写作专练
[单元写作训练〗
假定你是秦皇岛市的一名中学生李华，请向准备来你校作交换生的英国同学介绍一下位于秦皇岛旅游区著名的河北海滨国家森林公园。要点如下：
1.位于秦皇岛市北戴河区，占地1，600多公顷；
2.森林茂密，栖息着多种珍稀动物，鸟类380余种，占河北省鸟类总数的90％多；
3.欢迎游览。
注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇：公顷 hectare
[审题谋篇〗
定体裁 说明文——公园介绍
定人称 第三人称为主
定时态 一般现在时为主
定要点 定结构 第一部分：简要介绍公园的位置和主要特色； 第二部分：欢迎游览。
[遣词造句〗
A.翻译单词或短语
1. 位于
2. adj. 极佳的
3. 因……而出名
4. adj. 稀少的；珍贵的
5. 是……的家园
6. 占……的比例
7. 对……有吸引力
8. adj. 有益的
B.完成句子
1.河北海滨国家森林公园位于秦皇岛市北戴河区。
Hebei Coastal National Forest Park Beidaihe District， Qinhuangdao City.
2.河北海滨国家森林公园是中国一个极佳的旅游景点。
Hebei Coastal National Forest Park is in China.
3.这个公园因其茂密的森林和大量的珍稀动物，特别是各种鸟类资源而闻名。
The park its thick forest and abundance of ， especially varieties of birds.
4.占地1，600多公顷，这个公园是380多种鸟类的家园。
Covering more than 1，600 hectares， the park .
5.它们占据了河北省鸟类总数的90％多。
They 90％ of the total bird species in Hebei Province.
6.它以其令人叹为观止的美丽吸引着来自世界各地的游客。
with its breathtaking beauty.
7.河北海滨国家森林公园被认为是观鸟者必去之地。
Hebei Coastal National Forest Park for bird watchers.
8.你会发现在这儿的旅行是令人愉快并且有益的。
You will your trip here .
C.句式升级
9.用过去分词作状语合并句1和句2
10.用定语从句合并句4和句5
[连句成篇〗
[读后续写训练〗
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Sometimes things may seem beyond our efforts， but keep on and you will find beautiful views in front of you.
I was on my second outdoor experience trip that every student had to go on.That year， we had a choice of what difficulty level we wanted： one through five.My friends and I had agreed that one would make us seem lazy and that challenging ourselves would make for a good story.In choosing level two， we believed that it would still be a fun experience.
We were quickly proven wrong.
The further we drove into the White Mountains， the higher the walls on either side of the winding highway grew.I was still in awe of the mountains I had seen so many times before； I couldn’t help feeling my heart shaking with anxiety.Soon I would have to leave the school bus that brought 50 students out into the wilderness like every year before.
My group consisted of my friends， Riley and Ann， six extremely athletic boys and me myself.We arrived at the base camp lodge （小屋） first.After putting things aside and rearranging our bags， we made our way out into the wilderness.
The three of us girls were questioning if this was really a level two.The path was unbelievably steep （陡峭的） and rocky toward the top of the mountain where the first hut was located.We were practically jogging in an attempt to keep up with the boys ahead of us.Before the trip， we were told to take breaks as often as we needed to drink water， but that wasn’t helping our pounding hearts and heavy breathing as much as it should have.
Then， 30 minutes into the most difficult hike the three of us had ever done， Riley slipped and landed on her knee.After a few moments， we turned back down the mountain as it was decided that Riley could not make the trip with us.We sat on the grass outside the lodge where we had started while Riley was brought inside to join the level one group.Ann and I exchanged breathless glances， our cheeks red and wet with sweat.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式作答。
“Do you think we should ask if we could join the level one group too？” I asked Ann.
The next days， although extremely tired， we kept on.
[要素解读〗
When 1.
Where 2.
Who 3.
Event 4.
[谋篇布局〗
Para.1：
请回答下列问题（根据括号内的要求和汉语句子提示补全英文句子）：
1.What did they do after Riley dropped out？（采用直接引语的形式描述“我”和Ann讨论的内容。用恰当的动词短语形象地描写出说话时上气不接下气的情形；用环境描写“远处巍峨的群山”来侧面衬托她们面对的艰巨困难，同时照应所给材料主题句中的beautiful views in front of you，画面感强烈，让人有身临其境的感觉）
“I know you won’t，” she .“I won’t！” I said to myself， looking at the mountains .
“我知道你不会的，”她喘着气说。“我不会！”我望着远处的巍峨群山自言自语道。
2.What happened next？（此处推进情节进一步发展，继续描写环境的艰险，并用动词-ing形式来描写伴随着的困难情形，同时照应前文徒步旅行曾落后男孩们的情节）
We stepped on the path again， the boys.
我们又踏上陡峭多石的小路，试图跟上男孩们。
3.How were they feeling and what did they think during their trip？（首先通过排比的修辞手法，用一系列的无灵主语句来详细描述行进中具体的痛苦感受，给人更鲜活的感觉，让人感同身受。然后，通过对坚持还是放弃这一内心斗争的抉择来照应文章开头的主题句：有时候，事情似乎超出了我们的努力范围，但坚持下去，你会发现美丽的风景就在你的面前）
Our bags felt ； our legs ； tears almost over out of our eyes.I wanted to turn back and leave .But， I couldn’t.I didn’t want to be someone .
我们感觉背包更沉了，腿也痛，眼泪几乎涌出眼睛。此时此地，我只想立刻转身离开，但我做不到。我不想成为一个轻易放弃的人。
Para.2：
请回答下列问题（根据括号内的要求和汉语句子提示补全英文句子）：
4.Did they keep up with the boys？ （此处继续描述旅行的情况。由文中的描述和常识可知，两人体力不如那些男孩子，所以情节应该是：两个女孩子尽力追赶，但仍然落后于那些男孩子）
Ann and I still behind the boys.
安和我发现我们仍然落在男孩子们后面。
5.How did the author feel？（此处是心理描写。相比续写第一段，“我”此时的思想获得了进一步提升，向主题思想进一步靠拢）
Instead of ， I felt as though I was gaining anyone else.
我非但没有感到尴尬，反而觉得自己从这次旅行中获得的东西比任何人都多。
6.What did they do while hiking？（两人体力不支，停下来休息符合情理；另外，两人也需要一些动力支撑她们继续前进，而欣赏沿途的风景能帮两人缓解疲惫。此处使用动作链来描写两人的旅行过程，疲惫中伴着欣赏风景，照应文章主题）
Ann and I and ， water and the deep green valleys from high above.
安和我停下来休息，喝水，从高处欣赏着深绿色的山谷。
7. How might this story end？（两个女孩历尽千辛万苦终于到达了目的地。故事结尾以两人历尽艰辛之后所获得的快乐来呼应文章的首句，升华主题。用动词-ing形式以及独立主格结构照应材料的语言风格）
We to the destination. in front of us， I exchanged a glance with Ann， .
我们到达了目的地。面对眼前美丽的景色，我和安交换了眼神，我们都笑了。
[续写成文〗
Tips：1.续写第一段：本段开头语表明作者看到Riley加入一级难度组，内心有些犹豫，于是询问Ann是否也要加入。由第二段的开头语可知，两人继续随二级难度组旅行。那么，第一段主要围绕两人如何作出决定并再次踏上旅途展开。
2.续写第二段：本段开头语表明，接下来几天两人虽然很累，但是仍然在坚持。那么，本段应侧重描述接下来旅行中的情况，同时结尾呼应文章开头的主题句“有时候，事情似乎超出了我们可以努力做到的范围，但坚持下去，你会发现美丽的风景就在你的面前”。
写作专练
[单元写作训练]
[遣词造句]
A.1.be located in
2.superb
3.be famous/well-known for
4.rare
5.be home to
6.account for
7.appeal to
8.rewarding
B.1.is located in
2.a superb tourist attraction
3.is well-known for； rare animals
4.is home to over 380 varieties of birds
5.account for more than
6.It appeals to tourists from all over the world
7.is thought to be a must
8.find； enjoyable and rewarding
C.9.Located in Beidaihe District， Qinhuangdao City， Hebei Coastal National Forest Park is a superb tourist attraction in China.
10.Covering more than 1，600 hectares， the park is home to over 380 varieties of birds， which account for more than 90％ of the total bird species in Hebei Province.
[连句成篇]
Located in Beidaihe District， Qinhuangdao City， Hebei Coastal National Forest Park is a superb tourist attraction in China.The park is well-known for its thick forest and abundance of rare animals， especially varieties of birds.Covering more than 1，600 hectares， the park is home to over 380 varieties of birds， which account for more than 90％ of the total bird species in Hebei Province.It appeals to tourists from all over the world with its breathtaking beauty.
Hebei Coastal National Forest Park is thought to be a must for bird watchers.Taking a walk in such a forest is not just a time for relaxation.You will find your trip here enjoyable and rewarding.
[读后续写训练]
[要素解读]
1.during the course of the trip
2.on the path towards the mountain top
3.Riley， Ann and I （three girls）， six athletic boys
4.Riley， Ann and I took part in the outdoor experience trip organized by the school.We joined the level two group， together with six boys.We thought we could keep up with the boys， but it didn’t work out that way.Riley slipped and hurt her knee and she dropped out of the level two group.Then Ann and I hesitated.
[谋篇布局]
1.breathed out； awesome； in the distance
2.steep and rocky； attempting to keep up with
3.heavier； hurt； spilled； nothing more than； right then and there； who gave up easily
4.found ourselves lagging
5.feeling embarrassed； more out of the trip than
6.hung back； took breaks； drinking； admiring
7.made it； Facing the beautiful views； both of us smiling
[续写成文]
参考范文：
“Do you think we should ask if we could join the level one group too？” I asked Ann.“I know you won’t，” she breathed out.“I won’t！” I said to myself， looking at the awesome mountains in the distance.Then we stepped on the steep and rocky path again， attempting to keep up with the boys.Our bags felt heavier； our legs hurt； tears almost spilled over out of our eyes.I wanted nothing more than to turn back and leave right then and there.But， I couldn’t.I didn’t want to be someone who gave up easily.
The next days， although extremely tired， we kept on.Ann and I still found ourselves lagging behind the boys.Instead of feeling embarrassed， I felt as though I was gaining more out of the trip than anyone else.As the boys ran， Ann and I hung back and took breaks， drinking water and admiring the deep green valleys from high above.Level two was fun， too.And eventually we made it to the destination.Facing the beautiful views in front of us， I exchanged a glance with Ann， both of us smiling.
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写作专练
[单元写作训练]
假定你是秦皇岛市的一名中学生李华，请向准备来你校作交换生
的英国同学介绍一下位于秦皇岛旅游区著名的河北海滨国家森林公
园。要点如下：
1. 位于秦皇岛市北戴河区，占地1，600多公顷；
2. 森林茂密，栖息着多种珍稀动物，鸟类380余种，占河北省鸟类总
数的90％多；
3. 欢迎游览。
注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇：公顷 hectare
[审题谋篇]
定体裁 说明文——公园介绍
定人称 第三人称为主
定时态 一般现在时为主
定要点 定结构 第一部分：简要介绍公园的位置和主要特色；
第二部分：欢迎游览。
1. 位于
2. adj. 极佳的
3. 因……而出名
4. adj. 稀少的；珍贵的
5. 是……的家园
6. 占……的比例
7. 对……有吸引力
8. adj. 有益的
be located in
superb
be famous/well-known for
rare
be home to
account for
appeal to
rewarding
[遣词造句]
A. 翻译单词或短语
1. 河北海滨国家森林公园位于秦皇岛市北戴河区。
Hebei Coastal National Forest Park Beidaihe
District， Qinhuangdao City.
2. 河北海滨国家森林公园是中国一个极佳的旅游景点。
Hebei Coastal National Forest Park is in China.
3. 这个公园因其茂密的森林和大量的珍稀动物，特别是各种鸟类资
源而闻名。
The park its thick forest and abundance
of ， especially varieties of birds.
is located in
a superb tourist
attraction
is well-known for
rare animals
B. 完成句子
4. 占地1，600多公顷，这个公园是380多种鸟类的家园。
Covering more than 1，600 hectares， the park
.
5. 它们占据了河北省鸟类总数的90％多。
They 90％ of the total bird species in
Hebei Province.
6. 它以其令人叹为观止的美丽吸引着来自世界各地的游客。
with its
breathtaking beauty.
is home to over
380 varieties of birds
account for more than
It appeals to tourists from all over the world
7. 河北海滨国家森林公园被认为是观鸟者必去之地。
Hebei Coastal National Forest Park for
bird watchers.
8. 你会发现在这儿的旅行是令人愉快并且有益的。
You will your trip here .
C. 句式升级
9. 用过去分词作状语合并句1和句2
is thought to be a must
find
enjoyable and rewarding
Located in Beidaihe District， Qinhuangdao City， Hebei Coastal
National Forest Park is a superb tourist attraction in China.
10. 用定语从句合并句4和句5
Covering more than 1，600 hectares， the park is home to over
380 varieties of birds， which account for more than 90％ of the
total bird species in Hebei Province.
Located in Beidaihe District， Qinhuangdao City， Hebei
Coastal National Forest Park is a superb tourist attraction in
China.The park is well-known for its thick forest and abundance
of rare animals， especially varieties of birds.Covering more than
1，600 hectares， the park is home to over 380 varieties of
birds， which account for more than 90％ of the total bird species
in Hebei Province.It appeals to tourists from all over the world
with its breathtaking beauty.
[连句成篇]
Hebei Coastal National Forest Park is thought to be a must
for bird watchers.Taking a walk in such a forest is not just a time
for relaxation.You will find your trip here enjoyable and
rewarding.
[读后续写训练]
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使
之构成一篇完整的短文。
Sometimes things may seem beyond our efforts， but keep on
and you will find beautiful views in front of you.
I was on my second outdoor experience trip that every student
had to go on.That year， we had a choice of what difficulty level
we wanted： one through five.My friends and I had agreed that
one would make us seem lazy and that challenging ourselves would
make for a good story.In choosing level two， we believed that it
would still be a fun experience.
We were quickly proven wrong.
The further we drove into the White Mountains， the higher the
walls on either side of the winding highway grew.I was still in awe of
the mountains I had seen so many times before； I couldn’t help
feeling my heart shaking with anxiety.Soon I would have to leave the
school bus that brought 50 students out into the wilderness like every
year before.
My group consisted of my friends， Riley and Ann， six
extremely athletic boys and me myself.We arrived at the base camp
lodge （小屋） first.After putting things aside and rearranging our
bags， we made our way out into the wilderness.
The three of us girls were questioning if this was really a level
two.The path was unbelievably steep （陡峭的） and rocky toward
the top of the mountain where the first hut was located.We were
practically jogging in an attempt to keep up with the boys ahead of
us.Before the trip， we were told to take breaks as often as we needed
to drink water， but that wasn’t helping our pounding hearts and
heavy breathing as much as it should have.
Then， 30 minutes into the most difficult hike the three of us had
ever done， Riley slipped and landed on her knee.After a few
moments， we turned back down the mountain as it was decided that
Riley could not make the trip with us.We sat on the grass outside the
lodge where we had started while Riley was brought inside to join the
level one group.Ann and I exchanged breathless glances， our cheeks
red and wet with sweat.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式作答。
“Do you think we should ask if we could join the level one
group too？” I asked Ann.
The next days， although extremely tired， we kept on.
When 1.
Where 2.
Who 3.
Event 4.
during the course of the trip
on the path towards the mountain top
Riley， Ann and I （three girls）， six athletic boys
Riley， Ann and I took part in the outdoor experience
trip organized by the school.We joined the level two
group， together with six boys.We thought we could keep
up with the boys， but it didn’t work out that way.Riley
slipped and hurt her knee and she dropped out of the level
two group.Then Ann and I hesitated.
[要素解读]
[谋篇布局]
Para.1：
请回答下列问题（根据括号内的要求和汉语句子提示补全英文句
子）：
1. What did they do after Riley dropped out？（采用直接引语
的形式描述“我”和Ann讨论的内容。用恰当的动词短语形象
地描写出说话时上气不接下气的情形；用环境描写“远处巍峨
的群山”来侧面衬托她们面对的艰巨困难，同时照应所给材料
主题句中的beautiful views in front of you，画面感强烈，让
人有身临其境的感觉）
“I know you won’t，” she .“I won’t！” I
said to myself， looking at the mountains
.
“我知道你不会的，”她喘着气说。“我不会！”我望着远处的
巍峨群山自言自语道。
breathed out
awesome
in the
distance
2. What happened next？（此处推进情节进一步发展，继续描写环境
的艰险，并用动词-ing形式来描写伴随着的困难情形，同时照应前
文徒步旅行曾落后男孩们的情节）
We stepped on the path again，
the boys.
我们又踏上陡峭多石的小路，试图跟上男孩们。
steep and rocky
attempting
to keep up with
3. How were they feeling and what did they think during their trip？
（首先通过排比的修辞手法，用一系列的无灵主语句来详细描述
行进中具体的痛苦感受，给人更鲜活的感觉，让人感同身受。然
后，通过对坚持还是放弃这一内心斗争的抉择来照应文章开头的
主题句：有时候，事情似乎超出了我们的努力范围，但坚持下
去，你会发现美丽的风景就在你的面前）
Our bags felt ； our legs ； tears
almost over out of our eyes.I wanted
to turn back and leave .But， I
couldn’t.I didn’t want to be someone .
我们感觉背包更沉了，腿也痛，眼泪几乎涌出眼睛。此时此
地，我只想立刻转身离开，但我做不到。我不想成为一个轻易
放弃的人。
heavier
hurt
spilled
nothing more
than
right then and there
who gave up easily
Para.2：
请回答下列问题（根据括号内的要求和汉语句子提示补全英文句
子）：
4. Did they keep up with the boys？ （此处继续描述旅行的情况。由
文中的描述和常识可知，两人体力不如那些男孩子，所以情节应
该是：两个女孩子尽力追赶，但仍然落后于那些男孩子）
Ann and I still behind the boys.
安和我发现我们仍然落在男孩子们后面。
found ourselves lagging
5. How did the author feel？（此处是心理描写。相比续写第一段，
“我”此时的思想获得了进一步提升，向主题思想进一步靠拢）
Instead of ， I felt as though I was
gaining anyone else.
我非但没有感到尴尬，反而觉得自己从这次旅行中获得的东西比
任何人都多。
feeling embarrassed
more out of the trip than
6. What did they do while hiking？（两人体力不支，停下来休息符合
情理；另外，两人也需要一些动力支撑她们继续前进，而欣赏沿
途的风景能帮两人缓解疲惫。此处使用动作链来描写两人的旅行
过程，疲惫中伴着欣赏风景，照应文章主题）
Ann and I and ，
water and the deep green valleys from high above.
安和我停下来休息，喝水，从高处欣赏着深绿色的山谷。
hung back
took breaks
drinking
admiring
7. How might this story end？（两个女孩历尽千辛万苦终于到达了目
的地。故事结尾以两人历尽艰辛之后所获得的快乐来呼应文章的
首句，升华主题。用动词-ing形式以及独立主格结构照应材料的语
言风格）
We to the destination.
in front of us， I exchanged a glance with Ann，
.
我们到达了目的地。面对眼前美丽的景色，我和安交换了眼神，
我们都笑了。
made it
Facing the beautiful views
both of us
smiling
Tips：1.续写第一段：本段开头语表明作者看到Riley加入一级难
度组，内心有些犹豫，于是询问Ann是否也要加入。由第二段的开
头语可知，两人继续随二级难度组旅行。那么，第一段主要围绕
两人如何作出决定并再次踏上旅途展开。
[续写成文]
2. 续写第二段：本段开头语表明，接下来几天两人虽然很累，但是
仍然在坚持。那么，本段应侧重描述接下来旅行中的情况，同时
结尾呼应文章开头的主题句“有时候，事情似乎超出了我们可以
努力做到的范围，但坚持下去，你会发现美丽的风景就在你的面
前”。
“Do you think we should ask if we could join the level one
group too？” I asked Ann.“I know you won’t，” she breathed
out.“I won’t！” I said to myself， looking at the awesome
mountains in the distance.Then we stepped on the steep and rocky
path again， attempting to keep up with the boys.Our bags felt
heavier； our legs hurt； tears almost spilled over out of our eyes.I
wanted nothing more than to turn back and leave right then and
there.But， I couldn’t.I didn’t want to be someone who gave up
easily.
参考范文：
The next days， although extremely tired， we kept on.Ann
and I still found ourselves lagging behind the boys.Instead of
feeling embarrassed， I felt as though I was gaining more out of the
trip than anyone else.As the boys ran， Ann and I hung back and
took breaks， drinking water and admiring the deep green valleys
from high above.Level two was fun， too.And eventually we made
it to the destination.Facing the beautiful views in front of us， I
exchanged a glance with Ann， both of us smiling.
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