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Writing Lesson 1 户外实践类
假设你是李华,5 月 20 日(周日)参加了学校组织的 “生态农场实践日” 活动。请以 “A Memorable School Trip” 为题,写一篇英文日记,内容可以包含但不仅限于:参与人员与集合细节、交通方式与农场环境描写、具体劳动实践与团队活动、个人感悟与环保主题关联。
一.审题要点
人称:第一人称(I/we)
时态:一般过去时(核心)+ 现在完成时(感悟升华)
新增得分点:环境描写(如农场生态细节)、劳动教育(如农业知识应用)、环保理念(如可持续发展)
字数控制:80-100 词(开头已给出,不计入总词数)
二、提纲优化与细节拓展
段落 内容 细节/亮点
第一段 (背景引入) 集合时间、地点、人员、交通 增加天气描写(如 “sunny with a gentle breeze”) 使用 “gather at the school gate promptly” 体现守时意识
第二段 (活动主体) 农场劳动 + 团队协作活动 劳动细节:“pick organic strawberries”“learn to plant seedlings” 团队活动:“hold a picnic with self-picked vegetables” 环境描写:“butterflies flying among the crops”
第三段 (感悟升华) 个人感受 + 环保 / 劳动教育主题 升华句:“realize the importance of sustainable farming” 关联中考热点:“cherish food and protect the environment”
三、遣词造句升级(附中考高频表达)
基础句型 升级句型(高分句型) 句式解析
We went to the farm by bike. We cycled to the Eco-Farm, enjoying the fresh air along the way. 用 “cycled” 替代 “went by bike”,更显生动;增加伴随状语提升句式丰富度
We helped farmers pick vegetables. Under the farmers’ guidance, we carefully picked organic tomatoes and learned about crop rotation. 加入 “under guidance” 体现学习过程;“crop rotation”(轮作)为农业相关高级词汇
We had a good time. Not only did we gain hands-on experience, but also deepened our understanding of eco-friendly agriculture. 使用 “not only...but also...” 倒装句;“hands-on experience”“eco-friendly” 为高分词汇
四、句型总结(新增中考高频句型)
1. 环境描写:
The farm was covered with green crops, where birds sang and bees buzzed.(定语从句)
A small stream ran through the fields, adding a touch of life to the peaceful scenery.(分词短语作状语)
劳动教育:
It was the first time I had tried planting seeds, which made me appreciate the hard work behind every meal.(固定句型:It was the first time + 过去完成时)
环保升华:
Only by protecting the land can we ensure a healthy environment for future generations.(倒装句:Only + 状语置于句首)
五、强化版填空训练-根据中文提示补全句子,注意使用升级表达:
1. The whole class ____________________ (7 点准时在校门口集合), with excitement shining in our eyes.
2. As we arrived at the Eco-Farm, ____________________ (蝴蝶在花丛中飞舞), and the smell of fresh soil greeted us.
3. We worked in groups to ____________________ (种植幼苗) and learned about ____________________ (可持续农业实践).
4. ____________________ (最难忘的部分是野餐), where we cooked dishes with the vegetables we had picked.
5. This trip has not only brought us joy but also ____________________ (增强了我们的环保意识).
答案示例:
gathered at the school gate promptly at 7:00 a.m.
butterflies were flying among the flowers
plant seedlings; sustainable farming practices
The most unforgettable part was the picnic
strengthened our awareness of environmental protection
六、参考范文(2025 中考标准范文)
A Memorable School Trip
May 20th, Sunday, Sunny
The whole class gathered at the school gate promptly at 7:00 a.m. We cycled to the Eco-Farm, enjoying the fresh air and gentle breeze along the way. The farm was a lively scene: green crops swayed in the wind, butterflies fluttered among colorful flowers, and a small stream babbled beside the fields.
Under the farmers’ guidance, we first picked organic strawberries and tomatoes. I was amazed to learn about crop rotation and how nature helps plants grow healthily. In the afternoon, we worked in teams to plant vegetable seedlings, laughing as we covered our hands in soil. Later, we held a picnic with the vegetables we had picked, enjoying the sweet taste of our labor.
As we left the farm at sunset, I realized how much we take food for granted. This trip taught me not only the joy of farming but also the importance of protecting the environment. I hope more students can experience such meaningful activities and learn to cherish every harvest.
七、中考冲刺小贴士
热点关联:近年中考常将 “劳动教育”“生态文明” 与郊游类话题结合,建议积累相关词汇(如 “organic farming”“carbon footprint”“farm-to-table”)。
结构模板:采用 “环境描写→具体活动→感悟升华” 三段式,结尾务必关联个人成长或社会热点。
卷面策略:重点句型(如倒装句、定语从句)用横线标注(模拟卷中可操作),帮助阅卷老师快速捕捉亮点。