(共16张PPT)
后
续
写
读
Initial Guidance for Continuation Writing
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what to read
2
what to write
3
write the draft
4
show your writing
CONTENTS
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was exam time at Marc's school. Every day, their teachers gave them loads of homework and told them the test was very important and that they ought to spare no effort to perform well in it. Everyone followed the teachers' instructions and made preparations for it, except Marc. He just turned a deaf ear to it. He thought he would rather play football than study.
His mum and dad repeated the importance of revision for exams over and over again. They told him that he should be working hard preparing for the test. But the weather was sunny and he thought he had better things to do.
"Shall we go to the park " he said to his friend Huck one afternoon. "It's a nice day. We could play football and kick around." Huck shook his head. "I'm supposed to review my lessons," he said. "I'm going home to do some math."
Marc was amazed. "You'd rather do math than play football " “Math is important. Besides, my mum says she will buy me a mountain bike if I do well in the math exam.”
“That's crazy”, said Marc. Huck shrugged(耸肩) and replied, "Wait until I beat you in the test and you will watch me riding past on my mountain bike!"
" You won't beat me," said Marc.
" Oh yes, I will." "Oh no, you won't! That will never happen. Just wait and see!" For the first time ever, Marc wanted to perform well. He couldn't bear it if his friend came top and he did badly. So when he got home, he opened his math book. But there was so much to do. All of a sudden, he felt like he'd forgotten everything he had learned that year! He didn't know where to start. When his sister Lily came in, he was sitting expressionlessly by the desk, just staring out of the window.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式作答。
"You don't look happy, Marc. What's wrong " she said. __________________________________________________
On the day of the exam, Marc went to school with great confidence. ________________________________________
读什么
续什么
读什么What to read
十句五定法
读情节（人物&事件）、情感、伏笔
续什么What to write
Para1第一句 情绪/动作
Para1最后一句 根据Para2第一句过渡
Para2倒数第二句 紧贴首段/问题解决
Para2第一句 情绪/动作
Para2最后一句 升华 成长/亲情/友情
所见，所闻，所感，所说，所做
五句填细节
五句定框架
读后续写要求续写词数为150词左右。若一句话平均15个词，则10句话左右则可以完成。
1. It was exam time at Marc's school. Every day, their teachers gave them loads of homework and told them the test was very important and that they ought to spare no effort to perform well in it. Everyone followed the teachers' instructions and made preparations for it, except Marc. He just turned a deaf ear to it. He thought he would rather play football than study.
Plots
who
what
Emotion
Marc
Foreshadowing(伏笔） Continuation
Marc teachers
exam→
prepare for it VS play football
not care
loads of homework
Would he finish the homework
turned a deaf ear to it
Regret
play football
Play football after the exam
读情节（人物&事件）、情感、伏笔
读什么What to read
2. His mum and dad repeated the importance of revision for exams over and over again. They told him that he should be working hard preparing for the test. But the weather was sunny and he thought he had better things to do.
Plots
who
what
Emotion
Marc
Foreshadowing Continuation
Marc mum&dad
revision VS better things
not care
parents→angry
parents seeing my changes
→surprised
读情节（人物&事件）、情感、伏笔
读什么What to read
3. "Shall we go to the park " he said to his friend Huck one afternoon. "It's a nice day. We could play football and kick around." Huck shook his head. "I'm supposed to review my lessons," he said. "I'm going home to do some math."
4. Marc was amazed. "You'd rather do math than play football " “Math is important. Besides, my mum says she will buy me a mountain bike if I do well in the math exam.”
5. “That's crazy”, said Marc. Huck shrugged(耸肩) and replied, "Wait until I beat you in the test and you will watch me riding past on my mountain bike!"
6. " You won't beat me," said Marc.
7. " Oh yes, I will." "Oh no, you won't! That will never happen. Just wait and see!" For the first time ever, Marc wanted to perform well. He couldn't bear it if his friend came top and he did badly. So when he got home, he opened his math book. But there was so much to do. All of a sudden, he felt like he'd forgotten everything he had learned that year! He didn't know where to start. When his sister Lily came in, he was sitting expressionlessly by the desk, just staring out of the window.
Plots
who
what
Emotion
Marc
Foreshadowing Continuation
0
Marc Huck Lily
play football VS revise lessons
can't bear being beaten→ open math book→
not knowing where to start
amazed, shocked, angry, helpless
mountain bike
ride it together to play football
quarreled
be friends again
Lily came in
helped Marc
what to read
1.Clarify the plots
story mountain
opening
development
climax
resolution
ending
teachers, exam Vs
Marc, football
parents, revision VS
Marc, better things
Huck VS Marc
quarreled
Marc back home, helpless
？
读什么What to read
Para1 : “You don’t__ __
Para2: On the day of_ __
2. Design the following plots
五句定框架+五句填细节
十句五定法 设计情节
读后续写要求续写词数为150词左右。若一句话平均15个词，则10句话左右则可以完成。
P1: "You don't look happy, Marc. What's wrong " she said.
P2: On the day of the exam, Marc went to school with great confidence.
Marc难过无助，回答Lily
快考试了,信心大增
尽管紧张，决定尽力而为
考试结果出来，顺利通过（Huck/parents反应）
坚持不放弃
所感：后悔 turned a deaf ear
所闻：Lily愿意帮他复习
所做：Marc努力准备 （+父母意外惊喜）
所见：遇到Huck, 对方反应
所做：拿到试卷，认真答题
① 情绪/动作
②
③
④
⑤ 根据para2 衔接
⑥ 情绪/动作
⑨ 问题解决
⑩ 升华
⑦
⑧
what to write
① 情绪/动作 Marc难过无助，回答Lily
② 所感：后悔 turned a deaf ear
③ 所闻：Lily愿意帮他复习
④ 所做：Marc努力准备（+父母意外惊喜）
⑤ 根据Para2 衔接 快考试了，信心大增
⑥ 情绪/动作 尽管紧张，决定尽力而为
⑨ 问题解决 考试结果，通过（Huck/parents）
⑩ 升华 坚持不放弃
⑦ 所见：遇到Huck,对方反应
⑧ 所做：拿到试卷，认真答题
续写微技能
情绪描写
语段衔接
万能升华
所见 At the sight of..., sb....
所闻 Upon hearing the news that, sb....
所说 “...”, sb. said in a/an adj. voice, “...”
所做 Sb did sth, did sth and did sth
Doing sth, sb did sth and did sth
Having done sth, sb did sth and did sth
Done, sb did sth, doing sth
所感 It was at the moment that sb. realized ...
It (suddenly) occurred to sb. that
范文
write the draft and show the writing
语段衔接
根据衔接连贯理论，通过词汇的有效衔接（词汇同现或词汇复现）实现语义连贯和衔接逻辑。
第一段结尾
出现第二段首句的同词或同义词
P2: On the day of the exam, Marc went to school with great confidence. _____________
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
P1: "You don't look happy, Marc. What's wrong " she said.________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Para1最后一句：Having prepared for the exam for a week, his confidence grew and he could solve the math problems easily.
所见At the sight of the horror movie scene, she covered her eyes with her hands.
所闻Upon hearing the news that he had won the first prize, he jumped with joy.
所说“I love you so much.”, she said in a tender voice, “you are always on my mind.”
所做（动作描写）
The boy rushed to the sea, took off his clothes and jumped into the water.
Rushing to the sea, the boy took off his clothes and jumped into the water.
Having worked hard for a month, she attended the exam, and passed it successfully.
Encouraged by the teacher's words, Xiao Ming raised his hand, exclaiming “I volunteer”.
所感It was at the moment that he realized “nothing is more precious than family love.”
句式准备1
万能升华
余音绕梁式
eg.It was this unique experience that made her understand the power of perseverance
eg. It was at the moment that he realized “nothing is more precious than family love.”
eg.Years later, looking back to the story, he still felt it unforgettable, thinking that it had been a life-changing experience.
灵魂顿悟式
情绪描写
公式1：a sense of 情绪名词+seized+sb+when+句子
Suddenly, a strong sense of happiness seized him when he heard the good news.
公式2：情绪adj1+情绪adj2, sb do sth, doing sth
Relieved and delighted, he called his sister after the exam, expressing his joy and gratitude.
公式3：With +n+非谓语, sb did sth
With tears rolling down his face, he thanked his sister in a delighted voice.
句式准备2
读什么
续什么
One Possible Version
P1: "You don't look happy, Marc. What's wrong " she said. ①情绪描写 Hopeless and helpless, he turned to look at Lily, explaining what had happened, especially the bet between he and Huck. ②所感 Glancing at loads of homework, “I am eager to revise math, but I don't know where to start and how to do”, he sighed. ③所闻 “Don't worry. I will help you with the exam.” Lily comforted him. ④所做 The following days, Marc worked very hard and every time he wanted to give up, it occurred to him that he did not want to lose to Huck. ⑤衔接 Having prepared for the exam for a few days, his confidence grew and he could solve the math problems easily.
P2: On the day of the exam, Marc went to school with great confidence. ⑥情绪描写 Nervous as he was, he decided to spare no effort to finish the paper. ⑦所见 He met Huck in the classroom, who looked delighted, as if he was bound to win. But Marc did not care. ⑧ 所做 The exam started and Marc answered all the questions carefully. ⑨ 问题解决 Several days later, the result came out. A strong sense of excitement overwhelmed Marc as he knew he passed the exam successfully. Relieved and delighted, he called his sister after the exam, expressing his joy and gratitude. ⑩ 升华 It was this unique experience that made Marc realize “ Nothing is impossible for a willing heart.”
THANK YOU!阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was exam time at Marc's school. Every day, their teachers gave them loads of homework and told them the test was very important and that they ought to spare no effort to perform well in it. Everyone followed the teachers' instructions and made preparations for it, except Marc. He just turned a deaf ear to it. He thought he would rather play football than study.
His mum and dad repeated the importance of revision for exams over and over again. They told him that he should be working hard preparing for the test. But the weather was sunny and he thought he had better things to do.
"Shall we go to the park " he said to his friend Huck one afternoon. "It's a nice day. We could play football and kick around." Huck shook his head. "I'm supposed to review my lessons," he said. "I'm going home to do some math."
Marc was amazed. "You'd rather do math than play football " “Math is important. Besides, my mum says she will buy me a mountain bike if I do well in the math exam.”
“That's crazy”, said Marc. Huck shrugged(耸肩) and replied, "Wait until I beat you in the test and you will watch me riding past on my mountain bike!"
" You won't beat me," said Marc.
" Oh yes, I will." "Oh no, you won't! That will never happen. Just wait and see!" For the first time ever, Marc wanted to perform well. He couldn't bear it if his friend came top and he did badly. So when he got home, he opened his math book. But there was so much to do. All of a sudden, he felt like he'd forgotten everything he had learned that year! He didn't know where to start. When his sister Lily came in, he was sitting expressionlessly by the desk, just staring out of the window.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式作答。
"You don't look happy, Marc. What's wrong " she said. _________________________________________________________________________
On the day of the exam, Marc went to school with great confidence. _________________________________________________________________________
一、读什么What to read
读___________、___________、___________
二、续什么What to write
五句定框架
Para1第一句 _______________________________
Para1最后一句_______________________________
Para2第一句 _______________________________
Para2倒数第二句 _______________________________
Para2最后一句_______________________________
五句填细节 所____、所____、所____、所____、所____、所____、
一、读情节（人物&事件）、情感、伏笔
1. It was exam time at Marc's school. Every day, their teachers gave them loads of homework and told them the test was very important and that they ought to spare no effort to perform well in it. Everyone followed the teachers' instructions and made preparations for it, except Marc. He just turned a deaf ear to it. He thought he would rather play football than study.
Plot Foreshadowing(伏笔) Continuation
Who loads of homework
What turned a deaf ear to it
Emotion play football
Marc
2. His mum and dad repeated the importance of revision for exams over and over again. They told him that he should be working hard preparing for the test. But the weather was sunny and he thought he had better things to do.
Plot Foreshadowing(伏笔) Continuation
Who
What
Emotion
Marc
"Shall we go to the park " he said to his friend Huck one afternoon. "It's a nice day. We could play football and kick around." Huck shook his head. "I'm supposed to review my lessons," he said. "I'm going home to do some math."
4. Marc was amazed. "You'd rather do math than play football " “Math is important. Besides, my mum says she will buy me a mountain bike if I do well in the math exam.”
5. “That's crazy”, said Marc. Huck shrugged(耸肩) and replied, "Wait until I beat you in the test and you will watch me riding past on my mountain bike!"
6. " You won't beat me," said Marc.
7. " Oh yes, I will." "Oh no, you won't! That will never happen. Just wait and see!" For the first time ever, Marc wanted to perform well. He couldn't bear it if his friend came top and he did badly. So when he got home, he opened his math book. But there was so much to do. All of a sudden, he felt like he'd forgotten everything he had learned that year! He didn't know where to start. When his sister Lily came in, he was sitting expressionlessly by the desk, just staring out of the window.
Plot Foreshadowing(伏笔) Continuation
Who
What
Emotion
Marc
二、续什么What to write
十句五定法 设计情节
五句定框架+五句填细节
P1: "You don't look happy, Marc. What's wrong " she said.
P2: On the day of the exam, Marc went to school with great confidence.
______________________________________
2._______________________________________
3._______________________________________
4._______________________________________
5._______________________________________
6._______________________________________
7._______________________________________
8._______________________________________
9._______________________________________
10.______________________________________
所见 ____________________________________________________________________
所闻 ____________________________________________________________________
所说 ____________________________________________________________________
所做 ____________________________________________________________________
所感 ____________________________________________________________________
语段衔接
根据衔接连贯理论，通过词汇的有效衔接（词汇同现或词汇复现）实现语义连贯和衔接逻辑。
P1: "You don't look happy, Marc. What's wrong " she said.________________________
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
P2: On the day of the exam, Marc went to school with great confidence. _____________
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
句式准备1
所见At the sight of the horror movie scene, she covered her eyes with her hands.
所闻Upon hearing the news that he had won the first prize, he jumped with joy.
所说“I love you so much.”, she said in a tender voice, “you are always on my mind.”
所做（动作描写）
The boy rushed to the sea, took off his clothes and jumped into the water.
Rushing to the sea, the boy took off his clothes and jumped into the water.
Having worked hard for a month, she attended the exam, and passed it successfully.
Encouraged by the teacher's words, Xiao Ming raised his hand, exclaiming “I volunteer”.
所感It was at the moment that he realized “nothing is more precious than family love.”
句式准备2
情绪描写
公式1：a sense of 情绪名词+seized+sb+when+句子
Suddenly, a strong sense of happiness seized him when he heard the good news.
公式2：情绪adj1+情绪adj2, sb do sth, doing sth
Relieved and delighted, he called his sister after the exam, expressing his joy and gratitude.
公式3：With +n+非谓语, sb did sth
With tears rolling down his face, he thanked his sister in a delighted voice.
万能升华
灵魂顿悟式
eg.It was this unique experience that made her understand the power of perseverance
eg. It was at the moment that he realized “nothing is more precious than family love.”
余音绕梁式
eg.Years later, looking back to the story, he still felt it unforgettable, thinking that it had been a life-changing experience.
parents→angry
