2025年高考全国一卷读后续写学案（含答案）

2025年高考全国一卷读后续写学案
【高考真题】
67. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
注意:
(1)续写词数应为150个左右；
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I realized it was me who was at fault.
_______________________________________________________________________________
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
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【原文翻译】
我和妻子想在初夏举办一个小型聚会，与家人朋友分享我们的新家。她准备了很多小吃，而我的任务是整理好后院。
后院有足够的空间让孩子们奔跑玩耍。只有一件事我没预料到：我弟弟决定带上他的狗托比——一只重达50磅、活力四射的毛球。它虽然很友好，但很容易撞倒我侄女的小儿子们和我六个月大的孙女。所以，当我弟弟出现时，我请他看好托比，让它待在外面。
我的计划起初进展顺利。托比在后院来回奔跑消耗着精力，也给孩子们留出了足够的空间。没想到晚饭后，天气突变。开始下雨了，大家都进了屋。
那是个尴尬的时刻。我不想让托比在屋子里乱跑，而我弟弟也不愿意带着一条湿漉漉的狗开车回家。最终，我弟弟决定离开，而不是强人所难。
几天过去了，我没有收到弟弟的任何消息。我给他发了短信，表达了希望他再来的愿望。他的回复让我意外——实际上是震惊：“绝不可能。” 显然，他对我们上次分别的方式很不满。毕竟，我几乎没有给他选择的余地。不过，我推测他会慢慢淡忘的。
两个月过去了。妻子建议我和弟弟联系一下，但我拒绝了，心想他应该先打电话来。然而，我的良心一直不安。我试着站在弟弟的角度考虑问题。他正面临健康问题，而他结婚三十五年的妻子几个月前刚刚去世。托比是他忠实的伙伴，是支撑他活下去的动力。
【写作训练步骤】
一、通读全文
读情节：__________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________.
读人物: （侧写人物）
“我”:_______________________________________________________________
妻子：_____________________________________________________________________
哥哥：_____________________________________________________________________
Toby：_____________________________________________________________________
读时态：___________________________________________________________________
读冲突：
（内在冲突）：_________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________
（外在冲突）：___________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________
读情绪发展：
聚会前的期待——对Toby可能带来危险的担忧——安排Toby时很顺利——天气突变——哥哥离开时的不安——收到冷淡回复时的惊讶——两个月的内心挣扎与自责
—— _______________________——______________________——____________________
读主题：______________________________________________________________________
第二步：【十句五定法】
Par.1 I realized it was me who was at fault.
Par.2 With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
1.主题升华句
2.接Hint1
3.有效过渡Hint2
4.有效衔接Hint2
5.根据句6和主题推导出故事最终的、富有余韵的结尾句
第三步：【微写作训练】
1.环境描写（根据中文提示完成默写训练）
风：
风：__________ 台风：______________ 飓风：______________
微风：____________ 龙卷风：______________
强劲的：_____________ 可怕的：_______________ 轻微的：________________
冰冷的：_____________ 寒冷的：_______________ 严寒刺骨的：____________
雨：
雨：__________ 阵雨：____________ 暴风雨：_____________ 细雨：_____________
洪水：______________ 大雨：____________ 下大雨：________________
遇上雨：__________________ 下着倾盆大雨：_____________________
雨水落下：________________ 突降的大雨：_______________________
嚎叫的风：_________________ 温柔的微风：_______________________
云：
雾气腾腾：________________ 带着雷电的云：____________________
蔚蓝的天空：___________________ 万里无云：_____________________
2.人物描写
巨大的：_____________ 敏锐的：_______________ 苍白的：________________
耐心的：_____________ 坚定的：________________ 沉稳的：_________________
合情理的：_______________ 真诚的：_______________ 好脾气：__________________
3.感动情绪
感动：______________ 打动：______________ 深受感动的：___________________
被感动的热泪盈眶：_________________________
被感动的说不出话：_________________________
4.情感描写
愧疚感席卷而来：___________________________
空荡房间回荡着孤独:______________________________
他泛红的眼眶涌出泪水:_____________________________
无声的理解弥漫在空气中:_____________________________
5.动作描写
笨拙地摸索门把手：______________________________
饼干在我手中颤抖：______________________________
颤抖的手捂住嘴:_________________________________
把脸埋进狗的毛发里:______________________________
6.环境象征描写
雨滴如未落的泪水 → 悲伤：__________________________
阳光破云 → 关系转暖: _______________________________
门迟疑地打开 → 心防松动: ____________________________
【微动作训练】
训练一：动作-情绪绑定默写
（补全句子 + 全句翻译）
1.英文：He ______ the steering wheel, his knuckles white with .
中文：他（紧握）方向盘，指关节因______（焦虑）而发白。
2.英文：Toby ______ my hand with his wet nose, melting my ______ instantly.
中文：托比用湿鼻子______（轻蹭）我的手，瞬间融化了我的______（怨恨）。
3. 英文：I ______ the biscuits , tears blurring my vision.
中文：我（递出）饼干时______（笨拙地），泪水模糊了视线。
训练二：环境反射心理仿写
1.要求：将直白句 "I felt very sad" 改为环境反射式描写
英文：__________________________________________________________________
中文提示：雨滴淅沥敲打窗户，如同我未落的泪水。
2.要求：将 "He finally forgave me" 改为环境反射式描写
英文：_________________________________________________________________
中文提示：阳光破云而出，温暖了我们之间冰封的沉默。
3.要求：将 "The dog made us reconcile" 改为象征式描写
英文：_________________________________________________________________
中文提示：托比欢快摇动的尾巴，成了跨越我们裂痕的桥梁。
训练三：综合情景创作
（情景 + 中英对照范例）
1. 情景：弟弟开门看见"我"雨中持饼干。
要求：包含1个动作-情绪绑定句 + 1个环境反射心理句
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
补全段落中缺失的英文表达（每空一词），括号内为中文提示。
Paragraph 1
I realized it was me who was at fault. I had been so ______ (专注于) keeping the party under control that I ______ (未能考虑) how important Toby was to my brother during this difficult time. My ______ (自尊心) had kept me from ______ (主动联系), and now months had passed without a ______ (正式的谈话). One evening, I picked up the phone and left him a ______ (语音留言), apologizing for my behavior and asking if we could meet. To my ______ (宽慰), he called back the next day, and we agreed to ______ (尽快见面).
Paragraph 2
With the biscuits my wife had made, I ______ (到达) my brother’s door. He opened it with a ______ (惊讶的微笑), and for a moment, neither of us spoke. Then we ______ (拥抱) — something we hadn’t done since before his wife ______ (去世). We sat on the porch with Toby ______ (趴在旁边), and I handed him the box of biscuits. “Thank you,” he said ______ (轻声地). We talked for hours, laughing, ______ (回忆往事), and slowly ______ (重建) what had been lost. As I watched Toby gently ______ (把头靠在) my brother’s leg, I knew we were finally on the ______ (治愈之路).
2025年高考全国一卷读后续写参考答案
【写作训练步骤】
二、通读全文
读情节："我"和妻子举办家庭聚会,妻子准备食物，"我"负责后院安排。哥哥带着爱犬Toby前来,由于担心活泼的 Toby 会伤到小孩,"我"要求 哥哥把狗留在室外。起初安排顺利但突如其来的降雨迫使所有人进屋，导致 哥哥不得不带着淋湿的狗提前离开。之后两个月 哥哥拒绝联系，"我"经过内心挣扎，最终理解 哥哥的处境并主动登门道歉和解。
读人物: （侧写人物）
“我”: 一位组织家庭聚会的主人，关心孩子的安全，但最初对宠物狗的处理方式不够全面。后来意识到自己的错误并主动修复关系。
妻子：热情好客，为聚会准备了很多零食，并在"我"与 哥哥和解时提供了亲手做的饼干作为礼物。
哥哥：一位失去妻子不久、面临健康问题，并且沉默寡言；将狗 Toby 视为重要的情感寄托和精神支柱。对"我"最初的要求感到受伤，但最终接受和解。
Toby：一只 50 磅重、精力旺盛且友好的狗，是独居的作者哥哥的重要伴侣。
读时态：通过阅读原文找到时间点初夏，家庭聚会当天及之后两个月。全文一般过去时态
读冲突：
（内在冲突）：1.由于这只体型较大的狗，"我"对孩子们安全的担忧与对哥哥情感需求的理解之间的冲突2."我"的自尊心(认为哥应该先联系)与自己没能理解哥哥造成的良心谴责之间的冲突3.从单纯考虑聚会安排到理解哥哥丧偶后的情感依赖的认知冲突。
（外在冲突）：1."我"对 Toby 的限制与哥哥对爱犬的感情之间的矛盾冲突2.突如其来的天气变化导致的尴尬局面（环境冲突）3.兄弟间因误解产生的两个月冷战（情感冲突）
读情绪发展：
聚会前的期待——对Toby可能带来危险的担忧——安排Toby时很顺利——天气突变——哥哥离开时的不安——收到冷淡回复时的惊讶——两个月的内心挣扎与自责
—— 换位思考后的理解与懊悔 → 主动和解时的决心 →(暗示)兄弟关系修复的欣慰
读主题：亲情需要理解与包容
第二步：【十句五定法】
Par.1 I realized it was me who was at fault.
Par.2 With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
1.主题升华句
As I watched Toby gently rest his head on my brother’s leg, I knew we were finally on the path to healing.
2.接Hint1
I had been so focused on keeping the party under control that I failed to consider how important Toby was to my brother during this difficult time.
3.有效过渡Hint2
To my relief, he called back the next day, and we agreed to get together soon.
4.有效衔接Hint2
He opened it with a surprised smile, and for a moment, neither of us spoke.
5.根据句6和主题推导出故事最终的、富有余韵的结尾句
“Thank you,” he said quietly. We talked for hours, laughing, remembering old times, and slowly rebuilding what had been lost.
第三步：【微写作训练】
7.环境描写（根据中文提示完成默写训练）
风：
风：wind 台风：typhoon 飓风：hurricane
微风：breeze 龙卷风：tornado
强劲的：strong 可怕的：terrible 轻微的：light/slight
冰冷的：icy 寒冷的：cold 严寒刺骨的：bitter/biting
雨：
雨：rain 阵雨：shower 暴风雨：storm 细雨：drizzle
洪水：flood 大雨：heavy rain 下大雨：rain hard/heavily
遇上雨：get caught in the rain 下着倾盆大雨：pour with rain
雨水落下：with the rain pouring down 突降的大雨：an unexpected shower
嚎叫的风：the howling wind 温柔的微风：the gentle breeze
云：
雾气腾腾：the misty cloud 带着雷电的云：the thundering clouds
蔚蓝的天空：a deep blue sky 万里无云：a deep cloudless sky
8.人物描写
巨大的：enormous 敏锐的：sharp 苍白的：pale
耐心的：patient 坚定的：determined 沉稳的：steady
合情理的：reasonable 真诚的：sincerely 好脾气：good temper
9.感动情绪
感动：move 打动：affect 深受感动的：impressed
被感动的热泪盈眶：be moved to tears
被感动的说不出话：be touched beyond words
10.情感描写
愧疚感席卷而来：A wave of guilt washed over me
空荡房间回荡着孤独: Loneliness echoed in the empty house
他泛红的眼眶涌出泪水: Tears welled up in his red-rimmed eyes
无声的理解弥漫在空气中: An unspoken understanding hung in the air
11.动作描写
笨拙地摸索门把手：fumbled with the doorknob
饼干在我手中颤抖：the biscuits trembled in my grip
颤抖的手捂住嘴: pressed a trembling hand to her mouth
把脸埋进狗的毛发里: buried his face in the dog's fur
12.环境象征描写
雨滴如未落的泪水 → 悲伤：Raindrops dripped like unshed tears
阳光破云 → 关系转暖: Sunlight broke through the clouds
门迟疑地打开 → 心防松动: The door creaked open hesitantly
【微动作训练】
训练一：动作-情绪绑定默写
（补全句子 + 全句翻译）
3.英文：He ______ the steering wheel, his knuckles white with .
中文：他（紧握）方向盘，指关节因______（焦虑）而发白。
(Key: clutched; anxiety)
4.英文：Toby ______ my hand with his wet nose, melting my ______ instantly.
中文：托比用湿鼻子______（轻蹭）我的手，瞬间融化了我的______（怨恨）。
(Key: nudged; resentment)
3. 英文：I ______ the biscuits , tears blurring my vision.
中文：我（递出）饼干时______（笨拙地），泪水模糊了视线。
(Key: extended; clumsily)
训练二：环境反射心理仿写
4.要求：将直白句 "I felt very sad" 改为环境反射式描写
英文：Raindrops pattered against the window like my unshed tears.
中文提示：雨滴淅沥敲打窗户，如同我未落的泪水。
要求：将 "He finally forgave me" 改为环境反射式描写
英文：Sunlight broke through the clouds, warming the frozen silence between us.
中文提示：阳光破云而出，温暖了我们之间冰封的沉默。
要求：将 "The dog made us reconcile" 改为象征式描写
英文：Toby’s enthusiastically wagging tail became a bridge across our rift.
中文提示：托比欢快摇动的尾巴，成了跨越我们裂痕的桥梁。
训练三：综合情景创作
（情景 + 中英对照范例）
1. 情景：弟弟开门看见"我"雨中持饼干。
要求：包含1个动作-情绪绑定句 + 1个环境反射心理句
His breath hitched when he recognized the soggy box in my hands, a storm of emotions flashing in his eyes.
The fading drizzle mirrored the last barriers melting between us, each drop whispering of forgiveness.
补全段落中缺失的英文表达（每空一词），括号内为中文提示。
Paragraph 1
I realized it was me who was at fault. I had been so ______ (专注于) keeping the party under control that I ______ (未能考虑) how important Toby was to my brother during this difficult time. My ______ (自尊心) had kept me from ______ (主动联系), and now months had passed without a ______ (正式的谈话). One evening, I picked up the phone and left him a ______ (语音留言), apologizing for my behavior and asking if we could meet. To my ______ (宽慰), he called back the next day, and we agreed to ______ (尽快见面).
Paragraph 2
With the biscuits my wife had made, I ______ (到达) my brother’s door. He opened it with a ______ (惊讶的微笑), and for a moment, neither of us spoke. Then we ______ (拥抱) — something we hadn’t done since before his wife ______ (去世). We sat on the porch with Toby ______ (趴在旁边), and I handed him the box of biscuits. “Thank you,” he said ______ (轻声地). We talked for hours, laughing, ______ (回忆往事), and slowly ______ (重建) what had been lost. As I watched Toby gently ______ (把头靠在) my brother’s leg, I knew we were finally on the ______ (治愈之路).
答案与解析
段落 答案 中文提示 考察重点
1 focused on 专注于 心理描写短语
failed to consider 未能考虑 情感转折动词
pride 自尊心 冲突核心词
reaching out 主动联系 高考高频短语
proper conversation 正式的谈话 人际关系词块
voice message 语音留言 现代交际词汇
relief 宽慰 情绪反应名词
get together soon 尽快见面 口语化表达
2 arrived at 到达 基础动作动词
surprised smile 惊讶的微笑 微表情描写
hugged 拥抱 关键和解动作
passed away 去世 委婉语替换
resting beside us 趴在旁边 宠物行为描写
quietly 轻声地 副词修饰情感
remembering old times 回忆往事 情感升华铺垫
rebuilding 重建 主题关键词
rest his head on 把头靠在 细节动作链
path to healing 治愈之路 主题升华隐喻