专题01 命题研究及近五年新高考读后续写解读(学生版+教师版)-【读后续写命题方向预测与语料】2025专项读后续写

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专题01 命题研究及近五年新高考读后续写解读(原卷版)
第一部分 聚焦高考 明晰考向
第二部分 命题研究
第三部分 近五年高考英语读后续写真题精准练(新课标卷&浙江卷)
第一部分 聚焦高考 明晰考向
试卷名称 考试年份 主题语境 写作话题
新课标 Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷 2024年 人与社会 陌生人的信任与善意——遵守承诺支付打车费
2023年 人与自我 参加写作比赛——在老师的鼓励下作者培养写作兴趣
2022年 人与自我 身残志坚的男孩——激励患有脑疾的学生参加越野比赛
2021年 人与自我 母亲节的惊喜——双胞胎兄妹在母亲节为母亲做早餐
2020年 人与社会 爱心爆米花——帮助他们赚钱比给他们钱更好
浙江卷 2024年1月 人与自我 路痴的自我救赎——Eva运用一公里长跑分解任务的思维模式来熟悉教学楼
2023年1月 人与自然 关爱动物——作者与意外救下的蜂鸟
2022年6月 人与自我 志愿者活动——为无家可归的人分发食物
2022年1月 人与社会 团队合作——与队友合作完成课程研究
2021年6月 人与自我 个人成长——暑假打工,补贴家用
2021年1月 人与自我 万圣节趣事——头被卡在南瓜中
2020年1月 人与自然 小狗Poppy的陪伴
2020年6月 人与自然 与熊对抗脱险
第二部分 命题研究
高考英语读后续写考什么?
读后续写任务要求考生在一段350词以内的语言材料基础上,根据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写,将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的150词左右的短文。读后续写融合了对阅读和写作两种能力的考查。阅读是先导、是基础,写作是后续、是升华。因此,读和写是一个有机的整体,密不可分。在阅读、理解所给材料的基础上,我们要梳理文章脉络,构思续写情节,拓展细节描写,完成写作任务,并确保续写与上文浑然一体。读后续写除了要求学生掌握丰富的词汇和句式外,还注重学生的内容构思和情节衔接的能力。主要聚焦在以下四个方面:
1.三大考点交替考查,主题贴近校园,贴近生活,贴近学生,有一定的趣味性,所选材料一般以记叙文为主,文章浅显易懂,故事线索的逻辑性也较强。2023年新课标Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷读后续写延续了2022年的“人与自我”主题,依旧把场景安排在了校园,关系依旧是“师生关系”,所以这两年的作文从命题的思路上可谓“一脉相承”;2024年变化的是续写主人公不再是在校学生或青少年,而是“出国开会的社会人士”,解决问题的场景也突破了往年的日常生活和学校,走向了社会这个更大的舞台,需要解决的问题不再是学生时代的问题,而是社会上人际交往中遇到的问题。
2.所给出的段落开头与上下文联系紧密,对续写故事的发展有提示、衔接、引导和一定程度的限制作用;
3.读写并重,综合考查学生阅读、归纳、思辨和写作能力,也就是要读透所给材料,对文章线索做到精确理解,这样才能使续写内容不偏离主题;
4.续写的部分多是故事发展的高潮或结局,情节不唯一,可根据自己的理解自由发挥。
5.故事的结尾都传递正能量,矛盾得到圆满解决,人际关系更加融洽。主题渗透立德树人的观念,传递社会主义核心价值观和人类美好的品质,引导学生坚定理想信念、提升品德修养等。
高考英语读后续写评分标准
【评分标准】
一、评分原则
1.本题总分为25分,按五个档次进行评分。
2.评分时,应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑,具体为:
(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度;
(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性;
(3)语句间的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时,应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
4.评分时还应注意:
(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分;
(2)书写较差以至影响交际的,酌情扣分;
(3)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
二、各档次的给分范围和要求
档次 分数段 要求
第五档优秀 21~25 内容:创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高。 语言:使用了多样且恰当的词汇、句式和语法结构,表达流畅,语言错误少,且完全不影响理解。 篇章:自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间的衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯。 (几乎无错句)
第四档良好 16~20 内容:创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完整,与原文情境融洽度比较高。 语言:使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇、句式和语法结构,表达比较流畅,有个别错误,但不影响理解。 篇章:比较有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。 (偶见错句)
第三档一般 11~15 内容:创造了基本完整的故事内容,但有的情节不合理或逻辑性不强,与原文情境基本相关。 语言:使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有部分语言错误或不恰当之处,个别部分影响理解。 篇章:尚有语句衔接意识,全文结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯。 (半数对句)
第二档较差 6~10 内容:内容和逻辑上有重大问题,续写不够完整,与原文有一定程度的脱节。 语言:所用词汇有限,语法结构单调,错误较多且比较低级,影响理解。 篇章:未能有效地使用语句间的衔接手段,全文结构不够清晰,意义欠连贯。 (少有对句)
第一档差 1~5 内容:内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题,或有部分内容抄自原文,续写不完整,与原文情境基本脱节。 语言:所使用的词汇非常有限,语法结构单调,错误极多,严重影响理解。 篇章:几乎没有使用语句间的衔接手段,全文结构不清晰,意义不连贯。 (几乎无对句)
零分 0 未作答;所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判;续写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。
【写作流程】
1.梳理原文情节,把握文章主题
我们可以从标题、段落首句、记叙文的六要素等方面理解和把握故事的情节和主题。
2.分析人物关系,把握人物特点
对于人物特点,作者有时会通过文字直接说明,有时会通过细节描写进行刻画。在大多数故事中,人物之间的关系可以通过故事中某些暗含的信息挖掘出来。
3.挖掘文本主线,厘清故事脉络
我们可以将文中发生的事情,按照时间顺序串联起来,这样就可以得到故事梗概。如果我们在阅读的过程中能够注意挖掘人物的情感线索,找出人物情感和发生事件的逻辑关系,那么故事的脉络自然也就清晰了。
4.读懂续写首句,判定故事走向
续写首句为我们提供了续写的基本依据。续写第一段的内容往往是事件的高潮,而续写第二段是整个故事的结尾部分。
5.预设核心冲突,搭建故事框架
故事的发展是靠矛盾冲突(或核心问题)推进的,我们要从故事中挖掘核心冲突,分析这个冲突是如何产生的。
6.串联文章线索,设计精彩结尾
解决了故事的核心冲突后,需要给故事一个结尾,常见的结尾方式有自然式、点题式、首尾呼应式、主题升华式和以景结情式。
7.遣词句秀文采,确保风格一致
明确了续写内容后,我们要选择恰当的词句将其表达出来。好的文章离不开优美的词句,利用高级的句式结构、不同的修辞手法以及恰当的环境描写,同时注意语言特点和原文的一致性,再在词句逻辑跳跃之处加上衔接,一篇优美的文章便应运而生了。
[名师提醒]
1.所续写部分不能脱离各自段落的首句开头语。
这些开头语与传统写作中的开头语类似,在某种程度上引导你的思路向哪方面发展。
2.读后续写要求读写并重
与阅读理解题一样,读后续写同样需要对本篇文章精确理解,这样所续写部分才不至于偏离主题。
3.关注续写内容有无把握主题
(1)事件的走向及最终结局有无偏离作者的写作意图或主题意蕴、思想情感或人生哲理?
(2)事件的发展有无凸显主题,体现正确的价值导向,展现对真、善、美的思考与追求?
4.关注续写内容有无符合逻辑
(1)续写第一段有无与前文、后文形成逻辑联结?与最后一段有无自然呼应?
(2)续写第二段作为文本结尾有无与开头形成呼应?有无体现主题思想与价值追求?
第三部分 近五年高考英语读后续写真题精准练
新课标卷
1.(2024年新课标I卷&II卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.
That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.
Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. "We made it," he said.
Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: "Out of order. Sorry."
注意:
(1)续写词数应为150个左右;
(2)请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
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Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
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2.(2023年新高课标I卷&II卷)
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150个左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
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3.(2022年新课标I卷&II卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration(懊恼). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
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I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
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4.【2021新课标I&II卷】
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右。
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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5.【2020新课标卷】
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well, we can make popcorn(爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右:
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
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浙江卷
1.(2024年浙江卷1月)
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym.
Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist.
In her first PE class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car!
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. ” It’s just the beginning, “she thought.” I’ll come in last for sure. “
Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word” mile. “Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2, 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
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Paragraph 2:
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
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2.(2023年浙江卷1月)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs (蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away.
Hovering (悬停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say goodbye.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
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I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
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3.(2022年浙江卷1月)
阅读下面短文, 根据所给情节进行续写, 使之构成一个完整的故事
When Dr. Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the fiercely competitive, extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate (命运)would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren't there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn't mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn't look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn't say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis (假说), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I was outmatched. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn't want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn't sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 结尾部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后, 请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1. We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
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Para 2. One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
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4.(2022年浙江卷6月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
I needed to do something in my community (社区) in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do.
I thought that we would just be passing out dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.
As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act How would they treat me Would they hate me for having more than they did While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous. I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned (分配) to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.
I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had tally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking. Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile.
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Paragraph 2:
I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way.
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5.(2021年浙江卷1月)
Pumpkin (南瓜) carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage-I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said,and with Jason helping to support its weight,I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I can’t get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1
It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer.
Paragraph 2
The video was posted the Monday before Halloween.
6.【2020年浙江卷1月】
“I'm going to miss you so much, Poppy, "said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions(情绪)get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile.” I guess this is it, “he said.” I'll see you back home in a month, okay?"His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy's mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn't seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn't.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn't her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. "What should we do to cheer Poppy up?"asked Dad. “We've tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy, “smiled Mom.” Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let's get a little dog for Poppy."
It didn't take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging(摆动)ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1. Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.
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Para 2. A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________专题01 命题研究及近五年新高考读后续写解读(解析版)
第一部分 聚焦高考 明晰考向
第二部分 命题研究
第三部分 近五年高考英语读后续写真题精准练(新课标卷&浙江卷)
第一部分 聚焦高考 明晰考向
试卷名称 考试年份 主题语境 写作话题
新课标 Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷 2024年 人与社会 陌生人的信任与善意——遵守承诺支付打车费
2023年 人与自我 参加写作比赛——在老师的鼓励下作者培养写作兴趣
2022年 人与自我 身残志坚的男孩——激励患有脑疾的学生参加越野比赛
2021年 人与自我 母亲节的惊喜——双胞胎兄妹在母亲节为母亲做早餐
2020年 人与社会 爱心爆米花——帮助他们赚钱比给他们钱更好
浙江卷 2024年1月 人与自我 路痴的自我救赎——Eva运用一公里长跑分解任务的思维模式来熟悉教学楼
2023年1月 人与自然 关爱动物——作者与意外救下的蜂鸟
2022年6月 人与自我 志愿者活动——为无家可归的人分发食物
2022年1月 人与社会 团队合作——与队友合作完成课程研究
2021年6月 人与自我 个人成长——暑假打工,补贴家用
2021年1月 人与自我 万圣节趣事——头被卡在南瓜中
2020年1月 人与自然 小狗Poppy的陪伴
2020年6月 人与自然 与熊对抗脱险
第二部分 命题研究
高考英语读后续写考什么?
读后续写任务要求考生在一段350词以内的语言材料基础上,根据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写,将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的150词左右的短文。读后续写融合了对阅读和写作两种能力的考查。阅读是先导、是基础,写作是后续、是升华。因此,读和写是一个有机的整体,密不可分。在阅读、理解所给材料的基础上,我们要梳理文章脉络,构思续写情节,拓展细节描写,完成写作任务,并确保续写与上文浑然一体。读后续写除了要求学生掌握丰富的词汇和句式外,还注重学生的内容构思和情节衔接的能力。主要聚焦在以下四个方面:
1.三大考点交替考查,主题贴近校园,贴近生活,贴近学生,有一定的趣味性,所选材料一般以记叙文为主,文章浅显易懂,故事线索的逻辑性也较强。2023年新课标Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷读后续写延续了2022年的“人与自我”主题,依旧把场景安排在了校园,关系依旧是“师生关系”,所以这两年的作文从命题的思路上可谓“一脉相承”;2024年变化的是续写主人公不再是在校学生或青少年,而是“出国开会的社会人士”,解决问题的场景也突破了往年的日常生活和学校,走向了社会这个更大的舞台,需要解决的问题不再是学生时代的问题,而是社会上人际交往中遇到的问题。
2.所给出的段落开头与上下文联系紧密,对续写故事的发展有提示、衔接、引导和一定程度的限制作用;
3.读写并重,综合考查学生阅读、归纳、思辨和写作能力,也就是要读透所给材料,对文章线索做到精确理解,这样才能使续写内容不偏离主题;
4.续写的部分多是故事发展的高潮或结局,情节不唯一,可根据自己的理解自由发挥。
5.故事的结尾都传递正能量,矛盾得到圆满解决,人际关系更加融洽。主题渗透立德树人的观念,传递社会主义核心价值观和人类美好的品质,引导学生坚定理想信念、提升品德修养等。
高考英语读后续写评分标准
【评分标准】
一、评分原则
1.本题总分为25分,按五个档次进行评分。
2.评分时,应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑,具体为:
(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度;
(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性;
(3)语句间的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时,应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
4.评分时还应注意:
(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分;
(2)书写较差以至影响交际的,酌情扣分;
(3)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
二、各档次的给分范围和要求
档次 分数段 要求
第五档优秀 21~25 内容:创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高。 语言:使用了多样且恰当的词汇、句式和语法结构,表达流畅,语言错误少,且完全不影响理解。 篇章:自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间的衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯。 (几乎无错句)
第四档良好 16~20 内容:创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完整,与原文情境融洽度比较高。 语言:使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇、句式和语法结构,表达比较流畅,有个别错误,但不影响理解。 篇章:比较有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。 (偶见错句)
第三档一般 11~15 内容:创造了基本完整的故事内容,但有的情节不合理或逻辑性不强,与原文情境基本相关。 语言:使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有部分语言错误或不恰当之处,个别部分影响理解。 篇章:尚有语句衔接意识,全文结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯。 (半数对句)
第二档较差 6~10 内容:内容和逻辑上有重大问题,续写不够完整,与原文有一定程度的脱节。 语言:所用词汇有限,语法结构单调,错误较多且比较低级,影响理解。 篇章:未能有效地使用语句间的衔接手段,全文结构不够清晰,意义欠连贯。 (少有对句)
第一档差 1~5 内容:内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题,或有部分内容抄自原文,续写不完整,与原文情境基本脱节。 语言:所使用的词汇非常有限,语法结构单调,错误极多,严重影响理解。 篇章:几乎没有使用语句间的衔接手段,全文结构不清晰,意义不连贯。 (几乎无对句)
零分 0 未作答;所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判;续写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。
【写作流程】
1.梳理原文情节,把握文章主题
我们可以从标题、段落首句、记叙文的六要素等方面理解和把握故事的情节和主题。
2.分析人物关系,把握人物特点
对于人物特点,作者有时会通过文字直接说明,有时会通过细节描写进行刻画。在大多数故事中,人物之间的关系可以通过故事中某些暗含的信息挖掘出来。
3.挖掘文本主线,厘清故事脉络
我们可以将文中发生的事情,按照时间顺序串联起来,这样就可以得到故事梗概。如果我们在阅读的过程中能够注意挖掘人物的情感线索,找出人物情感和发生事件的逻辑关系,那么故事的脉络自然也就清晰了。
4.读懂续写首句,判定故事走向
续写首句为我们提供了续写的基本依据。续写第一段的内容往往是事件的高潮,而续写第二段是整个故事的结尾部分。
5.预设核心冲突,搭建故事框架
故事的发展是靠矛盾冲突(或核心问题)推进的,我们要从故事中挖掘核心冲突,分析这个冲突是如何产生的。
6.串联文章线索,设计精彩结尾
解决了故事的核心冲突后,需要给故事一个结尾,常见的结尾方式有自然式、点题式、首尾呼应式、主题升华式和以景结情式。
7.遣词句秀文采,确保风格一致
明确了续写内容后,我们要选择恰当的词句将其表达出来。好的文章离不开优美的词句,利用高级的句式结构、不同的修辞手法以及恰当的环境描写,同时注意语言特点和原文的一致性,再在词句逻辑跳跃之处加上衔接,一篇优美的文章便应运而生了。
[名师提醒]
1.所续写部分不能脱离各自段落的首句开头语。
这些开头语与传统写作中的开头语类似,在某种程度上引导你的思路向哪方面发展。
2.读后续写要求读写并重
与阅读理解题一样,读后续写同样需要对本篇文章精确理解,这样所续写部分才不至于偏离主题。
3.关注续写内容有无把握主题
(1)事件的走向及最终结局有无偏离作者的写作意图或主题意蕴、思想情感或人生哲理?
(2)事件的发展有无凸显主题,体现正确的价值导向,展现对真、善、美的思考与追求?
4.关注续写内容有无符合逻辑
(1)续写第一段有无与前文、后文形成逻辑联结?与最后一段有无自然呼应?
(2)续写第二段作为文本结尾有无与开头形成呼应?有无体现主题思想与价值追求?
第三部分 近五年高考英语读后续写真题精准练
新课标卷
1.(2024年新课标I卷&II卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.
That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.
Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. "We made it," he said.
Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: "Out of order. Sorry."
注意:
(1)续写词数应为150个左右;
(2)请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
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Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
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【答案】
Para 1
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. He looked at me in disbelief, asking me what to do. Flashing him another apologetic smile, I begged him for a delayed payment. “If I miss this last bus to Prague, I’ll be late for the conference which is so important that I can’t afford to miss it!” I explained. “May I have your phone number I will call you and return the money I owe you. I promise I will keep my word or you keep my watch!” I added, handing him my watch as well as my business card. Gunter accepted my business card but rejected my watch. He wrote down his phone number and gave it to me. “Just keep your promise, Sir.” A feeling of gratitude washed over me as I heard his words. Giving him a firm handshake, I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the bus, and jumped onto it just before its departure.
Para 2
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before. Beaming a warm smile at him, I gave him a big hug the moment I saw him. We chatted happily on the way to the airport. I told him that thanks to his generosity and timely help, everything had gone smoothly. When he stopped his taxi outside the airport, I paid him for the “double car ride”, back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down. I also gave him an attractive souvenir I had bought at Prague, which he accepted with delight. We became good friends and kept in touch with each other regularly. I felt blessed to have such a warm-hearted friend like Gunter.
【解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者在一次因风暴延误的旅途中,匆忙搭乘出租车前往车站赶最后一班去布拉格的公共汽车。司机冈特不熟悉车站位置,通过电话求助后顺利抵达。到达时作者却发现自己没带现金,尝试用葡萄牙银行卡支付没有成功,而车站的取款机也故障了。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“我跑回到冈特那里,告诉他这个坏消息。”可知,第一段可描写作者留下冈特的电话,承诺会还钱给对方,冈特同意,最终作者及时登上了公共汽车。
②由第二段首句内容“四天后,当我回到维也纳时,我按照承诺给冈特打了电话。”可知,第二段可描写作者付费给冈特,并向对方表示感激,两人成为了好朋友。
2.续写线索:作者给出解决办法——承诺还钱——冈特同意——作者登上公共汽车——履行承诺还钱——两人成为朋友
3.词汇激活
行为类
①拒绝:reject/refuse
②给某人拥抱:give sb. a hug/embrace sb.
③记下,写下:write down/set down
情绪类
①难以置信地:in disbelief/incredibly/unbelievably
②开心地:happily/joyfully
【点睛】【高分句型1】He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before.(运用了where引导的限制性定语从句)
【高分句型2】When he stopped his taxi outside the airport, I paid him for the “double car ride”, back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down.(运用了when引导的时间状语从句,that引导的限制性定语从句)
2.(2023年新课标I卷&II卷)
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150个左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
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【答案】
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. I was so happy to hear the news that I immediately shared it with my teacher. “I knew you’d win! I am proud of you. You made it!” he said excitedly. Then came the big day. When I was invited to the stage to receive the award, I expressed my thanks to my teacher. I said, “It’s you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher. Without your recognition and guidance, I couldn’t have written this article. Again thank you very much!”
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. My teacher was waiting for me. Holding my hands, he said “Congratulations! You are a good writer, so keep writing.” “You know I didn’t like writing before, but now I am crazy about it! I will try my best to create good works.” I said seriously. Since then, I have written many good works and now I am a famous writer. I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.
【解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者上中学的时候,社会学老师邀请作者参加一个写作比赛。作者不喜欢写作,于是想都没想就拒绝了。但是在老师的鼓励下,作者同意试一试。作者在写作过程中虽然很累,但是没有放弃,坚持下来了。在作者最终完成写作时,作者感到写作让他很快乐,他已经不在乎输赢了。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后,当我几乎忘记比赛的时候,传来了消息。”和第二段首句“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室。”可知,第一段可描写作者获得比赛一等奖,在颁奖典礼上作者表达了对社会老师的感激。
②由第二段首句内容“颁奖后我去了老师的办公室。”可知,第二段可描写老师鼓励作者继续写作,自此作者坚持写作取得了成功,作者将这一切归功于自己的老师。
2.续写线索:比赛消息传来——作者获奖——高兴——颁奖典礼感谢老师——颁奖后来到老师办公室——老师告诉作者坚持写作——作者表达了对写作的喜爱——作者写作取得了成功——感激老师
3.词汇激活
行为类
①告知:inform/tell
②成功做到:make it/succeed
③表达:express/convey
情绪类
①高兴的:happy/glad
②激动地:excitedly/with excitement
【点睛】[高分句型1] I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. (运用了由连接词that引导的宾语从句)
[高分句型2] It’s you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher.(运用了强调句)
[高分句型3] I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.(运用了who引导的限制性定语从句
3.(2022年新课标I卷&II卷)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration(懊恼). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
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I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
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【答案】
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. I said gently and quietly, “No one can change your mind, except yourself. If you desire to challenge yourself, there is nothing to do with others’ thoughts.” He sat still with a deep breath. “You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here”, I added with a sincere tone. Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run. His coach heard what David said
and gave me a look—the kind that was more determined than anyone else’s.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The race started. It seemed that the runway was extremely long for young children, not to mention a child with a heart disease. David insisted on running as if he had forgotten all his weaknesses, though he was tripped over within the a few kilometers. It didn’t take long before he picked himself up again and continued his mission. Classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him. “Come on! You can make it! We are proud of you!” they shouted enthusiastically. To everyone’s joy, he reached the final line and ranked the 20th. It was no more important whether he won the first place or not. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.
【解析】
【导语】本文以赛跑为线索展开。作者是一名特殊教育教师,在大型越野赛跑那天,发现患有大脑疾病的大卫独自站在一旁。作者问其原因,他说准备放弃比赛。从教练口中得知,因为担心同学们会嘲笑大卫,所以教练想让大卫自己去决定是否参加赛跑。作者让大卫追寻自己的内心,不理会别人的看法,大卫最终参赛,尽管遇到困难,他战胜了自己,这已经无关名次,而是他的勇敢和坚定让这一切成为可能。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“我们挨着坐着,但大卫不愿看我一眼。”和第二段首句内容”我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上。”可知,第一段可描写作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛,大卫经过强烈的心理斗争,最终决定参加比赛。
②由第二段首句内容“我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上。”可知,第二段可描写大卫开始参赛,虽然中途遇到困难,仍然坚持到最后,完成比赛。
2续写线索:鼓励大卫——心理变化——决定参赛——克服困难——加油助威——完成比赛
3.词汇激活:
行动类:
①深呼吸:with a deep breath/breathe deeply
②坚持做:insisted on doing/be stick to doing
情绪类:
①热情:enthusiastically /with great passion
②骄傲:be proud of/take pride in
【点睛】[高分句型1]. You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here. (由which引导的非限制性定语从句和 why引导的限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]. Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run. (现在分词作状语和省略that的宾语从句)
[高分句型3]. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally. (含有It was…that结构的强调句型)
4.【2021新课标I&II卷】
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右。
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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【答案】
Paragraph 1:
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Knowing what they were preparing for, he was greatly surprised. So immediately, he offered to get involved in the kids’ job. Firstly, he put the pot of porridge on a gentle heat, asking Jeff to watch out for it going for fifteen minutes. And then, he asked Jenna to break another two eggs and mix them with milk. With all preparations done, they started to fry bread together. In a flash, sweet smell filled the air in the kitchen. To their delight, the breakfast was a success in the end.
Paragraph 1:
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. Eyes opened, the woman heard a harmonious “Happy Mother’s Day” from her twin kids with hot, sweet breakfast before her. Behind the children stood their father. To shed light on the game of the gift, he told the mother the whole story. After learning about what happened, she rose quickly to gaze at the boy’s hand with moved tears rolling down her cheeks. “Thank you, my honey!” said the mother.
本文是一篇记叙文。讲述的是Jenna和Jeff这对双胞胎兄妹为了在母亲节早上给母亲惊喜而精心策划并制作早餐的故事;他们克服困难,永不放弃,折射的是他们对母亲的拳拳之爱。
【导语】本文以母亲节为线索展开,讲述了双胞胎Jenna和Jeff为了献给母亲一份美味的早餐,自己动手,做起饭餐来,但是不幸的是,他们连连失败的故事。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时,他们的父亲出现了。”可知,第一段可描写他们的父亲指导帮助他们准备早餐。
②由第二段首句内容“这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上,叫醒了他们的母亲。”可知,第二段可描写母亲收到孩子们的礼物早餐,非常感动。
2.续写线索:指导——积极——献礼——感动
3.词汇激活
行为类
①帮助:help/assist
②完成:finish/complete
③拥抱:hug/embrace
情绪类
①高兴:happy/delighted
②感动:moved/touched
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. Father helped them adjust the fire, which was the key to success. (which引导的非限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]. It was not only the breakfast, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. (固定短语not only…but (also)和强调句型)
5.【2020新课标卷】
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well, we can make popcorn(爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右:
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
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【答案】
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. So, they went to the local supermarket together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home, they made a lot of popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn, they went to Bernard’s home. They told Bernard how to sell the popcorn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this family.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. He took the popcorn around to the houses and sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then, he wanted to be self-dependent. Therefore, he asked Mrs. Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that, not only did he sell popcorn, but he also added cream and salt to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He did not forget the help of Meredith’s family, and he also did what he could to help those in need.
【分析】本文是根据短文进行续写,使之成为一个完整的故事。
【详解】1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里,他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床,女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱,家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情,生活十分困难。后来,Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意--制作爆米花,让Bernard去卖爆米花。
2.根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的。
3.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上,并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致,故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。
4.根据第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.(当Meredith太太听到John的主意时,她也认为这是个好主意)可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思;根据第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.(一切准备就绪后,Bernard开始了他的新生意)可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。
5.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作,考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化,适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇,以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰,要点全面,表达流畅,切合题干要求,句子结构准确,适当补充信息,使篇章结构连贯。
浙江卷
1.(2024年浙江卷1月)
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym.
Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist.
In her first PE class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car!
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. ” It’s just the beginning, “she thought.” I’ll come in last for sure. “
Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word” mile. “Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2, 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
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Paragraph 2:
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
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【答案】
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. In the vast expanse of her school, a girl with poor directional skills struggled to navigate and often got lost. One day, during gym class, she observed a unique way to find her way - following the shadows of trees. As the sun cast its rays, the girl noticed how the shadows created patterns on the ground, guiding her path. She took a leap of faith and followed the shadows, surprising herself with each turn and stretch. Her efforts were noticed by the teacher, who praised her innovative thinking.
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. She used the shadows to navigate the school hallways, find her classes, and even locate the school's various facilities. This newfound skill not only helped the girl navigate her school but also instilled in her a sense of confidence and adventure. She learned excitedly that with a little creativity and observation, any challenge could be overcome. And with each step she took, she left behind a legacy of inspiration for those who followed in her footsteps, knowing that even without a clear sense of direction, there's always a way to find one's way.
【解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了高中生Eva因为方向感不强,经常在学校里迷路,在一次体育课上教练要求他们沿着校园跑步的时候Eva发现跟着树的影子能找到方向,她通过这个方法重新认识到了校园。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“当Pitt教练在终点线对她说:“干得好!”,伊娃很惊讶。”可知,第一段可描写Eva通过自己追随影子的方法找到方向,并且受到了教练的称赞。
②由第二段首句内容“Eva决定用同样的手段来记住学校大楼。”可知,第二段可描写Eva通过记住影子的方法来记住学校大楼并且通过这件事之后的感悟。
2.续写线索:方向感太差记不住学校建筑的位置——体育课上绕着学校跑却找不到方向——害怕最后一名心里非常紧张——跟随影子找到方向——受到教练的赞赏——获得感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①努力做某事:struggle to do sth./strive to do sth.
②导航:navigate/guide
③了解:learn/know/acknowledge
情绪类
①使某人惊讶:surprise sb./astonish sb.
②激动地:excitedly/in excitement
【点睛】[高分句型1]Her efforts were noticed by the teacher, who praised her innovative thinking.(who引导的非限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]She learned that with a little creativity and observation, any challenge could be overcome. (that引导的宾语从句)
2.(2023年浙江卷1月)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs (蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away.
Hovering (悬停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say goodbye.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
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I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
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【答案】
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. As my car neared it my thoughts drifted back to the moment when I rescued the hummingbird from the spider’s web. I rushed back to the deserted house. It was a great comfort that the original hole in the window was nowhere to be found. Leaving the house, I couldn’t help wondering how it was getting on now. Had it managed to find its way back home, or was it still out there somewhere struggling to survive
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. A flash of movement caught my attention. I turned around to see the same hummingbird hovering in the air. It seemed that the bird was waiting for me, its beady eyes locked on mine as if trying to convey some deep, unspoken gratitude. I felt a surge of relief and awe at the sight of this sound and grateful creature, and I knew that I would always cherish the memories we shared as I climbed into my car and drove away.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者被邀请去一个农场野餐,发现一个房子里有只蜂鸟被蜘蛛网困住了,作者把蜂鸟救了,把蜂鸟带出去的时候它迟迟不肯走,当作者走到一条布满黑莓的小路时,它开始动了,但是却不肯飞走,徘徊着,后来终于飞走了,当作者准备离开时,蜂鸟又飞到作者面前,好像是在和作者告别。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后,我又去了农场。”可知,第一段可描写作者回到农场时所看到的和所想到的。
②由第二段首句内容“我正要离开,这时蜂鸟出现了。”可知,第二段可描写蜂鸟是如何对作者的以及作者的感想。
2.续写线索:想起救蜂鸟的时候——回到那个房子——想到那只蜂鸟——看见蜂鸟——蜂鸟的表现——作者的感想
3.词汇激活
行为类
①思绪回到……:thoughts drift back to/thoughts return to
②匆匆回到:rush back to/hurry back to
③盯着:eyes locked on/eyes staring at
情绪类
①宽慰:feel a surge of relief/feel relieved
②感激:grateful/thankful
【点睛】[高分句型1] As my car neared it my thoughts drifted back to the moment when I rescued the hummingbird from the spider’s web. (由as引导的时间状语从句和when引导的限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2] It was a great comfort that the original hole in the window was nowhere to be found. (由that引导的主语从句)
3.(2022年浙江卷1月)
阅读下面短文, 根据所给情节进行续写, 使之构成一个完整的故事
When Dr. Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the fiercely competitive, extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate (命运)would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren't there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn't mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn't look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn't say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis (假说), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I was outmatched. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn't want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn't sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 结尾部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后, 请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1. We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
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Para 2. One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
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【答案】
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. Though I wanted to share my ideas with him fully, I failed to do so for fear that I would hold him back. I just kept nodding when he asked me whether it is ok to do this way or that way. I thought it was impossible to persuade him into accepting my views, so I didn’t want to waste our time to discuss. I started to wait to leave immediately we arrived at the place, and so did he. I just hoped that the presentation day could come earlier.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. I felt so sorry to hear that and I thought I should visit him in any case. He was a little surprised to see me when I stepped into his ward with some flowers and fruits. I offered to do the rest work of our project and he invited me to share my ideas to perfect it. We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on time. Our hard work paid off and Dr. Henderson’s was very satisfied with our wonderful findings. From this project, we also learned the significance of teammates. Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of persons can travel farther.
【分析】本文以事件为线索展开,讲述了作者在一次课上被分配了一个不想要的队友共同完成作业共享分数,他们从最开始的无法配合到最后圆满完成任务的温暖故事。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由续写段落第一段首句内容“我们开始定期见面起草计划。”可知,第一段可描写见面起草过程中所发生的事情以及过程中的心理活动。
②由续写段落第二段首句内容“有一天,我听说他因为严重的疾病住院了”可知,第二段可描写我的搭档住院以后我们是如何应对并最终圆满完成作业的。
2.续写线索:见面起草——我害怕说错,基本保持沉默,只是顺从他的想法——搭档生病住院——探望取得互信——合作圆满完成——懂得了团队合作的意义
3.词汇激活
行为类
①与…分享:share sth with sb / exchange sth with sb
②没能做:fail to do/be unable to do /not make it
③到达:arrived at /get to /reach/
④走进:step into/enter/come into
情绪类
①惊讶的:surprised/amazed/shocked
②满意的:satisfied /content/ pleased
【点睛】[高分句型1]. I started to wait to leave immediately we arrived at the place, and so did he.(使用了“so+(助)动词+主语”表示“……也一样”的倒装句型)
[高分句型2]. Though I wanted to share my ideas with him fully, I failed to do so for fear that I would hold him back.(使用了though 引导的让步状语从句)
4.(2022年浙江卷6月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
I needed to do something in my community (社区) in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do.
I thought that we would just be passing out dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.
As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act How would they treat me Would they hate me for having more than they did While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous. I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned (分配) to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.
I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had tally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking. Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile.
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Paragraph 2:
I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way.
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【答案】
As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. I wanted to make them know that I was really anxious to help them. To my relief, they smiled politely back at me when they saw my smile, and I could see their exhaustion in their eyes. I wanted to know what they were going through and I was desperate to know what I could do for them. They nodded gratefully as I pushed my spoon into the pot and took a large spoonful and poured it into their bowls.
I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. This experience made me realize that there are so many people in this world who need our help. It also made me realize that our small act of kindness can make them feel warm and make a great difference to them. I will never forget the way they looked at me when they were given food. I am anxious to urge the world to do everything possible to help those in need.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者为了完成高中毕业所需的社区服务时间,需要在所在的社区做点什么,作者去了施粥所,作者发现准备过程中要做的事情很多,作者看到无家可归的人靠近时心里有点害怕,但是却忙得没有时间去担心这些,作者看到了年龄和国籍各不相同的人,这让作者感到很难过。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“当他们朝我走来的时候,我露出了最灿烂、最幸福的笑容。”可知,第一段可描写作者是怎么为无家可归的人施粥。
②由第二段首句内容“我很高兴我用这种方式赢得了我的服务时间。”可知,第二段可描写作者对这次社区服务的感悟。
2.续写线索:无家可归的人笑——作者舀粥——无家可归的人感激——作者感悟——作者发出呼吁
3.词汇激活
行为类
①倒:pour/decant
②意识到:realize that/be aware that
③主张:urge sb. to do/advocate sb. to do
情绪类
①感谢:gratefully/thankfully
②急切的:anxious/eager
【点睛】[高分句型1] This experience made me realize that there are so many people in this world who need our help. (由that引导的宾语从句和who引导的定语从句)
[高分句型2] I will never forget the way they looked at me when they were given food. (由关系代词that引导的定语从句,省略了that和when引导的时间状语从句)
5.(2021年浙江卷1月)
Pumpkin (南瓜) carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage-I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said,and with Jason helping to support its weight,I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I can’t get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1
It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer.
Paragraph 2
The video was posted the Monday before Halloween.
【答案】Paragraph 1
It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Dad was summoned – less, it seemed, in expectation of practical help than to make sure he didn’t miss out on the spectacle. I heard him propose calling the fire department. “Stay tuned,” said Mom; she’d mentioned she was going to upload the video to Facebook, but it was only then I realized she’d been filming the whole time. The video cuts before my rescue —Dad got me to push my head farther into the pumpkin so Mom could reach in and undo the rubber band round my ponytail. I emerged with squash-conditioned hair, a sore chin and my nose plugged with pulp.
Paragraph 2
The video was posted the Monday before Halloween. By the end of that day, it had over 1,000 views. People asked Mom to put it on YouTube, and by Wednesday morning we were getting 5:00 am calls from TV breakfast shows and then the international media – the video started racking up hundreds of thousands of views. When I went on a youth camp, I was recognized by children I’d never met. The pumpkin also became a minor celebrity. Passersby and trick-or-treaters would knock and ask, “Which is Rachel’s pumpkin ” before taking selfies with it.
【分析】
本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者家有在万圣节雕刻南瓜的传统,今年也不例外,家里所有人都在厨房的餐桌上辛勤地工作着,而作者的妈妈则在拍摄一年一度的活动。结果作者将头伸进了南瓜里,被卡住了,无论如何也无法挣脱出来,妈妈却趁机拍下了这一幕,后来作者得救,视频也被上传到网上走红,这段视频开始获得数十万的点击量。
【详解】
1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“虽然时间只过去了五、六分钟,但还是感觉要长得多。”可知,第一段可描写作者是如何在爸爸的帮助下得救的。
②由第二段首句内容“这段视频是在万圣节前的周一发布的。”可知,第二段可描写作者头被卡在南瓜里这段视频在网上的走红情况,以及视频走红对作者家和作者的影响。
2.续写线索:爸爸被喊来帮忙——妈妈拍下了全过程——作者得救——视频被上传——视频走红——视频对作者家和作者的影响
3.词汇激活
行为类
确保:make sure / guarantee
打算做某事:be going to do sth./ intend to do sth.
出来:emerge / come out
情绪类
实际:practical / useful
出名:become a minor celebrity / be famous
6.【2020年浙江卷1月】
“I'm going to miss you so much, Poppy, "said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions(情绪)get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile.” I guess this is it, “he said.” I'll see you back home in a month, okay?"His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy's mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn't seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn't.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn't her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. "What should we do to cheer Poppy up?"asked Dad. “We've tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy, “smiled Mom.” Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let's get a little dog for Poppy."
It didn't take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging(摆动)ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1. Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.
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Para 2. A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university.
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【答案】Para 1.
Dad put the box on the ground and opened the top. A shiny little wet nose popped up. Then two fluffy paws. Next the box tipped over sideways, and out tumbled a mass of wiggly golden silliness. Poppy was amazed. She wagged furiously. She barked with joy. She smiled, her tongue lolling out as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was not shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping around the older dog. “That didn’t take long,” remarked Mom, as both dogs went roaring around the house in an impromptu game of chase. Dad laughed.
Para 2.
A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. He had missed Poppy and was looking forward to seeing her. When he bent down to give her a big hug, he fell over in surprise as a small golden cloud came racing up to lick his face too. “Oh my gosh, who is this ” he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the look of shock on his face. “That’s Pee-wee,” said Dad. “I can’t believe you got yourselves a puppy!” “We didn’t,” replied Mom. “This puppy is for Poppy!”
【解析】
【分析】这是一篇读后续写作文。
【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知,文章讲述了男孩要去上大学,和自己的狗Poppy道别。而没有了男孩在家里,Poppy也非常想念男孩,于是男孩父母决定给Poppy买一条小狗作伴。
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:爸爸打开盒子,一条可爱的小狗出现了。所以后文应该是描写买来的小狗的样子以及这两只狗的相处情况;第二段开头是:几个星期后,男孩从大学回到家里。本段应该写男孩回到家以后看到两条狗的反应,以及父母告诉男孩这条狗是买给Poppy的。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度,我们要熟悉所给划线词语,恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右;续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。