Section Ⅵ Writing——记叙文
[语料积累]
1.首段:介绍故事背景
①Last week,I helped my grandparents prepare their trip to Beidaihe.
上周,我帮助外祖父母为北戴河的旅行做准备。
②Last Sunday,an old lady aged about seventy was badly hurt in a traffic accident at the second crossing of Xinhua Road.
上周日,一位大约七十岁的老奶奶在新华路的第二个路口的一次交通事故中严重受伤。
2.主体:故事的发展与结局
①Last night I was busy preparing for my test when I heard a loud noise.
昨天晚上,我正忙着为考试做准备突然听到很大的噪音。
②On my way home,I came across an old friend of mine.
在回家的路上,我遇到了一位老朋友。
③The sun was shining and the birds were singing. 阳光明媚,鸟儿在歌唱。
3.尾段:故事的启示与评论
①Tired as we were,we still felt quite happy.
尽管很累,但是我们仍然感到很高兴。
②I learned from the experience that honesty always comes first.
从这次经历中我学会了诚实是最重要的。
[典题示例]
5月1日,你和你们班的志愿者去阳光敬老院(Sunshine Nursing Home)开展志愿者活动。请按下列要点用英语写一篇短文。
时间 5月1日
地点 阳光敬老院(Sunshine Nursing Home)
活动过程 1.到达时受到欢迎 2.赠送鲜花和水果 3.帮助老人打扫卫生 4.坐在院子里与老人聊天
老人们 的反应 激动并感谢,并说这一天将是他们永远会记住的美好一天
感受 很高兴,因为……
注意:1.写作词数应为80个左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
1.审题谋篇
第一段:事件背景;
第二段:事件过程;
第三段:个人感受。
2.要点翻译
①5月1日,我和我的同学去阳光敬老院做志愿者工作。
On May 1,my classmates and I went to Sunshine Nursing Home and did some voluntary work.
②一到达,我们就受到了热烈欢迎,我们赠送给老人们鲜花和水果。
On arrival,we were warmly welcomed,and we presented the elderly with flowers and fruits.
③打扫完房子后,我们坐在院子里和老人开心地聊天。
After we cleaned the house,we sat in the yard and chatted with the elderly people happily.
④老人们对我们的善意很感激,他们说这是如此美好的一天,他们将永远记住它。
The elderly were grateful and thankful for our kindness,saying it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever.
⑤我们很高兴因为我们所做的事情给别人带来了快乐,也丰富了我们的生活。
We are very happy because what we did has brought joy to others and enriched our own lives.
3.词句升级
(1)用时间状语从句升级句②
As soon as we arrived,we were warmly welcomed,and we presented the elderly with flowers and fruits.
(2)用动词-ing 形式升级句③
After cleaning the house, we sat in the yard,chatting with the elderly people happily.
(3)用not only...but also...升级句⑤
We are very happy because what we did has not only brought joy to others but also enriched our own lives.
4.连句成篇
【参考范文】
On May 1, my classmates and I went to Sunshine Nursing Home and did some voluntary work.
As soon as we arrived,we were warmly welcomed, and we presented the elderly with flowers and fruits.After cleaning the house,we sat in the yard, chatting with the elderly people happily.The elderly were grateful and thankful for our kindness, saying it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever.
In a word,we are very happy because what we did has not only brought joy to others but also enriched our own lives.
[随堂演练]
假定你是李华,请根据下面的提示写一篇短文。内容包括:
1.上周日你和同学李强去看羽毛球比赛,在去球场的路上看到一位老人躺在地上。
2.你坐在老人身边照看着他,李强打电话叫了救护车。
3.你们决定和老人一起去医院,等老人的女儿来了你们才离开。
4.你们错过了羽毛球比赛,但是一点也不后悔,你们为自己所做的事情感到自豪。
注意:1.写作词数应为80个左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
参考词汇:球场court 救护车ambulance
【参考范文】
Last Sunday my classmate Li Qiang and I went to watch a badminton match.We were walking on the way to the court when we saw an old man lying on the ground.
Walking closer,we found that he was badly injured.Thus I sat there to take care of the old man and in the meanwhile Li Qiang called the ambulance.After a while the ambulance arrived and we decided to go to the hospital with the old man.Not until the old man's daughter arrived did we leave.
Though we missed the match, we felt more than delighted.We were not only proud of what we had done but also understood helping others was the source of happiness.
Ⅰ.应用文写作(满分15分)
假设你是李华,你的朋友 David 升入高一后,由于学习任务重,忽视了体育锻炼,导致体质下降,写信向你寻求帮助,请你给他回信。内容包括:
1.表示理解;
2.提出建议;
3.予以鼓励。
要求:1.写作词数应为80个左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
【参考范文】
Dear David,
I'm terribly sorry to hear that your physical condition has declined due to heavy school work and neglect of exercise.Here are some suggestions that might help you strike a balance between study and physical activities.
Firstly, it's recommended that you make a realistic schedule which includes study time and physical activities.It can help you develop a habit of exercising regularly, thus improving your health.Additionally, why not invite your friends to exercise together Not only will it make workout more enjoyable, but also it will help reduce your stress.Lastly, if I were you, I would stay positive and persistent.Every step we take towards improving our health is a victory.
I'm here to support you every step of the way and wish you both health and happiness.
Yours,
Li Hua
Ⅱ.情景微续写(满分25分)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写一段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When Mark was five years old, his father died and his life fell apart.His mom Jane and he lived a hard life.They had to move from California to Arizona and live with Mark's grandmother, Moria.That meant Mark lost all his friends and his carefree life.
It could have been the end of Mark's childhood, but then he met 76-year-old Mr.Kelsey, Moira's next-door neighbor.One day, he was kicking a soccer ball around the yard when one kick sent the ball over the fence into Kelsey's yard.Mark came to Kelsey's home, feeling a little nervous.
“Grandpa, can I get my ball back ” Mark said cautiously.“Of course,” Kelsey said gently with a smile.“Come over and have a talk with me, will you ” Then they had a pleasant chat.
Kelsey lived alone but had a loving and patient heart to children.Over time, the two of them gradually established a deep friendship, enjoying each other's company.
Half a year later, something unexpected happened.Mark learned Kelsey had a serious eye disease but he couldn't afford the $3,000 surgery (外科手术).Without timely treatment, he would go blind completely.However, Jane and Moria were also on a tight budget, unable to spare any money for Kelsey.
Mark made up his mind to wash cars at the parking lot of the shopping center on the weekends to raise money for poor Kelsey.He offered to wash each car for one dollar.Mark knew he had to wash a lot of cars to make up the money, but he was determined.
A few days later, one of his customers, named Jason, asked curiously, “What do you do this for, kid ” “My neighbor, Mr.Kelsey.He needs an eye surgery.I'm raising money for him.I badly need $3, 000,” Mark replied.“You're a kind boy,” Jason said softly.“Where do you live ” Mark told Jason his address.Deeply moved by what Mark was doing, Jason decided to help him in another way.
注意:续写词数应为100个左右。
Jason shared Mark's story online, appealing for donations.
【前文批注】
When Mark was five years old, his father died and his life fell apart. His mom Jane and he lived a hard life.They had to move from California to Arizona and live with Mark's grandmother, Moria.That meant Mark lost all his friends and his carefree life.(本段主要介绍了全文的主要角色Mark的基本情况:搬到祖母那里,没了朋友,为下文与Mr.Kelsey成为朋友埋下伏笔)
It could have been the end of Mark's childhood, but then he met 76-year-old Mr.Kelsey, Moira's next-door neighbor.One day, he was kicking a soccer ball around the yard when one kick sent the ball over the fence into Kelsey's yard. Mark came to Kelsey's home, feeling a little nervous.
“Grandpa, can I get my ball back ” Mark said cautiously.“Of course,” Kelsey said gently with a smile.“Come over and have a talk with me, will you ” Then they had a pleasant chat.
Kelsey lived alone but had a loving and patient heart to children.Over time, the two of them gradually established a deep friendship, enjoying each other's company. (第2-4段讲述了两人成为好朋友的过程)
Half a year later, something unexpected happened.Mark learned Kelsey had a serious eye disease but he couldn't afford the $3,000 surgery (外科手术).Without timely treatment, he would go blind completely.(Kelsey急需手术,但负担不起手术费) However, Jane and Moria were also on a tight budget, unable to spare any money for Kelsey.(Mark家经济紧张,无法帮助Kelsey)
Mark made up his mind to wash cars at the parking lot of the shopping center on the weekends to raise money for poor Kelsey. He offered to wash each car for one dollar.Mark knew he had to wash a lot of cars to make up the money, but he was determined.(本段主要介绍Mark决定洗车帮Mark筹钱)
A few days later, one of his customers, named Jason, asked curiously, “What do you do this for, kid ” “My neighbor, Mr.Kelsey.He needs an eye surgery.I'm raising money for him.I badly need $3, 000,” Mark replied.“You're a kind boy,” Jason said softly.“Where do you live ”Mark told Jason his address.(为到Mark家送钱埋下伏笔)Deeply moved by what Mark was doing, Jason decided to help him another way.(被Mark的举动感动,Jason决定用另外的方式帮助Mark筹钱)
【原文解读】
Mark and his mom Jane moved to live with his grandmother.→Mark lost his friends and his carefree life.→Mark and 76-year-old Mr.Kelsey become good friends.→Mr.Kelsey need a surgery but couldn't afford it.→Mark was determined to raise money by washing cars.→Mark met Jason who decided to help Mark raise money in another way...→(根据原文及续写首句,续写文章主要讲述Jason如何帮助Mark筹钱,最终Mr.Kelsey手术成功。)
【思路形成】
Jason在网上呼吁筹钱→钱很快筹够,送到Mark家里→Mark的反应(惊讶,感动)→Kelsey做手术→手术成功
【单句续写】
1.Mark的善意很快传开了,很快就筹集了3 000美元。
Word of Mark's kindness spread quickly and soon$3,000 was collected.
2.当Jason带着钱来到Mark家时,Mark非常惊讶。
When Jason reached Mark's home with the money, Mark was deeply surprised.
3.得知发生了什么事后,Mark忍不住流下了感激的泪水。
Having learned what had happened, Mark couldn't hold back his tears of gratitude.
4.他被这些善良的人们的慷慨所感动,不断地说:“Kelsey的眼睛得救了!”
He was greatly touched by those kind people's generosity, saying repeatedly, “Kelsey's eyes will be saved!”
5.Mark立刻赶到Kelsey家,把钱给了他。
Without delay, Mark rushed to Kelsey's home and handed him the money.
6.第二天,Kelsey成功地接受了手术,视力逐渐恢复。
The next day, Kelsey successfully received a surgery, and gradually recovered his eyesight.
7.尽管生活可能艰难,但将善意传递下去的行为会让每个人的心灵都充满光明。
Hard as life might be, the act of paying it forward will brighten everyone's heart.
【连句成篇】
Jason shared Mark's story online, appealing for donations. Word of Mark's kindness spread quickly and soon$3,000 was collected.When Jason reached Mark's home with the money, Mark was deeply surprised.Having learned what had happened, Mark couldn't hold back his tears of gratitude.He was greatly touched by those kind people's generosity, saying repeatedly, “Kelsey's eyes will be saved!” Without delay, Mark rushed to Kelsey's home and handed him the money.The next day, Kelsey successfully received a surgery, and gradually recovered his eyesight.Hard as life might be, the act of paying it forward will brighten everyone's heart. (共44张PPT)
Section Ⅵ Writing——记叙文
[语料积累]
1.首段:介绍故事背景
①Last week,I helped my grandparents prepare their trip to Beidaihe.
上周,我帮助外祖父母为北戴河的旅行做准备。
②Last Sunday,an old lady aged about seventy was badly hurt in a traffic accident at the second crossing of Xinhua Road.
上周日,一位大约七十岁的老奶奶在新华路的第二个路口的一次交通事故中严重受伤。
2.主体:故事的发展与结局
①Last night I was busy preparing for my test when I heard a loud noise.
昨天晚上,我正忙着为考试做准备突然听到很大的噪音。
②On my way home,I came across an old friend of mine.
在回家的路上,我遇到了一位老朋友。
③The sun was shining and the birds were singing.
阳光明媚,鸟儿在歌唱。
3.尾段:故事的启示与评论
①Tired as we were,we still felt quite happy.
尽管很累,但是我们仍然感到很高兴。
②I learned from the experience that honesty always comes first.
从这次经历中我学会了诚实是最重要的。
[典题示例]
5月1日,你和你们班的志愿者去阳光敬老院(Sunshine Nursing Home)开展志愿者活动。请按下列要点用英语写一篇短文。
时间 5月1日
地点 阳光敬老院(Sunshine Nursing Home)
活动过程 1.到达时受到欢迎 2.赠送鲜花和水果
3.帮助老人打扫卫生 4.坐在院子里与老人聊天
老人们的反应 激动并感谢,并说这一天将是他们永远会记住的美好一天
感受 很高兴,因为……
注意:1.写作词数应为80个左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
1.审题谋篇
第一段:事件背景;第二段:事件过程;第三段:个人感受。
2.要点翻译
①5月1日,我和我的同学去阳光敬老院做志愿者工作。
On May 1,my classmates and I went to Sunshine Nursing Home and
.
②一到达,我们就受到了热烈欢迎,我们赠送给老人们鲜花和水果。
On arrival,we were warmly welcomed,and we
.
did some voluntary work
presented the elderly with flowers and fruits
③打扫完房子后,我们坐在院子里和老人开心地聊天。
After we cleaned the house,we and
.
④老人们对我们的善意很感激,他们说这是如此美好的一天,他们将永远记住它。
The elderly ,saying it was such a beautiful day that they .
sat in the yard
chatted with the elderly people happily
were grateful and thankful for our kindness
would remember it forever
⑤我们很高兴因为我们所做的事情给别人带来了快乐,也丰富了我们的生活。
We are very happy because
and .
what we did has brought joy to others
enriched our own lives
3.词句升级
(1)用时间状语从句升级句②
(2)用动词-ing 形式升级句③
As soon as we arrived,we were warmly welcomed,and we presented the elderly with flowers and fruits.
After cleaning the house, we sat in the yard,chatting with the elderly people happily.
(3)用not only...but also...升级句⑤
We are very happy because what we did has not only brought joy to others but also enriched our own lives.
4.连句成篇
【参考范文】
On May 1, my classmates and I went to Sunshine Nursing Home and did some voluntary work.
As soon as we arrived,we were warmly welcomed, and we presented the elderly with flowers and fruits.After cleaning the house, we sat in the yard, chatting with the elderly people happily.The elderly were grateful and thankful for our kindness, saying it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever.
In a word,we are very happy because what we did has not only brought joy to others but also enriched our own lives.
[随堂演练]
假定你是李华,请根据下面的提示写一篇短文。内容包括:
1.上周日你和同学李强去看羽毛球比赛,在去球场的路上看到一位老人躺在地上。
2.你坐在老人身边照看着他,李强打电话叫了救护车。
3.你们决定和老人一起去医院,等老人的女儿来了你们才离开。
4.你们错过了羽毛球比赛,但是一点也不后悔,你们为自己所做的事情感到自豪。
注意:1.写作词数应为80个左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
参考词汇:球场court 救护车ambulance
【参考范文】
Last Sunday my classmate Li Qiang and I went to watch a badminton match.We were walking on the way to the court when we saw an old man lying on the ground.
Walking closer,we found that he was badly injured.Thus I sat there to take care of the old man and in the meanwhile Li Qiang called the ambulance.After a while the ambulance arrived and we decided to go to the hospital with the old man.Not until the old man's daughter arrived did we leave.
Though we missed the match, we felt more than delighted.We were not only proud of what we had done but also understood helping others was the source of happiness.
课 时 精 练
Ⅰ.应用文写作(满分15分)
假设你是李华,你的朋友 David 升入高一后,由于学习任务重,忽视了体育锻炼,导致体质下降,写信向你寻求帮助,请你给他回信。内容包括:
1.表示理解;
2.提出建议;
3.予以鼓励。
要求:1.写作词数应为80个左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
【参考范文】
Dear David,
I'm terribly sorry to hear that your physical condition has declined due to heavy school work and neglect of exercise.Here are some suggestions that might help you strike a balance between study and physical activities.
Firstly, it's recommended that you make a realistic schedule which includes study time and physical activities.It can help you develop a habit of exercising regularly, thus improving your health. Additionally, why not invite your friends to exercise together Not only will it make workout more enjoyable, but also it will help reduce your stress.Lastly, if I were you, I would stay positive and persistent. Every step we take towards improving our health is a victory.
I'm here to support you every step of the way and wish you both health and happiness.
Yours,
Li Hua
Ⅱ.情景微续写(满分25分)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写一段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When Mark was five years old, his father died and his life fell apart.His mom Jane and he lived a hard life.They had to move from California to Arizona and live with Mark's grandmother, Moria.That meant Mark lost all his friends and his carefree life.
It could have been the end of Mark's childhood, but then he met 76-year-old Mr.Kelsey, Moira's next-door neighbor.One day, he was kicking a soccer ball around the yard when one kick sent the ball over the fence into Kelsey's yard.Mark came to Kelsey's home, feeling a little nervous.
“Grandpa, can I get my ball back ” Mark said cautiously.“Of course,” Kelsey said gently with a smile.“Come over and have a talk with me, will you ” Then they had a pleasant chat.
Kelsey lived alone but had a loving and patient heart to children.Over time, the two of them gradually established a deep friendship, enjoying each other's company.
Half a year later, something unexpected happened.Mark learned Kelsey had a serious eye disease but he couldn't afford the $3,000 surgery (外科手术).Without timely treatment, he would go blind completely.However, Jane and Moria were also on a tight budget, unable to spare any money for Kelsey.
Mark made up his mind to wash cars at the parking lot of the shopping center on the weekends to raise money for poor Kelsey.He offered to wash each car for one dollar.Mark knew he had to wash a lot of cars to make up the money, but he was determined.
A few days later, one of his customers, named Jason, asked curiously, “What do you do this for, kid ” “My neighbor, Mr.Kelsey. He needs an eye surgery.I'm raising money for him.I badly need
$3, 000,” Mark replied.“You're a kind boy,” Jason said softly.“Where do you live ” Mark told Jason his address.Deeply moved by what Mark was doing, Jason decided to help him in another way.
注意:续写词数应为100个左右。
Jason shared Mark's story online, appealing for donations.
【原文解读】
Mark and his mom Jane moved to live with his grandmother.→Mark lost his friends and his carefree life.→Mark and 76-year-old Mr.Kelsey become good friends.→Mr.Kelsey need a surgery but couldn't afford it.→Mark was determined to raise money by washing cars.→Mark met Jason who decided to help Mark raise money in another way...→(根据原文及续写首句,续写文章主要讲述Jason如何帮助Mark筹钱,最终Mr.Kelsey手术成功。)
【思路形成】
Jason在网上呼吁筹钱→钱很快筹够,送到Mark家里→Mark的反应(惊讶,感动)→Kelsey做手术→手术成功
【单句续写】
1.Mark的善意很快传开了,很快就筹集了3 000美元。
2.当Jason带着钱来到Mark家时,Mark非常惊讶。
Word of Mark’s kindness spread quickly and soon$3,000 was collected.
When Jason reached Mark’s home with the money, Mark was deeply surprised.
3.得知发生了什么事后,Mark忍不住流下了感激的泪水。
4.他被这些善良的人们的慷慨所感动,不断地说:“Kelsey的眼睛得救了!”
Having learned what had happened, Mark couldn’t hold back his tears of gratitude.
He was greatly touched by those kind people’s generosity, saying repeatedly, “Kelsey’s eyes will be saved!”
5.Mark立刻赶到Kelsey家,把钱给了他。
6.第二天,Kelsey成功地接受了手术,视力逐渐恢复。
Without delay, Mark rushed to Kelsey’s home and handed him the money.
The next day, Kelsey successfully received a surgery, and gradually recovered his eyesight.
7.尽管生活可能艰难,但将善意传递下去的行为会让每个人的心灵都
充满光明。
Hard as life might be, the act of paying it forward will brighten everyone’s heart.
【连句成篇】
Jason shared Mark’s story online, appealing for donations. Word of Mark’s kindness spread quickly and soon$3,000 was collected.When Jason reached Mark’s home with the money, Mark was deeply surprised.Having learned what had happened, Mark couldn’t hold back his tears of gratitude.He was greatly touched by those kind people’s generosity, saying repeatedly, “Kelsey’s eyes will
be saved!” Without delay, Mark rushed to Kelsey’s home and handed him the money.The next day, Kelsey successfully received a surgery, and gradually recovered his eyesight.Hard as life might be, the act of paying it forward will brighten everyone’s heart.
Thanks！
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