2026人教版新教材英语高考第一轮同步基础练--第二部分　读后续写 学案

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第二部分　读后续写
第一讲宏观把握,感知读后续写
读后续写考题提供一段350 词以内的语言材料,要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写(150 词左右),将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。从试题结构来看,读后续写评价的是书面理解能力和书面表达能力。因此,在写作之前,首先要读懂文本、理清故事情节,然后再构思故事的发展和结局。
[命题特点]
该题型一方面考查学生对所学语言的实际运用能力,另一方面也培养学生的发散思维能力。
读后续写不是随心所欲地写,而是根据题目要求,在读懂原文的基础上,利用原材料的素材、线索和情节等充分发挥想象力和创造力来续写。读后续写一般考查学生以下四个方面的能力:
阅读能力 读取叙事文本基本要素
读取情节发展
读取重要细节
梳理和概括信息
推断情节走向判断主题
写作能力 构建情节发展
清楚地描述事件的过程
选择合适的语言(词汇、句式和语法结构等)
合理并创造性地表达
积极向上的主题升华
思维能力 反映学生在面对生活实践或学习探索问题情境时,能否在正确的思想价值观念指导下合理运用思维方法,有效整合英语语言学科知识,具备高质量地认识问题、分析问题和解决问题的综合素质
学习能力 能够体会原材料故事中的语言特点和写作风格,继而完成与原材料写作风格契合度高的短文
[评分原则]
本题总分为25分,按五个档次进行评分。
评分时,应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑,具体为:
1.续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。
2.所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。
3.上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
4.评分时,应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
5.评分时还应注意:
①词数少于120的,酌情扣分;
②书写较差以致影响交际的,酌情扣分;
③单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
[评分标准]
档次 描述
第五档 (21—25分) (1)创造了丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高。 (2)使用了多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构,可能有个别小错,但完全不影响理解。 (3)有效地使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯。
第四档 (16—20分) (1)创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完整,与原文情境融洽度较高。 (2)使用了比较多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构,可能有些许错误,但不影响理解。 (3)比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。
第三档 (11—15分) (1)创造了基本合理的内容,有一定的逻辑性,续写基本完整,与原文情境相关。 (2)使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有一些错误或不恰当之处,但基本不影响理解。 (3)基本有效地使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯。
第二档 (6—10分) (1)内容或逻辑上有一些重大问题,续写不够完整,与原文情境有一定程度的脱节。 (2)所使用的词汇有限,语法结构单调,错误较多,影响理解。 (3)未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不够清晰,意义不够连贯。
续　表
档次 描述
第一档 (1—5分) (1)内容或逻辑上有较多重大问题,或有部分内容抄自原文,续写不完整,与原文情境基本脱节。 (2)所使用的词汇非常有限,语法结构单调,错误很多,严重影响理解。 (3)几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不清晰,意义不连贯。
0分 所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判;所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。未作答。
第二讲5“读”原文,理清故事脉络
读后续写中,读是为了更好地写。在续写文章之前,学生需细读文章内容,积累文章中出现的词、句表达等。划出文中提到的关键人物,找出故事发展的线索和脉络,抓住关键人物的性格、语言、动作中体现出来的细节,分析文章表达的主题思想,梳理阅读文本的逻辑结构,并对续写内容进行合理的想象,为后续自主创作搭建合理的情景模型。
1.读主题
读后续写的主题主要有助人、救人、趣事、亲情、友情、历险、励志、个人成长、关爱动物、生活哲理等。读懂这些主题有利于续写部分主旨大意的确立。
2.读要素
读后续写,属于记叙文体裁。记叙文通过再现故事经历去表达感情、揭示道理、启发他人。我们通过读所给的不完整故事,来提炼出记叙文六要素(who,what,when,where,why和how),进而弄清文章大意和主题。
3.读两线
阅读文本时要抓住情节线和情感线。必要时可以列出这些线索,以更好地理解文章,为续写做好准备。只有对原文的脉络线索和段落结构有正确的和深刻的理解,续写的内容才能和原文骨肉相连,契合紧密。
4.读冲突
冲突是指两个及以上势不两立的方面之间的矛盾冲突。没有冲突,就没有故事情节。冲突的类型包括人的自我挣扎、人与人之间的冲突(角色之间的冲突)、人与社会的抗争、人与自然的矛盾(角色与环境的冲突)等。矛盾冲突决定了双线(情节线和情感线)的跌宕起伏。
5.读语言风格
分析文章的用词特点和行文风格,以使续写的内容在语言色彩和行文风格上与所给文章保持一致。
典型例题(2024新课标Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I met Gunter on a cold,wet and unforgettable evening in September.I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference.Due to a big storm,my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half.I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague.The moment I got off the plane,I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.
That was when I met Gunter.I told him where I was going,but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station.I thought my pronunciation was the problem,so I explained again more slowly,but he still looked confused.When I was about to give up,Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend.After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century,Gunter put his phone down and started the car.
Finally,with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station.Thankfully,there was a long queue(队列)still waiting to board the bus.Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus,turned around,and looked at me with a big smile on his face.“We made it,” he said.
Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet.I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard.He tried it several times,but the card machine just did not play along.A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
At this moment,Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station.There,at the entrance,was a cash machine.I jumped out of the car,made a mad run for the machine,and popped my card in,only to read the message:“Out of order.Sorry.”
注意:
(1)续写词数应为150个左右;
(2)请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.



Four days later,when I was back in Vienna,I called Gunter as promised.


读文导引
1.读主题:人与社会:诚实守信,如约支付出租车费用。
2.读要素:通过阅读所给材料,可以得出前五个要素如下:
5W
When a cold,wet and unforgettable evening in September
Where Vienna
Who Gunter and I
What I negotiate with the taxi driver to resolve the problem of fare payment.
Why I had no cash in my wallet and the cash machine was out of order.
3.读两线
情节线 情感线
I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. anxious ↓ relief ↓ apologetic ↓ desperate
I ran like crazy through the airport building,jumped into the first taxi on the rank and met Gunter.
Gunter rang up a friend,located the bus station,and rolled into the bus station with just two minutes to spare.
I had zero cash in my wallet. I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times,but the card machine just did not play along.
I jumped out of the car,made a mad run for the cash machine,but it was out of order.
4.读冲突
在车站前,“我”发现没有现金支付出租车车费,尝试用银行卡但失败。“我”跑向ATM机却发现机器故障,陷入无奈。
5. 读语言风格
文章使用了大量的描述性语言,如“a cold,wet and unforgettable evening”“made a mad run for”等,营造了紧张和紧迫的氛围,也用了一些小词,如fish out,thin out等。另外文章使用了直接引语,即对话。因此,我们后文也可以使用一些对话描写。
跟踪训练
运用“五读原文”法理清下列读后续写的脉络
(2023新课标Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷)
When I was in middle school,my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest,I said no without thinking.I did not love writing.My family came from Brazil,so English was only my second language.Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play,where I played all the parts.No one laughed harder than he did.
So,why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply:“Because I love your stories.If you’re willing to apply yourself,I think you have a good shot at this.”Encouraged by his words,I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject.Paul Revere was a silversmith(银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18,1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming.My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth.Not a brilliant idea,but funny,and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think,as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately.I got tired.I had doubts.I wanted to quit.But,like Revere’s horse,I kept going.I worked hard.I checked my spelling.I asked my older sister to correct my grammar.I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library.I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher,he read it,laughed out loud and said,“Great.Now,write it again.” I wrote it again,and again and again.When I finally finished it,the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If I didn’t win.I wouldn’t care.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.


I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.

读文导引
1.读主题:人与自我:迎难而上,永不言弃
2.读要素
人物:　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
时间:　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
地点:　　　　　　　　　　　
起因:　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
经过:　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
3.读两线
情节线:拒绝参赛→尝试参加→以马的口吻写作→想放弃→继续坚持→不在乎是否能获奖
情感线:自我否定→　　　　　　→自我创新→　　　　　　→自我坚持→　　　　　　
4.读冲突
本不喜欢写作的作者在老师的鼓励下,通过自己的努力,不但尝试参加了写作比赛,而且通过自己的坚持不懈完成了参赛作品,实现了自我突破。
5.读语言风格
文本中分词作状语、状语从句、虚拟语气等句式的综合运用使得语言具有一定的丰富性,配合着短句,形成了长短句结合的节奏感。除了这些句式以外,文章还通过对主人公动作链的描写以及心理描写等丰富了细节,刻画了主人公在情感上对待英语写作的转变。续写部分的文风也要延续这些才行。
第三讲3个方法,构思续写情节
读后续写最重要的部分就是建构续写情节。考生在构思续写情节时除了分析续写原文中的故事要素、两条线索、一个主题、故事伏笔、语言风格和人物性格以外,还必须使续写情节符合人物的生活逻辑、情感逻辑和思维习惯等。建构续写情节要紧紧围绕故事主题,符合原文的叙事节奏并与续写原文的情节发展相衔接。我们可以借助思维导图、利用故事基本要素和搭建续写支架这三个方法来建构续写情节。
方法一借助思维导图
思维导图是一种利用结构简图来分析并组织故事脉络的辅助工具,其特点是形象直观、重点突出、层次清晰。利用思维导图建构情节的过程如下:
1.理解续写原文,了解故事背景
续写原文的首段一般会点明故事的背景。所以,要细读并理解首段,了解故事的背景,即“某人在何时何地做了什么事”。
2.梳理续写原文,理清事件线索
续写原文中一般会有一条或两条事件线索,即“什么人在什么时间做了什么事”,考生可以按照这个思维简要记录故事线索。同时,事件线索中会隐含人物的情感,考生可以将其提炼出来,以把握人物的情感线索。根据这两条线索就可以很容易地进行续写部分的情节创写。
3.阅读两段首句,合理预测情节
根据续写所给的两段首句,结合续写原文中的事件线索,就可以合理地预测续写部分的故事情节了。注意,所创写的情节必须符合人们的正常思维和逻辑。
[典例] (2022浙江卷改编)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I needed to do something in my community(社区) in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen,so I did,too. It seemed like a good thing to do.
I thought that we would just be passing out dinners to those in need,but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food,from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served,but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.
As the line of people came toward me,I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the homeless:How should I act How would they treat me Would they hate me for having more than they did While some of the people looked very friendly,some of them looked so dangerous. I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned (分配) to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help,she’d be right there,which I found quite comforting.
I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had totally given up on life,while others seemed to be making the best of the situation,smiling and joking. Some were better off than others,but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.
注意:1.续写词数应为 150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
As they came in my direction,I put on my brightest and happiest smile.


I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way.


设计导图
完成读后续写
方法二利用故事基本要素
一个故事的基本要素包括人物、场景、情节、冲突、主题和叙述视角等方面。根据这些基本要素可以合理地构建出续写部分的故事情节。
首先,找出故事的主要人物,分析其人物特点,并根据人物特点设计故事情节。
其次,理清故事的场景,根据续写所给的两个段落的段首句判断两个段落发生的场景和时间,以人物的动作为主导,合理预测每个段落的情节点和冲突点,否则故事就犹如流水账,平铺直叙。
然后,在理清原文情节的基础上分析文章的主题,所有的情节内容都应该围绕主题进行发展。
最后,明确叙述视角,即明确是用第一人称还是第三人称来叙述故事。
[典例] (2021新高考Ⅰ卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意:1.续写词数应为 150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.

The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.

要素分析
Characters Jeff and Jenna; Father; Mother
Settings Time:At 6 a.m. on Mother’s Day Place:At home
Given plots Prepare the breakfast for Mother. →The kitchen was made in a mess. →Father turned up ... →The twins carried the breakfast upstairs ...
Conflict The twins prepared breakfast for Mother but failed.
Theme The twins gave their mother a surprise by preparing breakfast for her.
Angle of narration With the third person:the twins
创设情节
第一段:Father appeared and helped the twins to prepare the breakfast for Mother.→The twins prepared the tray,added a card and headed for their parents’ bedroom
第二段:The twins said “Happy Mother’s Day”and hugged their mother→Mother was moved and thanked the twins before enjoying the breakfast.→Father was woken up and pretended to be astonished at the breakfast.→Jenna and Father winked at each other.
完成读后续写
方法三搭建续写支架
在构思续写情节时,考生可以从两个维度来搭建续写支架,即运用问题链或“六所”思维来搭建续写支架,构思合理情节。
维度1:搭建问题链支架
续写“问题链”是围绕续写原文和所给续写的两个段首句设置一系列问题,进行由浅入深、由此及彼的追问,从而形成严密而有节奏的“读—思—问”过程;或者解读原文和所给首句后捕捉首句核心词,然后自我设置“行为、情感、结果”等能引领故事发展的问题链,从而推动情节发展。
(1)设置原文问题链:
①What’s the story about (主旨)
②What’s the tone of the story (基调)
③What’s the main plot of the story (主线)
④How did the writer’s or the main role’s feelings change (情感)
⑤What’s the writer’s or the main role’s character according to the story (性格)
⑥What details or languages catch your eye (语言)
⑦What can we learn from the end of the story (价值)
(2)设置续写首句问题链:
①Read the first given sentence:Which words catch your eye What would the writer do How did the writer feel What was the result
②Read the second given sentence:Which words catch your eye How should paragraph 1 be ended reasonably What would the writer do How did the writer feel How should paragraph 2 be ended reasonably
维度2:搭建“六所”思维支架
续写所给的两个段落的首句控制着情节发展的主方向,所以考生应认真研读两个段首句,合理推理段落情节。在推理情节时,可用“六所”思维来构建情节,即人物的所说(what to say)、所听(what to hear)、所见(what to see)、所感(what to feel)、所思(what to think)以及所做(what to do)。有时为了故事或语篇的连贯性和简洁性,可选取部分要素来写。依据所给首句的“六所”思维方式让考生有情可推,有话可写,从而能快速地合理构思情节。
[典例] (2023浙江1月卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years.A noise at a window caught my attention,so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟),desperately trying to escape.She was covered in spider-webs (蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings.She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand,I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer.I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside,closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand,the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still,she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle,she began to move.I stopped,and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away.
Hovering (悬停),she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment,this tiny creature looked into my eyes,turning her head from side to side.Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout,I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident.They promised to fix the window.As I was departing,my friends walked me to my car.I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes,then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment,all were speechless. Then someone said,“She must have come to say goodbye.”
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
A few weeks later,I went to the farm again.


I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.


建构情节
维度1:搭建问题链支架
(1)设置原文问题链
主旨 What’s the story about (The hummingbird’s gratitude.)
基调 What’s the tone of the story (Full of warmth and tender feelings.)
主线 What’s the main plot of the story (rescued a trapped hummingbird accidentally→the bird lingered for a few minutes before she left→the bird saw me off when I left)
情感 How did the writer’s feelings change (cared about the trapped hummingbird→ felt puzzled when the bird didn’t fly away → should be moved by the bird’s action)
性格 What’s the writer’s character according to the story (Kind and caring.)
语言 What details catch your eye (The lively description of the hummingbird’s action and expressions.)
价值 What can we learn from the end of the story (Even animals know returning./Harmonious co-existence between man and wildlife.)
(2)设置续写首句问题链
第一段:A few weeks later,I went to the farm again.
(What questions will you ask yourself )
Which words catch your eye (I went to the farm again.)
What would the writer do (The writer would go past the abandoned milking house to check if the window was fixed,and may want to meet the hummingbird again.)
What was the result How did the writer feel (The broken window had been fixed and the writer felt relieved,but the hummingbird didn’t appear,so the author may have a sense of loss.)
第二段:I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
(What questions will you ask yourself )
Which words catch your eye (The hummingbird appeared.)
What would the hummingbird do How did she look (The hummingbird would fly around the writer happily and express her gratitude like the last time.)
How did the writer feel What would the writer do (The writer would feel excited and touched and show concern for the hummingbird.)
维度2:搭建“六所”思维支架
第一段:A few weeks later,I went to the farm again. (你想到了哪“六所”) 重回农场,作者想做什么 怀念什么
看到困住蜂鸟的小屋窗户已经修好,作者心情如何 没有见到蜂鸟,作者有何感受
第二段:I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. (你想到了哪“六所”) 蜂鸟看到作者后做了什么 神情怎样
作者看到蜂鸟后做了什么 心情怎样
作者对蜂鸟的行为有什么感悟
第四讲3大策略,营造高分亮点
策略一如何营造故事冲突
故事情节是故事中最容易吸引人注意的地方,而情节中最能吸引人的就是故事冲突。发生在主人公身上的一系列“冲突”能使故事悬念迭出,吸引读者继续阅读。冲突能够推动情节的发展,走向高潮。由于续写词数的限制,冲突不易设置过多。冲突应聚焦主人公对主事件的抉择,即主人公对主事件态度的转变或主人物性格的塑造。冲突主要有人与自然、人与社会或人与自我的冲突。我们可由下图来看一下“一波三折”式故事情节安排的重要性。
一、营造冲突的3阶段
(一)发现扰乱事件,捕捉冲突点
故事开始时,主人公的生活一般来说很平静,如果没有扰乱事件,主人公的生活不会改变。这样,故事就没有什么趣味性。相反,如果故事中出现了一些扰乱性事件,那么主人公的生活就会变得曲折起伏,吸引读者阅读。找到续写所给文中的扰乱事件,并尝试设计解决方案,这就是捕捉到了冲突点。
(二)分析人物性格,推动故事冲突
故事中主人公的性格好坏不一。好的性格主要是热心、善良、温和、体贴、无私、坚毅等;坏的性格主要是冷酷、自私、怯懦、傲慢、粗暴、虚伪、吝啬、偏执等。只有通过分析,辨明主人公的性格,才能更好地推动冲突的发展。
(三)设计最后危机,结束故事冲突
续写部分的两段往往蕴含着故事的高潮和结局,这个高潮就是最后的“危机”,它可以加剧故事冲突,使情节更具有戏剧性,也可以结束故事冲突,使情节更加完整。营造这个最后的“危机”可以让读者与主人公产生共情,从而提升故事的可读性。
二、营造冲突的3技巧
技巧1增加外部冲突
增加外部冲突是一种明显且有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。冲突带来紧迫感,将故事推向顶点。
1.角色之间的冲突
[典例] On the fourth or fifth night,we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time,Mum suddenly got a great idea:Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up a tent there David and I became nervous.
[分析] 开车找旅馆——徒劳无功——母亲建议搭帐篷——大卫和我倍感紧张,心有不悦(母子的观点不一)
2.角色与环境之间的冲突
[典例] (2021浙江1月卷) It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard,my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle,but it was no use. “I can’t get it out!” I shouted,my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
[分析] 我使劲拽,我的鼻子被卡住了——我转动头部试图找合适的角度,但没用——我大喊,响亮的声音在封闭的空间里显得很不自然(我的头被卡在南瓜里:我与南瓜“大战”)
3.时间刻不容缓,决策变得紧急
[典例] A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp. The bear roared at us,our frightened mouths wide open. My mind was blank in panic. I just stood there in a daze. The bear launched an attack to the fence,roaring. My hand holding the camera began to shake.
[分析] 熊回到了我们的营地——熊向我们吼叫——我头脑一片空白——我站在那里发呆——熊咆哮着向栅栏发起攻击——我握着相机的手开始发抖(此情此景,刻不容缓)
4.增加意外情节,营造困难境地
[典例] (2021新高考Ⅰ卷)The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
[分析] 锅太热了,面包几秒钟内就糊了(障碍1) ——粥溢出,把火扑灭了(障碍2)——炉子一片狼藉(障碍3)——杰夫的手碰到了火炉(障碍4)——锅里的面包又糊了(障碍5)
技巧2放大内心冲突
放大内心冲突(文中角色的内心斗争)有助于抓住读者的心,让读者感同身受,一步步将读者带入其境、融身其中,有助于制造故事波澜和冲突。
[典例1] (2022新高考Ⅰ卷)We sat down next to each other,but David wouldn’t look at me. He buried his head in his hands,sobbing. “Do you fear the audience will laugh at you ” I asked. He nodded and bit his lip,tears welling up in his eyes.
[分析] 不看我——埋头抽泣——点头咬唇——热泪盈眶(大卫渴望参加越野赛,但又极度不自信的内心矛盾得以体现)
[典例2] (2022 浙江1月卷)Though I wanted to share my ideas with him fully,I failed to do so for fear that I would hold him back. I just kept nodding when he asked me whether it is OK to do this way or that way. I thought it was impossible to persuade him into accepting my views,so I didn’t want to waste our time to discuss. I started to wait to leave immediately we arrived at the place,and so did he. I just hoped that the presentation day could come earlier.
[分析] 想分享观点但害怕犯错——点头附议,不想浪费时间讨论——彼此希望合作结束——我期盼展示的日子快点到来(作者直白的内心想法更真实地说明了作者内心矛盾冲突的逐渐升级:害怕合作——不想合作——期盼合作早点结束)
技巧3使用环境描写增加不确定性
环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用。当故事角色遇到困难的时候,我们往往通过加大笔墨描写故事环境,来衬托故事发展,增加高潮元素。
[典例] (2021 浙江卷)The pay day arrived at last. Excitement swept over me,for it was the first time I had got paid for my work. While walking back home,I felt the flowers lining the path look like angels,swaying in the wind,dancing in the sun. I conceived many plans about how to dispose of my earnings. I needed a new football ... I intended ... Bounding into the yard,I noticed my parents standing beside the old truck with glum looks. I realized something unpleasant happened. “How much do we still need to pay for a new truck ” asked my mother anxiously.
[分析] 领到第一份工资——心情非常兴奋——不愉快的事情发生(通过描写作者回家路上看到的风景来衬托作者的兴奋心情,同时又反衬了下面发生的不愉快的事情,通过对比强化了高潮氛围)
策略二如何打造龙头凤尾
一、高分开头5妙招
如何写好读后续写,在高考中博取阅卷老师的眼球,获得梦寐以求的高分 如何让学生的作品在高考中脱颖而出 这是很多老师和学生一直不懈努力的课题。一个好的故事开头就好比是一个香味十足的诱饵,诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地读完。 而一个拙劣的故事开头,一定会让读者大倒胃口,恹恹欲睡。“Well begun is half done!”可见写好一个故事的开头是多么重要。下面教你五招高分开头的方式。
妙招1巧用形容词/副词(短语)
①Disappointed and frustrated,David hung his head,trying to avoid eye contact with me.
大卫又失望又沮丧,低下头,尽量避免和我有眼神接触。
②Happily and excitedly,they went to the supermarket for what they needed.
他们高兴且激动地去超市买他们需要的东西。
妙招2巧用分词(短语)
①Seeing his face filled with anxiety,I felt sad,deciding to talk something with him.
看到他满脸焦虑,我感到很难过,决定和他谈谈。
②A few weeks later,the boy arrived home from university. Hurrying home,he couldn’t wait to see his old friend Poppy.
几个星期后,男孩从大学回到家里。匆忙回家,他迫不及待地想见到他的老朋友波比。
妙招3巧用高级句式
①I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.My brother came up with an idea that he could cut the pumpkin with a knife.(同位语从句)
我被困了五六分钟,虽然感觉时间要长得多。我的弟弟想出了一个主意,他可以用小刀把南瓜切开。
②At the very moment,the helicopter arrived.It hovered over the camp,causing strong wind that blew the bear unsteady on his feet.(非谓语动词+定语从句)
就在这时,直升机到了。它在营地上空盘旋,刮起大风,把熊吹得站立不稳。
妙招4巧用倒装结构
Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.Hardly had the little dog come out when Poppy came over to lick it as if it were a long-lost friend.
爸爸打开盒子,一只可爱的小狗出现了。小狗刚出来,波比就过来舔它,好像它是一个失散多年的朋友。
妙招5巧用强调句结构
That video was posted the day before Halloween.It was my brother who did that for amusement.
这段视频是在万圣节前一天发布的。那是我弟弟为了消遣才那样做的。
二、漂亮结尾2方法
续写不能虎头蛇尾,在篇末也要用心设计。由于文章的故事性、情节性强,所以续写的结尾可以是自然的升华议论,亦可以是其他方式结尾。常见的结尾方式有五种,即画面定格、对话收尾、主题升华、结尾留白和首尾呼应。下面为大家介绍2种常用方法。
方法1主题升华法
①More importantly,I earned my teammate’s recognition and we have realized the true meaning of friendship since then. (感悟友谊的真正含义)
更重要的是,我赢得了队友的认可,从那时起我们意识到友谊的真正含义。
②Someday,when I am older and have children of my own,I hope I can be just as great a parent as my mom.(母爱的深远影响)
有一天,当我长大了,有了自己的孩子,我希望我能成为和我妈妈一样伟大的母亲。
③In my opinion,money can’t take the place of everything,such as your life,your time and your happiness.(表达自己的价值观)
在我看来,金钱不能取代一切,比如你的生活、你的时间和你的幸福。
方法2首尾呼应法
(1)开头:It was summer,and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.
结尾:Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before.The special trip to the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind.
我从未经历过如此惊险刺激的假期。这次特殊的西部荒野之旅深深地印在了我的脑海里。
(2)开头:A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.
结尾:What a funny day!Arthur couldn’t stop laughing whenever he looked back on this funny experience.
多么有趣的一天!每当回想起这段有趣的经历,亚瑟都会笑个不停。
策略三如何遣词造句,润色续写内容
读后续写对语言综合运用能力要求更高。要增添“读后续写”的表达效果,不仅要有词汇量的积累,还要注意避免使用泛泛而谈的词汇,应该多使用具体的词汇使表达更加准确到位。 只有准确、连续的动作和夸张丰富的表情以及细致的心理活动描写,才能让人物栩栩如生!
技法1善用动作链
在读后续写的写作过程中,成功的动作描写可以交代人物的身份、地位,可以反映人物心理活动的进程,也可以表现人物的性格特征。人物的动作或简单或复杂,都不是一下子就能完成的,细心观察才能捕捉到最能体现人物特征的慢镜头。因此,在描写动作时,要学会细化动作,把动作过程分解成一连串细微的动作,形成动作链,写出动作的连贯性,这样才能使描写具有画面感,使人物更立体。
He stopped the taxi,jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver,“Go to the police station,please.”
他拦下了出租车,拿着箱子跳进车里,然后对司机说:“请到警察局去。”
The boys rushed to the lake,took off their clothes and jumped into the water.
男孩们冲到湖边,脱下衣服跳进水里。
The singer glanced at the audience,took a deep breath and began to sing.
歌手瞥了一眼观众,深吸了一口气,开始唱歌。
She would get out of the car excitedly,laughing and dancing around.
她会兴奋地下车,又笑又跳。
The old man sat under the sunset,reading the newspaper and listening to the radio.
老人坐在夕阳下,看着报纸,听着收音机。
Having queued for 3 hours,he was told that the ticket had been sold out.
排了3个小时的队后,他被告知票已经卖完了。
Deeply moved by the story,the children began to cry.
孩子们被这个故事深深感动了,哭了起来。
Poppy trotted to him and got up on his back legs,trying to lick his old friend.
小狗波比小跑到他跟前,站立起来,要舔他的老朋友。
Tony rushed to Rose and threw his arms around her tightly without hesitation,wiping tears from her cheeks.
托尼毫不犹豫地冲向罗斯,紧紧地抱住她,帮她擦去脸颊上的泪水。
技法2会用高级句式
1.形容词(短语)作状语
形容词(短语)在句中作状语,可以表明主语所处的状态。如:
Lost in the mountain for two days,these students were finally rescued by the local police.
这些学生在山里迷路两天后最终被当地警察救了出来。
Speechless and happy,she held her son tightly into her arms,with tears welling up in her eyes.
她高兴得说不出话来,紧紧地抱着她的儿子,热泪盈眶。
2.非谓语动词
巧妙地使用非谓语动词可以使句型更加多样化,使文章结构更加紧凑,使文章所表达的含义更加简明。如:
Exposed to the truth,I hugged Dad in my arms tightly.
真相大白后,我紧紧地拥抱了爸爸。
I lowered my head with embarrassment,standing there like a fool.
我尴尬地低下头,像个傻瓜一样站在那里。
Wild with joy,she jumped up,grabbing the blouse and flourishing it while crying.
她高兴得跳了起来,一把抓住衬衫,把它拿在手里挥舞着,哭了起来。
She made a final effort to cry for some help.Nevertheless,no one would come to save her.Jane walked along the stream,with fear gradually beating her bravery.
她做了最后的努力,大声呼救。然而,没有人会来救她。简沿着小溪走着,她的勇气逐渐被恐惧所取代。
3.with复合结构
with复合结构可以丰富句子的内容,其作用一般相当于一个状语从句,可以表示原因、条件、伴随、结果、方式等。如:
There was nobody inside.I slipped in and gingerly set the trophy on my teacher’s desk with a note attached,saying,“It’s a glory for both of us!Your inspiration seems a beacon guiding my way ahead.”
里面没有人。我溜进去,小心翼翼地把奖杯放在老师的桌子上,并附上一张纸条,上面写着:“这是我们俩的荣耀!你的鼓舞就像指引我前进的灯塔。”
“Thank you very much!” I showed my certificate to him with my eyes watering.“Without you,I couldn’t have done it.”
“非常感谢你!”我把我的证书给他看,流着泪,“没有你,我不可能做到。”
On hearing of the unexpected news,she was so surprised that she froze with her mouth wide open.
听到这个意外的消息,她惊讶得目瞪口呆。
With tears in my eyes, I said to him,“I would like to express my heartfelt gratitude to you for your timely help.”
我含着眼泪对他说:“我要向您表示衷心的感谢,感谢您的及时帮助。”
4.独立主格结构
独立主格结构的构成为“名词/代词+现在分词/过去分词/不定式/形容词/介词短语”,其作用相当于一个状语从句。如:
I embraced my father without a word,tears streaming.
我默默拥抱着父亲,泪流满面。
She thought of Tom,memories flooding out as she closed her eyes and recalled the kindness of him.
她想起了汤姆,当她闭上眼睛,回忆起他的友善,往事涌上心头。
My heart pumping wildly and my blood pulsing through my veins,I pulled back the reins,distracted the horse and tried every means to stop the horse but in vain.
我的心在狂跳,血液在静脉中跳动,我拉住缰绳,转移马的注意力,用尽一切办法想让马停下来,但都是徒劳。
The boy rushed to the old man’s house,his face covered with sweat.
男孩冲到老人家里,满脸是汗。
5.复合句
常用的复合句有定语从句、名词性从句和状语从句。如:
(2023新课标Ⅰ卷)I firstly expressed my gratitude to my loved teacher and said,“What you said gave me a great deal of encouragement,which inspired my motivation to writing.I wouldn’t have succeeded without your help.”
我首先对我敬爱的老师表示感谢,并说:“您说的话给了我很大的鼓励,激发了我写作的动力。没有您的帮助,我不可能取得成功。”
Eagerly,the twins gazed at their mother,whose eyes were filled with tears of thrill.
双胞胎热切地注视着妈妈,她的眼里充满激动的泪水。
That’s why Anna was surprised the following day when Bobby had made several ads.
那就是第二天鲍比做了几个广告时安娜感到惊讶的原因。
Cold and tired though we were,the kids’ smiling faces cheered us up.
虽然我们又冷又累,但孩子们的笑脸使我们振奋起来。
6.倒装句型
为了突出或强调句子中的某个部分,我们可以将其置于句首,形成倒装结构。如:
Hearing the dog barking fiercely,away fled the thief.
听到狗凶猛的叫声,小偷逃走了。
Not only did we lose all our money,but we also lost our way/but also we lost our way.
我们不仅丢了所有的钱,还迷了路。
Only when you find peace in your heart will you keep good relationships with others.
只有当你找到内心的平静时,你才能跟别人保持良好的关系。
Never had Jane missed Tom so much.Even a quarrel would be sweet now.
简从来没有这么想念过汤姆。现在即使是争吵也是甜蜜的。
So tightly did he draw the wolf’s neck against his shoulders that the animal could scarcely breathe and tried in vain to use its teeth.
他把狼的脖子紧紧地拉在肩上,以至于狼几乎无法呼吸,这让它的牙齿也无法派上用场。
7.强调句型
强调句型的基本结构为“It is/was+被强调部分+that/who+其他部分”。如:
Martin realized it was not the quantity of friends but the quality that mattered.
马丁意识到重要的不是朋友的数量,而是质量。
It was at that moment that I was overwhelmed with gratitude to my teacher.
就在那一刻,我对老师充满了感激之情。
It was not until then that I came to realize that we should always be honest.
直到那时我才意识到我们应该永远诚实。
8.虚拟语气
在表示虚假的、与事实相反的或难以实现的情况时用虚拟语气;表示主观愿望或某种强烈的情感时,也用虚拟语气。如:
If there hadn’t been your help,the boy would have failed in the test.
要是没有你的帮助,这个男孩就会在测试中不及格。
But for this experience,she wouldn’t have realized that she should spend more time with her family.
如果没有这次经历,她就不会意识到她应该花更多的时间和家人在一起。
If only I had not made such a stupid mistake.
要是我过去没有犯这样一个愚蠢的错误就好了。
It’s high time that we focused our attention on our studies.
该是我们把注意力集中在学习上的时候了。
Without his encouragement,I couldn’t have won the prize.
要是没有他的鼓励,我不可能获奖。
9.“无灵主语”句
“无灵主语”简单理解就是“没有生命”的东西作主语,比如时间、地点、自然现象等。比如My love goes to everybody.中love就是没有生命力的名词,但是go就是有生命力的动词。
“无灵主语”的应用大致分为五大类:
类型1:主语是表示情感状态的抽象名词
这类名词有fear(恐惧),excitement(兴奋)等。与之对应的动词有seize(突然侵袭,突然控制),choke(使哽咽),flood(充满),creep(不知不觉地产生),grip(使感兴趣,对……产生强有力的影响),give way to(被……代替)等。
Panic seized her.她突然惊慌失措。
Despair choked her words.她绝望得说不出话来。
A great sense of relief flooded over him.
他深感宽慰。
A slight feeling of fear slowly crept on him.
他慢慢地感到一丝恐惧。
I saw that the puzzled look in his eyes gave way to sadness.
我看见他眼中的困惑变成了悲伤。
类型2:主语是表示时间和地点的名词(短语)
这类名词(短语)有the town(镇),the following year(第二年)等。与之对应的动词有witness(见证),see,boast(有引以为荣的事物)等。
Beijing has witnessed great changes in recent years.
北京见证了最近几年的巨大变化。
The following year saw the death of his mother.
第二年他的妈妈去世了。
The town boasts a beautiful lake.
这座小镇引以为荣的是有一片美丽的湖。
类型3:主语是表示自然现象的名词
这类名词有fog(雾),earthquake(地震)等。与之对应的动词有blanket(覆盖),come,bring,prevent,strike(袭击),hit,threaten 等。
The thick fog blanketed the field.
浓雾笼罩着整个大地。
An earthquake came like a thief in the night,without warning.
地震出乎意料地到来,没有任何警示。
The rain prevented tourists from enjoying the full moon.
雨使得游客无法欣赏到满月。
类型4:主语是表示身体部位和音容的名词
这类名词有face(脸),laughter(笑声)等。与之对应的动词(短语)有light up(照亮;露出喜色),brighten(照亮),linger(继续存留),well up(涌出),flash(掠过;突然显露)等。
Her face lit up/brightened when I gave her the present.
我给她礼物时,她的脸上焕发出了光彩。
When he saw the familiar handwriting,tears welled up in his eyes.
当看到熟悉的字迹时,他热泪盈眶。
Her eyes flashed with anger.她的眼中闪出怒火。
类型5:主语是表示行为和动作的名词
这类名词有sight,thought,glance,look,idea,feeling等。与之对应的动词有strike(突然想到;让……觉得),arouse(唤起),remind,fill,delight,frighten,overwhelm(压倒;满溢)等。
A terrible thought suddenly struck me.
我突然有一个可怕的想法。
The sight of the scene filled me with horror.
看到这个情景我心中充满了恐惧。
A glance along his bookshelves arouses my interest in reading.
扫一眼他的书架就激发我读书的兴趣。
His frightening look frightened all the boys away.
他那可怕的样子把所有的男孩都吓跑了。
The good idea of solving the problem delighted all of us present at the meeting.
解决这个问题的好主意使出席会议的我们都很高兴。
Overwhelmed by the feeling of excitement,Catalina nodded and began to assist the astronomer.
卡塔琳娜非常兴奋,她点了点头,开始帮助那位天文学家。
技法3巧用修辞手法
无论是在汉语还是在英语中,修辞都是一门具有独特魅力的艺术。在读后续写中,恰当地运用修辞手法可以使平淡的语言变得鲜活、生动,从而增强文章的表现力,也有助于考生获得高分。较为常用的修辞手法有比喻和拟人两种。
1.比喻
比喻是根据事物之间的相似点,把某一事物比作另一事物,从而把抽象的事物说得具体、形象,把深奥的道理说得通俗、浅显、明白的一种修辞手法。常见的比喻形式有明喻和暗喻两种。
(1)明喻通常是把被比喻的“本体”和用以比喻的“喻体”同时说出,说明本体事物像喻体事物。它是最简单、最常见的一种修辞手法,其常见的标志词有like,as,as if,as though等。
Jenny couldn’t resist her inner joy,flying into the door like a bird.(情感描写)
珍妮控制不住内心的喜悦,像小鸟一样飞进了家门。
The scenery along the journey is just like a breathtaking landscape painting.(景物描写)
沿途的风景就像一幅令人叹为观止的山水画。
The icy wind started howling,cutting my face like a sharp knife.(环境描写)
寒风开始咆哮,像锋利的小刀一样刺痛了我的脸。
The smile on her face was as vibrant as the sun on a summer day.(情感描写)
她脸上的笑容和夏天的太阳一样充满活力。
I reached out to touch her face,which was as cold as the ice.(人物描写)
我伸手去摸她的脸,她的脸像冰一样凉。
Her hair grew greyer and greyer,as if (it had been) covered with snow and frost.(肖像描写)
她的头发越来越白了,简直像盖了一头皑皑的霜雪。
(2)暗喻与明喻不同,暗喻不通过比喻词表现出来,而是直接将一种事物当成另一种事物来描写,此时两种事物之间的联系和相似之处都是暗含的。暗喻较明喻而言更加简洁,也更加生动、深刻,表现力强。
Her hair was a golden river streaming down her shoulders.(肖像描写)
她的头发像是一条流淌在她肩上的金色河流。
The beautiful park was a scented carpet of color.(景物描写)
那座美丽的公园就像一块芬芳的彩色地毯。
I felt a lump in my throat,tears welling up in my eyes.(情感描写)
我哽咽了,泪水湿润了眼眶。
The boy wolfed down the food.(动作描写)
这个男孩狼吞虎咽地吃完了食物。
2.拟人
拟人就是把事物人格化,它既能生动形象地写出某事物的某个特点,又使事物具有拟人化后特有的具象效果。
The breeze gently kissed her cheeks.(环境描写)
微风轻柔地亲吻着她的脸颊。
The feathery snowflakes danced in the night air,making a beautiful picture.(景物描写)
鹅毛般的雪花在夜空中飞舞,构成了一幅美丽的图画。
Immediately,an absolute darkness ruled the forest.(环境描写)
顷刻间,一片黑暗统治了森林。
Fear seized/swallowed him.(情感描写)
恐惧把他吞噬了。
Anger choked my words.(情感描写)
我气得说不出话来。
A good idea suddenly struck me.(心理描写)
我突然想到一个好主意。
第五讲5组续写热考话题
热考话题一 挑战自我
挑战自我(如2022新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写)常包括:①如何面对失败,自我反思,实现个人成长;②表现尊重对手,收获友谊的体育或团队精神;③在同伴或家人的鼓励下,克服恐惧,取得比赛或演讲的成功。
这样构思情节
挑战自我相关的情感和场景描写
1.So embarrassed was he that he was eager to disappear from the spot.
他尴尬得想当场消失。
2.I could feel all the eyes were fixed on me.A strong sense of nervousness flooded/swept over me.
我能感觉到所有的眼睛都盯着我。我紧张极了。
3.The eyes of the whole audience fell upon him.Standing on the track,he felt his throat tight and his palms sweating.
所有观众都看着他。他站在跑道上,喉咙发紧,手心冒汗。
4.He took a deep breath,gathered up his courage,and walked to the track.
他深吸一口气,鼓起勇气,向跑道走去。
5.Then the next few minutes witnessed a fierce competition between the two sides.
接下来的几分钟是双方之间激烈的比赛。
观众反应描写
1.The end of our performance was met with a moment of surprising silence,and then the audience burst into thunderous applause.
我们的表演结束时,观众有片刻惊人的沉默,然后爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。
2.The performance/speech ended up with a storm of applause from the crowd.
演出/演讲在人群雷鸣般的掌声中结束。
3.When I finished,there was thunderous applause and I picked up my little Danni to thank the audience and waved off the stage.
当我结束时,台下响起雷鸣般的掌声,我抱起我的小丹尼感谢观众,挥手离开舞台。
升华主旨
1.The medal shone brightly under the sunshine/lights,reflecting the excited tears in my eyes and the sweat on my face.
奖牌在阳光/灯光下熠熠生辉,折射出我眼中激动的泪水和脸上的汗水。
2.With all these cheers and applause,the best prize that I gained was my confidence.
有了所有这些欢呼和掌声,我获得的最好的奖品就是我的信心。
3.It was his perseverance and determination not to give up that helped him win the game.
正是他的毅力和不放弃的决心帮助他赢得了比赛。
这样自主练评
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2024安徽合肥二模)
I used to be very active in sports and games when I was in primary school.I won the B Division long jump and was a good sprinter (短跑运动员).As a result,I was chosen to represent the school in the long jump and relay events at the District Sports Meet.Before the sports meet,I had put in a lot of hard work and dedication during the training sessions.I woke up early every morning to go for runs and did countless drills to improve my technique.My teammates and I supported and encouraged each other during training,pushing ourselves to do better and achieve our goals.
The meet lasted two days.I had no events scheduled for the first day.So I kept myself busy by watching the others compete.Large tents were provided for the young competitors on one side of the track.Despite being assigned the last tent that was furthest from the track,I made the best of the situation by decorating it with our school colors and creating a supportive atmosphere.
The next day,I was getting ready for my events.The long jump was scheduled for the early afternoon,followed by the 8×50 m relay later in the afternoon.I thought I was a pretty good jumper,but as the competition began,I realized I was vastly outclassed.We finished our jumps,and I came in fourth place,just missing out on a medal.
That was disappointing,but I reminded myself that we still had a chance in the 8×50 m relay,for which I was assigned to run the fifth leg.The race date arrived.We filed into our assigned spots and prepared for the race.After a tense minute or so,I heard the starter’s gun go off.When the first runners took off,I watched nervously and excitedly as my team runners kept up with the others.As they got closer,I realized we were at least in second place.
注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
My turn arrived and I took the baton (接力棒) cleanly and began my run.



As a result,I left the meet empty-handed.



热考话题二 社会温情
社会温情话题的读后续写是热考话题之一,如2020年新高考Ⅰ卷续写主题为卖爆米花帮助有需要的人的故事,传递了人间温情。
这样构思情节
帮助描写
1.I tearfully shared what I had seen with them and asked them to do something to give them a helping hand.
我含泪把我所看到的告诉了他们,并请他们做一些事情来帮助他们。
2.My mind was racing,trying to think of a solution to assist her.
我转动脑筋,试图想出一个解决办法帮助她。
3.As I said good-bye to him,I reached into my pocket and offered him a $20 bill for his help.
当我跟他道别时,我把手伸进口袋,递给他一张20美元的钞票感谢他的帮助。
感激和感动描写
1.In a flash,with tears welling up in my eyes,I was touched beyond words.
刹那间,眼泪涌上我的眼眶,我感动得说不出话来。
2.Surprised and moved,she bowed low to us and murmured“Thank you!”,weeping tears of gratitude.
她又惊喜又感动,向我们深深鞠躬低声道“谢谢!”,流下了感激的泪水。
升华主旨
1.Sometimes,a small act of kindness can be powerful enough to make a huge difference.
有时小小的善行会有很大影响。
2.Just as the saying goes,“Roses given,fragrance in hand.”
正如谚语所说:“赠人玫瑰,手有余香。”
3.As a matter of fact,a small gesture of care will possibly melt people’s loneliness.
事实上,一个表达关爱的小举动也会融化人们内心的孤独。
4.This kind act has a lasting influence on me.I always give others a helping hand if possible.
这种善意的行为对我产生了持久的影响。我总是尽可能地帮助别人。
这样自主练评
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2025辽宁重点高中联合体二模)
The weather was extremely hot as the midday sun shone with all its might.23-year-old Richard had just gotten down from a truck and could barely stand on the hot road.His feet were getting baked in his smelly sneakers.He panted heavily,looking around for a drink.But as far as his sunken eyes could see,there was not a drop of water.
Since Richard’s band in Los Angeles broke up several weeks ago,he had to come to reunite with his parents.Just as he finished a two-mile hike on the deserted highway,he stopped on the roadside.Suddenly,he noticed a little bike lying there.
When he approached near,he saw a water bottle and a small helmet lying nearby.He leaned closer and noticed fresh little muddy footsteps disappearing into the woods.Richard’s brows shot up in terror as he hurried toward the entrance of the dense forest.It seemed very unusual for a little kid to be all alone there.
Imagine a little kid out there alone!Richard’s instincts(直觉)told him something was wrong,so he cupped his hands around his mouth and called out to the child.Suddenly,he heard a faint cry from the heart of the woods.It was a little girl’s cry for help.
“Don’t give up!I’m coming!” Richard ran quickly after noticing a little girl and her dog holding onto a log(原木) and floating on the river.
The current was washing away almost everything on its course,and the girl was lucky that the log was stuck onto something under the surface.But that would not hold on for long as the current grew faster and stronger.
Richard wanted to pull the two out to the shore before they were washed toward the edge of the waterfall,which was just meters away.However,he couldn’t think of anything immediately.Just then,his mind acted fast,and he ran back to get something.
“Hold on...I’ll be right back,” he assured her.
注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
Moments later,Richard returned with a long vine(藤).



“Thank you so much!” the girl cried as she finally fell on the muddy shore.



热考话题三 温馨家庭
温馨家庭类话题的读后续写是热考话题之一,如2021年新高考Ⅰ卷续写主题为给妈妈做母亲节早餐,体现了家庭成员之间的爱。
这样构思情节
温馨家庭类的有关冲突,寻找解决办法、
解决冲突的场面描写
1.“Why are you so hard on me ”I shouted at Mom,slamming the door.I threw myself onto my bed and sobbed.
“你为什么对我这么苛刻 ”我冲着妈妈大喊,砰的一声关上了门。我扑倒在床上,抽泣起来。
2.The fault had been mainly on Richard’s side but he was too stubborn to admit it.
这主要是理查德的错,但他太固执了而没有承认。
3.That day,I walked home with my father.The setting sun shone on us,casting our shadows on the road.We talked a lot that day,and it seemed that the journey from school to our home had also been shortened.
那天,我和父亲一起步行回家。夕阳照在我们身上,把我们的影子投射在路上。那天我们聊了很多,从学校到我们家的路似乎也变短了。
温馨家庭类相关的动作、神态和情感描写
1.Sam sobbed and sprang out of his bed to give me a hug.
萨姆抽泣着从床上跳起来拥抱我。
2.Jim discovered there was no disappointment in his father’s eyes but only pride and love.
吉姆发现父亲的眼里没有失望,只有骄傲和爱。
3.When their mother saw the delicious breakfast,a spark of surprise flashed across her face.
当他们的母亲看到美味的早餐时,她的脸上闪过一丝惊喜。
升华主旨
1.It was Henry’s kindness that made me feel the warmth of our family.I will treasure it with all my heart.
正是亨利的善良让我感受到了我们家庭的温暖。我会用心珍惜它的。
2.Every time I faced challenges,a thought of giving up flashed in my mind,but the support of my family gave me the strength to keep going.
每次面对挑战,我都想放弃,但是家人的支持给了我继续前进的力量。
3.I got to know my dad better and learned to love him more,making tough things more manageable and life sweeter.
我更了解我的父亲并且更爱他了,这让棘手的事情变得更容易处理,生活更甜蜜。
这样自主练评
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2024河北石家庄质检)
I still remember the day when we decorated the house.I was ten and it was two weeks before Christmas.I was looking forward to my presents.Since I’m the youngest in the family,all of the family members would give me a gift one way or another.Sometimes it was a cookie or a hug but it was always there.I was the only center of attention and it was feeling good.
My uncles usually would ask me what I wanted before Christmas and that year I knew what I wanted.It was the spaceship I saw in the ads.I was dreaming of opening a big gift box,and it was there.But that year it came in a way that I wasn’t expecting.
It was two weeks before Christmas.Just two weeks.She couldn’t wait.My dear mother told my father that it was time,and then we went to the hospital.After an hour,they told me that I had a sister now.But I didn’t want a sister.I wanted a spaceship.The next few days went so fast.No one was caring about me.Everyone was talking about her and I knew that my life is never going to be the same ever again.I wasn’t ready to grow up,to be a big brother.But it just happened in an instant.
On the day before Christmas,everyone was in our home,talking only about my newborn sister.My family was becoming hers.Even my uncles didn’t ask me anything about the gift.She stole everything I’d ever had,my life and my presents.Thinking about this,I cried to sleep.I had a nightmare (噩梦) and woke up at the middle of the night.Shadows were all around me,and I was defenseless and so weak.I ran into my parents’ bedroom but couldn’t wake up my poor parents who were just too worn out.I was standing near their bed,trying not to cry when I saw her.She was awake and looking at me with her big eyes in her small bed.
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Suddenly a long shadow came into the bedroom and she started crying.



After having comforted her,something slowly changed inside me.



热考话题四 同学关系
同学关系类话题的读后续写是热考话题之一,虽新高考近两年没考过该话题,模拟题中却很常见。
这样构思情节
困境、误会或矛盾心理和弥补办法
1.I could only apologize for my ignoring him and hope that I could make it up by helping him with his studies.
我只能为我无视他而道歉,并希望我能通过帮助他学习来弥补。
2.I was standing right next to her,but she just ignored me.
我就站在她身边,可是她不理睬我。
3.Seeing him lying helplessly in bed,I felt a sense of sympathy and mercy welling up in my heart.
看着他无助地躺在床上,我既同情又怜悯。
4.Suddenly Mary came up,casting me an angry and disappointed look.
玛丽突然走近,向我投来愤怒和失望的目光。
友谊带来的改变
1.She felt lonely and hopeless until I approached her warmly.From then on,we two often learned together and shared happiness and sorrow.
在我热情地接近她之前,她感到孤独和绝望。从那时起,我们两个经常一起学习,分享快乐和悲伤。
2.It was her company and encouragement that not only made me happy,but also boosted my confidence.
正是她的陪伴和鼓励不仅让我开心还增强了我的自信。
升华主旨
1.I nodded firmly,knowing kindness and friendship bloomed in both of our hearts.
我坚定地点了点头,知道善良和友谊之花在我们两个的心中盛开。
2.There’s just one sure delight,friendship,like sunrise,warm and bright.
只有一种绝对的快乐,那就是友谊,像日出一样温暖而明亮。
3.It was on that very day that Tom made his first friend in the new school,and he truly appreciated the value of sincerity and honesty.
就在那一天,汤姆在新学校结识了他的第一个朋友,他真正认识到了真诚和诚实的价值。
这样自主练评
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2024辽宁鞍山二模)
When I found out that my new friend Karina did not share my opinions about some stuff,I was very upset.It was hard to imagine disagreeing with her about anything because when we first met,we got along so well.It was as if we’d known each other forever.
“No way!” I said,as I sat next to her on the first day of karate (空手道) camp.“Are those banana chips in your lunchbox ”
“You like banana chips ”she said in a surprised voice.“They’re my favorite snack.”
“My aunt brought some the last time she visited,and I’ve been craving (渴望) them ever since,” I said.
“I guess today’s your lucky day,” she said,handing me the bag.“We have a big box that’s kind of taking up space in the cupboard.So,you’d actually be helping me out!”
Right then is when I knew that Karina and I were meant to be friends forever.Whenever we got to pick a partner at camp,we picked each other.Whenever we had a break,we hung out together.The more time we spent together,the more we realized how amazingly alike we were.We both had two adorable cats,we both had an awesome younger sister,and we both had the same favorite song.
But then something happened.Karate camp was next to a piece of beautiful land that had a bunch of large old trees on it.Whenever it was nice out,we’d get to eat our lunch at picnic tables that were right by some of those trees.
After we finished lunch,our coach,Miguel,reminded us to keep the forest as clean and perfect as it was when we got here.
And that’s when things got complicated.
Sam,one of our teammates,asked us,“Have you guys heard that shopping mall rumor They want to cut down a bunch of those trees to make room for a shopping center.”To my surprise,Karina said,“My parents told me the shopping center would make new jobs for people who really needed work and people’s jobs were more important than trees.”
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I completely disagreed with Karina about cutting down trees.



Later,I suddenly realized Karina had her reasons for believing what she did.



热考话题五 遇险救援
历险脱困类也是高考读后续写曾涉及的话题,如浙江卷读后续写2020年的拍摄北极熊遇险;2018年的父子骑马迷路;2017 年的骑车游玩遇狼脱险。
这样构思情节
历险相关的环境和情感描写
1.It was completely dark except the faint light given out by a few stars in the sky.We had no idea where we were.
除了几颗星星发出微弱的光外,天完全黑了。我们不知道我们在哪里。
2.When we reached deep into the forest,suddenly the smog spread everywhere and we were not able to see each other clearly and lost our way.
当我们到达森林深处时,突然烟雾弥漫,我们看不清彼此,迷了路。
3.When buried under snow,Scott drifted between terror and panic,hoping that his friend Paul was not buried so deep.He held on to that faint possibility like a rope which could pull him to safety.
当斯科特被埋在雪下时,他惊恐万分,希望他的朋友保罗没有被埋得那么深。他紧紧抓住这个渺小的可能性,就像抓住一根能把他拉到安全地带的绳子。
脱险相关的动作和情感描写
1.He shook off the snow,moved snow away with bare hands,and managed to pull himself out.
他抖掉雪,徒手把雪弄开,然后设法爬了出来。
2.He painstakingly took only tiny breaths,fighting to stay positive by focusing on this breathing.
他费力地做着微小的呼吸,努力把注意力集中在这种呼吸上,以保持乐观的心态。
3.Time ticked away slowly.Just as he was feeling himself fading away,the rescue team arrived.
时间慢慢流逝。就在他感觉要死了的时候,救援队赶到了。
升华主旨
1.Our being lost added a special taste to my adventurous vacation which I would remember all my life.
我们的迷路给我的冒险假期增添了一份特别的滋味,我将终生难忘。
2.Finally,we went out of the forest that trapped us.What an unforgettable experience!It turns out that there’s always a way out of any difficult situation as long as we stay calm.
最后,我们走出了困住我们的森林。多么难忘的经历啊!事实证明,只要我们保持冷静,就总有办法摆脱困境。
3.It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with,we shouldn’t lose heart.
正是这种独特的经历使我理解了无论我们面临什么困难,我们都不应失去信心。
这样自主练评
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2024山东济南模拟)
The incident took place at Cheektowaga,a town in Erie County,New York,in the middle of a historic and dangerous snowstorm.I had gone out to visit my friend living in another county,but unfortunately I got stuck and was unable to drive further.
I fully realized how dangerous this would be as there was not enough gas left in the truck for me to get through the deadly snowstorm.The situation got even worse in such a place without any houses in sight.
I stayed in my truck,calling for help anxiously but the weak signal didn’t help me get connected.There was nothing I could do but wait.At midnight,there came a knock outside the truck.I opened the door and surprisingly found an old lady standing in the storm with just a thin coat,clearly not enough to survive the snowstorm.I invited her to get inside my truck at once.She told me in a weak voice that her name was Mary and her car broke down.She had walked a long way before finding my truck.
Misfortune never came alone.Soon,we realized the air conditioner burned all the fuel in my truck and it was getting colder and colder inside the truck.Mary closed her eyes without saying a word,shaking in the corner.Considering Mary’s condition,I decided to take action right now.Luckily,the GPS of my truck still worked.And with the help of GPS,I noticed that a school was nearby.I decided to take shelter in the school.Since Mary was too weak to move,I carried her on my back,heading to the school.After ten minutes’ struggle in the snow,we finally arrived,but found the school gate locked.
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I hesitated about what I should do.