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记笔记!!!!
读后续写分析
解读文本,奠定续写基础
读什么?
plots情节
language语言
clues伏线
who, when, where
what
why+how (续写内容)
推动情节发展,体现主旨的句子
语言风格(非谓语;从句;并列连词;状语的使用)
体现主题事件或推动情节发展的key words
可在续写中复现
Then, the principal announced the names chosen by the Honor Society.
I was so excited and surprised.
what would the author do
Why
写5句。 1心理+1对话+2动作+1过渡句。
其中可以穿插两句短句 (长短句结合)。
写5句。1心理+1对话+2个动作+1正能量句。
第一步:研读、翻译好并圈出两个段首句的关键词。
Who
Where
When
What
How
Erin,my friend Dee, Mom and Dad
school, home
months went by, one evening
They didn't pick me.
plot
They: the Honor Society
Read the plot.
Continuation: Para.1
Then, the principal announced the names
Beginning
Climax
Ending
I filled out the Honor Society application.
Months went by, and I received a letter. They didn't pick me.
Continuation:Para. 2
I was so excited and surprised.
plot
I have been nominated for the National Junior Honor Society."
Dad said " you have to believe in the excellence in yourself...
Theme主题分析:一般从故事转折点或者伏笔归纳得出
unshakable self-belief 自信
generosity 慷慨胸怀
1.写好三个衔接句
(1)第一段首句后的衔接句
(2)第一段尾句(必须能和第二段首句合理衔接):
(3)第二段首句后的衔接句:
第二步:依据首句,构思框架。
我真诚的为我的朋友们鼓掌。
这个特殊奖项属于艾琳(Erin) 的!
一阵幸福的浪潮涌上我的心头,我的眼睛像钻石般闪闪发光。
Continuation: Para.1
Then, the principal announced the names
Para.2 I was so excited and surprised.
I sincerely applauded for my friends.
This special award belongs to Erin!
A wave of happiness washed over me, and my eyes sparkled like diamonds.
3. 打磨写作
*适当升级词汇、句式
*在不影响主要情节的前提下,可合理地增加部分次要情节
*可依据H需要增加适当细节描写(环境,心理,外貌等)
Homework: 根据以上方法,修改你答题卡上的作文
注意不要添加新角色
替换高级词汇、短语、句式表达
使用adj/adv/with复合结构/非谓语/复合句等丰富表达
使用积累的地道短语和名人名言
避免重复使用同一词汇或句式
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
what’s the bad news?
Why
第一步:研读、翻译好并圈出两个段首句的关键词。
写5句。 1心理+1对话+2动作+1过渡句。
其中可以穿插两句短句 (长短句结合)。
写5句。1心理+1对话+2个动作+1正能量句。
Continuation: Para.1
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
Beginning
Climax
Ending
Just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station.
Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet.
Continuation:Para. 2
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
plot
Due to a big storm, I touched down just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague.
And the machine, “Out of order.
1.写好三个衔接句
(1)第一段首句后的衔接句
(2)第一段尾句(必须能和第二段首句合理衔接):
(3)第二段首句后的衔接句:
第二步:依据首句,构思框架。
机器出了问题
他同意我过四天后付款。我们交换了联系方式。
我们约定在机场见面,重逢时像久别老友般紧紧相拥。
Continuation: Para.1
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
There is somthing wrong with the machine.
He agree that I could pay it 4 days later and we exchanged contact information before I got on the bus.
We arranged to meet at the airport, and upon our arrival, we hugged each other like long lost friends.
Para.2Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
Para 1 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
① 听到这个消息后,Gunter 难以置信地看着我,也不知道该怎么办
Hearing this, he looked at me in disbelief, asking what to do.
② 我恳请延迟支付,解释:这是今天最后一趟去Prague 的bus, 会议很重要
Flashing him another apologetic smile, I begged him for a delayed payment. ““If I miss this last bus to Prague, I'll be late for the conference which is so important that I can't afford to miss it!" I explained anxiously.
③我问Gunter 要电话号码,承诺会议结束后,会给他打电话并付款
“May I have your phone number I promise I will call you and return the money I owe you when coming back from Prague.” I added, handing him my business card.
④ Gunter 没有犹豫,同意留下他的电话号码
Without a second thought,Gunter accepted my business card, wrote down his phone number and gave it to me. “Just keep your promise, Sir.”
⑤我很感动, 跑向巴士,登上巴士
A feeling of gratitude washed over me as I heard his words. After expressing my thanks, I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the bus, and jumped onto it just before its departure.
Para2 Four days later,when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
① 来车站接巴士站我,并载我去机场
He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off before and then drove me to the airport of Vienna.
② 去机场的路上,我感谢他.
On the way, I extended my thanks for his trust on me and timely help, without which everything wouldn’t have gone smoothly.
③到机场,我付去巴士站和从巴士站到机场的费用,并给Gunter 小费,他拒绝了
Hardly had he stopped his taxi outside the airport when I paid him for the “double car ride”, back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down.
④ Gunter 是一个温暖善良的人;和Gunter 仍保持联系
Gunter was such a warm-hearted man, melting the softest place in my heart. From then on, we became good friends and kept in touch with each other regularly.
⑤ 升华主题:诚信,友善;传播善意
It was this unforgettable experience that reminded me of the value of trust and kindness, inspiring me to pay it forward.