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Unit 8 Literature
A Continuation of a Story
Writing Workshop
By the end of this period, students will be able to:
analyze the story’s main elements.
use evaluation list to help you polish the draft.
learn the skills on continuation writing.
apply what you have learnt to the Continuation Writing.
Learning objectives
You are going to write a continuation of a story “The last leaf ”.
Discuss the questions with your partner.
1. What happened in the story “ The last leaf ”
2. What might happen next
3. What is important in continuing a story
Warming-up
where
who
in Greenwich Village
Johnsy, Sue and Behrman
when
in November
What happened in the story “ The Last Leaf ”
Suggested answer: The story happened in a building in New York. The heroine Johnsy had little chance of surviving because of pneumonia. She counted the leaves and thought she must die when the last leaf fell. Johnsy’s neighbor, Mr. Behrman painted an ivy leaf for her in the rain before the last leaf fell.But unfortunately he died of pneumonia at that night.
Read for writing
Read a continuation of 20,000 Leagues Under the Sea. Answer the quesions.
Where did this part of the story happen
What did the narrator meet
What did Ned think would happen to them
4 How is the continuation concencted with the original story
It happened inside the submarine.
The narrator met two seamen of the submarine.
They would die.
It uses the same characters as the original story, and it tells what happens next.
My Story Map Characters:
Setting:
The plot:
Read again. Identify the characters, the setting and the plot of the story.
They were nervous in the machine. Then two seamen came and checked their condition, provided water and dry biscuits and offered to take them home, but they didn’t believe that.
in the machine, right after Ned, Conseil and “I” were rescued
I; Ned; Conseil; two seamen
Para.1.Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.___________________________________________________
Para.2.Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. ______________________________________________________
Writing
“In 40 years he had never produced the masterpiece he longed to paint.”(para.7)
“And now I must see a fellow downstairs, Behrman. Pneumonia,too. There is no hope for him.”(para.12)
“Mr Behrman died today.”(para.13)
The Leaves
“Ten, nine, eight, seven...”(Para.4)
“They are falling fast now,”(para.5)
“there was just one remaining leaf”(para.8)
“the leaf was still there!”(para.10)
“When the last one falls, I must go, too...”(para.5)
“It will fall today. And I will die with it”(para.9)
“It is a crime to want to die.”(Para.11)
falling
one left
negative
positive
healthy
died
awful
Johnsy’s feelings
Mr . Behrman
Outlining
Draw a story map for your continuation of “The Last Leaf ”. Make sure your continuation is coherent with the original story.
details
My Story Map Title The spirit never dies
Setting a three-story building in Greenwich Village, after Mr. Behrman passed away
Characters Johnsy and Sue
New plot Johnsy and Sue worked harder in art after Mr. Behrman died. They decided to get on in life and share this touching story with people.
The development of the story With their continuous hard work, they successfully held an art exhibition of their paintings and some remaining works from Mr. Behrman.
Ending The local newspaper reported about this. Some rich men bought their works. Johnsy and Sue raised a charity to support poor people with pneumonia.
Drafting
Use your story map and the Writing Help to write the first draft.
Your first draft
Edit your story continuation in pairs. Then share what you have written in class.
A continuation of a story
Does the writer continue the story based on an understanding of the setting, the characters and the plot of the original story
Does the continuation start with a reasonable new plot
Does the writer include enough sensory details, actions and thoughts
Does the writer create dialogues that sound real and natural
Mark any spelling, punctuation or grammar errors.
Mark any unclear expressions. Give suggestions if you can.
Underline the expressions you like.
Comments
Editing
Para.1 Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Looking out of the window and staring at the last ivy leaf that never moved an inch, Johnsy couldn’t help crying sadly. Although she was too weak to sit up and move around, she was determined to see Mr Behrman the last time. Supported by Sue, Johnsy got out of bed and went downstairs. There was Mr. Behrman lying dead in his bed. Holding Mr. Behrman’s hand tightly, After what seemed like ages, she held back her tears and murmured to the pale face, “Dear Mr. Behrman! It’s you who gave me a second life and I promise that I will continue my painting.”
A possible version
Para.2 Ten years later, Jonhsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Her paintings were widely admired and on exhibition at art galleries all over the world. One day, she returned to Greenwich Village. When she opened the window and saw the leaf on the wall, she decided it was the right time for her to draw the painting that she had longed to produce. In the painting, a leaf held firmly onto the dry branches in the icy wind. With the last stroke on the paper, Johnsy smiled broadly. To her, the last leaf is a glimmer of hope that an old man gave to a desperate girl at the cost of his own life.
Finish and polish your composition by using the self-evaluation list, and then share with your classmates.
Homework