(共12张PPT)
– writing a survival story
Book 5 Unit 6
Learning objectives
At the end of the class, you are expected to:
1. figure out the main idea of the given text by finding out the basic information like “5w+1H” ;
2. layout the main plots of two paragraph by using the methods that will be learnt in class;
3. polish and finish the writing.
What is it 
Do you want to go to Mars someday 
Can human beings survive on Mars 
Mars
What did he do there 
In order to survive, I started to farm on Mars.
Are there any questions you want to ask 
astronaut
What happened 
Why did I need to farm 
Who
When
Where
What
Why
I
a rescue misson
a week since other astanauts left Mars
on Mars
Read
I was left alone on Mars and informed a rescue team would arrive after eight months. I had to farm on Mars as the food was only enough for four months.
no enough food
Build-up
Climax
accidentally left alone on Mars.
Feeling:_____________
beginning
A rescue mission would arrive after eight months and I had to farm on Mars as there was no enough food.
Feeling: _____________________
Resolution
Ending
What would I do next 
Would I succeed 
Story Mountain
hopeless
hopeful in hopelessness
given text
how
clue
principle: _______ending
positive
Para. 1: In order to survive, I started to farm on Mars. _____________
Para. 2: After eight months, the rescue team finally arrived. _____________
What will you write 
“二首
定段一”
“首主
定段二”
how did I feel (tears of excitement streamed down)
the team was amazed at.. / praised...
a mixed feeling of pride and relief welled up...
I was rescued / took the last look at/ left Mars.
Human determination could pave the way for survival.
How many sentences 
“10句5定”
how to farm (chose, collected, planted..etc.)
expected yet anxious about failure
despite difficulties,...never gave up / took care regulary
some seedlings sprouted
succuess (harvested enough food/ I waited hopefully)
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
action
response
( “ARE” )
6.
7.
8.
9.
10.
衔1
衔2
衔3
结尾句
主旨句
/ overjoyed
emotion
What can you learn from the story 
difficulties
What can you learn from the story 
metaphor
survive
think
read
write
“_____定段一”
“_____定段二”
Summary
“__w1H”
“ 十句_____法”
“_____原则”
5
二首
首主
ARE
“clue”
五定
Homework
Compulsory:
finish your writing
Optional:
句式:
动作链;
非谓语;
With的复合结构;
定语从句;
无灵主语
独立主格;
强调结构...
continue to build up your owncorpus(语料库) to help your writing.
维度 标准 分数 得分
情节 (9分) 情节发展是否合理,有逻辑? 5
情节完整吗? 2
主题升华是否恰当 2
内容 (8分) 描写是否丰富 (动作,对话,心理,神态,环境描写等) 6
是否有伏笔呼应? 2
语言 (8分) 词汇、短语、句式是否恰当且多样? 4
语法是否正确? 2
是否有效地使用了衔接手段? 2 总分 25
Evaluation