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广东省佛山市三校2025届高三1月第一次模拟考试英语试题
47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数为150词左右。
Once upon a time, in an old Italian town, lived a little girl named Piccola. She was an only child, sharing her home with her hardworking mother, who worked as a laundress and cleaner until the late hours of the night.
Her house had a tiny garden, surrounded by a stone wall. She would sit out there and play with a ragged doll. Through a narrow crack (裂缝) in the stone wall, Piccola’s curious gaze often wandered to a neighboring garden filled with laughter, beautiful colors, and the joyful play of three children. Piccola watched in wonder as they danced, sang and played with their brightly colored toys. From that day on, she secretly admired them from afar, but was too shy to talk to them.
One fine morning, though, the youngest of the children saw Piccola’s eye peering through the crack in the garden wall. “Hello!” he said. “Who are you ” Piccola found the courage to speak. “My name is Piccola!” she replied, “I love to watch you play in your beautiful sunny garden!” The little boy called his big brother and sister. They were curious about Piccola, and asked her many questions about her life.
That evening, the children told their father about the mysterious girl who lived next door, and how she was all alone in her house some days. Could she come and play with them Their father got his hammer and chipped a hole in the wall big enough for Piccola to get through.
When she entered the neighbors’ garden, Piccola felt shy about her ragged old dress. She didn’t even have proper shoes to wear, just a pair of simple wooden ones. Piccola needn’t have worried! Her neighbors welcomed her and showed her new games to play. From that day on, they became good friends.
The day before Christmas, her neighbors began to chat about the gifts Father Christmas would bring them. “What do you want on Christmas Piccola,” her neighbors asked. “I hope he will bring me a new doll for Christmas, but I have never received one before,” she felt very depressed. “He knows everything,” the neighbors comforted her.
注意：1．续写词数应为150词左右;
2．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision.
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall.
广东省佛山市三校2025届高三1月第一次模拟考试英语试题
47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数为150词左右。
Once upon a time, in an old Italian town, lived a little girl(倒装句) named Piccola(过去分词短语做后置定语). She was an only child, sharing her home with her hardworking mother(现在分词短语做后置定语), who worked as a laundress and cleaner until the late hours of the night(定从).
Her house had a tiny garden, surrounded by a stone wall(过去分词短语作后置定语). She would sit out there and play with a ragged doll. Through a narrow crack (裂缝) in the stone wall(介词短语做状语), Piccola’s curious gaze often wandered to a neighboring garden(动作描写 反应人物心理，性格) filled(过去分词短语做 后置定语) with laughter, beautiful colors, and the joyful play of three children(并列). Piccola watched in wonder as they danced, sang and played with their brightly colored toys(动作串描写 作对比). From that day on, she secretly admired them from afar, but was too shy to talk to them(动作反应人物性格).
One fine morning, though, the youngest of the children saw Piccola’s eye peering through the crack in the garden wall. “Hello!” he said. “Who are you ” Piccola found the courage to speak. “My name is Piccola!” she replied, “I love to watch you play in your beautiful sunny garden!” The little boy called his big brother and sister. They were curious about Piccola, and asked her many questions about her life.
That evening, the children told their father about the mysterious girl who lived next door(定从), and how she was all alone in her house some days(宾从). Could she come and play with them Their father got his hammer and chipped a hole in the wall big enough for Piccola to get through.
When she entered the neighbors’ garden(状从), Piccola felt shy about her ragged old dress. She didn’t even have proper shoes to wear, just a pair of simple wooden ones. Piccola needn’t have worried! Her neighbors welcomed her and showed her new games to play. From that day on, they became good friends.
The day before Christmas, her neighbors began to chat about the gifts Father Christmas would bring them(定从). “What do you want on Christmas Piccola,” her neighbors asked. “I hope he will bring me a new doll for Christmas(宾从), but I have never received one before,” she felt very depressed(情绪描写). “He knows everything,” the neighbors comforted her.
注意：1．续写词数应为150词左右;
2．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision.
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall.
表格1：读后续写要求分析
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 Piccola是一个孤独且勇敢的小女孩，她向往与邻居孩子们的关系并展现了内心的渴望。 "She secretly admired them from afar, but was too shy to talk to them."
情感层次 情感由孤独转为希望，通过与邻居的互动产生了归属感与友谊。 "From that day on, they became good friends."
关键情节点 Piccola勇敢地与邻居孩子们互动，并且在圣诞节希望得到新玩具。 "I hope he will bring me a new doll for Christmas, but I have never received one before."
语言特色 语言直接、简单且富有情感，表达了Piccola内心的渴望与忧虑。 "She felt very depressed."
关键词分析 "孤独"、"渴望"、"友谊"、"圣诞节" "Mysterious girl," "all alone," "Christmas," "depressed"
心理描写 Piccola因自己贫穷的衣着而感到自卑，但她最终克服了羞怯。 "She didn’t even have proper shoes to wear, just a pair of simple wooden ones."
动作描写 Piccola通过墙洞与邻居接触，克服内心的恐惧，并最终与邻居成为朋友。 "Piccola needn’t have worried! Her neighbors welcomed her and showed her new games to play."
环境描写 文章中的环境展示了一个充满色彩、欢乐的邻里关系与Piccola孤独的小花园。 "She would sit out there and play with a ragged doll."
隐含主题 孤独与渴望的情感，通过邻里关系的互动来表达人与人之间的温情和关爱。 "I love to watch you play in your beautiful sunny garden!"
情感转折 从孤独到获得关爱与友情的转折，特别是在圣诞节这个富有意义的时刻。 "Piccola felt very depressed."
空间转换 从Piccola的小花园到邻居的花园，物理空间的转换象征着心理和情感上的转变。 "Piccola needn’t have worried! Her neighbors welcomed her."
时间过渡 时间的过渡从一个普通的日子到圣诞节，这个节日的氛围承载了更深的意义。 "The day before Christmas, her neighbors began to chat about the gifts Father Christmas would bring them."
Story Mountain 思维导图
Beginning： Piccola watches the neighbors，play from a distance.
Rising Action：Piccola talks to the little boy and becomes friends withthe children.
Climax： Piccola wishes for a new doll for Christmas.
Falling Action：Neighbors plan to get her a Christmas gift.
Resolution ：Piccola receives a new doll.
Possible Versions
Version 1
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. They knew they had to do something special for Piccola(宾从). The next day, they all gathered secretly in the garden, with the father at the lead(with复合结构). They decided to work together to give Piccola a wonderful Christmas surprise. The father went to the village and bought a beautiful doll. The older brother and sister made colorful clothes for it, and they all carefully wrapped it with a big bow. They were excited to see Piccola’s reaction, and they hoped the gift would bring her the happiness(宾从) she had always longed for(定语从句).
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. She rushed to the hole, her heart beating fast(独立主格). To her surprise, the children were there, holding a beautifully wrapped gift in their hands(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The father smiled kindly as he handed her the doll(状从), saying(现在分词短语做伴随动作), "Merry Christmas, Piccola! May your heart be as full as this gift." Piccola’s eyes filled with tears of joy(状态心理描写) as she hugged the doll tightly(状从 动作描写). She couldn’t believe her dream had come true(宾从). From that moment on, Christmas became the most cherished day of her life.
高中语法加分点分析
定语从句
例句: "The father went to the village and bought a beautiful doll that he knew would make Piccola happy."
语法说明: 定语从句为句子提供更多的细节和信息，增强句子表达的清晰度。
状语从句
例句: "They were excited because they hoped the gift would bring her the happiness she had always longed for."
语法说明: 状语从句描述时间、原因、条件等，用于连接句子，丰富意思。
倒装句
例句: "Never before had Piccola received such a precious gift."
语法说明: 倒装句常用于强调，增加句子的表达效果。
独立主格结构
例句: "Piccola, her heart racing with excitement, reached for the gift."
语法说明: 独立主格结构用来描述人物的状态或行动。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
喜悦: "Her eyes filled with tears of joy," "she hugged the doll tightly," "Piccola couldn’t believe her dream had come true."
惊讶: "Piccola’s heart beat fast," "she rushed to the hole, her heart beating fast."
期待: "They were excited to see Piccola’s reaction," "they hoped the gift would bring her the happiness she had always longed for."
动作描写
赠送礼物: "Handed her the doll," "carefully wrapped it with a big bow," "made colorful clothes for it."
互动: "The children were there, holding a beautifully wrapped gift in their hands," "Piccola rushed to the hole."
读后续写积累语料
动作描写替换
Give → Present, Hand over, Offer, Pass, Deliver
Rush → Hurry, Sprint, Dash, Race, Rush forward
Hug → Embrace, Hold tightly, Cling to, Squeeze, Cuddle
心理描写替换
Excitement → Joy, Happiness, Thrill, Eagerness, Enthusiasm
Surprise → Astonishment, Shock, Amazement, Wonder, Startle
Version 2
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. They knew they had to do something special for Piccola(宾从). With a sense of urgency(介短状语), they quickly gathered and made plans for a surprise. The father, who was a skilled carpenter(定从), took it upon himself to repair the broken hole in the wall and make it wider. The children helped by collecting ribbons and wrapping paper to decorate the surprise gift. They were filled with excitement, eager to see Piccola’s reaction(adj做补语). As the day of Christmas drew near(状从), the whole family worked together in secret, determined to bring joy to the lonely girl next door(adj做补语或状语).
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. She rushed over, heart pounding in her chest(独立主格). To her astonishment(情绪描写), the children were standing there, holding a beautifully wrapped gift(现在分词做伴随动作). The father smiled warmly, handing it to her with a gentle(现在分词短语做伴随动作), "Merry Christmas, Piccola! We hope this gift brings you joy(宾从)." Piccola felt tears of happiness spring to her eyes as she carefully unwrapped the present. Inside, she found a beautiful doll, something she had always dreamed of(定从). She hugged the doll tightly(动作描写), overwhelmed with gratitude and love(过去分词短语做原因状语). From that moment on, Piccola realized that Christmas was not just about receiving gifts, but about the kindness and warmth of the people around her(宾从 递进句式).
亮点语法与词汇分析
定语从句
例句: "The father, who was a skilled carpenter, took it upon himself to repair the broken hole in the wall."
语法说明: 定语从句提供了更多的背景信息，帮助描述人物特点。
倒装句
例句: "Never before had Piccola felt so loved."
语法说明: 倒装句用于加强语气和强调感情。
状语从句
例句: "As the day of Christmas drew near, the whole family worked together in secret."
语法说明: 状语从句描述时间，补充了句子的背景信息。
独立主格
例句: "Piccola, her hands trembling with excitement, slowly unwrapped the gift."
语法说明: 独立主格用于描述主语的状态。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
惊讶: "To her astonishment," "heart pounding in her chest"
喜悦: "Tears of happiness sprang to her eyes," "overwhelmed with gratitude"
感动: "She hugged the doll tightly, overwhelmed with gratitude and love."
动作描写
赠送礼物: "Handing it to her with a gentle smile," "carefully unwrapped the present"
互动: "Rushed over, heart pounding in her chest," "worked together in secret"
读后续写积累语料
动作描写替换
Give → Present, Hand over, Offer, Pass, Deliver
Hug → Embrace, Squeeze, Hold tightly, Cling to, Cuddle
Rush → Dash, Hurry, Sprint, Race, Rush forward
心理描写替换
Happiness → Joy, Delight, Ecstasy, Thrill, Bliss
Gratitude → Thankfulness, Appreciation, Recognition, Gratefulness, Acknowledgment
高级词汇与替换
Tears → Droplets, Streams, Tears of joy, Eyes welling up, Moist eyes
Heart pounding → Heart racing, Heart throbbing, Thumping heart, Racing pulse, Beating loudly
Version 3
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. They realized that Piccola had never experienced the joy of receiving a gift on Christmas, and they were determined to change that(宾从). The father suggested they surprise Piccola with a gift(宾从) that she would never forget(定从). They all pitched in and secretly bought a beautiful doll(动作描写). The children decorated it with colorful clothes, and they made sure to wrap it in the finest paper they could find(定从). They couldn’t wait to see the look on Piccola’s face when she saw the gift.(情绪描写 状从) The whole family worked together, and the atmosphere was filled with excitement and anticipation.
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. She quickly ran to answer it(动作描写对原文的衔接), unsure of what to expect(情绪描写 adj做状语+宾从). When she opened the hole(状从), she was greeted by the smiling faces of her new friends. The father handed her the gift, and she could hardly believe her eyes(习语). "Merry Christmas, Piccola!" the children said in unison. Piccola carefully unwrapped the doll, her heart racing with joy(独立主格). She had never received a gift like this before. As she held the doll close(状从 动作描写), tears of happiness filled her eyes(情绪描写). She realized that Christmas was more than just about receiving presents – it was about the love and kindness shared among friends(宾从 递进句式).
亮点语法与词汇分析
宾语从句
例句: "The father suggested that they surprise Piccola with a gift she would never forget."
语法说明: 宾语从句用于描述父亲的建议，提供了核心内容。
状语从句
例句: "When she opened the hole, she was greeted by the smiling faces of her new friends."
语法说明: 状语从句描述动作发生的时间背景。
定语从句
例句: "The children decorated it with colorful clothes, which made it even more special."
语法说明: 定语从句提供了对名词“衣服”的进一步描述。
倒装句
例句: "Hardly had Piccola unwrapped the gift when she began to cry."
语法说明: 倒装句用于强调动作发生的突然性。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
惊喜: "Piccola could hardly believe her eyes," "Her heart racing with joy"
感动: "Tears of happiness filled her eyes," "She realized Christmas was about the love and kindness"
动作描写
开礼物: "Carefully unwrapped the doll," "Held the doll close"
互动: "Smiling faces," "Handed her the gift"
Version 4
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. They decided that they would do everything in their power to make Piccola feel loved and appreciated(宾从 make sb do sth). The father went into town to buy a beautiful doll, while the children worked together to prepare a festive surprise for her(宾从). They decorated the garden with sparkling lights and wrapped the doll in a warm blanket. The whole family was full of excitement, knowing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) that they were about to make Piccola’s Christmas unforgettable(宾从). They couldn’t wait to share the joy of the season with her and show her that she was not alone in the world(宾从).
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. She hurried over, her heart racing with anticipation(独立主格). When she opened the hole(状从), she was greeted by her new friends, who were holding a gift in their hands(定从). With a big smile(方式状语), the father handed the doll to Piccola. "Merry Christmas!" they all said. Piccola couldn’t hold back her tears(动作情绪描写) as she carefully unwrapped the gift(状从). Inside, she found the doll she had always dreamed of(定从). She hugged it tightly, overwhelmed by the kindness of her neighbors(过去分词短语做原因状语). This Christmas, Piccola learned that the true spirit of the season was about love, kindness, and the bonds(宾从) that tie people together(定从).
亮点语法与词汇分析
宾语从句
例句: "They decided that they would do everything in their power to make Piccola feel loved."
语法说明: 宾语从句进一步解释了人物的决定和意图。
状语从句
例句: "When she opened the hole, she was greeted by her new friends."
语法说明: 状语从句描述了动作发生的条件。
独立主格
例句: "Piccola, her heart racing with anticipation, rushed to the hole."
语法说明: 独立主格结构表达了Piccola的心理状态。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
激动: "Her heart racing with anticipation," "Overwhelmed by the kindness"
喜悦: "Piccola couldn’t hold back her tears," "She hugged it tightly"
动作描写
准备礼物: "Wrapped the doll in a warm blanket," "Decorated the garden with sparkling lights"
接收礼物: "Opened the hole," "Rushed to the hole"
官方作文：
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. Secretly, they pooled their pocket money(筹钱动作) and set out to the local toy store. There, they carefully selected a beautiful doll, dressed in the finest clothes(过去分词短语做后置定语), with a sweet smile that seemed to promise endless joy(定从). On Christmas Eve, as snowflakes gently danced in the air(状从 环境描写), Piccola sat in her tiny garden, feeling a twinge of sadness thinking about her unfulfilled wish(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Little did she know(倒装句), her friends’ thoughtful gesture would soon turn her sadness into pure joy.
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. Excitedly, she peered out to find her new friends standing there, holding a beautifully wrapped present(现在分词短语做伴随动作). “Merry Christmas, Piccola!” they exclaimed in unison. “We wanted to make sure Santa didn’t forget you this year(宾从).” With trembling hands(介词短语做方式状语), Piccola unwrapped the gift to reveal the exquisite doll, her eyes widening in disbelief and joy(独立主格). Overcome with emotion(过去分词短语做原因状语), she hugged the doll tightly, tears of happiness streaming down her cheeks(独立主格). “Thank you so much,” she whispered, her heart filled with gratitude and the warmth of newfound friendship(独立主格). That Christmas, Piccola learned that sometimes the best gifts come from the kindness of others(宾从).
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了从前，在一个古老的意大利小镇上，住着一个名叫皮卡拉的小女孩。她是家里的独生女，和勤劳的母亲住在一起，母亲做洗衣工和清洁工，工作到深夜。女孩的房子有一个小花园，四周有一堵石墙，她会从墙上的一条缝隙看其他孩子玩耍，邻居得知了她的处境后，给她买了圣诞节礼物，把她的悲伤变成了纯粹的快乐。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“她走后，邻居们面面相觑，然后做了一个决定”可知，第一段可描写邻居们买礼物的经过以及皮卡拉的感受。
②由第二段首句内容“圣诞节的早晨，皮科拉听到有人敲墙上刚加宽的洞”可知，第二段可描写孩子们给皮卡拉送去了礼物，皮卡拉了解到，有时候最好的礼物来自他人的善意。
2.续写线索：邻居们挑选礼物——皮卡拉感到悲伤——邻居们送礼物——皮卡拉感动和感谢——皮卡拉感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①出发：set out/depart
②挑选：select/pick out
③确保：make sure/ensure
情绪类
①快乐：joy/happiness
②体贴：thoughtful/considerate
【点睛】[高分句型1] On Christmas Eve, as snowflakes gently danced in the air, Piccola sat in her tiny garden, feeling a twinge of sadness thinking about her unfulfilled wish. (运用了as引导时间状语从句)
[高分句型2] Overcome with emotion, she hugged the doll tightly, tears of happiness streaming down her cheeks. (运用了独立主格结构)
47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数为150词左右。
Once upon a time, in an old Italian town, lived a little girl named Piccola. She was an only child, sharing her home with her hardworking mother, who worked as a laundress and cleaner until the late hours of the night.
Her house had a tiny garden, surrounded by a stone wall. She would sit out there and play with a ragged doll. Through a narrow crack (裂缝) in the stone wall, Piccola’s curious gaze often wandered to a neighboring garden filled with laughter, beautiful colors, and the joyful play of three children. Piccola watched in wonder as they danced, sang and played with their brightly colored toys. From that day on, she secretly admired them from afar, but was too shy to talk to them.
One fine morning, though, the youngest of the children saw Piccola’s eye peering through the crack in the garden wall. “Hello!” he said. “Who are you ” Piccola found the courage to speak. “My name is Piccola!” she replied, “I love to watch you play in your beautiful sunny garden!” The little boy called his big brother and sister. They were curious about Piccola, and asked her many questions about her life.
That evening, the children told their father about the mysterious girl who lived next door, and how she was all alone in her house some days. Could she come and play with them Their father got his hammer and chipped a hole in the wall big enough for Piccola to get through.
When she entered the neighbors’ garden, Piccola felt shy about her ragged old dress. She didn’t even have proper shoes to wear, just a pair of simple wooden ones. Piccola needn’t have worried! Her neighbors welcomed her and showed her new games to play. From that day on, they became good friends.
The day before Christmas, her neighbors began to chat about the gifts Father Christmas would bring them. “What do you want on Christmas Piccola,” her neighbors asked. “I hope he will bring me a new doll for Christmas, but I have never received one before,” she felt very depressed. “He knows everything,” the neighbors comforted her.
注意：1．续写词数应为150词左右;
2．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision.
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall.
广东省佛山市三校2025届高三1月第一次模拟考试英语试题
47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数为150词左右。
Once upon a time, in an old Italian town, lived a little girl(倒装句) named Piccola(过去分词短语做后置定语). She was an only child, sharing her home with her hardworking mother(现在分词短语做后置定语), who worked as a laundress and cleaner until the late hours of the night(定从).
Her house had a tiny garden, surrounded by a stone wall(过去分词短语作后置定语). She would sit out there and play with a ragged doll. Through a narrow crack (裂缝) in the stone wall(介词短语做状语), Piccola’s curious gaze often wandered to a neighboring garden(动作描写 反应人物心理，性格) filled(过去分词短语做 后置定语) with laughter, beautiful colors, and the joyful play of three children(并列). Piccola watched in wonder as they danced, sang and played with their brightly colored toys(动作串描写 作对比). From that day on, she secretly admired them from afar, but was too shy to talk to them(动作反应人物性格).
One fine morning, though, the youngest of the children saw Piccola’s eye peering through the crack in the garden wall. “Hello!” he said. “Who are you ” Piccola found the courage to speak. “My name is Piccola!” she replied, “I love to watch you play in your beautiful sunny garden!” The little boy called his big brother and sister. They were curious about Piccola, and asked her many questions about her life.
That evening, the children told their father about the mysterious girl who lived next door(定从), and how she was all alone in her house some days(宾从). Could she come and play with them Their father got his hammer and chipped a hole in the wall big enough for Piccola to get through.
When she entered the neighbors’ garden(状从), Piccola felt shy about her ragged old dress. She didn’t even have proper shoes to wear, just a pair of simple wooden ones. Piccola needn’t have worried! Her neighbors welcomed her and showed her new games to play. From that day on, they became good friends.
The day before Christmas, her neighbors began to chat about the gifts Father Christmas would bring them(定从). “What do you want on Christmas Piccola,” her neighbors asked. “I hope he will bring me a new doll for Christmas(宾从), but I have never received one before,” she felt very depressed(情绪描写). “He knows everything,” the neighbors comforted her.
注意：1．续写词数应为150词左右;
2．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision.
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall.
表格1：读后续写要求分析
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 Piccola是一个孤独且勇敢的小女孩，她向往与邻居孩子们的关系并展现了内心的渴望。 "She secretly admired them from afar, but was too shy to talk to them."
情感层次 情感由孤独转为希望，通过与邻居的互动产生了归属感与友谊。 "From that day on, they became good friends."
关键情节点 Piccola勇敢地与邻居孩子们互动，并且在圣诞节希望得到新玩具。 "I hope he will bring me a new doll for Christmas, but I have never received one before."
语言特色 语言直接、简单且富有情感，表达了Piccola内心的渴望与忧虑。 "She felt very depressed."
关键词分析 "孤独"、"渴望"、"友谊"、"圣诞节" "Mysterious girl," "all alone," "Christmas," "depressed"
心理描写 Piccola因自己贫穷的衣着而感到自卑，但她最终克服了羞怯。 "She didn’t even have proper shoes to wear, just a pair of simple wooden ones."
动作描写 Piccola通过墙洞与邻居接触，克服内心的恐惧，并最终与邻居成为朋友。 "Piccola needn’t have worried! Her neighbors welcomed her and showed her new games to play."
环境描写 文章中的环境展示了一个充满色彩、欢乐的邻里关系与Piccola孤独的小花园。 "She would sit out there and play with a ragged doll."
隐含主题 孤独与渴望的情感，通过邻里关系的互动来表达人与人之间的温情和关爱。 "I love to watch you play in your beautiful sunny garden!"
情感转折 从孤独到获得关爱与友情的转折，特别是在圣诞节这个富有意义的时刻。 "Piccola felt very depressed."
空间转换 从Piccola的小花园到邻居的花园，物理空间的转换象征着心理和情感上的转变。 "Piccola needn’t have worried! Her neighbors welcomed her."
时间过渡 时间的过渡从一个普通的日子到圣诞节，这个节日的氛围承载了更深的意义。 "The day before Christmas, her neighbors began to chat about the gifts Father Christmas would bring them."
Story Mountain 思维导图
Beginning： Piccola watches the neighbors，play from a distance.
Rising Action：Piccola talks to the little boy and becomes friends withthe children.
Climax： Piccola wishes for a new doll for Christmas.
Falling Action：Neighbors plan to get her a Christmas gift.
Resolution ：Piccola receives a new doll.
Possible Versions
Version 1
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. They knew they had to do something special for Piccola(宾从). The next day, they all gathered secretly in the garden, with the father at the lead(with复合结构). They decided to work together to give Piccola a wonderful Christmas surprise. The father went to the village and bought a beautiful doll. The older brother and sister made colorful clothes for it, and they all carefully wrapped it with a big bow. They were excited to see Piccola’s reaction, and they hoped the gift would bring her the happiness(宾从) she had always longed for(定语从句).
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. She rushed to the hole, her heart beating fast(独立主格). To her surprise, the children were there, holding a beautifully wrapped gift in their hands(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The father smiled kindly as he handed her the doll(状从), saying(现在分词短语做伴随动作), "Merry Christmas, Piccola! May your heart be as full as this gift." Piccola’s eyes filled with tears of joy(状态心理描写) as she hugged the doll tightly(状从 动作描写). She couldn’t believe her dream had come true(宾从). From that moment on, Christmas became the most cherished day of her life.
高中语法加分点分析
定语从句
例句: "The father went to the village and bought a beautiful doll that he knew would make Piccola happy."
语法说明: 定语从句为句子提供更多的细节和信息，增强句子表达的清晰度。
状语从句
例句: "They were excited because they hoped the gift would bring her the happiness she had always longed for."
语法说明: 状语从句描述时间、原因、条件等，用于连接句子，丰富意思。
倒装句
例句: "Never before had Piccola received such a precious gift."
语法说明: 倒装句常用于强调，增加句子的表达效果。
独立主格结构
例句: "Piccola, her heart racing with excitement, reached for the gift."
语法说明: 独立主格结构用来描述人物的状态或行动。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
喜悦: "Her eyes filled with tears of joy," "she hugged the doll tightly," "Piccola couldn’t believe her dream had come true."
惊讶: "Piccola’s heart beat fast," "she rushed to the hole, her heart beating fast."
期待: "They were excited to see Piccola’s reaction," "they hoped the gift would bring her the happiness she had always longed for."
动作描写
赠送礼物: "Handed her the doll," "carefully wrapped it with a big bow," "made colorful clothes for it."
互动: "The children were there, holding a beautifully wrapped gift in their hands," "Piccola rushed to the hole."
读后续写积累语料
动作描写替换
Give → Present, Hand over, Offer, Pass, Deliver
Rush → Hurry, Sprint, Dash, Race, Rush forward
Hug → Embrace, Hold tightly, Cling to, Squeeze, Cuddle
心理描写替换
Excitement → Joy, Happiness, Thrill, Eagerness, Enthusiasm
Surprise → Astonishment, Shock, Amazement, Wonder, Startle
Version 2
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. They knew they had to do something special for Piccola(宾从). With a sense of urgency(介短状语), they quickly gathered and made plans for a surprise. The father, who was a skilled carpenter(定从), took it upon himself to repair the broken hole in the wall and make it wider. The children helped by collecting ribbons and wrapping paper to decorate the surprise gift. They were filled with excitement, eager to see Piccola’s reaction(adj做补语). As the day of Christmas drew near(状从), the whole family worked together in secret, determined to bring joy to the lonely girl next door(adj做补语或状语).
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. She rushed over, heart pounding in her chest(独立主格). To her astonishment(情绪描写), the children were standing there, holding a beautifully wrapped gift(现在分词做伴随动作). The father smiled warmly, handing it to her with a gentle(现在分词短语做伴随动作), "Merry Christmas, Piccola! We hope this gift brings you joy(宾从)." Piccola felt tears of happiness spring to her eyes as she carefully unwrapped the present. Inside, she found a beautiful doll, something she had always dreamed of(定从). She hugged the doll tightly(动作描写), overwhelmed with gratitude and love(过去分词短语做原因状语). From that moment on, Piccola realized that Christmas was not just about receiving gifts, but about the kindness and warmth of the people around her(宾从 递进句式).
亮点语法与词汇分析
定语从句
例句: "The father, who was a skilled carpenter, took it upon himself to repair the broken hole in the wall."
语法说明: 定语从句提供了更多的背景信息，帮助描述人物特点。
倒装句
例句: "Never before had Piccola felt so loved."
语法说明: 倒装句用于加强语气和强调感情。
状语从句
例句: "As the day of Christmas drew near, the whole family worked together in secret."
语法说明: 状语从句描述时间，补充了句子的背景信息。
独立主格
例句: "Piccola, her hands trembling with excitement, slowly unwrapped the gift."
语法说明: 独立主格用于描述主语的状态。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
惊讶: "To her astonishment," "heart pounding in her chest"
喜悦: "Tears of happiness sprang to her eyes," "overwhelmed with gratitude"
感动: "She hugged the doll tightly, overwhelmed with gratitude and love."
动作描写
赠送礼物: "Handing it to her with a gentle smile," "carefully unwrapped the present"
互动: "Rushed over, heart pounding in her chest," "worked together in secret"
读后续写积累语料
动作描写替换
Give → Present, Hand over, Offer, Pass, Deliver
Hug → Embrace, Squeeze, Hold tightly, Cling to, Cuddle
Rush → Dash, Hurry, Sprint, Race, Rush forward
心理描写替换
Happiness → Joy, Delight, Ecstasy, Thrill, Bliss
Gratitude → Thankfulness, Appreciation, Recognition, Gratefulness, Acknowledgment
高级词汇与替换
Tears → Droplets, Streams, Tears of joy, Eyes welling up, Moist eyes
Heart pounding → Heart racing, Heart throbbing, Thumping heart, Racing pulse, Beating loudly
Version 3
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. They realized that Piccola had never experienced the joy of receiving a gift on Christmas, and they were determined to change that(宾从). The father suggested they surprise Piccola with a gift(宾从) that she would never forget(定从). They all pitched in and secretly bought a beautiful doll(动作描写). The children decorated it with colorful clothes, and they made sure to wrap it in the finest paper they could find(定从). They couldn’t wait to see the look on Piccola’s face when she saw the gift.(情绪描写 状从) The whole family worked together, and the atmosphere was filled with excitement and anticipation.
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. She quickly ran to answer it(动作描写对原文的衔接), unsure of what to expect(情绪描写 adj做状语+宾从). When she opened the hole(状从), she was greeted by the smiling faces of her new friends. The father handed her the gift, and she could hardly believe her eyes(习语). "Merry Christmas, Piccola!" the children said in unison. Piccola carefully unwrapped the doll, her heart racing with joy(独立主格). She had never received a gift like this before. As she held the doll close(状从 动作描写), tears of happiness filled her eyes(情绪描写). She realized that Christmas was more than just about receiving presents – it was about the love and kindness shared among friends(宾从 递进句式).
亮点语法与词汇分析
宾语从句
例句: "The father suggested that they surprise Piccola with a gift she would never forget."
语法说明: 宾语从句用于描述父亲的建议，提供了核心内容。
状语从句
例句: "When she opened the hole, she was greeted by the smiling faces of her new friends."
语法说明: 状语从句描述动作发生的时间背景。
定语从句
例句: "The children decorated it with colorful clothes, which made it even more special."
语法说明: 定语从句提供了对名词“衣服”的进一步描述。
倒装句
例句: "Hardly had Piccola unwrapped the gift when she began to cry."
语法说明: 倒装句用于强调动作发生的突然性。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
惊喜: "Piccola could hardly believe her eyes," "Her heart racing with joy"
感动: "Tears of happiness filled her eyes," "She realized Christmas was about the love and kindness"
动作描写
开礼物: "Carefully unwrapped the doll," "Held the doll close"
互动: "Smiling faces," "Handed her the gift"
Version 4
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. They decided that they would do everything in their power to make Piccola feel loved and appreciated(宾从 make sb do sth). The father went into town to buy a beautiful doll, while the children worked together to prepare a festive surprise for her(宾从). They decorated the garden with sparkling lights and wrapped the doll in a warm blanket. The whole family was full of excitement, knowing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) that they were about to make Piccola’s Christmas unforgettable(宾从). They couldn’t wait to share the joy of the season with her and show her that she was not alone in the world(宾从).
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. She hurried over, her heart racing with anticipation(独立主格). When she opened the hole(状从), she was greeted by her new friends, who were holding a gift in their hands(定从). With a big smile(方式状语), the father handed the doll to Piccola. "Merry Christmas!" they all said. Piccola couldn’t hold back her tears(动作情绪描写) as she carefully unwrapped the gift(状从). Inside, she found the doll she had always dreamed of(定从). She hugged it tightly, overwhelmed by the kindness of her neighbors(过去分词短语做原因状语). This Christmas, Piccola learned that the true spirit of the season was about love, kindness, and the bonds(宾从) that tie people together(定从).
亮点语法与词汇分析
宾语从句
例句: "They decided that they would do everything in their power to make Piccola feel loved."
语法说明: 宾语从句进一步解释了人物的决定和意图。
状语从句
例句: "When she opened the hole, she was greeted by her new friends."
语法说明: 状语从句描述了动作发生的条件。
独立主格
例句: "Piccola, her heart racing with anticipation, rushed to the hole."
语法说明: 独立主格结构表达了Piccola的心理状态。
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇短语
情绪描写
激动: "Her heart racing with anticipation," "Overwhelmed by the kindness"
喜悦: "Piccola couldn’t hold back her tears," "She hugged it tightly"
动作描写
准备礼物: "Wrapped the doll in a warm blanket," "Decorated the garden with sparkling lights"
接收礼物: "Opened the hole," "Rushed to the hole"
官方作文：
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After she left, the neighbors looked at each other and then made a decision. Secretly, they pooled their pocket money(筹钱动作) and set out to the local toy store. There, they carefully selected a beautiful doll, dressed in the finest clothes(过去分词短语做后置定语), with a sweet smile that seemed to promise endless joy(定从). On Christmas Eve, as snowflakes gently danced in the air(状从 环境描写), Piccola sat in her tiny garden, feeling a twinge of sadness thinking about her unfulfilled wish(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Little did she know(倒装句), her friends’ thoughtful gesture would soon turn her sadness into pure joy.
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On Christmas morning, Piccola heard a knock on the newly widened hole in the wall. Excitedly, she peered out to find her new friends standing there, holding a beautifully wrapped present(现在分词短语做伴随动作). “Merry Christmas, Piccola!” they exclaimed in unison. “We wanted to make sure Santa didn’t forget you this year(宾从).” With trembling hands(介词短语做方式状语), Piccola unwrapped the gift to reveal the exquisite doll, her eyes widening in disbelief and joy(独立主格). Overcome with emotion(过去分词短语做原因状语), she hugged the doll tightly, tears of happiness streaming down her cheeks(独立主格). “Thank you so much,” she whispered, her heart filled with gratitude and the warmth of newfound friendship(独立主格). That Christmas, Piccola learned that sometimes the best gifts come from the kindness of others(宾从).
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了从前，在一个古老的意大利小镇上，住着一个名叫皮卡拉的小女孩。她是家里的独生女，和勤劳的母亲住在一起，母亲做洗衣工和清洁工，工作到深夜。女孩的房子有一个小花园，四周有一堵石墙，她会从墙上的一条缝隙看其他孩子玩耍，邻居得知了她的处境后，给她买了圣诞节礼物，把她的悲伤变成了纯粹的快乐。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“她走后，邻居们面面相觑，然后做了一个决定”可知，第一段可描写邻居们买礼物的经过以及皮卡拉的感受。
②由第二段首句内容“圣诞节的早晨，皮科拉听到有人敲墙上刚加宽的洞”可知，第二段可描写孩子们给皮卡拉送去了礼物，皮卡拉了解到，有时候最好的礼物来自他人的善意。
2.续写线索：邻居们挑选礼物——皮卡拉感到悲伤——邻居们送礼物——皮卡拉感动和感谢——皮卡拉感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①出发：set out/depart
②挑选：select/pick out
③确保：make sure/ensure
情绪类
①快乐：joy/happiness
②体贴：thoughtful/considerate
【点睛】[高分句型1] On Christmas Eve, as snowflakes gently danced in the air, Piccola sat in her tiny garden, feeling a twinge of sadness thinking about her unfulfilled wish. (运用了as引导时间状语从句)
[高分句型2] Overcome with emotion, she hugged the doll tightly, tears of happiness streaming down her cheeks. (运用了独立主格结构)
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