读后续写--夹克与支票：邻里间的温暖救赎 讲义-广东省汕尾市四校联考2024-2025学年高三上学期10月考试英语试题

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Steven Green was a hard-working man who worked all his life to support his family. He never finished college, so he had to take hard labor jobs around the neighborhood. He worked as a builder and a carpenter through the years. He often helped his neighbors whenever he was needed. However, as he grew older, he could no longer do these jobs. His knees grew weak, and his health condition made it difficult for him to do hard work.
Steven’s kids didn’t live in the same state as him and could only send him a small sum of money because they also led a poor life. Unfortunately, Steven experienced constant physical pain after years of hard work, and he needed to take medicine every day. The money offered by his kids was only enough for food, and his savings were small. Realizing that he needed more money, Steven decided to get a job again. He eventually found a job as a doorkeeper. At first, his salary was enough to pay for the groceries and the medicine he needed. However, due to his advanced age, he started to need more medicine, which cost a lot.
To pay the growing bills, Steven began to take items from his home to a second-hand store to get some money. One day, as he was carrying an old radio to the store, his neighbor, Ben, saw him. “Mr. Green, it’s so good to see you! How have you been ” Ben asked. “I’m doing great. I’m just selling some stuff at home that I don’t need anymore for some cash. Being weak is terrible when you’re old, so take care of yourself when you are young, alright ” he said almost jokingly. Ben nodded.
“Thanks for the tip, Mr. Green!” he said before waving goodbye. That same day, Steven was cooking dinner when he heard the doorbell ring. Not expecting anyone, he walked curiously to the door.
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Surprisingly, he saw Ben standing there with a jacket in his arms.
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“Ben must have forgotten about the check in the pocket,” Steven thought.
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一、文章大意
史蒂文 格林一生辛勤工作养家，因未完成大学学业，从事建筑工和木匠等体力活。随着年龄增长，身体状况不佳，无法继续这类工作。他的孩子生活贫困，只能给他寄少量钱，而他因多年劳作身体疼痛，每日需服药，钱不够用。于是他找了门卫的工作，后来药费增加，他开始变卖家中物品。一天，邻居本看到他拿着旧收音机去二手店，两人交谈后，当天史蒂文做饭时门铃响了。
二、故事山分析
开端：史蒂文一生辛苦工作，年老后身体衰弱，孩子贫困无法给予足够经济支持，他面临经济困境。
发展：史蒂文找了门卫工作，后因药费增加，开始变卖家中物品维持生计。
高潮：邻居本看到史蒂文拿着旧物去二手店，当天史蒂文做饭时门铃响，悬念产生。
结局（续写方向）：门铃响后发生的事，可能是本给予帮助，也可能是其他与解决史蒂文经济困境相关的情节，以及史蒂文的反应和后续生活变化。
三、伏笔及在续写中的回应
伏笔 1：史蒂文孩子生活贫困，只能给他寄少量钱 。回应：可能促使邻居或其他人更加同情他，从而在续写中给予帮助。
伏笔 2：史蒂文因健康问题需要更多药物，费用增加 。回应：是他经济困境加剧的原因，续写中可能围绕解决药费问题展开，比如有人帮忙支付药费。
伏笔 3：史蒂文开始变卖家中物品 。回应：这一行为被本看到，可能引发本的关心，在续写中本可能针对他变卖物品这一情况采取行动。
伏笔 4：史蒂文与本的对话 。回应：两人的交流可能使本更了解史蒂文的困境，为续写中本的帮助行为做铺垫。
伏笔 5：门铃响起 。回应：这是续写的起点，门铃响后出现的人及发生的事是续写关键，很可能是本带着对史蒂文有帮助的东西再次出现。
四、续写要点
第一段
着重描写本带着夹克出现的场景，包括本的表情、动作，如本微笑着，眼神中带着关切，将夹克递给史蒂文，说这是自己不怎么穿的，希望史蒂文收下。同时描写史蒂文的惊讶反应，他可能一时愣住，不知所措，然后礼貌地推辞。
第二段
围绕史蒂文发现夹克口袋里的支票展开，描写他的心理活动，如震惊、感动，他可能会想本怎么会如此慷慨。接着可以写史蒂文决定去找本，当面感谢，或者以自己的方式表达对本帮助的感激，两人的互动进一步展现邻里间的温暖。
五、情感线
起初史蒂文因经济困境和身体状况感到无奈和焦虑，在与本交流时保持乐观态度，当门铃响看到本带着夹克出现时感到惊讶，发现支票后是满满的感动，最后因本的帮助内心充满温暖，对未来生活重新燃起希望，情感从消极逐渐转向积极。
六、故事线
史蒂文的工作经历及年老后的困境。
史蒂文找工作及药费增加后的应对（变卖物品）。
本看到史蒂文变卖物品及两人的交流。
门铃响后本带着夹克出现。
史蒂文发现夹克口袋里的支票。
史蒂文对本帮助的回应及后续生活的变化。
七、主旨升华句（英文）
In the face of hardships, a small act of kindness from a neighbor can light up the darkest days, just like Ben's help to Steven.
True neighbors are those who notice the struggles of others and reach out a helping hand without hesitation, as Ben did for Steven.
Even in poverty and old age, the warmth of human connection can bring hope and strength, as demonstrated by the relationship between Steven and Ben.
A simple gesture of giving, like the jacket with a hidden check, can change someone's life and show the beauty of humanity in the community.
Hard times may test us, but the kindness and compassion of others, such as Ben's towards Steven, can make us believe in the goodness of the world.
八、写作示范
示范一
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Surprisingly, he saw Ben standing there with a jacket in his arms. Ben smiled warmly and said, “Mr. Green, I found this old jacket in my closet. I don't wear it anymore, and I thought it might be useful to you.” Steven was taken aback, his eyes widening in surprise. He stammered, “Oh, Ben, that's so kind of you, but I can't just take it.” Ben insisted, pushing the jacket into Steven's hands. “Please, Mr. Green. It's really of no use to me.” Steven finally accepted it, his heart filled with gratitude.
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“Ben must have forgotten about the check in the pocket,” Steven thought. As he unfolded the jacket to put it away, a check fluttered out. His eyes bulged when he saw the amount. It was enough to cover his medicine expenses for months. Overwhelmed with emotions, Steven decided to go to Ben's house right away. When he arrived, Ben opened the door with a big smile. Steven handed the check back, saying, “Ben, this is too much.” But Ben just patted him on the shoulder and said, “Keep it, Mr. Green. We're neighbors, and we should help each other.” Steven's eyes welled up with tears, and he knew that he wasn't alone in his struggles anymore.
示范二
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Surprisingly, he saw Ben standing there with a jacket in his arms. Ben looked a bit nervous but determined. “Mr. Green,” he said, “I brought this jacket for you. It's winter coming, and I thought you might need it.” Steven was touched but also a bit confused. He said, “Thank you, Ben, but you really didn't have to.” Ben shook his head. “No, Mr. Green. You've always been so kind to us in the neighborhood. Let me do something for you now.” Steven took the jacket, feeling a warmth spreading in his chest.
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“Ben must have forgotten about the check in the pocket,” Steven thought. After Ben left, Steven went to hang the jacket in the closet. As he did, something fell out. He bent down and picked up a check. His hands trembled as he realized what it meant. He couldn't believe Ben's generosity. The next day, Steven made a special meal and invited Ben over. When Ben came, Steven hugged him tightly and said, “Ben, your help means the world to me. I don't know how to repay you.” Ben smiled and said, “You don't have to. Just knowing I could help makes me happy.” From that day on, their friendship grew even deeper, and Steven's life became a little easier.
【答案】范文
Surprisingly he saw Ben standing there with a jacket in his arms. “Earlier today, I noticed you weren’t wearing a jacket. It’s getting cold these days, so I want to give you this jacket as a gift,” Ben said, handing Steven the coat. Steven accepted the gift and thanked Ben a lot. The next day, Steven wore the jacket to work. Feeling cold, he put his hands inside the pockets. Then he found there was something inside. To his surprise, it was a check for $ 200!
“Ben must have forgotten about the check inside the pocket,” Steven thought. He then went to Ben’s house. “I believe this is yours,” Steven said, showing Ben the check. But Ben shook his head and said the check was Steven’s. Seeing Steven’s confused face, Ben explained Steven had helped his mom a lot and that he had never had a chance to repay Steven’s kindness before. Therefore, when he realized Steven needed help, he decided to reach out. Hearing those words, Steven was so touched that he hugged Ben tightly.