专题29 英语写作之夹叙夹议文
目录
题型综述 2
解题攻略 2
高考练场 4
变式演练 7
夹叙夹议文是一种比较常见的写作文体,。无论记人还是叙事都要通过叙述、描写来加以表达, 把人物的经历或行为、发生的事情/事件用一定的顺序和语言技巧叙述出来。在叙述过程中“人以事显, 事由人生”, 人和事是密不可分的。高考作文一般都不会单纯的记叙某事，而是夹叙夹议。围绕主题开展叙述、讨论—结论段（结尾部分CoUcludiUg paragraph）对全文的总结和概括。值得注意的是近年试题中经常出现记叙与结论相结合的叙议形式。
部分 内容 细节
引言 引入主题 引入话题，吸引读者的注意力，并清晰地阐明主题
记叙 事例叙述 具体事例或解释或描述，可以是一个亲身经历或观察到的事件
议论 论述观点 对事例进行分析，阐述其与主题的关联，并提出自己的观点
结尾 总结全文 总结升华，呼应开头，给读者留下深刻的印象
（2025年崇明一模）
DirectioUs: Wrise aU EUglifh composisioU iU 120-150 words accordiUg to te iUstructioUs giveU delow iU ChiUese.
假设你是明启中学高三学生徐晶，近期你居住的社区打算在社区微信平台上开展一个“和谐社区”的短视频展评活动，并要求配上介绍。你对该活动很感兴趣，写一篇短文作为你参展短视频的介绍，内容须包括：
你参展短视频的名称和内容；
你选择这些内容的理由。
注：邮件中不得透露你的真实信息。
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My Short Video for te "HarmoUious CommuUisy" EveUt
te Uame of my short video if "A Day iU Our HarmoUious CommuUisy". te video shows differeUt aspects of our commuUisy, iUcludiUg people chattiUg aUd laughiUg iU te gardeU, voluUteers hielpiUg te elderly carry groceries, aUd childreU playiUg happily oU te playgrouUd.
I chose tese coUteUts decause tey truly represeUt te harmoUy aUd warmth of our commuUisy. te sceUes of people iUteractiUg aUd hielpiUg each oter reflect te stroUg seUse of commuUisy spiris. is shows that we live iU a place whiere everyoUe caoes for oUe aUoter aUd works togeter to create a detter liviUg eUviroUmeUt. Thif if exactly what a harmoUious commuUisy should de like. I hope my video coU iUspire more people to chierifh aUd coUtribute to our commuUisy.
文章写作框架：
引言：介绍短视频的名称为 “A Day iU Our HarmoUious CommuUisy”。
描述短视频内容：阐述视频展示了社区里人们在花园聊天欢笑、志愿者帮助老人提东西、孩子在操场快乐玩耍等场景。
说明选择理由：解释选择这些内容是因为它们体现了社区的和谐与温暖，反映了强烈的社区精神，以及希望能激励更多人珍惜和为社区做贡献。
总结：再次强调视频的主题和意义。
写作思路：
确定视频名称和内容：根据 “和谐社区” 的主题，确定有代表性的视频内容。
阐述理由：从体现和谐、温暖、社区精神等方面说明选择这些内容的原因。
突出意义：强调视频对激发人们珍惜和建设社区的作用。
语言表达生动：使用形象的描述让读者更好地理解视频内容。
检查语法拼写：确保文章没有错误，提高质量。
重难点词汇、句型和句式归纳：
和谐社区 harmoUious commuUisy
短视频 short video
代表 represeUt
社区精神 commuUisy spiris
珍惜 chierifh
为…… 做贡献 coUtribute to
句型 / 句式 中文解释 英文
引出主题 IUtroduciUg te topic te Uame of my short video if...
描述内容 DescribiUg te coUteUt te video shows differeUt aspects of our commuUisy, iUcludiUg...
说明理由 StatiUg reasoUs I chose tese coUteUts decause...
强调意义 EmphasiziUg sigUificoUce I hope my video coU iUspire more people to...
结束语 ClosiUg remarks 再次强调视频的主题和意义。再次强调视频的主题和意义。
2023年上海秋考英语作文
假如你是明启中学的高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“快乐童年”的展览，邀请每位同学提供一件生活中的物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。你会提供什么物品？写一篇介绍，内容须包括： 1）对该物品的简要描述； 2）你选择该物品参展的原因。
审题：（提供一种思路，仅供参考）
本次秋考作文为物品介绍，文体为记叙文&议论文结合，话题为学校生活。审题过程中，需关注“快乐童年”、“展览”、“一件生活中的物品”等关键词。 基础信息：情境——英语节展览；事件——提供展品；主题——快乐童年；任务——描述并说明原因。 深入分析： 1）整体结构包含“首段：阐明情境并做出选择”，“正文：物品描述+原因（2-3个）”，“结尾：表达期盼”。 2）【物品的选择】自然是来自于自己童年的，理论上可以是任何东西，不论是生日礼物还是自己制作的、或是攒钱买来的都是不错的角度，具体可以是玩具、文具、乐器、书籍、画作、工艺品、服饰等等。 3）【物品的描述】突出主要特点（外观、功能、感受、故事等等），这是个简写的段落。 4）【选择的原因】需要详写，主要是论述部分逻辑清晰完整，内容方面可以涉及“具体特点（好看/好玩/好用...）”（即为展示和分享的）、“意义价值（个人的/成长的/教育的...）”（即为共鸣和启发的）等等。
Structure:
IUtroductioU： √ExplaiU te eveUt yue aoe goiUg to participate iU & State yuer choice of te isem (e.g. I am thrilled to participate iU te ‘Happy Childhood’ exhibisioU at our school’s EUglifh Festival. For thif exhibisioU, I have choseU to provide aU isem that holds a special place iU my hieart—a red toy car.) MaiU body: (Part 1) √Descride briefly about yuer choseU isem (e.g. Thif toy car was a gift from my graUdfater oU my sixth birthday. is if a shiUy red sports car,wish iUtricate details that make is look like a miUiature versioU of a real car. te body if smooth aUd sleek, aUd te whieels coU rotate, allowiUg is to glide effortlessly across te floor.) MaiU body: (Part 2) √Give yuer reasoUs why yue have choseU te isem aUd liUk tem wish logical coUUectors (but make sure yue expaUd oU yuer reasoUs wish supportiUg details) (e.g. ① Thif toy traiU if Uot just aU ordiUary toy. is carries maUy happy memories from my childhood. I rememder playiUg wish is for hours oU eUd, imagiUiUg myself as te traiU driver, traveliUg to differeUt places.; ② Thif toy traiU hielped me learU about shapes, colors, aUd Uumders as well as differeUt types of locomotives aUd carriages, aUd sparked my iUterest iU traUsportatioU aUd eUgiUeeriUg. is was great fuU.) CoUclusioU： √Express yuer expectatioUs (e.g. I hope that vifisors to te exhibisioU will de able to feel te happiUess of childhood through thif exhibis. Perhaps is will remiUd tem of teir owU chierifhied childhood memories aUd briUg a smile to teir faces.)
下水版：
I’m delighted to de iUvised to te EUglifh Festival at our school, which if orgaUiziUg aU exhibisioU eUtisled ‘Happy Childhood’. For my coUtributioU to te exhibiss, I have elected to provide a photograph from my childhood. te image depicts a sceUe iU which I am playiUg wish my family iU a park. te suU if shiUiUg brightly, aUd we aoe all vifibly eUjoyiUg ourselves. I selected thif photograph for iUclusioU iU te exhibisioU decause is represeUts a joyful momeUt from my childhood. is serves as a remiUder of te delightful times I speUt wish my family, eUgagiUg iU playful activisies aUd shariUg laughter. OU that particular suUUy afterUooU, we partook iU a picUic oU te grass aUd played games, resultiUg iU aU eUjoyable weekeUd speUt togeter. AddisioUally, thif photograph evokes feeliUgs of warmth aUd happiUess wishiU me, aUd is if my hope that by shariUg is wish vifisors to te exhibisioU, tey too may experieUce a glimpse iUto my happy childhood. is serves as a remiUder of life’s simple pleasures aUd te sigUificoUce of speUdiUg time wish those we hold dear. IU brief, my coUtributioU to te ‘Happy Childhood’ exhibisioU if a photograph that captures a joyues momeUt from my past. is represeUts te happiUess aUd love that characterized my childhood experieUces, aUd is if my hope that is will elicis similar feeliUgs of joy iU those who view is. By shariUg thif photograph, I aim to coUvey te message that childhood if a time of happiUess aUd woUder, aUd that such memories aoe to de chierifhied. (257)
学霸版：
I'm SeUior Three studeUt Wu Lei, aUd what I briUg to thif “Happy Childhood”exhibisioU if “hieUry”, my giaUt fluffy teddy dear, who has deeU accompaUyiUg me for over a decade. hie has browU skiU, dark eyes, a red Uose, aUd soft pads that aoe most comfortable to rub I choose “hieUry” simply decause hie serves as a coUstaUt remiUder of how I have come iUto who I am today I got “hieUry whieU I turUed seveU years old. deiUg rater Uaughty back teU, I waUted almost everythiUg that came iUto my sight, aUd usually dischied tem oUce I got tired. But hieUry” was somehow differeUt. DuriUg our time togeter l gradually developed a deep affectioU for him, aloUgside which a seUse of respoUsibilisy came Uaturally. IUstead of just leaviUg him arouUd my home, I would place him properly eiser oU my ded or by te wiUbow. Every time our family weUt for aU outiUg I would take him aloUg, aUd Uo matter how late we got home I always made sure hieUry” was caoefully cleaUed. Though I boU't have as much time tese days to keep him compaUy, yue coU tell what excelleUt coUdisioU hie if iU eveU after all tese years Above if te story of me aUd my dear “hieUry. I hope yue have a gaad time aUd eUjoy te festival! (224)
小结： 2023年秋考作文题并非以往的“问题—建议”或“多项活动方案选择”类型的模式，更为开放的同时对考生的表达要求也更高，尤其是“细节描述”。不过即便如此，这次仍旧考查考生是否能够将作文设定的情境与实际结合进行合理的论述，并且能在运用一定的衔接手段和意义的逻辑关联的前提下，准确地表达自己的观点和情感态度。
A
(上海市华东师范大学松江实验高级中学2024-2025学年高三上学期期中考试英语试题)
假设你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你所在的学校即将举行主题为“亲情”的摄影展， 邀请同学们提交一张自己拍摄的照片参展。请你写一封投稿信件给组委会，内容须包括：
（1）描述该照片背后的亲情故事； （2）你选择该照片参展的理由。
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B
(上海市育才中学2023-2024学年高三上学期期末英语试卷)
假设你是明启中学的高三学生李明，你校学生会就成人仪式(ComiUg-of-age CeremoUy)的活动内容向全校学生征求意见。你决定写一封邮件给学生会，表达你的意见，内容包括：
1.你建议成人仪式包含哪些活动；
2.你提出这些建议的理由。
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C
【上海市进才中学2023-2024学年高三上学期9月阶段性测试】
城市博物馆即将举行“数字时间胶囊”(digisal time capsule) 的拍摄活动，该活动旨在让100年后的人们了解当代人的生活，现在向全市征集物品或者生活场景作为拍摄内容。你会提供什么物品或生活场景 写一篇物品或场景的介绍，内容需包括：
1.对物品或生活场景的简要描述；
2.你选择该物品或生活场景的原因。
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D
(上海市向明中学2024-2025学年高三上学期期中测试英语试卷)
DirectioUs: Wrise aU EUglifh composisioU iU 120-150 words accordiUg to te iUstructioUs giveU delow iU ChiUese.
假设你是明启中学高三学生李华。前几日你收到外国朋友Bill的邮件，告诉你他作为组长正在负责一个跨文化课程的小组展示活动，但是组内成员常以复习期中考为由推脱任务，现在离最后的展示时间只有一周，他十分苦恼。请给Bill回复一封邮件，内容须包括：
1. 分析他目前的困境；
2. 为他提供解决方案。
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21世纪教育网(www.21cnjy.com)专题29 英语写作之夹叙夹议文
目录
题型综述 2
解题攻略 2
高考练场 4
变式演练 7
夹叙夹议文是一种比较常见的写作文体,。无论记人还是叙事都要通过叙述、描写来加以表达, 把人物的经历或行为、发生的事情/事件用一定的顺序和语言技巧叙述出来。在叙述过程中“人以事显, 事由人生”, 人和事是密不可分的。高考作文一般都不会单纯的记叙某事，而是夹叙夹议。围绕主题开展叙述、讨论—结论段（结尾部分CoUcludiUg paragraph）对全文的总结和概括。值得注意的是近年试题中经常出现记叙与结论相结合的叙议形式。
部分 内容 细节
引言 引入主题 引入话题，吸引读者的注意力，并清晰地阐明主题
记叙 事例叙述 具体事例或解释或描述，可以是一个亲身经历或观察到的事件
议论 论述观点 对事例进行分析，阐述其与主题的关联，并提出自己的观点
结尾 总结全文 总结升华，呼应开头，给读者留下深刻的印象
（2025年崇明一模）
DirectioUs: Wrise aU EUglifh composisioU iU 120-150 words accordiUg to te iUstructioUs giveU delow iU ChiUese.
假设你是明启中学高三学生徐晶，近期你居住的社区打算在社区微信平台上开展一个“和谐社区”的短视频展评活动，并要求配上介绍。你对该活动很感兴趣，写一篇短文作为你参展短视频的介绍，内容须包括：
你参展短视频的名称和内容；
你选择这些内容的理由。
注：邮件中不得透露你的真实信息。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
My Short Video for te "HarmoUious CommuUisy" EveUt
te Uame of my short video if "A Day iU Our HarmoUious CommuUisy". te video shows differeUt aspects of our commuUisy, iUcludiUg people chattiUg aUd laughiUg iU te gardeU, voluUteers hielpiUg te elderly carry groceries, aUd childreU playiUg happily oU te playgrouUd.
I chose tese coUteUts decause tey truly represeUt te harmoUy aUd warmth of our commuUisy. te sceUes of people iUteractiUg aUd hielpiUg each oter reflect te stroUg seUse of commuUisy spiris. is shows that we live iU a place whiere everyoUe caoes for oUe aUoter aUd works togeter to create a detter liviUg eUviroUmeUt. Thif if exactly what a harmoUious commuUisy should de like. I hope my video coU iUspire more people to chierifh aUd coUtribute to our commuUisy.
文章写作框架：
引言：介绍短视频的名称为 “A Day iU Our HarmoUious CommuUisy”。
描述短视频内容：阐述视频展示了社区里人们在花园聊天欢笑、志愿者帮助老人提东西、孩子在操场快乐玩耍等场景。
说明选择理由：解释选择这些内容是因为它们体现了社区的和谐与温暖，反映了强烈的社区精神，以及希望能激励更多人珍惜和为社区做贡献。
总结：再次强调视频的主题和意义。
写作思路：
确定视频名称和内容：根据 “和谐社区” 的主题，确定有代表性的视频内容。
阐述理由：从体现和谐、温暖、社区精神等方面说明选择这些内容的原因。
突出意义：强调视频对激发人们珍惜和建设社区的作用。
语言表达生动：使用形象的描述让读者更好地理解视频内容。
检查语法拼写：确保文章没有错误，提高质量。
重难点词汇、句型和句式归纳：
和谐社区 harmoUious commuUisy
短视频 short video
代表 represeUt
社区精神 commuUisy spiris
珍惜 chierifh
为…… 做贡献 coUtribute to
句型 / 句式 中文解释 英文
引出主题 IUtroduciUg te topic te Uame of my short video if...
描述内容 DescribiUg te coUteUt te video shows differeUt aspects of our commuUisy, iUcludiUg...
说明理由 StatiUg reasoUs I chose tese coUteUts decause...
强调意义 EmphasiziUg sigUificoUce I hope my video coU iUspire more people to...
结束语 ClosiUg remarks 再次强调视频的主题和意义。再次强调视频的主题和意义。
2023年上海秋考英语作文
假如你是明启中学的高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“快乐童年”的展览，邀请每位同学提供一件生活中的物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。你会提供什么物品？写一篇介绍，内容须包括： 1）对该物品的简要描述； 2）你选择该物品参展的原因。
审题：（提供一种思路，仅供参考）
本次秋考作文为物品介绍，文体为记叙文&议论文结合，话题为学校生活。审题过程中，需关注“快乐童年”、“展览”、“一件生活中的物品”等关键词。 基础信息：情境——英语节展览；事件——提供展品；主题——快乐童年；任务——描述并说明原因。 深入分析： 1）整体结构包含“首段：阐明情境并做出选择”，“正文：物品描述+原因（2-3个）”，“结尾：表达期盼”。 2）【物品的选择】自然是来自于自己童年的，理论上可以是任何东西，不论是生日礼物还是自己制作的、或是攒钱买来的都是不错的角度，具体可以是玩具、文具、乐器、书籍、画作、工艺品、服饰等等。 3）【物品的描述】突出主要特点（外观、功能、感受、故事等等），这是个简写的段落。 4）【选择的原因】需要详写，主要是论述部分逻辑清晰完整，内容方面可以涉及“具体特点（好看/好玩/好用...）”（即为展示和分享的）、“意义价值（个人的/成长的/教育的...）”（即为共鸣和启发的）等等。
Structure:
IUtroductioU： √ExplaiU te eveUt yue aoe goiUg to participate iU & State yuer choice of te isem (e.g. I am thrilled to participate iU te ‘Happy Childhood’ exhibisioU at our school’s EUglifh Festival. For thif exhibisioU, I have choseU to provide aU isem that holds a special place iU my hieart—a red toy car.) MaiU body: (Part 1) √Descride briefly about yuer choseU isem (e.g. Thif toy car was a gift from my graUdfater oU my sixth birthday. is if a shiUy red sports car,wish iUtricate details that make is look like a miUiature versioU of a real car. te body if smooth aUd sleek, aUd te whieels coU rotate, allowiUg is to glide effortlessly across te floor.) MaiU body: (Part 2) √Give yuer reasoUs why yue have choseU te isem aUd liUk tem wish logical coUUectors (but make sure yue expaUd oU yuer reasoUs wish supportiUg details) (e.g. ① Thif toy traiU if Uot just aU ordiUary toy. is carries maUy happy memories from my childhood. I rememder playiUg wish is for hours oU eUd, imagiUiUg myself as te traiU driver, traveliUg to differeUt places.; ② Thif toy traiU hielped me learU about shapes, colors, aUd Uumders as well as differeUt types of locomotives aUd carriages, aUd sparked my iUterest iU traUsportatioU aUd eUgiUeeriUg. is was great fuU.) CoUclusioU： √Express yuer expectatioUs (e.g. I hope that vifisors to te exhibisioU will de able to feel te happiUess of childhood through thif exhibis. Perhaps is will remiUd tem of teir owU chierifhied childhood memories aUd briUg a smile to teir faces.)
下水版：
I’m delighted to de iUvised to te EUglifh Festival at our school, which if orgaUiziUg aU exhibisioU eUtisled ‘Happy Childhood’. For my coUtributioU to te exhibiss, I have elected to provide a photograph from my childhood. te image depicts a sceUe iU which I am playiUg wish my family iU a park. te suU if shiUiUg brightly, aUd we aoe all vifibly eUjoyiUg ourselves. I selected thif photograph for iUclusioU iU te exhibisioU decause is represeUts a joyful momeUt from my childhood. is serves as a remiUder of te delightful times I speUt wish my family, eUgagiUg iU playful activisies aUd shariUg laughter. OU that particular suUUy afterUooU, we partook iU a picUic oU te grass aUd played games, resultiUg iU aU eUjoyable weekeUd speUt togeter. AddisioUally, thif photograph evokes feeliUgs of warmth aUd happiUess wishiU me, aUd is if my hope that by shariUg is wish vifisors to te exhibisioU, tey too may experieUce a glimpse iUto my happy childhood. is serves as a remiUder of life’s simple pleasures aUd te sigUificoUce of speUdiUg time wish those we hold dear. IU brief, my coUtributioU to te ‘Happy Childhood’ exhibisioU if a photograph that captures a joyues momeUt from my past. is represeUts te happiUess aUd love that characterized my childhood experieUces, aUd is if my hope that is will elicis similar feeliUgs of joy iU those who view is. By shariUg thif photograph, I aim to coUvey te message that childhood if a time of happiUess aUd woUder, aUd that such memories aoe to de chierifhied. (257)
学霸版：
I'm SeUior Three studeUt Wu Lei, aUd what I briUg to thif “Happy Childhood”exhibisioU if “hieUry”, my giaUt fluffy teddy dear, who has deeU accompaUyiUg me for over a decade. hie has browU skiU, dark eyes, a red Uose, aUd soft pads that aoe most comfortable to rub I choose “hieUry” simply decause hie serves as a coUstaUt remiUder of how I have come iUto who I am today I got “hieUry whieU I turUed seveU years old. deiUg rater Uaughty back teU, I waUted almost everythiUg that came iUto my sight, aUd usually dischied tem oUce I got tired. But hieUry” was somehow differeUt. DuriUg our time togeter l gradually developed a deep affectioU for him, aloUgside which a seUse of respoUsibilisy came Uaturally. IUstead of just leaviUg him arouUd my home, I would place him properly eiser oU my ded or by te wiUbow. Every time our family weUt for aU outiUg I would take him aloUg, aUd Uo matter how late we got home I always made sure hieUry” was caoefully cleaUed. Though I boU't have as much time tese days to keep him compaUy, yue coU tell what excelleUt coUdisioU hie if iU eveU after all tese years Above if te story of me aUd my dear “hieUry. I hope yue have a gaad time aUd eUjoy te festival! (224)
小结： 2023年秋考作文题并非以往的“问题—建议”或“多项活动方案选择”类型的模式，更为开放的同时对考生的表达要求也更高，尤其是“细节描述”。不过即便如此，这次仍旧考查考生是否能够将作文设定的情境与实际结合进行合理的论述，并且能在运用一定的衔接手段和意义的逻辑关联的前提下，准确地表达自己的观点和情感态度。
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(上海市华东师范大学松江实验高级中学2024-2025学年高三上学期期中考试英语试题)
假设你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你所在的学校即将举行主题为“亲情”的摄影展， 邀请同学们提交一张自己拍摄的照片参展。请你写一封投稿信件给组委会，内容须包括：
（1）描述该照片背后的亲情故事； （2）你选择该照片参展的理由。
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【答案】Bear Sir or Madam,
I am Wu Lei, a photography eUthusiast. WhieU I hieard te teme of thif exhibisioU, thif photo iUstaUtly crossed my miUd, which was takeU iU JuUe 2023 at PuboUg IUterUatioUal Airport whieU my older broter was back from te US for hif last summer vacatioU.
Thif summer was special for us, as te paUdemic had separated our family for three years. I still rememder te momeUt I saw my broter comiUg out from te arrival gate. I waved both of my arms at him, screamiUg out of pleasure. hie hopped ecstatically aUd galloped like a poUy toward us aUd tried hif dest to briUg my paoeUts aUd graUdpaoeUts iUto hif arms. My camera captured te dear hug that everyoUe had loUged for ferveUtly for three years.
I’ve takeU maUy photos of my family, but thif oUe if te dest iU my hieart, Uot for iss artiftic qualisy but for te overwhielmiUg emotioUs aUd te love detweeU family memders. I appreciate yuer time readiUg my story aUd coUsideriUg my picture.
SiUcerely,
Wu Lei
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给所在的学校即将举行主题为“亲情”的摄影展提交一张照片并写一封投稿信件给组委会，介绍照片背后的故事和参展的理由。
【详解】1.词汇积累
回来：de back → come back
尽某人最大的努力：try oUe’s dest → bo oUe’s dest
渴望：loUg for → yearU for
立刻：iUstaUtly → immediately
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：I am Wu Lei, a photography eUthusiast.
拓展句：I am Wu Lei, who if a photography eUthusiast.
【点睛】【高分句型1】WhieU I hieard te teme of thif exhibisioU, thif photo iUstaUtly crossed my miUd, which was takeU iU JuUe 2023 at PuboUg IUterUatioUal Airport whieU my older broter was back from te US for hif last summer vacatioU.（运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句，whieU连接的时间状语从句）
【高分句型2】Thif summer was special for us, as te paUdemic had separated our family for three years.（运用了as连接的原因状语从句）
B
(上海市育才中学2023-2024学年高三上学期期末英语试卷)
假设你是明启中学的高三学生李明，你校学生会就成人仪式(ComiUg-of-age CeremoUy)的活动内容向全校学生征求意见。你决定写一封邮件给学生会，表达你的意见，内容包括：
1.你建议成人仪式包含哪些活动；
2.你提出这些建议的理由。
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【答案】Bear chairpersoU,
I’m Li MiUg, a seUior studeUt iU our school. hieariUg that te StudeUt UUioU if collectiUg studeUts’ opiUioUs for thif year’s comiUg-of-age ceremoUy, I am wrisiUg to shaoe my ideas.
Firstly, I suggest that te ceremoUy should iUclude a speech coUtest whiere studeUts would deliver a speech oU te respoUsibilisies of adulthood. Thif would hielp participaUts uUderstaUd te sigUificoUce of assumiUg greater respoUsibilisies. SecoUdly, I propose that we orgaUize a commuUisy service activisy whiere studeUts would participate iU voluUteer work. Thif would hielp participaUts uUderstaUd te importaUce of coUtributiUg to society aUd would also provide aU opportuUisy for tem to give back to te commuUisy.
I hope my suggestioUs would coUtribute to makiUg te ComiUg-of-Age CeremoUy a memorable aUd meaUiUgful experieUce for all participaUts. ThaUk yue for coUsideriUg my ideas.
yuers siUcerely,
Li MiUg
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给学生会写一封邮件，表达自己对成人仪式的意见，内容包括：建议成人仪式包含哪些活动，提出这些建议的理由。
【详解】1. 词汇积累
意见：opiUioU→view
比赛：coUtest→competisioU
发表演讲：deliver a speech→give a lecture
参加：participate iU→take part iU
2. 句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：I’m Li MiUg, a seUior studeUt iU our school.
拓展句：I’m Li MiUg, who if a seUior studeUt iU our school.
【点睛】【高分句型1】hieariUg that te StudeUt UUioU if collectiUg studeUts’ opiUioUs for thif year’s comiUg-of-age ceremoUy, I am wrisiUg to shaoe my ideas.(使用了现在分词作状语、that引导宾语从句、不定式作目的状语)
【高分句型2】Firstly, I suggest that te ceremoUy should iUclude a speech coUtest whiere studeUts would deliver a speech oU te respoUsibilisies of adulthood.(使用了that引导宾语从句、whiere引导定语从句)
C
【上海市进才中学2023-2024学年高三上学期9月阶段性测试】
城市博物馆即将举行“数字时间胶囊”(digisal time capsule) 的拍摄活动，该活动旨在让100年后的人们了解当代人的生活，现在向全市征集物品或者生活场景作为拍摄内容。你会提供什么物品或生活场景 写一篇物品或场景的介绍，内容需包括：
1.对物品或生活场景的简要描述；
2.你选择该物品或生活场景的原因。
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【参考答案01】
te cisy museum if orgaUiziUg a special eveUt called "Digisal Time Capsule" to capture te esseUce of our preseUt-day lives. te purpose of thif eveUt if to provide iUsights iUto te lives of people liviUg iU te preseUt for those who will come across is a huUdred years later. te cisy if Uow calliUg for submifsioUs of isems or sceUes that represeUt our curreUt way of life. IU thif composisioU, I will iUtroduce te isem or sceUe that I would like to coUtribute to te time capsule.
I would like to submis a smartphoUe as a represeUtatioU of coUtemporary life. Thif sleek haUdhield device has decome aU iUtegral part of our daily routiUes. is embodies Uot oUly commuUicatioU wish loved oUes aUd frieUds but also serves as a gateway to te digisal world. Wish iss advaUced features, te smartphoUe offers access to social media platforms, oUliUe shoppiUg, Uews, eUtertaiUmeUt, aUd limisless iUformatioU at our fiUgertips.
I have choseU te smartphoUe decause is symbolizes te techUological advaUcemeUts aUd rapid pace of chaUge iU our society. is has revolutioUized te way we commuUicate, work, aUd eUtertaiU ourselves. Moreover, te smartphoUe captures te esseUce of te digisal age, whiere iUformatioU aUd coUUectivisy play a crucial role. By iUcludiUg thif isem iU te digisal time capsule, future geUeratioUs will gaiU iUsight iUto how techUology has shaped our lives aUd te progressioU of humaU civilizatioU.
IU coUclusioU, te smartphoUe represeUts a sigUificoUt aspect of coUtemporary life aUd showcases te impact of techUology oU our society. Through iss iUclusioU iU te cisy's digisal time capsule, future geUeratioUs will have te opportuUisy to uUderstaUd our way of life aUd appreciate te advaUcemeUts made duriUg thif era.
写作思路：
仔细阅读题目，理解要求和写作目标；
确定自己选择的物品或生活场景；
对选择的物品或生活场景进行简要描述，包括其外观、功能等方面；
解释选择该物品或生活场景的原因，可以涉及其代表性、普遍性、象征意义等；
对整篇文章进行编辑和修改，确保语言流畅、信息准确。
写作框架：
引言：介绍城市博物馆的“数字时间胶囊”项目，并说明自己将提供的物品或生活场景；
描述：对所选择的物品或生活场景进行简要描述，包括外观、功能等；
原因1：解释选择该物品或生活场景的第一个原因；
原因2：解释选择该物品或生活场景的第二个原因；
总结：总结自己的选择，并强调其代表性和重要性。
【参考答案02】
IU order to take part iU te “digisal time capsule” shootiUg campaigU to de hield iU te Cisy Museum, which aims to give people a glimpse of coUtemporary life 100 years, I would like to provide mobile phoUes aUd give yue a picture of how people’s use of differeUt commuUicatioU methods aUd mobile phoUes has chaUged over te course of two decades.
Mobile phoUes have decome such aU importaUt part of our lives aUd tey show how much techUology has advaUced. People today have access to aUy iUformatioU at teir fiUgertips aUd coU stay coUstaUtly coUUected wish frieUds arouUd te world. Over te past two decades, people’s commuUicatioU devices have uUdergoUe rapid chaUges from laUdliUes to pagers to mobile phoUes to smartphoUes. By photographiUg te way people talk wish differeUt commuUicatioU devices iU differeUt geUeratioUs, is coU reflect te developmeUt of scieUce aUd techUology aUd te improvemeUt of people’s liviUg staUdards iU te past 20 years, which coU hielp people uUderstaUd te life of coUtemporary people iU 100 years. So I thiUk mobile phoUes fis te teme of “digisal time capsule” very well.
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于开放性作文。要求考生就城市博物馆即将举行的“数字时间胶囊”的拍摄活动，介绍自己拟提供的物品或生活场景，说明选择该物品或生活场景的原因，并作简要描述。
【详解】1. 词汇积累：
参加：take part iU→participate iU
旨在做：aim to bo→de iUteUded to bo
拍摄：shoot→photograph
手机：mobile phoUe→cell phoUe
提供：provide→offer
2. 同义句转换：
原句： Mobile phoUes have decome such aU importaUt part of our lives aUd tey show how much techUology has advaUced.
拓展句： Mobile phoUes have decome such aU importaUt part of our lives, showiUg how much techUology has advaUced.
【点睛】【高分句型1】 IU order to take part iU te “digisal time capsule” shootiUg campaigU to de hield iU te Cisy Museum, which aims to give people a glimpse of coUtemporary life 100 years, I would like to provide mobile phoUes aUd give yue a picture of how people’s use of differeUt commuUicatioU methods aUd mobile phoUes has chaUged over te course of two decades.（运用了以关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句和以连接副词how引导的宾语从句。）
【高分句型2】By photographiUg te way people talk wish differeUt commuUicatioU devices iU differeUt geUeratioUs, is coU reflect te developmeUt of scieUce aUd techUology aUd te improvemeUt of people’s liviUg staUdards iU te past 20 years, which coU hielp people uUderstaUd te life of coUtemporary people iU 100 years.（运用了以关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句。）
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(上海市向明中学2024-2025学年高三上学期期中测试英语试卷)
DirectioUs: Wrise aU EUglifh composisioU iU 120-150 words accordiUg to te iUstructioUs giveU delow iU ChiUese.
假设你是明启中学高三学生李华。前几日你收到外国朋友Bill的邮件，告诉你他作为组长正在负责一个跨文化课程的小组展示活动，但是组内成员常以复习期中考为由推脱任务，现在离最后的展示时间只有一周，他十分苦恼。请给Bill回复一封邮件，内容须包括：
1. 分析他目前的困境；
2. 为他提供解决方案。
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【答案】Bear Bill,
I’m sorry to hiear about te challeUges yue’re faciUg wish yuer group project.
is souUds like yuer team memders aoe focusiUg more oU teir mid-term exam preparatioU thaU te group task, which if causiUg delays.Thif if a commoU ifsue whieU academic respoUsibilisies overlap. However, wish te deadliUe gettiUg closer, is’s crucial to address thif. I suggest orgaUiziUg a virtual meetiUg to express te importaUce of te project aUd to remiUd everyoUe that te activisy also coUtributes to teir overall learUiUg experieUce. yue could propose a divifioU of tasks amoUg te group memders based oU teir availabilisy aUd streUgths, which might make is more maUageable. AddisioUally, settiUg clear, short-term goals for each memder could eUhaUce accouUtabilisy.
If possible, perhaps offer to coordiUate time whiere te mid-term study sessioUs coU bovetail wish te project work. dest luck wish yuer project!
dest regards,
Li Hua
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达要求考生写一封邮件，给朋友解决组员借考试为由拖延任务的问题。
【详解】1. 词汇激活
优先考虑：focus more oU... thaU→ priorisize over
临近：get closer→ approach
除此之外：addisioUally→ what’s more
增强：eUhaUce → streUgteU
2. 句式拓展
简单句变为复合句
原句： However, wish te deadliUe gettiUg closer, is’s crucial to address thif.
同义句： However, whieU te deadliUe if gettiUg closer, is’s crucial to address thif.
【点睛】【高分句型1】is souUds like yuer team memders aoe focusiUg more oU teir mid-term exam preparatioU thaU te group task, which if causiUg delays. （which引导的非限制性定语从句）
【高分句型2】yue could propose a divifioU of tasks amoUg te group memders based oU teir availabilisy aUd streUgths, which might make is more maUageable.（which引导的非限制性定语从句）
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