专题12 读后续写十句五定法写大纲+四步设计补全情节
一、两段十句五定法的思路
Para 1. Para 2.
定 句1: 衔接提示句--心理/动作链 定句6:衔接提示句--心理/动作链
句2: 句7:
句3: 句8：
句4: 定句9:紧贴原文，交代结局
定句5: 过渡到P2首句 定句10:点睛
其中第一段中的句1与句5，第二段中的句1，句4和句5共五句话基本是固定的，其他的句子安排根据具体情况可作轻微调整。
【2023年新高考全国Ⅰ&II卷】When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
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文章主要讲述一个学生参加了一个写作比赛并获奖的故事。两句提示分别如下：
Para.1 A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
Para.2 I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.
根据这两句话可以基本定位，第一段讲自己听到比赛获胜消息后的场景，第二段写将这个好消息与老师分享。因此大致思路会如下列出：
Para.1
句1：衔接- 令我意外的是，我在这个写作比赛中荣获了第一名。
句2：主角动作+心理：我欣喜不已。
句3：配角动作+心理：我的老师为我感到骄傲
句4：主角动作+心理：感谢老师。
句5：衔接Para. 2: 参加颁奖典礼。
Para.2
句1：衔接：老师在等我。
句2：主角动作+心理：再次感谢老师
句3：配角动作+心理：老师恭喜并激励我
句4：交代结局：我爱上了写作。
句5：点睛：老师的信任与激励成就了我的今天。
这两个场景其实具有很大的相似性，区分在于一个沟通是远距离的，一个是面对面的。在打好大纲后，会扩句是写漂亮的必备条件。
Para.1
句1：衔接-令我意外的是，我在这个写作比赛中荣获了第一名。
To my surprise, I won the first place in the contest.
或What surprised me most was that I won the first place in the contest.
句2：我欣喜不已
Informed of the good news, I was very happy.
扩句：将心理描写换成其他高级表达。
Informed of the good news, a wave of delight taking hold of me, joy danced all the way to my heart.
句3：我的老师为我感到骄傲。
My teacher felt proud of me.
扩句：加入衔接
No sooner had I put down the call than I called my teacher to share the good news, who felt extremely proud of me.
(句式:no sooner had +主+done...than...一...就...)
句4：主角动作+心理：感谢老师。
I thanked him for all the help he had offered.
扩句：套用应用文感谢信的写法(without one's help, ...wouldn't have done...)
I thanked him for all the help he had offered, without which I wouldn't have achieved such a big success.
句5：衔接Para. 2: 参加颁奖典礼。
Finally came the award presentation day.
扩句：加入在颁奖典礼上会做的事情。
Finally came the award presentation day, when I gratefully delivered a speech with excitement.
Para.2
句1：衔接：老师在等我。
My teacher was waiting for me.
扩句：增加动作与神情描写。
When I opened the door, I found my teacher was waiting for me, whose face was glowing like a diamond.
句2：主角动作+心理：再次感谢老师
I expressed my gratitude again to him.
扩句：加入动作与眼神
Looking into his eyes, I expressed my heartfelt gratitude again to him, with tears misting my eyes.
句3：配角动作+心理：老师恭喜并激励我
He delivered his congratulations to me and encouraged me.
扩句：动作拆成三连，加入神情。
He patted my back softly, delivered his congratulations to me again and encouraged me with pride, smile on his face lighting up the whole room.
句4：交代结局：我爱上了写作。
From then on, I fell in love with writing.
扩句：补充点内容。
From then on, I fell in love with writing, who is now a famous writer with hundreds of works.
句5：点睛：老师的信任与激励成就了我的今天。
It's my teacher's trust and encouragement that contributes to all my achievements today.
扩句：套用个“我相信”的句式.
I hold the firm belief that it's my teacher's trust and encouragement that contributes to all my achievements today.
注意
续写时以第一人称描写的文章，其他人物的心理活动不能直接描写，只能通过神情、动作与眼神表达。所以这篇文章中，心理描写只有作者，老师的心理通过动作与神情传达。另外，若想作文获得相对高的分数，要尽可能的避免写对话描写。
One possible version:
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. I was so happy to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher. “I knew you’d win! I am proud of you. You made it!” he said excitedly. Then came the big day. When I was invited to the stage to receive the award, I expressed my thanks to my teacher. I said, “It’s you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher. Without your recognition and guidance, I couldn’t have written this article. Again thank you very much!”
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. My teacher was waiting for me. Holding my hands, he said “Congratulations! You are a good writer, so keep writing.” “You know I didn’t like writing before, but now I am crazy about it! I will try my best to create good works.” I said seriously. Since then, I have written many good works and now I am a famous writer. I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.
二、NSDD四步设计补全情节
“NSDD”: N需求D困难+S方法+D结局
“评卷员说” 情节设计原则
优先等级:简单·稳妥>紧凑>丰富>故事性
情节构思-“需求法”(NSDD)
(1)N需求+D困难+S方法+D结局
(2)历年真题，情节设计分析
3.情节设计素材:原文三处
(1)串联大意5W1H+P1P2首句，定事件走向，
(2)划关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
(3)各类描写占比，学写比例与其一致
2. “听评卷人说”评卷标准
1.“语法、时态、拼写、标点、大小写、叙述连贯性等方面的错误率都与学生读后续写的成绩存在不同程度的正相关性。”
2.“普遍存在情节不严密，词汇较低级，句式变化少等情况”
3.“...续写内容要与原文融洽，连贯...”
4.“阅卷实际操作评分标准，主要依据为是否有正确的句子，原则上就高不就低。
20分:内容通顺，细节比较多，允许些许错误。
18分:内容通顺，细节少些，语言有些许错误。
15分:内容可读，语言错误多。
10分:内容基本完整，基本没什么完整的句子。
3.续写情节设计，优先顺序原则:
“严密、融洽、连贯.
简单·稳妥>紧凑>丰富>故事性
(优先) (重要) (挑战) (尝试)
总结:情节设计的任务为:简单稳妥
其他维度可通过词汇、句式、连接词、各类描写来实现；
紧凑型:情节推进+连接成分(逻辑连词+副词+介词短语)；
丰富性:各类描写、词汇、句式；
故事性:多读英语小故事，了解文化，熟悉常见情节
【读原文:5WP1P2+角色特点+描写占比】
第一件事:串联首尾段5W1H+P1P2给定句，定事件走向
(1)读首段得知:人物+大致事件
(2)读尾段得知:具体事件+态度(列出所有角色)
(3)读P1P2给定句得知:故事结局走向
2.第二件事:划出关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
(1)划出角色相关描写(adj/v/n):用来续写角色，改写关键词;
(2)划出矛盾/需求，关键情节:用来续写情节，甚至是“升华”。
3.观察各类描写占比，续写比例与其一致
(1)看各类描写:续写时尽量占比一致；
(2)语法句式:尽量保持一致，也可模仿好句；
(3)占比多的描写:关键所在，决定情节走向。
构思前:读原文3件事(5WP1P2+角色+描写)
Who关键词 动作：v 情绪/心理：adj. 特点：n./phrase
角色1
角色2
角色3
What关键词
P1P2关键句
3W1H
故事情节:short story plots
Story Elements
Story elements are the pieces, or ingredients that when put together make up a narrative story.Identifying and remembering story elements will help you understand a story better.
Story Elements characters: people/animals in the story
Setting: when/where the story takes place
Problem: the conflict or main problem that the characters have
Solution: how the problem is solved
续写情节构思:需求法(NSDD)
Needs需求→Difficulty困难、障碍→Solution行动、方法→Denouement结局(需求解决)
续写情节构思:需求法(NSDD)---线索
Needs (需求) 重点看:首尾段+P1P2给定句 2.也可理解为:写作者要写到的内容
Difficulties (困难) 设置困难，原文找冲突、障碍(5W1H+角色特点)
Solutions (方法) 1.大转机:通常在P1/P2首句 2.原文:所有角色/事物
Denouement (结局) 1.需求被解决(符合价值观结局) 2.升华感悟(按需要来写)
【历年真题情节:需求-被解决】
年份 主题 需求 Needs 结局 Denouement 困难 Difficulties 方法和媒介Solutions
2024.全国I&II卷 陌生司机相助 钱包丢失需要钱 再次去老地方感谢 无法支付车费 陌生司机的信任让我感激
2023.6全国I&II卷 老师鼓励“我”参加写作比赛 写作不是我的强项 写作比赛获奖 无数次修改稿件 老师的鼓励让我终身难忘
2023.6全国浙江卷 救下一只蜂鸟 蜂鸟被困废弃房屋中 蜂鸟记得再次相见的我 人与自然的和谐相处源于救助
2022.6全国I&II卷 残疾孩子参加越野跑比赛 比赛前信心动摇 坚持完成比赛 学生丧失信心 老师的鼓励让他坚持完成比赛
2021.6全国I&II卷 母亲节惊喜 做早餐 不会做，厨房乱 爸爸帮忙 父亲的辛劳和担心，触动了我
【2020年浙江卷】
写作思路点拨
N需求:首尾1-2段+P1/P2给定句
->脱险:对抗熊30分钟
->我们:拍照
->熊:吃到食物
S方法:P1/P2给定句+角色事物
->等直升机
->Ei11行动
->喷雾+面包
D结局:需求解决+呼应原文
->脱险:登直升机
->我们拍照
->熊冲破栅栏吃食物
【最大化利用原文，情节仅需补2-3句】
N需求:脱险，对抗熊30分钟;惊险时刻(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)
D困难:熊凶猛;武器只能用普通物品(线索在:5W1H+角色特点)
S方法:等直升机;Ei11行动;喷客+面包(线索在:P1/P2给定句+角色事物)
D结局:登机脱险;熊破栅栏吃食物;我拍照(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)
P1: A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp. P2:At that very moment,the helicopter arrived.
1.接着P1(心理/动作链)--意识到喷雾无用，熊更凶狠 6.接着P2(心理/动作链)
2.我害怕，不知咋办 7.登直升机脱险
3.其他喷雾+扔面包 8.俯瞰营地，发现惊人一幕
4.行动有用，熊跑去吃面包 9.结局(需求解决)--熊终于冲破栅栏吃食物
5.根据P2--熊吃完又折回，惊险时刻 10.升华(归类+总结共性）--我拍照，心想:“熊得逞了”
One possible version
Pl:A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad.My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do.At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence.It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn't long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
P2: At that very moment, the helicopter.arrived,"Thank goodness we are saved!"Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved.When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind.I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene -we were robbed by a polar bear!
【辽宁省2024-2025学年高三上学期10月大联考】In a busy street of New York City, two strangers, Emily and Jack, found themselves on an unexpected journey of kindness and connection.
Emily, a young graphic (图案的) designer, was hurrying home after a late- night shift when she accidentally dropped her bag, scattering (散落) its contents onto the sidewalk. The scattered items were her work laptop, her latest design drawings, her mother's medication and some other things that were crucial to Emily. The wind was so strong that it could have blown her belongings away at any moment. Tired out, she knelt down, trying to gather her scattered belongings. Just then, Jack, a middle- aged man with a gentle smile, approached her. “Let me help you with that,” Jack offered, his voice warm and reassuring.
“Oh, thank you so much!” Emily replied with embarrassment.
As they picked up the items together, they struck up a conversation. Emily shared her story of a busy week, mentioning how her mother had always been a pillar (支柱) of support for her and her ten-year-old sister since their father's early passing, a source of unconditional love and wisdom that had shaped their lives. Jack, in turn, talked about his recent retirement and his dreams of hosting his own photography exhibition, showcasing the beauty he had captured through his camera over the years.
Suddenly, Emily's phone rang. It was her sister, panic- stricken, informing her that their mother needed immediate medical attention. Emily's face paled, and her hands started to shake. Jack asked, “Is everything alright ”
“My mother...she needs me, but I don't know how to get to the hospital quickly. I have no car.” Emily said, tears welling up in her eyes. Without hesitation, Jack said, “I'll take you there. My car is parked nearby.” When they arrived at the hospital, Jack insisted on staying until Emily's mother was stabilized.
Weeks later, Emily's mother made a full recovery. Wanting to repay Jack's kindness, Emily decided to do something for his dream.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150个左右：
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Then, Emily rang up Jack with a proposal.
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Emily spent countless hours working on the exhibition.
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【答案】
Then, Emily rang up Jack with a proposal. “I really appreciate what you have done for me. Without your help, my mother couldn’t have recovered. My family means so much to me.” Emily said, with tears in her eyes, “In return for your help, I also want to do something for you, Jack. Let me host a photography exhibition for you, showing the beauty you had captured through your camera over the years.” When listening this, Jack was very amazed and grateful. He was deeply moved by Emily’s suggestion.
Emily spent countless hours working on the exhibition. Despite the difficulties ahead, she was full of strength and confidence in her hearts. Tired as she was, she felt she had great passion for the exhibition. Because Emily knew that were it not for Jack’s help, her mother may couldn’t have survived that day. The two strangers tried their best to help each other. Finally, the exhibition was a great success. Jack was in tears because his dream came true. It was love that makes the world go around, which Emily felt deep in her heart.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了平面设计师艾米丽不小心把包里重要的东西散落在人行道上，如果不及时的捡起来，可能被大风吹走，陌生人杰克在此刻伸出援助之手帮助了艾米丽。在得知艾米丽的母亲需要立即就医后，杰克毫不犹豫的开车送艾米丽的妈妈去医院并精心照顾直至出院，艾米丽对于杰克的帮助，心存感激并决定帮助他实现自己的梦想。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“然后，艾米丽打电话向杰克提出建议。”可知，第一段可描写艾米丽的建议和原因以及杰克的感受。
②由第二段首句内容“艾米丽花了无数的时间来筹备这个展览。”可知，第二段可描写艾米丽准备展览很累，但是内心很坚定，以及杰克的感激之情。
2.续写线索：提出建议——感动——碰到困难——坚定克服——成功举办——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①捕捉：capture/seize
②感激：appreciate /thank
③举办：host/hold
情绪类
①感谢：showing appreciation/be grateful
②感动的：moved /touch
【点睛】[高分句型1]Jack was in tears because his dream came true.（由连接词because引导的时间状语从句）
[高分句型2]It was love that makes the world go around, which Emily felt deep in her heart（由It was …that…构成的强调句以及which引导非限制性定语从句）专题12 读后续写十句五定法写大纲+四步设计补全情节
一、两段十句五定法的思路
Para 1. Para 2.
定 句1: 衔接提示句--心理/动作链 定句6:衔接提示句--心理/动作链
句2: 句7:
句3: 句8：
句4: 定句9:紧贴原文，交代结局
定句5: 过渡到P2首句 定句10:点睛
其中第一段中的句1与句5，第二段中的句1，句4和句5共五句话基本是固定的，其他的句子安排根据具体情况可作轻微调整。
【2023年新高考全国Ⅰ&II卷】When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
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文章主要讲述一个学生参加了一个写作比赛并获奖的故事。两句提示分别如下：
Para.1 A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
Para.2 I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.
根据这两句话可以基本定位，第一段讲自己听到比赛获胜消息后的场景，第二段写将这个好消息与老师分享。因此大致思路会如下列出：
Para.1
句1：衔接- 令我意外的是，我在这个写作比赛中荣获了第一名。
句2：主角动作+心理：我欣喜不已。
句3：配角动作+心理：我的老师为我感到骄傲
句4：主角动作+心理：感谢老师。
句5：衔接Para. 2: 参加颁奖典礼。
Para.2
句1：衔接：老师在等我。
句2：主角动作+心理：再次感谢老师
句3：配角动作+心理：老师恭喜并激励我
句4：交代结局：我爱上了写作。
句5：点睛：老师的信任与激励成就了我的今天。
这两个场景其实具有很大的相似性，区分在于一个沟通是远距离的，一个是面对面的。在打好大纲后，会扩句是写漂亮的必备条件。
Para.1
句1：衔接-令我意外的是，我在这个写作比赛中荣获了第一名。
To my surprise, I won the first place in the contest.
或What surprised me most was that I won the first place in the contest.
句2：我欣喜不已
Informed of the good news, I was very happy.
扩句：将心理描写换成其他高级表达。
Informed of the good news, a wave of delight taking hold of me, joy danced all the way to my heart.
句3：我的老师为我感到骄傲。
My teacher felt proud of me.
扩句：加入衔接
No sooner had I put down the call than I called my teacher to share the good news, who felt extremely proud of me.
(句式:no sooner had +主+done...than...一...就...)
句4：主角动作+心理：感谢老师。
I thanked him for all the help he had offered.
扩句：套用应用文感谢信的写法(without one's help, ...wouldn't have done...)
I thanked him for all the help he had offered, without which I wouldn't have achieved such a big success.
句5：衔接Para. 2: 参加颁奖典礼。
Finally came the award presentation day.
扩句：加入在颁奖典礼上会做的事情。
Finally came the award presentation day, when I gratefully delivered a speech with excitement.
Para.2
句1：衔接：老师在等我。
My teacher was waiting for me.
扩句：增加动作与神情描写。
When I opened the door, I found my teacher was waiting for me, whose face was glowing like a diamond.
句2：主角动作+心理：再次感谢老师
I expressed my gratitude again to him.
扩句：加入动作与眼神
Looking into his eyes, I expressed my heartfelt gratitude again to him, with tears misting my eyes.
句3：配角动作+心理：老师恭喜并激励我
He delivered his congratulations to me and encouraged me.
扩句：动作拆成三连，加入神情。
He patted my back softly, delivered his congratulations to me again and encouraged me with pride, smile on his face lighting up the whole room.
句4：交代结局：我爱上了写作。
From then on, I fell in love with writing.
扩句：补充点内容。
From then on, I fell in love with writing, who is now a famous writer with hundreds of works.
句5：点睛：老师的信任与激励成就了我的今天。
It's my teacher's trust and encouragement that contributes to all my achievements today.
扩句：套用个“我相信”的句式.
I hold the firm belief that it's my teacher's trust and encouragement that contributes to all my achievements today.
注意
续写时以第一人称描写的文章，其他人物的心理活动不能直接描写，只能通过神情、动作与眼神表达。所以这篇文章中，心理描写只有作者，老师的心理通过动作与神情传达。另外，若想作文获得相对高的分数，要尽可能的避免写对话描写。
One possible version:
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. I was so happy to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher. “I knew you’d win! I am proud of you. You made it!” he said excitedly. Then came the big day. When I was invited to the stage to receive the award, I expressed my thanks to my teacher. I said, “It’s you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher. Without your recognition and guidance, I couldn’t have written this article. Again thank you very much!”
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. My teacher was waiting for me. Holding my hands, he said “Congratulations! You are a good writer, so keep writing.” “You know I didn’t like writing before, but now I am crazy about it! I will try my best to create good works.” I said seriously. Since then, I have written many good works and now I am a famous writer. I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.
二、NSDD四步设计补全情节
“NSDD”: N需求D困难+S方法+D结局
“评卷员说” 情节设计原则
优先等级:简单·稳妥>紧凑>丰富>故事性
情节构思-“需求法”(NSDD)
(1)N需求+D困难+S方法+D结局
(2)历年真题，情节设计分析
3.情节设计素材:原文三处
(1)串联大意5W1H+P1P2首句，定事件走向，
(2)划关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
(3)各类描写占比，学写比例与其一致
2. “听评卷人说”评卷标准
1.“语法、时态、拼写、标点、大小写、叙述连贯性等方面的错误率都与学生读后续写的成绩存在不同程度的正相关性。”
2.“普遍存在情节不严密，词汇较低级，句式变化少等情况”
3.“...续写内容要与原文融洽，连贯...”
4.“阅卷实际操作评分标准，主要依据为是否有正确的句子，原则上就高不就低。
20分:内容通顺，细节比较多，允许些许错误。
18分:内容通顺，细节少些，语言有些许错误。
15分:内容可读，语言错误多。
10分:内容基本完整，基本没什么完整的句子。
3.续写情节设计，优先顺序原则:
“严密、融洽、连贯.
简单·稳妥>紧凑>丰富>故事性
(优先) (重要) (挑战) (尝试)
总结:情节设计的任务为:简单稳妥
其他维度可通过词汇、句式、连接词、各类描写来实现；
紧凑型:情节推进+连接成分(逻辑连词+副词+介词短语)；
丰富性:各类描写、词汇、句式；
故事性:多读英语小故事，了解文化，熟悉常见情节
【读原文:5WP1P2+角色特点+描写占比】
第一件事:串联首尾段5W1H+P1P2给定句，定事件走向
(1)读首段得知:人物+大致事件
(2)读尾段得知:具体事件+态度(列出所有角色)
(3)读P1P2给定句得知:故事结局走向
2.第二件事:划出关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
(1)划出角色相关描写(adj/v/n):用来续写角色，改写关键词;
(2)划出矛盾/需求，关键情节:用来续写情节，甚至是“升华”。
3.观察各类描写占比，续写比例与其一致
(1)看各类描写:续写时尽量占比一致；
(2)语法句式:尽量保持一致，也可模仿好句；
(3)占比多的描写:关键所在，决定情节走向。
构思前:读原文3件事(5WP1P2+角色+描写)
Who关键词 动作：v 情绪/心理：adj. 特点：n./phrase
角色1
角色2
角色3
What关键词
P1P2关键句
3W1H
故事情节:short story plots
Story Elements
Story elements are the pieces, or ingredients that when put together make up a narrative story.Identifying and remembering story elements will help you understand a story better.
Story Elements characters: people/animals in the story
Setting: when/where the story takes place
Problem: the conflict or main problem that the characters have
Solution: how the problem is solved
续写情节构思:需求法(NSDD)
Needs需求→Difficulty困难、障碍→Solution行动、方法→Denouement结局(需求解决)
续写情节构思:需求法(NSDD)---线索
Needs (需求) 重点看:首尾段+P1P2给定句 2.也可理解为:写作者要写到的内容
Difficulties (困难) 设置困难，原文找冲突、障碍(5W1H+角色特点)
Solutions (方法) 1.大转机:通常在P1/P2首句 2.原文:所有角色/事物
Denouement (结局) 1.需求被解决(符合价值观结局) 2.升华感悟(按需要来写)
【历年真题情节:需求-被解决】
年份 主题 需求 Needs 结局 Denouement 困难 Difficulties 方法和媒介Solutions
2024.全国I&II卷 陌生司机相助 钱包丢失需要钱 再次去老地方感谢 无法支付车费 陌生司机的信任让我感激
2023.6全国I&II卷 老师鼓励“我”参加写作比赛 写作不是我的强项 写作比赛获奖 无数次修改稿件 老师的鼓励让我终身难忘
2023.6全国浙江卷 救下一只蜂鸟 蜂鸟被困废弃房屋中 蜂鸟记得再次相见的我 人与自然的和谐相处源于救助
2022.6全国I&II卷 残疾孩子参加越野跑比赛 比赛前信心动摇 坚持完成比赛 学生丧失信心 老师的鼓励让他坚持完成比赛
2021.6全国I&II卷 母亲节惊喜 做早餐 不会做，厨房乱 爸爸帮忙 父亲的辛劳和担心，触动了我
【2020年浙江卷】
写作思路点拨
N需求:首尾1-2段+P1/P2给定句
->脱险:对抗熊30分钟
->我们:拍照
->熊:吃到食物
S方法:P1/P2给定句+角色事物
->等直升机
->Ei11行动
->喷雾+面包
D结局:需求解决+呼应原文
->脱险:登直升机
->我们拍照
->熊冲破栅栏吃食物
【最大化利用原文，情节仅需补2-3句】
N需求:脱险，对抗熊30分钟;惊险时刻(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)
D困难:熊凶猛;武器只能用普通物品(线索在:5W1H+角色特点)
S方法:等直升机;Ei11行动;喷客+面包(线索在:P1/P2给定句+角色事物)
D结局:登机脱险;熊破栅栏吃食物;我拍照(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)
P1: A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp. P2:At that very moment,the helicopter arrived.
1.接着P1(心理/动作链)--意识到喷雾无用，熊更凶狠 6.接着P2(心理/动作链)
2.我害怕，不知咋办 7.登直升机脱险
3.其他喷雾+扔面包 8.俯瞰营地，发现惊人一幕
4.行动有用，熊跑去吃面包 9.结局(需求解决)--熊终于冲破栅栏吃食物
5.根据P2--熊吃完又折回，惊险时刻 10.升华(归类+总结共性）--我拍照，心想:“熊得逞了”
One possible version
Pl:A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad.My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do.At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence.It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn't long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
P2: At that very moment, the helicopter.arrived,"Thank goodness we are saved!"Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved.When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind.I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene -we were robbed by a polar bear!
【辽宁省2024-2025学年高三上学期10月大联考】In a busy street of New York City, two strangers, Emily and Jack, found themselves on an unexpected journey of kindness and connection.
Emily, a young graphic (图案的) designer, was hurrying home after a late- night shift when she accidentally dropped her bag, scattering (散落) its contents onto the sidewalk. The scattered items were her work laptop, her latest design drawings, her mother's medication and some other things that were crucial to Emily. The wind was so strong that it could have blown her belongings away at any moment. Tired out, she knelt down, trying to gather her scattered belongings. Just then, Jack, a middle- aged man with a gentle smile, approached her. “Let me help you with that,” Jack offered, his voice warm and reassuring.
“Oh, thank you so much!” Emily replied with embarrassment.
As they picked up the items together, they struck up a conversation. Emily shared her story of a busy week, mentioning how her mother had always been a pillar (支柱) of support for her and her ten-year-old sister since their father's early passing, a source of unconditional love and wisdom that had shaped their lives. Jack, in turn, talked about his recent retirement and his dreams of hosting his own photography exhibition, showcasing the beauty he had captured through his camera over the years.
Suddenly, Emily's phone rang. It was her sister, panic- stricken, informing her that their mother needed immediate medical attention. Emily's face paled, and her hands started to shake. Jack asked, “Is everything alright ”
“My mother...she needs me, but I don't know how to get to the hospital quickly. I have no car.” Emily said, tears welling up in her eyes. Without hesitation, Jack said, “I'll take you there. My car is parked nearby.” When they arrived at the hospital, Jack insisted on staying until Emily's mother was stabilized.
Weeks later, Emily's mother made a full recovery. Wanting to repay Jack's kindness, Emily decided to do something for his dream.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150个左右：
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Then, Emily rang up Jack with a proposal.
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Emily spent countless hours working on the exhibition.
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