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“环 境 描 写” 到 底 怎 么 写?
借景抒情、寓情于景是写作中常用的手法。恰当的背景场景描写有利于推动故事情节的发展,烘托人物的心理活动,给读者身临其境的感受。背景场景描写要有全貌有细节,有全景有特写,要点面结合,重点突出。可以描写事件发生的时间、地点、环境等,也可以描写人看到的景象或感受到的某种情绪。
注意:环境描写只是起画龙点睛的作用,环境描写不要写太长,且环境描写一定为你的内容服务,而不是为了看起来高大上。所以写作的时候千万不要本末倒置,写一些无关紧要的套句或者环境描写只会对情节起到反作用。
Part 1 环境描写的语言技巧
Skill 1
刘德华《冰雨》:冷冷的 冰雨 在我脸上 胡乱地 拍
形容词 意象 介词短语 副词 动词
The icy rain is whipping my face mercilessly.
adj + 意象 + 特定动词 + 副词/介词短语
思维训练
1. The wind blew.
2. The trees waved.
3. The sun shone.
思维训练
1. The wind blew.
The gentle warm wind blew softly on the face.
2. The trees waved.
3. The sun shone.
思维训练
1. The wind blew.
The gentle warm wind blew softly on the face.
2. The trees waved.
The tall green trees waved quietly on the roadsides.
3. The sun shone.
思维训练
1. The wind blew.
The gentle warm wind blew softly on the face.
2. The trees waved.
The tall green trees waved quietly on the roadsides.
3. The sun shone.
The morning sun shone on the ground warmly and gently.
blazing 炽热的 glaring 耀眼的 shimmering 闪烁的 lingering 逗留不去的 weak 微弱的 sun sunlight sunshine shine 发光/照耀 flood in 射进来 kiss 亲吻 burn 燃烧 bright 明亮地
dazzlingly 灿烂/耀眼地
lively 充满活力地
like an oven 像烤箱一样
gentle/mild 温柔/和的 soft 柔和的 weak 微弱的 white/silvery 白/银白的 moon moonlight shine 发光 glow 发光 weakly 微弱地
lightly 轻轻地
gently 轻柔地
softly 轻柔地
glittering 闪闪发光的 stars twinkle 闪烁 sparkle 闪耀/烁 glimmer 发微光 vividly 生动地/活泼地
quietly 安静地
peacefully 平静地
Skill 2
许嵩《断桥残雪》:我望着湖面,水面寒月如雪。
My eyes gazing upon the lake, the water glittered in the moonlight, cold as the winter snow.
写景句 + 比喻 / 拟人
思维训练
1. wind
The icy wind started howling, _________________________________.
2. sun
The morning sunlight flooded in through the curtain, ______________
_________________________________________________________
3. tree
Tall trees lined up on both sides of the street,____________________
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like a sharp knife scratching my face
like pieces of gold dancing on the floor.
like soldiers throwing long shadows on the ground.
思维训练
4. cloud
The white clouds hang low in the sky, __________________________
_________________________________________________________
5. rain
The dreadful rain was pouring down, ___________________________
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6. flower
The flowers dotted the garden, ________________________________
like pieces of cotton sailing with the wind
like monsters beating wildly against the windows.
like elves dancing gracefully in the air.
1. The stars are in the sky.
2. The tree is waving.
3. The stars sparkled.
4. The last leaf of the autumn fell on the ground.
The bright stars scattered in the sky, like gems twinkling brilliantly.
The trees waved wildly in the air, like a drunken man trembling from side to side.
The stars sparkled vividly, like naughty children looking at us with curiosity.
The last leaf of autumn fluttered to the ground, like a drop of autumn’s tear, melting silently in his overwhelming sorrow.
翻译练习
Skill 3
李宗盛《漂洋过海来看你》:在漫天风沙里望着你远去,我竟悲伤的不能自已
With the sand all over the sky, your familiar figure faded away, and a flood of grief welled up in my heart, sweeping over my body.
写景 + 感受 (无灵主语)
a ripple of + 情感名词 run through sb’s heart
a flood / wave of + 情感名词 well up in sb
a sense of +情感名词 + creep over sb / creep on to sb
sb. was immersed in +情感名词.
思维训练
1. wind
The icy wind howling, a ripple of tension ran through his heart.
2. sun
The morning sunlight flooding in through the curtain, a ripple of satisfaction ran through the twins’ heart.
3. moon
The silvery moon glowing in the sky, a ripple of grief ran through Jane’s heart.
思维训练
1. wind
The icy wind howling, a ripple of tension ran through his heart.
2. sun
The morning sunlight flooding in through the curtain, a ripple of satisfaction ran through the twins’ heart.
3. moon
The silvery moon glowing in the sky, a ripple of grief ran through Jane’s heart.
思维训练
1. wind
The icy wind howling, a ripple of tension ran through his heart.
2. sun
The morning sunlight flooding in through the curtain, a ripple of satisfaction ran through the twins’ heart.
3. moon
The silvery moon glowing in the sky, a ripple of grief ran through Jane’s heart.
思维训练
1. wind
The icy wind howling, a ripple of tension ran through his heart.
2. sun
The morning sunlight flooding in through the curtain, a ripple of satisfaction ran through the twins’ heart.
3. moon
The silvery moon glowing in the sky, a ripple of grief ran through Jane’s heart.
思维训练
4. snow
Featherily snowflake falling from the sky, I was immersed in delight.
5. rain
Heavy rain beating down on the street, I was immersed in regret.
6. crowd
Crowds of people gathering into the classroom, I was immersed in awkwardness.
思维训练
4. snow
Featherily snowflake falling from the sky, I was immersed in delight.
5. rain
Heavy rain beating down on the street, I was immersed in regret.
6. crowd
Crowds of people gathering into the classroom, I was immersed in awkwardness.
思维训练
4. snow
Featherily snowflake falling from the sky, I was immersed in delight.
5. rain
Heavy rain beating down on the street, I was immersed in regret.
6. crowd
Crowds of people gathering into the classroom, I was immersed in awkwardness.
思维训练
4. snow
Featherily snowflake falling from the sky, I was immersed in delight.
5. rain
Heavy rain beating down on the street, I was immersed in regret.
6. crowd
Crowds of people gathering into the classroom, I was immersed in awkwardness.
The wind was howling dreadfully and the rain was pouring from the heaven, whipping against the branches of lined trees. I was seized with the roaring power of nature. A sense of horror creeping up on me.
Part 2 环境描写的应用原则
融“情”于景
1. 融“情感”于景:烘托气氛,刻画心理,体现情感
2. 融“情节”于景:推动情节发展
Part 2 环境描写的应用原则
融“情”于景
1. 融“情感”于景:烘托气氛,刻画心理,体现情感
2. 融“情节”于景:推动情节发展
1. The sun shone warmly on the runway, and the trees glowed in the warm sunlight, all of which were encouraging David to complete the run.
这一切都在鼓励着David坚持完成跑步。
2. The leaves were shimmering, the air was filled with delight, and everything around was celebrating David’s bravery.
周围一切都在庆祝David的勇敢。
3. The warm sun shone on David’s face, the trees swayed with the wind, and the whole forest applauded David’s courage.
整座森林都为大卫的勇气而喝彩。
4. Bathed in the warm sunshine, the trees waved in the breeze, sharing David’s delight of finishing the game.
分享着David完成比赛的喜悦。
1. The sun shone warmly on the runway, and the trees glowed in the warm sunlight, all of which were encouraging David to complete the run.
这一切都在鼓励着David坚持完成跑步。
2. The leaves were shimmering, the air was filled with delight, and everything around was celebrating David’s bravery.
周围一切都在庆祝David的勇敢。
3. The warm sun shone on David’s face, the trees swayed with the wind, and the whole forest applauded David’s courage.
整座森林都为大卫的勇气而喝彩。
4. Bathed in the warm sunshine, the trees waved in the breeze, sharing David’s delight of finishing the game.
分享着David完成比赛的喜悦。
1. The sun shone warmly on the runway, and the trees glowed in the warm sunlight, all of which were encouraging David to complete the run.
这一切都在鼓励着David坚持完成跑步。
2. The leaves were shimmering, the air was filled with delight, and everything around was celebrating David’s bravery.
周围一切都在庆祝David的勇敢。
3. The warm sun shone on David’s face, the trees swayed with the wind, and the whole forest applauded David’s courage.
整座森林都为大卫的勇气而喝彩。
4. Bathed in the warm sunshine, the trees waved in the breeze, sharing David’s delight of finishing the game.
分享着David完成比赛的喜悦。
1. The sun shone warmly on the runway, and the trees glowed in the warm sunlight, all of which were encouraging David to complete the run.
这一切都在鼓励着David坚持完成跑步。
2. The leaves were shimmering, the air was filled with delight, and everything around was celebrating David’s bravery.
周围一切都在庆祝David的勇敢。
3. The warm sun shone on David’s face, the trees swayed with the wind, and the whole forest applauded David’s courage.
整座森林都为大卫的勇气而喝彩。
4. Bathed in the warm sunshine, the trees waved in the breeze, sharing David’s delight of finishing the game.
分享着David完成比赛的喜悦。
1. The sun shone warmly on the runway, and the trees glowed in the warm sunlight, all of which were encouraging David to complete the run.
这一切都在鼓励着David坚持完成跑步。
2. The leaves were shimmering, the air was filled with delight, and everything around was celebrating David’s bravery.
周围一切都在庆祝David的勇敢。
3. The warm sun shone on David’s face, the trees swayed with the wind, and the whole forest applauded David’s courage.
整座森林都为大卫的勇气而喝彩。
4. Bathed in the warm sunshine, the trees waved in the breeze, sharing David’s delight of finishing the game.
分享着David完成比赛的喜悦。
5. As the sky gradually darkened and the light dimmed, he quickened his steps.
随着天色渐晚,光线渐暗,他加快了脚步。
6. She had no choice but to stop for another night. A gust of cold wind blew and she started to miss the warmth of Tom’s hug.
她别无他法,只能在这里再待上一晚。一股冷风吹来, 她开始想念Tom温暖的怀抱。
7. I closed my eyes in the speeding car. Winding rivers, towering mountains, deep valleys and sunny beaches held me entirely in their fascination.
在飞驰的车上,我闭上双眼。蜿蜒的小溪,高耸的群山,幽深的山谷,明媚的海滩,让我深深着迷。
5. As the sky gradually darkened and the light dimmed, he quickened his steps.
随着天色渐晚,光线渐暗,他加快了脚步。
6. She had no choice but to stop for another night. A gust of cold wind blew and she started to miss the warmth of Tom’s hug.
她别无他法,只能在这里再待上一晚。一股冷风吹来, 她开始想念Tom温暖的怀抱。
7. I closed my eyes in the speeding car. Winding rivers, towering mountains, deep valleys and sunny beaches held me entirely in their fascination.
在飞驰的车上,我闭上双眼。蜿蜒的小溪,高耸的群山,幽深的山谷,明媚的海滩,让我深深着迷。
5. As the sky gradually darkened and the light dimmed, he quickened his steps.
随着天色渐晚,光线渐暗,他加快了脚步。
6. She had no choice but to stop for another night. A gust of cold wind blew and she started to miss the warmth of Tom’s hug.
她别无他法,只能在这里再待上一晚。一股冷风吹来, 她开始想念Tom温暖的怀抱。
7. I closed my eyes in the speeding car. Winding rivers, towering mountains, deep valleys and sunny beaches held me entirely in their fascination.
在飞驰的车上,我闭上双眼。蜿蜒的小溪,高耸的群山,幽深的山谷,明媚的海滩,让我深深着迷。
5. As the sky gradually darkened and the light dimmed, he quickened his steps.
随着天色渐晚,光线渐暗,他加快了脚步。
6. She had no choice but to stop for another night. A gust of cold wind blew and she started to miss the warmth of Tom’s hug.
她别无他法,只能在这里再待上一晚。一股冷风吹来, 她开始想念Tom温暖的怀抱。
7. I closed my eyes in the speeding car. Winding rivers, towering mountains, deep valleys and sunny beaches held me entirely in their fascination.
在飞驰的车上,我闭上双眼。蜿蜒的小溪,高耸的群山,幽深的山谷,明媚的海滩,让我深深着迷。
Part 3 练习
As we approached the camping site surrounded by mountains,we had difficulty containing our excitement. ________________________
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字数80左右。续写一段“美好欢乐”的场景。不限情节,合理即可。需体现本课内容,加入一定的环境描写。
随着我们靠近群山围绕的宿营地,我们难以抑制心中的兴奋。一到达宿营地,妈妈就立即打开车门,冲了出去,热切地催促我们搭帐篷。绿树连绵起伏,各色野花点缀其中,周围迷人的风景堪称一场名副其实的视觉盛宴。我们沐浴着阳光,呼吸着鲜花甜美的芬芳。鸟儿在欢快地歌唱,好像在热情地迎接我们。我的家人惬意地聊着天,过去美好的记忆涌上我们心头。
KEYS:
As we approached the camping site surrounded by mountains,we had difficulty containing our excitement.On reaching it,my mom opened the door immediately,charged outside and eagerly urged us to put up the tent.The surrounding fascinating landscape was a true feast for our eyes,with its rolling green trees dotted with various wild flowers.We were bathed in the sun and breathed in the sweet scent of fresh flowers.Birds were singing happily as if they were warmly greeting us.My family chatted comfortably,sweet memories of the past crowding in on us.
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