写作专练
[单元写作训练〗
假定你是李华，你校英文报社正在就“刷脸支付”这一话题征文。上周五你们班也就该话题进行了激烈的讨论。请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：
1.介绍讨论的情况；
2.发表自己的看法。
注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇：刷脸支付face-scanning payment
[审题谋篇〗
定体裁 议论文——刷脸支付
定人称 第一和第三人称为主
定时态 一般现在时为主
定要点 定结构 开头：介绍刷脸支付的情况； 主体：列举同学们的不同看法； 结尾：说明自己的看法。
[遣词造句〗
A.翻译单词或短语
1. 优点和缺点
2. 支持
3. 人脸识别
4. n. 精确（程度）
5. 导致，造成
6. 关于，至于
B.完成句子
1.如今，刷脸支付在顾客中越来越受欢迎，但它既有优点也有缺点。
Nowadays， face-scanning payment among customers， but it has .
2.顾客不需要携带手机或银行卡。
Customers don’t .
3.这使支付更加方便。（make＋宾语＋宾补）
.
4.人脸识别还没有达到100％的准确率。
Facial recognition .
5.这可能会导致支付风险。
This might .
6.随着人脸识别技术的改进，刷脸支付肯定会变得越来越可靠。
facial recognition technology， face-scanning payment will definitely .
C.句式升级
7.用动词-ing形式短语作状语合并句2和句3
8.用which引导的非限制性定语从句合并句4和句5
[连句成篇〗
[读后续写训练〗
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I first met her in the mid-afternoon on a hot， dry summer day as she gracefully walked across my front yard.Her large， hopeful eyes locked on mine.Man， she was a beauty.Right then and there she captured my imagination and heart.
This being our first meeting， I was hoping to know her better.So， I checked her out more closely.I asked her gently， “You often come here？” She seemed to know the neighborhood well and was not afraid at all.
We have plenty of deer in our Colorado neighborhood but most are wary （警惕的） of their two-legged neighbors.Not this doe （雌鹿）.She had come to late lunch today in conversation with a guy who clearly admired her.
Unlike so many lookalikes， this doe had two identifiable characteristics， a six-inch-long， two-inch-wide streak （条纹） of darker fur on the right side of her body and a split in one of her ears.Both made her easily identifiable.I thought she needed a nickname， so she became “Streak”.
I cut a bushy branch of green leaves and held it up for Streak to take a bite.Like most girls on a first date， she was hesitant to get more deeply involved.Once I put it down， she ate up all the leaves.Eventually， Streak had her fill， took one last look at me， meandered down the path on the side of the house， and disappeared into a neighbor’s bush.Streak showed up every now and again.Sometimes I would be in the backyard as she came with her family or company.I would see her markings， especially that distinctive split and know it was her.I’d say， “Hi， Streak！” “Hey， sweetheart！” She would always pause， lock her eyes on mine and in a short time start walking towards me.It was clear that there was some kind of connection between us.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式作答。
One day， I decided to approach her to see if she would let me touch her.
Over time I noticed Streak slowing down， obviously aging.
[要素解读〗
When 1.
Where 2.
Who 3.
Event 4.
[谋篇布局〗
Para.1：
请回答下列问题（根据括号内的要求和汉语句子提示补全英文句子）：
1. How did the author touch the deer？（承接首句，使用多个副词来刻画作者的动作，描写作者第一次触摸鹿时小心翼翼的姿态）
I reached out my right hand .
我慢慢地、轻柔地伸出右手。
2.How would the deer react？（通过对鹿的神态、动作以及对作者的触觉、动作的细节描写描绘出双方初次接触时的警惕和试探心理，让情节设置合情合理，极富画面感）
She me， her nose and my hand .Her nose stayed for a while until I my fist and tried to her on the cheek.
她的眼睛一直盯着我，慢慢地垂下鼻子，轻轻地碰了碰我的手。她湿润的鼻子停留了一会儿，直到我张开拳头，试图抚摸她的脸颊。
3. How did they get along then？（通过二者之间的眼神交流更进一步加深对彼此的了解，使用独立主格结构，让语言精练优雅。随着作者与鹿之间的频繁互动，他们之间的关系应越来越亲密，通过平铺直叙的方式推动情节发展，自然而然地过渡到第二段的续写）
Streak as we stood in silence， ， .Over the next several years， I would Streak in my yard from time to time， her and her some love.
Streak向后退了一步，我们沉默地站在那里，两眼相望，都在享受这一刻。在接下来的几年里，我会时不时地在我的院子里发现Streak，我会欢迎她，并给她一些爱。
Para.2：
请回答下列问题（根据括号内的要求和汉语句子提示补全英文句子）：
4. What happened to the deer when she got old？（根据常理可推断这只鹿老了之后，可能不会像之前那样经常出现，然后使用排比的修辞手法，几个急促的短句透视出作者内心的失望）
Then one year she .Not that spring， not during the summer， .
然后有一年她没有回来。那年春天没有，夏天也没有，一整年都没有回来。
5. What did the author think about it？（本段主要抒发作者的内心情感：希望Streak可以平静地度过余生，同时珍视他们之间的友谊。使用形容词短语作状语、谓语动词的强调、让步状语从句等高级句式和语法结构，让文章更加富有诗情画意，提升文章的境界）
， she may have become food for her its natural enemies.I hope she could live out the rest of her life and ， instead of dying in pain.I that no life is permanent. ， I will cherish our friendship and miss her forever.
她年纪大了，动作慢了，可能已经成了天敌的食物。我希望她能平静地度过余生，寿终正寝，而不是在痛苦中死去。的确，我知道没有生命是永恒的。无论她在哪里，我都会珍惜我们的友谊，永远想念她。
[续写成文〗
Tips：1.续写第一段：根据首句可以推测，作者决定主动接近鹿，并试着去触碰她，他们的关系变得越来越亲密。
2.续写第二段：根据首句可以推测，这一段应侧重描述鹿老了之后的情况以及作者的感想。
写作专练
[单元写作训练]
[遣词造句]
A.1.advantages and disadvantages
2.be for/be in favor of
3.facial recognition
4.accuracy
5.lead to
6.as for
B.1.is becoming increasingly popular； both advantages and disadvantages
2.have to carry a mobile phone or a bank card
3.This makes payment more convenient
4.hasn’t achieved an accuracy of 100 percent
5.lead to payment risks
6.With the improvement of； become more and more reliable
C.7.Customers don’t have to carry a mobile phone or a bank card， making payment more convenient.
8.Facial recognition hasn’t achieved an accuracy of 100 percent， which might lead to payment risks.
[连句成篇]
Nowadays，face-scanning payment is becoming increasingly popular among customers， but it has both advantages and disadvantages.Recently， we have had a class discussion about it.
Some students are for face-scanning payment.First， the payment can be completed quickly.Second， customers don’t have to carry a mobile phone or a bank card， making payment more convenient.However， others argue that facial recognition hasn’t achieved an accuracy of 100 percent， which might lead to payment risks.Additionally， customers’ personal information may be revealed illegally.
As for me， I am in favor of it.With the improvement of facial recognition technology， face-scanning payment will definitely become more and more reliable.
[读后续写训练]
[要素解读]
1.a mid-afternoon in summer
2.in the front yard
3.I， a deer named Streak
4.The deer walked across the author’s front yard， and the author called her “Streak” because of the streak on the right side of her body.The deer showed up every now and again， and the author would communicate with her.It was clear that there was some kind of connection between them.
[谋篇布局]
1.slowly and softly
2.kept her eyes on； slowly lowered； touched； gently； moist； opened； pet
3.took a step back； eyes locked； both enjoying the moment； find； welcome； show
4.did not come around； not at all
5.Older and slower； pass away peacefully； do know； No matter where she is
[续写成文]
参考范文：
One day， I decided to approach her to see if she would let me touch her.I reached out my right hand slowly and softly.She kept her eyes on me， slowly lowered her nose and touched my hand gently.Her moist nose stayed for a while until I opened my fist and tried to pet her on the cheek.Streak took a step back as we stood in silence， eyes locked， both enjoying the moment.Over the next several years， I would find Streak in my yard from time to time， welcome her and show her some love.
Over time I noticed Streak slowing down， obviously aging.Then one year she did not come around.Not that spring， not during the summer， not at all.I realized that my friend Streak was no longer young.Older and slower， she may have become food for her natural enemies.I hope she could live out the rest of her life and pass away peacefully， instead of dying in pain.I do know that no life is permanent.No matter where she is， I will cherish our friendship and miss her forever.
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写作专练
[单元写作训练]
假定你是李华，你校英文报社正在就“刷脸支付”这一话题征
文。上周五你们班也就该话题进行了激烈的讨论。请你用英语写一篇
短文投稿，内容包括：
1. 介绍讨论的情况；
2. 发表自己的看法。
注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇：刷脸支付face-scanning payment
定体裁 议论文——刷脸支付
定人称 第一和第三人称为主
定时态 一般现在时为主
定要点 定结构 开头：介绍刷脸支付的情况；
主体：列举同学们的不同看法；
结尾：说明自己的看法。
[审题谋篇]
1. 优点和缺点
2. 支持
3. 人脸识别
4. n. 精确（程度）
5. 导致，造成
6. 关于，至于
advantages and disadvantages
be for/be in favor of
facial recognition
accuracy
lead to
as for
[遣词造句]
A. 翻译单词或短语
B. 完成句子
1. 如今，刷脸支付在顾客中越来越受欢迎，但它既有优点也有缺点。
Nowadays， face-scanning payment
among customers， but it has
.
2. 顾客不需要携带手机或银行卡。
Customers don’t .
3. 这使支付更加方便。（make＋宾语＋宾补）
.
is becoming increasingly
popular
both advantages and
disadvantages
have to carry a mobile phone or a bank card
This makes payment more convenient
4. 人脸识别还没有达到100％的准确率。
Facial recognition .
5. 这可能会导致支付风险。
This might .
6. 随着人脸识别技术的改进，刷脸支付肯定会变得越来越可靠。
facial recognition technology，face-
scanning payment will definitely .
hasn’t achieved an accuracy of 100 percent
lead to payment risks
With the improvement of
become more and more reliable
7. 用动词-ing形式短语作状语合并句2和句3
8. 用which引导的非限制性定语从句合并句4和句5
Customers don’t have to carry a mobile phone or a bank card，
making payment more convenient.
Facial recognition hasn’t achieved an accuracy of 100 percent，
which might lead to payment risks.
C. 句式升级
[连句成篇]
Nowadays，face-scanning payment is becoming increasingly
popular among customers， but it has both advantages and
disadvantages.Recently， we have had a class discussion about it.
Some students are for face-scanning payment.First，the payment can be completed quickly.Second，customers don’t have to carry a mobile phone or a bank card，making payment more convenient. However，others argue that facial recognition hasn’t achieved an accuracy of 100 percent，which might lead to payment risks.Additionally，customers’personal information may be revealed illegally.
As for me，I am in favor of it.With the improvement of facial
recognition technology，face-scanning payment will definitely
become more and more reliable.
[读后续写训练]
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使
之构成一篇完整的短文。
I first met her in the mid-afternoon on a hot， dry summer day
as she gracefully walked across my front yard.Her large， hopeful
eyes locked on mine.Man， she was a beauty.Right then and there
she captured my imagination and heart.
This being our first meeting， I was hoping to know her
better.So， I checked her out more closely.I asked her gently，
“You often come here？” She seemed to know the neighborhood
well and was not afraid at all.
We have plenty of deer in our Colorado neighborhood but most
are wary （警惕的） of their two-legged neighbors.Not this doe （雌
鹿）.She had come to late lunch today in conversation with a guy who
clearly admired her.
Unlike so many lookalikes， this doe had two identifiable
characteristics， a six-inch-long， two-inch-wide streak （条纹） of
darker fur on the right side of her body and a split in one of her
ears.Both made her easily identifiable.I thought she needed a
nickname， so she became “Streak”.
I cut a bushy branch of green leaves and held it up for Streak to
take a bite.Like most girls on a first date，she was hesitant to get
more deeply involved.Once I put it down，she ate up all the leaves. Eventually，Streak had her fill，took one last look at me，meandered down the path on the side of the house，and disappeared into a neighbor’s bush.Streak showed up every now and again. Sometimes I would be in the backyard as she came with her family or company.I would see her markings，especially that distinctive split and know it was her. I’d say，“Hi， Streak！” “Hey，sweetheart！” She would
always pause，lock her eyes on mine and in a short time start walking towards me. It was clear that there was some kind of connection between us.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式作答。
One day，I decided to approach her to see if she would let me touch
her.
Over time I noticed Streak slowing down，obviously aging.
When 1.
Where 2.
Who 3.
Event 4.
a mid-afternoon in summer
in the front yard
I， a deer named Streak
The deer walked across the author’s front yard，and the
author called her“Streak”because of the streak on the right
side of her body.The deer showed up every now and again，
and the author would communicate with her.It was clear that
there was some kind of connection between them.
[要素解读]
[谋篇布局]
Para.1：
请回答下列问题（根据括号内的要求和汉语句子提示补全英文句子）：
1. How did the author touch the deer？（承接首句，使用多个副词来
刻画作者的动作，描写作者第一次触摸鹿时小心翼翼的姿态）
I reached out my right hand .
我慢慢地、轻柔地伸出右手。
slowly and softly
2. How would the deer react？（通过对鹿的神态、动作以及对作者的
触觉、动作的细节描写描绘出双方初次接触时的警惕和试探心
理，让情节设置合情合理，极富画面感）
She me， her nose
and my hand .Her nose stayed
for a while until I my fist and tried to her on
the cheek.
她的眼睛一直盯着我，慢慢地垂下鼻子，轻轻地碰了碰我的手。她湿润的鼻子停留了一会儿，直到我张开拳头，试图抚摸她的脸颊。
kept her eyes on
slowly lowered
touched
gently
moist
opened
pet
3. How did they get along then？（通过二者之间的眼神交流更进一步加深对彼此的了解，使用独立主格结构，让语言精练优雅。随着作者与鹿之间的频繁互动，他们之间的关系应越来越亲密，通过平铺直叙的方式推动情节发展，自然而然地过渡到第二段的续写）
Streak as we stood in silence， ，
.Over the next several years，I
would Streak in my yard from time to time， her
and her some love.
Streak向后退了一步，我们沉默地站在那里，两眼相望，都在享受这一刻。在接下来的几年里，我会时不时地在我的院子里发现Streak，我会欢迎她，并给她一些爱。
took a step back
eyes locked
both enjoying the moment
find
welcome
show
4. What happened to the deer when she got old？（根据常理可推断这
只鹿老了之后，可能不会像之前那样经常出现，然后使用排比的
修辞手法，几个急促的短句透视出作者内心的失望）
Then one year she .Not that spring， not
during the summer， .
然后有一年她没有回来。那年春天没有，夏天也没有，一整年都
没有回来。
did not come around
not at all
Para.2：
请回答下列问题（根据括号内的要求和汉语句子提示补全英文句子）：
5. What did the author think about it？（本段主要抒发作者的内心情
感：希望Streak可以平静地度过余生，同时珍视他们之间的友谊。
使用形容词短语作状语、谓语动词的强调、让步状语从句等高级
句式和语法结构，让文章更加富有诗情画意，提升文章的境界）
， she may have become food for her natural
enemies.I hope she could live out the rest of her life and
， instead of dying in pain.I that
no life is permanent. ， I will cherish
our friendship and miss her forever.
Older and slower
pass
away peacefully
do know
No matter where she is
她年纪大了，动作慢了，可能已经成了天敌的食物。我希望她能
平静地度过余生，寿终正寝，而不是在痛苦中死去。的确，我知
道没有生命是永恒的。无论她在哪里，我都会珍惜我们的友谊，
永远想念她。
[续写成文]
Tips：1.续写第一段：根据首句可以推测，作者决定主动接近鹿，
并试着去触碰她，他们的关系变得越来越亲密。
2. 续写第二段：根据首句可以推测，这一段应侧重描述鹿老了之后的情况以及作者的感想。
One day， I decided to approach her to see if she would let me
touch her.I reached out my right hand slowly and softly.She kept
her eyes on me， slowly lowered her nose and touched my hand
gently.Her moist nose stayed for a while until I opened my fist and
tried to pet her on the cheek.Streak took a step back as we stood in
silence， eyes locked， both enjoying the moment.Over the next
several years， I would find Streak in my yard from time to time，
welcome her and show her some love.
参考范文：
Over time I noticed Streak slowing down，obviously aging. Then one year she did not come around.Not that spring，not during the summer，not at all.I realized that my friend Streak
was no longer young.Older and slower， she may have become
food for her natural enemies.I hope she could live out the rest of
her life and pass away peacefully， instead of dying in pain.I do
know that no life is permanent.No matter where she is， I will
cherish our friendship and miss her forever.
谢 谢 观 看 ！
