英语读后续写框架思路-四步解题法
读后续写要求考生在阅读一篇未完成短文后,根据首句提示续写两段内容,保持情节连贯、语言风格一致,并体现正能量价值观。
【评分重点】:
内容连贯性(与原文逻辑衔接自然);
语言丰富性(语法准确、词汇多样);
主题升华(情感或道理合理升华)。
Step 1:精读原文,抓关键信息
【重点】 提取5要素:
人物关系(如朋友、家人);
核心冲突(如迷路、误会、比赛失利);
情感线索(如焦虑、感动、后悔);
环境细节(如天气、场景描写);
伏笔暗示(如人物对话、未解决的矛盾)。
示例:
原文:Lisa hesitated at the crossroads, holding the map upside down. The sky darkened, and thunder rumbled in the distance...
提取信息:
人物:Lisa(可能迷路);
冲突:迷路 + 天气恶化;
伏笔:地图拿反,暗示后续可能求助或发现错误。
Step 2:构思情节,设计两段框架
【难点】 确保两段内容既有衔接又有递进,避免“流水账”。
万能结构:
第一段:解决冲突(首句提示 + 行动/转折);
第二段:升华主题(感悟/情感变化 + 环境呼应)。
情节设计模板:
段落 内容要点 例句参考
第一段 根据首句展开行动,引入转折 Just as she was about to cry, a gentle voice behind her said, "Need help "
第二段 解决冲突,情感升华 That day, Lisa learned that kindness often appears in the darkest moments.
Step 3:语言模仿与细节添加
【重点】模仿原文的时态、人称、语言风格(如描述性语言、对话)。
【技巧】添加感官细节(视觉、听觉)与情感描写:
Her hands trembled (触觉) as raindrops began to fall (视觉), and the howling wind (听觉) made her heart race.
A warm smile spread across his face, easing her anxiety.
Step 4:检查润色,确保衔接
【重点】 使用衔接词呼应前文:
代词:he, this, such kindness...
逻辑词:Meanwhile, Finally, To her surprise...
关键词重复:map, storm, help...
1.情感描写万能句
焦虑:Her heart pounded like a drum, and sweat trickled down her back.
惊喜:Eyes widening, she gasped, “Is this really for me ”
感动:A warm feeling surged through her, blurring her vision with tears.
2.环境描写模板
开头呼应:The storm raged on, but her fear had melted away.
结尾升华:The sun broke through the clouds, symbolizing hope and new beginnings.
3. 对话设计原则
推动情节:“Follow me,” the old man said calmly. “I know a shortcut.”
揭示性格:“Mistakes are proof that you’re trying,” Mom whispered, wiping her tears.
失分点 对策
情节偏离原文 紧扣原文伏笔,避免添加无关人物或事件。
时态/人称错误 通读原文,确定时态(如一般过去时)和人称。
结尾仓促 预留2-3句进行情感升华或道理总结。
题目(2023年新高考I卷读后续写):
原文梗概:男孩Tom在森林捡到受伤的小鸟,悄悄照顾它,但被同学嘲笑。
首句提示:
Paragraph 1:Tom hesitated, holding the tiny bird in his hands...
Paragraph 2:Weeks later, the bird was ready to fly...
范文续写:
Paragraph 1:
Tom hesitated, holding the tiny bird in his hands. “What if they laugh at me again ” he thought. Suddenly, the bird let out a weak chirp, its eyes pleading for help. Taking a deep breath, Tom tucked it into his jacket and hurried home. He carefully cleaned its wound, recalling his grandma’s words: “True courage is doing what’s right, even when others doubt you.”
Paragraph 2:
Weeks later, the bird was ready to fly. As Tom opened the window, it hopped onto his palm, chirping cheerfully. “You’re strong now,” he whispered. With a flap of wings, it soared into the sky. Watching it disappear, Tom smiled. The laughter of his classmates no longer stung — he had learned that kindness, like the bird’s song, needed no approval.
【高分分析】:
情节衔接:紧扣“救助-被嘲笑-放飞”主线;
语言亮点:感官描写(weak chirp)、哲理句(True courage...);
主题升华:由个人经历到普遍道理。
练习:根据以下开头续写两段(每段50词左右):
The bell rang, and Emma found an old diary under her desk...
口诀记忆:
读后续写莫慌张,五要素抓信息详;
两段结构分层次,情感环境不能忘;
模仿原文是关键,衔接升华高分涨!