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As a young boy, I was carefree. Every vacation I looked forward to two things—seeing my grandpa and hearing his wonderful stories. My grandpa was a very good storyteller. He had worked various odd jobs when he was young and wove his adventures and misadventures into fantastic tales. These wonderful tales colored my childhood.
As I grew up, I had to admit that Grandpa’s stories went on a little long, even a little boring and gradually lost their magic. However, not wanting to upset him, my brother and I would sometimes take turns sitting in the living room, listening to grandpa tell his stories.
When my grandpa was approaching 91, he suffered from serious memory-loss. It was kind of what doctors called dementia (痴呆), probably the earliest stage of Alzheimer’s disease. Following the doctor’s directions, we moved him into a Sunrise Assisted Living Community, where he could get a better care. After that, grandpa hardly came to our house.
One weekend before my grandpa’s birthday, I came to visit him. Seeing grandpa sitting in his armchair, dull-looking, I was consumed with mixed feelings. I wheeled grandpa to the sunshine in the courtyard, talking to him. He couldn’t express himself clearly and spoke in short bursts, but I listened to him patiently and carefully just as I used to be a little boy.
It was then that I noticed a shadow box with some old and yellowish photos in it. I picked one up, in which my brother, several boys in our neighborhood, and I were playing basketball with grandpa cheering us on twenty years before. My mind flashed back to those beautiful memories. Back then, Grandpa was in good physical condition and we were all wearing basketball jerseys, playing and laughing with abandon. I presented the photo to my grandpa, pointing at each member and reminding him of their names. Incredibly, grandpa could speak out the name of every player. I even caught a soft light in grandpa’s eyes and a smile on his lips.
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A bright idea for grandpa’s birthday came to my mind.
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Seeing “the same players” playing there, grandpa seemed to have thought of something.
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文本分析
角色:____________________
2.视角:第______人称
3.时空线:from “我” 童年时期待假期见爷爷、听他讲故事→____________________→____________________→“我” 在爷爷生日前探望他,发现爷爷对旧篮球照片有记忆→(续写)“我” 为爷爷生日策划篮球场景→(续写)爷爷看到 “旧伙伴” 打篮球的反应与后续(补充关键情节节点)
4. 请在文章中将可能的线索都找出来。
Why did “我” look forward to vacations as a young boy :____________________(结合 “我” 对爷爷和他故事的期待作答)
How did “我” and brother treat grandpa’s stories when “我” grew up :____________________(梳理 “我” 和弟弟长大后对爷爷故事的态度)
What happened to grandpa when he was approaching 91 :____________________(说明爷爷的健康状况及后续安排)
What made grandpa show a smile and soft light in his eyes during “我”’s visit :____________________(结合旧篮球照片的情节作答)
What memory did the old basketball photo bring to “我”?:____________________(描述照片唤起的 “我” 的童年回忆)
What clue did the photo give “我” for grandpa’s birthday :____________________(推断照片为 “我” 提供的生日策划思路)
5.情节线:“我” 童年时期待假期见爷爷、听他讲冒险故事→“我” 长大后觉得爷爷的故事冗长,仍和弟弟轮流倾听以免他难过→爷爷 91 岁患痴呆症,被送到辅助生活社区→____________________→____________________→(续写)“我” 联系旧伙伴,计划在爷爷生日时重现篮球场景→(续写)爷爷看到 “旧伙伴” 打篮球后的反应与情感变化(补充中间关键情节)
6.情感线:
“我”:期待、喜爱(童年对爷爷和故事的情感)→____________________(长大后对爷爷故事的态度,含愧疚与体贴)→____________________(看到爷爷痴呆、神情呆滞时)→____________________(发现爷爷对旧篮球照片有记忆时)→____________________(为爷爷策划生日时及看到爷爷反应时)
爷爷:热情、善于分享(年轻时讲故事时)→____________________(年老患痴呆后,神情与表达状态)→____________________(看到旧篮球照片时)→____________________(续写中看到 “旧伙伴” 打篮球时)
“我” 的弟弟:____________________(对爷爷的体贴,从 “轮流倾听故事” 推断)
7.综合以上信息,请用 3-4 句话概括文章大意。(中英各一个)
中文:____________________
英文:____________________(提炼原文核心情节,如 “我” 与爷爷的过往、爷爷的健康变化、旧照片的作用等,简洁概括)
8.句式:请从原文中找出以下句式各 1 例,并抄写下来:
并列句:____________________
让步状语从句:____________________
定语从句:____________________
现在分词作状语:____________________
9.主题(本文属于人与自我 / 人与他人):____________________(结合 “我” 与爷爷的亲情、记忆的意义、关爱的价值等核心思想提炼)
情节构造
第一段提示句:A bright idea for grandpa’s birthday came to my mind.
衔接句 1——— 对 “bright idea” 提问 “‘我’想到的生日主意是什么?基于什么提出的?”:What was the birthday idea “我” came up with, and what was it based on
过渡句推演:衔接 1→____________________(补充 “我” 联系他人、筹备生日活动的过程,体现对爷爷的关爱)←衔接 2
衔接句 2——— 对 “preparation” 提问 “‘我’和伙伴们为实现这个想法做了哪些准备?”:What preparations did “我” and the friends make to realize the idea
第二段提示句:Seeing “the same players” playing there, grandpa seemed to have thought of something.
衔接句 3——— 对 “grandpa’s reaction” 提问 “爷爷看到‘旧伙伴’打篮球时,有哪些具体反应(表情、动作、语言)?”:What specific reactions (expressions, actions, words) did grandpa have when seeing the “old players” playing
过渡句推演:衔接 3→____________________(补充 “我们” 与爷爷的互动、爷爷的情感变化,呼应亲情与记忆的主题)←主题
主题:____________________(结合亲情对记忆的唤醒、关爱带来的温暖等核心思想提炼)
段落构思
第一段:A bright idea for grandpa’s birthday came to my mind.
→①____________________(描述 “我” 产生生日想法的原因,关联旧篮球照片的启发)→②____________________(展现 “我” 联系伙伴、筹备活动的过程与大家的态度)→③____________________(写出 “我们” 带爷爷到现场、准备呈现场景的细节);
英文:____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第二段:Seeing “the same players” playing there, grandpa seemed to have thought of something.
→①____________________(描写爷爷看到场景后的初步反应,如眼神、动作变化)→②____________________(呈现 “我们” 与爷爷的互动,如交流、陪伴的细节)→③____________________(写出 “我” 的感悟,呼应主题);
英文:
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参考答案
文本分析
1.角色:“我”(重视亲情,童年喜爱爷爷的故事,长大后仍用心关爱患痴呆症爷爷的晚辈)、爷爷(年轻时擅长讲冒险故事,91 岁患痴呆症,对童年篮球记忆有残留的老人)、“我” 的弟弟(与 “我” 默契配合,轮流倾听爷爷故事以体贴爷爷的家人)、邻里男孩(曾与 “我”、弟弟及爷爷一起打篮球的伙伴,是唤醒爷爷记忆的关键角色)
2.视角:第一人称(以 “我” 的视角叙述与爷爷的过往及当下经历,如 “Every vacation I looked forward to...”“I wheeled grandpa to the sunshine...”)
3.时空线:from “我” 童年时期待假期见爷爷、听他讲故事→“我” 长大后觉得爷爷的故事冗长却仍和弟弟轮流倾听→爷爷 91 岁患痴呆症,被送到 Sunrise 辅助生活社区→“我” 在爷爷生日前探望他,发现他对旧篮球照片有记忆→(续写)“我” 为爷爷生日策划篮球场景→(续写)爷爷看到 “旧伙伴” 打篮球的反应与后续(补充关键情节节点)
4. 请在文章中将可能的线索都找出来。
Why did “我” look forward to vacations as a young boy :Because “我” could see grandpa and listen to his wonderful adventure stories, which made “我”’s childhood colorful.
How did “我” and brother treat grandpa’s stories when “我” grew up :“我” and brother thought grandpa’s stories were a little long and boring, but we took turns sitting in the living room to listen, not wanting to upset him.
What happened to grandpa when he was approaching 91 :He suffered from serious memory-loss (dementia, probably early Alzheimer’s disease); “我们” moved him to a Sunrise Assisted Living Community for better care, and he hardly came to “我们”’s house after that.
What made grandpa show a smile and soft light in his eyes during “我”’s visit :“我” showed grandpa an old basketball photo—with “我”、brother、neighborhood boys playing basketball and grandpa cheering them on 20 years ago—and reminded him of everyone’s names; grandpa could speak out all the names, which awakened his warm memory.
What memory did the old basketball photo bring to “我”?:It brought back “我”’s memory of 20 years ago—grandpa was in good health, “我们” all wore basketball jerseys, played basketball and laughed freely with grandpa cheering.
What clue did the photo give “我” for grandpa’s birthday :The photo showed that basketball memory could arouse grandpa’s emotion, so “我” got the idea to recreate the basketball scene for his birthday to make him happy.
5.情节线:“我” 童年时期待假期见爷爷、听他讲冒险故事→“我” 长大后觉得爷爷的故事冗长,仍和弟弟轮流倾听以免他难过→爷爷 91 岁患痴呆症,被送到辅助生活社区→“我” 在爷爷生日前探望他,发现他神情呆滞,便推他到庭院晒太阳→“我” 发现旧篮球照片,爷爷看到后能说出所有人名并露出笑容→(续写)“我” 联系旧伙伴,计划在爷爷生日时重现篮球场景→(续写)爷爷看到 “旧伙伴” 打篮球后的反应与情感变化(补充中间关键情节)
6.情感线:
“我”:期待、喜爱(童年对爷爷和故事的情感)→体贴、略带无奈(长大后对爷爷故事的态度,含愧疚与体贴)→心疼、酸涩(看到爷爷痴呆、神情呆滞时)→惊喜、欣慰(发现爷爷对旧篮球照片有记忆时)→用心、温暖(为爷爷策划生日时及看到爷爷反应时)
爷爷:热情、善于分享(年轻时讲故事时)→呆滞、表达不清(年老患痴呆后,神情与表达状态)→欣喜、记忆复苏(看到旧篮球照片时)→激动、愉悦(续写中看到 “旧伙伴” 打篮球时)
“我” 的弟弟:体贴、懂事(对爷爷的体贴,从 “轮流倾听故事” 推断)
7.以上信息,请用 3-4 句话概括文章大意。(中英各一个)
中文:“我” 童年时期待假期见爷爷、听他讲冒险故事,长大后虽觉得故事冗长仍和弟弟轮流倾听。爷爷 91 岁患痴呆症被送到辅助生活社区,“我” 生日前探望他时,发现他对二十年前和 “我”、弟弟及邻里男孩打篮球的旧照片有记忆,这让 “我” 萌生了为他策划生日惊喜的想法。
英文:When I was a child, I looked forward to vacations to see my grandpa and listen to his adventure stories. When I grew up, though I found his stories long, my brother and I still took turns listening to avoid upsetting him. Grandpa got dementia at 91 and was sent to an assisted living community; before his birthday, I visited him and found he recognized the old photo of us playing basketball with him 20 years ago, which gave me the idea to plan a birthday surprise for him.
8.句式:请从原文中找出以下句式各 1 例,并抄写下来:
并列句:He had worked various odd jobs when he was young and wove his adventures and misadventures into fantastic tales.
让步状语从句:However, not wanting to upset him, my brother and I would sometimes take turns sitting in the living room, listening to grandpa tell his stories.
定语从句:Following the doctor’s directions, we moved him into a Sunrise Assisted Living Community, where he could get a better care.
现在分词作状语:Seeing grandpa sitting in his armchair, dull-looking, I was consumed with mixed feelings.
9.主题(本文属于人与自我 / 人与他人):本文属于人与他人,主题是 “亲情唤醒记忆,关爱温暖人心”—— 即便爷爷因痴呆症失去大部分记忆,“我” 用细心与关爱捕捉到他对篮球记忆的残留,通过重现童年场景唤醒他的情感,展现了亲情对破碎记忆的修复力与关爱的温暖价值。
情节构造
第一段提示句:A bright idea for grandpa’s birthday came to my mind.
衔接句 1——— 对 “bright idea” 提问 “‘我’想到的生日主意是什么?基于什么提出的?”:What was the birthday idea “我” came up with, and what was it based on
过渡句推演:衔接 1→“我” thought of recreating the basketball scene in the photo for grandpa’s birthday, so “我” called brother and the neighborhood boys immediately. They were all willing to help after hearing about grandpa’s condition. On the birthday, “我们” arrived at the community early, put on old-style basketball jerseys, and prepared a small basketball→衔接 2
衔接句 2——— 对 “preparation” 提问 “‘我’和伙伴们为实现这个想法做了哪些准备?”:What preparations did “我” and the friends make to realize the idea
第二段提示句:Seeing “the same players” playing there, grandpa seemed to have thought of something.
衔接句 3——— 对 “grandpa’s reaction” 提问 “爷爷看到‘旧伙伴’打篮球时,有哪些具体反应(表情、动作、语言)?”:What specific reactions (expressions, actions, words) did grandpa have when seeing the “old players” playing
过渡句推演:衔接 3→Grandpa’s eyes lit up, he leaned forward in the wheelchair, and mumbled the names of “我” and brother. “我们” stopped playing and walked to him; grandpa held “我”’s hand tightly, smiling and saying “happy” repeatedly. “我” and brother felt warm, knowing the surprise had touched grandpa→主题
主题:亲情是唤醒记忆的钥匙,即使岁月模糊了过往,用心打造的温暖场景仍能激活亲人内心深处的美好回忆,让爱得以传递。
段落构思
第一段:A bright idea for grandpa’s birthday came to my mind.
→①Since the old basketball photo had awakened grandpa’s warm memory, I thought: Why not recreate that scene for his birthday It might make him as happy as when he saw the photo.→②I immediately called my brother and the neighborhood boys who played basketball with us back then. →③When we got near the open area, my brother shouted, “Pass it here!” and the boys started playing lightly, just like old times;
英文:A bright idea for grandpa’s birthday came to my mind. Since the old basketball photo had awakened grandpa’s warm memory, I thought: Why not recreate that scene for his birthday It might make him as happy as when he saw the photo. I immediately called my brother and the neighborhood boys who played basketball with us back then. They were all moved by my plan and promised to come. On grandpa’s birthday, we arrived at the community early. We put on simple basketball jerseys like we did 20 years ago and even brought a small basketball that looked similar to the old one. Then I wheeled grandpa to the courtyard, pretending to take him for a walk. When we got near the open area, my brother shouted, “Pass it here!” and the boys started playing lightly, just like old times.
第二段:Seeing “the same players” playing there, grandpa seemed to have thought of something.
→① Slowly, he opened his mouth and mumbled, “Xiao Li (my name)... Xiao Qiang (my brother’s name)...”→②The boys noticed and stopped playing, walking over to greet him one by one. Grandpa nodded hard, a big smile spreading across his wrinkled face.→③At that moment, I realized that dementia could take away grandpa’s recent memory, but it couldn’t erase the deep warmth of childhood.;
英文:Seeing “the same players” playing there, grandpa seemed to have thought of something. His dull eyes suddenly lit up, and he stopped staring at the ground. He leaned forward slightly in the wheelchair, his gaze fixed on the boys playing basketball. Slowly, he opened his mouth and mumbled, “Xiao Li (my name)... Xiao Qiang (my brother’s name)...” I knelt down beside him, holding his trembling hand. The boys noticed and stopped playing, walking over to greet him one by one. Grandpa nodded hard, a big smile spreading across his wrinkled face. He kept repeating “good... happy...” in short bursts, but we all understood how excited he was. At that moment, I realized that dementia could take away grandpa’s recent memory, but it couldn’t erase the deep warmth of childhood. The love we prepared had become the most precious gift for grandpa’s birthday.