2024年浙江首考卷读后续写分析（讲义）-2026届高三英语复习
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高考真题续写分析第二篇
(2024·浙江1月卷)Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water.One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building.It was a six-story building.On each floor,hallways stretched in four directions,leading to classrooms,laboratories,and teachers’ offices.Somewhere in the building,there was also a library,a cafeteria,and a gym.
Having a poor sense of direction,Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building.All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about,let alone commit to memory.She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist.
In her first P.E.class,Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside.She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic.There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile.To Eva,“a mile” was used to describe long distances.It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s,and that always seemed like a long way,even in a car!
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子),Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However,while some of her classmates edged ahead,others actually fell behind.“It’s just the beginning,” she thought.“I’ll come in last for sure.”
Soon Eva began to breathe hard,with her heart pounding and legs shaking.Feeling desperate,Eva started using a mind trick on herself.She stopped thinking about the word “mile”.Instead,she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead.Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯).After that,she tried to see if she could complete her first lap.One lap turned into two,then three,then four.
注意:续写词数应为150个左右。
Paragraph 1:
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised.
Paragraph 2:
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
1.文本阅读
第1—2段:引入故事,铺垫线索。伊娃方向感差,在校园里找路很困难。
第3—4段:在一次体育课上,教练要求他们沿着跑道跑一英里。
第5段:伊娃发现集中注意力于树的影子能激励她完成跑步。
伏笔①:Instead,she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead.
伏笔②:Having a poor sense of direction,Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building.
2.写作线索
受到教练的赞赏——充满成就感——感悟成功靠策略而不是体力——把学校布局看成跑道——熟悉学校——升华主题:韧性和决心
3.情节构建
阅 读 任 务 维度 原文 文意
背景 (结局安排) Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. 伊娃在高中的第一个星期都在努力勉强维持。
进展 (发展) ①In her first P.E.class,Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside.②When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子),Eva figured she would be left in the dust.③Feeling desperate,Eva started using a mind trick on herself. ①在她的第一堂体育课上,当皮特教练宣布每个人都必须绕着外面的跑道跑一英里时,伊娃惊呆了。②当皮特教练吹响哨子时,伊娃认为她会被甩在后面。③感到绝望的伊娃开始对自己使用心理暗示。
冲突 (矛盾点) To Eva,“a mile” was used to describe long distances. 对伊娃来说,“一英里”是用来形容长距离的。
写作手法 上文多处使用心理描写 丰富人物形象
续 写 任 务 结局 (结果) 段落1:根据续写段落第1段首句内容“当皮特教练在终点线对她说‘干得好!’时,伊娃很惊讶。”再联系原文伏笔①,可预测发展方向。第1段描写“伊娃通过追随影子的方法到达终点后的状态及所思所想”,同时为下一段内容作铺垫。 段落2:根据续写段落第2段首句内容“伊娃决定用同样的手段来记住学校大楼。”再联系原文伏笔②,可预测发展方向。第2段描写“伊娃通过将学校大楼看成跑道来逐渐记住其布局以及这件事之后的感悟”。最后升华主题:韧性和决心。
4.精彩范文
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised.Her lungs were burning,and her legs felt like jelly,but her heart was soaring with an unfamiliar sense of accomplishment.As she bent over,hands on her knees,trying to catch her breath,she couldn’t help but smile.The once intimidating mile had been conquered,not by sheer physical strength but by a mental strategy that broke the daunting task into manageable segments.She realised that her fear had been bigger than the actual challenge,and as she looked around at her peers,some panting,some still running,she felt a kinship with them all.
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.Each corridor and staircase would no longer be a part of an overwhelming maze but a series of short journeys.She began to see the sprawling campus as a track she could navigate,one step at a time.Day by day,the hallways became familiar,the faces less strange,and the classrooms less daunting.As she rounded the corner to her next class,a smile playing on her lips,she thought to herself,“Just one more lap.” Little did she know,as she walked through the halls,that each step was a testament to her newfound resilience and determination.
[写作指导]
第一步:梳理文本信息
Topic/Storyline 伊娃方向感差
When 高中时期
Where 学校
Who 伊娃和皮特教练
Why 方向感差,伊娃找不到位置
What 害怕跑步
How 专注于橡树投在跑道上的阴影
Main idea:本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了高中生伊娃因为方向感不强,经常在学校里迷路。在一次体育课上,教练要求他们沿着跑道跑步的时候,伊娃发现集中注意力于树的影子能激励她完成跑步,她通过这个方法重新认识了校园。
第二步:理顺情节线索
段落 大意
第1—2段 伊娃方向感差,在校园里找路很困难
第3—4段 在一次体育课上,教练要求他们沿着跑道跑一英里
第5段 伊娃发现集中注意力于树的影子能激励她完成跑步
第三步:分析续写段落开头语,构思续写情节
第1段 开头语 关键词块:“Nice work!”
情节预设:由第一段首句内容“当皮特教练在终点线对她说‘干得好!’时,伊娃很惊讶。”可知,第一段可描写伊娃通过追随影子的方法到达终点后的状态及所思所想,同时为下一段内容作铺垫。
第2段 开头语 关键词块:the school building
情节预设:由第二段首句内容“伊娃决定用同样的手段来记住学校大楼。”可知,第二段可描写伊娃通过将学校大楼看成跑道来逐渐记住其布局以及这件事之后的感悟。
第四步:审题立意谋篇
人称 第三人称
时态 一般过去时
伏笔 ①Instead,she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead. ②Having a poor sense of direction,Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building.
续写线索 受到教练的赞赏——充满成就感——感悟成功靠策略而不是体力——把学校布局看成跑道——熟悉学校——升华主题:韧性和决心
第五步:优化润色成文
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised.①Her lungs were burning,and her legs felt like jelly,but her heart was soaring with an unfamiliar sense of accomplishment.②As she bent over,hands on her knees,trying to catch her breath,she couldn’t help but smile.③The once intimidating mile had been conquered,not by sheer physical strength but by a mental strategy that broke the daunting task into manageable segments.She realised that her fear had been bigger than the actual challenge,and as she looked around at her peers,some panting,some still running,she felt a kinship with them all. Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. ④Each corridor and staircase would no longer be a part of an overwhelming maze but a series of short journeys.She began to see the sprawling campus as a track she could navigate,one step at a time.Day by day,the hallways became familiar,the faces less strange,and the classrooms less daunting.As she rounded the corner to her next class,a smile playing on her lips,she thought to herself,“Just one more lap.” ⑤Little did she know,as she walked through the halls,that each step was a testament to her newfound resilience and determination. ①排比; ②独立结构,分词作状语; ③not...but...; ④呼应原文第二段; ⑤倒装;总领全文,升华主题。
(2024·浙江1月卷)Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water.One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building.It was a six-story building.On each floor,hallways stretched in four directions,leading to classrooms,laboratories,and teachers’ offices.Somewhere in the building,there was also a library,a cafeteria,and a gym.
Having a poor sense of direction,Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building.All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about,let alone commit to memory.She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist.
In her first P.E.class,Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside.She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic.There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile.To Eva,“a mile” was used to describe long distances.It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s,and that always seemed like a long way,even in a car!
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子),Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However,while some of her classmates edged ahead,others actually fell behind.“It’s just the beginning,” she thought.“I’ll come in last for sure.”
Soon Eva began to breathe hard,with her heart pounding and legs shaking.Feeling desperate,Eva started using a mind trick on herself.She stopped thinking about the word “mile”.Instead,she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead.Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯).After that,she tried to see if she could complete her first lap.One lap turned into two,then three,then four.
注意:续写词数应为150个左右。
Paragraph 1:
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised.
Paragraph 2:
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
1.文本阅读
第1—2段:引入故事,铺垫线索。伊娃方向感差,在校园里找路很困难。
第3—4段:在一次体育课上,教练要求他们沿着跑道跑一英里。
第5段:伊娃发现集中注意力于树的影子能激励她完成跑步。
伏笔①:Instead,she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead.
伏笔②:Having a poor sense of direction,Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building.
2.写作线索
受到教练的赞赏——充满成就感——感悟成功靠策略而不是体力——把学校布局看成跑道——熟悉学校——升华主题:韧性和决心
3.情节构建
阅 读 任 务 维度 原文 文意
背景 (结局安排) Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. 伊娃在高中的第一个星期都在努力勉强维持。
进展 (发展) ①In her first P.E.class,Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside.②When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子),Eva figured she would be left in the dust.③Feeling desperate,Eva started using a mind trick on herself. ①在她的第一堂体育课上,当皮特教练宣布每个人都必须绕着外面的跑道跑一英里时,伊娃惊呆了。②当皮特教练吹响哨子时,伊娃认为她会被甩在后面。③感到绝望的伊娃开始对自己使用心理暗示。
冲突 (矛盾点) To Eva,“a mile” was used to describe long distances. 对伊娃来说,“一英里”是用来形容长距离的。
写作手法 上文多处使用心理描写 丰富人物形象
续 写 任 务 结局 (结果) 段落1:根据续写段落第1段首句内容“当皮特教练在终点线对她说‘干得好!’时,伊娃很惊讶。”再联系原文伏笔①,可预测发展方向。第1段描写“伊娃通过追随影子的方法到达终点后的状态及所思所想”,同时为下一段内容作铺垫。 段落2:根据续写段落第2段首句内容“伊娃决定用同样的手段来记住学校大楼。”再联系原文伏笔②,可预测发展方向。第2段描写“伊娃通过将学校大楼看成跑道来逐渐记住其布局以及这件事之后的感悟”。最后升华主题:韧性和决心。
4.精彩范文
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised.Her lungs were burning,and her legs felt like jelly,but her heart was soaring with an unfamiliar sense of accomplishment.As she bent over,hands on her knees,trying to catch her breath,she couldn’t help but smile.The once intimidating mile had been conquered,not by sheer physical strength but by a mental strategy that broke the daunting task into manageable segments.She realised that her fear had been bigger than the actual challenge,and as she looked around at her peers,some panting,some still running,she felt a kinship with them all.
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.Each corridor and staircase would no longer be a part of an overwhelming maze but a series of short journeys.She began to see the sprawling campus as a track she could navigate,one step at a time.Day by day,the hallways became familiar,the faces less strange,and the classrooms less daunting.As she rounded the corner to her next class,a smile playing on her lips,she thought to herself,“Just one more lap.” Little did she know,as she walked through the halls,that each step was a testament to her newfound resilience and determination.
[写作指导]
第一步:梳理文本信息
Topic/Storyline 伊娃方向感差
When 高中时期
Where 学校
Who 伊娃和皮特教练
Why 方向感差,伊娃找不到位置
What 害怕跑步
How 专注于橡树投在跑道上的阴影
Main idea:本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了高中生伊娃因为方向感不强,经常在学校里迷路。在一次体育课上,教练要求他们沿着跑道跑步的时候,伊娃发现集中注意力于树的影子能激励她完成跑步,她通过这个方法重新认识了校园。
第二步:理顺情节线索
段落 大意
第1—2段 伊娃方向感差,在校园里找路很困难
第3—4段 在一次体育课上,教练要求他们沿着跑道跑一英里
第5段 伊娃发现集中注意力于树的影子能激励她完成跑步
第三步:分析续写段落开头语,构思续写情节
第1段 开头语 关键词块:“Nice work!”
情节预设:由第一段首句内容“当皮特教练在终点线对她说‘干得好!’时,伊娃很惊讶。”可知,第一段可描写伊娃通过追随影子的方法到达终点后的状态及所思所想,同时为下一段内容作铺垫。
第2段 开头语 关键词块:the school building
情节预设:由第二段首句内容“伊娃决定用同样的手段来记住学校大楼。”可知,第二段可描写伊娃通过将学校大楼看成跑道来逐渐记住其布局以及这件事之后的感悟。
第四步:审题立意谋篇
人称 第三人称
时态 一般过去时
伏笔 ①Instead,she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead. ②Having a poor sense of direction,Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building.
续写线索 受到教练的赞赏——充满成就感——感悟成功靠策略而不是体力——把学校布局看成跑道——熟悉学校——升华主题:韧性和决心
第五步:优化润色成文
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line,Eva was surprised.①Her lungs were burning,and her legs felt like jelly,but her heart was soaring with an unfamiliar sense of accomplishment.②As she bent over,hands on her knees,trying to catch her breath,she couldn’t help but smile.③The once intimidating mile had been conquered,not by sheer physical strength but by a mental strategy that broke the daunting task into manageable segments.She realised that her fear had been bigger than the actual challenge,and as she looked around at her peers,some panting,some still running,she felt a kinship with them all. Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. ④Each corridor and staircase would no longer be a part of an overwhelming maze but a series of short journeys.She began to see the sprawling campus as a track she could navigate,one step at a time.Day by day,the hallways became familiar,the faces less strange,and the classrooms less daunting.As she rounded the corner to her next class,a smile playing on her lips,she thought to herself,“Just one more lap.” ⑤Little did she know,as she walked through the halls,that each step was a testament to her newfound resilience and determination. ①排比; ②独立结构,分词作状语; ③not...but...; ④呼应原文第二段; ⑤倒装;总领全文,升华主题。