深圳中考英语真题作文（2022年）评讲课件(共19张PPT)

(共19张PPT)
2022中考真题
青春不觉老朱颜，强半销磨薄领间
—— 一轮复习第三周作文 ——
目 录
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审题-摘取内容要素
构思-建立内容逻辑
成文-句段衔接成篇
升级-优化词句表达
CONTENTS
Pre-writing
TIP1: 完成六何分析表格(5W1H)
Step 1 审题-摘取内容要素
what
who
why
when
where
how
①我
②同学们
①毕业活动
一般过去时
海边
②解说词
参加国际学生vlog作品展
①海边活动
②活动感言
①沙滩排球
......
晚上
搭帐篷
聚餐
清理垃圾
分享会
下午
Pre-writing
Body
Step 1 审题-摘取内容要素
TIP2: 提取重点短语并翻译
沙滩排球
冲浪
搭帐篷
聚餐
清理垃圾
分享会
增进友谊
宝贵的回忆
a beach volleyball game
surfing
put up tent
have a picnic
pick up the litter
share feeling
promote friendship
valuable memories
Pre-writing
Step 2 构思-建立内容逻辑
1. 下午，我们打沙滩排球。
TIP2:头脑风暴各段句子并翻译
Beginning
Ending
引出话题（已给出）
感谢语 （已给出）
In the afternoon,
Body
①海边活动
②活动感言
①沙滩排球
......
晚上
搭帐篷
聚餐
清理垃圾
分享会
下午
We
played a beach volleyball game.
Pre-writing
Step 2 构思-建立内容逻辑
2. 有些同学在附近游泳，另一些同学享受着海上冲浪的乐趣。
TIP2:头脑风暴各段句子并翻译
Beginning
Ending
引出话题（已给出）
感谢语 （已给出）
Some students
Body
①海边活动
②活动感言
①沙滩排球
......
晚上
搭帐篷
聚餐
清理垃圾
分享会
下午
went swimming
nearby,
others
enjoyed
the fun of
surfing in the sea.
Pre-writing
Step 2 构思-建立内容逻辑
3. 我们在沙滩上清理垃圾。
TIP2:头脑风暴各段句子并翻译
Beginning
Ending
引出话题（已给出）
感谢语 （已给出）
We
Body
①海边活动
②活动感言
①沙滩排球
......
晚上
搭帐篷
聚餐
清理垃圾
分享会
下午
picked up the litter
on the beach.
Pre-writing
Step 2 构思-建立内容逻辑
4. 晚上，我们搭起帐篷，并在沙滩上野餐。
TIP2:头脑风暴各段句子并翻译
Beginning
Ending
引出话题（已给出）
感谢语 （已给出）
At night,
Body
①海边活动
②活动感言
①沙滩排球
......
晚上
搭帐篷
聚餐
清理垃圾
分享会
下午
we
put up tents
and
on the beach.
had a picnic
Pre-writing
Step 2 构思-建立内容逻辑
5.我们坐在一起，并分享对这次难忘的经历的感受。
TIP2:头脑风暴各段句子并翻译
Beginning
Ending
引出话题（已给出）
感谢语 （已给出）
All of us
Body
①海边活动
②活动感言
①沙滩排球
......
晚上
搭帐篷
聚餐
清理垃圾
分享会
下午
sat around
and
our feeling
experience.
shared
about this unforgettable
Pre-writing
Step 2 构思-建立内容逻辑
6. 我们不仅增进我们的友谊，而且活动给我们留下宝贵的回忆。
TIP2:头脑风暴各段句子并翻译
Beginning
Ending
引出话题（已给出）
感谢语 （已给出）
We
Body
①海边活动
②活动感言
①沙滩排球
......
晚上
搭帐篷
聚餐
清理垃圾
分享会
下午
not only
promote our friendship,
but also
this activity
leaves us
valuable memories.
Pre-writing
Step 3 成文-句段衔接成篇
TIP: 连句成段、连段成篇
Beginning(Para.1)引出话题
Body (Para.2) 要点1：海边活动；要点2：活动感悟
Ending (Para.3) 感谢语
Hi, everyone! I am Li Hua. lt's my great pleasure to present my vlog to you.
Last Saturday, we went to the seaside to celebrate our graduation. In the afternoon, we had a beach volleyball game. Some students went swimming nearby, others enjoyed the fun of surfing in the sea.We picked up the litter on the beach. At night, we put up tents and had a picnic. All of us sat around and shared our feeling about this unforgettable experience. We not only promote our friendship, but also this activity leaves us a valuable experience.
So much for my video. I hope you have enjoyed it. Thank you
how
While-writing
Step 4 升级-优化词句表达
TIP: 高分策略
Beginning(Para.1)引出话题
Body (Para.2) 要点1：海边活动；要点2：活动感悟
Ending (Para.3) 感谢语
Hi, everyone! I am Li Hua. lt's my great pleasure to present my vlog to you.
Last Saturday, we went to the seaside to celebrate our graduation. In the afternoon, we had a beach volleyball game. Some students went swimming nearby, others enjoyed the fun of surfing in the sea. We picked up the litter on the beach. At night, we put up tents and had a picnic. All of us sat around and shared our feeling about this unforgettable experience. We not only promote our friendship, but also this activity leaves us a valuable experience.
So much for my video. I hope you have enjoyed it. Thank you
（1）内容升级（对中间段落how的内容进行发散扩展）
（2）连接词（过渡句，逻辑词）
While-writing
In the afternoon, we had a beach volleyball game.
Step 4 升级-优化词句表达
Body (para2)
要点：海边活动；
要点：活动感言
我们玩得很开心
we all had a good time.
TIP:内容升级：对how部分进行内容扩展
In the afternoon,
一起去海边
今天是晴天
内容扩展的方法：描述事实
we went to the seaside together.
It was a sunny day.
Some students went swimming nearby, others enjoyed the fun of surfing in the sea.
内容扩展的方法：描述感受
swimming nearby, others enjoyed the fun of surfing in the sea.
Some students went
We all had a good time.
we went to the
It was a sunny
seaside together.
We had a beach volleyball
day.
game.
While-writing
we picked up the litter on the beach.
Step 4 升级-优化词句表达
Body (para2)
要点：海边活动；
要点：活动感言
我们做的食物非常美味
The food cooked by us was so delicious.
TIP:内容升级：对how部分进行内容扩展
Before dark,
天黑前
多么有意义
内容扩展的方法：时间逻辑词，感受
Before dark，
How meaningful it was!
was so delicious.
a picnic.
we picked up
How
the litter on the beach.
At night,
meaningful it was!
we put up two tents and had
At night, we put up two tents and had a picnic.
内容扩展的方法：描述感受
The food cooked by us
While-writing
All of us sat around and shared our feeling about this unforgettable experience.
Step 4 升级-优化词句表达
Body (para2)
要点：海边活动；
要点：活动感言
通过这次活动
Through this activity,
TIP:内容升级：对how部分进行内容扩展
Finally,
最后
内容扩展的方法：时间逻辑词
Finally,
leaves us a valuable experience.
our friendship, but also this activity
all of us sat around and
Through
shared our feeling about this
unforgettable experience.
this activity, We not only promote
We not only promote our friendship, but also this activity leaves us a valuable experience.
内容扩展的方法：过渡词，期待
我希望我们都有一个更美好的未来。
I hope that all of us have a better life.
I hope that all of us have a better
life.
While-writing
参考范文
Hi, everyone! I am Li Hua. lt's my great pleasure to present my vlog to you.
Last Saturday, we went to the seaside to celebrate our graduation. In the afternoon, we went to the seaside together. It was a sunny day. We had a beach volleyball game. Some students went swimming nearby, others enjoyed the fun of surfing in the sea. We all had a good time. Before dark，
we picked up the litter on the beach. How meaningful it was! At night, we put up tents and had a picnic. The food cooked by us was so delicious. All of us sat around and shared our feeling about this unforgettable experience. Through this activity,We not only promote our friendship, but also this activity leaves us a valuable experience. I hope that all of us have a better life.
So much for my video. I hope you have enjoyed it. Thank you
Post-writing
the standard of evaluation 评分标准
Post-writing
Thank you
青春不觉老朱颜，强半销磨薄领间
—— 一轮复习第三周作文 ——