2025秋高考英语复习写作分类指导专题三写作提升第五节细节与逻辑课件
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专题三 写作提升
第五节 细节与逻辑
在英语书面表达中，增加细节内容描写是必不可少的。在信息提纲类写作中，考生一定不能只是简单地翻译或者仅仅完成题目所要求的指定内容；在看图作文中更不能只是轻描淡写地描述图片内容，否则很有可能造成内容不充实丰富、词数要求不达标或者结构不连贯等问题。适当增加细节内容，能够使文章流畅、丰满，达到应有的表达效果。增加细节内容的具体方法如下：
※增加时间、地点等细节
我已经带来了你让我归还的这两本书。
I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return.
→I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library.(增加地点)
［跟踪练习1］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1. (这一次)， scientists will profit from the data， and we’re creating a platform in which to engage as many people as possible in what’s happening (在北冰洋).
This time
in the Arctic Ocean
2.The Chinese Silk Road， (以今天的西安为起点) and finally finishes at the east coast of the Mediterranean， is well-known to the world.
3. (一到机场)， I meet a friend I haven’t seen for long.
4.I was attracted by the beauty of the city (一……就……) I arrived here at 6 o’clock in the morning by plane.
which starts from today’s Xi’an
On arriving at the airport
the moment/immediately/as
soon as/directly
※增加原因、结果、条件、让步、手段、目的等内容
(1)我会读点书。
I’ll do some reading.
→I’ll do some reading for fun， and for knowledge as well.(补充原因)
(2)我会参加一些社交活动。
I’ll take part in some social activities.
→If possible， I’ll take part in some social activities.(条件状语)
→If possible， I’ll take part in some social activities so that/in order that I can know more about the society.(结果状语)
(3)特雷西来电话说，博尔顿咖啡屋见面取消。
Tracy called， saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee.
→Tracy called， saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee as she has something important to deal with.(原因状语)
(4)我也帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。
I also helped children in the neighbourhood with their English lessons.
→I also helped children in the neighbourhood with their English lessons. To my joy， they made rapid progress and their parents thought highly of me.(增添结果)
［跟踪练习2］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1.Tomb Sweeping Day， (中国传统节日之一)， usually falls around April 5 every year to honor the dead and satisfy their ancestors.
2. (伴随着全球气候变得越来越暖)， our earth is faced with great threat.
one of the traditional Chinese festivals
With the global climate becoming warmer and warmer
3. (坐落在东北部)， Beijing is well known for its cultural relics which have been there for a long history.
4.During this period， people will go to clean the graves and pay respect to their ancestors， (带上食物和水果).
5. (作为一名高中生)， it’s everyone’s duty to do something to save our home.
Situated in northeast
carrying food and fruit
Being a senior school student
※列举具体的事例进行补充说明
(1)我要花一些时间和父母在一起。
I’ll spend some time staying with my parents.
→I’ll spend some time staying with my parents， chatting with them and doing some housework.
(2)我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。
I like to seek a pen pal who is interested in travelling just like me.
→I like to seek a pen pal who is interested in travelling just like me. If possible， we can travel together or share travelling.
［跟踪练习3］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1.The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our daily life.
(我们不仅仅能阅读国内外的新闻)， but also get information， send emails and attend online schools.
2.Laura is a standard American style. _______________________________ (她说一口完美的美式英语)， and that’s why I am crazy about her.
Not only can we read news from home and abroad
She speaks perfect American English
3.However， it seems people are unaware of the negative effects of mobile phones on communication.
(比如，很多人越来越不重视面对面的交流).
4.However， every coin has two sides， so does the Internet.
(比如，沉溺于互联网也许会影响我们的学习和工作).
For example， many people begin to pay less attention to face-to-face communication
For example， being lost in the Internet may affect our study and work
※增添神态、动作、心理描写以及背景渲染等细节
(1)我有时去村子西边的小河钓鱼。
I went fishing in the river of the west of the village now and then.
→I went fishing in the river of the west of the village now and then. The water in the river is very clear.(背景渲染)
→Weather permitting， I went fishing in the river of the west of the village now and then.(相关背景)
(2)我发现了一些不良行为。
I found some bad behaviour.
→I found some bad behaviour. Some people scribbled on the wall； some played soccer on the lawn and some people threw rubbish everywhere.(相关行为描述)
(3)晚饭后，这位男士走向了卧室。
After supper， the man went to his bedroom.
→After a rich meal， the fat man slowly made his way to his bedroom.(神态、动作描写)
［跟踪练习4］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1. (考虑到这项活动很有意义)， we intend to design a uniform suited to our own class.
2.I’ll try my best to make your uncle happy here.
(我热切地期盼着他来我们城市参观).
Considering the activity is of great value/meaningful
I am eagerly looking forward to his visit to our city
3.Many teenagers don’t pay any attention to their health， especially during the holiday. (他们花费太多的时间在看电视上)， playing games and chatting on the Internet all night.
4.Looking back to my stay in Britain， (我感到非常高兴和满意).
5.In the summer vacation， (我渴望得到一份兼职工作).
They spend too much time watching TV
I felt very happy and satisfied
I am longing to get/have a part-time job
※结尾适当发挥，写出个人感受、评价、希望愿景、倡议等
(1)Although I was very tired this summer holiday， I felt very happy for what I did.(个人感受)
(2)I think such activities are necessary and meaningful.(评价)
(3)In a word， if she would like to learn Chinese， I hope she will do it well.(愿景)
(4)As a student， it’s our duty to protect our school environment and make it clean.(倡议)
［跟踪练习5］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1. (作为一名专业的篮球运动员)， his performance in this season is not satisfactory.
2.I think Beijing (非常值得再次参观).
3.In my view， (不管互联网多么吸引人)， it shouldn’t separate us from our loved ones.
As a professional basketball player
is well worth a second visit
no matter how attractive the Internet is
4. (通过这个实验我们得出一个结论)：the temperature doesn’t change when ice is melting into water.
5.Let’s develop good habits of saving energy in our daily life and
(尽力为我们的环境做出更多贡献).
6.Therefore， we should spend time with our families，
(享受我们在一起的时光).
We drew a conclusion through the experiment
try to make more contributions to our environment
enjoying the time when we are together
※妙用衔接、过渡
一篇好的文章读起来是抑扬顿挫、圆润通畅、朗朗上口的。即使词汇再美、句式再高级，若缺乏有效的衔接与过渡，充其量也只能是一盘零乱的珍珠，虽光彩夺目却不堪受用。有效地使用过渡成分将亮点语句串“珠”成篇，是成就满分作文的最后一道“工序”。利用好“起”“承”“转”“合”四方法，会让文章读起来自然流畅，彰显考生深厚的写作功底，折服阅卷老师挑剔的目光并为之“倾倒”而给高分。
(1)表示时间顺序的过渡性词语
at the beginning/end of， in the end， afterwards， since then， meanwhile， immediately， after that， from then on， all of a sudden， at present， after a while， at the same time， in the past…
At the beginning of the term， I had trouble in learning physics.
In the end， I made great progress with practice and persistence.
(2)表示递进关系的过渡性词语
what’s more/moreover， in addition to， furthermore， besides， to make things worse， the most important of all， worst of all， especially， in particular， apart from…
Besides， I have a sense of responsibility and rich experience in being a volunteer.
Moreover， I learned Chinese painting for more than ten years in my childhood； therefore， I do know a lot about this great art form.
(3)表示并列或转折关系的过渡性词语
however， while， despite， otherwise， on the contrary， in spite of， after all， nevertheless， as well as， neither…nor， not only…but also， either…or， not…but…
Despite having lived in China for a long time， they don’t know how to make tea.
(4)表示条件或让步关系的过渡性词语
as (so) long as， on condition that， unless， in case(of)， even if/though， as/though/although
It would be safer to take more money with you in case of emergency.
He agreed to speak to reporters on condition that he was not identified.
(5)表示因果关系的过渡性词语
because (of)， now that， thanks to， due to， as a result/consequence(of)， since， therefore/thus
They are hoping for a return to normality now that the war is over.
As a consequence of his hard work， he was eventually admitted to Nanjing University.
(6)表示列举事实或观点过渡的词语
such as， for example/instance， take…for example， that is to say， as follows， in other words， on the one hand…on the other hand， for one thing…for another， personally， in my opinion/view， as far as I’m concerned， as for me…
As for me， it was an honor to have such a close friend like you.
In Pride and Prejudice， some of the main things that Jane Austen wants to teach people are as follows.
(7)表示总结的过渡性词语
in short， in brief， in a word， to sum up， all in all， on the whole， in general/generally speaking， in conclusion…
To sum up， I wish you could live up to the expectations of our school.
In brief， do as the Chinese do when in China.
［跟踪练习6］
一、根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1.总之，不管遇到什么样的挑战，我都会勇敢地拥抱未来。
， no matter what kind of challenges I encounter， I will bravely embrace the future.
In a word/To sum up/All in all
2.一方面，我能通过做这样的事赚些钱来帮助父母；另一方面，我能从中获得一些经验，这会对我将来的生活有益。
， I can earn money by doing it to help my parents. ， I can gain some experience from it， which will do good to my future life.
3.结果，孩子们变得太依赖父母，以至于他们没有独立的思想和创造性的想法。
， children become so reliant on their parents that they have no independent thought or creative ideas.
On the one hand
On the other hand
As a consequence/result
4.他要么是不能来，要么就是不想来。
he couldn’t come he did not want to.
5.根据一项调查，现在总数已减少到不足1000。
a research， the total number is reduced to less than 1，000 now.
Either
or
According to
二、选用适当的过渡性词语补全短文
to begin with， last but not least， moreover， as far as I’m concerned
Dear Jim，
I am glad that you are interested in Chinese culture and eager to explore more.
1. ， the Ancient Poetry is your best choice. 2. ， by learning Chinese ancient poems， you can have an extensive knowledge of history and culture in ancient China. 3. ， you can feel the charm of the language by reading
As far as I’m concerned
To begin with
Moreover
poems， which helps to improve your Chinese. To follow the course well， you’d better read and recite as many poems as possible. 4. ， it is a good idea to search for related background knowledge so that you will fully understand the conception of poetry.
What do you think of the course？ I am sure you will have a lot of fun from it.
Yours，
Li Hua
Last but not least
专题三 写作提升
第五节 细节与逻辑
在英语书面表达中，增加细节内容描写是必不可少的。在信息提纲类写作中，考生一定不能只是简单地翻译或者仅仅完成题目所要求的指定内容；在看图作文中更不能只是轻描淡写地描述图片内容，否则很有可能造成内容不充实丰富、词数要求不达标或者结构不连贯等问题。适当增加细节内容，能够使文章流畅、丰满，达到应有的表达效果。增加细节内容的具体方法如下：
※增加时间、地点等细节
我已经带来了你让我归还的这两本书。
I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return.
→I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library.(增加地点)
［跟踪练习1］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1. (这一次)， scientists will profit from the data， and we’re creating a platform in which to engage as many people as possible in what’s happening (在北冰洋).
This time
in the Arctic Ocean
2.The Chinese Silk Road， (以今天的西安为起点) and finally finishes at the east coast of the Mediterranean， is well-known to the world.
3. (一到机场)， I meet a friend I haven’t seen for long.
4.I was attracted by the beauty of the city (一……就……) I arrived here at 6 o’clock in the morning by plane.
which starts from today’s Xi’an
On arriving at the airport
the moment/immediately/as
soon as/directly
※增加原因、结果、条件、让步、手段、目的等内容
(1)我会读点书。
I’ll do some reading.
→I’ll do some reading for fun， and for knowledge as well.(补充原因)
(2)我会参加一些社交活动。
I’ll take part in some social activities.
→If possible， I’ll take part in some social activities.(条件状语)
→If possible， I’ll take part in some social activities so that/in order that I can know more about the society.(结果状语)
(3)特雷西来电话说，博尔顿咖啡屋见面取消。
Tracy called， saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee.
→Tracy called， saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee as she has something important to deal with.(原因状语)
(4)我也帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。
I also helped children in the neighbourhood with their English lessons.
→I also helped children in the neighbourhood with their English lessons. To my joy， they made rapid progress and their parents thought highly of me.(增添结果)
［跟踪练习2］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1.Tomb Sweeping Day， (中国传统节日之一)， usually falls around April 5 every year to honor the dead and satisfy their ancestors.
2. (伴随着全球气候变得越来越暖)， our earth is faced with great threat.
one of the traditional Chinese festivals
With the global climate becoming warmer and warmer
3. (坐落在东北部)， Beijing is well known for its cultural relics which have been there for a long history.
4.During this period， people will go to clean the graves and pay respect to their ancestors， (带上食物和水果).
5. (作为一名高中生)， it’s everyone’s duty to do something to save our home.
Situated in northeast
carrying food and fruit
Being a senior school student
※列举具体的事例进行补充说明
(1)我要花一些时间和父母在一起。
I’ll spend some time staying with my parents.
→I’ll spend some time staying with my parents， chatting with them and doing some housework.
(2)我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。
I like to seek a pen pal who is interested in travelling just like me.
→I like to seek a pen pal who is interested in travelling just like me. If possible， we can travel together or share travelling.
［跟踪练习3］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1.The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our daily life.
(我们不仅仅能阅读国内外的新闻)， but also get information， send emails and attend online schools.
2.Laura is a standard American style. _______________________________ (她说一口完美的美式英语)， and that’s why I am crazy about her.
Not only can we read news from home and abroad
She speaks perfect American English
3.However， it seems people are unaware of the negative effects of mobile phones on communication.
(比如，很多人越来越不重视面对面的交流).
4.However， every coin has two sides， so does the Internet.
(比如，沉溺于互联网也许会影响我们的学习和工作).
For example， many people begin to pay less attention to face-to-face communication
For example， being lost in the Internet may affect our study and work
※增添神态、动作、心理描写以及背景渲染等细节
(1)我有时去村子西边的小河钓鱼。
I went fishing in the river of the west of the village now and then.
→I went fishing in the river of the west of the village now and then. The water in the river is very clear.(背景渲染)
→Weather permitting， I went fishing in the river of the west of the village now and then.(相关背景)
(2)我发现了一些不良行为。
I found some bad behaviour.
→I found some bad behaviour. Some people scribbled on the wall； some played soccer on the lawn and some people threw rubbish everywhere.(相关行为描述)
(3)晚饭后，这位男士走向了卧室。
After supper， the man went to his bedroom.
→After a rich meal， the fat man slowly made his way to his bedroom.(神态、动作描写)
［跟踪练习4］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1. (考虑到这项活动很有意义)， we intend to design a uniform suited to our own class.
2.I’ll try my best to make your uncle happy here.
(我热切地期盼着他来我们城市参观).
Considering the activity is of great value/meaningful
I am eagerly looking forward to his visit to our city
3.Many teenagers don’t pay any attention to their health， especially during the holiday. (他们花费太多的时间在看电视上)， playing games and chatting on the Internet all night.
4.Looking back to my stay in Britain， (我感到非常高兴和满意).
5.In the summer vacation， (我渴望得到一份兼职工作).
They spend too much time watching TV
I felt very happy and satisfied
I am longing to get/have a part-time job
※结尾适当发挥，写出个人感受、评价、希望愿景、倡议等
(1)Although I was very tired this summer holiday， I felt very happy for what I did.(个人感受)
(2)I think such activities are necessary and meaningful.(评价)
(3)In a word， if she would like to learn Chinese， I hope she will do it well.(愿景)
(4)As a student， it’s our duty to protect our school environment and make it clean.(倡议)
［跟踪练习5］
根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1. (作为一名专业的篮球运动员)， his performance in this season is not satisfactory.
2.I think Beijing (非常值得再次参观).
3.In my view， (不管互联网多么吸引人)， it shouldn’t separate us from our loved ones.
As a professional basketball player
is well worth a second visit
no matter how attractive the Internet is
4. (通过这个实验我们得出一个结论)：the temperature doesn’t change when ice is melting into water.
5.Let’s develop good habits of saving energy in our daily life and
(尽力为我们的环境做出更多贡献).
6.Therefore， we should spend time with our families，
(享受我们在一起的时光).
We drew a conclusion through the experiment
try to make more contributions to our environment
enjoying the time when we are together
※妙用衔接、过渡
一篇好的文章读起来是抑扬顿挫、圆润通畅、朗朗上口的。即使词汇再美、句式再高级，若缺乏有效的衔接与过渡，充其量也只能是一盘零乱的珍珠，虽光彩夺目却不堪受用。有效地使用过渡成分将亮点语句串“珠”成篇，是成就满分作文的最后一道“工序”。利用好“起”“承”“转”“合”四方法，会让文章读起来自然流畅，彰显考生深厚的写作功底，折服阅卷老师挑剔的目光并为之“倾倒”而给高分。
(1)表示时间顺序的过渡性词语
at the beginning/end of， in the end， afterwards， since then， meanwhile， immediately， after that， from then on， all of a sudden， at present， after a while， at the same time， in the past…
At the beginning of the term， I had trouble in learning physics.
In the end， I made great progress with practice and persistence.
(2)表示递进关系的过渡性词语
what’s more/moreover， in addition to， furthermore， besides， to make things worse， the most important of all， worst of all， especially， in particular， apart from…
Besides， I have a sense of responsibility and rich experience in being a volunteer.
Moreover， I learned Chinese painting for more than ten years in my childhood； therefore， I do know a lot about this great art form.
(3)表示并列或转折关系的过渡性词语
however， while， despite， otherwise， on the contrary， in spite of， after all， nevertheless， as well as， neither…nor， not only…but also， either…or， not…but…
Despite having lived in China for a long time， they don’t know how to make tea.
(4)表示条件或让步关系的过渡性词语
as (so) long as， on condition that， unless， in case(of)， even if/though， as/though/although
It would be safer to take more money with you in case of emergency.
He agreed to speak to reporters on condition that he was not identified.
(5)表示因果关系的过渡性词语
because (of)， now that， thanks to， due to， as a result/consequence(of)， since， therefore/thus
They are hoping for a return to normality now that the war is over.
As a consequence of his hard work， he was eventually admitted to Nanjing University.
(6)表示列举事实或观点过渡的词语
such as， for example/instance， take…for example， that is to say， as follows， in other words， on the one hand…on the other hand， for one thing…for another， personally， in my opinion/view， as far as I’m concerned， as for me…
As for me， it was an honor to have such a close friend like you.
In Pride and Prejudice， some of the main things that Jane Austen wants to teach people are as follows.
(7)表示总结的过渡性词语
in short， in brief， in a word， to sum up， all in all， on the whole， in general/generally speaking， in conclusion…
To sum up， I wish you could live up to the expectations of our school.
In brief， do as the Chinese do when in China.
［跟踪练习6］
一、根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子
1.总之，不管遇到什么样的挑战，我都会勇敢地拥抱未来。
， no matter what kind of challenges I encounter， I will bravely embrace the future.
In a word/To sum up/All in all
2.一方面，我能通过做这样的事赚些钱来帮助父母；另一方面，我能从中获得一些经验，这会对我将来的生活有益。
， I can earn money by doing it to help my parents. ， I can gain some experience from it， which will do good to my future life.
3.结果，孩子们变得太依赖父母，以至于他们没有独立的思想和创造性的想法。
， children become so reliant on their parents that they have no independent thought or creative ideas.
On the one hand
On the other hand
As a consequence/result
4.他要么是不能来，要么就是不想来。
he couldn’t come he did not want to.
5.根据一项调查，现在总数已减少到不足1000。
a research， the total number is reduced to less than 1，000 now.
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or
According to
二、选用适当的过渡性词语补全短文
to begin with， last but not least， moreover， as far as I’m concerned
Dear Jim，
I am glad that you are interested in Chinese culture and eager to explore more.
1. ， the Ancient Poetry is your best choice. 2. ， by learning Chinese ancient poems， you can have an extensive knowledge of history and culture in ancient China. 3. ， you can feel the charm of the language by reading
As far as I’m concerned
To begin with
Moreover
poems， which helps to improve your Chinese. To follow the course well， you’d better read and recite as many poems as possible. 4. ， it is a good idea to search for related background knowledge so that you will fully understand the conception of poetry.
What do you think of the course？ I am sure you will have a lot of fun from it.
Yours，
Li Hua
Last but not least