2025届高考英语应用文写作训练1 书信类 告知+建议 讲义
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应用文书信类(告知信+建议信) 训练讲评
一 书信类应用文格式、考情
书信类应用文首段一般包括开场寒暄，身份信息，背景事件，表达目的，衔接过渡五方面内容。
基于整体逻辑，中间段多采用虚（感受，想法等）实结合的内容构建模式
尾段一般包括重申，感受，互动等内容。
应用文高考趋势
1. 注重考查创新思维、分析问题解决问题的能力；
2. 内容要求更为具体；
3. 中国故事、国际视野、环保意识、体美劳等内容贯穿其中。
写作注意事项
1. 注意收信人身份（正式与非正式，语言的得体性）；
2. 注意格式特征;
3. 审题到位，写全要点
4. 句子的流畅性（长句较多，尾重原则；避免单一句式，句句开头都不同；）
二 告知信、活动介绍
(一) 练后重写 告知信 给笔友写信，非正式
假定你是李华，为丰富同学们的课外活动，上周你校举行了爱国歌咏比赛( patriotic song singing contest)。请给你的笔友Tom写一封信，分享其中的故事。内容包括:
1．比赛经过（整体+个人）；2．你的感悟（围绕爱国、歌曲、比赛）。
注意：
1．写作词数应为80左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Dear Tom,
______________________
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
问题：比赛经过要具体；感悟要契合话题
范文
Dear Tom,
Last week, our school organized a patriotic song singing contest to enrich our extracurricular activities, and it was truly an inspiring event!
开场寒暄，身份信息，背景事件√，表达目的，衔接过渡（简单评价或总结概括）（总分总结构）
Students from different grades participated enthusiastically in it, singing patriotic songs that celebrated our country's glory and history. The atmosphere was electric as everyone sang with passion and pride. I performed a song that my grandfather used to sing, which made me feel connected to our heritage. 长句，符合尾重原则；句句开头都不同
比赛经过：参加人员，具体唱了哪首歌，+评价气氛、学生风貌，我做了什么+我的感受
I learn that expressing patriotism can take various forms, and music is one of the most beautiful ways to do so. It is a heartwarming experience that I will always treasure.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
或：
Para1:
I am writing to share with you a patriotic song singing contest held by our school last week, which is truly an inspiring event. 开场寒暄，身份信息，背景事件√，表达目的√，衔接过渡（简单评价）（总分总结构）√
你的作品1
Dear Tom,
How's everything going To enrich our after-class activities, our school held a patriotic song singing contest last week. I'd like to share some details with you.衔接过渡，好！
To begin with our headmaster left gave a lecture concerning the significance of loving country. Then, participaters participants were invited to give their performances and I engaged in it actively. In the end. I won the silver medal. 中间段要具体；因篇幅有限，校长讲话可以不写
After this contest，I was full of excitement and gratitude. Only our country blooms will we live a better life.I feel so fortunate to be born in China. Only+状语位于句首 才用倒装
I'm looking forward to your reply. 尾段有些突兀
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
帮你改进1-1（语言打磨）
Last week, our school held a patriotic song singing contest to enrich our after-school activities. I’d like to share it with you. （删掉寒暄部分，语言更流畅）
It started with a lecture from our headmaster about the importance of patriotism. Then, we all got to perform. I participated and had a great time! I even won a silver medal! 中间段内容偏少，需要进一步增加具体内容
I'm so excited and grateful. I truly believe that only with a thriving country can we have a better life. I feel incredibly lucky to be Chinese.
Looking forward to hearing from you!
帮你改进1-2（内容+语言优化）
Last week, our school held a patriotic song singing contest to enrich our after-school activities. I can’t wait to share it with you!
Many classes participated, each performing a different patriotic song. The competition was fierce! Our class sang "My Motherland," and although we didn't win, we gave it our all. Seeing everyone so enthusiastic and singing with such passion really moved me. It made me feel a strong sense of national pride and the importance of loving our country.
It is such a meaningful and unforgettable experience that I am eager for more.
尾段或：
What kind of extracurricular activities are popular at your school Looking forward to hearing from you! （合理使用Looking forward to hearing from you!）
你的作品2
Dear Tom,
I'm excited to tell you my story which happened定语从句稍显啰嗦 last week. It's about my experiences and feelings from a patriotic song singing contest. 句子.不够流畅
When hearing the news of this contest, I actively participated in it. I practiced my songs again and again and I believed I could make it. 赛前篇幅过长Then the big day finally came, despite a little sense of embarrassment, I finished my song as I expected. Finally I had won the first prize with big applause. 比赛经过要具体
From this experience, I have learnt that " There is a willing,there is success. Where there is a will, there is a way.” 感受与活动主题不契合
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
帮你改进2（内容+语言优化）
I am writing to share with you the patriotic song singing contest held in our school last week, which was really inspiring.
As arranged, each class took the stage and sang a patriotic song. Class 3 sang "Ode to the Motherland" enthusiastically and Class 5's performance of "The East is Red" was particularly moving. My class chose "My Motherland" and we even won the first prize! Singing together, feeling the power of the lyrics, I was overwhelmed with a sense of national pride.
The contest wasn't just about winning; it was about sharing our love for our country through music. It was a truly unforgettable experience.
（二）高考题训练 2024新课标卷 告知信
假定你是李华，上周五你们班在公园上了一堂美术课。请你给英国朋友Chris写一封邮件分享这次经历，内容包括：
（1）你完成的作品；（2）你的感想（围绕公园美术课）。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
Dear Chris,
I’m writing to share with you an art class I had in a park last Friday.
______________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
难点：对美术作品的具体阐述；基于公园 美术课的合理的感想
Para1：首段衔接过渡：
You cannot imagine how meaningful and interesting it was!
Its details are as follows. 代词衔接
It was an amazing experience that left a deep impression on me.
It was filled with creativity and joy.
What happened there truly broadened my horizons.
The combination of art and nature was simply perfect.
Para2: 内容构建：
你完成的作品：（美术课任务可以写但不要过多，）你的作品内容，（创作过程/灵感，效果如何）
你的感受（公园 上美术课的感受）亲近自然，艺术灵感
范文片段1：We were tasked to draw or paint something that impressed us most. Inspired by the fantastic scenery, I created a watercolor painting of the small bridge over the park’s pond, surrounded by blooming flowers. The entire experience was incredibly refreshing. Being surrounded by nature not only sparked my creativity but also offered a much-needed break from the usual hustle and bustle of school life. I felt a deep sense of peace as I painted.
任务——作品内容——感受
范文片段2：Upon arriving at the park at 8 o’clock, we began painting the landscape there. Inspired by the beauty of the park, I soon had a great idea. I painted the park scenes: the bright sun, the green grass, the children playfully chasing after one another and the people playing chess in the shade, all of which made up a peaceful and happy picture. This outdoor art class was really unforgettable. Not only did we students get some hands-on experience from the class, but we also developed our interest in both art and nature! 时间顺序
虚实结合：到达，任务，开始，我的创意+灵感来源，我的画+整体印象；感受总——分
Para3: 重申感受、期待、互动
In a word, it was not just an art class; it was a moment of connection with nature that I truly cherished.
The park art class was incredibly refreshing and inspiring. I'm eager for more.
你的作品3
Dear Chris,
I’m writing to share with you an art class I had in a park last Friday. 少衔接过渡
My work illustrates a corner of the park, in which stands a thin tree covered with thick snow. I found a red blossom on its branch. Astonished, I recorded it with my paintbrush.I was inspired by this tree and moved by its might, which told me the meaning of life and the courage when facing difficulties. It was that special art class that gave me the chance to come across such a special tree. 内容逻辑：先写灵感，再写画了什么
In my point of view, this kind of classes is essential for our keeping closed to nature and learning from nature. for us to be closer to nature and get some inspiration from it.
Do you agree with me Looking forward to your reply.
修改意见：三段式比较好
帮你改进3
I’m writing to share the experience of an art class I had in a park last Friday. It was truly unforgettable!
My work captures a slender tree, covered with a heavy coat of snow, stands upright in the cold. Against the icy white, a vibrant red flower blooms bravely on one of its branches, symbolizing life's strength in adversity. The encounter with nature was truly inspiring, providing a unique experience unattainable in the classroom.
Not only did the art class stimulate my creativity, but it also deepened my bond with the natural world. I am eager for more of such enriching experiences.
（三） 模拟题训练
假定你是李华，最近你们到一个外国游客较多的旅游景点上了一堂口语实践课。请你用英文给澳大利亚朋友Luke写一封邮件分享这次经历，内容包括：
上课的过程；2．你的感想。
注意：1．写作词数应为80个左右：2．请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
Dear Luke,
I’m writing to share with you a special spoken English class I had the other day.
__________________
Yours,
Li Hua
范文
I’m writing to share with you a special spoken English class I had the other day. It was an amazing experience that left a deep impression on me. / It was held at a popular tourist spot frequented by many foreign visitors.
Our teacher organized interactive activities where we had to communicate with tourists in English to practice our speaking skills. We were divided into small groups and tasked with introducing local attractions to the tourists. 上课过程：任务——时间顺序
The class was both challenging and exciting. I felt a bit nervous at first, but as I started interacting with the tourists, my confidence grew. It was fascinating to see how people from different cultures responded to our presentations. I learned a lot about effective communication and the importance of being adaptable in language use. 感想：评价，感受，收获
Overall, the experience was incredibly enriching. It not only improved my English but also broadened my perspective on cultural exchange. 重申感受、期待、互动
范文2
Dear Luke,
I’m writing to share an extraordinary spoken English class we had recently.
Our teacher led the entire class to a famous tourist attraction frequented by visitors from Western countries. We had the unique opportunity to engage in conversations with native speakers. All of us were activated by the authentic environment, eager to talk to the foreigners. Even the most timid boy managed to have a happy conversation with a tourist from Wellington.
This immersive experience was incredibly beneficial, as it significantly boosted my confidence and sharpened my language skills. I believe this experience will have a lasting positive impact on my English proficiency.
或：
Interacting with them in a real-world setting was exciting and profoundly enriching. I am eager for more of such activities.
Yours,
Li Hua
总结
首段开门见山：活动内容、目的、时间、地点、主办方等+衔接句(简单评价,或总结概括)；
中间段内容要具体：谁参加，唱了什么歌曲/ 具体画了什么/ 具体做了什么；
中间段要虚实结合：现场氛围、我的感受/ 对画作意境的阐述等 ；
感受可放在中间段最后，也可放在尾段；感受要与活动契合（爱国、唱歌与爱国、难忘的经历、希望有更多类似活动）；
首尾段不要过长。
三 建议 推荐
示范
Suggestion Letter to a Superior 正式
Dear Sir,
After spending a considerable amount of time with my team, I feel that there are a lot of areas where we can improve. I am writing this letter to you to give my honest opinion on the working of the team so far.
I feel the team is moving towards a positive direction and a few improvements will help us in achieving more. The first one is that we need to improve upon the communications within the team. All delays and lags we are facing are somewhat associated with a lack of communication. 建议的理由The second one is that we need to organise some team-building activities to help us work together as one unit.
I feel if these pointers are worked upon, we will witness growth in each individual and the group as well.
Yours sincerely,
Pablo Ortega
或：
I am writing this letter to you regarding---
I hope you will accept these suggestions and take the necessary actions.
（四） 练后重写
假定你是李华，你校外教Chris想学习中国的水墨画，希望你能给他推荐一位老师。请你给他写一封电子邮件，内容包括：
1. 介绍老师的情况；2. 授课时间和地点。
注意：1 词数80词左右；2. 开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。
Dear Chris,
I'm writing to recommend a Chinese ink painting teacher to you as you expressed your interest in learning this art form. I wholeheartedly suggest Mr Li, an accomplished and seasoned professional in Chinese ink painting.
With over two decades of experience in teaching, Mr. Li is widely recognized for his engaging and practical teaching style, which has earned him a considerable following. His classes are both informative and entertaining. The classes are held on Saturdays from 10 am to 12 pm at the Chinese Cultural Center, situated at No. 6 Kangning Road.
I hope this recommendation is helpful to you. Please let me know if you have any questions, as I would be happy to assist you further.
（五） 高考题训练 2023新课标卷 建议信 （分析问题+建议）
假定你是李华，外教Ryan准备将学生随机分为两人一组，让大家课后练习口语，你认为这样分组存在问题。请你给外教写一封邮件，内容包括：
1. 说明问题；2. 提出建议。
注意：1. 写作词数应为80个左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Dear Ryan,
I’m Li Hua from Class 3.
_______________________________________________________________________
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
难点：恰当地指出问题，具体合理的建议; 得体的语言。
范文1
I’m Li Hua from Class 3. Knowing you are going to randomly divide two students into a group to practice the speaking after class, I am writing to state my opinion on the grouping way.
This grouping method has some drawbacks. One of the disadvantages to random pairs is that some students, especially the ones unfamiliar with each other, have to deal with embarrassments. What's more, large level gap can bring about difficulties in communication within the groups. It would be ideal if you can arrange the group according to our levels and objectives so that we can strengthen interactive learning.
I am looking forward to your reply. / Hoping you can take my advice into careful consideration and looking forward to your reply.
范文2
Dear Ryan,
I hope this email finds you well正式信件打招呼. I have some concerns regarding the random grouping of students in pairs for post-class speaking practice.
Random pairings may not always be effective as students may feel uncomfortable or less motivated with someone they are not familiar with. I suggest considering grouping based on students' proficiency levels or interests. This can enhance engagement and encourage better communication. It could also foster a supportive environment for language practice.
Thank you for considering my suggestions.
Best regards,
Li Hua
你的作品4
Dear Kyan,
I'm Li Hua from Class 3. I’m writing to you about the groups of practicing language. You have declared that two students should be divided into one group. I think it is improper. Because there always one listener, he or she couldn't check out your人称错 problems. It's bad for your future development. In my opinion, I think重复 the group should include 4 students in which the most of mistakes can be figured out and they can develop better.
Above are my views about the division不是建议信尾端写法. Looking forward to your reply. 审题没有注意到“随机”
帮你改进4（仅语言）
Dear Ryan,
I am Li Hua from Class 3, writing to express my opinion on the grouping strategy for language practice you have proposed.
I believe that pairing two students together may not be the most effective approach. Having just one listener means that errors might go unnoticed, blocking overall progress. In my opinion, forming groups of four students would be more beneficial. This setup would allow for a broader range of feedback and enable students to identify and correct mistakes more effectively, facilitating the better development of language skills.
I appreciate your consideration of these suggestions. Looking forward to your early reply.
（六） 模拟题训练
随着社会的发展，心理健康越来越受到人们的关注。10 月 10日是“世界精神卫生日”。假定你是李华,请你给校长就如何改善学生心理健康状况写一封信,内容包括:
心理健康的重要性; 2. 你的建议及理由。
难点：心理健康重要性；语言得体
Dear Principal.
I hope this letter finds you well. As World Mental Health Day is approaching. I want to take this opportunity to discuss the importance of mental health among us students and suggest some improvements.
Mental health is crucial for overall well being. It affects thoughts, emotion and behavior, influencing how we handle stress and relate to others. To enhance it, I suggest organizing workshops that educate students about stress management, which will empower them with practical skills to deal with life's challenges. Additionally, establishing a mental health support system, including trained counselors and a safe space for students to express themselves, will be invaluable. It will encourage students to seek help when needed and foster a sense of belonging and understanding.
Thank you for considering these suggestions. I am convinced that mental health of us students will reach new heights.
Yours
Li Hua
范文2
Dear Principal,
With the development of society, mental health is drawing ever more attention. As World Mental Health Day is approaching, I am writing this letter with the utmost respect and eagerness to offer some suggestions on how to improve students' psychological conditions.
Good mental health is crucial for personal growth, enabling individuals to develop a positive self-image, build confidence, and have a strong sense of self-worth. I suggest the school offer professional psychological guidance, such as hiring professional psychologists to provide counseling services. This would help students deal with stress and promote their mental health. What's more, it might be a good idea if the school were to organize more sports activities, like running competitions and ball games. Engaging in these activities can help release stress and enhance students’ physical fitness.
I sincerely hope that my suggestions can be put to use by the school. I firmly believe that the psychological state of our school will get better and better.
Yours
Li Hua
你的作品5
Honored headmaster,
I'm Li Hua in senior 3. The world mental Day is around the corner. It's clear that mental health is crucial to create students a better basis to learn and improve their physical health.衔接
I suggest that you should add a mental health class in Saturday afternoon. Also, every month, there should be mental health speech. These measures would not interrupt students' study time and could help students be aware of the importance of mental health and improve it gradually.
Hope you could apply my suggestions.
Yours sincerely,
帮你改进5
Dear Principle,
I'm Li Hua in senior 3. As World Mental Health Day approaches, I would like to seize this opportunity to offer some suggestions on enhancing the mental well-being of students.
Mental health is undeniably the cornerstone of a balanced life, influencing not only academic achievements but also emotional well-being and overall happiness. To enhance student mental health in our school, I recommend introducing a mental health class every week. Furthermore, organizing a monthly mental health talk would be beneficial. These measures can educate students on how to effectively address mental health issues, thus offering them powerful mental support.
I hope you will consider implementing these suggestions.
Yours sincerely,
总结：
首段：建议（推荐）的背景+过渡衔接
中间段：建议（推荐）+理由（根据具体题目可能会增加其他内容）
尾段：希望建议被采纳；希望问题得到解决
恰当的建议，得体的语气；
语言总结
提建议的句式+陈述理由
It would be ideal/ a good idea if you can arrange the group according to our levels and objectives so that we can strengthen interactive learning.
I suggest / recommend considering grouping based on students' proficiency levels or interests. This can enhance engagement and encourage better communication. It could also foster a supportive environment for language practice.
In my opinion, forming groups of four students would be more beneficial. This setup would allow for使可能 a broader range of feedback and enable students to identify and correct mistakes more effectively, facilitating the better development of language skills.
What's more, it might be a good idea if the school were to organize more sports activities, like running competitions and ball games. Engaging in these activities can help release stress and enhance students’ physical fitness.
It is important to do ---
绵阳一诊 建议信
假如你是李华，你的朋友Wilson写信告诉你他最近沉迷于踢足球，成绩下降，老师和父母很担心，希望他放弃这个爱好，他很难过（问题）。请你就Wilson的问题给他回信，内容包括：
1. 你的建议；2. 给与安慰或鼓励。
你的作品6
Dear Wilson,
How's going How is it these days I hearing from am sorry to hear that some problems which bothered you a lot. There are some tips and comforts.
Your parents and teacher are worried about your grades. So It is important to improve your grades First, you can balance the time between the football and study. Secondly, you can recognize it was a prize, may be it can encouraged you not focus on football all clay. Also, it's important to keep this hobby, because it can excites excite you. The best way is communicate to communicate with your parents.
Hope this email can comforts comfort you. Have a nice day!
Yours,
Li Hua.
修改意见：
首段阐述问题（，表示理解），写做意图（提建议）
中间段（逻辑清晰）：提建议，原因，具体做法；鼓励（或安慰）
注意建议的合理性
尾段：祝愿，盼回复
帮你改进6
Dear Wilson,
I hope you are doing well. Knowing that you are upset because of the conflict between your love for football and the impact it's having on your grades, I am writing to offer some suggestions.
I suggest you find a balance between your football activities and your studies. While football is an important part of your life, prioritizing your studies is crucial for your future success. One effective strategy could be to / You could set aside specific time for football practice and reserve other time for focused studying. Believe in yourself, and I am confident that you can excel in both your academics and your interests, achieving improved results.
Looking forward to hearing good news from you!
一 书信类应用文格式、考情
书信类应用文首段一般包括开场寒暄，身份信息，背景事件，表达目的，衔接过渡五方面内容。
基于整体逻辑，中间段多采用虚（感受，想法等）实结合的内容构建模式
尾段一般包括重申，感受，互动等内容。
应用文高考趋势
1. 注重考查创新思维、分析问题解决问题的能力；
2. 内容要求更为具体；
3. 中国故事、国际视野、环保意识、体美劳等内容贯穿其中。
写作注意事项
1. 注意收信人身份（正式与非正式，语言的得体性）；
2. 注意格式特征;
3. 审题到位，写全要点
4. 句子的流畅性（长句较多，尾重原则；避免单一句式，句句开头都不同；）
二 告知信、活动介绍
(一) 练后重写 告知信 给笔友写信，非正式
假定你是李华，为丰富同学们的课外活动，上周你校举行了爱国歌咏比赛( patriotic song singing contest)。请给你的笔友Tom写一封信，分享其中的故事。内容包括:
1．比赛经过（整体+个人）；2．你的感悟（围绕爱国、歌曲、比赛）。
注意：
1．写作词数应为80左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Dear Tom,
______________________
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
问题：比赛经过要具体；感悟要契合话题
范文
Dear Tom,
Last week, our school organized a patriotic song singing contest to enrich our extracurricular activities, and it was truly an inspiring event!
开场寒暄，身份信息，背景事件√，表达目的，衔接过渡（简单评价或总结概括）（总分总结构）
Students from different grades participated enthusiastically in it, singing patriotic songs that celebrated our country's glory and history. The atmosphere was electric as everyone sang with passion and pride. I performed a song that my grandfather used to sing, which made me feel connected to our heritage. 长句，符合尾重原则；句句开头都不同
比赛经过：参加人员，具体唱了哪首歌，+评价气氛、学生风貌，我做了什么+我的感受
I learn that expressing patriotism can take various forms, and music is one of the most beautiful ways to do so. It is a heartwarming experience that I will always treasure.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
或：
Para1:
I am writing to share with you a patriotic song singing contest held by our school last week, which is truly an inspiring event. 开场寒暄，身份信息，背景事件√，表达目的√，衔接过渡（简单评价）（总分总结构）√
你的作品1
Dear Tom,
How's everything going To enrich our after-class activities, our school held a patriotic song singing contest last week. I'd like to share some details with you.衔接过渡，好！
To begin with our headmaster left gave a lecture concerning the significance of loving country. Then, participaters participants were invited to give their performances and I engaged in it actively. In the end. I won the silver medal. 中间段要具体；因篇幅有限，校长讲话可以不写
After this contest，I was full of excitement and gratitude. Only our country blooms will we live a better life.I feel so fortunate to be born in China. Only+状语位于句首 才用倒装
I'm looking forward to your reply. 尾段有些突兀
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
帮你改进1-1（语言打磨）
Last week, our school held a patriotic song singing contest to enrich our after-school activities. I’d like to share it with you. （删掉寒暄部分，语言更流畅）
It started with a lecture from our headmaster about the importance of patriotism. Then, we all got to perform. I participated and had a great time! I even won a silver medal! 中间段内容偏少，需要进一步增加具体内容
I'm so excited and grateful. I truly believe that only with a thriving country can we have a better life. I feel incredibly lucky to be Chinese.
Looking forward to hearing from you!
帮你改进1-2（内容+语言优化）
Last week, our school held a patriotic song singing contest to enrich our after-school activities. I can’t wait to share it with you!
Many classes participated, each performing a different patriotic song. The competition was fierce! Our class sang "My Motherland," and although we didn't win, we gave it our all. Seeing everyone so enthusiastic and singing with such passion really moved me. It made me feel a strong sense of national pride and the importance of loving our country.
It is such a meaningful and unforgettable experience that I am eager for more.
尾段或：
What kind of extracurricular activities are popular at your school Looking forward to hearing from you! （合理使用Looking forward to hearing from you!）
你的作品2
Dear Tom,
I'm excited to tell you my story which happened定语从句稍显啰嗦 last week. It's about my experiences and feelings from a patriotic song singing contest. 句子.不够流畅
When hearing the news of this contest, I actively participated in it. I practiced my songs again and again and I believed I could make it. 赛前篇幅过长Then the big day finally came, despite a little sense of embarrassment, I finished my song as I expected. Finally I had won the first prize with big applause. 比赛经过要具体
From this experience, I have learnt that " There is a willing,there is success. Where there is a will, there is a way.” 感受与活动主题不契合
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
帮你改进2（内容+语言优化）
I am writing to share with you the patriotic song singing contest held in our school last week, which was really inspiring.
As arranged, each class took the stage and sang a patriotic song. Class 3 sang "Ode to the Motherland" enthusiastically and Class 5's performance of "The East is Red" was particularly moving. My class chose "My Motherland" and we even won the first prize! Singing together, feeling the power of the lyrics, I was overwhelmed with a sense of national pride.
The contest wasn't just about winning; it was about sharing our love for our country through music. It was a truly unforgettable experience.
（二）高考题训练 2024新课标卷 告知信
假定你是李华，上周五你们班在公园上了一堂美术课。请你给英国朋友Chris写一封邮件分享这次经历，内容包括：
（1）你完成的作品；（2）你的感想（围绕公园美术课）。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
Dear Chris,
I’m writing to share with you an art class I had in a park last Friday.
______________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
难点：对美术作品的具体阐述；基于公园 美术课的合理的感想
Para1：首段衔接过渡：
You cannot imagine how meaningful and interesting it was!
Its details are as follows. 代词衔接
It was an amazing experience that left a deep impression on me.
It was filled with creativity and joy.
What happened there truly broadened my horizons.
The combination of art and nature was simply perfect.
Para2: 内容构建：
你完成的作品：（美术课任务可以写但不要过多，）你的作品内容，（创作过程/灵感，效果如何）
你的感受（公园 上美术课的感受）亲近自然，艺术灵感
范文片段1：We were tasked to draw or paint something that impressed us most. Inspired by the fantastic scenery, I created a watercolor painting of the small bridge over the park’s pond, surrounded by blooming flowers. The entire experience was incredibly refreshing. Being surrounded by nature not only sparked my creativity but also offered a much-needed break from the usual hustle and bustle of school life. I felt a deep sense of peace as I painted.
任务——作品内容——感受
范文片段2：Upon arriving at the park at 8 o’clock, we began painting the landscape there. Inspired by the beauty of the park, I soon had a great idea. I painted the park scenes: the bright sun, the green grass, the children playfully chasing after one another and the people playing chess in the shade, all of which made up a peaceful and happy picture. This outdoor art class was really unforgettable. Not only did we students get some hands-on experience from the class, but we also developed our interest in both art and nature! 时间顺序
虚实结合：到达，任务，开始，我的创意+灵感来源，我的画+整体印象；感受总——分
Para3: 重申感受、期待、互动
In a word, it was not just an art class; it was a moment of connection with nature that I truly cherished.
The park art class was incredibly refreshing and inspiring. I'm eager for more.
你的作品3
Dear Chris,
I’m writing to share with you an art class I had in a park last Friday. 少衔接过渡
My work illustrates a corner of the park, in which stands a thin tree covered with thick snow. I found a red blossom on its branch. Astonished, I recorded it with my paintbrush.I was inspired by this tree and moved by its might, which told me the meaning of life and the courage when facing difficulties. It was that special art class that gave me the chance to come across such a special tree. 内容逻辑：先写灵感，再写画了什么
In my point of view, this kind of classes is essential for our keeping closed to nature and learning from nature. for us to be closer to nature and get some inspiration from it.
Do you agree with me Looking forward to your reply.
修改意见：三段式比较好
帮你改进3
I’m writing to share the experience of an art class I had in a park last Friday. It was truly unforgettable!
My work captures a slender tree, covered with a heavy coat of snow, stands upright in the cold. Against the icy white, a vibrant red flower blooms bravely on one of its branches, symbolizing life's strength in adversity. The encounter with nature was truly inspiring, providing a unique experience unattainable in the classroom.
Not only did the art class stimulate my creativity, but it also deepened my bond with the natural world. I am eager for more of such enriching experiences.
（三） 模拟题训练
假定你是李华，最近你们到一个外国游客较多的旅游景点上了一堂口语实践课。请你用英文给澳大利亚朋友Luke写一封邮件分享这次经历，内容包括：
上课的过程；2．你的感想。
注意：1．写作词数应为80个左右：2．请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
Dear Luke,
I’m writing to share with you a special spoken English class I had the other day.
__________________
Yours,
Li Hua
范文
I’m writing to share with you a special spoken English class I had the other day. It was an amazing experience that left a deep impression on me. / It was held at a popular tourist spot frequented by many foreign visitors.
Our teacher organized interactive activities where we had to communicate with tourists in English to practice our speaking skills. We were divided into small groups and tasked with introducing local attractions to the tourists. 上课过程：任务——时间顺序
The class was both challenging and exciting. I felt a bit nervous at first, but as I started interacting with the tourists, my confidence grew. It was fascinating to see how people from different cultures responded to our presentations. I learned a lot about effective communication and the importance of being adaptable in language use. 感想：评价，感受，收获
Overall, the experience was incredibly enriching. It not only improved my English but also broadened my perspective on cultural exchange. 重申感受、期待、互动
范文2
Dear Luke,
I’m writing to share an extraordinary spoken English class we had recently.
Our teacher led the entire class to a famous tourist attraction frequented by visitors from Western countries. We had the unique opportunity to engage in conversations with native speakers. All of us were activated by the authentic environment, eager to talk to the foreigners. Even the most timid boy managed to have a happy conversation with a tourist from Wellington.
This immersive experience was incredibly beneficial, as it significantly boosted my confidence and sharpened my language skills. I believe this experience will have a lasting positive impact on my English proficiency.
或：
Interacting with them in a real-world setting was exciting and profoundly enriching. I am eager for more of such activities.
Yours,
Li Hua
总结
首段开门见山：活动内容、目的、时间、地点、主办方等+衔接句(简单评价,或总结概括)；
中间段内容要具体：谁参加，唱了什么歌曲/ 具体画了什么/ 具体做了什么；
中间段要虚实结合：现场氛围、我的感受/ 对画作意境的阐述等 ；
感受可放在中间段最后，也可放在尾段；感受要与活动契合（爱国、唱歌与爱国、难忘的经历、希望有更多类似活动）；
首尾段不要过长。
三 建议 推荐
示范
Suggestion Letter to a Superior 正式
Dear Sir,
After spending a considerable amount of time with my team, I feel that there are a lot of areas where we can improve. I am writing this letter to you to give my honest opinion on the working of the team so far.
I feel the team is moving towards a positive direction and a few improvements will help us in achieving more. The first one is that we need to improve upon the communications within the team. All delays and lags we are facing are somewhat associated with a lack of communication. 建议的理由The second one is that we need to organise some team-building activities to help us work together as one unit.
I feel if these pointers are worked upon, we will witness growth in each individual and the group as well.
Yours sincerely,
Pablo Ortega
或：
I am writing this letter to you regarding---
I hope you will accept these suggestions and take the necessary actions.
（四） 练后重写
假定你是李华，你校外教Chris想学习中国的水墨画，希望你能给他推荐一位老师。请你给他写一封电子邮件，内容包括：
1. 介绍老师的情况；2. 授课时间和地点。
注意：1 词数80词左右；2. 开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。
Dear Chris,
I'm writing to recommend a Chinese ink painting teacher to you as you expressed your interest in learning this art form. I wholeheartedly suggest Mr Li, an accomplished and seasoned professional in Chinese ink painting.
With over two decades of experience in teaching, Mr. Li is widely recognized for his engaging and practical teaching style, which has earned him a considerable following. His classes are both informative and entertaining. The classes are held on Saturdays from 10 am to 12 pm at the Chinese Cultural Center, situated at No. 6 Kangning Road.
I hope this recommendation is helpful to you. Please let me know if you have any questions, as I would be happy to assist you further.
（五） 高考题训练 2023新课标卷 建议信 （分析问题+建议）
假定你是李华，外教Ryan准备将学生随机分为两人一组，让大家课后练习口语，你认为这样分组存在问题。请你给外教写一封邮件，内容包括：
1. 说明问题；2. 提出建议。
注意：1. 写作词数应为80个左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Dear Ryan,
I’m Li Hua from Class 3.
_______________________________________________________________________
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
难点：恰当地指出问题，具体合理的建议; 得体的语言。
范文1
I’m Li Hua from Class 3. Knowing you are going to randomly divide two students into a group to practice the speaking after class, I am writing to state my opinion on the grouping way.
This grouping method has some drawbacks. One of the disadvantages to random pairs is that some students, especially the ones unfamiliar with each other, have to deal with embarrassments. What's more, large level gap can bring about difficulties in communication within the groups. It would be ideal if you can arrange the group according to our levels and objectives so that we can strengthen interactive learning.
I am looking forward to your reply. / Hoping you can take my advice into careful consideration and looking forward to your reply.
范文2
Dear Ryan,
I hope this email finds you well正式信件打招呼. I have some concerns regarding the random grouping of students in pairs for post-class speaking practice.
Random pairings may not always be effective as students may feel uncomfortable or less motivated with someone they are not familiar with. I suggest considering grouping based on students' proficiency levels or interests. This can enhance engagement and encourage better communication. It could also foster a supportive environment for language practice.
Thank you for considering my suggestions.
Best regards,
Li Hua
你的作品4
Dear Kyan,
I'm Li Hua from Class 3. I’m writing to you about the groups of practicing language. You have declared that two students should be divided into one group. I think it is improper. Because there always one listener, he or she couldn't check out your人称错 problems. It's bad for your future development. In my opinion, I think重复 the group should include 4 students in which the most of mistakes can be figured out and they can develop better.
Above are my views about the division不是建议信尾端写法. Looking forward to your reply. 审题没有注意到“随机”
帮你改进4（仅语言）
Dear Ryan,
I am Li Hua from Class 3, writing to express my opinion on the grouping strategy for language practice you have proposed.
I believe that pairing two students together may not be the most effective approach. Having just one listener means that errors might go unnoticed, blocking overall progress. In my opinion, forming groups of four students would be more beneficial. This setup would allow for a broader range of feedback and enable students to identify and correct mistakes more effectively, facilitating the better development of language skills.
I appreciate your consideration of these suggestions. Looking forward to your early reply.
（六） 模拟题训练
随着社会的发展，心理健康越来越受到人们的关注。10 月 10日是“世界精神卫生日”。假定你是李华,请你给校长就如何改善学生心理健康状况写一封信,内容包括:
心理健康的重要性; 2. 你的建议及理由。
难点：心理健康重要性；语言得体
Dear Principal.
I hope this letter finds you well. As World Mental Health Day is approaching. I want to take this opportunity to discuss the importance of mental health among us students and suggest some improvements.
Mental health is crucial for overall well being. It affects thoughts, emotion and behavior, influencing how we handle stress and relate to others. To enhance it, I suggest organizing workshops that educate students about stress management, which will empower them with practical skills to deal with life's challenges. Additionally, establishing a mental health support system, including trained counselors and a safe space for students to express themselves, will be invaluable. It will encourage students to seek help when needed and foster a sense of belonging and understanding.
Thank you for considering these suggestions. I am convinced that mental health of us students will reach new heights.
Yours
Li Hua
范文2
Dear Principal,
With the development of society, mental health is drawing ever more attention. As World Mental Health Day is approaching, I am writing this letter with the utmost respect and eagerness to offer some suggestions on how to improve students' psychological conditions.
Good mental health is crucial for personal growth, enabling individuals to develop a positive self-image, build confidence, and have a strong sense of self-worth. I suggest the school offer professional psychological guidance, such as hiring professional psychologists to provide counseling services. This would help students deal with stress and promote their mental health. What's more, it might be a good idea if the school were to organize more sports activities, like running competitions and ball games. Engaging in these activities can help release stress and enhance students’ physical fitness.
I sincerely hope that my suggestions can be put to use by the school. I firmly believe that the psychological state of our school will get better and better.
Yours
Li Hua
你的作品5
Honored headmaster,
I'm Li Hua in senior 3. The world mental Day is around the corner. It's clear that mental health is crucial to create students a better basis to learn and improve their physical health.衔接
I suggest that you should add a mental health class in Saturday afternoon. Also, every month, there should be mental health speech. These measures would not interrupt students' study time and could help students be aware of the importance of mental health and improve it gradually.
Hope you could apply my suggestions.
Yours sincerely,
帮你改进5
Dear Principle,
I'm Li Hua in senior 3. As World Mental Health Day approaches, I would like to seize this opportunity to offer some suggestions on enhancing the mental well-being of students.
Mental health is undeniably the cornerstone of a balanced life, influencing not only academic achievements but also emotional well-being and overall happiness. To enhance student mental health in our school, I recommend introducing a mental health class every week. Furthermore, organizing a monthly mental health talk would be beneficial. These measures can educate students on how to effectively address mental health issues, thus offering them powerful mental support.
I hope you will consider implementing these suggestions.
Yours sincerely,
总结：
首段：建议（推荐）的背景+过渡衔接
中间段：建议（推荐）+理由（根据具体题目可能会增加其他内容）
尾段：希望建议被采纳；希望问题得到解决
恰当的建议，得体的语气；
语言总结
提建议的句式+陈述理由
It would be ideal/ a good idea if you can arrange the group according to our levels and objectives so that we can strengthen interactive learning.
I suggest / recommend considering grouping based on students' proficiency levels or interests. This can enhance engagement and encourage better communication. It could also foster a supportive environment for language practice.
In my opinion, forming groups of four students would be more beneficial. This setup would allow for使可能 a broader range of feedback and enable students to identify and correct mistakes more effectively, facilitating the better development of language skills.
What's more, it might be a good idea if the school were to organize more sports activities, like running competitions and ball games. Engaging in these activities can help release stress and enhance students’ physical fitness.
It is important to do ---
绵阳一诊 建议信
假如你是李华，你的朋友Wilson写信告诉你他最近沉迷于踢足球，成绩下降，老师和父母很担心，希望他放弃这个爱好，他很难过（问题）。请你就Wilson的问题给他回信，内容包括：
1. 你的建议；2. 给与安慰或鼓励。
你的作品6
Dear Wilson,
How's going How is it these days I hearing from am sorry to hear that some problems which bothered you a lot. There are some tips and comforts.
Your parents and teacher are worried about your grades. So It is important to improve your grades First, you can balance the time between the football and study. Secondly, you can recognize it was a prize, may be it can encouraged you not focus on football all clay. Also, it's important to keep this hobby, because it can excites excite you. The best way is communicate to communicate with your parents.
Hope this email can comforts comfort you. Have a nice day!
Yours,
Li Hua.
修改意见：
首段阐述问题（，表示理解），写做意图（提建议）
中间段（逻辑清晰）：提建议，原因，具体做法；鼓励（或安慰）
注意建议的合理性
尾段：祝愿，盼回复
帮你改进6
Dear Wilson,
I hope you are doing well. Knowing that you are upset because of the conflict between your love for football and the impact it's having on your grades, I am writing to offer some suggestions.
I suggest you find a balance between your football activities and your studies. While football is an important part of your life, prioritizing your studies is crucial for your future success. One effective strategy could be to / You could set aside specific time for football practice and reserve other time for focused studying. Believe in yourself, and I am confident that you can excel in both your academics and your interests, achieving improved results.
Looking forward to hearing good news from you!