读后续写：Eric暴雨夜兔子，克服多动症，成长为有责任感的少年+讲义-云南红河州、文山州2025届高中毕业生第二次复习统一监测
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红河州、文山州2025届高中毕业生第二次复习统一监测
47.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Our ten-year-old son, Eric, was a happy but hyperactive(多动症) child. Although he was quite bright and had a warm spirit with a bright smile lightning up his face, he had learning difficulties in focusing on reading and writing. He struggled with understanding instructions or remembering new information, causing him to fall behind in class. The psychologist did the tests that showed he liked animals, so we took in two rabbits, hoping that caring for them would improve his condition.
One Sunday morning, a warm little hand urgently patted my cheek. “Mom, wake up! There’s a big storm. We have to bring in Bucket and Captain!” Instinctively, I reached for my husband, Larry, but he was on a business trip.
I turned on the light. Eric leaped up on the bed to peek through the curtains. The window was covered with driving snow. “Let’s go, Mom. We have to save them!”
We stuffed ourselves into some winter clothes and hurried to the yard. Eric went charging out into the snow-filled darkness to the rabbit hutches. “ You get Captain,” he shouted through the howling wind, already holding Bucket, a white male rabbit, back to the house. I dragged Captain from the cage into the room and surprisingly found that Eric was busy preparing something. His face was serious and focused without noticing that the rabbit was eating the telephone cord.
Soon, the rabbits bounced around playfully, feeding on fresh vegetables. Eric took a moment to observe their behaviors and gently touched their fur, whispering soothing words of comfort. He also got the rabbits to rest in a nest made of towels and blankets in front of the fireplace and even read them his favorite books. Time seemed to have stood still.
Larry returned ahead of time, “ What is going on here ”, staring at Eric. “ I got worried when I couldn’t reach you, so I caught an earlier flight,” he explained. “Did you know the phone is out of order ”
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150左右；
（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened.
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance.
红河州、文山州2025届高中毕业生第二次复习统一监测
47.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Our ten-year-old son, Eric, was a happy but hyperactive(多动症) child(背景信息描述). Although he was quite bright and had a warm spirit with a bright smile lightning up his face(with复合结构做主语补语)(状从), he had learning difficulties in focusing on reading and writing(人物性格和描述). He struggled with understanding instructions or remembering new information, causing him to fall behind in class(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The psychologist did the tests that showed he liked animals(宾从), so we took in two rabbits, hoping(现在分词做伴随动作) that caring for them would improve his condition(宾从).
One Sunday morning, a warm little hand urgently patted my cheek(动作描写). “Mom, wake up! There’s a big storm. We have to bring in Bucket and Captain(兔子名)!” Instinctively, I reached for my husband, Larry, but he was on a business trip.
I turned on the light. Eric leaped up on the bed to peek through the curtains(状语). The window was covered with driving snow. “Let’s go, Mom. We have to save them!”
We stuffed ourselves into some winter clothes and hurried to the yard. Eric went charging out into the snow-filled darkness to the rabbit hutches(现在分词短语做伴随动作). “ You get Captain,” he shouted through the howling wind, already holding Bucket(现在分词短语做伴随动作), a white male rabbit, back to the house. I dragged Captain from the cage into the room and surprisingly found that Eric was busy preparing something. His face was serious and focused(表情描写) without noticing that the rabbit was eating the telephone cord(宾从).
Soon, the rabbits bounced around playfully, feeding on fresh vegetables(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Eric took a moment to observe their behaviors and gently touched their fur, whispering soothing words of comfort. He also got the rabbits to rest in a nest made of towels(过去分词短语做后置定语) and blankets in front of the fireplace and even read them his favorite books. Time seemed to have stood still.
Larry returned ahead of time, “ What is going on here ”, staring at Eric(现在分词短语做伴随动作). “ I got worried when I couldn’t reach you(状从), so I caught an earlier flight,” he explained. “Did you know the phone is out of order(宾从) ”
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150左右；
（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened.
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance.
1. 读后续写类型分析
该文章属于情感成长类读后续写，主要围绕Eric通过照顾兔子展现出的责任感和专注力的提升，以及他与家人之间的情感互动。续写应围绕Eric的成长、家庭关系的深化以及兔子的象征意义展开。
2. 续写思路与布局
布局：续写应分为两段，第一段承接Eric向父亲Larry讲述事件的经过，第二段描写Eric在后续日子里的变化和成长。
框架提炼：
第一段：Eric向Larry讲述风暴中救兔子的经过，展现他的责任感和成长。
第二段：通过Eric在照顾兔子过程中的表现，体现他在学习和生活中的进步，呼应开头提到的学习困难。
实施：通过对话、心理描写和动作描写，展现Eric的情感变化和成长。
3. 续写注意事项
承接原文：需承接Eric对兔子的关心、Larry的提前回家以及电话线路故障的情节。
整体注意：保持情感连贯性，突出Eric的成长，避免情节突兀。
巧妙设计：通过细节描写（如Eric的专注、兔子的反应）深化主题。
4. 故事山模式分析
开端：Eric的多动症和学习困难。
发展：引入兔子，Eric在风暴中救兔子。
高潮：Eric专注照顾兔子，展现责任感。
结局：Eric的成长和家庭关系的深化。
5. 续写衔接点
衔接点：Eric救兔子的经过、Larry的提前回家、电话线路故障。
心情描写：Eric的“serious and focused”表情。
动作描写：Eric“charging out into the snow-filled darkness”。
关键转折点：Eric救兔子并专注照顾它们。
伏笔与冲突：电话线路故障暗示沟通问题，风暴是外部冲突。
隐含线索：兔子象征Eric的成长和责任。
解决方案：通过照顾兔子，Eric逐渐克服学习困难。
6. 表格分析
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 Eric从多动症孩子成长为有责任感的孩子 “Eric was a happy but hyperactive child”
情感层次 Eric对兔子的关心、Larry对家庭的牵挂 “Mom, wake up! There’s a big storm. We have to bring in Bucket and Captain!”
关键情节点 风暴中救兔子，Eric专注照顾兔子，父亲Larry的提早回家 “Eric took a moment to observe their behaviors and gently touched their fur”；Larry returned ahead of time
语言特色 简洁生动，突出动作和情感 “His face was serious and focused”
关键词分析 兔子、风暴、责任感、成长 “caring for them would improve his condition”
心理描写 Eric的专注和责任感 “His face was serious and focused”
动作描写 Eric冲进雪中救兔子 “Eric went charging out into the snow-filled darkness”
环境描写 风暴的恶劣天气 “The window was covered with driving snow”
隐含主题 通过照顾动物培养责任感和专注力 “hoping that caring for them would improve his condition”
情感转折 从多动到专注，从学习困难到责任感提升 “His face was serious and focused”
空间转换 从室内到室外，再回到室内 “We stuffed ourselves into some winter clothes and hurried to the yard”
时间过渡 从风暴发生到救兔子，再到Larry回家 “Larry returned ahead of time”
3. 动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句
动作描写（Action Descriptions）
Eric charged out into the snow-filled darkness.
（Eric冲进风雪交加的黑暗中。）
He gently touched their fur, whispering soothing words.
（他轻轻抚摸着它们的毛发，低声安慰。）
She dragged Captain from the cage into the room.
（她把Captain从笼子里拖进房间。）
Eric leaped up on the bed to peek through the curtains.
（Eric跳上床，透过窗帘张望。）
The rabbits bounced around playfully, feeding on fresh vegetables.
（兔子们蹦蹦跳跳，吃着新鲜的蔬菜。）
He stuffed himself into winter clothes and hurried to the yard.
（他匆忙穿上冬衣，冲向院子。）
Eric prepared a nest of towels and blankets in front of the fireplace.
（Eric在壁炉前用毛巾和毯子搭了一个窝。）
Larry knelt down, listening intently to Eric’s story.
（Larry蹲下来，专注地听Eric讲述。）
心理描写（Psychological Descriptions）
His face was serious and focused, showing a newfound determination.
（他的表情严肃而专注，展现出一种新的决心。）
Eric’s heart raced with a mix of fear and excitement.
（Eric的心因恐惧和兴奋而加速跳动。）
A sense of pride swelled in his chest as he recounted the story.
（当他讲述这个故事时，一种自豪感在他胸中涌动。）
He felt a deep connection with the rabbits, as if they understood him.
（他感到与兔子们有一种深刻的联系，仿佛它们能理解他。）
For the first time, Eric felt a sense of purpose.
（Eric第一次感到了一种使命感。）
His mind was calm, focused entirely on the task at hand.
（他的头脑很平静，完全专注于手头的任务。）
A wave of relief washed over him as he saw the rabbits safe.
（当他看到兔子们安全时，一种宽慰感涌上心头。）
He couldn’t help but smile, feeling a warmth spread through his heart.
（他忍不住微笑，感到一股暖流涌上心头。）
环境描写（Environmental Descriptions）
The window was covered with driving snow, obscuring the view outside.
（窗户被大雪覆盖，外面的景色模糊不清。）
The howling wind echoed through the yard, making the night feel even colder.
（呼啸的风在院子里回荡，让夜晚显得更加寒冷。）
The fireplace crackled softly, casting a warm glow over the room.
（壁炉轻轻噼啪作响，给房间投下温暖的光芒。）
Snowflakes danced in the air, creating a magical winter scene.
（雪花在空中飞舞，营造出梦幻的冬日景象。）
The yard was blanketed in white, with only the rabbit hutches visible.
（院子里一片雪白，只有兔笼隐约可见。）
The storm raged outside, but inside, the room felt cozy and safe.
（外面的风暴肆虐，但房间里却感到舒适而安全。）
The fresh vegetables on the floor added a touch of life to the room.
（地板上的新鲜蔬菜为房间增添了一丝生机。）
The warm little hand on her cheek brought her back to reality.
（脸颊上温暖的小手将她拉回现实。）
4. 常见单词的高级替换词
场景分类与替换词
Care (照顾)
高级替换：tend, nurture, attend to, look after, foster
例句：Eric tended to the rabbits with great care.
Focus (专注)
高级替换：concentrate, immerse, engross, fixate, absorb
例句：He was completely immersed in observing the rabbits.
Save (拯救)
高级替换：rescue, retrieve, salvage, recover, deliver
例句：They managed to rescue the rabbits from the storm.
Improve (改善)
高级替换：enhance, refine, ameliorate, boost, elevate
例句：Caring for the rabbits helped ameliorate Eric’s condition.
Observe (观察)
高级替换：monitor, scrutinize, inspect, survey, examine
例句：Eric spent hours scrutinizing the rabbits’ behaviors.
5. 高中语法现象与地道搭配分析
语法现象
现在分词作状语
例句：Eric went charging out into the snow-filled darkness, holding Bucket tightly.
分析：现在分词“holding”表示伴随动作，增强句子的动态感。
定语从句
例句：The rabbits, which were feeding on fresh vegetables, seemed content.
分析：定语从句“which were feeding”修饰“rabbits”，补充信息。
虚拟语气
例句：If Eric hadn’t acted quickly, the rabbits might have been in danger.
分析：虚拟语气表达与事实相反的假设。
倒装句
例句：Not only did Eric save the rabbits, but he also cared for them deeply.
分析：倒装结构“Not only did”强调Eric的行为。
地道搭配
Light up (点亮)
例句：His smile lit up the room.
近义词：brighten, illuminate
反义词：darken, dim
Fall behind (落后)
例句：Eric was falling behind in class due to his learning difficulties.
近义词：lag, trail
反义词：excel, advance
Take in (收养)
例句：They took in two rabbits to help Eric.
近义词：adopt, foster
反义词：abandon, reject
Peek through (透过…看)
例句：Eric peeked through the curtains to check the storm.
近义词：glance, peer
反义词：ignore, overlook
Howling wind (呼啸的风)
例句：The howling wind made the night feel even colder.
近义词：roaring, screaming
反义词：calm breeze, gentle wind
生词短语积累
Hyperactive (adj. 多动的)
词意：excessively active
近义词：restless, energetic
反义词：calm, lethargic
例句：Eric was a hyperactive child who struggled to sit still.
Instinctively (adv. 本能地)
词意：without conscious thought
近义词：intuitively, naturally
反义词：deliberately, consciously
例句：She instinctively reached for her phone when she heard the noise.
Soothing (adj. 安慰的)
词意：calming or comforting
近义词：relaxing, pacifying
反义词：agitating, disturbing
例句：His soothing words helped calm the frightened rabbit.
Remarkable (adj. 显著的)
词意：worthy of attention; extraordinary
近义词：notable, impressive
反义词：ordinary, unremarkable
例句：Eric made remarkable progress in his studies.
Unwavering (adj. 坚定的)
词意：steady or resolute
近义词：steadfast, determined
反义词：wavering, uncertain
例句：His unwavering dedication to the rabbits was inspiring.
Possible Answers
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened. In panic, his eyes still wide with excitement(独立主格). “Dad, you won’t believe what happened(宾从)! There was a huge storm, and Bucket and Captain were outside(对原文的衔接). Mom and I had to bring them in. It was so cold, but I didn’t care. I just knew I had to save them!(宾从)” Larry knelt down, listening intently(现在分词做伴随动作) as Eric described(状从) how he had braved the snow and wind to rescue the rabbits(宾从),Larry still catching his breath from his early return(独立主格，描述父亲的状态). He noticed the chewed telephone cord(与原文的衔接) on the floor and realized why he couldn’t reach them. “I was so worried when the phone didn’t work,” Larry admitted, his voice filled with relief and proud(独立主格描写情绪) . Eric’s eyes widened as he glanced at the cord(状从), then at the rabbits. “I didn’t even notice they were chewing it(宾从)!” he exclaimed, a mix of guilt and pride in his voice(情绪描写).
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance. As the days passed(状从), Eric’s bond with the rabbits grew stronger(关系描写). He spent hours observing them, noting(现在分词做伴随动作) how they ate, played, and rested(动作串). His teachers began to notice a change in him too. He was more focused in class, and his reading and writing improved significantly. One day, his teacher pulled Larry aside after school. “Eric has made remarkable progress,” she said. “He’s more attentive and seems to really enjoy learning now.” Larry smiled, realizing(现在分词做伴随动作) that the rabbits had given Eric more than just companionship—they had given him a sense of purpose(宾从). At home, Eric continued to care for Bucket and Captain with unwavering dedication(状语，描写心理). He even started a journal, documenting their behaviors and his thoughts(现在分词做伴随动作). The once hyperactive child had found a way to channel his energy into something meaningful(对比描写，变化描写), and his bright smile now lit up not just his face, but the hearts of everyone around him.
Version 2
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened. His voice trembling with excitement(独立主格描述情绪) as he recounted the stormy rescue(状从), his words tumbled out in an excited rush. “Dad, you should’ve seen it! The storm was crazy, but I know I have to save Bucket and Captain!”his words flowing with a newfound confidence(独立主格，描写人物变化). Larry, who had returned early due to the phone outage(定从，与原文衔接), listened with a mix of relief and pride(情绪描写). He glanced at the chewed telephone cord and chuckled(与原文衔接). “No wonder I couldn’t reach you,” he said, pointing to the cord(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Eric’s eyes followed Larry’s gaze, and he gasped. “I didn’t even notice they were chewing it!” he admitted, his voice tinged with both embarrassment and pride(情绪描写). Larry patted his son’s shoulder, his heart swelling with love.
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance. With days passing by(时间过渡语), Eric’s bond with the rabbits deepened(情感联系描写), and his behavior at school began to change. His teacher noticed how he was more attentive in class(宾从), often raising his hand to answer questions(现在分词短语做伴随动作). At home, Eric spent hours observing the rabbits, jotting down notes in a journal(现在分词短语做伴随动作). His writing, once fragmented(adj做补语，once与now做对比), now flowed with clarity and purpose. Larry and his wife marveled at the change, realizing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) that the rabbits had given Eric more than companionship(宾从)—they had given him a sense of responsibility and focus(递进说明). Eric’s smile, always bright(adj做主语补语), now carried a quiet confidence.
Version 3
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened. His eyes sparkling with pride (独立主格，情绪描写)as he narrated the night’s events(状从). “Dad, I knew I had to save them(宾从)! The storm was so bad, but I didn’t care. I just ran out and got Bucket and Captain.” Larry, who had returned early due to the phone outage(定从，交代原因), listened with a mix of relief and pride(情绪描写). He noticed the chewed telephone cord on the floor and smiled. “No wonder I couldn’t reach you,” he said, pointing to the cord(现在分词做伴随动作). Eric’s eyes widened as he realized(状从) what had happened(宾从). “I didn’t even know they were chewing it!(宾从)” he exclaimed,shooting a naughty smile at the two little creatures(现在分词短语做伴随动作).
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance. With days passing by(时间过渡), Eric’s connection with the rabbits grew stronger, and his academic performance began to improve(孩子的变化). His teacher remarked on his increased focus and participation in class. At home, Eric spent hours reading to the rabbits, his voice calm and steady(独立主格刻画人物). His parents noticed how he was more organized, even helping with household chores(宾从，人物刻画). The rabbits had not only brought joy to Eric’s life but also taught him responsibility and patience. Eric’s journey from a hyperactive child to a focused, caring individual(后置定语) was nothing short of remarkable(否定强调).
加分点与亮点词汇
语法加分点：
独立主格：His voice trembling with excitement
定语从句：The rabbits, which were once just pets, had become a catalyst.
虚拟语气：If Eric hadn’t acted quickly, the rabbits might have been in danger.
亮点词汇：
情绪描写：trembling with excitement, swelling with pride
动作描写：braved the snow, jotting down notes
替换词：
Save → rescue, retrieve
Focus → concentrate, immerse
语法加分点：
倒装句：Not only did Eric save the rabbits, but he also cared for them deeply.
独立主格：His eyes sparkling with pride
定语从句：The rabbits, which had brought joy to Eric’s life, also taught him responsibility.
亮点词汇：
情绪描写：sparkling with pride, heart swelling with admiration
动作描写：prepared a nest, reading to the rabbits
替换词：
Care → tend, nurture
Improve → enhance, refine
语法加分点：
虚拟语气：If Eric hadn’t saved the rabbits, they might have been lost.
定语从句：The rabbits, which had become a turning point, taught Eric valuable lessons.
独立主格：His words tumbling out in an excited rush
亮点词汇：
情绪描写：filled with pride, sense of accomplishment
动作描写：documenting their behaviors, offering to help
替换词：
Observe → monitor, scrutinize
Responsibility → duty, obligation
读后续写积累语料
短语升级替换
Take care of → tend to, look after
例句：Eric tended to the rabbits with great care.
Pay attention to → focus on, concentrate on
例句：He concentrated on observing the rabbits’ behaviors.
Save from danger → rescue, retrieve
例句：They managed to rescue the rabbits from the storm.
Improve a lot → make remarkable progress, show significant improvement
例句：Eric made remarkable progress in his studies.
Feel happy → be filled with joy, swell with pride
例句：Larry’s heart swelled with pride as he listened to Eric.
Responsibility → duty, obligation
例句：The rabbits taught Eric a sense of responsibility.
Focus → concentration, immersion
例句：Eric’s immersion in caring for the rabbits improved his focus.
Bravery → courage, determination
例句：Eric showed great courage in saving the rabbits.
Transformation → change, growth
例句：Eric’s transformation was evident to everyone around him.
Companionship → friendship, bond
例句：The rabbits provided Eric with a deep sense of companionship.
47.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Our ten-year-old son, Eric, was a happy but hyperactive(多动症) child. Although he was quite bright and had a warm spirit with a bright smile lightning up his face, he had learning difficulties in focusing on reading and writing. He struggled with understanding instructions or remembering new information, causing him to fall behind in class. The psychologist did the tests that showed he liked animals, so we took in two rabbits, hoping that caring for them would improve his condition.
One Sunday morning, a warm little hand urgently patted my cheek. “Mom, wake up! There’s a big storm. We have to bring in Bucket and Captain!” Instinctively, I reached for my husband, Larry, but he was on a business trip.
I turned on the light. Eric leaped up on the bed to peek through the curtains. The window was covered with driving snow. “Let’s go, Mom. We have to save them!”
We stuffed ourselves into some winter clothes and hurried to the yard. Eric went charging out into the snow-filled darkness to the rabbit hutches. “ You get Captain,” he shouted through the howling wind, already holding Bucket, a white male rabbit, back to the house. I dragged Captain from the cage into the room and surprisingly found that Eric was busy preparing something. His face was serious and focused without noticing that the rabbit was eating the telephone cord.
Soon, the rabbits bounced around playfully, feeding on fresh vegetables. Eric took a moment to observe their behaviors and gently touched their fur, whispering soothing words of comfort. He also got the rabbits to rest in a nest made of towels and blankets in front of the fireplace and even read them his favorite books. Time seemed to have stood still.
Larry returned ahead of time, “ What is going on here ”, staring at Eric. “ I got worried when I couldn’t reach you, so I caught an earlier flight,” he explained. “Did you know the phone is out of order ”
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150左右；
（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened.
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance.
红河州、文山州2025届高中毕业生第二次复习统一监测
47.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Our ten-year-old son, Eric, was a happy but hyperactive(多动症) child(背景信息描述). Although he was quite bright and had a warm spirit with a bright smile lightning up his face(with复合结构做主语补语)(状从), he had learning difficulties in focusing on reading and writing(人物性格和描述). He struggled with understanding instructions or remembering new information, causing him to fall behind in class(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The psychologist did the tests that showed he liked animals(宾从), so we took in two rabbits, hoping(现在分词做伴随动作) that caring for them would improve his condition(宾从).
One Sunday morning, a warm little hand urgently patted my cheek(动作描写). “Mom, wake up! There’s a big storm. We have to bring in Bucket and Captain(兔子名)!” Instinctively, I reached for my husband, Larry, but he was on a business trip.
I turned on the light. Eric leaped up on the bed to peek through the curtains(状语). The window was covered with driving snow. “Let’s go, Mom. We have to save them!”
We stuffed ourselves into some winter clothes and hurried to the yard. Eric went charging out into the snow-filled darkness to the rabbit hutches(现在分词短语做伴随动作). “ You get Captain,” he shouted through the howling wind, already holding Bucket(现在分词短语做伴随动作), a white male rabbit, back to the house. I dragged Captain from the cage into the room and surprisingly found that Eric was busy preparing something. His face was serious and focused(表情描写) without noticing that the rabbit was eating the telephone cord(宾从).
Soon, the rabbits bounced around playfully, feeding on fresh vegetables(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Eric took a moment to observe their behaviors and gently touched their fur, whispering soothing words of comfort. He also got the rabbits to rest in a nest made of towels(过去分词短语做后置定语) and blankets in front of the fireplace and even read them his favorite books. Time seemed to have stood still.
Larry returned ahead of time, “ What is going on here ”, staring at Eric(现在分词短语做伴随动作). “ I got worried when I couldn’t reach you(状从), so I caught an earlier flight,” he explained. “Did you know the phone is out of order(宾从) ”
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150左右；
（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened.
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance.
1. 读后续写类型分析
该文章属于情感成长类读后续写，主要围绕Eric通过照顾兔子展现出的责任感和专注力的提升，以及他与家人之间的情感互动。续写应围绕Eric的成长、家庭关系的深化以及兔子的象征意义展开。
2. 续写思路与布局
布局：续写应分为两段，第一段承接Eric向父亲Larry讲述事件的经过，第二段描写Eric在后续日子里的变化和成长。
框架提炼：
第一段：Eric向Larry讲述风暴中救兔子的经过，展现他的责任感和成长。
第二段：通过Eric在照顾兔子过程中的表现，体现他在学习和生活中的进步，呼应开头提到的学习困难。
实施：通过对话、心理描写和动作描写，展现Eric的情感变化和成长。
3. 续写注意事项
承接原文：需承接Eric对兔子的关心、Larry的提前回家以及电话线路故障的情节。
整体注意：保持情感连贯性，突出Eric的成长，避免情节突兀。
巧妙设计：通过细节描写（如Eric的专注、兔子的反应）深化主题。
4. 故事山模式分析
开端：Eric的多动症和学习困难。
发展：引入兔子，Eric在风暴中救兔子。
高潮：Eric专注照顾兔子，展现责任感。
结局：Eric的成长和家庭关系的深化。
5. 续写衔接点
衔接点：Eric救兔子的经过、Larry的提前回家、电话线路故障。
心情描写：Eric的“serious and focused”表情。
动作描写：Eric“charging out into the snow-filled darkness”。
关键转折点：Eric救兔子并专注照顾它们。
伏笔与冲突：电话线路故障暗示沟通问题，风暴是外部冲突。
隐含线索：兔子象征Eric的成长和责任。
解决方案：通过照顾兔子，Eric逐渐克服学习困难。
6. 表格分析
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 Eric从多动症孩子成长为有责任感的孩子 “Eric was a happy but hyperactive child”
情感层次 Eric对兔子的关心、Larry对家庭的牵挂 “Mom, wake up! There’s a big storm. We have to bring in Bucket and Captain!”
关键情节点 风暴中救兔子，Eric专注照顾兔子，父亲Larry的提早回家 “Eric took a moment to observe their behaviors and gently touched their fur”；Larry returned ahead of time
语言特色 简洁生动，突出动作和情感 “His face was serious and focused”
关键词分析 兔子、风暴、责任感、成长 “caring for them would improve his condition”
心理描写 Eric的专注和责任感 “His face was serious and focused”
动作描写 Eric冲进雪中救兔子 “Eric went charging out into the snow-filled darkness”
环境描写 风暴的恶劣天气 “The window was covered with driving snow”
隐含主题 通过照顾动物培养责任感和专注力 “hoping that caring for them would improve his condition”
情感转折 从多动到专注，从学习困难到责任感提升 “His face was serious and focused”
空间转换 从室内到室外，再回到室内 “We stuffed ourselves into some winter clothes and hurried to the yard”
时间过渡 从风暴发生到救兔子，再到Larry回家 “Larry returned ahead of time”
3. 动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句
动作描写（Action Descriptions）
Eric charged out into the snow-filled darkness.
（Eric冲进风雪交加的黑暗中。）
He gently touched their fur, whispering soothing words.
（他轻轻抚摸着它们的毛发，低声安慰。）
She dragged Captain from the cage into the room.
（她把Captain从笼子里拖进房间。）
Eric leaped up on the bed to peek through the curtains.
（Eric跳上床，透过窗帘张望。）
The rabbits bounced around playfully, feeding on fresh vegetables.
（兔子们蹦蹦跳跳，吃着新鲜的蔬菜。）
He stuffed himself into winter clothes and hurried to the yard.
（他匆忙穿上冬衣，冲向院子。）
Eric prepared a nest of towels and blankets in front of the fireplace.
（Eric在壁炉前用毛巾和毯子搭了一个窝。）
Larry knelt down, listening intently to Eric’s story.
（Larry蹲下来，专注地听Eric讲述。）
心理描写（Psychological Descriptions）
His face was serious and focused, showing a newfound determination.
（他的表情严肃而专注，展现出一种新的决心。）
Eric’s heart raced with a mix of fear and excitement.
（Eric的心因恐惧和兴奋而加速跳动。）
A sense of pride swelled in his chest as he recounted the story.
（当他讲述这个故事时，一种自豪感在他胸中涌动。）
He felt a deep connection with the rabbits, as if they understood him.
（他感到与兔子们有一种深刻的联系，仿佛它们能理解他。）
For the first time, Eric felt a sense of purpose.
（Eric第一次感到了一种使命感。）
His mind was calm, focused entirely on the task at hand.
（他的头脑很平静，完全专注于手头的任务。）
A wave of relief washed over him as he saw the rabbits safe.
（当他看到兔子们安全时，一种宽慰感涌上心头。）
He couldn’t help but smile, feeling a warmth spread through his heart.
（他忍不住微笑，感到一股暖流涌上心头。）
环境描写（Environmental Descriptions）
The window was covered with driving snow, obscuring the view outside.
（窗户被大雪覆盖，外面的景色模糊不清。）
The howling wind echoed through the yard, making the night feel even colder.
（呼啸的风在院子里回荡，让夜晚显得更加寒冷。）
The fireplace crackled softly, casting a warm glow over the room.
（壁炉轻轻噼啪作响，给房间投下温暖的光芒。）
Snowflakes danced in the air, creating a magical winter scene.
（雪花在空中飞舞，营造出梦幻的冬日景象。）
The yard was blanketed in white, with only the rabbit hutches visible.
（院子里一片雪白，只有兔笼隐约可见。）
The storm raged outside, but inside, the room felt cozy and safe.
（外面的风暴肆虐，但房间里却感到舒适而安全。）
The fresh vegetables on the floor added a touch of life to the room.
（地板上的新鲜蔬菜为房间增添了一丝生机。）
The warm little hand on her cheek brought her back to reality.
（脸颊上温暖的小手将她拉回现实。）
4. 常见单词的高级替换词
场景分类与替换词
Care (照顾)
高级替换：tend, nurture, attend to, look after, foster
例句：Eric tended to the rabbits with great care.
Focus (专注)
高级替换：concentrate, immerse, engross, fixate, absorb
例句：He was completely immersed in observing the rabbits.
Save (拯救)
高级替换：rescue, retrieve, salvage, recover, deliver
例句：They managed to rescue the rabbits from the storm.
Improve (改善)
高级替换：enhance, refine, ameliorate, boost, elevate
例句：Caring for the rabbits helped ameliorate Eric’s condition.
Observe (观察)
高级替换：monitor, scrutinize, inspect, survey, examine
例句：Eric spent hours scrutinizing the rabbits’ behaviors.
5. 高中语法现象与地道搭配分析
语法现象
现在分词作状语
例句：Eric went charging out into the snow-filled darkness, holding Bucket tightly.
分析：现在分词“holding”表示伴随动作，增强句子的动态感。
定语从句
例句：The rabbits, which were feeding on fresh vegetables, seemed content.
分析：定语从句“which were feeding”修饰“rabbits”，补充信息。
虚拟语气
例句：If Eric hadn’t acted quickly, the rabbits might have been in danger.
分析：虚拟语气表达与事实相反的假设。
倒装句
例句：Not only did Eric save the rabbits, but he also cared for them deeply.
分析：倒装结构“Not only did”强调Eric的行为。
地道搭配
Light up (点亮)
例句：His smile lit up the room.
近义词：brighten, illuminate
反义词：darken, dim
Fall behind (落后)
例句：Eric was falling behind in class due to his learning difficulties.
近义词：lag, trail
反义词：excel, advance
Take in (收养)
例句：They took in two rabbits to help Eric.
近义词：adopt, foster
反义词：abandon, reject
Peek through (透过…看)
例句：Eric peeked through the curtains to check the storm.
近义词：glance, peer
反义词：ignore, overlook
Howling wind (呼啸的风)
例句：The howling wind made the night feel even colder.
近义词：roaring, screaming
反义词：calm breeze, gentle wind
生词短语积累
Hyperactive (adj. 多动的)
词意：excessively active
近义词：restless, energetic
反义词：calm, lethargic
例句：Eric was a hyperactive child who struggled to sit still.
Instinctively (adv. 本能地)
词意：without conscious thought
近义词：intuitively, naturally
反义词：deliberately, consciously
例句：She instinctively reached for her phone when she heard the noise.
Soothing (adj. 安慰的)
词意：calming or comforting
近义词：relaxing, pacifying
反义词：agitating, disturbing
例句：His soothing words helped calm the frightened rabbit.
Remarkable (adj. 显著的)
词意：worthy of attention; extraordinary
近义词：notable, impressive
反义词：ordinary, unremarkable
例句：Eric made remarkable progress in his studies.
Unwavering (adj. 坚定的)
词意：steady or resolute
近义词：steadfast, determined
反义词：wavering, uncertain
例句：His unwavering dedication to the rabbits was inspiring.
Possible Answers
Version 1
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened. In panic, his eyes still wide with excitement(独立主格). “Dad, you won’t believe what happened(宾从)! There was a huge storm, and Bucket and Captain were outside(对原文的衔接). Mom and I had to bring them in. It was so cold, but I didn’t care. I just knew I had to save them!(宾从)” Larry knelt down, listening intently(现在分词做伴随动作) as Eric described(状从) how he had braved the snow and wind to rescue the rabbits(宾从),Larry still catching his breath from his early return(独立主格，描述父亲的状态). He noticed the chewed telephone cord(与原文的衔接) on the floor and realized why he couldn’t reach them. “I was so worried when the phone didn’t work,” Larry admitted, his voice filled with relief and proud(独立主格描写情绪) . Eric’s eyes widened as he glanced at the cord(状从), then at the rabbits. “I didn’t even notice they were chewing it(宾从)!” he exclaimed, a mix of guilt and pride in his voice(情绪描写).
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance. As the days passed(状从), Eric’s bond with the rabbits grew stronger(关系描写). He spent hours observing them, noting(现在分词做伴随动作) how they ate, played, and rested(动作串). His teachers began to notice a change in him too. He was more focused in class, and his reading and writing improved significantly. One day, his teacher pulled Larry aside after school. “Eric has made remarkable progress,” she said. “He’s more attentive and seems to really enjoy learning now.” Larry smiled, realizing(现在分词做伴随动作) that the rabbits had given Eric more than just companionship—they had given him a sense of purpose(宾从). At home, Eric continued to care for Bucket and Captain with unwavering dedication(状语，描写心理). He even started a journal, documenting their behaviors and his thoughts(现在分词做伴随动作). The once hyperactive child had found a way to channel his energy into something meaningful(对比描写，变化描写), and his bright smile now lit up not just his face, but the hearts of everyone around him.
Version 2
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened. His voice trembling with excitement(独立主格描述情绪) as he recounted the stormy rescue(状从), his words tumbled out in an excited rush. “Dad, you should’ve seen it! The storm was crazy, but I know I have to save Bucket and Captain!”his words flowing with a newfound confidence(独立主格，描写人物变化). Larry, who had returned early due to the phone outage(定从，与原文衔接), listened with a mix of relief and pride(情绪描写). He glanced at the chewed telephone cord and chuckled(与原文衔接). “No wonder I couldn’t reach you,” he said, pointing to the cord(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Eric’s eyes followed Larry’s gaze, and he gasped. “I didn’t even notice they were chewing it!” he admitted, his voice tinged with both embarrassment and pride(情绪描写). Larry patted his son’s shoulder, his heart swelling with love.
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance. With days passing by(时间过渡语), Eric’s bond with the rabbits deepened(情感联系描写), and his behavior at school began to change. His teacher noticed how he was more attentive in class(宾从), often raising his hand to answer questions(现在分词短语做伴随动作). At home, Eric spent hours observing the rabbits, jotting down notes in a journal(现在分词短语做伴随动作). His writing, once fragmented(adj做补语，once与now做对比), now flowed with clarity and purpose. Larry and his wife marveled at the change, realizing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) that the rabbits had given Eric more than companionship(宾从)—they had given him a sense of responsibility and focus(递进说明). Eric’s smile, always bright(adj做主语补语), now carried a quiet confidence.
Version 3
Paragraph 1: Eric rushed to Larry and told him what had happened. His eyes sparkling with pride (独立主格，情绪描写)as he narrated the night’s events(状从). “Dad, I knew I had to save them(宾从)! The storm was so bad, but I didn’t care. I just ran out and got Bucket and Captain.” Larry, who had returned early due to the phone outage(定从，交代原因), listened with a mix of relief and pride(情绪描写). He noticed the chewed telephone cord on the floor and smiled. “No wonder I couldn’t reach you,” he said, pointing to the cord(现在分词做伴随动作). Eric’s eyes widened as he realized(状从) what had happened(宾从). “I didn’t even know they were chewing it!(宾从)” he exclaimed,shooting a naughty smile at the two little creatures(现在分词短语做伴随动作).
Paragraph 2: With days passing by, Eric had a big chance. With days passing by(时间过渡), Eric’s connection with the rabbits grew stronger, and his academic performance began to improve(孩子的变化). His teacher remarked on his increased focus and participation in class. At home, Eric spent hours reading to the rabbits, his voice calm and steady(独立主格刻画人物). His parents noticed how he was more organized, even helping with household chores(宾从，人物刻画). The rabbits had not only brought joy to Eric’s life but also taught him responsibility and patience. Eric’s journey from a hyperactive child to a focused, caring individual(后置定语) was nothing short of remarkable(否定强调).
加分点与亮点词汇
语法加分点：
独立主格：His voice trembling with excitement
定语从句：The rabbits, which were once just pets, had become a catalyst.
虚拟语气：If Eric hadn’t acted quickly, the rabbits might have been in danger.
亮点词汇：
情绪描写：trembling with excitement, swelling with pride
动作描写：braved the snow, jotting down notes
替换词：
Save → rescue, retrieve
Focus → concentrate, immerse
语法加分点：
倒装句：Not only did Eric save the rabbits, but he also cared for them deeply.
独立主格：His eyes sparkling with pride
定语从句：The rabbits, which had brought joy to Eric’s life, also taught him responsibility.
亮点词汇：
情绪描写：sparkling with pride, heart swelling with admiration
动作描写：prepared a nest, reading to the rabbits
替换词：
Care → tend, nurture
Improve → enhance, refine
语法加分点：
虚拟语气：If Eric hadn’t saved the rabbits, they might have been lost.
定语从句：The rabbits, which had become a turning point, taught Eric valuable lessons.
独立主格：His words tumbling out in an excited rush
亮点词汇：
情绪描写：filled with pride, sense of accomplishment
动作描写：documenting their behaviors, offering to help
替换词：
Observe → monitor, scrutinize
Responsibility → duty, obligation
读后续写积累语料
短语升级替换
Take care of → tend to, look after
例句：Eric tended to the rabbits with great care.
Pay attention to → focus on, concentrate on
例句：He concentrated on observing the rabbits’ behaviors.
Save from danger → rescue, retrieve
例句：They managed to rescue the rabbits from the storm.
Improve a lot → make remarkable progress, show significant improvement
例句：Eric made remarkable progress in his studies.
Feel happy → be filled with joy, swell with pride
例句：Larry’s heart swelled with pride as he listened to Eric.
Responsibility → duty, obligation
例句：The rabbits taught Eric a sense of responsibility.
Focus → concentration, immersion
例句：Eric’s immersion in caring for the rabbits improved his focus.
Bravery → courage, determination
例句：Eric showed great courage in saving the rabbits.
Transformation → change, growth
例句：Eric’s transformation was evident to everyone around him.
Companionship → friendship, bond
例句：The rabbits provided Eric with a deep sense of companionship.