书面表达
备战 2025 年中考英语新课标（核心素养）二轮复习之优秀
生拔高重难题型特训
【预测分析】
一、重难点解析
1、内容深度与逻辑性
观点表达模糊：部分学生因词汇量不足或逻辑混乱，导致论点不清晰（如“时间管理”类作文
未明确利弊分析）。
素材与主题脱节：社会热点类作文（如 AI 伦理、垃圾分类）需结合实例，但学生常堆砌空
泛观点，缺乏具体案例支撑。
2、语言准确性
语法错误高频：主谓不一致、时态混用（如过去事件误用现在时）、从句结构错误（缺少关
系词）是主要扣分点。
中式英语表达：直译中文结构（如“Good good study, day day up”），需强化地道表达训练。
3、结构与衔接
段 落 松 散 ： 缺 乏 总 分 总 结 构 ， 段 落 间 过 渡 生 硬 （ 如 未 使 用 连 接 词 “Furthermore”“In
conclusion”）。
句式单一：过度依赖简单句，复合句（定语从句、状语从句）使用率不足，影响文采分。
4、文化敏感性与创新性
跨文化表达偏差：涉及中西节日对比时，易混淆习俗细节（如春节与圣诞节的时间、活动差
异）。
模板化严重：套用万能句导致千篇一律，缺乏个性化视角（如“建议信”未体现真实场景）。
二、备考策略
1、内容构建与逻辑强化
思维导图训练：针对议论文，用“观点-论据-案例”框架搭建提纲（如“时间管理”作文分“学生
压力”“解决方案”“长期益处”三部分）。
热点素材库：按主题分类积累案例（如环保类：垃圾分类数据、低碳出行方式），确保论据
具体。
2、语言精准度提升
语法专项突破：每日精析 5 个典型错句（如非谓语动词错误），重点攻克主从复合句结构。
地道表达替换：建立同义表达表（如“important”→“crucial”“significant”），避免重复。
3、结构优化与衔接技巧
三段式模板：
开头：直击主题（如“There is growing concern about...”）。
主体：分点论述（Firstly...Secondly...Finally...）。
结尾：总结观点+呼吁/建议（如“In conclusion, balancing...is essential.”）。
逻辑信号词强化：整理转折（However）、因果（Therefore）、举例（For instance）等词表，
每篇作文至少使用 3 种。
4、实战模拟与纠错
限时写作训练：每周完成 2 篇真题作文（15 分钟/篇），严格遵循“审题-列提纲-写作-检查”
流程。
错题归因本：记录高频错误类型（如冠词缺失、介词误用），针对性强化练习。
5、文化与创新融入
跨文化对比写作：练习“中西节日差异”类题目，积累文化特色词汇（如“red envelope”
“Christmas carol”）。
个性化表达设计：在建议信或观点文中加入个人经历（如“I once struggled with...”），增强
真实性。
三、高分范文要素
1、结构范例
2、语言亮点
复合句：Although hobbies are enjoyable, overcommitting may lead to burnout.
谚语引用：As the saying goes, “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.”
数据支撑：A survey shows 70% of students feel stressed when neglecting leisure activities.
四、评分标准与避坑指南
1、评分细则
内容（8 分）：覆盖所有要点，逻辑连贯（缺 1 点扣 3 分）。
语言（8 分）：语法错误≤2 处，拼写错误≤3 处。
结构（4 分）：使用复合句、连接词得 1-2 分，无错误得满分。
2、常见失分点
字数不足：低于 60 词直接降档，建议控制在 80-100 词。
中式表达：如“Very like”→“Quite fond of”。
格式错误：应用文未写称呼和落款（如书信缺“Yours sincerely”）。
五、总结
2025 年上海中考书面表达需以“内容精准、逻辑清晰、语言规范”为核心，通过热点素材积
累、语法专项突破、结构模板训练实现提分。建议结合真题模拟与错题复盘，强化个性化表
达与文化元素，最终达到“稳中求新”的高分目标。
【基础试题】
A
DeepSeek 的问世使人工智能 AI（Artificial Intelligence）成为热门话题，科学技术的快
速发展给人们的学习和生活带来了巨大的变化，同时也引发了人们对于人工智能取代人类的
担忧。假如你是李华，请写一篇名为“AI in Our Life”的作文，谈谈那你对人工智能的看法。
内容包括：
1. AI 的优点：使生活更加方便、舒适；代替人类完成危险、繁重的工作……
2. AI 的缺点：学生过于依赖人工智能，失去独立思考能力；增加失业风险……
3. 你的看法：……
参考词汇：advantage 优点; disadvantage 缺点; convenient 方便; comfortable 舒适；
take the place of………代替; depend on 依赖; risk 风险
要求：1. 80 词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；2. 短文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信
息。
AI in Our Life
The invention of DeepSeek has made AI a hot topic among people in our society. ________
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【答案】
AI in Our Life
The invention of DeepSeek has made AI a hot topic among people in our society. It has
become an important part of our life.
In some ways, AI is good for us. It makes our life more convenient and comfortable. For
example, we can get information on every subject from it in a few seconds. What’s more. AI can
help us to do some dangerous and hard jobs. However, it also brings us some problems. Students
can’t think by themselves with the help of AI and they can’t study carefully in class. Moreover, AI
will take the place of humans in some jobs, increasing the risk of unemployment.
In my opinion, we should use AI as a helper to improve our life.
【难度】0.85
【知识点】科学技术
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：时态以“一般现在时”为主；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏提示，并适当添加细节，注意字母大小写以
及标点符号。
[写作步骤]
第一步、承接已给的开头，介绍 AI 的优点；
第二步、介绍 AI 的缺点；
第三步、表达自己的看法。
[亮点词汇]
①be good for 有益于
②with the help of… 在……的帮助下
③take the place of 代替
[高分句型]
①Students can’t think by themselves with the help of AI and they can’t study carefully in class.(
并列句)
B
下周五是学校“社会实践活动日”, 学校对学生参加活动的意愿进行了调查。请你根据
下面的调查结果写一篇调查报告, 并结合你的选择和选择的理由谈谈你对这次活动的看法。
注意:（1）短文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名。
（2）词数 80 个左右（开头结尾已给出, 不计入总词数）。
Our school did a survey among the students about our plan for social practice activities on
Social Practice Day. Here are the results. _____________________________________________
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I’m looking forward to the coming day.
【答案】
Our school did a survey among the students about our plan for social practice activities on
Social Practice Day. Here are the results.
According to the survey, 31% of the students would like to clean streets and parks. 25.5%
of the students want to help old people, and 22.8% of the students plan to help parents do
housework. 14.7% of them choose to help the patients in hospitals, and the rest choose other
activities.
As for me, I choose to clean the streets and parks because I want to protect the environment
and make our city more beautiful. I believe this activity will help us understand the importance of
teamwork and responsibility.
I’m looking forward to the day.
【难度】0.85
【知识点】文体活动
【详解】[总体分析]
① 题材：本文是一篇图表类调查报告写作；
② 时态：一般现在时，一般将来时；
③ 结构：调查概况→数据分析→个人选择及理由→表达期待。
[写作步骤]
第一步：引出调查的主题；
第二步：列举图表中的主要数据；
第三步：说明自己的选择和理由；
第四步：表达期待与感受。
[亮点词汇]
① according to 根据
② take part in 参加
③ as for 至于
④ look forward to 盼望
[高分句型]
① I choose to clean the streets and parks because I want to protect the environment and make our
city more beautiful. （原因状语从句）
② I believe this activity will help us understand the importance of teamwork and responsibility.
（宾语从句）
C
近年来，随着科技发展，电子产品越来越多，学生的书写能力大大降低。假如你是校
英语书法协会的会长，为了让同学们重视书写 handwriting，请你用英语写一封倡议书，内
容包括：
1. 目前学生书写不如以前的原因；
2. 如何练就好书写：减少对电子产品的依赖；养成习惯……；
3. 好书写的重要性，发出号召。
要求：
1. 词数 90 左右；
2. 不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
3. 根据提示要点表述，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear students,
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
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_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
The Students Union
【答案】
Dear students,
With the development of technology, we rely more on electronic devices, causing our
English handwriting to decline. It is a worrying situation.
To improve this situation, we should reduce our dependence on electronic devices, such as
taking handwritten notes in class. We should also develop the habit of writing an English diary
every day, which can help us get familiar with letters and improve writing speed and neatness.
Good handwriting can not only leave a good impression on teachers when we hand in
assignments but also reflect our learning attitude.
Let’s take action right away! I believe that with our efforts, we can all have beautiful
English handwriting.
The Students Union
【难度】0.85
【知识点】青少年问题
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇书信作文；
②时态：时态以一般现在时为主；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏字数要求，可适当添加细节。
[写作步骤]
第一步，解释目前学生书写不如以前的原因；
第二步，写出如何练就好书写；
第三步，点明好书写的重要性，并发出号召。
[亮点词汇]
①not only…but also…不仅……而且……
②such as 例如
③get familiar with 熟悉
④take action 采取行动
⑤right away 马上
[高分句型]
①We should also develop the habit of writing an English diary every day, which can help us get
familiar with letters and improve writing speed and neatness.（which 引导的定语从句）
②Good handwriting can not only leave a good impression on teachers when we hand in
assignments but also reflect our learning attitude.（when 引导的时间状语从句）
【提升试题】
A
回望初中三年，课堂似一方舞台，无数活动精彩呈现。或是一场好书推荐会，或是一
幕角色扮演，或是一次 DIY 创作实践……随着毕业季脚步渐近，学校公众平台的英语角栏
目发起“A Class Activity I’ll Never Forget”征文活动，诚邀同学们用英文记录那场亲身经历、
收获满溢的课堂活动。请你浏览推送内容，撰写一篇英语文章投稿。
Introduce what the activity was
Describe what you did during the activity
Explain why you will never forget it
注意事项：
1.短文内容须自拟，要求观点明确、语句通顺、意思连贯、符合题意；
2.词数在 100 个左右，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数；
3.短文中不得使用真实的个人及学校信息；
4，短文必须写在答题卡指定的位置上。
A Class Activity I’ll Never Forget
As I look back on my junior high school years, countless memories flood into my mind.
But one class activity impresses me
most_________________________________________________
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【答案】
A Class Activity I’ll Never Forget
As I look back on my junior high school years, countless memories flood into my mind.
But one class activity impresses me most—role play.
Last month, our teacher divided us into pairs and asked us to act out the dialogue between
Eddie and Hobo. I practised hard with my partner, trying to catch classmates’ attention. When it
was our turn, we stood in front of the class, acting it out perfectly with body language. The whole
class laughed and gave us a big hand. It was the last time we did such a fun show in junior high
school.
I’ll never forget the activity that not only taught me about the magic of English but had a
lasting influence on my learning journey.
【难度】0.65
【知识点】叙事忆旧、哲理感悟、个人经历
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：时态以“一般过去时”为主；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应根据提示要点进行书面表达，不要遗漏要点，可适当发挥。
应能够围绕主题准确使用一定的语法、词汇、短语和句型等，清楚连贯地表达自己的思想，
进而完成写作任务。
[写作步骤]
第一步，表明写作意图，引出话题；
第二步，具体阐述写作内容。分别从是什么活动、活动期间做了什么以及为什么难忘等方面
介绍这次课堂活动的具体详情;
第三步，书写结语。表达自己的收获和感悟。
[亮点词汇]
①divide ... into ...把……分成……
②act out 把……演出来
③catch sb’s attention 引起某人的注意
④have a lasting influence on 对……有持久的影响
[高分句型]
①When it was our turn, we stood in front of the class, acting it out perfectly with body language.
(When 引导的时间状语从句)
②I’ll never forget the activity that not only taught me about the magic of English but had a lasting
influence on my learning journey. (定语从句)
B
雨果曾经说过：“善是精神世界的阳光”。某英文网站正在开展以“友善”为主题的征文
活动。假如你是李华，请用英语写一篇短文投稿，分享一段你帮助他人的经历以及你的收获。
提示：
（1）What experience can you share about helping others
（2）What have you learnt from the experience
要求：
（1）短文须包括提示中的要点，并适当发挥。
（2）短文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名。
（3）词数 80 个左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
The world is beautiful because of kindness. ______________________________________
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【答案】
The world is beautiful because of kindness. When you reach out to those in need, you can
also feel good.
My friend Jane used to be a shy girl. To help her, I encouraged her to take part in an English
competition. I did my best to cheer her up when she wanted to give up. I listened to her speech
over and over again until we felt satisfied. In the end, she did excellently in the competition.
From this experience, I realised that an act of kindness can give people strength and I can
also make myself perfect while helping others.
【难度】0.65
【知识点】个人经历
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：时态主要为“一般过去时”；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏提示问题，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，表明写作意图，表达友善的重要性；
第二步，具体阐述帮助他人的经历；
第三步，书写结语，表达收获。
[亮点词汇]
①in need 在需要中的
②used to 过去常常
③take part in 参加
④over and over again 一次又一次
[高分句型]
①To help her, I encouraged her to take part in an English competition.（动词不定式表目的）
②From this experience, I realised that an act of kindness can give people strength and I can also
make myself perfect while helping others.（宾语从句）
C
学以致用，知行合一。你是如何将所学知识应用到生活中解决实际问题的？学校英语
社团正在组织题为“Learning for practice”的征文比赛，请根据以下提示，写一篇短文。
注意：1.文中不得出现你的真实姓名和学校名称；
2.表达清楚，语言通顺，书写规范；
3.词数不少于 100 词。文章的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Learning for practice
It’s important for us teenagers to put what we have learnt into practice in daily life._______
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【答案】
Learning for practice
It’s important for us teenagers to put what we have learnt into practice in daily life. In our
daily life, our parents prepare everything for us. Sometimes we don’t know how to look after
ourselves or solve problems around us. I’m facing the same problem.
This term, we have a new subject—Labor course. I learn how to grow vegetables and do
some chores through this course. On my mother’s birthday, I cooked a bowl of noodles for my
mother to show my love. Though it tasted bad, my mother felt very happy. Now, I can help my
parents do some housework, such as making the bed and sweeping the floor.
I am happy that I can put what I’ve learnt into practice in daily life.
【难度】0.65
【知识点】叙事忆旧
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一材料作文。
②时态：时态主要为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”。
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏要点。注意行文连贯，逻辑清晰，无拼写和
语法错误。
[写作步骤]
第一步，承接给出的开头，点明自己面临的问题；
第二步，介绍自己学到的知识以及应用；
第三步，写出总结。
[亮点词汇]
①prepare everything for us 为我们准备好一切
②do some chores 做家务
③such as 例如
[高分句型]
①Though it tasted bad, my mother felt very happy. (Though 引导的让步状语从句)
②I am happy that I can put what I’ve learnt into practice in daily life. (what 引导的宾语从句)
【拔高试题】
A
在你成长的过程中，有许多值得感恩的人，其中一定有某个人陪伴你、影响你、感动
你。学校“善雅之声”广播站的英语主题活动周正在以“Thank you,____________”为题进行征
文比赛。请根据以下流程图写一篇英语征文，谈谈你最想感谢的人（家人、老师或朋友......）。
要求：
1.征文须补全题目，内容根据流程图自拟，流程图中括号部分为非限定性内容，仅供参考；
2.80-120 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数；
3.文中不能出现真实姓名和所在班级的名称。
Thank you,____________
In my life, there are many people who have helped and influenced me a lot. The person I
want to say thanks most is _________________________________________________________
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【答案】
Thank you, Mom
In my life, there are many people who have helped and influenced me a lot. The person I
want to say thanks most is my m om. When I was a child, I was shy and afraid o f speaking in
public. My mom gave me lots of encouragement and support. She always told me, "Don't be
afraid, just try." She also spent m uch time reading with me. When I made mistakes, she never
shouted at me. Instead, she hel ped me to find out the reasons and learn from them. Without her
help, I couldn't improve my speaking skills so much. Now I'm confident enough to speak in public
and I'm no longer shy. I really want to say thanks to my mom.
【难度】0.4
【知识点】家人和亲人、情感、个人经历
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇记叙文；
②时态：全文主要采用一般过去时描述过去发生的事情，使用一般现在时描述现在的状态；
③提示：严格围绕题目要求，涵盖了题目要求的内容，语言表达流畅，无语法和拼写错误，
字数符合规定。
[写作步骤]
第一步，开头直接表明在自己生命中有很多人给予帮助和影响，而最想感谢的人是母亲，迅
速切入主题，引出下文对具体事例的描述；
第二步，从三个方面具体描述母亲对自己的帮助，母亲耐心帮助分析原因，让自己从错误中
学习。这些事例生动地展现了母亲在自己成长过程中的重要作用，为后文表达感恩之情做铺
垫；
第三步，结尾段先说明在母亲的帮助下，自己能够自信地在公共场合讲话，不再害羞，最后
直接表达对母亲的感激之情，呼应文章开头和主题，使文章结构完整，情感真挚。
[亮点词汇]
①afraid of 害怕
②encouragement 鼓励
③Instead 相反
[高分句型]
①When I was a child, I was shy and afraid of speaking in public.（时间状语从句）
②Without her help, I couldn't improve my speaking skills so much.（运用“without”介词短语）
B
假如你是李华，你的英国笔友 Alan 听说中国学校非常重视体育运动，发邮件询问你
校日常体育运动的开展情况和你最爱的运动以及你从运动中得到的好处。请你给他回一封邮
件，回答他提出的问题。
From Alan To Li Hua
Subject School sports
Dear Li Hua,
Hope this email finds you well. I heard that sports are very important in Chinese schools,
and I’m really curious about the sports activities in your school.
Could you tell me how many P. E. classes you have each week Also, what sports clubs
are there in your school Besides, I’m interested to know which sport you like best and what
benefits (益处) you’ve got from it. I believe it will be great to learn from your experiences.
Looking forward to your reply.
Alan
注意：
（1）可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
（2）文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称；
（3）写作词数为 80 左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Alan,
I’m so happy to tell you about the sports activities in our school!______________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
【答案】
Dear Alan,
I’m so happy to tell you about the sports activities in our school! Our school offers four P.E.
classes each week. During these classes, we learn various sports skills and play different games.
There are many sports clubs in our school, such as the football club, the basketball club, the
swimming club and the ping-pong club. Students can join the clubs according to their own
interests. I like basketball best because it’s exciting and challenging. I’m on the school basketball
team. We practice together three times a week. Playing basketball helps me build a strong body
and develop teamwork spirit.
What’s more, I’ve made many friends through playing basketball. I think sports make my
school life more colorful and meaningful. What about the sports activities in your school
I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
【难度】0.4
【知识点】健康与运动、社团/俱乐部、爱好、教育、文体活动
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一封电子邮件；
②时态：以一般现在时为主；
③提示：写作要点已给出，要求根据提示内容进行写作，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，开头表达很高兴回复笔友关于学校体育运动的询问，引出下文；
第二步，先说明学校每周有四节体育课；接着列举学校的足球、篮球、游泳和乒乓球俱乐部；
然后表明自己最喜欢篮球，阐述篮球运动能增强体质、培养团队合作精神，还能交到朋友；
第三步，结尾询问笔友学校的体育运动情况，期待对方回信。
[亮点词汇]
①offer 提供
②teamwork spirit 团队合作精神
③make friends 交朋友
[高分句型]
①There are many sports clubs in our school, such as the football club, the basketball club, the
swimming club and the ping-pong club.（There be 句型）
②I like basketball best because it’s exciting and challenging.（原因状语从句）
C
在当今数字化时代，人工智能（AI）已经渗透到我们生活的方方面面。为了使同学们
学会客观、理性地对待 AI，你班同学以“Should students use AI in their studies ”为题展开了辩
论。请你根据写作要求，用英语写一篇文章，表达你自己的观点。
写作要求：
1.结合上图提示，表明你的观点并说明理由，可适当发挥；
2.文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和学校名称；
3.词数 100 左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
Should students use AI in their studies
Does AI help students learn, or does it bring new challenges Different people hold
different opinions.________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
【答案】例文 1
Should students use AI in their studies
Does AI help students learn, or does it bring new challenges Different people hold
different opinions. In my opinion, students should use AI in their studies. It is a useful helper for
students.
First of all, AI can be a good teacher when we are at home. It offers help like a real teacher,
which helps to solve problems in time. Besides, Al helps to open our minds. When we meet a hard
math problem, AI can provide us with more than one method to solve it. We can learn more ways
of solving problems with the help of AI. What’s more, AI helps to find information more quickly.
It makes learning more efficient.
In a word, I think students should use AI in their studies. It not only helps them open their
minds but also makes learning more efficient.
例文 2
Should students use AI in their studies
Does AI help students learn, or does it bring new challenges Different people hold
different opinions. From my point of view, students shouldn’t use AI in their studies. It is not good
for students’ growth.
First, AI will offer direct answers to students. It will stop students from thinking by
themselves. Gradually, they will be poor at thinking. In addition, if they always turn to AI for
help, they may lose the ability to solve problems on their own. It can do much harm to students’
further development. Last but not least, using AI means that they will spend much time in front of
screens. It is bad for their eyes.
In conclusion, I believe that it is wiser to avoid using AI in students’ studies. They should
think independently and solve problems with their own efforts.
【难度】0.4
【知识点】意见/建议、科学技术
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：主要为“一般现在时”；
③提示：写作提示已给出，可适当增加细节，不要遗漏，注意上下文的逻辑关系。
[写作步骤]
第一步，简述自己的观点；
第二步，具体从 AI 如何帮助师生解决难题来说明理由；
第三步，书写结语，再次强调自己的观点。
[亮点词汇]
①in my opinion 在我看来
②provide sb with sth 给某人提供某物
③with the help of 在……的帮助下
[高分句型]
①It offers help like a real teacher, which helps to solve problems in time. (which 引导非限制性
定语从句)
②When we meet a hard math problem, AI can provide us with more than one method to solve it.
(when 引导时间状语从句)
③In a word, I think students should use AI in their studies. (that 省略的宾语从句)书面表达
备战 2025 年中考英语新课标（核心素养）二轮复习之优秀
生拔高重难题型特训
【预测分析】
一、重难点解析
1、内容深度与逻辑性
观点表达模糊：部分学生因词汇量不足或逻辑混乱，导致论点不清晰（如“时间管理”类作文
未明确利弊分析）。
素材与主题脱节：社会热点类作文（如 AI 伦理、垃圾分类）需结合实例，但学生常堆砌空
泛观点，缺乏具体案例支撑。
2、语言准确性
语法错误高频：主谓不一致、时态混用（如过去事件误用现在时）、从句结构错误（缺少关
系词）是主要扣分点。
中式英语表达：直译中文结构（如“Good good study, day day up”），需强化地道表达训练。
3、结构与衔接
段 落 松 散 ： 缺 乏 总 分 总 结 构 ， 段 落 间 过 渡 生 硬 （ 如 未 使 用 连 接 词 “Furthermore”“In
conclusion”）。
句式单一：过度依赖简单句，复合句（定语从句、状语从句）使用率不足，影响文采分。
4、文化敏感性与创新性
跨文化表达偏差：涉及中西节日对比时，易混淆习俗细节（如春节与圣诞节的时间、活动差
异）。
模板化严重：套用万能句导致千篇一律，缺乏个性化视角（如“建议信”未体现真实场景）。
二、备考策略
1、内容构建与逻辑强化
思维导图训练：针对议论文，用“观点-论据-案例”框架搭建提纲（如“时间管理”作文分“学生
压力”“解决方案”“长期益处”三部分）。
热点素材库：按主题分类积累案例（如环保类：垃圾分类数据、低碳出行方式），确保论据
具体。
2、语言精准度提升
语法专项突破：每日精析 5 个典型错句（如非谓语动词错误），重点攻克主从复合句结构。
地道表达替换：建立同义表达表（如“important”→“crucial”“significant”），避免重复。
3、结构优化与衔接技巧
三段式模板：
开头：直击主题（如“There is growing concern about...”）。
主体：分点论述（Firstly...Secondly...Finally...）。
结尾：总结观点+呼吁/建议（如“In conclusion, balancing...is essential.”）。
逻辑信号词强化：整理转折（However）、因果（Therefore）、举例（For instance）等词表，
每篇作文至少使用 3 种。
4、实战模拟与纠错
限时写作训练：每周完成 2 篇真题作文（15 分钟/篇），严格遵循“审题-列提纲-写作-检查”
流程。
错题归因本：记录高频错误类型（如冠词缺失、介词误用），针对性强化练习。
5、文化与创新融入
跨文化对比写作：练习“中西节日差异”类题目，积累文化特色词汇（如“red envelope”
“Christmas carol”）。
个性化表达设计：在建议信或观点文中加入个人经历（如“I once struggled with...”），增强
真实性。
三、高分范文要素
1、结构范例
2、语言亮点
复合句：Although hobbies are enjoyable, overcommitting may lead to burnout.
谚语引用：As the saying goes, “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.”
数据支撑：A survey shows 70% of students feel stressed when neglecting leisure activities.
四、评分标准与避坑指南
1、评分细则
内容（8 分）：覆盖所有要点，逻辑连贯（缺 1 点扣 3 分）。
语言（8 分）：语法错误≤2 处，拼写错误≤3 处。
结构（4 分）：使用复合句、连接词得 1-2 分，无错误得满分。
2、常见失分点
字数不足：低于 60 词直接降档，建议控制在 80-100 词。
中式表达：如“Very like”→“Quite fond of”。
格式错误：应用文未写称呼和落款（如书信缺“Yours sincerely”）。
五、总结
2025 年上海中考书面表达需以“内容精准、逻辑清晰、语言规范”为核心，通过热点素材积
累、语法专项突破、结构模板训练实现提分。建议结合真题模拟与错题复盘，强化个性化表
达与文化元素，最终达到“稳中求新”的高分目标。
【基础试题】
A
DeepSeek 的问世使人工智能 AI（Artificial Intelligence）成为热门话题，科学技术的快
速发展给人们的学习和生活带来了巨大的变化，同时也引发了人们对于人工智能取代人类的
担忧。假如你是李华，请写一篇名为“AI in Our Life”的作文，谈谈那你对人工智能的看法。
内容包括：
1. AI 的优点：使生活更加方便、舒适；代替人类完成危险、繁重的工作……
2. AI 的缺点：学生过于依赖人工智能，失去独立思考能力；增加失业风险……
3. 你的看法：……
参考词汇：advantage 优点; disadvantage 缺点; convenient 方便; comfortable 舒适；
take the place of………代替; depend on 依赖; risk 风险
要求：1. 80 词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；2. 短文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信
息。
AI in Our Life
The invention of DeepSeek has made AI a hot topic among people in our society. ________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
B
下周五是学校“社会实践活动日”, 学校对学生参加活动的意愿进行了调查。请你根据
下面的调查结果写一篇调查报告, 并结合你的选择和选择的理由谈谈你对这次活动的看法。
注意:（1）短文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名。
（2）词数 80 个左右（开头结尾已给出, 不计入总词数）。
Our school did a survey among the students about our plan for social practice activities on
Social Practice Day. Here are the results. _____________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
I’m looking forward to the coming day.
C
近年来，随着科技发展，电子产品越来越多，学生的书写能力大大降低。假如你是校
英语书法协会的会长，为了让同学们重视书写 handwriting，请你用英语写一封倡议书，内
容包括：
1. 目前学生书写不如以前的原因；
2. 如何练就好书写：减少对电子产品的依赖；养成习惯……；
3. 好书写的重要性，发出号召。
要求：
1. 词数 90 左右；
2. 不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
3. 根据提示要点表述，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear students,
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
The Students Union
【提升试题】
A
回望初中三年，课堂似一方舞台，无数活动精彩呈现。或是一场好书推荐会，或是一
幕角色扮演，或是一次 DIY 创作实践……随着毕业季脚步渐近，学校公众平台的英语角栏
目发起“A Class Activity I’ll Never Forget”征文活动，诚邀同学们用英文记录那场亲身经历、
收获满溢的课堂活动。请你浏览推送内容，撰写一篇英语文章投稿。
Introduce what the activity was
Describe what you did during the activity
Explain why you will never forget it
注意事项：
1.短文内容须自拟，要求观点明确、语句通顺、意思连贯、符合题意；
2.词数在 100 个左右，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数；
3.短文中不得使用真实的个人及学校信息；
4，短文必须写在答题卡指定的位置上。
A Class Activity I’ll Never Forget
As I look back on my junior high school years, countless memories flood into my mind.
But one class activity impresses me
most_________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
B
雨果曾经说过：“善是精神世界的阳光”。某英文网站正在开展以“友善”为主题的征文
活动。假如你是李华，请用英语写一篇短文投稿，分享一段你帮助他人的经历以及你的收获。
提示：
（1）What experience can you share about helping others
（2）What have you learnt from the experience
要求：
（1）短文须包括提示中的要点，并适当发挥。
（2）短文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名。
（3）词数 80 个左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
The world is beautiful because of kindness. ______________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
C
学以致用，知行合一。你是如何将所学知识应用到生活中解决实际问题的？学校英语
社团正在组织题为“Learning for practice”的征文比赛，请根据以下提示，写一篇短文。
注意：1.文中不得出现你的真实姓名和学校名称；
2.表达清楚，语言通顺，书写规范；
3.词数不少于 100 词。文章的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Learning for practice
It’s important for us teenagers to put what we have learnt into practice in daily life._______
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
【拔高试题】
A
在你成长的过程中，有许多值得感恩的人，其中一定有某个人陪伴你、影响你、感动
你。学校“善雅之声”广播站的英语主题活动周正在以“Thank you,____________”为题进行征
文比赛。请根据以下流程图写一篇英语征文，谈谈你最想感谢的人（家人、老师或朋友......）。
要求：
1.征文须补全题目，内容根据流程图自拟，流程图中括号部分为非限定性内容，仅供参考；
2.80-120 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数；
3.文中不能出现真实姓名和所在班级的名称。
Thank you,____________
In my life, there are many people who have helped and influenced me a lot. The person I
want to say thanks most is _________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
B
假如你是李华，你的英国笔友 Alan 听说中国学校非常重视体育运动，发邮件询问你
校日常体育运动的开展情况和你最爱的运动以及你从运动中得到的好处。请你给他回一封邮
件，回答他提出的问题。
From Alan To Li Hua
Subject School sports
Dear Li Hua,
Hope this email finds you well. I heard that sports are very important in Chinese schools,
and I’m really curious about the sports activities in your school.
Could you tell me how many P. E. classes you have each week Also, what sports clubs
are there in your school Besides, I’m interested to know which sport you like best and what
benefits (益处) you’ve got from it. I believe it will be great to learn from your experiences.
Looking forward to your reply.
Alan
注意：
（1）可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
（2）文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称；
（3）写作词数为 80 左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Alan,
I’m so happy to tell you about the sports activities in our school!______________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
C
在当今数字化时代，人工智能（AI）已经渗透到我们生活的方方面面。为了使同学们
学会客观、理性地对待 AI，你班同学以“Should students use AI in their studies ”为题展开了辩
论。请你根据写作要求，用英语写一篇文章，表达你自己的观点。
写作要求：
1.结合上图提示，表明你的观点并说明理由，可适当发挥；
2.文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和学校名称；
3.词数 100 左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
Should students use AI in their studies
Does AI help students learn, or does it bring new challenges Different people hold
different opinions.________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
