of his house, and I explained the situation. As expected, he immediately said, “Alright, I’ll help.”We instantly got to work. The garage was a mess of boxes, but we gathered all our energy and soon brought the cleanup to an end. When arranging the last box, however, I nudged the shelf accidentally. Before I could react, a vase fell and crashed to the ground, broken into pieces.
I froze, my heart pounding. The vase was beautiful with delicate designs, which must have cost a fortune. Glancing at the open garage door, I suggested, “Maybe I can just sweep this up. Mrs. Thompson won’t even notice.” I responded fast and piled the pieces into the trash bin. But Steve’s expression darkened. “That’s not how it works. You should tell her what happened.”
I tried to justify myself, telling all the chores I’d done for Mrs. Thompson without pay. I even argued that it wasn’t my responsibility to pay for something I didn’t destroy on purpose. However, Steve wasn’t buying it, his voice firm. “You’re better than that. Be responsible.”
We stood there in silence, the weight of the moment hanging between us. Just then, Mrs. Thompson walked in, giving us a scare. She smiled warmly, unaware of the whole thing. “Boys, I baked a chocolate cake. Now come in for a piece. I really appreciate all your help.”
注意：
续写词数应为150个左右;
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake.
Paragraph 2:Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up.
山西省太原市2024-2025学年高三上学期期末学业诊断英语试卷
(满分25分)47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Summer vacation starting(独立主格), Steve and I planned to play baseball every day, aiming to join the freshman team(现在分词做伴随动作). “If you make it into the team, I’ll buy you a new baseball glove as a present.” My mom’s promise echoed in my mind as I excitedly waited for Steve(状从), staring at my worn-out glove(现在分词做伴随动作).
But today I had to clean Mrs. Thompson’s garage first. She was weakened by old age, so my mom always volunteered me to help her. Mom wouldn’t let me accept any money, thinking(现在分词做伴随动作) she didn’t have much(宾从), and literally, I never minded — after all, Mrs. Thompson had knitted me five sweaters and always made me cakes. Most importantly, it was the right thing to do.
Steve came rushing out of his house(现在分词做伴随动作), and I explained the situation. As expected(状从压缩), he immediately said, “Alright, I’ll help.”We instantly got to work. The garage was a mess of boxes, but we gathered all our energy and soon brought the cleanup to an end. When arranging the last box(状从压缩), however, I nudged the shelf accidentally. Before I could react(状从), a vase fell and crashed to the ground(环境描写), broken into pieces(过去分词做后置定语).
I froze, my heart pounding(独立主格描写心情). The vase was beautiful with delicate designs, which must have cost a fortune(定从). Glancing at the open garage door(现在分词做伴随动作), I suggested, “Maybe I can just sweep this up. Mrs. Thompson won’t even notice.” I responded fast and piled the pieces into the trash bin. But Steve’s expression darkened(情绪描写). “That’s not how it works(宾从). You should tell her what happened(宾从).”
I tried to justify myself, telling all the chores(现在分词做伴随动作) I’d done for Mrs. Thompson without pay(定从). I even argued that it wasn’t my responsibility to pay for something(宾从) I didn’t destroy on purpose(定从). However, Steve wasn’t buying it, his voice firm(独立主格). “You’re better than that. Be responsible.”
We stood there in silence(介短做状语 状态秒细微), the weight of the moment hanging between us(独立主格 非常好的状态描写). Just then, Mrs. Thompson walked in, giving us a scare(现在分词做伴随动作). She smiled warmly, unaware of the whole thing.(adj短语做不用涂) “Boys, I baked a chocolate cake. Now come in for a piece(祈使句). I really appreciate all your help.”
注意：
续写词数应为150个左右;
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake.
Paragraph 2:Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up.
1. 续写分类与思路分析
分析角度 内容 承接原文的事项 续写注意事项
续写类型 成长类（成长、责任与道德选择） 原文讲述主人公在帮助邻居时犯错并面临道德选择 续写应体现主人公的心理变化和成长
构思思路 体现主人公的内心挣扎、朋友的影响、最终做出正确选择的成长过程 强调人物情感和价值观的塑造 避免生硬转折，确保情节流畅自然
布局框架 1. 犹豫与压力 → 2. 朋友的鼓励 → 3. 选择面对 → 4. 诚实带来的结果 过渡句需自然衔接，铺垫情绪冲突 关键点应与原文衔接，如“责任”“诚实”主题
实施方法 采用心理描写、动作描写、对话推动情节发展 结合环境描写增强氛围 避免过度描述，保持篇幅适中
续写承接 1. 突出主人公的挣扎：想隐瞒但内心不安 2. 朋友的劝说推动选择 3. 勇敢承认错误 4. 友善的结果（如老人宽容） 衔接原文的人物性格，如Steve坚持原则 细腻刻画心理活动，让角色更生动
续写设计 结局可设置为：1. 诚实获得认可 2. 友谊升华 3. 主人公成长 重点突出人物成长 语境自然衔接，符合高考评分标准
2. 故事山模式分析
续写故事山模式分析表
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 斯蒂夫是个诚实正直的朋友，主角则面临道德抉择 "Steve的表情变暗。“You’re better than that. Be responsible.”"
情感层次 从侥幸心理→内疚和挣扎→坦白后的释然 "I froze, my heart pounding." "Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up."
关键情节点 1. 主角不小心打碎花瓶 2. 斯蒂夫坚持诚实 3. 主角最终决定承认错误 "Before I could react, a vase fell and crashed to the ground, broken into pieces." "Steve’s expression darkened." "Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up."
语言特色 通过短句、对话增强紧张感，心理描写细腻 "I froze, my heart pounding." "Glancing at the open garage door, I suggested, 'Maybe I can just sweep this up.'"
关键词分析 hesitation (犹豫), guilt (愧疚), honesty (诚实), friendship (友谊) "I tried to justify myself..." "You should tell her what happened."
心理描写 1. 犹豫是否坦白 2. 害怕被责备 3. 内心的道德挣扎 "I tried to justify myself, telling all the chores I’d done..." "Having said that, I waited nervously..."
动作描写 1. 手足无措 2. 偷瞄大门 3. 胸口狂跳 "I froze, my heart pounding." "Glancing at the open garage door..." "We stood there in silence, the weight of the moment hanging between us."
环境描写 车库内的杂乱与压抑映衬主角的内心矛盾 "The garage was a mess of boxes..." "I nudged the shelf accidentally."
隐含主题 诚实与责任，面对错误的重要性 "That’s not how it works. You should tell her what happened."
情感转折 1. 轻松期待→ 2. 内疚挣扎→ 3. 释然与成长 "Maybe I can just sweep this up." "I tried to justify myself..." "Having said that, I waited nervously..."
空间转换 车库→屋内（暗示心理变化） "Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake."
时间过渡 通过事件顺序自然推进情节 "Just then, Mrs. Thompson walked in, giving us a scare."
伏笔 斯蒂夫的态度预示结局，车库的杂乱象征心理冲突 "Steve's expression darkened." "The garage was a mess of boxes..."
冲突点 是否坦白错误 "Maybe I can just sweep this up. Mrs. Thompson won’t even notice."
隐含线索 Mrs. Thompson的善良为主角坦白创造条件 "Boys, I baked a chocolate cake. Now come in for a piece. I really appreciate all your help."
解决方案 主角最终选择诚实，并得到宽恕 "Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up."
本篇续写的故事山模式是典型的道德成长类，核心冲突围绕主角是否诚实展开。通过心理描写、动作描写和对话，展现了内心挣扎和最终成长。整体上，文章鼓励诚实与责任感，并通过Mrs. Thompson的宽容赋予结局温暖的色彩。
3. 续写所需的情境描写语料
（1）动作描写推荐句（8个）
句子 适用场景
He clenched his fists, trying to suppress his anxiety. 表现紧张或挣扎
His hands trembled as he reached for the broom. 表现害怕或内疚
He stole a glance at Steve, hoping for reassurance. 表现内心不安
His legs felt heavy as he walked toward Mrs. Thompson. 表现压力和犹豫
He took a deep breath and squared his shoulders. 表现下定决心
His fingers fidgeted with the hem of his shirt. 表现焦虑不安
He gulped and forced himself to speak. 表现紧张地开口
A wave of relief washed over him when she smiled. 表现解脱和宽慰
（2）心理描写推荐句（8个）
句子 适用场景
A battle raged in his mind between honesty and fear. 纠结是否说实话
His heart pounded against his chest like a drum. 表现极度紧张
Guilt gnawed at him, refusing to let go. 表现内疚
His conscience screamed at him to do the right thing. 表现道德挣扎
A lump formed in his throat as he hesitated. 表现紧张或害怕
His stomach twisted into a tight knot. 表现焦虑或压力
A sense of dread settled over him like a heavy blanket. 表现担忧或害怕
He felt as if the air had been sucked out of his lungs. 表现震惊或害怕
（3）环境描写推荐句（8个）
句子 适用场景
The garage smelled of dust and old wood. 形容环境氛围
Sunlight streamed through the half-opened door, casting long shadows. 形容光影效果
A faint scent of freshly baked chocolate cake drifted through the air. 形容温暖氛围
The silence in the room was almost deafening. 形容尴尬气氛
The summer heat pressed down like an invisible weight. 形容闷热环境
A gentle breeze rustled the leaves outside. 形容平静的环境
The wooden floor creaked under his hesitant steps. 形容紧张氛围
The broken vase lay in sharp fragments, a silent reminder of his mistake. 形容破碎场景
（4）常见单词的高级替换（5组）
基础词汇 高级替换词 适用情境
Nervous Anxious, uneasy, jittery 表现紧张
Scared Terrified, shaken, horrified 表现恐惧
Sad Heartbroken, dejected, downcast 表现伤心
Happy Overjoyed, delighted, elated 表现开心
Think Ponder, contemplate, reflect 表现思考
4. 高中语法分析与可积累语料
（1）文章涉及的高中语法现象
语法点 示例句 解析
虚拟语气 If you make it into the team, I’ll buy you a new baseball glove. 条件句，表示将来可能发生的情况（If + 一般现在时, 主句 will + 动词原形）。
过去进行时 We were cleaning the garage when the vase fell. 过去进行时（was/were + v-ing）表示过去某一时刻正在发生的动作。
非谓语动词（现在分词） Smiling warmly, Mrs. Thompson invited us in. 现在分词作状语，表示伴随动作。
强调句型 It was Steve who insisted on telling the truth. 强调句型（It is/was + 被强调部分 + that/who）。
独立主格结构 The garage cleaned, we finally relaxed. 独立主格（名词/代词 + 分词），表示伴随情况。
倒装句 Not only did Steve help, but he also encouraged me. “Not only... but also” 倒装句，助动词提前。
（2）可积累的语料
词汇/短语 词性 词义 近义词 反义词 例句
hesitantly adv. 犹豫地 reluctantly, cautiously confidently He hesitantly stepped forward to confess his mistake.
clench v. 紧握，咬紧 grip, grasp release, loosen He clenched his fists in frustration.
gnaw at phr. 折磨，使苦恼 bother, haunt reassure Guilt gnawed at him, making it hard to breathe.
pile up phr. 堆积 accumulate, stack scatter He quickly piled up the broken pieces in the trash bin.
brace oneself for phr. 为…做好准备 steel oneself for neglect, ignore He braced himself for Mrs. Thompson’s reaction.
5. Possible Versions
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake. My heart pounded(心理描写) as I exchanged nervous glances with Steve(状从). As much as I wanted to ignore the vase(状从), guilt gnawed at me(心理描写). With a deep breath, I approached Mrs. Thompson and stammered, "I... I accidentally broke your vase while cleaning(状从省略)." I braced myself for disappointment(心理描写), but she merely smiled. "Oh, that old thing It was already cracked," she said, chuckling(现在分词做伴随动作). A wave of relief washed over me(心理描写). She then pushed the gift box toward me. "This is for you," she said warmly. I opened it, astonished(adj做状语或主语补语)—it was a brand-new baseball glove. Tears welled in my eyes(情绪描写) as I realized the value of honesty(状从).
Paragraph 2: Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up. She gently patted my shoulder, her eyes kind(独立主格). "It’s not objects that matter, but people’s hearts(递进句式)," she said. I felt a deep sense of shame for having considered hiding the truth(心理活动描写). Steve grinned, giving me an approving nod. (现在分词做伴随动作)That moment, I understood the true meaning of integrity. We enjoyed the delicious chocolate cake, the earlier tension replaced by warmth(独立主格). As we left(状从), I squeezed my new glove, feeling its smooth leather(现在分词做伴随动作). That summer, I not only gained a glove but also a lesson(并列递进) that would last a lifetime(定从)—honesty always brings the best rewards.
Version 2
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake. My palms were sweaty, and my throat tightened (状态、心理描写，省略句)as I pondered whether to confess(宾从). Just then, Mrs. Thompson noticed my discomfort. "Is something wrong, dear " she asked. Unable to hold back(adj做主语补语或状语), I admitted, "I accidentally broke your vase.(宾从)" Her eyes widened for a moment before softening(动作心理描写). "Oh, I had forgotten all about that vase," she chuckled. "It wasn’t valuable, just an old item." I let out a sigh of relief(动作心理描写). Then, to my surprise, she handed me the gift box.Inside was a brand-new baseball glove(倒装句), exactly like the one I had dreamed of(定从). Tears blurred my vision(动作心理描写)—I had done the right thing.
Paragraph 2: Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up. She took a sip of her tea and smiled. "Honesty is more important than any object," she said. I looked at Steve, who gave me an encouraging thumbs-up(定从). I realized that my hesitation had been unnecessary(宾从)—owning up to mistakes(非谓语动词短语做主语) felt better than hiding them(感官动词主动表被动). We sat down, enjoying the cake(现在分词做伴随动作), the warmth of her words lingering in my heart.(独立主格) That day, I learned that integrity, like baseball, requires practice and courage(宾从，比喻). As I left(状从), my heart was lighter(心理描写), and my new glove felt like a well-earned prize.
Version 3
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake. Steve gave me a look that said, "Now is the time."(定从+宾从) I hesitated, but deep down, I knew he was right. (宾从) Taking a deep breath(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I stepped forward and admitted breaking the vase. Mrs. Thompson stared at me for a second before laughing gently. "That old thing I never really liked it much anyway!" My jaw dropped(动作心理描写). Before I could respond(状从), she pushed the gift box toward me. "For all your hard work," she said. I opened it with shaky hands—a brand-new baseball glove. The guilt in my chest melted into gratitude. (形象描写心理)
Paragraph 2: Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up. She merely smiled and patted my hand. "Mistakes happen, but honesty lasts forever," she said. Steve beamed at me, his pride evident(独立主格，对于次要人物的处理). I had worried for nothing—honesty had rewarded me in ways I never expected(定从). We enjoyed the chocolate cake, the earlier fear fading into laughter(独立主格). As I walked home with my new glove(状从), I felt lighter. That summer, I learned that the right choices, though difficult, always lead to unexpected rewards(宾从).
分析与总结
亮点语法分析
语法点 例句 搭配/近义表达
定语从句 "That old thing I never really liked it much anyway!" which, that, whom
状语从句 "Before I could respond, she pushed the gift box toward me." as, while, after
宾语从句 "She said that honesty is more important than any object." think that, believe that
倒装句 "I had worried for nothing—honesty had rewarded me in ways I never expected." Little did I know, Hardly had I realized
独立主格 "Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up." That being said, The situation being such
情绪描写
词汇 近义词
Hesitantly Reluctantly, Uncertainly
Nervously Anxiously, Uneasily
Grateful Thankful, Appreciative
动作描写
词汇 近义词
Stepped forward Moved forward, Advanced
Patted Tapped, Touched lightly
Beamed Smiled broadly, Grinned
高级替换词
常见词 替换词
Happy Elated, Overjoyed
Sad Downcast, Dismayed
Nervous Uneasy, Tense
续写积累语料
表述愧疚："Guilt gnawed at me." / "I felt a pang of regret."
表达如释重负："A wave of relief washed over me."
强调做正确的事："Integrity requires practice and courage."
6. 亮点词汇整理
（1）情绪描写
词汇/短语 近义词 示例
Guilt gnawed at me Guilt consumed me, I was overcome with guilt Guilt gnawed at me, making my stomach churn.
A lump formed in my throat I struggled to hold back tears A lump formed in my throat as I hesitated.
Relief flooded over me A wave of relief washed over me Relief flooded over me as she smiled.
My heart pounded like a drum My pulse raced, My heart hammered in my chest My heart pounded like a drum as I stepped forward.
（2）动作描写
词汇/短语 近义词 示例
Clench one’s fists Tighten one’s grip, Ball up one’s fists He clenched his fists in frustration.
Swallow hard Gulp, Struggle to speak I swallowed hard before speaking.
Trembling hands Shaky fingers, Quivering hands His hands trembled as he reached for the broom.
Brace oneself for Prepare for, Steel oneself for I braced myself for her reaction.
官方范文(满分25分)
Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake. “Could it be for me ” I wondered. Mrs. Thompson read my thoughts, “Your mom mentioned you’ re training for the baseball team, so I prepared this for you. Open it!(宾从)” I unwrapped the box and a brand-new baseball glove was in sight! Immense guilt grew(心理描写) when I recalled all(状从) she did for me(定从). Steve’s words also struck me, urging me to admit the mistake(现在分词做伴随动作). I said in a low voice, “Mrs. Thompson, I’m sorry for breaking your vase in the garage by accident. I should pay for it.”
Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up. However, instead of disappointment, she just laughed. “Oh, that old vase was just a cheap thing I picked up at a dollar store(定从). It is far less precious than your help and honesty. Don’t worry about it. Let’s enjoy the cake!” A bit relieved(adj做状语或主语补语), I exchanged a look with Steve, eager to break in my new glove on the field (adj做状语或主语补语)and expecting another visit to Mrs. Thompson’s house(现在分词做伴随动作). In his eyes, this time, shone a bright glimmer(倒装句) approving of my recovered sense of responsibility(现在分词做后置定语).
(满分25分)47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Summer vacation starting, Steve and I planned to play baseball every day, aiming to join the freshman team. “If you make it into the team, I’ll buy you a new baseball glove as a present.” My mom’s promise echoed in my mind as I excitedly waited for Steve, staring at my worn-out glove.
But today I had to clean Mrs. Thompson’s garage first. She was weakened by old age, so my mom always volunteered me to help her. Mom wouldn’t let me accept any money, thinking she didn’t have much, and literally, I never minded — after all, Mrs. Thompson had knitted me five sweaters and always made me cakes. Most importantly, it was the right thing to do.
Steve came rushing out of his house, and I explained the situation. As expected, he immediately said, “Alright, I’ll help.”We instantly got to work. The garage was a mess of boxes, but we gathered all our energy and soon brought the cleanup to an end. When arranging the last box, however, I nudged the shelf accidentally. Before I could react, a vase fell and crashed to the ground, broken into pieces.
I froze, my heart pounding. The vase was beautiful with delicate designs, which must have cost a fortune. Glancing at the open garage door, I suggested, “Maybe I can just sweep this up. Mrs. Thompson won’t even notice.” I responded fast and piled the pieces into the trash bin. But Steve’s expression darkened. “That’s not how it works. You should tell her what happened.”
I tried to justify myself, telling all the chores I’d done for Mrs. Thompson without pay. I even argued that it wasn’t my responsibility to pay for something I didn’t destroy on purpose. However, Steve wasn’t buying it, his voice firm. “You’re better than that. Be responsible.”
We stood there in silence, the weight of the moment hanging between us. Just then, Mrs. Thompson walked in, giving us a scare. She smiled warmly, unaware of the whole thing. “Boys, I baked a chocolate cake. Now come in for a piece. I really appreciate all your help.”
注意：
续写词数应为150个左右;
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake.
Paragraph 2:Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up.
山西省太原市2024-2025学年高三上学期期末学业诊断英语试卷
(满分25分)47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Summer vacation starting(独立主格), Steve and I planned to play baseball every day, aiming to join the freshman team(现在分词做伴随动作). “If you make it into the team, I’ll buy you a new baseball glove as a present.” My mom’s promise echoed in my mind as I excitedly waited for Steve(状从), staring at my worn-out glove(现在分词做伴随动作).
But today I had to clean Mrs. Thompson’s garage first. She was weakened by old age, so my mom always volunteered me to help her. Mom wouldn’t let me accept any money, thinking(现在分词做伴随动作) she didn’t have much(宾从), and literally, I never minded — after all, Mrs. Thompson had knitted me five sweaters and always made me cakes. Most importantly, it was the right thing to do.
Steve came rushing out of his house(现在分词做伴随动作), and I explained the situation. As expected(状从压缩), he immediately said, “Alright, I’ll help.”We instantly got to work. The garage was a mess of boxes, but we gathered all our energy and soon brought the cleanup to an end. When arranging the last box(状从压缩), however, I nudged the shelf accidentally. Before I could react(状从), a vase fell and crashed to the ground(环境描写), broken into pieces(过去分词做后置定语).
I froze, my heart pounding(独立主格描写心情). The vase was beautiful with delicate designs, which must have cost a fortune(定从). Glancing at the open garage door(现在分词做伴随动作), I suggested, “Maybe I can just sweep this up. Mrs. Thompson won’t even notice.” I responded fast and piled the pieces into the trash bin. But Steve’s expression darkened(情绪描写). “That’s not how it works(宾从). You should tell her what happened(宾从).”
I tried to justify myself, telling all the chores(现在分词做伴随动作) I’d done for Mrs. Thompson without pay(定从). I even argued that it wasn’t my responsibility to pay for something(宾从) I didn’t destroy on purpose(定从). However, Steve wasn’t buying it, his voice firm(独立主格). “You’re better than that. Be responsible.”
We stood there in silence(介短做状语 状态秒细微), the weight of the moment hanging between us(独立主格 非常好的状态描写). Just then, Mrs. Thompson walked in, giving us a scare(现在分词做伴随动作). She smiled warmly, unaware of the whole thing.(adj短语做不用涂) “Boys, I baked a chocolate cake. Now come in for a piece(祈使句). I really appreciate all your help.”
注意：
续写词数应为150个左右;
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake.
Paragraph 2:Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up.
1. 续写分类与思路分析
分析角度 内容 承接原文的事项 续写注意事项
续写类型 成长类（成长、责任与道德选择） 原文讲述主人公在帮助邻居时犯错并面临道德选择 续写应体现主人公的心理变化和成长
构思思路 体现主人公的内心挣扎、朋友的影响、最终做出正确选择的成长过程 强调人物情感和价值观的塑造 避免生硬转折，确保情节流畅自然
布局框架 1. 犹豫与压力 → 2. 朋友的鼓励 → 3. 选择面对 → 4. 诚实带来的结果 过渡句需自然衔接，铺垫情绪冲突 关键点应与原文衔接，如“责任”“诚实”主题
实施方法 采用心理描写、动作描写、对话推动情节发展 结合环境描写增强氛围 避免过度描述，保持篇幅适中
续写承接 1. 突出主人公的挣扎：想隐瞒但内心不安 2. 朋友的劝说推动选择 3. 勇敢承认错误 4. 友善的结果（如老人宽容） 衔接原文的人物性格，如Steve坚持原则 细腻刻画心理活动，让角色更生动
续写设计 结局可设置为：1. 诚实获得认可 2. 友谊升华 3. 主人公成长 重点突出人物成长 语境自然衔接，符合高考评分标准
2. 故事山模式分析
续写故事山模式分析表
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 斯蒂夫是个诚实正直的朋友，主角则面临道德抉择 "Steve的表情变暗。“You’re better than that. Be responsible.”"
情感层次 从侥幸心理→内疚和挣扎→坦白后的释然 "I froze, my heart pounding." "Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up."
关键情节点 1. 主角不小心打碎花瓶 2. 斯蒂夫坚持诚实 3. 主角最终决定承认错误 "Before I could react, a vase fell and crashed to the ground, broken into pieces." "Steve’s expression darkened." "Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up."
语言特色 通过短句、对话增强紧张感，心理描写细腻 "I froze, my heart pounding." "Glancing at the open garage door, I suggested, 'Maybe I can just sweep this up.'"
关键词分析 hesitation (犹豫), guilt (愧疚), honesty (诚实), friendship (友谊) "I tried to justify myself..." "You should tell her what happened."
心理描写 1. 犹豫是否坦白 2. 害怕被责备 3. 内心的道德挣扎 "I tried to justify myself, telling all the chores I’d done..." "Having said that, I waited nervously..."
动作描写 1. 手足无措 2. 偷瞄大门 3. 胸口狂跳 "I froze, my heart pounding." "Glancing at the open garage door..." "We stood there in silence, the weight of the moment hanging between us."
环境描写 车库内的杂乱与压抑映衬主角的内心矛盾 "The garage was a mess of boxes..." "I nudged the shelf accidentally."
隐含主题 诚实与责任，面对错误的重要性 "That’s not how it works. You should tell her what happened."
情感转折 1. 轻松期待→ 2. 内疚挣扎→ 3. 释然与成长 "Maybe I can just sweep this up." "I tried to justify myself..." "Having said that, I waited nervously..."
空间转换 车库→屋内（暗示心理变化） "Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake."
时间过渡 通过事件顺序自然推进情节 "Just then, Mrs. Thompson walked in, giving us a scare."
伏笔 斯蒂夫的态度预示结局，车库的杂乱象征心理冲突 "Steve's expression darkened." "The garage was a mess of boxes..."
冲突点 是否坦白错误 "Maybe I can just sweep this up. Mrs. Thompson won’t even notice."
隐含线索 Mrs. Thompson的善良为主角坦白创造条件 "Boys, I baked a chocolate cake. Now come in for a piece. I really appreciate all your help."
解决方案 主角最终选择诚实，并得到宽恕 "Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up."
本篇续写的故事山模式是典型的道德成长类，核心冲突围绕主角是否诚实展开。通过心理描写、动作描写和对话，展现了内心挣扎和最终成长。整体上，文章鼓励诚实与责任感，并通过Mrs. Thompson的宽容赋予结局温暖的色彩。
3. 续写所需的情境描写语料
（1）动作描写推荐句（8个）
句子 适用场景
He clenched his fists, trying to suppress his anxiety. 表现紧张或挣扎
His hands trembled as he reached for the broom. 表现害怕或内疚
He stole a glance at Steve, hoping for reassurance. 表现内心不安
His legs felt heavy as he walked toward Mrs. Thompson. 表现压力和犹豫
He took a deep breath and squared his shoulders. 表现下定决心
His fingers fidgeted with the hem of his shirt. 表现焦虑不安
He gulped and forced himself to speak. 表现紧张地开口
A wave of relief washed over him when she smiled. 表现解脱和宽慰
（2）心理描写推荐句（8个）
句子 适用场景
A battle raged in his mind between honesty and fear. 纠结是否说实话
His heart pounded against his chest like a drum. 表现极度紧张
Guilt gnawed at him, refusing to let go. 表现内疚
His conscience screamed at him to do the right thing. 表现道德挣扎
A lump formed in his throat as he hesitated. 表现紧张或害怕
His stomach twisted into a tight knot. 表现焦虑或压力
A sense of dread settled over him like a heavy blanket. 表现担忧或害怕
He felt as if the air had been sucked out of his lungs. 表现震惊或害怕
（3）环境描写推荐句（8个）
句子 适用场景
The garage smelled of dust and old wood. 形容环境氛围
Sunlight streamed through the half-opened door, casting long shadows. 形容光影效果
A faint scent of freshly baked chocolate cake drifted through the air. 形容温暖氛围
The silence in the room was almost deafening. 形容尴尬气氛
The summer heat pressed down like an invisible weight. 形容闷热环境
A gentle breeze rustled the leaves outside. 形容平静的环境
The wooden floor creaked under his hesitant steps. 形容紧张氛围
The broken vase lay in sharp fragments, a silent reminder of his mistake. 形容破碎场景
（4）常见单词的高级替换（5组）
基础词汇 高级替换词 适用情境
Nervous Anxious, uneasy, jittery 表现紧张
Scared Terrified, shaken, horrified 表现恐惧
Sad Heartbroken, dejected, downcast 表现伤心
Happy Overjoyed, delighted, elated 表现开心
Think Ponder, contemplate, reflect 表现思考
4. 高中语法分析与可积累语料
（1）文章涉及的高中语法现象
语法点 示例句 解析
虚拟语气 If you make it into the team, I’ll buy you a new baseball glove. 条件句，表示将来可能发生的情况（If + 一般现在时, 主句 will + 动词原形）。
过去进行时 We were cleaning the garage when the vase fell. 过去进行时（was/were + v-ing）表示过去某一时刻正在发生的动作。
非谓语动词（现在分词） Smiling warmly, Mrs. Thompson invited us in. 现在分词作状语，表示伴随动作。
强调句型 It was Steve who insisted on telling the truth. 强调句型（It is/was + 被强调部分 + that/who）。
独立主格结构 The garage cleaned, we finally relaxed. 独立主格（名词/代词 + 分词），表示伴随情况。
倒装句 Not only did Steve help, but he also encouraged me. “Not only... but also” 倒装句，助动词提前。
（2）可积累的语料
词汇/短语 词性 词义 近义词 反义词 例句
hesitantly adv. 犹豫地 reluctantly, cautiously confidently He hesitantly stepped forward to confess his mistake.
clench v. 紧握，咬紧 grip, grasp release, loosen He clenched his fists in frustration.
gnaw at phr. 折磨，使苦恼 bother, haunt reassure Guilt gnawed at him, making it hard to breathe.
pile up phr. 堆积 accumulate, stack scatter He quickly piled up the broken pieces in the trash bin.
brace oneself for phr. 为…做好准备 steel oneself for neglect, ignore He braced himself for Mrs. Thompson’s reaction.
5. Possible Versions
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake. My heart pounded(心理描写) as I exchanged nervous glances with Steve(状从). As much as I wanted to ignore the vase(状从), guilt gnawed at me(心理描写). With a deep breath, I approached Mrs. Thompson and stammered, "I... I accidentally broke your vase while cleaning(状从省略)." I braced myself for disappointment(心理描写), but she merely smiled. "Oh, that old thing It was already cracked," she said, chuckling(现在分词做伴随动作). A wave of relief washed over me(心理描写). She then pushed the gift box toward me. "This is for you," she said warmly. I opened it, astonished(adj做状语或主语补语)—it was a brand-new baseball glove. Tears welled in my eyes(情绪描写) as I realized the value of honesty(状从).
Paragraph 2: Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up. She gently patted my shoulder, her eyes kind(独立主格). "It’s not objects that matter, but people’s hearts(递进句式)," she said. I felt a deep sense of shame for having considered hiding the truth(心理活动描写). Steve grinned, giving me an approving nod. (现在分词做伴随动作)That moment, I understood the true meaning of integrity. We enjoyed the delicious chocolate cake, the earlier tension replaced by warmth(独立主格). As we left(状从), I squeezed my new glove, feeling its smooth leather(现在分词做伴随动作). That summer, I not only gained a glove but also a lesson(并列递进) that would last a lifetime(定从)—honesty always brings the best rewards.
Version 2
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake. My palms were sweaty, and my throat tightened (状态、心理描写，省略句)as I pondered whether to confess(宾从). Just then, Mrs. Thompson noticed my discomfort. "Is something wrong, dear " she asked. Unable to hold back(adj做主语补语或状语), I admitted, "I accidentally broke your vase.(宾从)" Her eyes widened for a moment before softening(动作心理描写). "Oh, I had forgotten all about that vase," she chuckled. "It wasn’t valuable, just an old item." I let out a sigh of relief(动作心理描写). Then, to my surprise, she handed me the gift box.Inside was a brand-new baseball glove(倒装句), exactly like the one I had dreamed of(定从). Tears blurred my vision(动作心理描写)—I had done the right thing.
Paragraph 2: Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up. She took a sip of her tea and smiled. "Honesty is more important than any object," she said. I looked at Steve, who gave me an encouraging thumbs-up(定从). I realized that my hesitation had been unnecessary(宾从)—owning up to mistakes(非谓语动词短语做主语) felt better than hiding them(感官动词主动表被动). We sat down, enjoying the cake(现在分词做伴随动作), the warmth of her words lingering in my heart.(独立主格) That day, I learned that integrity, like baseball, requires practice and courage(宾从，比喻). As I left(状从), my heart was lighter(心理描写), and my new glove felt like a well-earned prize.
Version 3
Paragraph 1: Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake. Steve gave me a look that said, "Now is the time."(定从+宾从) I hesitated, but deep down, I knew he was right. (宾从) Taking a deep breath(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I stepped forward and admitted breaking the vase. Mrs. Thompson stared at me for a second before laughing gently. "That old thing I never really liked it much anyway!" My jaw dropped(动作心理描写). Before I could respond(状从), she pushed the gift box toward me. "For all your hard work," she said. I opened it with shaky hands—a brand-new baseball glove. The guilt in my chest melted into gratitude. (形象描写心理)
Paragraph 2: Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up. She merely smiled and patted my hand. "Mistakes happen, but honesty lasts forever," she said. Steve beamed at me, his pride evident(独立主格，对于次要人物的处理). I had worried for nothing—honesty had rewarded me in ways I never expected(定从). We enjoyed the chocolate cake, the earlier fear fading into laughter(独立主格). As I walked home with my new glove(状从), I felt lighter. That summer, I learned that the right choices, though difficult, always lead to unexpected rewards(宾从).
分析与总结
亮点语法分析
语法点 例句 搭配/近义表达
定语从句 "That old thing I never really liked it much anyway!" which, that, whom
状语从句 "Before I could respond, she pushed the gift box toward me." as, while, after
宾语从句 "She said that honesty is more important than any object." think that, believe that
倒装句 "I had worried for nothing—honesty had rewarded me in ways I never expected." Little did I know, Hardly had I realized
独立主格 "Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up." That being said, The situation being such
情绪描写
词汇 近义词
Hesitantly Reluctantly, Uncertainly
Nervously Anxiously, Uneasily
Grateful Thankful, Appreciative
动作描写
词汇 近义词
Stepped forward Moved forward, Advanced
Patted Tapped, Touched lightly
Beamed Smiled broadly, Grinned
高级替换词
常见词 替换词
Happy Elated, Overjoyed
Sad Downcast, Dismayed
Nervous Uneasy, Tense
续写积累语料
表述愧疚："Guilt gnawed at me." / "I felt a pang of regret."
表达如释重负："A wave of relief washed over me."
强调做正确的事："Integrity requires practice and courage."
6. 亮点词汇整理
（1）情绪描写
词汇/短语 近义词 示例
Guilt gnawed at me Guilt consumed me, I was overcome with guilt Guilt gnawed at me, making my stomach churn.
A lump formed in my throat I struggled to hold back tears A lump formed in my throat as I hesitated.
Relief flooded over me A wave of relief washed over me Relief flooded over me as she smiled.
My heart pounded like a drum My pulse raced, My heart hammered in my chest My heart pounded like a drum as I stepped forward.
（2）动作描写
词汇/短语 近义词 示例
Clench one’s fists Tighten one’s grip, Ball up one’s fists He clenched his fists in frustration.
Swallow hard Gulp, Struggle to speak I swallowed hard before speaking.
Trembling hands Shaky fingers, Quivering hands His hands trembled as he reached for the broom.
Brace oneself for Prepare for, Steel oneself for I braced myself for her reaction.
官方范文(满分25分)
Hesitantly, we entered the room and I noticed a gift box on the table beside the cake. “Could it be for me ” I wondered. Mrs. Thompson read my thoughts, “Your mom mentioned you’ re training for the baseball team, so I prepared this for you. Open it!(宾从)” I unwrapped the box and a brand-new baseball glove was in sight! Immense guilt grew(心理描写) when I recalled all(状从) she did for me(定从). Steve’s words also struck me, urging me to admit the mistake(现在分词做伴随动作). I said in a low voice, “Mrs. Thompson, I’m sorry for breaking your vase in the garage by accident. I should pay for it.”
Having said that, I waited nervously for Mrs. Thompson to speak up. However, instead of disappointment, she just laughed. “Oh, that old vase was just a cheap thing I picked up at a dollar store(定从). It is far less precious than your help and honesty. Don’t worry about it. Let’s enjoy the cake!” A bit relieved(adj做状语或主语补语), I exchanged a look with Steve, eager to break in my new glove on the field (adj做状语或主语补语)and expecting another visit to Mrs. Thompson’s house(现在分词做伴随动作). In his eyes, this time, shone a bright glimmer(倒装句) approving of my recovered sense of responsibility(现在分词做后置定语).
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