Unit13
We’re trying to save the earth!
Writing Name
I. Analyze the topic
Writing Topic
Mianyang is a clean city in China,but there are also some environmental problems these days.Everyone is responsible for protecting environment.Please write an e-mail to the city mayor about the problems and your suggestions and send it to dsjzx-cx@my..
In your e-mail,you can describe the following questions:
What are the problems
What caused these problems
What are your possible suggestions
写作要求：书写规范，100词左右；可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Person：
Tense：
Text：
Details
Reader：
III. Make an outline
Structure：
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IV. Finish the first draft
Dear City Mayor,
V. Finish the second draft
Dear City Mayor,Marking ladders
Unit13
We’re trying to save the earth!
For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure, content, grammar & language Self-check Peer check Teacher’s assessment
Structure and content I have organized my writing into paragraphs. (1 point)
Para : I have led the topic (2 point)
Para_____: I have written problems,causes,solutions (9points)
Para.____:I have showed my expectations (2 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (2point)
Grammar and language My expressions are right. (3 points)
There are spelling mistakes. (1 point)
I have used some good sentences. (2 point)
I have used some conjunction words and transitional sentences.. (2 point)
I have checked my word count is around . (1 point)
Total Score
What can I do to improve my writing next time (共12张PPT)
Unit13
We’re trying to save the earth!
Writing
Writing Topic
Mianyang is a clean city in China,but there are also some environmental problems these days.Everyone is responsible for protecting environment.Please write an e-mail to the city mayor about the problems and your suggestions and send it to dsjzx-cx@my..
In your e-mail,you can describle the following questions:
What are the problems
What caused these problems
What are your possible suggestions
要求：
1.书写规范，100词左右；可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Pre-writing
Person
The third person
Tense
The simple present
Text
An e-mail
Reader
the mayer of Mianyang
Details
1. Describle all the questions
2.80-100 words
Pre-writing
Beginning
movie/reasons/contents/feelings
Body
Ending
Structure
lead to the topic
Pre-writing
problems/causes/solutions
show expectations
Pre-writing
I’m glad /happy...to write a letter to you.
greetings
I am a middle school student named/called...
introduction
I want to/I’d like to /I’m willing to tell you something about the environmental problems in our city.
Lead the topic
Beginning
Pre-writing
Body
air/water/noise/land/waste...pollution
eg.The air is badly polluted./We can’t see blue sky anymore.
1.factories that brun coal pollute...
2.there are more cars/...
3.factories put waste water ...
4.people throw litter into river.
5.farmers use farming chemicals...
6.people buy useless things.
7.people throw away things like wooden chopsticks...
1. To cut down..., we should/could...
2. I suggest that ...
3. We are supposed to...
4. lt's a good idea to...
5.We shouldn’t...
take the bus/ride a bike/walk
sort the garbage
bring a bag
throw ...into bins
reuse the things
buy the things we need
...
problems
causes
solutions
Ending
Pre-writing
expectations
All in all,everyone should play a part in protecting the environment.
And I believe together our actions can make a diffrence and lead to a better future.
Pre-writing
Linking words/Transitional sentences(过渡句)
1.Firstly,I have noticed that our city is facing serious pollution problems.One problem is that...
2.So we should do everything we can to protect the environment.Firstly,we can...Ass for ...pollution...,...
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Write a passage in 15 minutes
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While-writing
a clear structure:beginning,body,ending.
correct content: (lead to the topic;problems,causes,solutions;show expectations)
some conjunction words and transitional sentences
some good sentences
no spelling mistakes
a clear and tidy hand writing
no wrong sentences
enough words
Structure
and
content
Grammar andIanguage
Post-writing
Spelling mistakes
Wrong sentences &Punctuation mistakes
Good sentences
Conjunction words
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Check the composition
Post-writing
Work in groups,correct the mistakes and appreciate(欣赏) your group members’ compositions. Then show it to the class.
Focus on: 1. structure(结构)
2. handwriting(书写)
3. points(要点)
4. grammar(语法)
5. punctuation(标点)
6.Ianguage(语言)
7. fluency(流畅度)
Post-writing
