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写作中怎样使用复杂 结构和高级词汇
一.复杂结构:
1.使用适当的时态 2.适当的语态
3.使用不定式 4.使用过去分词
5.使用V.+ing形式 6.使用名词性从句
7.使用状语从句 8.使用定语从句
9.使用虚拟语气
10.使用强调句,倒装句,感叹句
11.使用并列句
一)、怎样运用复杂结构:
1. 改变时态
The bell is ringing now. (一般)
2. 改变语态
People suggest that the conference be put off. (一般)
There goes the bell. (高级)
It is suggested that the conference be put off. (高级)
3. 使用不定式
4. 使用过去分词
He is so kind that he can help me. (一般)
He is so kind as to help me. (高级)
She walked out of the room and many students followed her. (一般)
Followed by many students, she… . (高级)
Once it is seen, it can never be forgotten . (一般)
Once seen, it can … . (高级)
5. 使用v-ing形式
When he arrives please give me an e-mail. (一般)
If the weather permits, I’ll come tomorrow. (一般)
On his arriving/ arrival, please give…. (高级)
Weather permitting, I’ll come tomorrow. (高级)
Now our school has three teachers. They teach 48 pupils. (一般)
Now our School has three teachers, teaching 48 pupils. (高级)
It disappointed everybody that he didn’t turn up. (一般)
I happened to have met him. (一般)
6. 使用名词性从句
The fact that he didn’t turn up disappointed everybody. (高级)
It happened that I had met him. (高级)
To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things. (一般)
What surprised him is that the girl…. (高级)
7. 使用状语从句
I won’t believe what he says. (一般)
If you come back before six o’clock, you can go out. (一般)
The meal was very nice. We all enjoyed it very much. (一般)
No matter what he says, I won’t believe. (高级)
You can go out on condition that you come back before…. (高级)
The meal was so nice that we all…. (高级)
8. 使用定语从句
The girl is spoken highly of. Her composition was well written. (一般)
The girl whose composition was well written was spoken highly of. (高级)
I studied Chinese, maths, English, physics, chemistry and computer at school. (一般)
The subjects I studied at school included Chinese, maths, English…. (高级)
9. 使用虚拟语气
The ship didn’t sink because there were the efforts of the captain. (一般)
I wasn’t invited to the party, so I didn’t attend it. (一般)
If I had been invited to the party, I would have attended it. (高级)
But for the efforts of the captain, the ship would have sunk. (高级)
10. 使用强调句、倒装句、感叹句
Regular radio broadcasts began in 1920. (一般)
It was not until 1920 that regular radio…. (高级)
Weak as I am, I’ll make the effort. (高级)
Though I’m weak, I will make the effort. (一般)
How glad we were to see the crops and...! (高级)
We were glad to see the crops and vegetables growing very well. (一般)
11. 使用并列句
If you go through the gate, you’ll find the entrance to Bear Country. (一般)
Go through the gate, and you’ll find…. (高级)
I got up late this morning, otherwise I could have caught the early bus. (高级)
I got up late this morning. I didn’t catch the early bus. (一般)
The more he spoke, the more excited he felt. (高级)
When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. (一般)
At the news of her death, he went…. (高级)
She has trouble in pronouncing the word. (高级)
Whose turn is it to be on duty today (高级)
When he heard she had died, he went pale with sorrow. (一般)
She can’t correctly pronounce the word. (一般)
Who will be on duty today (一般)
怎样运用高级词汇:
二)、怎样运用高级词汇:
As a result, the plan was a failure. (一般)
She went to Australia in order to study music. (一般)
Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable. (一般)
The plan turned out to be a failure. (高级)
She went to Australia for the purpose of studying music. (高级)
Thanks to the good weather, our journey…. (高级)
She doesn’t like sports.
She cares nothing for sports.
三)、写作常见错误分析:
1. 句子缺谓语
1) The building like a match box. 2) He told me that all my classmates sitting in the classroom.
1) A worker of the farm lead us to the field.
2) All the students like books that was written by Lu Xun.
2.主谓不一致,尤其是单数第三人称作主语时,谓语的单复数形式出现错误。
3.时态错误
4.词性混用
1) When he came back, he found that his wife has gone to bed.
2) What are you doing this time yesterday
1) She enjoys study English.
2) If anyone against the plan, please let me know.
5.介词误用
6.冠词误用
1) In my surprise, he has got the first prize.
2) He came here to attend the meeting by a new car.
1) We elected Li Hua the monitor of the Class Five.
2) Once upon a time, there was an one-eyed lion.
3) The history is actually a very interesting subject.
7.名词的数混淆
8.动词用法错误
Thank you for all the informations.
1) Where are you come from
2) When I arrived Hong Kong, my mother was there waiting for me.
3) He didn’t notice the teacher to come into the classroom.
4) The accident was happened in 1999.
9.习惯用法错误
The reason is because he does not know what to do next.
10. 句子之间的逻辑关系不清
误:It hit the old man down but the driver, a woman, didn’t stop her car.
Finding she had caused an accident, the woman sped her car to flee away. The old man and I saw the car’s number. It’s AC864. The old man couldn’t move , I decided to help him.
正:It hit the old man down but the driver, who was a woman, didn’t stop her car. Finding she had caused an accident, the woman sped her car to flee away.
Fortunately, I saw the car’s number. It’s AC864. Noticing the old man couldn’t move, I decided to help him.
11.画蛇添足 、过多的长句使句子复杂化(语言不简洁)
修改前:
A famous sportsman was giving a speech which was rather interesting.
修改后:
A famous sportsman was giving an interesting speech.
修改前
Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission. The air pollution is becoming more and more serious which is caused by buses and cars. What’s more, so many rivers are polluted by dirty water which is from factory. In addition, sandstorm struck us now and then, from which we suffered a lot.
修改后
Nowadays, some people are still cutting down trees without permission. As a result, people have to suffer sandstorms now and then. What’s more, as buses and cars give off a lot of poisonous gases, the air is getting dirtier and dirtier. Moreover, there are many rivers polluted by dirty water from factories.
The situation is becoming more and more serious.
12.过于简单的句子使文章缺少逻辑
性,可读性。
修改前
Yesterday, there was a policeman in the street. He stopped a car. The car was at the corner. It looked like a Honda. There was a boy on the sidewalk. He was riding his bicycle. The bicycle was a two-wheeler. The car nearly knocked down the boy.
修改后
Yesterday, a policeman stopped a car—Honda at the corner of the street, because it nearly knocked down a boy who was riding a two-wheel bicycle on the sidewalk.
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