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题型过关第6讲 书面表达
初一英语书面表达满分技巧：从审题到润色全攻略
一、核心解题步骤：五步成文法
1. 审题定框架（2 分钟）
三要素分析：
体裁：记叙文（写事 / 人）、应用文（书信 / 邮件）、说明文（介绍物品 / 活动）；
人称：第一人称（I/we）、第三人称（he/she/they）；
时态：一般现在时（现状 / 习惯）、一般过去时（过去经历）、将来时（计划 / 建议）。
例：题目 “介绍你的学校”→体裁：说明文；人称：第一人称；时态：一般现在时。
2. 列提纲抓要点（3 分钟）
结构模板：
开头：背景引入 / 总述主题（1-2 句）；
中间：分点展开（2-3 段，每段 1 个要点 + 支撑句）；
结尾：总结 / 感受 / 建议（1 句）。
例：题目 “我的周末”→提纲：
开头：I had a great weekend.
中间：On Saturday, I studied... On Sunday, I played...
结尾：It was really fun.
3. 填充内容写初稿（10 分钟）
句子升级技巧：
简单句→复合句：
原句：I like English. She likes English.
升级：Both I and she like English.
添加细节：
原句：He played basketball.
升级：He played basketball with his classmates happily after school.
4. 检查纠错润色（3 分钟）
必查项目：
语法：主谓一致（he plays）、时态（yesterday 用过去时）、单复数（a book/books）；
拼写：易错词（friend, beautiful, interesting）；
句式：避免重复（用不同连接词：and/but/also/besides）。
5.誊写答案（2 分钟）
书写规范：
字母大小适中，间距均匀；
标点清晰（逗号不连写，句末点实心）；
分段明确（每段开头空两格）。
二、常考体裁模板与提分句型
1. 记叙文（写经历 / 故事）
模板：
开头：Last weekend, I went to the park with my family.
中间：First, we... Then, we... Finally, we...
结尾：It was an unforgettable experience.
提分句型：
“As soon as I arrived, I saw...”（一到就看到...）
“Suddenly, something amazing happened...”（突然，神奇的事发生了...）
2. 书信 / 邮件（应用文）
模板：
开头：Dear Tom,
How’s it going I’m writing to tell you about...
中间：In my opinion,... You should...
结尾：I’m looking forward to your reply.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
提分句型：
“I’d like to invite you to...”（我想邀请你...）
“If you have any questions, feel free to ask me.”（如有疑问，随时问我）
3. 说明文（介绍人 / 物 / 活动）
模板：
开头：There is a wonderful festival called...
中间：People usually... They also...
结尾：I love this festival because...
提分句型：
“It is famous for...”（它因... 而著名）
“The most important thing is...”（最重要的是...）
三、避坑指南：初一学生常见错误
偏题跑题：
误：题目要求 “介绍爱好”，写成 “家庭”；
正：紧扣题目关键词（如 “hobby”），每段围绕主题展开。
句式单一：
误：全文只用 “I like...”“He is...”；
正：穿插使用不同句式（感叹句：How beautiful! 祈使句：Let’s go!）。
语法漏洞：
误：“I goed to school.”（正确：went）；
正：重点检查过去式不规则变化（go→went, eat→ate）。
中式英语：
误：“I very like English.”（正确：I like English very much.）；
正：积累地道表达（如 “have a good time” 而非 “play happy”）。
四、实战演练：题目解析与范文
题目：
假设你是李华，你的英国朋友 Tom 想了解中国春节。请写一封邮件，内容包括：
春节的时间；
主要活动（大扫除、贴春联、吃年夜饭等）；
你的感受。
范文示例：
spring-festival-email关于春节的邮件范文
V1
生成 spring-festival-email.txt
解析：
结构清晰：开头点明主题，中间分点介绍，结尾表达感受；
语言亮点：使用 “sweep away bad luck”“bring good fortune” 等文化表达；
语法正确：时态（一般现在时）、人称（I/we）无误。
五、提分口诀与素材积累
口诀速记：
“审题定框架，要点先写下；
句子别单一，衔接靠连词；
语法仔细查，书写要工整。”
万能素材库：
连接词：firstly, secondly, finally; besides, however, in addition;
情感表达：I’m interested in.../It’s really exciting.../I hope...;
文化词汇：dragon dance（舞龙）, paper-cutting（剪纸）, lunar calendar（农历）。
一、书面表达
1．请根据中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于 50词的文段写作，所给提示词语仅供选用。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。
在平时的学习和生活中，你一定帮助过他人。某英文报正以“Happiness of helping others”为题，举办中学生征文活动。请你根据以下信息，写一篇英文短文投稿。
提示词语： problem, make progress, with the help of, proud
提示问题：
1. When and where did you help the person
2. What did you do
3. How did you feel
Helping others always brings me happiness.
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【答案】范文：
Helping others always brings me happiness. Last month, my classmate Li Hua had a problem with math. He couldn’t understand some difficult exercises. I decided to help him after school. We stayed in the classroom, and I explained the questions step by step. With the help of practice, he made progress quickly. When he got a good grade in the next test, I felt very proud.
Helping others not only makes them happy but also brings joy to me. I will keep helping people whenever I can!
【详解】[总体分析]
① 题材：本文是一篇记叙文，为材料作文；
② 时态：时态为“一般过去时”为主，表达感受时用“一般现在时”；
③ 提示：需包含三个提示问题内容，使用给定提示词，注意人称和时态转换；
[写作步骤]
第一步：说明帮助事件的基本情况；
第二步：详细描述帮助的具体内容和过程；
第三步：表达帮助他人后的感受和收获。
[亮点词汇]
①decide to do sth 决定做某事
② make progress 取得进步
③ feel proud 感到自豪
[高分句型]
When he got a good grade in the next test, I felt very proud.（时间状语从句）
2．Life is just like a mirror. You smile at it, and it smiles at you, too.
请你以“Learn to Smile”为题，根据下面导图所列的要点写一篇不少于70词的短文（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
要求：短文必须包括所有内容要点，不要逐字翻译，可适当发挥，使短文连贯通顺。
Learn to Smile
I remember a song, the first sentence of it is “Just a smile and the rain is gone.” Do you like smiling I think you should learn to smile.
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【答案】例文
Learn to Smile
I remember a song, the first sentence of it is “Just a smile and the rain is gone.” Do you like smiling I think you should learn to smile.
First, learn to smile at yourself when something unpleasant happens in your life. If you fail an exam or you are misunderstood by your friends, don’t be sad. Just smile at yourself. Smiling at yourself brings back your confidence. Sometimes the one who beats you is not others, but yourself. And smiles can also keep you healthy.
Second, learn to smile at others. It will make you communicate better with people. Smiling at others makes yourself happy as well.
In a word, the smile is a kind of language belonging to everyone. It passes love and friendship and helps shorten the distance between you and other people. Living with a smile, every day will be shiny.
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：时态以一般现在时和一般将来时为主；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏词数要求，可适当添加细节。
[写作步骤]
第一步，根据导图写出如何学会对自己微笑，并介绍学会对自己微笑的好处；
第二步，写出学会对他人微笑的好处等；
第三步，书写结语。
[亮点词汇]
①learn to do学习做某事
②communicate with sb与某人沟通
③as well也
④in a word总之
⑤belong to属于
[高分句型]
①First, learn to smile at yourself when something unpleasant happens in your life.（when引导的时间状语从句）
②If you fail an exam or you are misunderstood by your friends, don’t be sad.（if引导的条件状语从句）
3．假如你是Zhang Liang，你的美国网友Peter最近发给你一封电子邮件，询问你的个人情况。请根据以下提示，给他回一封电子邮件。
提示：
1．你的爱好和特长：你的日常饮食习惯；
2．你的主要上学方式以及原因；
3．你课后的体育锻炼，如打篮球、踢足球等；
4．你喜欢的动物及原因；
5．可适当发挥……
要求：1．字迹清晰、语句通顺、语意连贯、书写规范；
2．要包括提示中的所有词，并可适当发挥：
3．70词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
4．文中不要出现真实人名和学校。
Dear Peter,
Thanks for your e-mail. I am very happy to tell you something about myself.
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How about you I’m looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours
Zhang Liang
【答案】例文
Dear Peter,
Thanks for your email. I am very happy to tell you something about myself.
I like reading books and I’m good at drawing. I usually eat lots of fruits and vegetables, and I drink milk every day. I go to school by bike because it’s good exercise. After school, I often play basketball with my friends. It’s fun and makes me strong. Sometimes I play football with my father. My favorite animal is the dog. They are friendly and loyal. I have a pet dog named Lucky. He always cheers me up!
How about you I’m looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours,
Zhang Liang
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇应用文，为电子邮件；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏，适当增加细节完整表述内容。
[写作步骤]
第一步，开头已给出，引出本文主题；
第二步，介绍自己的爱好，特长和日常生活习惯，交通方式以及原因及自己喜欢的动物；
第三步，反问对方的情况并结束文章。
[亮点词汇]
①be good at doing sth擅长做某事
②after school放学后
③look forward to doing sth盼望做某事
[高分句型]
①I go to school by bike because it’s good exercise.（because引导原因状语从句）
4．假如你是保罗（Paul），请你根据以下思维导图，以“My Favourite Sport”为题，用英语写一篇70词左右的短文，介绍一下你最喜欢的运动。
要求：
1. 内容积极向上；
2. 文中不得出现真实的人名和校名。
My Favourite Sport
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【答案】例文
My Favourite Sport
My name is Paul. Among all the sports, my favourite sport is playing basketball. At the age of seven, I fell in love with basketball. Then I practised hard in order to play it well. I play with my friends four times a week now.
Basketball plays an important role in my daily life. First of all, I think playing basketball is a good way to help us to build up our strength. Second, it can give me a sense of happiness. Third, it is good for my body and mind. Lastly, playing basketball is a good way to make friends.
All in all, I get a lot from sports. I wish everybody likes doing sports to have a strong and healthy body.
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：主要为“一般现在时”；
③提示：写作提示已给出，考生应注意不要漏写你的愿望，适当发挥，使上下文连贯。
[写作步骤]
第一步，说明你最喜欢的运动是什么；
第二步，阐述你喜欢这项运动的原因；
第三步，说明你的愿望是什么。
[亮点词汇]
①fall in love with爱上
②happiness幸福
③all in all总而言之
[高分句型]
I wish everybody likes doing sports to have a strong and healthy body. (省略that的宾语从句)
5．题目：My Favorite Food
要求：1. 语言表达准确，语意通顺、连贯；
2. 书写工整、规范；
3. 根据所给题目，写一篇不少于 80 词的短文，介绍你最喜欢的食物，包括它的味道、制作过程、你喜欢它的原因以及它对你的特殊意义（如果有的话）。
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【答案】例文：
My Favorite Food
My favorite food is pizza. It tastes delicious with its crispy crust, rich cheese, and various toppings. The process of making pizza is quite interesting. First, we need to prepare the dough by mixing flour, water, yeast, and a little salt. Then, let it rise for a while. Next, spread the tomato sauce on the dough, add plenty of cheese, and put your favorite toppings like mushrooms, peppers, and sausages. Finally, bake it in the oven until the cheese melts and the crust turns golden brown. I love pizza because it offers a wide range of flavors and combinations. You can customize it according to your taste. Moreover, it’s perfect for sharing with friends and family. Whenever we have a pizza party, it’s always full of joy and laughter. Pizza is not just food for me; it’s a symbol of togetherness and happiness.
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇话题作文；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏提示，并适当添加细节，注意字母大小写以及标点符号。
[写作步骤]
第一步、介绍自己最喜欢的食物是什么；
第二步、介绍食物的味道、制作过程以及自己喜欢它的原因。
[亮点词汇]
①for a while一会儿
②according to根据
③be full of充满
[高分句型]
①I love pizza because it offers a wide range of flavors and combinations.(because引导原因状语从句)
6．你校将组织主题为“How to Spend Your Free Time”的英语演讲比赛。假设你是李华，打算参加比赛，谈谈自己的想法和做法。请根据以下图示，写一篇演讲稿。
要求:
1. 演讲稿须包括图示内加粗字体的三个方面，括号内为非限定性内容，可作适当发挥，要求语句通顺，意思连贯；
2. 词数80左右，演讲稿开头与结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
3. 文中不得提及真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
How to Spend Your Free Time
Dear teachers and classmates,
It’s my great honour to make a speech here. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
So much for my speech. Thanks for listening!
【答案】One possible version:
How to Spend Your Free TimeDear teachers and classmates,
It’s my great honour to make a speech here. What do you do in your free time How should we spend our free time
First, it’s good for us to take part in outdoor activities. We can go camping on sunny days to have a rest. We can also go riding at weekends. Taking exercise makes us healthy and happy.
Second, it’s good for us to help people in need. We may visit the old people’s home and do some cleaning for them. We can also help clean up the city park.
At home, I think we can help our parents do some housework and read more books. If we are tired, there are many ways to relax. We can read some books, we can also listen to our favourite music.
So there are so many interesting things we can do. We can feel happy and meaningful.
So much for my speech. Thanks for listening!
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇演讲稿；
②时态：以“一般现在时”为主；
③提示：写作的要点提示已给出，考生应按要求进行写作，注意不要遗漏任何提示内容，可适当添加细节，使讲稿内容意思完整。
[写作步骤]
第一步，承接已给出的开头，引出演讲主题；
第二步，介绍空闲时间的户外活动、利用空闲时间帮助他人的活动、在家里能做的事情；
第三步，介绍感受。
[亮点词汇]
① be good for对……有好处
② go camping去野营
③ people in need有需要的人
④clean up the city park清整城市公园
[高分句型]
① First, it’s good for us to take part in outdoor activities. (it代替动词不定式作形式主语)
② If we are tired, there are many ways to relax. (if引导的条件状语从句)
7．请根据下面思维导图的要点提示，以“My Free Time”为题写一篇70词左右的英语短文，谈谈你业余生活的计划及安排。
要求：
1. 文中不得出现真实的人名和校名；
2. 标题已给出,不计入总词数。
My Free Time
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【答案】例文
My Free Time
I am a junior high school student. I’m busy doing my lessons, but my free time is colourful.
After school I usually play sports with my classmates. I like playing basketball and soccer. Sports help me to keep healthy and study better. I often do some reading in the evening. I think books are my good friends. Sometimes I watch TV or listen to music. They can help me see the outside world. On Saturday or Sunday, I usually help my mother do some housework.
I think my free time is wonderful.
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：时态为“一般现在时”；
③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏，适当增加细节完整表述内容。
[写作步骤]
第一步，简洁明了点明身份和总体感受 ；
第二步，按照时间顺序，分别从放学后、晚上、周末三个时间段，详细描述自己的活动。
第三步，评价自己的空闲时间。
[亮点词汇]
①keep healthy保持健康
②do some reading进行阅读
③help sb. do sth.帮助某人做某事
[高分句型]
①I’m busy doing my lessons, but my free time is colourful.（并列复合句）
②I think books are my good friends.（宾语从句）
8．位于广州的长隆野生动物园（Chimelong Safari Park）不仅是国内外游客了解动物习性和保护知识的地方,更是珍稀濒危动物的家园。假设你是长隆野生动物园的“小小保育员”, 请为游客设计一份《野生动物保护指南》（Wildlife Protection Guide）帮助游客了解野生动物和园内的参观规则。请根据以下提示完成一篇英文短文：
内容要点如下:
1. Talk about one of the wild animals (looks, habit, ability);
2. Introduce the rules in the Safari Park and tell the reasons;
3. Call on (呼吁) people to protect wild animals.
要求:
1）词数不少于60词;
2）不得使用真实姓名; 开头已给出。
Dear visitors,
I’m the keeper of the Chimelong Safari Park. Today I want to introduce one of the wild animals and some zoo rules to you. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【答案】例文
Dear visitors,
I’m the keeper of the Chimelong Safari Park. Today I want to introduce one of the wild animals and some zoo rules to you.
Let’s talk about the pandas. They are cute with black and white fur. They mainly live on bamboo and spend most of their time eating and sleeping. Pandas are not only good at climbing trees but also swimming.
Now, here are the rules in our park. First, don’t feed the animals. Human food may be harmful to them. Second, don’t litter. We should keep the park clean for the animals. Third, smoking is not allowed here. It can be dangerous and bad for the animals’ health.
Wild animals are an important part of nature. Let’s work together to protect them and give them a better home.
Wish you a great time here!
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：时态为一般现在时；
③提示：写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏提示中的要点，可适当添加细节，并突出写作要点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，谈论其中一种野生动物的外表、习性、能力等。
第二步，再介绍野生动物园的规则并说明原因。
第三步，呼吁人们保护野生动物。
[亮点词汇]
①black and white fur黑白相间的羽毛
②keep the park clean保持公园干净
③an important part一个重要的部分
[高分句型]
①They mainly live on bamboo and spend most of their time eating and sleeping.（and连接并列成分）
②Let’s work together to protect them and give them a better home.（祈使句）
9．保护大自然是每个人应尽的责任和义务。我们在生活中的点滴小事上，也能做出自己的贡献。你将参加学校英文报举办的“Protecting Mother Nature”主题征文活动，请根据图片提示，用英语写一篇文章，谈谈你是如何保护大自然的。
注意：
1. 词数80左右；
2. 不得透露任何个人信息。
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【答案】例文
Protecting Mother Nature
Mother Nature is very important to us. We should take action to protect her.
First, we should reduce pollution. Walking or riding bicycles to school is an environmentally friendly choice for us. Second, we should turn off the lights when we leave a room. Additionally, we should save water, as water is the source of life and we should not waste it. Third, we should not litter; instead, we should put rubbish in the bin. Fourth, we should plant more trees, as trees can clean the air and prevent soil erosion.
Let’s work together to protect Mother Nature and make our Earth a better place to live in.
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇说明文，为材料作文；
②时态：时态主要为“一般现在时”；
③提示：文章应该包括思维导图提示要点，要适当补充，使文章内容充实；行文时多用第一人称，尽量多使用短语和句型；写作中适当使用连接词，使行文连贯、顺畅。
[写作步骤]
第一步，开门见山：提出文章核心观点，强调大自然对人类的重要性，并呼吁人们采取行动保护大自然，为下文具体阐述保护措施做铺垫。
第二步，从多个日常生活角度详细阐述保护大自然的具体行动；
第三步，总结全文，再次呼吁大家共同努力保护大自然。
[亮点词汇]
①take action 采取行动
②work together 携手共进
[高分句型]
①Walking or riding bicycles to school is an environmentally friendly choice for us. (动名词作主语)
②Second, we should turn off the lights when we leave a room. (when引导的时间状语从句)
10．请结合下面导图内容及提示，以“My Holiday”为题，写一篇不少于70词的短文。
要求:1.短文须包含导图中的所有信息，并适当拓展；
2.文中不能出现真实的人名和校名。
My Holiday
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【答案】One possible version:
My Holiday
I went to Shanghai with my parents last week. We went there by plane. Shanghai is a big city, and there is a famous park. So we visited it first. We spent a whole day in the park and had a good time. I played a lot of games there. They were so interesting. I bought some gifts for my friends. Shanghai is really a wonderful place. I like it so much that I’m looking forward to visiting it again.
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：本文是一篇材料作文；
②时态：“一般过去时和一般现在时”为主；
③提示：根据提示内容进行写作，注意不要遗漏，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步，介绍自己什么时候以什么方式和谁去了上海；
第二步，具体阐述自己做了什么；
第三步，书写结语，表达感受。
[亮点词汇]
①famous 著名的
②have a good time 玩得开心
③buy sth for sb 为某人购买某物
④look forward to doing 期待做某事
[高分句型]
①Shanghai is a big city, and there is a famous park.creates. (and连接并列句)
②I like it so much that I’m looking forward to visiting it again. (so...that...引导结果状语从句)
11．同学们一定听过《如愿》这首歌，其中的一句歌词“山河无恙，烟火寻常”描绘了中国的盛世景象。城市的发展如同一部生动的历史长卷，每一条街道、每一座建筑都是一页篇章，记载着人们的辛勤耕耘和智慧创新。用脚步丈量大地宽广，用心感受中国的温暖怀抱。假定你是李辉，你的美国笔友David想来中国旅游，请你用英文给他写一封电子邮件。
内容包括：
1.推荐一座值得游玩的城市及原因。
2.介绍该城市2-3处著名景点，描述这些景点的独特之处和游客的游玩活动。 介绍当地的特色美食……
3.表达期待。
注意：
（1）词数80左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
（2）可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear David,
I hope this email finds you well. I’m excited to hear that you’re planning to visit China! _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】例文：
Dear David,
I hope this email finds you well. I’m excited to hear that you’re planning to visit China! I suggest Beijing because it’s the best choice to see Chinese history. There are three famous places you must visit. The Great Wall is very long and beautiful. You will feel excited when you walk on it. The Forbidden City has many old palaces. Summer Palace is perfect to take a walk by the lake. Don’t miss Beijing duck — the most delicious food here! I can’t wait to see you.
Yours,
Li Hua
【详解】[总体分析]
①题材：应用文(电子邮件)
②时态：一般现在时为主，一般将来时表期待
③提示：需包含城市推荐、3个景点介绍和美食推荐
[写作步骤]
第一步，推荐北京及历史原因；
第二步，介绍3个景点：长城、故宫、颐和园；
第三步，推荐烤鸭；
第四步，表达期待。
[亮点词汇]
①best choice 最佳选择
②famous places 著名景点
③delicious food 美味食物
④take a walk 散步
[高分句型]
①I suggest Beijing because it’s the best choice to see Chinese history.（because引导原因状语从句）
②You will feel excited when you walk on it.（when引导时间状语从句）
③Don’t miss Beijing duck — the most delicious food here!（祈使句的否定形式）/ 让教学更有效 高效备考 | 英语学科
题型过关第6讲 书面表达
初一英语书面表达满分技巧：从审题到润色全攻略
一、核心解题步骤：五步成文法
1. 审题定框架（2 分钟）
三要素分析：
体裁：记叙文（写事 / 人）、应用文（书信 / 邮件）、说明文（介绍物品 / 活动）；
人称：第一人称（I/we）、第三人称（he/she/they）；
时态：一般现在时（现状 / 习惯）、一般过去时（过去经历）、将来时（计划 / 建议）。
例：题目 “介绍你的学校”→体裁：说明文；人称：第一人称；时态：一般现在时。
2. 列提纲抓要点（3 分钟）
结构模板：
开头：背景引入 / 总述主题（1-2 句）；
中间：分点展开（2-3 段，每段 1 个要点 + 支撑句）；
结尾：总结 / 感受 / 建议（1 句）。
例：题目 “我的周末”→提纲：
开头：I had a great weekend.
中间：On Saturday, I studied... On Sunday, I played...
结尾：It was really fun.
3. 填充内容写初稿（10 分钟）
句子升级技巧：
简单句→复合句：
原句：I like English. She likes English.
升级：Both I and she like English.
添加细节：
原句：He played basketball.
升级：He played basketball with his classmates happily after school.
4. 检查纠错润色（3 分钟）
必查项目：
语法：主谓一致（he plays）、时态（yesterday 用过去时）、单复数（a book/books）；
拼写：易错词（friend, beautiful, interesting）；
句式：避免重复（用不同连接词：and/but/also/besides）。
5.誊写答案（2 分钟）
书写规范：
字母大小适中，间距均匀；
标点清晰（逗号不连写，句末点实心）；
分段明确（每段开头空两格）。
二、常考体裁模板与提分句型
1. 记叙文（写经历 / 故事）
模板：
开头：Last weekend, I went to the park with my family.
中间：First, we... Then, we... Finally, we...
结尾：It was an unforgettable experience.
提分句型：
“As soon as I arrived, I saw...”（一到就看到...）
“Suddenly, something amazing happened...”（突然，神奇的事发生了...）
2. 书信 / 邮件（应用文）
模板：
开头：Dear Tom,
How’s it going I’m writing to tell you about...
中间：In my opinion,... You should...
结尾：I’m looking forward to your reply.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
提分句型：
“I’d like to invite you to...”（我想邀请你...）
“If you have any questions, feel free to ask me.”（如有疑问，随时问我）
3. 说明文（介绍人 / 物 / 活动）
模板：
开头：There is a wonderful festival called...
中间：People usually... They also...
结尾：I love this festival because...
提分句型：
“It is famous for...”（它因... 而著名）
“The most important thing is...”（最重要的是...）
三、避坑指南：初一学生常见错误
偏题跑题：
误：题目要求 “介绍爱好”，写成 “家庭”；
正：紧扣题目关键词（如 “hobby”），每段围绕主题展开。
句式单一：
误：全文只用 “I like...”“He is...”；
正：穿插使用不同句式（感叹句：How beautiful! 祈使句：Let’s go!）。
语法漏洞：
误：“I goed to school.”（正确：went）；
正：重点检查过去式不规则变化（go→went, eat→ate）。
中式英语：
误：“I very like English.”（正确：I like English very much.）；
正：积累地道表达（如 “have a good time” 而非 “play happy”）。
四、实战演练：题目解析与范文
题目：
假设你是李华，你的英国朋友 Tom 想了解中国春节。请写一封邮件，内容包括：
春节的时间；
主要活动（大扫除、贴春联、吃年夜饭等）；
你的感受。
范文示例：
spring-festival-email关于春节的邮件范文
V1
生成 spring-festival-email.txt
解析：
结构清晰：开头点明主题，中间分点介绍，结尾表达感受；
语言亮点：使用 “sweep away bad luck”“bring good fortune” 等文化表达；
语法正确：时态（一般现在时）、人称（I/we）无误。
五、提分口诀与素材积累
口诀速记：
“审题定框架，要点先写下；
句子别单一，衔接靠连词；
语法仔细查，书写要工整。”
万能素材库：
连接词：firstly, secondly, finally; besides, however, in addition;
情感表达：I’m interested in.../It’s really exciting.../I hope...;
文化词汇：dragon dance（舞龙）, paper-cutting（剪纸）, lunar calendar（农历）。
一、书面表达
1．请根据中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于 50词的文段写作，所给提示词语仅供选用。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。
在平时的学习和生活中，你一定帮助过他人。某英文报正以“Happiness of helping others”为题，举办中学生征文活动。请你根据以下信息，写一篇英文短文投稿。
提示词语： problem, make progress, with the help of, proud
提示问题：
1. When and where did you help the person
2. What did you do
3. How did you feel
Helping others always brings me happiness.
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2．Life is just like a mirror. You smile at it, and it smiles at you, too.
请你以“Learn to Smile”为题，根据下面导图所列的要点写一篇不少于70词的短文（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
要求：短文必须包括所有内容要点，不要逐字翻译，可适当发挥，使短文连贯通顺。
Learn to Smile
I remember a song, the first sentence of it is “Just a smile and the rain is gone.” Do you like smiling I think you should learn to smile.
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3．假如你是Zhang Liang，你的美国网友Peter最近发给你一封电子邮件，询问你的个人情况。请根据以下提示，给他回一封电子邮件。
提示：
1．你的爱好和特长：你的日常饮食习惯；
2．你的主要上学方式以及原因；
3．你课后的体育锻炼，如打篮球、踢足球等；
4．你喜欢的动物及原因；
5．可适当发挥……
要求：1．字迹清晰、语句通顺、语意连贯、书写规范；
2．要包括提示中的所有词，并可适当发挥：
3．70词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
4．文中不要出现真实人名和学校。
Dear Peter,
Thanks for your e-mail. I am very happy to tell you something about myself.
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How about you I’m looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours
Zhang Liang
4．假如你是保罗（Paul），请你根据以下思维导图，以“My Favourite Sport”为题，用英语写一篇70词左右的短文，介绍一下你最喜欢的运动。
要求：
1. 内容积极向上；
2. 文中不得出现真实的人名和校名。
My Favourite Sport
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5．题目：My Favorite Food
要求：1. 语言表达准确，语意通顺、连贯；
2. 书写工整、规范；
3. 根据所给题目，写一篇不少于 80 词的短文，介绍你最喜欢的食物，包括它的味道、制作过程、你喜欢它的原因以及它对你的特殊意义（如果有的话）。
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6．你校将组织主题为“How to Spend Your Free Time”的英语演讲比赛。假设你是李华，打算参加比赛，谈谈自己的想法和做法。请根据以下图示，写一篇演讲稿。
要求:
1. 演讲稿须包括图示内加粗字体的三个方面，括号内为非限定性内容，可作适当发挥，要求语句通顺，意思连贯；
2. 词数80左右，演讲稿开头与结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
3. 文中不得提及真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
How to Spend Your Free Time
Dear teachers and classmates,
It’s my great honour to make a speech here. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
So much for my speech. Thanks for listening!
7．请根据下面思维导图的要点提示，以“My Free Time”为题写一篇70词左右的英语短文，谈谈你业余生活的计划及安排。
要求：
1. 文中不得出现真实的人名和校名；
2. 标题已给出,不计入总词数。
My Free Time
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8．位于广州的长隆野生动物园（Chimelong Safari Park）不仅是国内外游客了解动物习性和保护知识的地方,更是珍稀濒危动物的家园。假设你是长隆野生动物园的“小小保育员”, 请为游客设计一份《野生动物保护指南》（Wildlife Protection Guide）帮助游客了解野生动物和园内的参观规则。请根据以下提示完成一篇英文短文：
内容要点如下:
1. Talk about one of the wild animals (looks, habit, ability);
2. Introduce the rules in the Safari Park and tell the reasons;
3. Call on (呼吁) people to protect wild animals.
要求:
1）词数不少于60词;
2）不得使用真实姓名; 开头已给出。
Dear visitors,
I’m the keeper of the Chimelong Safari Park. Today I want to introduce one of the wild animals and some zoo rules to you. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
9．保护大自然是每个人应尽的责任和义务。我们在生活中的点滴小事上，也能做出自己的贡献。你将参加学校英文报举办的“Protecting Mother Nature”主题征文活动，请根据图片提示，用英语写一篇文章，谈谈你是如何保护大自然的。
注意：
1. 词数80左右；
2. 不得透露任何个人信息。
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
10．请结合下面导图内容及提示，以“My Holiday”为题，写一篇不少于70词的短文。
要求:1.短文须包含导图中的所有信息，并适当拓展；
2.文中不能出现真实的人名和校名。
My Holiday
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
11．同学们一定听过《如愿》这首歌，其中的一句歌词“山河无恙，烟火寻常”描绘了中国的盛世景象。城市的发展如同一部生动的历史长卷，每一条街道、每一座建筑都是一页篇章，记载着人们的辛勤耕耘和智慧创新。用脚步丈量大地宽广，用心感受中国的温暖怀抱。假定你是李辉，你的美国笔友David想来中国旅游，请你用英文给他写一封电子邮件。
内容包括：
1.推荐一座值得游玩的城市及原因。
2.介绍该城市2-3处著名景点，描述这些景点的独特之处和游客的游玩活动。 介绍当地的特色美食……
3.表达期待。
注意：
（1）词数80左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
（2）可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear David,
I hope this email finds you well. I’m excited to hear that you’re planning to visit China! _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
