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My parents were always against me owning my own pet, afraid of the mess it would make or that I would quickly lose interest in taking care of it, but we made a compromise: I could volunteer at a local pet shelter on the weekends to test my sense of responsibility and dedication. That was how I first came to volunteer at the Avondale pet shelter and — more importantly — where I met my future best friend, Chocolate.
One hot August afternoon, my boss Charlie told me that they were bringing in a young black Labrador Retriever and that I'd be its primary caretaker. An hour after our conversation and in came Chocolate — a beautiful dog with shining brown fur and amazing blue eyes. At about 3 months old, I expected him to be a lot more energetic and playful, but he immediately backed off and lay down at the back of his pen (围栏).
I asked Charlie what was the matter with him. He replied that Chocolate had a genetic problem which caused him to be born with a short tail, leading potential owners to think there was something wrong with him; so the breeder felt that they had no choice but to give up the puppy to the shelter.
He was overlooked and underappreciated. I felt very angry at the thought that an otherwise healthy dog could be thrown away so easily. At the same time, I felt a deep sympathy for this dog who had been cheated out of the love and attention he deserved. It was at this moment that I resolved to give Chocolate as much love and attention as I could while working as a volunteer.
Although Chocolate was reluctant and shy at first. Eventually through enough treats and play he slowly came around and warmed up to me. Soon enough, whenever I came around his pen to let him out for his turn of walks and play, Chocolate was always excited and jumping with joy.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
As time passed by, the connection between Chocolate and I grew stronger and stronger.
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One day, Charlie said Chocolate must find a home soon or he would be removed.
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文本分析
1.角色:_____________________________
2.视角:第________人称
3.时空线:from volunteering at the shelter---______________ ---bringing Chocolate home
4. 请在文章中将可能的线索都找出来。
How did “I” get to know Chocolate :
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What was Chocolate’s problem :
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How did “I” get along with Chocolate at first :
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What was “I”’s feeling towards Chocolate :
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What conflict might “I” face :
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How did Charlie treat Chocolate :
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5.情节线:“我” 因父母反对养宠物,妥协去收容所做志愿者→________________________→“我” 用心照料,Chocolate 逐渐亲近 “我”→(续写)“我” 与 Chocolate 情感加深→得知 Chocolate 需尽快找到家,“我” 说服父母收养它。
6.情感线:“我”:期待(when volunteering)→___________(seeing Chocolate first)→___________(knowing his story)→___________(getting along)→___________(续写)
Charlie:(arranging care)→(informing the urgency)
父母:(opposing pet ownership)→(续写:妥协、接纳)
7. 综合以上信息,请用 3-4 句话概括文章大意。(中英各一个)
中文:
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英文:
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句式:
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9.主题(本文属于人与自我 / 人与动物):_______________________
情节构造
第一段提示句:As time passed by, the connection between Chocolate and I grew stronger and stronger.
衔接句 1——— 对 “connection grew stronger” 提问 “What details showed the deepened connection ”:What specific behaviors reflected the stronger bond between “I” and Chocolate
过渡句推演:衔接 1→______←衔接 2
衔接句 2——— 对 “emotional change” 提问 “How did ‘I’ feel about Chocolate then ”:What did “I” realize about Chocolate in my heart
第二段提示句:One day, Charlie said Chocolate must find a home soon or he would be removed.
衔接句 3——— 对 “Charlie’s words” 提问 “How did ‘I’ react to the news ”:What was “I”’s immediate feeling and reaction when hearing Charlie’s words
过渡句推演:衔接 3→______←主题
主题:_________________________________
段落构思
第一段:As time passed by, the connection between Chocolate and I grew stronger and stronger.
→①__________________→②__________________→③__________________;
英文:
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第二段:One day, Charlie said Chocolate must find a home soon or he would be removed.
→④__________________→⑤__________________→⑥__________________。
英文:
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参考答案
文本分析
1.角色:“我”(志愿在收容所工作的青少年)、Chocolate(有短尾基因问题的黑色拉布拉多幼犬)、父母(反对 “我” 养宠物,注重责任感)、Charlie(收容所老板,“我” 的上司)、繁殖者(因 Chocolate 短尾将其送入收容所)
2.视角:第一人称
3.时空线:from volunteering at the shelter---taking care of Chocolate at the shelter ---bringing Chocolate home
4. 请在文章中将可能的线索都找出来。
How did “I” get to know Chocolate :
“I” volunteered at Avondale pet shelter as a compromise with parents, and boss Charlie arranged “me” to be Chocolate’s primary caretaker.
What was Chocolate’s problem :He had a genetic problem that made him born with a short tail, which made potential owners think he was defective.
How did “I” get along with Chocolate at first :Chocolate was reluctant and shy initially, but “I” gained his trust through treats and play, and he warmed up to “I”.
What was “I”’s feeling towards Chocolate :“I” felt angry for him being abandoned, sympathetic for losing deserved love, and later developed deep affection.
What conflict might “I” face :Parents were against “me” owning a pet, but “I” wanted to keep Chocolate, especially when he had to find a home soon.
How did Charlie treat Chocolate :He took Chocolate into the shelter and assigned “me” as his primary caretaker, later informed “me” that Chocolate needed a home soon.
5.情节线:“我” 因父母反对养宠物,妥协去收容所做志愿者→被安排照顾因短尾被遗弃的 Chocolate→“我” 用心照料,Chocolate 逐渐亲近 “我”→(续写)“我” 与 Chocolate 情感加深→得知 Chocolate 需尽快找到家,“我” 说服父母收养它。
6.情感线:“我”:期待(when volunteering)→_同情、愤怒;(seeing Chocolate first)→喜爱、珍视;(knowing his story)→焦急、坚定(续写)
Charlie:(arranging care)→(informing the urgency)
父母:(opposing pet ownership)→(续写:妥协、接纳)
7. 综合以上信息,请用 3-4 句话概括文章大意。(中英各一个)
中文:
“我” 因父母反对养宠物,周末去收容所做志愿者,负责照顾因短尾被遗弃的幼犬 Chocolate。“我” 用心照料让 Chocolate 逐渐亲近,两人情感渐深。当得知 Chocolate 需尽快找到家否则会被送走,“我” 说服父母,最终将它带回家。
英文:Since my parents opposed me having a pet, I volunteered at a shelter on weekends as a compromise and was in charge of Chocolate, a puppy abandoned for his short tail due to genetic issues. My care made Chocolate warm up to me, and we grew close. When told Chocolate had to find a home soon, I persuaded my parents and finally took him home.
8.句式:
让步状语从句(Although Chocolate was reluctant and shy at first...);
定语从句(...a young black Labrador Retriever and that I'd be its primary caretaker);
现在分词作状语(leading potential owners to think...);
宾语从句(I expected him to be a lot more energetic...)
9. 主题(本文属于人与自我 / 人与动物):_______________________
人与动物间的情感联结;责任与爱的担当
情节构造
第一段提示句:As time passed by, the connection between Chocolate and I grew stronger and stronger.
衔接句 1——— 对 “connection grew stronger” 提问 “What details showed the deepened connection ”:What specific behaviors reflected the stronger bond between “I” and Chocolate
过渡句推演:衔接 1→______←衔接 2
Chocolate’s responsive behaviors and “my” extra care for him
衔接句 2——— 对 “emotional change” 提问 “How did ‘I’ feel about Chocolate then ”:What did “I” realize about Chocolate in my heart
第二段提示句:One day, Charlie said Chocolate must find a home soon or he would be removed.
衔接句 3——— 对 “Charlie’s words” 提问 “How did ‘I’ react to the news ”:What was “I”’s immediate feeling and reaction when hearing Charlie’s words
过渡句推演:衔接 3→______←主题
“I” persuading parents to adopt Chocolate
主题:_________________________________
True love and responsibility make a home for both humans and animals.
四、段落构思
第一段:As time passed by, the connection between Chocolate and I grew stronger and stronger.
①Chocolate reacted eagerly whenever “I” appeared, like pressing against the fence and wiggling his short tail.②“I” spent extra time with him, bringing favorite treats and playing together.③“I” shared daily life with him and realized “I” couldn’t bear to lose him.
→英文:He’d greet me by pressing his body to the pen fence, his blue eyes sparkling, the moment I stepped into the shelter. I’d bring peanut butter treats he loved and play fetch in the yard, watching him run happily with his short tail wagging. I even talked about my day to him, and he’d tilt his head as if understanding. A deep affection welled up in me—I knew he’d become irreplaceable.
第二段:One day, Charlie said Chocolate must find a home soon or he would be removed.
④“I” felt heartbroken and panicked, worried about Chocolate’s fate.⑤“I” begged parents to adopt him, promising to take full responsibility.⑥Parents agreed, and “I” brought Chocolate home, giving him a forever home.
→英文:My heart dropped instantly, and I sat beside his pen, eyes burning with worry. That night, I pleaded with my parents, telling them how Chocolate had opened up to me and that his short tail didn’t diminish his sweetness. I vowed to handle all his care, and they finally agreed. The next day, I carried Chocolate home—he curled up at my feet, and I knew we’d found happiness in each other.