(共17张PPT)
主题写作:人与社会--科学与技术--科学技术与工程,人类发明与创新
人与自我--生活与学习--多彩、安全、有意义的学校生活
An Invitation to
the 2025 Science Festival
Writing and Improvement
Feedback
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
Lesson task: Improve the first draft.
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
假设你叫李明,你所在的学校拟组织一年一度的科技节。请你以学生会主席的身份,写信给姊妹学校澳门濠江中学的外籍学生Linda,邀请她过来参加此次活动,内容包括:
A good composition (15’) complete content (内容完整) (6’)
good language (语言得体) (9’)
Invitation 1
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
Learn what makes a good composition.
Watch and review the activities.
design 3D ___________
enter a model-making ________
show handmade ____________
try out some fun ___________
pay a visit to_______________
artworks
competition
science projects
the science fair
experiments
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
Invitation 2
spelling mistakes
grammar mistakes
Invitation 1
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1. use correct
spelling and grammar
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
How to improve the language
Invitation 1
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
Invitation 2
good phrases
good expression
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Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
How to improve the language
Good language
1. use correct spelling and grammar
2. use good expressions
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
You can _______________ the science fair.
3. The Science Festival can help students study science. (**健)
The Science Festival will ________________________students to______________________science.
pay a visit to
provide a chance for
learn (more) about
Tip1: Change for a better expression.
I __________ you will _________________ it.
1. I think you will like it. (**妍)
Language bank
1. be sure
2. be interested in
3. learn about
4. pay a visit to
5. provide a chance for sb. to
am sure
be interested in
2. You can go to the science fair.
festival
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
Tip2: Combine for a better expression.
You will have a great time at the festival. I promise.
I promise (that) you will have a great time at the festival.
It increases our knowledge. It brings us a lot of fun.
It not only brings us a lot of fun but also increases our knowledge.
(that)
(not only …but also…)
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
--Thomas Edison
Surprise is the seed of science.
(惊奇是科学的种子。)
Tip3: Add a saying(名人名言) for a better expression.
As the saying goes, surprise is the seed of science.
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
3. Use a topic sentence .
Change (变)
Combine (合)
Add (增)
expression
Good language 1. use correct spelling and grammar
2. use good expressions
3. use topic sentences
How to improve the language
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
假设你叫李明,你所在的学校拟组织一年一度的科技节。请你以学生会主席的身份,写信给姊妹学校澳门濠江中学的外籍学生Linda,邀请她过来参加此次活动,内容包括:
注意:
1. 可在写作内容要点的基础上适当拓展信息。
2. 不得在作文中出现真实人名和地名。
3. 词数80词左右,作文开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
Lesson task: Improve your first draft with the tips we learned today.
Attention:Please improve your handwriting.
Engage:share on topic
Explore: learn to write
Experience: write to learn
Evaluate: assess to reflect
Pair-work: Check(√) your partner’s second draft with the check list.
Item Peer check(√) Point
Language 9’ 1. Does the writer spell the words correctly 是否有拼写错误?(红笔圈出 ) Yes/No
2. Does the writer use the grammar correctly 是否有语法错误 (红笔圈、删、添 ) Yes/No
3. Does the writer use good expression 是否使用好的表达(利用变-合-增技巧) (红笔 画出 ) Yes/No
4. Does the writer use topic sentence 是否使用主题句(红笔 画出 ) Yes/No
Attention Is the handwriting good enough Yes/No
Comment Good points: . Advice: .
Homework
Must do Polish your second draft based on the comments.
(基于平台的个人写作报告和同伴互评完善二稿)
Choose to do A: Draw a mind map about what you’ve learnt today.
B: Shoot a video of your invitation .