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如何使动作描写更生动具体?
Deeply encouraged after hearing this, David held out his arms and hugged me, replying in a delighted voice “ I can do it!”
After a while, she brought a big box and handed it to the deliveryman, saying"Uncle, this is a gift for you."
That afternoon, the three played happily in the living
room, tossing toys here and there. (2021年 浙江卷)
(2022年邵阳市第二次联考)
(2022年新高考I卷)
动作链与动作面
读后续写微技能
Skill 1 构造动作链
把动作过程分解成一连串的动作,构造动作链,让你的动作描写既生动又具体!
分解动作,形成动作链 Action chains
竖起了大拇指
满意地点了点头
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She nodded with satisfaction and thumbed up at us.
nodded with satisfaction
thumbed up at us
一把抱住
she dashed forward, jumped up and hugged the girl tightly.
冲向前
跳起来
句型 1:谓语A and谓语 B / 谓语A, 谓语B and 谓语C
dashed forward
jumped up
hugged
动作链 ACTION CHAINS
冲向湖边
脱掉衣服
跳入水中
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女孩跳入湖中嬉戏
rushed to the lake
took off her clothes
jumped into the water
The girl rushed excitedly to the lake, took off her clothes and jumped into the water.
女孩兴奋地冲到湖边,脱下衣服,跳进了水里。
爸爸冲了进来,静静地站着,然后突然大笑起来。
(2021年 浙江卷)
Dad rushed in, stood still, and then burst into laughter.
高考链接
Skill 2 构造动作面
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Emotions
Dialogues
Inner thought
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动作面=动作+情感,环境,语言,心理等
Surroundings
动作面=动作+
情绪
动作
对话
“我去给你们拿点咖啡,”她笑道,朝厨房走去。
“I'll get you some coffee ,”she smiled, heading for the kitchen.
He was overjoyed, singing and dancing in the rain.
他欣喜若狂,在雨中又唱又跳。
句型 2 : 主语+谓语, doing and doing
站在海边,他们仰望天空,感受着这份珍贵的平静。
句型3: Doing,主语+谓语 ,doing
Standing at the seashore, they looked up into the sky, feeling the precious peace .
Surroundings
Actions
Inner thought
面对这四个强壮的人,狼可能会感到受到威胁,开始撤退。
( 2020年 浙江高考卷)
Facing the four strong men, the wolf might feel threatened ,starting to withdraw.
高考链接
①Encouraged by the teacher's words, Li Hua raised his hand high,
saying, “ I volunteer.”
②Encouraged by the teacher's words, Tom hesitated to raise his hand , whispering, “ ignore me.”
句型4: : Done,主语+谓语 ,doing
心理
动作
对话
听完后深受鼓励,David伸出双臂抱住了我并微笑着说:“ 我可以做到!”
(2022年 新高考I 读后续写)
Deeply encouraged after hearing this, David held out his arms and hugged me, replying in a delighted voice “ I can do it!”
高考链接
又累又饿,他们终于安全到达了目的地。
Exhausted and hungry, they eventually arrived at the destination safe and sound .
句型5: 形容词做状语,主语+谓语
难过但不害怕,他决定立即改变方案。 (2019. 浙江高考卷)
Heartbroken but fearless, he was determined to change the solution immediately.
贝贝坐在泳池边,低着头,思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。
With his head dropped, Beibei sat beside the pool, thinking whether he was white or black.
句型6: With +宾语+宾补,主语+谓语,(doing)
在一位当地村民的带领下,我们最终到达了目的地。
With a local villager guiding, we finally arrived at the destination.
Summary
1. A,B and C / A and B (三个/两个并列动词的连接)
2. 主语+谓语,doing and doing (伴随动作)
3. Doing, 主语+谓语, doing (主动动作)
4. Done , 主语+谓语, doing (被动动作)
5. 形容词作状语,主语+谓语
6. with +逻辑主语+非谓
How to describe an action vividly
Output: Integrated Skills
小试牛刀
1. 他转过头看着我。
He turned his head around and looked at me.
2. 我竖起大拇指向他示意,为他感到骄傲。
I signaled to him, thumbing up and feeling proud of him.
3. 在我的鼓励下,他深吸了一口气,为比赛做好了准备。
Encouraged by me, he took a deep breath, getting ready for the race.
4. 使出全身力气,尽管步伐异常,他完成了比赛,最后成功达到了终点线。
Gathering all his strength, in spite of his abnormal steps, he finished the race, making it to the finish line at last.
5. 我感到兴奋,如释重负,一阵幸福感涌上心头。
Excited, I felt relieved, a sense of happiness surging through me.
6. 与此同时,随着他的名字在空中传播,人群中爆发出雷鸣般掌声。
Meanwhile, with his name broadcast in the air, thurderous applause broke out among the crowd.
原文解码(2025全国新高考一卷)
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn't counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece's small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn't happy with driving home with a wet dog.
原文解码(what to read)
Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn't heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: "Not a chance." Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he'll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother's shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
注意:
(1) 续写词数应为150个左右;
(2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I realized it was me who was at fault.
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With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.
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Homework
完成读后续写作文部分的第一段
Thank you !