2025年6月新高考一卷英语试题读后续写精析 讲义（素材）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn't counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50 - pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece's small boys and my six - month - old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn't happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn't heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: "Not a chance." Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he'll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience(良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother's shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty - five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going. 注意：(1) 续写词数应为150个左右；(2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I realized it was me who was at fault.
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With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.
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一 续写策略
读后续写要求考生能有效把握文章的写作意图和人物的情感态度，读懂所给材料的故事情节和行文结构，紧紧围绕所给材料的故事主题，对故事的发展和结局进行合理想象和创作。
01 精读原文，厘清脉络
给出材料的故事情节是续写部分的“指南针”，指引着续写的方向。仔细阅读原文，厘清故事情节、人物关系、矛盾冲突、情感发展等关键信息，才能在构思新的续写时做到前后文逻辑、内容和语言的连贯性与一致性。
02 细读首句，构思框架
研读给定的两段开头语 “I realized it was me who was at fault.” 和 “With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door”，可以确定续写的大致方向。在第一段中详细描述主人公意识到错误后的内心活动和想法；在第二段中重点描写主人公与弟弟见面时的场景和对话，展现和解的过程。
03修改润色，完善优化
优化语言表达，使用恰当准确的词汇和短语、高级丰富的句式表达；添加细节描写，运用生动的动作描写、灵活的对话描写、细致的心理描写和丰富的环境描写来为文章增添色彩； 注意前后衔接，保持文章结构清晰、语意连贯、逻辑合理、行文流畅。
二．写作指导
【前文梗概】
我的妻子和我认为家人朋友多年未聚，于是决定在后院举行老友家庭party，但是自己的兄弟带来了一只五十磅重的大狗，害怕大狗伤害孩子，我让兄弟让他的狗远离现场，大狗因为提前跑了几圈，没有力气，的确没有扰乱party，但是晚餐后开始下雨，我们陷入两难困境（我不想让大狗进屋，兄弟不想让狗淋雨）随后兄弟只好撤回家。随后兄弟觉得自己被冷遇，和我矛盾，我给兄弟发短信（再次举办pary），但是兄弟回复"Not a chance"，于是我与他赌气，但是在一次妻子的提醒中，我想起兄弟妻子因为心脏病在几个月前去世，大狗是他唯一的陪伴，深感抱歉，我决定行动。
【要素分析】
(1)人物关系与情感发展：“我”因过于注重房子的整洁而忽略了哥哥的情感需求，从最初的理直气壮转变为深深地自责。哥哥则因丧妻之痛和健康问题而处于情感脆弱期，狗Toby是他重要的精神寄托。哥哥的受伤与沉默是情节的核心驱动力。
(2)核心冲突：“我”的“规则”与哥哥的“情感需求”之间的冲突。续写需要解决这一冲突，弥合兄弟间的裂痕。
(3)故事主题：探讨亲情、共情（同理心）、理解与和解的重要性。
【解题思路】
本篇续写属于“人际关系修复类”，难度不大。 由续写段首句可知第一段应着重心理描写，主人公回忆起弟弟的困境以及失去妻子后的孤独、对托比的依赖，以及被哥哥拒绝时的双重伤害等。
由续写段第二段可知本段应着重描写和解场景：门开后弟弟的憔悴模样、托比的反应变化（从警惕到认出亲人）、沉默中的情感张力。可以设计用肢体语言表现原谅 —— 比如弟弟接过饼干时颤抖的手，和最终说"托比很想你"这样含蓄的和解信号，最终“血浓于水”的亲情让两人重归于好。
三.写作示范
【下水文1】
I realized it was me who was at fault. My rigid focus on order had blinded me to my brother’s fragile state. Toby wasn't just a pet; he was my grieving brother's lifeline and sole comfort after losing his wife. By prioritizing the kids' temporary safety over his profound need for companionship, I'd dismissed his emotional reality. His curt reply wasn't just about the rain; it was the sound of a door closing on someone already isolated. Shame washed over me and I was determined to apologize to him face to face.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door. My heart pounded as I knocked. He opened it, looking weary. Toby stood beside him, tail stiff. "Hi," I managed, holding out the tin. "Susan made these." He stared silently, the air thick with unsaid words. Finally, he took the tin. "Thanks," he murmured. Toby sniffed my hand, tail tentatively wagging. "Come in," my brother said, stepping back. Relief flooded me and I truly understood the meaning of the saying "Blood is thicker than water!"
【下水文2】
I realized it was me who was at fault. My own pride and my focus on a perfect house had blinded me to his pain. I had treated Toby, his only source of comfort, as a simple inconvenience. For my brother, who had already lost so much, my rigid rule must have felt like another rejection. A wave of shame washed over me. I couldn’t let my foolishness create a permanent distance between us. I had to apologize and show him he was more important than any house rule. With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door. Taking a deep breath, I knocked. When he opened it, his eyes showed surprise, followed by a familiar sadness. Before he could speak, I said, “I am so sorry. I was selfish and I hurt you.” He stood silent for a moment, his shoulders relaxing slightly. Just then, Toby pushed past his legs, swinging his tail and gently pushed his head against my hand. A slight smile of relief finally appeared on my brother’s face as he stepped aside and held the door open.
【参考答案】
I realized it was me who was at fault.Had I allowed my brother to bring Toby inside during the party, we could have kept the dog on a lead, and cleanup would have been easy if he had made a mess. “You need to make this right,” my wife said one morning over coffee. I swallowed my pride. I knew my brother’s daily routine and reasoned I could catch him at home around lunchtime. It had been over two months since the gathering, with still no word from him. Naturally, I was tempted to let it slide, but in the end I knew it was up to me.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.As I stood there, I felt a bit nervous. When he opened the door, he stared at me for a moment. Toby came up to me, tail wagging. That felt like a good sign. He motioned that I could step inside. My next words were that I was sorry for the way I had conducted myself at the party. A faint smile crossed his lips as he took the biscuits from me. We had lunch together happily. Several months later, we had another family function at our house. Of course, my brother brought Toby with him. Thankfully, there were no accidents or issues. My brother had a great time. Later, when I thanked my wife, she smiled and handed me a broom so I could sweep up the dog hair.
四．命题思路分析
（1）情感冲突引入
故事起点：题目开头设定了一个日常生活中的情境——主人公和妻子举办家庭聚会，气氛轻松且充满期待。主人的任务是整理院子，而妻子负责准备小吃。 然而，出现了一个意外——主人公的兄弟带着狗 Toby 来到家中，主人公要求兄弟把狗留在外面，以免狗打扰到小孩子。尽管Toby 性格温和，但它的活跃让主人公感到担心。
冲突的引发：问题的根源是主人公过度关注狗的行为和对孩子的保护，而忽略了自己哥哥在失去妻子后的情感需要，导致了情感的疏远。通过这个冲突，出题者意图考察学生对情感误解和关系修复的处理能力，尤其是在家庭关系中。
（2）责任与宽容主题
情感发展：主人公意识到自己的行为是错误的，并且自我反思后决定主动修复与哥哥的关系。这一转变展示了宽容与责任的主题。出题者希望考察学生是否能在续写中恰当地表现主人公的反思、道歉以及两人关系的修复。
深度反思：与许多以单纯情节推进为主的题目不同，这个题目更注重情感的层次性和深度。主人公在经历内心挣扎和自我反思后，最终采取了行动，表现出一个成熟的人物成长轨迹。因此，本次续写不仅考察学生的情节构建能力，也考察他们如何深刻刻画人物内心的矛盾和转变。
（3）人物成长与情感修复
内心世界描写：续写要求学生在短时间内表现出主人公的内心转变，即从原本的自我中心到体谅和宽容。他/她如何通过一次反思，认识到自己忽略了家庭成员的情感需要？这种情感转变的呈现，要求学生通过细腻的心理描写和情节推进来展现人物的成长。
修复与和解：最后，主人公的道歉与哥哥的接受，是家庭关系中的修复过程，出题者希望通过这一过程，引导学生思考人际关系中的责任担当和理解宽容。
（4）情节与人物互动的自然发展
题目不仅要求续写故事结尾的自然发展，还要求学生在续写过程中关注人物之间的互动，特别是对话和情感交融。这不同于某些只侧重情节起伏或外部事件的出题方式。