2026届高考英语总复习写作培优高分进阶第2部分读后续写 课件（共6份）

(共15张PPT)
写作培优　高分进阶
第二部分　读后续写
第一讲　命题规律技巧
读后续写是一种将“阅读”与“写作”深度融合起来进行考查的题型，它给学生提供了更多发挥想象力、展示语言输出能力的空间，充分体现了高考评价体系中所倡导的综合性、应用性和创新性。读后续写题型首先出现在2016年 10月浙江卷英语写作中。
一、读后续写命题透视
2020年新高考Ⅰ卷(适用地区：山东)、Ⅱ卷(适用地区：海南)作为第一批新高考试点被推出。截止到2023年，新高考Ⅰ卷适用地区有山东、湖北、江苏、河北、广东、湖南、福建、浙江；新高考Ⅱ卷适用地区有海南、辽宁、重庆、云南、山西、安徽、黑龙江、吉林。它们都有读后续写这一题型。
与浙江卷不同的是，新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷读后续写没有在阅读材料中提供画线词，这似乎给学生的写作思维插上了腾飞的翅膀。然而，读后续写不是随心所欲地写，而是根据题目要求，在读懂原文的基础上，利用原材料、线索和情节等充分发挥想象力和创造力来续写。
真题回眸
命题风向 1.读后续写选材突出个人成长、社会关爱、家庭亲情、劳动教育、学会感恩等主题。
2．续写思路和线索隐藏于段落开头语中或在原文的最后段落中。读后续写并非天马行空式的随意发挥和创作，而是在彻底读懂原文的基础上根据原文信息和所给出的两段开头语进行写作，因此续写情节必须合情合理，并与原文构成一个有机的整体。
3．读后续写的选材特征：阅读材料要有趣，内容能延伸；难度要适当，易于理解和模仿；长度应适宜，有丰富的内容。
4．读后续写这一题型是对学生“语言、思维、文化”的三位一体式考查。在进行读后续写时，学生既要运用所学语言知识，还要了解文化背景，同时发挥创造性思维。
二、读后续写高分攻略
1．评分标准
读后续写评分细则
(1)本题总分为25分，按五个档次进行评分。
(2)评分时，应主要从内容、词汇和语法以及篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体为：
①续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。
②所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。
③语句间的衔接和全文的连贯性。
各档次的给分范围和要求 备注
档次 描述 (1)评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次， 最后给分。
(2)评分时还应注意：
①词数少于 120的，酌情扣分；
②书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分；
③单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
第五档 (21－25分) ①创造了丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高； ②使用了多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构，有个别小错，但完全不影响理解； ③有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段，全文结构清晰，意义连贯。 各档次的给分范围和要求 备注
档次 描述 (1)评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次， 最后给分。
(2)评分时还应注意：
①词数少于 120的，酌情扣分；
②书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分；
③单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
第四档 (16－20分) ①创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高； ②使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达较流畅，可能有些许错误，但不影响理解； ③比较有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。 各档次的给分范围和要求 备注
档次 描述 (1)评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次， 最后给分。
(2)评分时还应注意：
①词数少于 120的，酌情扣分；
②书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分；
③单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
第三档 (11－15分) ①创造了基本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境相关； ②使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有一些错误或不恰当之处，但基本不影响理解； ③基本有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。 各档次的给分范围和要求 备注
档次 描述 (1)评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次， 最后给分。
(2)评分时还应注意：
①词数少于 120的，酌情扣分；
②书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分；
③单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
第二档 (6－10分) ①内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题，续写不够完整，与原文情境有一定程度脱节； ②所用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多且比较低级，影响理解； ③未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义不够连贯。 各档次的给分范围和要求 备注
档次 描述 (1)评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次， 最后给分。
(2)评分时还应注意：
①词数少于 120的，酌情扣分；
②书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分；
③单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
第一档 (1－5分) ①内容和逻辑有较多重大问题，或有部分内容抄自原文，续写不完整，与原文情景基本脱节； ②所使用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误极多，严重影响理解； ③几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义不连贯。 各档次的给分范围和要求 备注
档次 描述 (1)评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次， 最后给分。
(2)评分时还应注意：
①词数少于 120的，酌情扣分；
②书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分；
③单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
零分 ①未作答； ②所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判； ③书写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。 2.解题攻略
【续写“7—3—4”原则】
七个不 不增加人物 三个一致 原文一致原则
不增加旁支情节 曲折性原则
不用过多对话 正能量原则
不用负能量结局 四个衔接 续写第一段第二句：衔接(给出的)第一段首句
不在文末设置悬念 续写第一段尾句：衔接(给出的)第二段首句
不偏离原文主题 续写第二段第二句：衔接(给出的)第二段首句
不违背逻辑常理 续写第二段尾句：衔接前文并升华原文主旨
【续写5步骤】(共19张PPT)
写作培优　高分进阶
第二部分　读后续写
第二讲　续写文本解读
读后续写的体裁以记叙文为主，记叙文是以写人物的经历和事物发展变化为主要内容的一种文体形式。要写好续写文章，深刻理解文本是第一步。理解文本要注意以下几个方面。
一、浅层信息获取
1．抓住记叙文的六要素
记叙文的六要素即人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，读后续写所提供的文本已给出了前几个要素。因此阅读文本时要紧扣所给的要素。
2．厘清人物关系
阅读时要关注文章写作视角，即写作人称，标记文中的主要人物，并厘清这些主要人物之间的关系，如亲子关系、师生关系、同学关系等，这对于此后的续写至关重要。
二、深层文本解读
1．把握两大线索
即情节线和情感线。阅读文本时要抓住这两条主线，以便更好地理解文章，为续写做好准备。只有对原文的脉络线索有正确和深刻的理解，续写的内容才能和原文骨肉相连，契合紧密。
2．明确故事主旨
读后续写的主题体现立德树人精神，围绕家庭亲情、个人成长、校园生活、人与人之间守望互助、人与自然和动物的和谐相处创设情境。因此，广大考生在做读后续写题目时，应在此范围内正确判断其主题，保证自己的续写内容正确体现主题、不偏离主题。
3．抓住伏笔与铺垫
对于作者而言，“挖坑”和“填坑”是创作的一大乐趣。就像完形填空题型中的“复现”一样，文章中重要的细节本来就会反复出现，反复被强调。对于读后续写而言，要求续写内容要和所给短文一脉相承，最好的方式就是呼应所给短文中的细节。抓住可以呼应的细节，可以帮助我们打开思路。而且有些时候，前文的细节对续写部分会起到限定作用，忽略了重要的细节，很可能导致“故事续写”变成前后矛盾的“续写事故”。
【典例示范】
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest.I said no without thinking.I did not love writing.My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language.Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts.No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply：“Because I love your stories.If you're willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words，I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere's horse as my subject.Paul Revere was a silversmith(银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18,1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming, My story would come straight from the horse's mouth.Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else's choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately.I got tired.I had doubts.I wanted to quit.But, like Revere's horse, I kept going.I worked hard.I checked my spelling.I asked my older sister to correct my grammar.I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library.I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said，“Great.Now, write it again.”I wrote it again, and again and again.When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If I didn't win, I wouldn't care.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.
一、浅层信息获取
1．抓住记叙文的六要素
人物 ________________________________________________
时间 ______________________________
地点 ___________________
起因 my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest
经过 Encouraged by my teacher, Chose a subject and began to write
结果 ...
I, my social studies teacher, my older sister
When I was in middle school
in middle school
2.厘清人物关系
主要人物及关系 (1)____________________________
(2)_____________________________
次要人物 __________________
my social studies teacher
I(a middle school student)
my older sister
二、深层文本解读
1．把握两大线索
情节线 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
情感线 ____________________________________________
my teacher asked me to enter a writing contest→my teacher encouraged me to have a try→I chose a subject and began to write
resistant→willing to do→persistent→enjoyable
2.明确故事主旨
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者上中学的时候，社会学老师邀请作者参加一个写作比赛。作者不喜欢写作，于是想都没想就拒绝了。但是在老师的鼓励下，作者同意试一试。作者在写作过程中虽然很累，但是没有放弃，坚持下来了。在作者最终完成写作时，作者感到写作让他很快乐，他已经不在乎输赢了。本文主题体现了立德树人的精神，彰显了人性的光辉。
3．抓住伏笔与铺垫
①老师让我参加作文大赛：__________________________________
___________________________________________________________
②我的英语是第二语言：____________________________________
___________________________________
③受到老师的鼓励去参赛：_________________________________
_____________________
When I was in middle school, my social
studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest.
My family came from Brazil, so English was
only my second language.
Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give
it a try.
④以平静心态对待输赢：____________________________________
________________________________________________________________________
When I finally finished it, the thought of
winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If I didn't win, I wouldn't
care.(共31张PPT)
写作培优　高分进阶
第二部分　读后续写
第三讲　续写情节构建
第一节　拟定续写框架
做读后续写题时，对所给文本后面的故事情节及故事结尾的推断是写好读后续写的前提。高考所给的读后续写形式是半开放性的，这种形式既可以让考生充分发挥想象力，又能让考生有章可循。考生在推测后续情节时一般根据两个方面：第一是所给文章的情节，特别是伏笔之处；第二是所给每段的首句。
一、捕捉续写点，妙照应衔接
利用捕捉和对应的手法，找到原文设置的伏笔，合理推测照应续写的段落，以使续写段落在语言、逻辑和内容上符合原文基调。
二、研读两首句，巧构思框架
1．两段首句定一框
所给第一段的首句既能承接上文，也是本段的起始句，由第二段的首句可以推测第一段的结尾内容。通过这两段首句可以大体推断第一段的内容。
2．二框二首正能量
由第二段的首句可以预测第二段的内容，尤其注意结尾一定是圆满的、皆大欢喜的内容或者正能量的结局。由此可以推断第二段的主要情节。
【典例示范】
(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run.Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线) through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence.He was small for ten years old.His usual big toothy smile was absent today.I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened.“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him，” he explained uncomfortably.“I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration(懊恼)．I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing.After making sure that David could run if he wanted，I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid.He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team.It just took him longer—that's all.David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish.As a special education teacher at the school，I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
【情节设计】
一、捕捉续写点，妙照应衔接
利用捕捉和对应的手法，找到原文设置的伏笔：
1．大卫想放弃比赛：_______________________________________
______________________________________________________________
I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
2．“我”对大卫的处境表示理解，但是赞赏他的决心和毅力：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
As a special education teacher at the school，I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
二、研读两首句，巧构思框架
根据给出的第一段首句“We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.”可知，我们坐在一起，但是 David并没有看我。由此可见，David此刻很煎熬。这一段可以描写主人公对 David心情的理解，用语言安慰和鼓励 David，最终 David态度的变化。
根据给出的第二段首句“I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.”可知， David 来到了起跑线上，准备和其他同学一起参赛。上一段最后的情节需要和第二段首句呼应，描写 David战胜了自己，改变了主意，决定继续参赛。第二段需要描写 David跑步时的场景， David的努力，观众们的反应，比赛最终的结果， David 的心情，主人公的心情。
第一段： We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.
情节构思：________________________________________________
_________________________
第二段：I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
情节构思：________________________________________________
____________
作者鼓励 David 继续完成比赛→David经过激烈的心理斗争→最终决定参加比赛
David开始参赛→虽然中途遇到困难→仍然坚持到最后，完成比赛
【范文赏读】
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. Staring at David，“You never miss a single practice, and I firmly believe that you will finish your run if you bravely face this challenge，”I said gently.He took a relaxed breath.“The reason why you should show up is that you have made full preparations for this event，”I added in a sincere voice.At my words, with tears rolling down his cheeks, David turned to me and firmly expressed his determination to finish the cross-country run.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.The race started.It was difficult for the young to run so long a distance, not to mention David with a brain disease.However, David kept running as he practiced again and again, though he was out of breath within a few kilometers.He always picked himself up again and continued his running.To our delight, David reached the finish line and won a medal for his persistence.It was his strong determination that made a difference.
第二节　续写情节优化
读后续写中的情节设计不能天马行空、脱离题目给定的前文和两段首句。我们必须依据情节发展和常识，在给定的框架内，可按“所见、所闻、所说、所思、所做”或从环境、心理、动作、语言和情感等五个方面着手，每段写5至8个句子，丰富情节内容，推动问题的解决。
1．所见：环境描写/人物描写/神情描写
细致刻画文中主人公看到了什么，描写所看到的景象：环境、人物和神情等。
2．所闻/所说：语言描写
即文中人物说了什么，描写文中主人公和其他人物的对话。
3．所思：心理描写
即文中人物心里想了什么，描写文中主人公心理活动。
4．所做：动作描写
即文中人物做了什么，细致刻画描写文中人物的动作。
【典例示范】
(2022·1月浙江卷改编)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When Dr. Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class，I secretly hoped that he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with.Above all，I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match.As fate(命运) would have it, Dr.Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself.He looked at me as though I weren't there.I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course.He wasn't mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression that he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn't look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn't say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis(假说), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings.Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project，I was uneasy.Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me.I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn't want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out.I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers.I wasn't sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
【续写分析】
利用“五所”设问，丰富续写内容
1．第一段我们可以大胆设问：
(1)__________________________________________
(2)_____________________________________________
(3)_____________________________________________
(4)_____________________________________________
根据这四个问题，第一段就有内容可写了。
Did we share our ideas with each other？
Would that boy like to accept my opinions？
What should I do when he ignored my advice？
How would I feel when he ignored my advice？
2．第二段我们可以大胆设问：
(1)_______________________________________________________________________________________________
(2)_______________________________________
(3)________________________________________________
(4)__________________________________________
How would I feel when I got the news that he was admitted to hospital
for a serious disease？
Did I go to the hospital to see him？
How would he feel when he saw me in his ward？
How did we do the project from then on？
(5)_____________________________________
(6)______________________________________________
(7)______________________________________
这样，根据设问，整理答案，适当扩充，再运用恰当的动作描写、心理描写和一些高级表达，用上适当的过渡词语，就组成一篇完整的文章了。
Was the project completed on time？
Was the teacher satisfied with our project？
What did we learn from the project？
【范文赏读】
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. Though I wanted to share my ideas with him fully，I failed to do so for fear that I would hold him back(所思：心理描写)．I just kept nodding when he asked me whether it's OK to do this way or that way(所做：动作描写)．I thought it was impossible to persuade him into accepting my views, so I didn't want to waste our time to discuss(所思：心理描写)．I just hoped that the presentation day could come earlier.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.I felt so sorry to hear that and I thought I should visit him in any case(所思：心理描写)．He was a little surprised to see me when I stepped into his ward with some flowers and fruits(所见、所做：神情和动作描写)．I offered to do the rest work of our project and he invited me to share my ideas to perfect it.We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on time(所做：动作描写)．Our hard work paid off and Dr.Henderson was very satisfied with our wonderful findings.From this project, we also learned the significance of teammates(所思：心理描写)．Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of persons can travel farther.(共33张PPT)
写作培优　高分进阶
第二部分　读后续写
第四讲　续写衔接、点题
一、写好四句，3句衔接与主旨升华
1．四个顺畅呼应，进行有效衔接
(1)续写首句与给出的首段首句的衔接；
(2)续写首段尾句与给出的次段首句的衔接；
(3)给出的次段首句与续写次段首句的衔接；
(4)文章结尾升华与文章主题意义的衔接。
2．围绕“真善美”，传递正能量
续写故事的内容一定要传递正能量，围绕“真善美”的大主题设计情节，弘扬社会主义核心价值观，因此续写结尾要按此进行主旨升华。
二、3句衔接语与主旨升华的常用方法和句式
1．做好衔接的基本方法
(1)提示句的主语继续成为续写的第一句的主语
(2)提示句的某个关键词成为一个新的主语
(3)续写第一段的最后一句的主语和续写第二段的首句主语一致，使得段落连贯一致
[点拨] 根据情况以上规则可以灵活变通，如续写第二段的首句主语一致可以作为续写第一段的最后一句的宾语。但无论如何要保持语义连贯一致。
2．衔接过渡语的常用句式
(1)形容词(短语)作状语
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.Anxious and full of expectation, he took the popcorn around to the houses and began to sell his popcorn.
一切准备就绪后，伯纳德开始着手他的新生意。既焦虑又满怀期待，他拿着爆米花挨家挨户地开始售卖。
(2)非谓语动词作状语
(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.Seeing his face filled with anxiety，I felt sad, deciding to talk something with him.
我们紧挨着坐了下来，但大卫不愿看我。看着他那充满焦虑的脸，我感到很难过，决定和他说点什么。
(3)倒装句衔接
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.In no time did their father seem to understand exactly what had happened and what to do next.
当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲出现了。他们的父亲似乎很快就明白了到底发生了什么事，下一步该怎么办。
(4)介词短语或副词作状语衔接
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.Much to my surprise/Surprisingly, I beat a lot of participants and won the first prize.
几个星期后，当我几乎忘记比赛的时候，传来了消息。令我吃惊的是，我打败了很多参赛者，获得了第一名。
(5)对话或者独白衔接
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.“Congratulations! Your efforts paid off！” said he smilingly.
颁奖典礼结束后，我去了老师的办公室。“祝贺你！ 你的努力得到了回报！”他微笑着说。
(6)状语从句衔接
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.The minute I stepped in, he laughed out loud again as has had before, and said“Congratulations！”
颁奖典礼结束后，我去了老师的办公室。我一进门，他又像以前一样大笑起来，说“祝贺你！”
3．主旨升华的常用方法和句式
6种主旨升华的方法
(1)名言结尾法
需要注意的是：不可生搬硬套名言警句，一定要具体文本，具体分析。
①(2022·1月浙江卷)Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of persons can travel farther.
正如俗话说，一个人可以走得很远，但一群人可以走得更远。
②Just as the saying puts，“Where there is a will, there is a way.” Now I couldn't agree more.
正如俗话所说，“有志者，事竟成。”现在我完全同意。
(2)情感升华法
Seeing the javelin，I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying，“You've found your talent and I've found you.”
看到标枪，我觉得它好像在鼓励我，并说，“你找到了你的天赋，我找到了你。”
(3)运用修辞法
①I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene—we were robbed by a polar bear.
我迅速拿出相机，拍下了这一罕见的场景——我们被一只北极熊抢劫了。
②That affection towards our family is like a touch of green tea, refreshing and heartwarming.
那份对我们家人的感情像一杯清茶，沁人心脾，温暖人心。
(4)首尾呼应法
①A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.
一天，在亚瑟上班的路上发生了一件有趣的事情。
②What a funny day! Arthur couldn't stop laughing whenever he looked back on this happy experience.
多么有趣的一天啊！ 每当亚瑟想起这次欢乐的经历，他就忍不住笑个不停。
(5)感悟体会法
①(2024·潍坊市五县市高三10月统考)From the experience，I was fully aware of the responsibility and great value as a doctor, which, therefore, inspired me to continue to pursue my dream.
从这些经验中，我充分意识到作为一名医生的责任和巨大的价值，因此，这激发了我继续追求我的梦想。
②I held the paper bag tightly, tears rolling down without control.It is love that makes the world go around, which I felt deep in my heart.
我紧紧地握着纸袋，眼泪禁不住流了下来。正是爱让这世界转动，在我心里深深感受到了这一点。
(6)画面定格法
①The children said loudly，“Happy Mother's Day！” Mother hugged them tightly and kissed them again and again.
孩子们大声说：“母亲节快乐！”妈妈紧紧地拥抱着他们，一次又一次地吻着他们。
②In the evening, Dad came back.I proudly took out my own money and handed it to Dad.
那天晚上，爸爸回来了。我骄傲地拿出了我自己的钱，递给了爸爸。
5种常用句式
(1)only引起的倒装句
①Only then did I realize that it was bravery that can conquer whatever difficulty came in the way.
直到那时我才意识到，正是勇敢才能克服前进道路上的一切困难。
②Only when we open up the door of our heart can we be bathed in the brilliant sunshine and enjoy the warmth of love.
只有当我们打开心门，我们才能沐浴在灿烂的阳光下享受爱的温暖。
(2)强调句型
It was a simple knot and an understanding heart that saved me from the awkward situation.
正是这一个简单的绳结和一颗善解人意的心将我从尴尬中拯救出来。
(3)From then on＋表行动的句子
①From then on，I made up my mind to pass on“love” to others.
从那以后，我下定决心向别人传递“爱”。
②From that day on, every time I meet someone who needs help，I always reach out to them, hoping to pass on the kindness that Mexican family offered me.
从那天起，每当我遇到需要帮助的人，我总是伸出手去帮助他们，希望把墨西哥家庭给予我的善良传递下去。
(4)Sometimes＋表感悟类的句子
①Sometimes，a moment of kindness could mean so much to another, and that a simple act could make the world so much better.
有时候，那一刻的善良对另一个人来说意义重大，而一个简单的行为可以使世界变得如此美好。
②Sometimes a small act of kindness may be powerful enough to make a huge difference.
有时候一个小小的善举可能会产生巨大的影响。
(5)综合型组合公式：结果＋难忘的经历＋体悟
I thought about what had just happened.What I was eager to utter was that it was such an exceedingly memorable experience that I would never forget.
我想了想刚才发生的事。我急切想说的是，这是一次极其难忘的经历，我永远不会忘记。
【典例示范】
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education.A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities.From age 14, he worked.And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and I thought that I would surpass(超过) anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team.In poor weather，I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号)．
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field.He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals.After a short way, the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed.Then we began again.This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle.It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
At home, my dad said，“A job's a big step to growing up.I'm glad you will be contributing to the household.” My dad's words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested.I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
When I brought my paycheck home—it was $119—my dad wanted to talk to me.
I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.
【范文赏读】
When I brought my paycheck home—it was $119—my dad wanted to talk to me.Obviously(副词作状语衔接), my dad would try to persuade me to contribute all my earning.It's never fair.I thought in my mind hopelessly, grabbing the money tightly in my sweating fist.After a long silence, he didn't ask as expected, instead, he gently said“How do you plan to spend the money from the farmer？” Without any hesitation, the following words popped out，“There are many things I wanted, such as a new football，a
baseball bat and a pair of sneakers and so on, anything but to pay family expense like you.” At that, my dad nodded and let me keep the money(与第二段首句主语一致)．
I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.Staring at my confused expression(分词作状语衔接), my dad explained：“Though I can't understand your world of school activities, still I will stand by you”．Moved by the touching words and seeing his increasingly hunching back, I felt a sense of guilt and selfishness welled up in my mind and surged through myself.At exactly that moment，I realized why my father let me have the money—it was his expectation for my future, his encouragement and quiet love.It was this unique experience that made me realize I would never surpass his love for me(强调句型)．(共133张PPT)
写作培优　高分进阶
第二部分　读后续写
第五讲　续写语言提升
由读后续写评分原则可知，读后续写作文对词汇应用的丰富性、准确性都做出了明确的要求。文中除了要准确使用词汇外，也要注意所用词汇的丰富性：减少基础词汇(如笼统词、低年级常用词等)的使用，培养使用复杂词汇(如具体词、派生词、短语等)的习惯，从而使文章内容更加生动、丰富，提升文章档次。
第一节　词汇升级
常用词汇升级方法如下：
基础用法 高级用法
低年级学习的词语 高年级学习的词语
笼统的词语(如walk) 具体的词语(如tiptoe，wander等)
单词(如visit) 短语(如pay a visit to)
单词原形(如happy) 单词的派生词(如happily, happiness等)
就读后续写来说，最主要的升级方法是笼统词变具体词和单词变短语。
类型1　笼统词变具体词
笼统词指一些描述范围较大、指向信息不明确的词语，而具体词往往是这类词语的具体描述。笼统词变具体词可以使叙述的内容更加准确，行文更加生动。
As soon as the puppy heard his footsteps, it ran towards him.
一听到他的脚步声，波比就朝他跑了过来。
如果将句中的 ran 改为 darted(飞奔，像飞镖一样射出去)，可以更准确地表现出小狗激动的情绪，使读者产生更直接的观感，这是笼统词变具体词的一大好处。但是在使用的时候也需要注意用词是否符合语境，如上句中，若将 run改为 sprint(冲刺)，则无法展现小狗对主人的友好，不符合句子的语境。
按照词性进行划分，常用的笼统词变具体词示例如下：
名词 笼统词 具体词
thing business(事情), issue(问题), affair(事件), matter(事态), event(大事), trifle(琐事)
advantage virtue(优点；长处), merit(优点；价值), benefit(优势；益处)
disadvantage shortcoming(缺点；短处), drawback(缺点；不利条件), demerit(短处)
top climax(极点；顶点), peak (顶峰), summit(最高点；顶点)
way method(方法；办法), approach(方式；方法), avenue(途径；手段)
形容词和副词 笼统词 具体词
beautiful handsome(英俊的), attractive (吸引人的), graceful(优雅的), fine(精美的)
glad excited(兴奋的), pleasant(愉快的), joyful(欢喜的)
important vital(至关重要的), critical(决定性的), significant(意义重大的), primary(首要的), profound(深刻的)
bad mean(刻薄), evil(邪恶的), selfish(自私的), disgusting(令人厌恶的)
形容词和副词 good excellent(优秀的), awesome(令人惊叹的), outstanding(杰出的)
poor impoverished(赤贫的), needy(贫困的), poverty-stricken(一贫如洗的)
very terribly (极度 地), extremely(极 其), highly(非常), greatly(大大地)
all completely(彻 底地), absolutely(绝对地), fully(充分地)
only merely(只不过), solely(单独地；唯一地)
即时演练1
结合语境，将句中笼统词替换成具体词以优化表达
1．I decided that I am very bad.I've been mainly concerned with myself.
→I decided that I am very __________.I've been mainly concerned with myself.
2．It was only a flicker of light in the distance, yet it filled them with hope.
→It was _________ a flicker of light in the distance, yet it filled them with hope.
selfish
merely
3．Feeling tired and helpless, Mauro left a goodbye note to his wife on the wall of the tomb and prepared to meet his untimely end.
→Feeling ____________ and __________, Mauro left a goodbye note to his wife on the wall of the tomb and prepared to meet his untimely end.
4．Seeing this, the guy quickly let go of Kim and broke into a run.
→Seeing this, the guy ____________ let go of Kim and broke into a run.
exhausted
desperate
hurriedly
5．Through this unforgettable and remarkable thing, it eventually dawned on me that nothing is difficult with a willing heart.
→Through this unforgettable and remarkable _____________________it eventually dawned on me that nothing is difficult with a willing heart.
event/experience
类型2　单词变短语
用意思相同或相近的短语替换单词，可以达到优化表达的效果。较为常见的是将动词替换成动词短语，也有一些将副词替换成副词短语、介词替换成介词短语的情况，将形容词替换成“of＋名词”的情况也比较常见，例如：valuable→of great value。现将一些高频的单词替换成短语的情况归纳如下：
单词 短语
like have a passion for
begin get down to
use make use of
desire long for
decide make up one's mind, be determined to
cry burst into tears
meet come across
think(认为) hold the view
单词 短语
bear put up with
affect have an effect/influence on
remember bear...in mind
own be in possession of
believe be convinced of
tired worn out
stress lay emphasis on
solve work out, figure out
replace take the place of
单词 短语
see catch sight of
suit be suitable for
refuse turn down
attract appeal to
usually more often than not
about with regard to
finally in the end, at length
important of importance
即时演练2
结合语境，将单词替换成短语以优化表达
1．Usually, he would walk alone by the lake in a daze.______________
2．It has given us a richer understanding of certain learning mechanisms, particularly about non-humans._________________
3．The minute I heard the first note of her voice，I cried.____________
More often than not
with regard to
burst into tears
4．Remember that the rules we're talking about here are not rules you explicitly know._______________
5．Keep an eye out for the beautiful, observe the unusual, and see the surprising._________________
6．It is important to keep calm in such an emergency.______________
7．She is a good singer, and her music attracts a much larger audience._____________
8．We were so tired when we returned from the fields that we went to bed immediately.___________
Bear in mind
catch sight of
of importance
appeals to
worn out
第二节　句式升级
要提高读后续写的语言表达能力，我们除了掌握读后续写常用的一些词语外，在平时的学习中还要注意积累一些常用句式，并背诵、默写、仿写，最后做到运用自如。
提分句式1　无灵主语句，写情更细腻
在英美人的思维中，往往更注意客观事物和现象对人的作用和影响，反映在语言表达上就是经常用无生命名词作主语。无灵主语句的使用可以有效地提升作文的档次。
句型公式1：A wave of/A sense of...＋情感名词＋有灵动词＋sb.
a wave of a surge of a spark of a sense of a feeling of a burst of happiness/joy/ delight 开心 anger/fury 狂怒 sadness/sorrow 悲伤 gratitude/appreciation 感激 admiration 钦佩 guilt/remorse 愧疚悔恨 fear/terror/panic/fright 害怕；惊恐 astonishment/shock/surprise 惊讶 nervousness 紧张 seized/caught/ struck 抓住 swept/flooded/rushed over 袭来 flooded over 充满 ran through/passed through 掠过 overwhelmed 淹没；压倒 took hold of 控制 enveloped 笼罩 gave way to 被……代替 welled up 涌出 ＋sb.
普通：I felt regretful when I heard the bad news.
升级1：A wave of regret swept over me as I heard the bad news.
当我听到那个坏消息时，一股悔恨的浪潮席卷了我。
升级 2：A strong sense of regret took hold of me the moment I heard the bad news.
当我听到那个坏消息时，一种强烈的悔恨之情控制了我。
句型公式2：身体部位的名词/“音、容、笑”的名词＋有灵动词(短语)
face, eye， heart, hand， finger， laughter， smile， tears, voice， disappointment flashed/passed over掠过 brightened/lighted up照亮 welled up 涌出 spread across 浮现 clouded over 显得阴沉 (恐惧、愤怒、忧愁) ＋sb./sb.'s
face, eye，
heart等
普通：She felt very delighted when I gave her the present.
升级：Her face brightened when I gave her the present.
我给她礼物时，她的脸上焕发出了光彩。
句型公式3：情感名词＋有灵动词＋sb.(使某人不能做某事)
(1)情感名词＋deprived/robbed sb. of sth.(使某人丧失……的能力)
普通：I was too astonished to speak anything.
升级：Astonishment deprived me of my power of speech.
惊讶使我说不出话来。
(2)情感名词＋ prevented sb. from doing sth.(使某人无法做某事)
普通：He was too afraid to move.
升级：A strong wave of fear prevented him from moving.
强烈的恐惧感使他无法动弹。
(3) words等名词＋ failed sb.(某人无法做某事)
普通：I was speechless when I tried to express my heartfelt thanks.
升级：Words failed me when I tried to express my heartfelt gratitude.
当我试图表达我衷心的感谢时，我说不出话来。
即时演练1
Ⅰ.用无灵主语升级下列句子
1．I felt happy as I heard the good news.
→______________________________ the moment I heard the exciting news.(delight)
2．When she realized the little boy had lied, she felt very disappointed.
→Realizing the little boy had lied，_____________________________
________________________________.
A wave of delight seized me
a look of disappointment passed
over/spread across/flashed her face
3．On the stage, he was too nervous to speak.
→On the stage, nervousness ___________________________________.
(deprive)
→On the stage, nervousness ___________________________.(prevent)
→On the stage，________________ because he was too nervous.(fail)
deprived him of his power of speech
prevented him from speaking
words failed him
4．As soon as I saw the rescuers，I got very excited.
→The instant I saw the rescuers, _______________________________.
(blood)
5．She cried as she realized what her friend had done for her.
→_________________________,as she realized what her friend had done for her.(tear, well up)
6．I felt guilty after I heard what he said.
→Having heard what he said，___________________________.(guilt)
blood passed over/rushed to my head
Tears welled up in her eyes
a wave of guilt washed over me
7．He was relieved to learn that no one was hurt in the accident.
→____________________________________,when he learned that no one was hurt in the accident.(relief)
8．When she realized that the shop was on fire, she felt frightened.
→When she realized that the shop was on fire，____________________
_______.(fear)
A feeling of relief/Relief swept over him
(a sense of) fear seized
her
Ⅱ.用无灵主语完成/翻译下列句子
1．当我意识到我是金牌的赢家时，满是惊讶和怀疑。(surround)
When I realized that I was the winner of Gold medal，______________
_______________________.
2．当他看着烟花照亮天空时，他感到一种令人难以置信的幸福。(sweep)
_______________________________________as he watched fireworks light up the sky.
surprise and
unbelief surrounded me
A feeling of incredible happiness swept over him
3．当小女孩醒来时，她母亲转哭为笑。(give way to)
As the little girl woke up，____________________________________.
4．当她见到她分开多年的最好的朋友时，她的脸上洋溢着纯粹的喜悦和幸福。(light up)
_________________________________________ when she saw her best friend after years apart.
her mother's tears gave way to laughter
Her face lit up with sheer delight and happiness
5．她心中涌起一阵骄傲，因为她成功地救了那个老人。(well up)
____________________________________________________________________
6．我伤心得说不出话来。(rob)
______________________________________________________
A burst of pride/Pride welled up inside her as she successfully saved the
old man.
The sadness robbed me of the power to say anything.
提分句式2　形容词(短语)作状语，描写更生动
句型公式：①形容词(短语)，主＋谓……
②主＋谓………，形容词(短语)
形容词(短语)作状语可位于句首、句末或句中。其主要功能是表达人物做某个动作的原因、结果或者伴随状态，可以增强感染力，使描述更生动形象。
1．表原因
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Afraid of hearing the other name，I lowered my head and thought to myself.
我害怕听到另一个名字，我低下头想了想。
Eager to see the sunrise, they got up at four.
他们渴望看日出，4点钟就起床了。
2．表结果
After the long journey, he finally got home, tired out/worn out/exhausted.
经过长途跋涉，他终于回到了家，累的精疲力尽。
Jack came back home from the disaster area, safe and sound.
杰克从灾区安然无恙地回到家中。
3．表伴随
Deep in thought, Mary sat still against the door.
玛丽静静地坐在门口，陷入沉思。
Lost in the forest, Mary lay under a tree, full of fear and despair.
玛丽迷失在森林里，躺在树下，充满了恐惧和绝望。
即时演练2
用形容词作状语完成/翻译下列句子
1．他的父母对他的表现很满意，于是给他买了一辆自行车作为奖励。
____________________________ , his parents bought him a bicycle as a reward.
2．我转过身来面对她，准备好了让她看到我眼中的愤怒和失望。
I turned over and faced her，__________________________________
_____________________________.
Satisfied with his performance
ready to let her see the anger and
disappointment in my eyes
3．我们看着房屋被暴风雨摧毁，无助而绝望。
We watched the houses being destroyed by the storm，______________
_________.
4．由于担心她母亲的健康状况，她不得不提前回家。
___________________________________________________________________
helpless and
hopeless
Worried about her mother's health, she had to return home ahead of
time.
5．五个小时后，他们终于回到了家，疲惫而又兴奋。
_______________________________________________________
6．我担心女儿的安全，给女儿打了很多次电话。
_______________________________________________________
Five hours later, they arrived home eventually, tired but excited.
Anxious about my daughter's safety，I called her many times.
提分句式3　非谓语动词作状语，表达更简洁
非谓语动词doing, having done和done作状语时，主要表示原因、结果或伴随情况。doing/having done形式所表达的动作与主语之间构成主动关系，done则与主语构成被动关系。用非谓语动词把同时发生或先后发生的两个动作连接起来，这样句子就不会显得单调，每个动作也能更紧密地衔接在一起。
句型公式1：主语＋did sth., doing...或者Doing...，主语＋did sth.
分析：两个动作同时发生，而且主语都一样，就可以用分词作状语，doing表示主动。
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)We talked for a while, recalling the journey I embarked on and the doubts I overcame.
我们聊了一会儿，回忆起我开始的旅程和我克服的疑虑。
句型公式 2：主语＋ did sth., done...或者Done...，主语＋did sth.
分析：done与逻辑主语是被动关系。
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Dominated by an overwhelming sense of excitement and pride at his words, I simply stood there dumbfounded.
我对他的话感到了一种强烈的兴奋和自豪，但我只是目瞪口呆地站在那里。
Immersed in a strong sense of fear, she could not say a word.
她沉浸在一种强烈的恐惧感中，一句话也说不出来。
句型公式3：Having done sth., sb. did sth.
分析：如果想强调同一个主语一个动作做完之后又做了另一个动作，就可以把先发生的用 having done的形式来表示。
Having walked for quite a long time, she found herself lost.
＝After she walked for quite a long time, she found herself lost.
走了很长时间后，她发现自己迷路了。
即时演练3
Ⅰ.用非谓语动词作状语升级下列句子
1．She felt exhausted and sat by the stream, and rested her aching feet.
→She felt exhausted and sat by the stream，____________________.
2．She was dressed in a Santa Claus costume, she slipped into the room without being noticed.
→______________________________ , she slipped into the room without being noticed.
resting her aching feet
Dressed in a Santa Claus costume
3．Sam felt so angry that he stormed out of the room, and slammed the door angrily behind him.
→Sam felt so angry that he stormed out of the room, _______________
_____________ behind him.
4．After the woman waited in line for an hour at the bank, she grew impatient and left.
→_____________________________________, the woman grew impatient and left.
slamming the
door angrily
Having waited in line for an hour at the bank
5．He was misunderstood by his teacher and laughed at by everyone, he felt rather upset and depressed.
→________________________________________________ , he felt rather upset and depressed.
Misunderstood by his teacher and laughed at by everyone
6．The teacher sat down on the bench, next to Gemma, patted her shoulder gently, and said gently，“I know you were just too nervous, but it's okay.”
→_______________________ , next to Gemma, the teacher patted her shoulder gently，_____________，“I know you were just too nervous, but it's okay.”
Sitting down on the bench
saying gently
7．After he reviewed his lessons for a whole weekend at home, he expected the coming exam with confidence.
→______________________________________________ , he expected the coming exam with confidence.
Having reviewed his lessons for a whole weekend at home
Ⅱ.用非谓语动词作状语完成/翻译下列句子
1．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)听到老师的鼓励，我对写作更有信心了。
_______________________________，I am even more confident to writing.
2．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)我被他的话打动了，于是我决定在写作上取得更大的进步，以达到他的期望。
__________________，I made up my mind to make more progress in writing so as to live up to his expectation.
Hearing my teacher's encouragement
Struck by his words
3．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)在欢呼声中，我在记者的镜头前，在数千名家长和学生的目光下接受了金牌。(overwhelm)
_______________________，I accepted the gold medal in front of cameras of reporters and thousands of eyes of parents and students.
4．(2022·1月浙江卷)我深知自己的优点和缺点，所以我决定专注于与这些主题打交道的工作。
___________________________________________，I decided to focus on the task of working with the subjects.
Overwhelmed with cheers
Knowing my strengths and weaknesses all too well
5．听到这话，简用尽全力抓住把手，把门拉开了。
____________ , Jane took hold of the handle，_________________, and was able to pull the door open.
6．承诺了五点之前我们能到那儿，所以当车抛锚的时候，我非常慌张。
_____________________________________________，I was seized with panic when the car broke down.
Hearing that
using all her strength
Having promised that we would get there before five
7．她感到令人难以忍受的寒冷和疲惫，她不知道如何应对这种可怕的情况。
_________________________________,she had no idea how to cope with the terrible situation.
8．她感到一阵悲伤，忍不住地哭了起来。
___________________________________________
Feeling unbearably cold and exhausted
Feeling a surge of sadness, she couldn't help crying.
提分句式4　独立主格与with复合结构，句式更灵活
非谓语动词作状语时，其逻辑主语须与主句主语保持一致。若不一致，非谓语动词形式须另带主语，从而构成复合结构的形式作状语，这种结构称为独立主格结构。独立主格结构，一般用逗号与主句分开，其作用相当于一个状语从句或并列句，常用来表示时间、原因、条件或伴随情况等。独立主格经常可以和with复合结构互换。
句型公式：①独立主格结构：名词/代词＋非谓语动词(-ing形式、-ed 形式或不定式)、形容词、副词或介词短语。
②with复合结构： with＋名词/代词＋非谓语动词(-ing形式、-ed 形式或不定式)、形容词、副词或介词短语。
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)As I entered, he looked up from his desk，(with) a warm smile spreading across his face.
我进去的时候，他从桌子上抬起头来，脸上露出了温暖的微笑。
Her father was lying on his back，(with) his dog trapped under the truck.
她的父亲仰面躺着，他的狗被困在卡车下面。
即时演练4
Ⅰ.用独立主格与with复合结构升级下列句子
1．He struggled to run towards the finishing line.His mouth was dry and his legs trembled.
→He struggled to run towards the finishing line，_________________
________________.(独立主格结构)
→He struggled to run towards the finishing line，__________________
_____________________.(with复合结构)
his mouth dry and his
legs trembling
with his mouth dry
and his legs trembling
2．Her eyes sparkled with excitement, and she struggled to her feet and shouted，“I'm here！”
→_____________________ with excitement, she struggled to her feet and shouted，“I'm here！”(独立主格结构)
→______________________ with excitement, she struggled to her feet and shouted，“I'm here！”(with复合结构)
Her eyes sparkling
With her eyes sparkling
3．He cast us a glance, and his face wore a warm smile.
→He cast us a glance, ________________________________.(独立主格结构)
→He cast us a glance, ___________________________________.(with
复合结构)
his face wearing a warm smile
with his face wearing a warm smile
4．His wife was in deep sorrow and her eyes were full of tears.
→His wife was in deep sorrow, ____________________.(独立主格结构)
→His wife was in deep sorrow, ________________________.(with复合结构)
her eyes full of tears
with her eyes full of tears
Ⅱ.用独立主格与with复合结构完成/翻译下列句子
1．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)我是如此的高兴和激动，(与)泪水模糊了我的眼睛。
I was so happy and thrilled, ________________________________.
2．几秒钟后，那个女孩出现了，手里紧紧地拿着一个纸袋。
In a few seconds, the girl turned up，___________________________
_______.
(with) tears blurring my eyes
with a paper bag held tightly in her
hand
3．它披着棕色的卷发，四下张望，眼睛里闪烁着好奇和有点不安。
Coated with brown curly hair, it looked everywhere, ________________
________________________________________.
4．眼睛凝视着家庭相册，他想到了他和祖父母在一起的快乐时光。
____________________________________ , he thought of the fun he had when he lived with his grandparents.
eyes sparkling
with curiosity and a little uneasiness
(With) his eyes fixed on the family album
5．泪水涌上眼睛，他用颤抖的声音向警察道谢。
_______________________________, he thanked the police in a trembling voice.
6．天逐渐变黑，所以简在森林中迷路了。
_____________________________________________________
(With) tears welling up in his eyes
With the sky turning dark gradually, Jane got lost in the forest.
7．他冲进房间，心脏狂跳，满脸通红。
__________________________________________________________
8．他躺在草地上，双手交叉在头顶下。
__________________________________________________________
He rushed to the room with his heart beating wildly and his face flushing.
He was lying on the grass，(with) his hands crossed under his head.
提分句式5　运用虚拟语气，文采更出众
虚拟语气是通过语法手段来表达出对别人的尊敬或尽量使自己的语气委婉、客气的效果。虚拟语气的形式多种多样，在写作中，虚拟语气能够表达其他任何语气所无法取代的丰富的感彩。
我们使用虚拟语气时，多数情况是因为表达者的语用目的，而不是简单表达一个相反的事实。说话者一般都是借助这个“虚拟情况”委婉表达一个言外之意，达到一个特定的交流目的，在很大程度上避免出现尴尬处境。例如：
If I had enough money, I would help you.
如果我有足够的钱，我就会帮助你。
分析：这句话的真正含义是I will not help you，通过使用if条件句，help的行为便成了一种假设的虚拟行为。听话者从该条件可以自己推断出这样的结论：我可能不帮你。
一、虚拟语气的常用句式
句型公式1：“If sb. had done..., sb. would have done”或者“Had sb. done..., sb. would have done”如果某人过去……，某人就……
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)If I hadn't attended the contest, I wouldn't have won the gold medal!
＝Had I not attended the contest，I wouldn't have won the gold medal!
如果我没有参加比赛，我就不会获得金牌！
句型公式2：“Without/But for..., sb. would have done”要不是……
分析：该句式相当于 If there had not been..., sb. would have done 或者 Had there not been..., sb. would have done
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Without your recognition and guidance，I couldn't have written this article.Again thank you very much!
如果没有你的认可和指导，我就不可能写这篇文章。再次非常感谢你！
句型公式3：“If only sb. had done...”某人要是……就好了
If only I had been the third runner who had got to the finish line.
要是我是第三位到达终点线的跑步者该多好啊！
句型公式4：How sb. wished that...had (not) done sth.! 某人多么希望……
How Timmy wished that he hadn't been so rude to his coach!
蒂米多么希望他没有那么粗鲁的对待教练啊！
句型公式5：sb.＋谓语， wishing that sb. had (not) done sth.
I was rooted on the ground due to being frightened, wishing that I had refused my mother's advice yesterday.
我由于恐惧而站在地上，真希望我昨天拒绝了妈妈的建议。
句型公式6：“sb.＋谓语， as if sb. had done”表达形象生动
The glasses dropped into the river, as if the water had swallowed them.
眼镜掉到河里，好像被水吞没了。
二、虚拟语气表达不同情绪
1．后悔、遗憾、悔恨
If I had taken his advice，I wouldn't have been trapped in the awful situation now!
如果我采纳了他的建议，我现在就不会被困在这个可怕的境地了！
2．生气、愤怒
“If you had been more patient, the situation would not have been so terrible.”I couldn't contain my anger and shouted at him.
“如果你能再耐心点，情况就不会那么糟糕，”我不能抑制我的愤怒并大声对他喊叫。
3．感激
But for/Without his help, I wouldn't have got out of trouble.I owed all my luck to him.
＝If it had not been for his help，I wouldn't have got out of trouble.I owed all my luck to him.
如果没有他的帮助，我不可能走出困境。我把我所有的运气都归功于他。
即时演练5
Ⅰ.用虚拟语气升级下列句子
1．If it hadn't been for your advice，I wouldn't have succeeded.
→___________________________I wouldn't have succeeded.(but for/without)
2．If you had taken my advice, you wouldn't have made such a mistake.
→______________________,you wouldn't have made such a mistake.(倒装)
Without/But for your advice
Had you taken my advice
3．If it had not been for your selfless help, I wouldn't have finally made great progress in my English.
→__________________________________，I wouldn't have finally made great progress in my English.(倒装)
→___________________________________，I wouldn't have finally made great progress in my English.(but for/without)
Had it not been for your selfless help
But for/Without your selfless help
Ⅱ.用虚拟语气完成/翻译下列句子
1．我几乎快要崩溃了。我多么希望我以前好好努力了。 (how)
I was almost on the edge of breaking down.________________________
______________.
2．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)“要不是因为你，先生，我就不会成功的。”我衷心地感谢了他。(倒装)
“_______________________________________________.”I thanked him with heartfelt gratitude.
How I wish I had worked
hard before
Had it not been for you, mister，I wouldn't have made it
3．他翻了相册，希望自己昨晚参加了派对。
He turned over the photo album, ________________________________
__________.
4．没有埃里克的鼓励，我剩下的时间都沉浸在悲伤之中。
__________________________________，I would have been immersed in sorrow for the rest of the day.
wishing that he had joined the party
last night
Without/But for Eric's encouragement
5．要不是我的粗鲁，我们就不会吵架了。
________________________________________________________
6．“要是我当初听取了妈妈的建议该多好！”小女孩低声对自己说。
______________________________________________________________________________________
But for my rudeness, we wouldn't have quarreled with each other.
“If only I had listened to my mother's advice！” the little girl
whispered to herself.
提分句式6　运用倒装句，句子更亮眼
倒装句的使用丰富了语言表达，让句式更加多样。因此，写作中适当用一些倒装句式会使文章的表达更生动、有力、让阅卷老师眼前一亮。
部分倒装1: So＋adj./adv.＋be动词/助动词＋主语．..that... 如此……以至于……
During the exam, so nervous was I that my mind went blank.
考试中我如此紧张以至于大脑一片空白。
部分倒装2：n./adj./adv.＋as/though＋主语＋谓语，主句　尽管/虽然……
Disappointed as/though I was, I still managed a weak smile on my face.
虽然我很失望，我依然挤出一丝微笑。
部分倒装3：Only＋状语/状语从句＋助动词/情态动词/be动词＋主语＋其他　只有……
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Only by daring to try can we make a breakthrough.
只有敢于尝试，我们才能取得突破。
(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)I encouraged David who was at a loss，“Do keep in mind that only by possessing a good state of mind can you attain success.”
我鼓励不知所措的大卫：“务必记住只有拥有良好的心态你才能获得成功。”
部分倒装4：Not until＋状语/状语从句＋助动词＋主语．..
Not until he had failed in the job interview did he realize how important confidence was.
直到他面试失败，他才意识到自信是多么重要。
部分倒装5：Hardly had sb. done...when.../No sooner had sb. done...than...　一……就……
No sooner had he realized his mistake than he apologized to his friend.
他一意识到自己的错误就向朋友道歉。
全部倒装6：Here/There/Out/In/Up/Down/Away/Now/Then...＋谓语(表示运动的不及物动词)＋主语
Following the roar, out rushed a tiger from among the bushes.
一声吼叫，呼地从丛林中窜出一只老虎。
全部倒装7：介词短语＋谓语(不及物动词，如 lie, stand, sit, exist, stretch, come)或系动词be＋主语(名词)
In the doorway stood a man with a hammer.
门口站着一个拿锤子的人。
全部倒装8：分词短语＋ be＋主语(名词)
Lying on the floor was a boy aged about 17.
躺在地板上的是一个约17岁的男孩。
即时演练6
Ⅰ.用倒装升级下列句子
1．Though we were stressed out, our eyes were glittering with hope.
→____________________________,our eyes were glittering with hope.
2．Hearing the cry, the boy rushed out in an instant, trying to find out what had happened.
→Hearing the cry，_____________________________ , trying to find out what had happened.
Stressed out as/though we were
out rushed the boy in an instant
3．The little girl was so particular about/over food that her parents shed tears of anxiety and worry.
→________________________________________________________________________________________________________
4．I didn't realize a small act of care can melt people's loneliness until I experienced the event.
→____________________________________________________________________________________________________
So particular about/over food was the little girl that her parents shed tears of anxiety and worry.
Not until I experienced the event did I realize a small act of care can melt people's loneliness.
5．Mike had hardly finished his performance when the audience all rose to their feet, clapping wildly.
→______________________________________________________________________________________________________
Hardly had Mike finished his performance when the audience all rose to their feet, clapping wildly.
Ⅱ.用倒装完成/翻译下列句子
1．(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)尽管他很痛苦，也有点尴尬，但他仍然拖着脚继续前进。
________________________________________, he still dragged his feet to keep moving forward.
2．看到考试的结果，我是如此的绝望，我觉得自己好像被撕成了碎片。
Seeing the result of the exam，_________________________________
_______________.
Painful and a bit embarrassed as/though he was
so desperate was I that I felt as if I were
torn into pieces
3．他突然发现自己站在一座山的山脚下，山顶上有一座古寺庙。
He suddenly found himself standing at the foot of a hill，____________
__________________________.
4．直到我经历了这场事故，我才意识到坏运气有可能是正在等待开启的门。
____________________________________________ bad fortune might be the door waiting to be opened.
on top of which
stood an old temple
Not until I experienced the accident was I aware that
5．我打开门，迈克尔站在那里，浑身都是泥。
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I opened the door, and there stood Michael, all covered in mud.
提分句式7　运用强调句，习作更出彩
强调句型的使用是为了突出强调句子的某一部分，它是一种比较容易掌握的高级表达方式。其构成为：It is/was＋被强调部分＋that/who＋其他。
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)I said，“It's you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher.”
我说：“是你让我爱上了写作，我的社会研究老师。”
It was not until then that I realized Mama lied to us just out of love.
直到那时我才意识到出于爱，妈妈对我们说了谎。
即时演练7
Ⅰ.用强调句型升级下列句子(强调黑体部分)
1．My determination and efforts helped me achieve my dream.
__________________________________________________________
2．I came to know a truth—a small act of kindness can make a big difference on that day.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________
It was my determination and efforts that helped me achieve my dream.
It was on that day that I came to know a truth—a small act of kindness can make a big difference.
3．We created a harmonious atmosphere with sincerity and faithfulness.
→__________________________________________________________________________________
4．(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)Devin made his final decision at that moment.
→___________________________________________________
It was with sincerity and faithfulness that we created a harmonious atmosphere.
It was at that moment that Devin made his final decision.
Ⅱ.用强调句型翻译下列句子
1．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)就在这时，一股暖流涌过了我的身体。
_____________________________________________________________________________
2．(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)正是他勇敢的心和坚强的信念，最终会让一些不寻常的事情发生。
____________________________________________________________________________________________
It was at that moment that a warm surge of streams washed through my body.
It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.
3．正是这次特别的经历让我意识到宽恕是一种重要的美德。
_______________________________________________________________________________________
4．就在那天，我意识到爸爸在我这个年龄所取得的成就比我所做的要大得多。
______________________________________________________________________________________________________
It was the special experience that made me realize forgiving is an important virtue.
It was on that day that I realized what Dad had accomplished at my age was much greater than I did.
第三节　生动描写
叙述和描写都是记叙文写作中的主要表达方式。
1．叙述(narration)是将事情的前后经过记录下来，主要用来交代人物活动和事件经过，展开情节。
2．描写(description)则指通过各个感官的细节描述，用生动形象的语言把人物、景物的状态具体地描绘出来。
高效技法1　过程化：运用动作链，营造画面感
考生要学会分解动作，形成一个细化的动作链，比如浙江高考读后续写中 Mac遇到狼上车的动作，不是简单的get in the car就可以解决的，过于笼统的描述使描写空洞乏味，学生要善于捕捉这个关键的慢镜头，并将Mac的动作按照时间轴分解为jump off the bicycle—dash into the back seat of the car—slam the door—lean against the seat, breathless 等动作链来描写，通过动作链可形成动作面，使情景具有画面感，那么如何设计动作链和动作面呢？
一、分解动作，形成动作链
句型公式1：主语＋动作A，动作B and 动作C
该句式中连词 and连接三个或三个以上的动作，构成动作链，动词的时态是一致的。
①I approached Dad, proudly took out of my own money and handed it to him.
我走近爸爸，骄傲地拿出我自己的钱递给他。
②Her pulses beat fast, and the blood warmed and relaxed every inch of her body.
她的心跳加快，热血温暖了全身，身心完全地放松下来。
句型公式2：主语＋动作A and动作B，非谓语动词/非谓语动词，主语＋动作A and动作B
该句中连词and连接两个或两个以上的动作，构成动作链。非谓语动词作状语，可置于句首或句尾。
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, saying，“Great.Now, write it again.”
当我把文章交给我的老师时，他读了它，大声笑着，说：“很好。现在，再写一遍。”
Putting on his coat, he stormed out and slammed the door shut.
他穿上外套，怒气冲冲地跑了出去，把门重重地关上。
句型公式3：时间状语从句＋主句
动作链的表达可用状语从句，如when, while, as, before, after引导的时间状语从句来体现。
After I had left something in the cloakroom，I went inside to get it.
我在衣帽间落下了点东西，然后就进去拿了。
二、动作链可以和情感，环境，心理，语言等结合，形成动作面
①Burning with anger, he glared at me with his big frightening eyes, yelling，“You' re such an idiot.”
分析：此处的burning with anger是情感描写， glare和yell是动作链，同时将动作和语言描写结合在了一起，形成了饱满的动作面，属于高分表达。
②As night was beginning to fall, Jane sat on the grass, staring at the vast sky, frightened and ravenous.
分析：此处将环境描写，动作描写以及情感描写结合在一起，形成了饱满的动作面。
即时演练1
Ⅰ.根据提示，用英语写出动作链或动作面
1．洛娜(Lorna)看夜空：走到窗前＋打开窗户＋抬头看着外面的夜空。(并列谓语)
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Lorna came to the window, opened it and looked out up at the night sky.
2．她看照片：拿起照片＋盯着它看了一会儿＋小心翼翼地把它放进了相册里。(并列谓语)
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3．简沿着小溪走：感觉更强壮＋沿着小溪走着＋希望它能把她带到湖边。(非谓语动词)
_________________________________________________________________________________________________
She picked up the photo, stared at it for a while and placed it carefully into the album.
Feeling stronger now, Jane walked along the stream, hoping that it would lead her to the lake.
4．他们仰望天空：站在空荡的路边＋仰望天空＋感受到珍贵的宁静。(非谓语动词)
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5．我跑步：穿着平常的跑步服＋带着自信的微笑＋迅速掠过了他们。(非谓语动词；介词短语)
_______________________________________________________________________________
Standing beside the empty road, they looked up into the sky, feeling the precious peace.
Wearing my usual running clothes，I brushed past them with a confident smile.
Ⅱ.运用动作链和动作面的技巧完善下面的作文
In the morning, as scheduled，_________________________________
_________________________________________(双胞胎早早起床，踮着脚走进了厨房，从袋子里舀出面粉)．Once they set about making bread, they felt confused.At that time，____________________________________
______________________________________________(他们的爸爸溜进厨房，轻拍双胞胎的肩膀，柔声安慰道)，
the twins got up early, tiptoed to the
kitchen and scooped some flour out of the bag
their father slid into the kitchen, patting the
twins' shoulders and comforting them in a soft voice
“Don't quit.You can overcome the challenge.” The twins made the bread smoothly.Then __________________________________________________
_________ (他们端着早餐，向楼上走去，喊醒他们的妈妈)．With her eyes glittering with excitement, so content was the mother that she gathered her children into her arms.
they carried the breakfast, advanced upstairs and woke up their
mother
高效技法2　精准化：精选动词，刻画具体的动作
不用抽象或虚化的动词描述，而是使用含义比较精确的描写。试比较下面两句：
①The little boy said sorry to his mother.
小男孩对他妈妈说对不起。
②The little boy hung his head and mumbled an apology to his mother.
小男孩垂着头，咕哝着向他母亲道歉。
类型一：缓慢移动
edge v．缓慢地移动 She edged her way through the crowd.
她在人群中慢慢向前移动。
inch v．缓慢地移动 He inched his way through the narrow passage.
他一点一点地穿过狭窄的通道。
类型二：闲逛散步
stroll v. 闲逛；漫步 We are strolling through a secluded walk.
我们正漫步穿过一条僻静的小径。
ramble v. 闲逛；散步 He rambled till supper time through the orderly avenues between the lines of walnut trees.
他在两旁胡桃树整齐林立的街道上散步一直到吃晚饭时。
类型三：踱步
pace v. 来回踱步 Before the play，I paced back and forth in the room.
演出前，我在房间里来回踱步。
类型四：蹑手蹑脚地走
creep v. 蹑手蹑脚地 移动 Then I crept downstairs and examined the tags attached to each of the packages.
然后我悄悄地走到楼下，检查了每个包裹上的标签。
tiptoe v. 蹑手蹑脚地 Curious to know what was inside, he tiptoed into the dark cave.
他好奇地想知道里面是什么，踮着脚走进了黑暗的洞穴。
类型五：蹒跚；走得不稳
stagger v．蹒跚 He clutched his chest, staggered to the nearest building and slumped sitting to the sidewalk.
他抓住胸口，步履蹒跚地走到最近的墙旁，颓然倒在人行道上。
stumble v. 跌跌撞撞地走 The thick smoke caused him to stumble blindly around, burned his eyes, and made it impossible to breathe.
浓烟使他盲目地跌跌撞撞地走，灼伤了他的眼睛，使他无法呼吸。
类型六：快走
storm out of 气冲冲地走出 He stormed out of the room in a burst of anger and slammed the door furiously.
他怒气冲冲地冲出房间，狠狠地关上门。
hustle v．快速 行走；赶紧 You'll have to hustle if you're to get home for supper.
你想赶回家吃晚饭的话，就得加快速度。
leap to one's feet 跳跃 He leapt to his feet and rushed out of the living room.
他一跃而起，冲出了客厅。
spring from 从……跳起来 He sprung from his chair and rushed to pick up the telephone.
他从椅子上跳起来，跑去接电话。
类型七：朝……走
made one's way 朝……走 Then Lisa stood up and made her way through the crowd toward me.
然后丽莎站了起来，穿过人群朝我走来。
head for 去往…… Clutching the tin can, he headed for the shop.
他抓着铁罐，向商店走去。
即时演练2
运用具体动词翻译下列句子
1．她沿着小路蹑手蹑脚地走着，迅速弯下腰，轻轻地用双手罩着蝴蝶。(creep, cup)
_______________________________________________________________________________________________
2．她向前冲过去，跪下来，把儿子抱在怀里。(dash, gather)
__________________________________________________________
She crept along the path, bent over swiftly and cupped her hands around the butterfly gently.　
She dashed forward, knelt down and gathered her son into her arms.　
3．孩子们兴奋地冲到湖边，脱下衣服，跳进水里。(rush, dive)
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
4．歌手瞥了一眼观众，深吸了一口气，开始唱歌。(glance)
___________________________________________________________________________
The children rushed excitedly to the lake, took off their clothes and dived into the water.　
The singer glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing.　
5．男孩把最后一个包举到肩上，露出了灿烂的微笑。 (flash)
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6．男孩把书放在原处，小心翼翼地走出房间。(tiptoe)
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile.　
Putting the book where it belonged, the boy tiptoed out of the room as lightly as possible.　
高效技法3　形象化：添加修饰成分，做到描写生动
除了精准选用表示动作的词语，还要给动词加上适当的修饰成分，使动作更加形象生动。适当的修饰语能细致地表达出动作的时间、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表现人物的鲜明个性与思想境界。动作描写中最常见的修饰成分就是状语，如副词、介词短语等。其次是定语，如形容词等。
在体现动作的迅速和短暂时，我们可以添加以下修饰语： immediately, without delay, witout hesitation等。
比如下面两个句子：
①The wolf also noticed them and turned its head back, shouting at Paul and Becky.
狼也注意到他们，回头朝保罗和贝基喊叫。
②At the same time, the wolf also noticed them and fiercely turned its head back, shouting loudly at Paul and Becky.
与此同时，狼也注意到了他们，恶狠狠地转过头，对保罗和贝基大声喊叫。
分析：第二句中加上 at the same time(与此同时), fiercely(激烈地), loudly(大声地)，就把这两个人遇到狼的危险情况生动地表达出来了。
句型公式1：“ with/in介词短语＋主语＋谓语”或者“主语＋谓语＋with/in介词短语”
说明：可以添加介词短语修饰动词。
①with＋情感名词
with delight/excitement/pleasure/happiness/joy/
satisfaction/anger/rage/patience/fear/terror/embarrassment/
pride/caution/care/patience/certainty 等
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Then, with my heart fluttering with excitement，I attended the award presentation.
然后，我兴奋得激动起来，参加了颁奖典礼。
②with＋身体部位
with its hungry red eyes/its sharp teeth/her shaky hand/her pale lips等
The ferocious wolf stared at Mac with its hungry red eyes.
凶猛的狼用它那只饥饿的红眼睛盯着麦克。
③in＋情感名词
in surprise/amazement/shock/sorrow等
When their mother saw the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, she widened her eyes in surprise.
当他们的妈妈看到眼前美味完美的早餐时，她惊讶地睁大了眼睛。
④in＋...voice
in a high/low/sweet/loud/soft/weak voice等
(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)Patting on his shoulder, I said in a soft voice，“I heard you had worked so hard for this event.”
我拍着他的肩膀，用一种温柔的声音说：“我听说你为这次活动付出了那么多的努力。”
句型公式2：主语＋谓语＋富有表现力的副词/介词短语结构
常用的高频副词有： cheerfully, curiously, eagerly, excitedly, fiercely, firmly, joyfully, immediately, impatiently, restlessly, swiftly, suddenly等。如在体现动作的迅速时，可添加以下介词短语： without pausing, without delay等。
Politely and excitedly, he asked Mrs.Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn.
他礼貌而兴奋地请梅瑞狄斯太太教他如何做爆米花。
Mac jumped off the bike and slid into the car without delay.
麦克跳下自行车，立刻钻进了车里。
句型公式3：富有表现力的形容词＋名词
恰当地运用富有表现力的形容词，能有效提升句子的表现力，增强表现效果。
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)The whole class burst into thunderous applause.
After class, Anne and I rushed to the hall to accept the awards.
全班同学都爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。下课后，安妮和我冲到大厅去接受颁奖典礼。
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Before leaving his office，I expressed my utmost gratitude to him and hugged him again.
在离开他的办公室之前，我对他表达了极大的感激，并再次拥抱了他。
即时演练3
运用富有表现力的形容词、副词或介词短语完成/翻译下列句子
1．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)我紧紧地拥抱着他，感激地说：“没有你的鼓励，我永远不会报名参加写作比赛。”
I __________________________________，“ Never will I sign up for the writing competition without your encouragement.”
hugged him tightly , saying thankfully
2．(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)当走到终点线时，他突然露出灿烂的笑容，兴奋地向我挥手，喊道：“我成功了！ 我成功了！”
When approaching the finishing line, he __________________________
and ___________________________ , crying“I made it! I made it！”
burst into a big toothy smile
waved to me with excitement
3．然后，他感到有人轻轻地拍了拍他的肩膀。妈妈微笑着说，“令人惊讶的是，他们相处得很好，曾经精力充沛的波比又回来了。”
Then he ______________ on his shoulder.It was Mom ____________，
“___________ ,they get along so well and the once energetic Poppy came back again.”
4．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)我逐渐被一种强烈的喜悦和幸福感所淹没。
__________________________________________________________
felt a gentle pat
with a smile
Amazingly
I was gradually overwhelmed by a strong sense of joy and happiness.
5．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)他轻轻地拍了拍我。是我体贴的老师激励我勇敢而积极地面对我的恐惧。
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6．(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)大卫毫不犹豫地点头表示同意，最终决定加入越野赛队。
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He patted me gently.It is my considerate teacher who inspires me to face my fear bravely and positively.
Without hesitation, David nodded in agreement, finally deciding to join in the cross-country team.
7．当学生们下车时，詹姆斯惊讶地睁大了眼睛。
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8．(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)我的老师走进教室时，脸上露出了一种富有感染力的微笑。
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When the students stepped off the bus, James's eyes widened in surprise.
My teacher entered the classroom with an infectious smile spreading on his face.(共68张PPT)
写作培优　高分进阶
第二部分　读后续写
第六讲　续写话题演练
Writing 1　个人成长类——电台实习生成长记
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2024·临沂市统考一模)
I had a dream from primary school: to work in television.My parents owned a little grocery store, so we were definitely not fancy people.Thankfully, my dad had raised me to have a lot of confidence.He often said，“You can do anything you want to do.” My dad was particularly supportive.He was my steady rock—always there for me.
With his help and encouragement, I was admitted to the radio and television arts program at Ryerson in Toronto.I really loved the program and worked hard and I was named the most outstanding graduate.I felt like I was already living my dream.I began to think that maybe I could apply for an internship(实习资格) in CBC or CTV.
Luckily, Global Television had just started broadcasting in Canada that year.I thought to myself：I'm new and they're new, so if I'm going to get to know one person at Global, it might as well be the president.I was scared, but I knew deep down inside that this was what I wanted.When I called my dad and told him my plan, he said，“Good, Faye.That's exactly what you should do.”
With my heart just about pounding out of my body，I called up the president of Global Television.Suddenly Mr.Slaight was on the phone.“I've heard that your studio facilities are amazing.I could come at eleven o'clock on Monday or eleven o'clock on Sunday for a tour.What would suit you better？”I caught him totally off guard.He stuttered a bit, and then picked a day.When I hung up, I was scared but excited.
I arrived at the studio on the appointed day.When Mr.Slaight took me around, he looked at me and said，“What do you want？” He sounded furious but curious.“All I want is a chance to audition (试镜)．I just want you to know my face.That's all I'm asking.”
I didn't know whether I'd ever hear from him again, but two weeks later, his secretary called，“Mr.Slight wants to know if you'd like to come and audition for a new school life show.”I immediately answered，“Sure！”
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
When I arrived at the station，I went direct into the audition and began my short performance.
Finally came the day of my first public appearance on live TV with my parents at home watching.
第一步　细读原文，获取双线
人物 _______________________________________________
时间 _______________________________
地点 _________________________________________________
情节线 __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
情感线 _________________________________________
主旨 _______________________
I, my dad, Mr.Slaight, Mr.Slaight' secretary
before working in television
at home, at Ryerson in Toronto, at the station
a dream of working in television→my dad encouraged me→I was
admitted to the radio and television arts program→his secretary
asked me to come and audition for a new school life show
ambitious→afraid→confident→anxious→excited
努力奋斗，实现梦想
第二步　研读首句，巧定框架
1．两段首句定一框
由第一段首句和第二段首句可以构思第一段内容：______________
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________
构思情节如下：
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只有我面试通
过，这样才有机会在电视上表演。所以我的表现最后一定是不错的，并
且获得了面试机会。
开始感到紧张→受到鼓励→建立信心→努力排练
2．二框二首正能量
根据第二段首句和正能量结尾可以构思第二段内容：____________
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
构思情节如下：
_________________________________________________________________________________________________
我开始第一次亮相，可以写表演的顺畅，是因为多天的排练和努力。演出大获成功，名声大噪等等，事业蒸蒸日上，最后点题呼应第一段由于爸爸的支持、帮助和鼓励进行点题。
在舞台上专心表演→大受欢迎→心中充满了无限的喜悦→父母激励我继续努力实现自己的梦想
第三步　3句衔接，主旨升华
When I arrived at the station，I went direct into the audition and began my short performance.
1．_________________________________________________ (与第一段首句衔接，倒装句)．..
Hardly had I said a few words when my mind went blank.
2．__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(与第二段首句衔接)
Finally came the day of my first public appearance on live TV with my parents at home watching.
3．_________________________________________________________ (与第二段首句衔接，介词短语作状语)．..
Whenever I felt worn out, my fatigue magically faded away after imagining the bright smile on my parents' cheeks when they saw my performance on TV.
Through the spotlight, what came into my sight was a full house.　
4．________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ (主旨升华，虚拟语气)
I deeply knew that without my father's help and encouragement，I wouldn't have fulfilled my dream and achieved so much.
第四步　语言提升，写作定稿
注意词汇精确化，句式多样化，描写生动化。
When I arrived at the station, I went direct into the audition and began my short performance.
Finally came the day of my first public appearance on live TV with my parents at home watching.
【参考范文】
When I arrived at the station，I went direct into the audition and began my short performance. Hardly had I said a few words when my mind went blank.Overwhelmed by a sense of nervousness，I began to stumble over my words.When I was at a loss, the chief examiner slowly came over and gently patted me on the shoulder, encouraging me not to be tense.Slowly, my previous restlessness gave way to the full confidence to well finish the performance.The next three minutes witnessed my smooth performance and I
was told to have passed the audition.During the next few days，I often threw myself into the rehearsal round the clock.Whenever I felt worn out, my fatigue magically faded away after imagining the bright smile on my parents' cheeks when they saw my performance on TV.
Finally came the day of my first public appearance on live TV with my parents at home watching. Through the spotlight, what came into my sight was a full house.With every line deeply engraved in my mind, I stood on the stage and devoted myself to the performance.Eventually, the show became a hit and its ratings were more than high.With infinite joy in my heart, I couldn't wait to share the good news with my parents.They inspired me to carry on and strive to shine in the industry.I deeply knew that without my father's help and encouragement，I wouldn't have fulfilled my dream and achieved so much.
Writing 2　家庭亲情类——母子情深
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2024·揭阳市高三联考)
Moving In
My eighty-five-year-old mother offered that familiar tilt(倾斜) of the head, the one that told me something was up.I tensed my shoulders and bit my lip, waiting for whatever was coming next.
I could handle it.She was predictable, though dramatic.I expected her to express her thoughts on the latest news or share the senior community news.
Instead, she calmly said, as though she were sharing her dinner menu，“I'm going to downsize and sell my house and nearly everything I own.” The breaking news was followed by a matter of fact stare.
“Do what？” I asked.“I'll be a floater，” she said.
“I'll stay with you, then with my brothers in Maine, and then with some of my friends.I'll just float around and enjoy myself.” She laughed as though she'd just discovered the perfect lifestyle.“I'll take my cat everywhere with me.I can't bear to leave him behind or give him away.What do you think？”
“No one will want you to show up with your cat.” My answer seemed a shock to her.After only seconds, she added，“Well, I just won't tell them he's coming.We'll just show up.What can they do？”
Shocked，I took a deep breath and forced myself to respond by explaining all the reasons why selling, moving in with me, and fearlessly dragging the cat across the country in secret were terrible ideas.
Unbothered, she simply said，“You're so dramatic.It'll be fine.”
I didn't take her announcement seriously.A few days after her announcement, my brother and I enjoyed a few laughs over her idea.After all, our mother was too independent to be placed in a place long-term with any of her children.She had made this clear on many occasions when I'd begged to live next door to her.I'd wanted to be close enough to watch over her but not too close, but she'd always refused.
I enjoyed living alone, hearing the quiet, writing and reading.I hated noise.My mother loved radio, television, and phone calls, endless phone calls.We would not make good housemates.
注意：续写词数应为150 左右。
I really panicked when she started having yard sales.
I took her to my home from the hospital happily, no longer bothered by her moving in.
第一步　细读原文，获取双线
人物 __________________
时间 ______________________________________
地点 __________
情节线 ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
情感线 puzzled→shocked
主旨 理解母亲，尊重母亲
my mother and I
at her age of eighty-five years old
at home
mother wanted to sell her house→I can't believe→mother
explained→I felt shocked and explained→we woudn't make good
housemates
第二步　研读首句，巧定框架
1．两段首句定一框
由第一段首句内容“她开始搞庭院甩卖的时候，我真的慌了”可知，第一段可描写______________________________________________
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构思情节如下：
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作者得知母亲真的在卖房子时的恐慌，后来母亲生病
住院及照顾母亲的情景。
恐慌→确认→母亲生病住院→照顾母亲
2．二框二首正能量
根据第二段首句和正能量结尾可以构思第二段内容：____________
________________________________________________________________________________
构思情节如下：
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描写作者把康复后的母亲接回自己的家中，开始照顾她，并带她去旅行，实现她的梦想。
接母亲回自己家住→意识到亲情的价值→带母亲旅行→实现她的梦想
第三步　3句衔接，主旨升华
I really panicked when she started having yard sales.
1．_____________________________________ (与第一段首句衔接，运用对话)．..
2．__________________________(与第二段首句衔接)
I took her to my home from the hospital happily, no longer bothered by her moving in.
“Are you serious？”I asked her one day.
Luckily, she recovered.
3．_______________________________________________________________________________(与第二段首句衔接，副词作状语)．..
4．___________________________________________________________________________________________________(主旨升华，倒装句)
Actually，I am not saying we would get along perfectly, but I see
things differently.
Only then did I realize that it was kindness and love that made our
world so warm and beautiful.
第四步　语言提升，写作定稿
注意词汇精确化，句式多样化，描写生动化。
I really panicked when she started having yard sales.
I took her to my home from the hospital happily, no longer bothered by her moving in.
【参考范文】
I really panicked when she started having yard sales.“Are you serious？”I asked her one day.“Of course，” she answered.I forced myself to face what was happening, and I begged for some cherished items.Then one day Mom caught a bad cold and had a high fever.I was afraid and sent her to the hospital.During those days，I was no longer stressed about her floater plan, whether it was right or logical.I just wanted her to be okay.Luckily, she recovered.
I took her to my home from the hospital happily, no longer bothered by her moving in. Actually，I am not saying we would get along perfectly, but I see things differently.Her moving in with me hadn't been part of the plan—living next to her had been.I've realized I don't have to understand her, just love her while she's here and take every moment I have with her as a gift.Whenever I had time, I would take her to travel, to realize her dream.Only then did I realize that it was kindness and love that made our world so warm and beautiful.
Writing 3　友情友爱类—风雨之后见彩虹
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2024·扬州市高三调研测试)
I looked up from my desk to see the teacher writing on the board：“Battle of the Books！” She smiled and said，“This time it's a teamwork.You're going to be in teams of two, and set a reading goal.Every team that meets their goal by the end of the month will get a prize！” The lunch bell sounded before she could explain any more rules.
As I gathered my things，Liya passed my desk and said，“Teammates？” Since Liya and I shared the same interest in graphic novel(漫画小说), and we took Hindi language class together, we teamed up automatically.I was both relieved and excited to have my team.Then we got to the cafeteria and quickly threw out a bunch of ideas of what to do at our table.
I looked to our third friend Kash, with whom the three of us always do stuff together，“Kash, do you have ideas for us？”“Why would I give you guys ideas？” he said gloomily(阴沉地)．“I'll save that for my team...whoever that is.Now I see how I rank in the friendship lineup.” Kash replied in an angry tone.
I knew he was mad for a reason.If I were him, not only would I think that I ranked last in that group, but I'd also be panicking about what team I could join.But now, I was on the inside and Kash wasn't, I felt like the only way to fix this would be three people on a team.So, as the teacher walked by our table, I asked for her permission.What surprised me was that she had intended to draw names to assign random groups, but didn't get a chance to say it before lunch.
Awkward and frustrated, we were stuck in this dilemma.Having first teamed up without Kash didn't mean we didn't like him.I knew we—especially I—wouldn't be able to enjoy any prize if our friend felt bad about being left out.So, I decided to do something to make it up for him and convince Kash he was an equal friend.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
That night, I was struck by an idea as I read a graphic novel that all three of us liked.
The next day, I handed my pages of apology to Kash.
第一步　细读原文，获取双线
人物 ________________________
时间 ____________________________________
地点 ____________
情节线 ___________________________________________________________________________________________________
情感线 ________________________________________________________
主旨 __________________________
Kash, teacher, Liya，I
when we had a reading competition
at school
we're going to be in teams of two→our third friend Kash became
angry→we were stuck in this dilemma
relieved and excited→awkward and frustrated→ forgivable
消除误会，再续友情
第二步　研读首句，巧定框架
1．两段首句定一框
由第一段首句内容“那天晚上，当我读了一本我们三个人都喜欢的漫画小说时，我被一个想法打动了。”和第二段首句内容可知，第一段可描写_______________________________
构思情节如下：
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我们写道歉信、弥补友情的过程。
两人商量→写出道歉信
2．二框二首正能量
根据第二段首句和正能量结尾可以构思第二段内容：第二段可描写_________________________________________________________
构思情节如下：
______________________
卡什接受我们的道歉、重新修复友谊的过程。
接受道歉→重归于好
第三步　3句衔接，主旨升华
That night，I was struck by an idea as I read a graphic novel that all three of us liked.
1．___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ (与第一段首句衔接，形容词作状语)．..
Thrilled and inspired，I sprang in front of my desk, racked my brains and started drawing a few scenes of three of us giggling, chattering and enjoying each other's company like we usually did.
2．____________________________________________________________________________________________________________ (与第二段首句衔接)
The next day, I handed my pages of apology to Kash.
3．______________________________________(与第二段首句衔接，现在分词作状语)．..
Pierced to the heart with guilt，I gingerly tucked the paintings into an envelope, hoping this would be an ice-breaker.
He took it, looking surprised at the first sight.
4．______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(主旨升华，现在分词作状语)
We exchanged a knowing smile, realizing that sincerity, trust and communication were always the key to clearing up the misunderstanding between friends.
第四步　语言提升，写作定稿
注意词汇精确化，句式多样化，描写生动化。
That night, I was struck by an idea as I read a graphic novel that all three of us liked.
The next day, I handed my pages of apology to Kash.
【参考范文】
That night，I was struck by an idea as I read a graphic novel that all three of us liked.Thrilled and inspired, I sprang in front of my desk, racked my brains and started drawing a few scenes of three of us giggling, chattering and enjoying each other's company like we usually did.On the last page，I wrote，“Dear Kash, you are not the one left behind.Liya and I are so sorry about the way we messed things up.” Pierced to the heart with guilt，I gingerly tucked the paintings into an envelope, hoping this would be an ice-breaker.
The next day, I handed my pages of apology to Kash. He took it, looking surprised at the first sight.After he read it, an expression of intense joy illuminated his eyes.Blushed，I broke the silence，“I'm sorry, dude.We should have talked to you.” With her eyes fixed on the floor, Liya came over and apologized in a low voice，“You mean a lot to us.” Hearing her words, Kash shook his head and beamed，“I was too sensitive.” We exchanged a knowing smile, realizing that sincerity, trust and communication were always the key to clearing up the misunderstanding between friends.
Writing 4　和谐自然类——人猫情未了
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2025·南通市调研)
It was Christmas Eve morning, and I awoke with a mission: to find my lost cat, Baby-Girl.As I got ready，I could hear icy rain pelting the windows.Baby-Girl was out there somewhere in the storm.I could just feel it.Sure, it had been a couple of weeks since she'd gone missing, but I still had faith.This was the season for miracles, after all.
About two weeks ago, my sweet kitty disappeared from my parents' house in my hometown.Baby-Girl had been staying with them while I was between apartments.At the time, I lived and worked in another city.I was staying with friends until I rented my own house.Baby-Girl had gotten out of my parents' house the day before I was set to drive back home to pick her up.
My dad and I had spent that entire visit searching for her.Dad was a“realist”， which meant he spent a whole lot of time trying to prepare me for the worst.“She's either been hit by a car or been taken in by someone who found her，” he said.I rolled my eyes.He could do with a little more faith!
Besides, though I couldn't explain it, I knew I'd see Baby-Girl again.She could survive all on her own.If any cat could do the impossible, it was my Baby-Girl.Even after I returned to my house without her, deep down I had this undeniable feeling that we would be reunited one day.
Now, home again for the holidays, I was determined to pick up my search right where I'd left off.I grabbed Baby-Girl's cat carrier and loaded it into the car, then asked my dad to drive me to the shelter.
At the shelter, a staff member took us to see the cats.We walked through rows of cages.My eyes scanned cats of all colors and sizes.None of them was my Baby-Girl.Then I noticed a room farther back.I pushed ahead.“Sweetheart, that's where they keep the cats that just came in，” Dad said.“Your cat wouldn't be in there.”
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
I insisted it didn't hurt to look and stepped into the room.
Sensing their doubts, I was ready to prove she was my cat.
第一步　细读原文，获取双线
人物 __________________________
时间 ________________________
地点 _________________
情节线 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
情感线 ________________________________
主旨 __________________________
Baby-Girl, my dad and I
Christmas Eve morning
at the shelter
my cat was missing→my dad and I searched for her→ I believed
that we would be reunited one day→we walked through rows of
cages
faithful→determined
关爱动物，初心不改
第二步　研读首句，巧定框架
1．两段首句定一框
由第一段首句内容“我坚持认为看看没有关系，并走进了房间。”可知，第一段可描写________________________________________
构思情节如下：
__________________________________________________________
作者在那个房间发现自己心爱的猫咪。
传来了喵喵叫声→发现我的小猫→收容所的工作人员怀疑不是我的
2．二框二首正能量
根据第二段首句和正能量结尾可以构思第二段内容：可描写______
_____________________________________________________
构思情节如下：
__________________________________________________________
作者通
过自己与猫咪的互动证明这只猫就是自己丢失的那只。
证明她是我的猫→我训练小猫→确认小猫
第三步　3句衔接，主旨升华
I insisted it didn't hurt to look and stepped into the room.
1．________________________________________(与第一段首句衔接，倒装句)．..
2.____________________________________________________________________________________________ (与第二段首句衔接)
Sensing their doubts，I was ready to prove she was my cat.
Suddenly, there came a familiar meow.
The shelter staff were skeptical too, saying the cat had just been
brought in during the morning storm.
3．______________________________(与第二段首句衔接，副词作状语)．..
4．___________________________________________________ (主旨升华，引用名言)
Cautiously，I grabbed the carrier.
As a saying goes，“Stick to your hopes and never give up.”
第四步　语言提升，写作定稿
注意词汇精确化，句式多样化，描写生动化。
I insisted it didn't hurt to look and stepped into the room.
Sensing their doubts, I was ready to prove she was my cat.
【参考范文】
I insisted it didn't hurt to look and stepped into the room. Suddenly, there came a familiar meow.I followed the sound and my eyes fell on a little cat with big green eyes.She was skinnier than I remembered, but it was Baby-Girl! My eye swelled up with tears.I opened the cage door.Baby-Girl practically jumped into my arms.I held her close as Dad looked on.“There's just no way...，” he mumbled.The shelter staff were skeptical too, saying the cat had just been brought in during the morning storm.
Sensing their doubts，I was ready to prove she was my cat.Cautiously, I grabbed the carrier.I'd trained Baby-Girl to walk inside the carrier.Sure enough, when she was letdown, she made a dash for the carrier and rushed right inside.I was overjoyed to have her back.It was a miracle that she had managed to survive on her own for so long, and I was filled with admiration for her strength and determination.I thanked my lucky stars that I had never given up hope, and that I had come back to the shelter one last time.As a saying goes，“Stick to your hopes and never give up.”