读后续写：遇险救援类 Amelia和村民救助搁浅的海豚 讲义- 浙江省海宁市2025届高三首考仿真考试英语试题
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浙江省海宁市2025届高三首考仿真考试英语试题
第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In a coastal village named Seaford lived a courageous youngwoman named Amelia. Amelia was known throughout Seaford for her adventurous nature. From the moment she could walk, she would eagerly run towards the crashing waves, feeling the sand between her toes and the cool spray of the ocean moisten her face. She was a woman with a strong will and possessed a heart full of kindness. Amelia's love for the ocean was intense,and she spent most of her days exploring the beautiful beaches and sparkling waters that surrounded her house.
One sunny morning, while Amelia was walking along the shore, she noticed a group of restlessseagulls abnormally circling above the crashing waves. Their unusual calls echoed through the air. Concerned for their well-being, she followed their flight pattern, her instincts guiding her toward danger.
As she approached a towering cliff, Amelia gasped in horror. On a narrow ledge(岩架), high above the violent waves , was a young dolphin trapped in a thick fishing net. Its shiny body shone under the golden rays of the sun, but its freedom was cruelly limited by the trap. With each struggle, the net tightened around its delicate body, leaving painful marks on its skin. Its tail flapped(摆动) helplessly, each movement a request for help, while its desperate cries for assistance echoed through the air.
A sense of urgency filled Amelia, pushing her forward with determination and resolve. Realizing that time was tight, Amelia knew she had to act instantly to free this innocent creature from its difficult position before it submitted to exhaustion or the force of the tides.
注意 ：
1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village.__________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm,welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment.__________________
第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In a coastal village named Seaford(过去分词做后置定语) lived a courageous youngwoman(倒装句) named Amelia(过去分词做后置定语). Amelia was known throughout Seaford for her adventurous nature. From the moment she could walk, she would eagerly run towards the crashing waves, feeling the sand between her toes and the cool spray of the ocean moisten her face(现在分词短语做伴随动作). She was a woman with a strong will(介词短语做后置定语) and possessed a heart full of kindness. Amelia's love for the ocean was intense,and she spent most of her days exploring the beautiful beaches and sparkling waters that surrounded her house(定从)(交代Amelia的背景信息).
One sunny morning, while Amelia was walking along the shore(状从), she noticed a group of restless seagulls abnormally circling above the crashing waves. Their unusual calls echoed through the air(环境描写). Concerned for their well-being(adj短语做主语补语), she followed their flight pattern, her instincts guiding her toward danger(独立主格).
As she approached a towering cliff(状从), Amelia gasped in horror(心理紧张害怕的描写 动作描写). On a narrow ledge(岩架), high above the violent waves , was a young dolphin(倒装句) trapped in a thick fishing net(过去分词短语做后置定语). Its shiny body shone under the golden rays of the sun(海豚的外观描写), but its freedom was cruelly limited by the trap. With each struggle(方式状语), the net tightened around its delicate body, leaving painful marks on its skin(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Its tail flapped(摆动) helplessly(动作描写), each movement a request for help(独立主格), while its desperate cries for assistance echoed through the air(环境动作描写).
A sense of urgency filled Amelia, pushing her forward with determination and resolve(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Realizing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) that time was tight(宾从), Amelia knew she had to act instantly to free this innocent creature from its difficult position(动作描写) before it submitted to exhaustion or the force of the tides(状从).
注意 ：
1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village.__________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm,welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment.__________________
1. 读后续写类型分类与思路构思分析
分类 读后续写类型 续写思路构思 布局与框架提炼 实施步骤 承接原文事项与整体注意事项 巧妙设计续写内容
类型 故事发展型 在原文中，Amelia已发现困境，下一步是解决问题。续写可以围绕“如何帮助困境中的海豚”展开，注重动作的执行与情感的变化 开头段落回到村庄获取帮助，然后回到现场，开始拯救海豚。第二段表现出海豚被释放后的变化，以及Amelia的情感反应 第一段：描述Amelia为拯救海豚返回村庄。第二段：表现海豚被放生后的变化和Amelia内心的满足与感动。 续写需要承接Amelia的果断与紧迫感，保持原文情感的延续与节奏。注意动作描写的连贯性与合理性。 可通过描述海豚被解救后的反应与Amelia的内心活动来展现主题，强调她对自然的关爱与对困难的坚持。
2. 故事山模式分析（Story Mountain）
Story Mountain 思维导图
阶段 描述
介绍 Amelia是一个勇敢的年轻女性，热爱大海，住在Seaford。
激发冲突 在海岸上发现一只海豚被渔网困住，无法自救。
发展 Amelia感到紧迫，决定采取行动，帮助困境中的海豚。
高潮 Amelia返回村庄获取工具或帮助，准备进行解救。
结局 海豚被顺利解救，进入大海，Amelia感受到完成使命后的满足与内心平静。
3. 承接原文和续写内容分析表
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 描述Amelia的勇敢与果断 "Amelia was known throughout Seaford for her adventurous nature."
情感层次 强调Amelia的责任感和急切 "A sense of urgency filled Amelia, pushing her forward with determination and resolve."
关键情节点 海豚被困和Amelia决定帮助它 "On a narrow ledge, high above the violent waves, was a young dolphin trapped in a thick fishing net."
语言特色 强调急迫感与情感，短句和重复表达 "Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village."
关键词分析 勇敢、急迫、困境、解救 "trapped," "urgency," "determination," "struggle," "help"
心理描写 Amelia的焦虑与决心 "Her instincts guiding her toward danger"
动作描写 动作的实施过程 "Amelia rushed back to the village."
环境描写 自然背景的设定，渔网与大海 "On a narrow ledge, high above the violent waves"
隐含主题 人与自然的联系，勇敢与无私 "Her love for the ocean was intense, and she spent most of her days exploring the beautiful beaches."
情感转折 从担忧到解救，最后的释然 "As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters"
空间转换 从海岸到村庄，再回到海岸 "Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village."
时间过渡 快速的决策与行动 "Realizing that time was tight, Amelia knew she had to act instantly."
4. 动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句
动作描写
She sprinted across the beach, determined to find help.
Amelia reached into the net, trying to free the dolphin.
She pulled at the tangled rope with all her strength.
Amelia climbed up the rocks, heart racing.
The wind whipped through her hair as she hurried back to the village.
She knelt beside the dolphin, gently untangling the fishing net.
Amelia took a deep breath, steeling herself for what was to come.
She whispered softly to the dolphin, hoping it would trust her.
心理描写
Amelia’s heart pounded as she realized the urgency of the situation.
She hesitated for a moment, unsure if she could do it.
Amelia felt a rush of determination surging through her veins.
The thought of losing the dolphin filled her with dread.
She knew she had to act quickly, without wasting a second.
Her hands trembled, but she refused to stop.
Amelia’s mind raced, calculating the fastest way to rescue the dolphin.
When the dolphin was finally freed, Amelia felt a wave of relief wash over her.
环境描写
The sun shone brightly, casting a golden glow over the waves.
The sea roared below, the foam crashing against the cliffs.
The wind howled as it swept through the coastal rocks.
The scent of saltwater filled the air as Amelia approached the cliff.
The village lay quiet, nestled between the cliffs and the sea.
The seagulls circled above, their calls echoing through the air.
The violent waves crashed against the shore, relentless in their power.
The narrow ledge jutted out dangerously from the cliffside.
5. 高中语法现象分析
1. 定语从句
例句: "The dolphin that Amelia saw was trapped in the net."
近义词替换: "The dolphin which Amelia discovered was stuck."
语法说明: 定语从句修饰名词，为其提供额外信息。
2. 状语从句
例句: "As the dolphin struggled, Amelia knew she had to act quickly."
近义词替换: "When the dolphin struggled, Amelia realized the urgency."
语法说明: 状语从句提供时间、条件、原因等附加信息。
3. 独立主格结构
例句: "The dolphin, its body shining under the sun, continued to struggle."
近义词替换: "The dolphin, its body glowing, fought against the net."
语法说明: 独立主格结构通常描述句子主语的状态或动作。
Possible Versions
【参考范文】
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village. She grabbed a toolkit, carried a strong rope and hurried back with a group of villagers(动作串描写). Everything was all set before Amelia got down to the rescue(状从). She lowered herself down the cliff little by little with great care(动作描写). Somehow, she felt dizzy and nothing could be seen(宾从).She stopped. The dolphin's desperate cries lingering through the air(独立主格), Amelia summoned up all the courage to proceed(鼓起勇气的描写). Ultimately, she arrived at the ledge. Standing on the ledge(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Amelia's heart pounded, the hands and feet shivering(独立主格 动作心理描写). After much effort, Amelia broke the thick net.With the help of the villagers(方式状语),the innocent creature(对原文的衔接) was let loose(习语) to the shore carefully and safely.
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment. Delicate and painful as the dolphin was(让步状从+倒装句),it went to great lengths to jump(习语), wagging its tail(现在分词短语做伴随动作).Amelia stood there, appearing extremely worn-out(现在分词短语做伴随动作，描写人物). Then, she stepped over to the lovely creature, patting it on the head and kissing it(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The dolphin snuggled(vt依偎，紧抱) up to Amelia, murmuring in a joyful voice(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Amelia waved good-bye to it, feeling relieved(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The sun cast the golden rays on Amelia's face(环境描写反应心理), and she went home in delight. Amelia's story has uplifted more and more people and they have grown valorous, good-natured and persistent.
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village. Her heart pounded(紧张心情描写) as she ran(状从), knowing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) the dolphin’s life was in her hands(宾从). The air was filled with the salty scent of the sea(环境描写), and she could hear the distant cry of seagulls(环境描写 对原文的衔接). She spotted the first house and knocked frantically, begging the fisherman inside to help her(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Without a word, he grabbed his rope and followed her back to the cliffside(动作描写). Their footsteps were quick, driven by the urgency of the situation(过去分词短语做原因状语). The sound of the waves crashing against the rocks(现在分词短语做后置定语) made her feel the weight of time slipping away.(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
Paragraph 2: As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment. Amelia held her breath(动作描写), watching it swim freely(现在分词短语做伴随动作), its sleek body moving gracefully(独立主格). The sun reflected off the water, casting a golden glow on the dolphin’s shimmering skin(现在分词短语做伴随动作)(环境描写). Amelia felt an overwhelming sense of relief and happiness(心理描写). The fisherman smiled at her, his eyes full of admiration(独立主格). She had done it—she had saved a life. As the dolphin disappeared into the vast ocean(状从), she stood still, feeling a deep connection to the sea and all its creatures(现在分词短语做伴随动作).
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village, her feet pounding against the sandy shore(独立主格，动作描写). She could feel her heart racing (动作描写)as she thought of the helpless dolphin(状从). The village was small, and every second mattered(习语). Reaching the fisherman's hut(现在分词短语做伴随动作), she knocked on the door with a sense of urgency, explaining the situation(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The fisherman, an older man with a deep knowledge of the sea(介词短语做后置定语), didn’t need any more words. He grabbed his ropes and followed her(动作描写), his face set in determination(独立主格). They raced back to the cliffside,(动作描写) knowing(现在分词做伴随动作) time was running out(宾从).
Paragraph 2:
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment. Amelia’s hands trembled(动作心理描写) as she watched(状从), but she knew the dolphin was free(宾从). With one final glance at her(with复合结构做状语), the creature swam away, its movements graceful and fluid(独立主格). Amelia exhaled deeply(动作描写), feeling a rush of emotion wash over her(现在分词短语做伴随动作，心理描写). She had saved the dolphin, but more than that, she had made a connection with the sea(递进升华句). The fisherman nodded in approval(动作描写), his proud smile saying everything(独立主格) that words couldn’t express. Amelia turned and walked slowly back to the village, a sense of peace settling over her(独立主格).
Version 3
Paragraph 1:
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village. Her mind raced(心理描写) as she thought of the dolphin trapped on the cliff(过去分词短语做后置定语)(状从). The sound of the ocean roaring behind her(现在分词短语做后置定语) spurred her onward(环境心理描写). She reached the first house she saw(定从), her breath quick and shallow from running(独立主格). With urgency in her voice(介短做方式状语), she told the fisherman what had happened(宾从). Without a second thought(介短做方式状语), he grabbed his rope and followed her. Together, they rushed back to the cliffside, the tension between them growing with each step(独立主格+情绪描写). Time was precious, and they needed to act fast before the dolphin succumbed to the tides(状从).
Paragraph 2:
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment. Amelia watched, her heart in her throat(独立主格，情绪描写), as the dolphin swam away into the vast ocean(状从). She could feel the weight of the situation lifting (心理描写)as she saw the creature find freedom. The fisherman, too, seemed to breathe easier(动作心理描写). Amelia had succeeded, but it was more than just a rescue—it was a bond with the sea(升华句，递进句式). As she stood on the cliffside(状从), watching the dolphin disappear(现在分词短语做伴随动作), she felt a profound sense of accomplishment and peace(心理描写).
高中语法加分点分析
定语从句
例句1: "The fisherman, who was an older man with a deep knowledge of the sea, didn’t need any more words."
例句2: "The dolphin, which had been struggling in the net, swam away freely."
语法说明: 定语从句用来提供名词的附加信息。
状语从句
例句1: "As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment."
例句2: "She rushed back to the village because time was running out."
语法说明: 状语从句用于描述时间、原因、条件等。
独立主格结构
例句1: "The dolphin, its body glowing under the sun, swam away."
例句2: "Amelia stood there, her heart pounding with relief."
语法说明 独立主格结构描述主语的状态或动作，增加句子的生动性。
倒装句
例句: "Never before had she felt such a deep connection to the sea."
语法说明: 强调句子的一部分，常用于表达情感。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
焦虑: "Her heart pounded," "her mind raced," "her breath quick and shallow"
紧迫感: "The tension between them growing," "time was precious," "she could feel the weight of time slipping away"
满足与释然: "An overwhelming sense of relief," "a sense of peace settling over her," "a profound sense of accomplishment"
动作描写
急切行动: "Rushed back to the village," "knocked frantically," "grabbed his rope"
拯救过程: "Gently released," "watched the dolphin swim away," "felt a rush of emotion wash over her"
读后续写积累语料
动作描写替换
Hurry → Rush, Sprint, Dash, Race, Run quickly
Help → Assist, Aid, Support, Lend a hand, Rescue
Release → Set free, Liberate, Let go, Unbind, Free
心理描写替换
Worry → Anxiety, Concern, Nervousness, Unease, Apprehension
Relief → Calmness, Peace, Satisfaction, Comfort, Fulfillment
第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In a coastal village named Seaford lived a courageous youngwoman named Amelia. Amelia was known throughout Seaford for her adventurous nature. From the moment she could walk, she would eagerly run towards the crashing waves, feeling the sand between her toes and the cool spray of the ocean moisten her face. She was a woman with a strong will and possessed a heart full of kindness. Amelia's love for the ocean was intense,and she spent most of her days exploring the beautiful beaches and sparkling waters that surrounded her house.
One sunny morning, while Amelia was walking along the shore, she noticed a group of restlessseagulls abnormally circling above the crashing waves. Their unusual calls echoed through the air. Concerned for their well-being, she followed their flight pattern, her instincts guiding her toward danger.
As she approached a towering cliff, Amelia gasped in horror. On a narrow ledge(岩架), high above the violent waves , was a young dolphin trapped in a thick fishing net. Its shiny body shone under the golden rays of the sun, but its freedom was cruelly limited by the trap. With each struggle, the net tightened around its delicate body, leaving painful marks on its skin. Its tail flapped(摆动) helplessly, each movement a request for help, while its desperate cries for assistance echoed through the air.
A sense of urgency filled Amelia, pushing her forward with determination and resolve. Realizing that time was tight, Amelia knew she had to act instantly to free this innocent creature from its difficult position before it submitted to exhaustion or the force of the tides.
注意 ：
1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village.__________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm,welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment.__________________
第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In a coastal village named Seaford(过去分词做后置定语) lived a courageous youngwoman(倒装句) named Amelia(过去分词做后置定语). Amelia was known throughout Seaford for her adventurous nature. From the moment she could walk, she would eagerly run towards the crashing waves, feeling the sand between her toes and the cool spray of the ocean moisten her face(现在分词短语做伴随动作). She was a woman with a strong will(介词短语做后置定语) and possessed a heart full of kindness. Amelia's love for the ocean was intense,and she spent most of her days exploring the beautiful beaches and sparkling waters that surrounded her house(定从)(交代Amelia的背景信息).
One sunny morning, while Amelia was walking along the shore(状从), she noticed a group of restless seagulls abnormally circling above the crashing waves. Their unusual calls echoed through the air(环境描写). Concerned for their well-being(adj短语做主语补语), she followed their flight pattern, her instincts guiding her toward danger(独立主格).
As she approached a towering cliff(状从), Amelia gasped in horror(心理紧张害怕的描写 动作描写). On a narrow ledge(岩架), high above the violent waves , was a young dolphin(倒装句) trapped in a thick fishing net(过去分词短语做后置定语). Its shiny body shone under the golden rays of the sun(海豚的外观描写), but its freedom was cruelly limited by the trap. With each struggle(方式状语), the net tightened around its delicate body, leaving painful marks on its skin(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Its tail flapped(摆动) helplessly(动作描写), each movement a request for help(独立主格), while its desperate cries for assistance echoed through the air(环境动作描写).
A sense of urgency filled Amelia, pushing her forward with determination and resolve(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Realizing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) that time was tight(宾从), Amelia knew she had to act instantly to free this innocent creature from its difficult position(动作描写) before it submitted to exhaustion or the force of the tides(状从).
注意 ：
1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village.__________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm,welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment.__________________
1. 读后续写类型分类与思路构思分析
分类 读后续写类型 续写思路构思 布局与框架提炼 实施步骤 承接原文事项与整体注意事项 巧妙设计续写内容
类型 故事发展型 在原文中，Amelia已发现困境，下一步是解决问题。续写可以围绕“如何帮助困境中的海豚”展开，注重动作的执行与情感的变化 开头段落回到村庄获取帮助，然后回到现场，开始拯救海豚。第二段表现出海豚被释放后的变化，以及Amelia的情感反应 第一段：描述Amelia为拯救海豚返回村庄。第二段：表现海豚被放生后的变化和Amelia内心的满足与感动。 续写需要承接Amelia的果断与紧迫感，保持原文情感的延续与节奏。注意动作描写的连贯性与合理性。 可通过描述海豚被解救后的反应与Amelia的内心活动来展现主题，强调她对自然的关爱与对困难的坚持。
2. 故事山模式分析（Story Mountain）
Story Mountain 思维导图
阶段 描述
介绍 Amelia是一个勇敢的年轻女性，热爱大海，住在Seaford。
激发冲突 在海岸上发现一只海豚被渔网困住，无法自救。
发展 Amelia感到紧迫，决定采取行动，帮助困境中的海豚。
高潮 Amelia返回村庄获取工具或帮助，准备进行解救。
结局 海豚被顺利解救，进入大海，Amelia感受到完成使命后的满足与内心平静。
3. 承接原文和续写内容分析表
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 描述Amelia的勇敢与果断 "Amelia was known throughout Seaford for her adventurous nature."
情感层次 强调Amelia的责任感和急切 "A sense of urgency filled Amelia, pushing her forward with determination and resolve."
关键情节点 海豚被困和Amelia决定帮助它 "On a narrow ledge, high above the violent waves, was a young dolphin trapped in a thick fishing net."
语言特色 强调急迫感与情感，短句和重复表达 "Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village."
关键词分析 勇敢、急迫、困境、解救 "trapped," "urgency," "determination," "struggle," "help"
心理描写 Amelia的焦虑与决心 "Her instincts guiding her toward danger"
动作描写 动作的实施过程 "Amelia rushed back to the village."
环境描写 自然背景的设定，渔网与大海 "On a narrow ledge, high above the violent waves"
隐含主题 人与自然的联系，勇敢与无私 "Her love for the ocean was intense, and she spent most of her days exploring the beautiful beaches."
情感转折 从担忧到解救，最后的释然 "As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters"
空间转换 从海岸到村庄，再回到海岸 "Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village."
时间过渡 快速的决策与行动 "Realizing that time was tight, Amelia knew she had to act instantly."
4. 动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句
动作描写
She sprinted across the beach, determined to find help.
Amelia reached into the net, trying to free the dolphin.
She pulled at the tangled rope with all her strength.
Amelia climbed up the rocks, heart racing.
The wind whipped through her hair as she hurried back to the village.
She knelt beside the dolphin, gently untangling the fishing net.
Amelia took a deep breath, steeling herself for what was to come.
She whispered softly to the dolphin, hoping it would trust her.
心理描写
Amelia’s heart pounded as she realized the urgency of the situation.
She hesitated for a moment, unsure if she could do it.
Amelia felt a rush of determination surging through her veins.
The thought of losing the dolphin filled her with dread.
She knew she had to act quickly, without wasting a second.
Her hands trembled, but she refused to stop.
Amelia’s mind raced, calculating the fastest way to rescue the dolphin.
When the dolphin was finally freed, Amelia felt a wave of relief wash over her.
环境描写
The sun shone brightly, casting a golden glow over the waves.
The sea roared below, the foam crashing against the cliffs.
The wind howled as it swept through the coastal rocks.
The scent of saltwater filled the air as Amelia approached the cliff.
The village lay quiet, nestled between the cliffs and the sea.
The seagulls circled above, their calls echoing through the air.
The violent waves crashed against the shore, relentless in their power.
The narrow ledge jutted out dangerously from the cliffside.
5. 高中语法现象分析
1. 定语从句
例句: "The dolphin that Amelia saw was trapped in the net."
近义词替换: "The dolphin which Amelia discovered was stuck."
语法说明: 定语从句修饰名词，为其提供额外信息。
2. 状语从句
例句: "As the dolphin struggled, Amelia knew she had to act quickly."
近义词替换: "When the dolphin struggled, Amelia realized the urgency."
语法说明: 状语从句提供时间、条件、原因等附加信息。
3. 独立主格结构
例句: "The dolphin, its body shining under the sun, continued to struggle."
近义词替换: "The dolphin, its body glowing, fought against the net."
语法说明: 独立主格结构通常描述句子主语的状态或动作。
Possible Versions
【参考范文】
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village. She grabbed a toolkit, carried a strong rope and hurried back with a group of villagers(动作串描写). Everything was all set before Amelia got down to the rescue(状从). She lowered herself down the cliff little by little with great care(动作描写). Somehow, she felt dizzy and nothing could be seen(宾从).She stopped. The dolphin's desperate cries lingering through the air(独立主格), Amelia summoned up all the courage to proceed(鼓起勇气的描写). Ultimately, she arrived at the ledge. Standing on the ledge(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Amelia's heart pounded, the hands and feet shivering(独立主格 动作心理描写). After much effort, Amelia broke the thick net.With the help of the villagers(方式状语),the innocent creature(对原文的衔接) was let loose(习语) to the shore carefully and safely.
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment. Delicate and painful as the dolphin was(让步状从+倒装句),it went to great lengths to jump(习语), wagging its tail(现在分词短语做伴随动作).Amelia stood there, appearing extremely worn-out(现在分词短语做伴随动作，描写人物). Then, she stepped over to the lovely creature, patting it on the head and kissing it(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The dolphin snuggled(vt依偎，紧抱) up to Amelia, murmuring in a joyful voice(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Amelia waved good-bye to it, feeling relieved(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The sun cast the golden rays on Amelia's face(环境描写反应心理), and she went home in delight. Amelia's story has uplifted more and more people and they have grown valorous, good-natured and persistent.
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village. Her heart pounded(紧张心情描写) as she ran(状从), knowing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) the dolphin’s life was in her hands(宾从). The air was filled with the salty scent of the sea(环境描写), and she could hear the distant cry of seagulls(环境描写 对原文的衔接). She spotted the first house and knocked frantically, begging the fisherman inside to help her(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Without a word, he grabbed his rope and followed her back to the cliffside(动作描写). Their footsteps were quick, driven by the urgency of the situation(过去分词短语做原因状语). The sound of the waves crashing against the rocks(现在分词短语做后置定语) made her feel the weight of time slipping away.(现在分词短语做伴随动作)
Paragraph 2: As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment. Amelia held her breath(动作描写), watching it swim freely(现在分词短语做伴随动作), its sleek body moving gracefully(独立主格). The sun reflected off the water, casting a golden glow on the dolphin’s shimmering skin(现在分词短语做伴随动作)(环境描写). Amelia felt an overwhelming sense of relief and happiness(心理描写). The fisherman smiled at her, his eyes full of admiration(独立主格). She had done it—she had saved a life. As the dolphin disappeared into the vast ocean(状从), she stood still, feeling a deep connection to the sea and all its creatures(现在分词短语做伴随动作).
Version 2
Paragraph 1:
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village, her feet pounding against the sandy shore(独立主格，动作描写). She could feel her heart racing (动作描写)as she thought of the helpless dolphin(状从). The village was small, and every second mattered(习语). Reaching the fisherman's hut(现在分词短语做伴随动作), she knocked on the door with a sense of urgency, explaining the situation(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The fisherman, an older man with a deep knowledge of the sea(介词短语做后置定语), didn’t need any more words. He grabbed his ropes and followed her(动作描写), his face set in determination(独立主格). They raced back to the cliffside,(动作描写) knowing(现在分词做伴随动作) time was running out(宾从).
Paragraph 2:
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment. Amelia’s hands trembled(动作心理描写) as she watched(状从), but she knew the dolphin was free(宾从). With one final glance at her(with复合结构做状语), the creature swam away, its movements graceful and fluid(独立主格). Amelia exhaled deeply(动作描写), feeling a rush of emotion wash over her(现在分词短语做伴随动作，心理描写). She had saved the dolphin, but more than that, she had made a connection with the sea(递进升华句). The fisherman nodded in approval(动作描写), his proud smile saying everything(独立主格) that words couldn’t express. Amelia turned and walked slowly back to the village, a sense of peace settling over her(独立主格).
Version 3
Paragraph 1:
Without hesitation, Amelia rushed back to the village. Her mind raced(心理描写) as she thought of the dolphin trapped on the cliff(过去分词短语做后置定语)(状从). The sound of the ocean roaring behind her(现在分词短语做后置定语) spurred her onward(环境心理描写). She reached the first house she saw(定从), her breath quick and shallow from running(独立主格). With urgency in her voice(介短做方式状语), she told the fisherman what had happened(宾从). Without a second thought(介短做方式状语), he grabbed his rope and followed her. Together, they rushed back to the cliffside, the tension between them growing with each step(独立主格+情绪描写). Time was precious, and they needed to act fast before the dolphin succumbed to the tides(状从).
Paragraph 2:
As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment. Amelia watched, her heart in her throat(独立主格，情绪描写), as the dolphin swam away into the vast ocean(状从). She could feel the weight of the situation lifting (心理描写)as she saw the creature find freedom. The fisherman, too, seemed to breathe easier(动作心理描写). Amelia had succeeded, but it was more than just a rescue—it was a bond with the sea(升华句，递进句式). As she stood on the cliffside(状从), watching the dolphin disappear(现在分词短语做伴随动作), she felt a profound sense of accomplishment and peace(心理描写).
高中语法加分点分析
定语从句
例句1: "The fisherman, who was an older man with a deep knowledge of the sea, didn’t need any more words."
例句2: "The dolphin, which had been struggling in the net, swam away freely."
语法说明: 定语从句用来提供名词的附加信息。
状语从句
例句1: "As the dolphin was gently released into the calm, welcoming waters, it hesitated for a moment."
例句2: "She rushed back to the village because time was running out."
语法说明: 状语从句用于描述时间、原因、条件等。
独立主格结构
例句1: "The dolphin, its body glowing under the sun, swam away."
例句2: "Amelia stood there, her heart pounding with relief."
语法说明 独立主格结构描述主语的状态或动作，增加句子的生动性。
倒装句
例句: "Never before had she felt such a deep connection to the sea."
语法说明: 强调句子的一部分，常用于表达情感。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
焦虑: "Her heart pounded," "her mind raced," "her breath quick and shallow"
紧迫感: "The tension between them growing," "time was precious," "she could feel the weight of time slipping away"
满足与释然: "An overwhelming sense of relief," "a sense of peace settling over her," "a profound sense of accomplishment"
动作描写
急切行动: "Rushed back to the village," "knocked frantically," "grabbed his rope"
拯救过程: "Gently released," "watched the dolphin swim away," "felt a rush of emotion wash over her"
读后续写积累语料
动作描写替换
Hurry → Rush, Sprint, Dash, Race, Run quickly
Help → Assist, Aid, Support, Lend a hand, Rescue
Release → Set free, Liberate, Let go, Unbind, Free
心理描写替换
Worry → Anxiety, Concern, Nervousness, Unease, Apprehension
Relief → Calmness, Peace, Satisfaction, Comfort, Fulfillment
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