读后续写：Jenny 忐忑间不依赖遗失的“幸运钉鞋” 通过克服自我心理障碍努力赢得比赛 讲义- 辽宁省东北育才2024-2025学年高三上学期五校联考期末英语试题

辽宁省东北育才2024-2025学年高三上学期五校联考期末英语试题
第二节 (满分25分)
47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Number 7, Jenny Walker, takes the lead,” cried the announcer. “Just one more hurdle (栏) and — Jenny Walker from Mount Lawley High School takes first place in the girls’ 100-meter hurdles!” The crowd went wild as Jenny’s teammates whooped(大叫，呐喊)(状从), “Good for you, Sweet Spikes (钉鞋)!” Sweet Spikes was Jenny’s nickname.
“County championship, here we come!” shouted Jenny, patting her neon-green track spikes(现在分词做伴随动作). They were almost worn out, but she didn’t care. They were her lucky shoes and she loved them. “Next Saturday, we’re taking home the gold,” Jenny whispered to her spikes.
“Don’t forget, Sweet Spikes,” chirped(v.愉悦的说话) Marisol, one of her teammates. “My birthday party is next Friday at Lakeside Park.” “Beep. Party recorded in calendar(过去分词做后置定语),” joked Jenny in her best robot voice.
Next weekend couldn’t come soon enough. Jenny brimmed with excitement all week long. At track practice, she leaped over those hurdles faster than ever before. She wore her spikes all day, and everything in her path was a hurdle: flowerpots in her front yard, sidewalk cracks, and even her little dog!
The day of Marisol’s party, Jenny put on her favorite blue shorts, a track T-shirt from her dad, and of course, her lucky spikes. “Perfect.” She smiled at herself in the mirror(动作描写). In Lakeside Park, music and the smell of grilled food filled the air(环境描写). But Jenny stopped by the track first, planning(现在分词短语做伴随动作) to do a couple of sprints (冲刺). “Sweet Spikes!” Two of her teammates rushed over, breathless and barefoot(adj做状语). “You have to try the slide!” Jenny’s eyes glanced across the party area. “Slide What sli—”
Suddenly, she saw it. The BIGGEST inflatable slide (充气滑梯) she’d ever seen(定从). Without thinking twice, Jenny kicked off her spikes and charged toward it. She conquered the slide again and again and again, until it was finally time to go home. As she unwillingly made her way back to the track where she’ d left her spikes(定从，主要事件转变), panic set in.
Jenny picked up the pace, her heart pounding louder the closer she got(独立主格复合 the more ... the more ...结构). When she got to the place(状从), her heart stopped, “My lucky spikes are gone!” Jenny’s teammates helped her search the park. No luck. “Farewell, gold,” Jenny murmured.
注意：
1. 续写短文的词数应为150个左右；
2. 请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1:
The next day, Jenny stood at the track of the county championship, still sad about her lost spikes.
Paragraph 2:
“Just one more hurdle and — Number 52, Jenny Walker, takes the gold!”
第二节 (满分25分)
47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Number 7, Jenny Walker, takes the lead,” cried the announcer. “Just one more hurdle (栏) and — Jenny Walker from Mount Lawley High School takes first place in the girls’ 100-meter hurdles!” The crowd went wild as Jenny’s teammates whooped, “Good for you, Sweet Spikes (钉鞋)!” Sweet Spikes was Jenny’s nickname.
“County championship, here we come!” shouted Jenny, patting her neon-green track spikes. They were almost worn out, but she didn’t care. They were her lucky shoes and she loved them. “Next Saturday, we’re taking home the gold,” Jenny whispered to her spikes.
“Don’t forget, Sweet Spikes,” chirped Marisol, one of her teammates. “My birthday party is next Friday at Lakeside Park.” “Beep. Party recorded in calendar,” joked Jenny in her best robot voice.
Next weekend couldn’t come soon enough. Jenny brimmed with excitement all week long. At track practice, she leaped over those hurdles faster than ever before. She wore her spikes all day, and everything in her path was a hurdle: flowerpots in her front yard, sidewalk cracks, and even her little dog!
The day of Marisol’s party, Jenny put on her favorite blue shorts, a track T-shirt from her dad, and of course, her lucky spikes. “Perfect.” She smiled at herself in the mirror. In Lakeside Park, music and the smell of grilled food filled the air. But Jenny stopped by the track first, planning to do a couple of sprints (冲刺). “Sweet Spikes!” Two of her teammates rushed over, breathless and barefoot. “You have to try the slide!” Jenny’s eyes glanced across the party area. “Slide What sli—”
Suddenly, she saw it. The BIGGEST inflatable slide (充气滑梯) she’d ever seen. Without thinking twice, Jenny kicked off her spikes and charged toward it. She conquered the slide again and again and again, until it was finally time to go home. As she unwillingly made her way back to the track where she’ d left her spikes, panic set in.
Jenny picked up the pace, her heart pounding louder the closer she got. When she got to the place, her heart stopped, “My lucky spikes are gone!” Jenny’s teammates helped her search the park. No luck. “Farewell, gold,” Jenny murmured.
注意：
1. 续写短文的词数应为150个左右；
2. 请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1:
The next day, Jenny stood at the track of the county championship, still sad about her lost spikes.
Paragraph 2:
“Just one more hurdle and — Number 52, Jenny Walker, takes the gold!”
1. 续写类型与构思分析
分析角度 内容
续写类型 该续写属于 “情节推进型”，即通过发展情节推动故事向前发展。原文以主角遗失幸运钉鞋作为情节转折点，续写部分需要解决她如何克服心理障碍，最终取得胜利。
构思思路 ① 衔接原文：承接 Jenny 丢失幸运钉鞋后的焦虑心情，展现她的心理变化。
② 冲突与转折：比赛当天，Jenny 对缺失钉鞋的忧虑，以及她如何在比赛中克服心理障碍。
③ 高潮部分：比赛进行中，她逐渐找回自信，不依赖“幸运物”，用实力赢得比赛。
④ 结局：Jenny 获胜，明白真正的幸运来自自己的努力，而不是钉鞋。
布局框架 - 第一段（铺垫+冲突）：Jenny 在赛场上回忆钉鞋，感到失落，怀疑自己是否能赢。
- 第二段（高潮+结局）：比赛开始，她逐步调整心态，最终凭借实力赢得冠军。
承接原文事项 1. 保持人物性格一致性（Jenny 热爱比赛，自信但有些迷信）。
2. 延续原文的关键元素（如钉鞋、队友的支持等）。
3. 衔接原文时间线（比赛前的焦虑→比赛中的心理斗争→最终胜利）。
巧妙设计续写内容 1. 心理描写深化 Jenny 的成长（从依赖钉鞋到相信自己）。
2. 运用环境渲染比赛氛围（观众的欢呼、比赛的紧张感）。
3. 合理安排情感转折（从紧张、焦虑到坚定、自信）。
2. Story Mountain 思维导图分析
Story Mountain 结构分析：
开端（Introduction）：Jenny 在之前的比赛中获胜，信心满满，期待县冠军赛。
上升情节（Rising Action）：在生日派对上玩耍时丢失了幸运钉鞋，她感到慌乱，开始害怕自己无法赢得比赛。
高潮（Climax）：县冠军赛当天，Jenny 感到焦虑，但在比赛中逐渐找回自信，意识到成功依赖的是自己，而非钉鞋。
下降情节（Falling Action）：Jenny 奋力冲刺，超越对手，即将赢得比赛。
结局（Resolution）：Jenny 夺冠，意识到真正的幸运源自努力与信念。
3. 文章衔接点、情绪、动作、关键转折点、伏笔、冲突点、隐含线索、解决方案分析表
分析角度 内容 原文反映句
人物刻画 Jenny 坚韧不拔，善于调整心态，逐步成长。 “Farewell, gold,” Jenny murmured.（她因丢鞋感到绝望）
情感层次 由信心满满 → 焦虑不安 → 逐渐找回信心 → 冲刺胜利。 “Jenny picked up the pace, her heart pounding louder the closer she got.”（她开始慌张寻找鞋子）
关键情节点 ① Jenny 丢失钉鞋；
② 比赛前她怀疑自己；
③ 比赛中找回信心；
④ 她最终夺冠。 “The next day, Jenny stood at the track of the county championship, still sad about her lost spikes.”
语言特色 生动的心理描写、动作描写与环境渲染。 “Her heart stopped.”（夸张表现情绪）
关键词分析 lucky spikes, confidence, determination, competition, hurdle -
心理描写 ① 担忧：害怕失去幸运；
② 迷茫：怀疑自己能否赢；
③ 坚定：专注于比赛本身。 “Doubt crept into her mind.”
动作描写 ① 搜索鞋子时的紧张；
② 赛前的忐忑站立；
③ 冲刺跨栏的动作。 “Jenny picked up the pace, her heart pounding louder.”
环境描写 观众欢呼、赛场气氛、炎热天气等渲染比赛紧张感。 “The crowd went wild.”
隐含主题 自信源于自身努力，而非外在物品。 “It’s not the shoes that win races. It’s me.”
情感转折 由焦虑到自信，再到胜利的满足。 “She took a deep breath and focused.”
空间转换 派对场地 → 赛场 → 终点线
时间过渡 周五派对 → 周六比赛日
4. 适用于续写的动作、心理、环境描写英文例句
（1）动作描写（8句）
She clenched her fists, determination flickering in her eyes.
Her legs trembled slightly, but she forced herself to stay focused.
She took off like an arrow, her breath steady and controlled.
She pumped her arms furiously, her strides lengthening with each step.
Her fingers dug into her palms as she prepared to sprint.
She gritted her teeth and launched herself forward.
She crouched down, ready to push off the starting block.
Her muscles tensed as she cleared the final hurdle.
（2）心理描写（8句）
Anxiety twisted in her stomach as she stepped onto the track.
A wave of doubt washed over her—could she win without her lucky spikes
She shook her head, forcing away the creeping fear.
“It’s all in my head,” she told herself firmly.
A surge of confidence rushed through her veins as she focused on the finish line.
“I’ve trained for this moment. I don’t need luck,” she reassured herself.
Her heart pounded, but she refused to let fear take over.
As the whistle blew, all hesitation disappeared—only the race mattered now.
（3）环境描写（8句）
The sun blazed overhead, casting long shadows on the track.
The scent of freshly cut grass filled the air.
The roaring cheers of the audience echoed through the stadium.
The whistle pierced the silence, marking the start of the race.
Heat radiated from the track, making the air shimmer.
Flags fluttered in the breeze, adding to the electric atmosphere.
The rhythmic pounding of footsteps created an almost hypnotic beat.
Sweat trickled down her temples as she crouched at the starting line.
5. 高级单词替换（分类）
普通单词 高级替换 适用场景
fast swift, rapid, fleet-footed 描述奔跑速度
nervous anxious, jittery, tense 心理描写
tired exhausted, drained, fatigued 比赛后状态
happy elated, jubilant, overjoyed 获胜情绪
strong resilient, sturdy, robust 形容意志
Possible Answers
官方:
The next day, Jenny stood at the track of the county championship, still sad about her lost spikes. Devastated as she was(让步状语从句倒装), she knew she had to compete(宾从). As she stepped onto the starting line(状从), Jenny took a deep breath and focused on the race ahead(动作描写). She could feel the energy and excitement of the crowd around her, with her teammates cheering for her(with复合结构), which gave her a renewed sense of determination(定从). The gunshot sounded through the stadium(赛场环境描写) as the race began(状从), and Jenny’s heart pounded with each stride(心情描写). She pushed herself harder than ever before, jumping over hurdle after hurdle with precision and speed(现在分词做伴随动作)(with复合不定式做状语).
“Just one more hurdle and — Number 52, Jenny Walker, takes the gold!” The announcer’s voice echoed through the stadium(赛场比赛描写) as Jenny crossed the finish line first(状从). The crowd erupted in cheers and applause, and Jenny’s teammates rushed to embrace her, celebrating her incredible victory(现在分词做伴随动作). “I did it without my lucky spikes!” Jenny exclaimed, tears of joy streaming down her face(独立主格情绪描写). “That’s right, girl!” said Marisol, “You proved you are the real deal(宾从)!” Jenny realized that it wasn’t the shoes that made her fast and strong, but her own determination and hard work(宾从)(强调句+递进语序). From that day on, she continued to break records and achieve greatness, proving(现在分词做伴随动作) that true success comes from within(宾从).
Version 1
Paragraph 1: The next day, Jenny stood at the track of the county championship, still sad about her lost spikes. Her usual determination was replaced with a sense of helplessness(情绪描写) as she gazed down at the shiny new spikes(状从) given to her by her coach(过去分词做后置定语). Although they were nice(状从), they didn’t carry the same memories as her lucky spikes. As the race started(状从), her mind wandered, and her legs felt heavier with each step(动作心理描写). "Focus, Sweet Spikes!" she whispered to herself(动作心理描写), trying to summon her old confidence(现在分词做伴随动作). But the crowd's cheers grew fainter(赛场环境描写), and Jenny felt her chance slipping away.
Paragraph 2: Just one more hurdle and — Number 52, Jenny Walker, takes the gold! The words rang in her ears like a dream. She couldn’t believe it. As she crossed the finish line(状从), her heart pounded with exhilaration(心理描写), and her teammates rushed to congratulate her. Jenny looked down at her new spikes, still not the same as Sweet Spikes(对原文的衔接), but they had carried her to victory today. "Maybe it’s not about the shoes after all," she thought, smiling through her tears(现在分词做伴随动作).
亮点语法与词汇
情绪描写:
"Her usual determination was replaced with a sense of helplessness" (描述失落情绪)
"Jenny felt her chance slipping away" (描述焦虑情绪)
"Her heart pounded with exhilaration" (描述兴奋情绪)
动作描写:
"Her legs felt heavier with each step" (强调身体的疲惫感)
"She crossed the finish line" (动作的最终结果)
积累语料:
“Focus, Sweet Spikes!”: Expressing determination, "Focus, it's your time!" "Stay strong, we got this!"
“her heart pounded”: Could be replaced with "her heart raced," "her pulse quickened."
高级词汇替换:
"Sense of helplessness" (替换为: "feeling of despair")
"Exhilaration" (替换为: "ecstasy")
Version 2
Paragraph 1: The next day, Jenny stood at the track of the county championship, still sad about her lost spikes. Despite wearing a different pair(介词短语做状语), she couldn’t shake the feeling that something important was missing(同位语从句). As the race began(状从), she tried to block out the thought of her old shoes, but they seemed to haunt her every move(心理描写). The crowd cheered(环境描写), but Jenny felt alone in her struggle(心理描写). She stumbled slightly at the first hurdle, but she quickly regained her focus. “Just one more hurdle, you can do it,” she encouraged herself.
Paragraph 2: Just one more hurdle and — Number 52, Jenny Walker, takes the gold! She couldn’t believe her eyes when she saw the finish line ahead(状从). With newfound energy(介词短语做状语), she surged forward and cleared the last hurdle effortlessly(动作描写). The moment she crossed the line(状从 the moment 一...就...), a huge cheer erupted from the stands(环境描写). Jenny raised her arms in victory, feeling a mixture of relief and triumph(现在分词做伴随动作). "I did it, Sweet Spikes," she whispered, feeling proud of herself(现在分词做伴随动作). It wasn’t about the shoes after all; it was her spirit that carried her.(递进句式+强调句)
亮点语法与词汇
情绪描写:
"Jenny felt alone in her struggle" (孤单感)
"A mixture of relief and triumph" (喜悦与释然)
动作描写:
"She surged forward and cleared the last hurdle effortlessly" (突出了动作的快速和轻松)
"She raised her arms in victory" (胜利的姿势)
积累语料:
"A huge cheer erupted" could be replaced with "A loud roar filled the air."
"She surged forward" could be replaced with "She dashed ahead."
高级词汇替换:
"Newfound energy" (替换为: "rejuvenated strength")
"Triumph" (替换为: "victory")
Version 3
Paragraph 1: The next day, Jenny stood at the track of the county championship, still sad about her lost spikes. She glanced at her competitors, feeling more nervous than usual(现在分词做伴随动作). Her usual confidence seemed to have faded(心理描写好句). As the starting gun fired(状从 赛场描写), she pushed herself forward, but the race felt different today. Her legs felt heavier than ever, and the track seemed to stretch endlessly before her.(环境描写反应心理) Her thoughts kept wandering back to her lost spikes.(心理描写) “Focus, Jenny, focus!” she muttered under her breath, trying to shake off the worry(现在分词做伴随动作).
Paragraph 2: Just one more hurdle and — Number 52, Jenny Walker, takes the gold! Jenny couldn’t believe it. Her hands were shaking as she crossed the finish line(状从), still in shock(介词短语做状态描写). The crowd erupted with excitement, but Jenny could only smile faintly(环境心理描写). She had won, but it wasn’t until the award ceremony that she realized how much she had learned(宾从). "It wasn’t about the spikes," she thought, “it was about believing in myself(递进句式).”
亮点语法与词汇
情绪描写:
"Her thoughts kept wandering back to her lost spikes" (表现思绪的迷茫)
"Jenny could only smile faintly" (刻画她的惊讶和复杂情感)
动作描写:
"Her hands were shaking as she crossed the finish line" (强调身体反应)
"She crossed the finish line" (描述最终的成就)
积累语料:
"Her thoughts kept wandering" could be replaced with "Her mind kept drifting."
"Could only smile faintly" could be replaced with "She managed a small smile."
高级词汇替换:
"Wandering" (替换为: "drifting")
"Faintly" (替换为: "weakly")