专题二 第1讲
模拟练 提考能
(2024·广东省湛江市高三一模)
Ever since I came to work in my present company five years ago, I have heard about a small restaurant nearby called Love Dad.Everybody believes that it is owned by somebody's loving dad.The restaurant does give the diners a sense of home.The furnishings are homely, with dining areas looking like family dining rooms.Best of all, they have hand-drawn cards, which diners can take away with them when checking out.The restaurant doesn't have a menu.You never know what will be served until you come to its door with a “served today” notice hanging to it.
Whenever I pass by, I just can't help entering to enjoy the homely atmosphere.It's a reminder of my own home and my dad, who will prepare a great dinner for the family every day.Dad is a manager in a construction company and a great cook at home and not only a great cook.He is the kind of hero-like father at home, who can fix everything in the home and deal with all problems.As my parents live in another city, this small homely restaurant is where I choose to go to comfort my homesickness.
Curiosity about whose dad the owner of the restaurant is has always been there among my workmates who are its regular customers but it seems that nobody has a clue.It doesn't matter much as all of them can get a taste of home there.
Last month, when I was home for the Christmas break, my parents talked to me about their plan for retirement and I mentioned the restaurant Love Dad to them.We all thought it would be great if Mom and Dad could join the restaurant in some way.They asked me about the exact location of it and decided to deal with the matter themselves.
注意：
1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
One week later, I got an email from Dad.
One day, I was sitting in Love Dad again.
【范文】
One week later, I got an email from Dad. He had good news for me that his talk with the owner of Love Dad went very smoothly.As the restaurant owner, who they called Mr.Penn, is getting old and finding it too much for him to handle all the chores, he gladly accepted my parents as partners to run the restaurant on one condition：they had to keep it secret whose parents they are, which they readily accepted and planned to start work two months later.
One day, I was sitting in Love Dad again.While waiting to be served, I glanced over the customers, thinking maybe one of them was Mr.Penn's son or daughter.Then I took out my phone to scroll through the daily news.When my dishes were served, I looked up from my phone and saw Mom standing beside me, smiling.I managed not to show my excitement and smiled back.The meal that day tasted especially nice.When checking out, I took a card on which a family scene was drawn.The sentence beside the picture read, “Even when we grow up, we are still our parents' kids.”
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专题二 读后续写
年份 卷别 体裁 语境 主题
2024 新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷 记叙文 人与社会 搭乘出租车
浙江1月 记叙文 人与自我 缺乏方向感
2023 新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷 记叙文 人与自我 参加写作比赛
浙江1月 记叙文 人与自然 解救蜂鸟
年份 卷别 体裁 语境 主题
2022 新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷 记叙文 人与自我 越野赛跑
浙江1月 记叙文 人与自我 和队友配合圆满完成任务
第1讲 宏观把握 感知读后续写
一、题型概述
读后续写是随着我国高考改革由教育部考试中心打造的英语高考新题型，2016年10月在浙江省首次使用。文章多是记叙文，要求考生能提取有效的文本信息，在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，根据要求和提示预测缺失部分的内容走势，将文章补充完整，使之浑然一体。本题型主要考查学生的阅读、写作、思维及学习能力。
读后续写考题提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写(150词左右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。从试题结构看，读后续写检测的是书面理解能力和书面表达能力。因此，在写作之前，首先要读懂文本，理清故事情节，然后构思故事的发展和结局。
二、命题特点
(1)所需阅读的短文词数在350以内。
(2)文章多以故事类记叙文或者夹叙夹议类为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。
(3)要求学生能够梳理故事文体的结构、分析故事发展的线索、想象故事发展的情节以及续写故事的发展和结局。
三、赋分标准
(一)评分原则
1．本题总分为25分，按五个档次进行评分。
2．评分时，应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体为：
(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度；
(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性；
(3)语句间的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3．评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。
4．评分时还应注意：
(1)词数少于120的，酌情扣分；
(2)书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分；
(3)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
(二)各档次的给分范围和要求
档次 描述
第五档
(21～
25分) ——创造了丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高；
——使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，有个别小错，但完全不影响理解；
——有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段，全文结构清晰，意义连贯。
档次 描述
第四档
(16～
20分) ——创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高；
——使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，错误较少，但不影响理解；
——比较有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
档次 描述
第三档
(11～
15分) ——创造了基本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境有关联；
——使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有一些错误和不恰当之处，但基本不影响理解；
——基本有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。
档次 描述
第二档
(6～10分) ——内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题，续写不够完整，与原文有一定程度脱节；
——所用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多且比较低级，影响理解；
——未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义欠连贯。
档次 描述
第一档
(1～5分) ——内容和逻辑有较多重大问题，或有部分内容抄自原文，续写不完整，与原文情境基本脱节；
——所使用的词汇非常有限，语法结构单调，错误极多，严重影响理解；
——几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义不连贯。
零档
(0分) ——未作答；
——所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判；
——书写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。
第一步 精读短文，掌握关键信息。通过精读短文，明确故事人物关系，理清故事主要事件，并找到该篇短文的写作线索，如是以时间为线索还是以空间为线索等，这样有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜(结尾)”。
第二步 根据已知，构思续写思路。根据短文后面的要求，再次快速回读短文，分析并发展短文的情景，结合续写段段首的开头语展开合理想象，最终确定续写段落的思路和内容。
第三步 结合情景，添加具体细节。考生要特别注意描写的丰富性。可通过对人物动作、语言、心理活动、表情和环境等细节的描写来丰富内容，增强叙述的画面感。
第四步 拟写草稿，修改错词病句。拟写时，注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性，并通过正确使用句与句之间的连接词，使上下文连贯。
第五步 润色成篇，规范誊写文章。最后注意往答题纸上誊写时，务必做到字迹工整、清晰。
(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run.Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence.He was small for ten years old.His usual big toothy smile was absent today.I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong？He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened.“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him，” he explained uncomfortably.“I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration(懊恼)．I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing.After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid.He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team.It just took him longer—that's all.David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish.As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
【解题导引】
第一步：精读短文，掌握关键信息。
本文以赛跑为线索展开。作者是一名特殊教育教师，在大型越野赛跑那天，发现患有大脑疾病的大卫独自站在一旁。作者问其原因，他说准备放弃比赛。从教练口中得知，因为担心同学们会嘲笑大卫，所以教练想让大卫自己去决定是否参加赛跑。作者让大卫追寻自己的内心，不理会别人的看法，大卫最终参赛，尽管遇到困难，他战胜了自己，尽自己最大的能力参与其中，是他的勇敢和坚定让这一切成为可能。
第二步：根据已知，构思续写思路。
1．由第一段首句内容“我们挨着坐着，但大卫不愿看我一眼。”和第二段首句内容“我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上。”可知，第一段可描写作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛，大卫经过强烈的心理斗争，最终决定参加比赛。
2．由第二段首句内容“我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上。”可知，第二段可描写大卫开始参赛，虽然中途遇到困难，仍然坚持到最后，完成比赛。
第三步：结合情景，添加具体细节。
根据题目所提供两段首句构思的续写思路，继而思考续写线索：鼓励大卫——心理变化——决定参赛——克服困难——加油助威——完成比赛。增加心理变化、克服困难以及同学们的加油助威等相应内容来丰富续写内容。
第四步：拟写草稿，修改错词病句。
在搭建好写作框架和基本内容后，开始着手打草稿，对罗列的要点进行重新筛选和整合，适当拓展要点，尽量使用表意准确、形象生动、符合以英语为母语的人的习惯表达方式的高级词汇，同时应注意长短句结合，让句式灵活多变，以体现考生深厚的语言功底，使文章更出彩。如行动类：①深呼吸：with a deep breath/breathe deeply②坚持做：insist on doing/stick to doing；情绪类：①热情：enthusiastically /with great passion②骄傲：be proud of/take pride in；高分句式：You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here.
(由which引导的非限制性定语从句和 why引导的限制性定语从句)，Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run.(现在分词作状语和省略that的宾语从句)，It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.(含有It was...that结构的强调句型)等。
第五步：润色成篇，规范誊写文章。
在誊写文章时，还需要对语言进行修饰、润色，恰当运用衔接手段，以使文本紧凑流畅。
【优秀作文赏析】
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. I said gently and quietly, “No one can change your mind, except yourself.If you desire to challenge yourself, there is nothing to do with others' thoughts.” He sat still with a deep breath.“You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here，” I added with a sincere tone.Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run.His coach heard what David said and gave me a look—the kind that was more determined than anyone else's.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.The race started.It seemed that the runway was extremely long for young children, not to mention a child with a brain disease.David insisted on running as if he had forgotten all his weaknesses, though he was tripped over within a few kilometers.It didn't take long before he picked himself up again and continued his mission.Classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him.“Come on! You can make it! We are proud of you！” they shouted enthusiastically.To everyone's joy, he reached the final line and ranked the 20th.It was no more important whether he won the first place or not.It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.
