第6讲 续写热点话题 人与动物
(2023·浙江1月卷)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was invited to a cookout on an old friend's farm in western Washington． I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years． A noise at a window caught my attention，so I entered it． It was a hummingbird(蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape． She was covered in spider-webs(蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings． She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up．
With the bird in my cupped hand，I looked around to see how she had gotten in． The broken window glass was the likely answer． I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside，closing the door securely behind me．
When I opened my hand，the bird did not fly away；she sat looking at me with her bright eyes． I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings． Still，she made no attempt to fly． Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired？Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move． I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away．
Hovering(悬停)，she approached within six inches of my face． For a very long moment，this tiny creature looked into my eyes，turning her head from side to side． Then she flew quickly out of sight．
During the cookout，I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident． They promised to fix the window． As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car． I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering． She turned from person to person until she came to me． She again looked directly into my eyes，then let out a squeaking call and was gone． For a moment，all were speechless． Then someone said，“She must have come to say good-bye．”
注意：续写词数应为150个左右。
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again．
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared．
Ⅰ．梳理原文细节，厘清篇章结构。
Ⅱ．依据首句提示，构思后续情节。
第一段：由续写第一段及续写第二段的提示语可知，该段应该描述我途经那间挤奶房时回想起上一回拯救蜂鸟的经历，以及享用烧烤的过程。
第二段：由续写第二段的提示语可知，该段应该描述两方面的内容：一是蜂鸟与我之间的互动交流；二是关于人与动物关系的启示。
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again．
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared．
1．The dog turned around，watching us，with his tail swinging up and down．
这只狗转过身来，上下摆动着尾巴，注视着我们。
2．At first the bird stuck his head out of his cage just to take a sip of water and fill his mouth with food．
起初，这只鸟把头探出笼子，只是为了喝一口水，往嘴里塞满食物。
3．Afraid I might hurt the lovely small creature，I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse．
害怕会伤害这个可爱的小生物，我不假思索地发出一声喊叫来阻止我的马。
4．Confused and frightened at my approach，the wolf backed off，pulling hard the chain．
狼被我的靠近弄得既困惑又害怕，向后退却，使劲地拉着链子。
5．Birds were singing，the air was filled with laughter，and everyone was in the best of moods．
鸟儿在歌唱，空气中充满了笑声，每个人都沉浸在愉悦当中。
6．At the sight of me，the dog circled around me，wagging his tail and licking my hands cheerfully．
一看到我，这只狗就围着我转圈，高兴地摇动着尾巴并舔着我的手。
第6讲 续写热点话题 人与动物
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A few weeks later，I went to the farm again． Having parked the car，I wandered on the blackberrylined path again．I still remembered my friends' promise so I went past the abandoned milking house to see if they had fixed the broken window．To my satisfaction，no other tiny creatures would meet this trouble any more．As I approached the farm，my friends invited me to the cookout．With the smell of roasting meat floating in the air，we chatted and laughed merrily around the picnic table till the sun set．As the evening glow spread across the farm，it was time for us to say goodbye，so we went to the parking lot together．
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared． With a squeaking call，she dived towards me，hovered before my face looking at me with her bright eyes，and then stopped on my left shoulder．I patted her on the back which was covered by colorful feathers．And I took out my water bottle，trying to give her some water．Content and joyful，she flew about 2 meters above the ground，turning her head from side to side as if expressing her gratitude for saving her life to me again．At that moment，I felt a mixture of happiness and excitement welling up in my heart，tears rolling down my cheeks．The sinking sun cast a warm glow over me and the bird，witnessing the wonderful connection between humans and animals．
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第6讲 续写热点话题 人与动物
(2023·浙江1月卷)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was invited to a cookout on an old friend's farm in western Washington．I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years．A noise at a window caught my attention，so I entered it．It was a hummingbird(蜂鸟)，desperately trying to escape．She was covered in spider-webs(蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings．She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up．
With the bird in my cupped hand，I looked around to see how she had gotten in．The broken window glass was the likely answer．I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside，closing the door securely behind me．
When I opened my hand，the bird did not fly away；she sat looking at me with her bright eyes．I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings．Still，she made no attempt to fly．Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired？Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle，she began to move．I stopped，and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away．
Hovering(悬停)，she approached within six inches of my face．For a very long moment，this tiny creature looked into my eyes，turning her head from side to side．Then she flew quickly out of sight．
During the cookout，I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident．They promised to fix the window．As I was departing，my friends walked me to my car．I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering．She turned from person to person until she came to me．She again looked directly into my eyes，then let out a squeaking call and was gone．For a moment，all were speechless．Then someone said，“She must have come to say good-bye．”
注意：续写词数应为150个左右。
A few weeks later，I went to the farm again．_________________
___________________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared．______
___________________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
Ⅰ．梳理原文细节，厘清篇章结构。
Ⅱ．依据首句提示，构思后续情节。
第一段：由续写第一段及续写第二段的提示语可知，该段应该描述我途经那间挤奶房时回想起上一回拯救蜂鸟的经历，以及享用烧烤的过程。
第二段：由续写第二段的提示语可知，该段应该描述两方面的内容：一是蜂鸟与我之间的互动交流；二是关于人与动物关系的启示。
A few weeks later，I went to the farm again．_________________
___________________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared．______
___________________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
A few weeks later，I went to the farm again．Having parked the car，I wandered on the blackberry-lined path again．I still remembered my friends' promise so I went past the abandoned milking house to see if they had fixed the broken window．To my satisfaction，no other tiny creatures would meet this trouble any more．As I approached the farm，my friends invited me to the cookout．With the smell of roasting meat floating in the air，we chatted and laughed merrily around the picnic table till the sun set．As the evening glow spread across the farm，it was time for us to say good-bye，so we went to the parking lot together．
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared．With a squeaking call，she dived towards me，hovered before my face looking at me with her bright eyes，and then stopped on my left shoulder．I patted her on the back which was covered by colorful feathers．And I took out my water bottle，trying to give her some water．Content and joyful，she flew about 2 meters above the ground，turning her head from side to side as if expressing her gratitude for saving her life to me again．At that moment，I felt a mixture of happiness and excitement welling up in my heart，tears rolling down my cheeks．The sinking sun cast a warm glow over me and the bird，witnessing the wonderful connection between humans and animals．
1．The dog turned around，watching us，with his tail swinging up and down．
这只狗转过身来，上下摆动着尾巴，注视着我们。
2．At first the bird stuck his head out of his cage just to take a sip of water and fill his mouth with food．
起初，这只鸟把头探出笼子，只是为了喝一口水，往嘴里塞满食物。
3．Afraid I might hurt the lovely small creature，I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse．
害怕会伤害这个可爱的小生物，我不假思索地发出一声喊叫来阻止我的马。
4．Confused and frightened at my approach，the wolf backed off，pulling hard the chain．
狼被我的靠近弄得既困惑又害怕，向后退却，使劲地拉着链子。
5．Birds were singing，the air was filled with laughter，and everyone was in the best of moods．
鸟儿在歌唱，空气中充满了笑声，每个人都沉浸在愉悦当中。
6．At the sight of me，the dog circled around me，wagging his tail and licking my hands cheerfully．
一看到我，这只狗就围着我转圈，高兴地摇动着尾巴并舔着我的手。
谢 谢！
