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Writing Lesson 12 观点建议类
教育部印发《关于加强中小学生手机管理工作的通知》后,某校就是否允许学生带手机进校园展开讨论。请以 “Mobile Phones in School: A Balanced View”为题,写一篇短文,内容需包含:
赞成观点(紧急联系、学习工具属性)
反对观点(分心干扰、健康隐患)
政策呼应(教育部 "有限带入" 原则)
优化建议(课间集中管理、家长协同监督)
一.审题要点
人称:第三人称(观点陈述)+ 第一人称(建议表达)
时态:一般现在时(核心)+ 情态动词(建议)
结构:采用 "正反论证→政策衔接→解决方案" 三段式,体现思辨性
二、提纲优化与细节拓展
段落 内容 细节/亮点词汇积累
第一段 (赞成与反对) 双向观点对比 + 数据支撑 赞成:45% of students use phones for emergency contacts(45%的学生使用手机进行紧急联络) 反对:60% of teachers report phone-related distractions in class (60%的教师表示,他们在课堂上因为手机而分心)
第二段 (政策与现状) 教育部政策解读 + 校园案例 According to the Ministry’s guidelines, schools should implement 'limited phone access'(根据教育部的指导方针,学校应该实施“限制电话接入”。) Our school now has a 'No Phone in Class' rule with exceptions for special needs(我们学校现在有“课堂禁止使用手机”的规定,特殊情况除外)
第三段 (建议与展望) 分层解决方案 学校:set up phone lockers for 课间集中存放 学生:use phones only for pre-approved educational apps(只使用预先批准的教育应用程序) 家长:sign a family contract to regulate usage (签订家庭合同来规范使用)
高级词汇积累
政策引用:Ministry of Education’s guidelines(教育部的指导方针)、limited phone access(限制电话接入)、No Phone in Class' rule (“课堂禁止使用手机”的规定)、mobile phone management in schools(学校手机管理)
教育术语:distraction-free environment(避免注意力分散的环境)、set up phone lockers for (课间集中存放)、pre-approved educational apps(预先批准的教育应用程序)
管理策略:designated phone storage zones(设计手机存放区)、emergency contacts(紧急联络)、classroom phone baskets(教室电话篮)
四、遣词造句升级(附中考高频表达)
基础句型 升级句型(高分句型) 句式解析(表达具体和延展)
Keep in touch with parents. Mobile phones serve as a lifeline for students to contact parents during emergencies, especially for those with working caregivers. serve as a lifeline for students to contact parents 成为学生与家长联系的生命线
Waste time on games. Excessive mobile use often leads to addiction, with students spending an average of 2.3 hours daily on non-educational apps. 用数据将问题具体化 Excessive mobile use 过度使用手机 lead to导致……
Better not use phones. Instead of a total ban, a more reasonable approach is to implement 'smart phone management' policies. Instead of…而不是…… reasonable approach合理的方法
五、句型总结(新增中考高频句型)
观点对比:
While some argue that phones are essential for modern learning, others stress their disruptive impact.(while 引导对比状语从句)
(一些人认为手机对现代学习至关重要,另一些人则强调手机的破坏性影响。)
Statistics show that students without in-class phone access score 15% higher on average in exams.(数据引用)
政策衔接:
In response to the Ministry of Education’s guidelines, our school has adopted a "phone-free classroom" policy.(政策响应表达)
(为响应教育部的指导方针,我们学校采取了“无手机课堂”政策。)
The key is to balance convenience with responsibility, as emphasized in recent educational directives.(被动语态 + 抽象名词)
(关键在于平衡便利与责任,正如近期教育指示所强调的那样。)
建议表达:
A practical solution is to allow phone use during breaks but require them to be stored during lessons.(不定式作表语)
(一个实际的解决方案是允许在课间休息时使用手机,但要求在上课时将手机存放起来。)
By working together, schools and families can create a healthy digital environment for teens.(动名词短语作状语)
(通过共同努力,学校和家庭能够为青少年营造一个健康的数字环境。)
六、强化版填空训练-根据中文提示补全句子,注意使用升级表达:
1. ________ (根据教育部规定), middle schools should ________ (实施手机有限带入政策).
2. Supporters believe phones are crucial for ______ (紧急联系) and ______ (获取学习资源).
3. Critics argue that phones cause ___________________ (注意力分散), with students ___________________ (平均每天浪费 2 小时) on social media.
4. A better approach is to _____ (设立课间手机存放柜) and _____ (允许用于教育类应用).
5. ____ (家长和学校协同合作), we can help students _______ (建立健康的手机使用习惯).
答案示例:
According to the Ministry of Education’s rules; implement a limited phone access policy
emergency contacts; accessing learning resources
attention distractions; wasting an average of 2 hours daily
set up break-time phone lockers; allow usage for educational apps
By collaborating between parents and schools; build healthy mobile habits
七、参考范文(范文可根据学生水平删减参考)
Mobile Phones in School: A Balanced View
The debate over mobile phones in school has gained new urgency with the Ministry of Education’s guidelines. While 45% of students see phones as essential for contacting parents in emergencies, 60% of teachers report that devices distract from classroom focus.
Those in favor highlight phones’ role as learning tools—for example, using educational apps for instant vocabulary checks or research. However, opponents stress the health risks: prolonged screen time causes eye strain and reduces physical activity. Data shows students with unlimited phone access spend 30% less time on homework.
In my view, a middle path is needed. Schools could designate "phone-free zones" during lessons and provide locker systems for safe storage. Students might use phones during breaks but must agree to parental controls on non-educational apps. By balancing technology with discipline, we can harness phones’ benefits while protecting students’ focus and well-being.